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Reviewer: Bobbysgirl Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Mar 2013 2:55 AM Title: Chapter 21 - The Conference Room

THAT WAS  CONSIDERATE OF HIM TO PUT HER NEEDS FIRST, ONLY ONE'S TRUE LOVE WOULD REALISE HIS MISTAKE AND RECTIFY IT. LOOKING FORWARD TO FACING "CHARLIE"  CAN'T WAIT!!!!!!!



Author's Response:

Yes, Edward could see that Bella really needed to feel like her needs were the most important thing to him right then, and it went a long way in making her feel better.  Edward will meet Charlie in the chapter after next! 

Thanks for the review, I appreciate it!

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Mar 2013 1:41 AM Title: Chapter 21 - The Conference Room

Great chapter.  oops for Jazz spilling the beans.  At least he calmed her a bit.  I think Liz is going to cause some trouble.  I like E's idea about talking to Charlie.



Author's Response:

Yeah, not so smart of Jasper.  He feels pretty shitty about it, I think. 

Edward did calm her and help her feel like things were under control again.  Glad you liked his idea about talking to Charlie, that will happen in the chapter after next!

Thanks for the review, I appreciate it!

Reviewer: Jane3105 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 14 Mar 2013 5:09 PM Title: Chapter 20 - Pioneer Place Mall

Great chapter.  I think Maggie has realised that Bella might be a good friend.



Author's Response:

Glad you liked the chapter!  Yes, Maggie has realized that Bella might be a good person to have in her life.  And this is a good start to their relationship. 

Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: roseblossome Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 13 Mar 2013 10:45 PM Title: Chapter 20 - Pioneer Place Mall

Great chapter!  I'm glad the shopping trip went so well!!!  Bella's advice about Heidi was good.  Great work!!



Author's Response:

Glad you liked the chapter so much!  Yes, their shopping trip went very well.  Glad you liked Bella's advice about Heidi.  I think it'll help Maggie.  Thanks for the nice review!

Reviewer: aelita48 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 13 Mar 2013 9:01 PM Title: Chapter 20 - Pioneer Place Mall

This is a very good chapter!

I found Maggie very nice.

Thank you.



Author's Response: Glad you liked the chapter so much! Yes, Maggie was very nice. She's a good kid, she was just struggling for a while. Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: Bobbysgirl Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Mar 2013 1:24 AM Title: Chapter 20 - Pioneer Place Mall

YOU COVERED ALL THE ISSUES PERFECTLY!!!!!!! HOPEFULLY EDWARD AND BELLA WILL BE ABLE TO RESUME THERE WEEKENDS SOON!! 



Author's Response:

Thank you so much! Glad to hear you enjoyed it. With the holidays coming up, they're going to be a bit busy, there is a lot to pack in before this story wraps up. They won't really get weekends like they had, but they'll find a much better balance and plenty of alone time. They're just going to fit it in around everything else going on in their lives.

Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: momof2jcs Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Mar 2013 12:45 AM Title: Chapter 20 - Pioneer Place Mall

Glad to see Maggie is trying to be civil and understanding. Now you just have to bring Charlie's way of thinking around. Thanks for sharing.

Author's Response:

Yep, Magge is really trying, and I think she did pretty well.  Charlie will come around, too, that's just a few more chapters away.  Thank you for the review!

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Mar 2013 10:29 PM Title: Chapter 20 - Pioneer Place Mall

Glad her and Maggie had a good time.



Author's Response:

They did!  And it really sets the stage for their future relationship.  Thanks for the nice review!

Reviewer: Shemilliah Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 12 Mar 2013 10:24 PM Title: Chapter 20 - Pioneer Place Mall

Well done Maggie.

Author's Response: Didn't she do great? I am pretty proud of Maggie, too! And you know Edward has to be absolutely ecstatic. Glad you liked the chapter and thanks for the review!

Reviewer: debslmac Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 12 Mar 2013 10:15 PM Title: Chapter 20 - Pioneer Place Mall

:)



Author's Response:

Glad you liked it! Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: OcSickGirl Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Mar 2013 9:57 PM Title: Chapter 20 - Pioneer Place Mall

Loved it, so glad Maggie is making an effort and I think it was very mature of her to apologize and own up to her mistakes. 

I find some fo this funny because when I was a junior in high school, my dad was dating a woman who was only 10 years older than me. After they broke up they stayed friends and she would take me to lunch sometimes with her best friend. She would give me advice and my senior year she came over and helped me get ready for prom. So I can relate.....lol.  I love how by end of the day she was felt comfortable enough with her to ask advice about her mom. When they were talking about Bella and Charlie arguing and Maggie said....Well it is weird....I literally LOL, because, she was just bluntly honest with her. 

Great job! 



Author's Response:

So glad you liked the chapter! 

Maggie is definitely making an effort, and you're right that apologizing and owning up to her mistakes (unprompted by Edward) says a lot about her maturity. 

That is funny about your dad's ex-gf.   It's good to know that Maggie and Bella's relationship is plausible!  They're just too close in age for Bella to ever be her "mom", but there's no reason they can't have a great relationship, especially since Bella and Edward are in this for the long haul. 

Glad you liked that Maggie asked about talking to Heidi.  She's really struggling and she saw that Bella might have some insight into the situation.  And yeah, Maggie is pretty blunt.  I kind of love that about her.  It doesn't hurt that I picture Emma Stone as Maggie, and I don't see her as being afraid to speak her mind. 

Thrilled that you enjoyed the chapter! Thanks for the nice review~

Reviewer: Lotus1011 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Mar 2013 1:24 AM Title: Chapter 13 - Bella's Living Room

Alice needs to get off her high horse... I understand why she's worried about Bella's future, but she should give Bella some credit.



Author's Response:

Yeah, Alice is acting a bit self-righteous right now.  Her concerns are valid, her delivery is not.  And she should trust her friend's jugement.  Alice will come around though, just give her time!

Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: tigger5600 Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Mar 2013 7:16 PM Title: Chapter 19 - The Swan's House

Great chapter, Poor Bella, but really I think that Charlie's reaction is normal for any father finding out what he just did, he may not have handled it well, but hopefully he can realize that she is being careful and they can work it out.  Can't wait to read more.

 

-Kate



Author's Response:

I think his concerns were normal, the way he expressed them was definitely bad.  He will come around, it's just going to take some time.  Thanks for the review, I appreciate it.

Reviewer: sherylbaby Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Mar 2013 2:17 AM Title: Chapter 19 - The Swan's House

Charlie is an ass!



Author's Response:

He certainly acted ass-y, didn't he?  Not to worry, he will come around and realize how badly he treated his daughter. 

Thanks for the review, I appreciate it.

Reviewer: romance4me2 Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Mar 2013 1:19 AM Title: Chapter 19 - The Swan's House

Actually, that was a fairly accurate description of my Dad's reaction when he found out about my then boyfriend who was divorced with 2 kids and only 5 years older than I was. Good job!



Author's Response:

LOL, oh dear.  I am glad to hear it was realistic, but I am very sorry your dad's reaction was so bad.  I hope he came around!  Charlie will, he just needs to meet Edward and realize that his daughter is a grown woman capable of making her own decisions.

Thanks for the review, I appreciate it.

Reviewer: OcSickGirl Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Mar 2013 12:15 AM Title: Chapter 19 - The Swan's House

Yikes!!!!  That was some reaction from Charlie for sure.  I do love how she compared him to Maggie, though....that was funny comparing him to a 16 year old girl...lol.

Thank you for not adding a unplanned pregnancy to this. If anything would solidify to her father that she doesn't know what she is doing, it would be that. Besides like you said, they have enough to deal with. 

Edward dropping by for a booty call was excellant, and probably just what they needed to take the edge off. Stolen moments and limited time to indulge isn't necessarily a bad thing. They were so hot and heavy from the get go, I think this downtime is good for them. They can get to know eachother better so that they have an even stronger foundation when they do go public.

Great Job Dissy!! 



Author's Response:

Hey, hun! Yes, Charlie reaction was awful, wasn't it?  And I think after that tantrum, comparing him to a sixteen year old girl was pretty fitting.  An unplanned pregnancy would be disasterous, and yes, it would solidify that she isn't really responsible enough to be with Edward.  Not to mention the fact that it would send this story straight into ridiculous levels of drama.  I already feel like I'm skirting the edge.  LOL

Glad you liked Edward's booty call. It is exactly what they needed.  And you're right, the time apart may be frustration, but it's deepening and strengthening their relationship in the meantime.

Thanks for the review, I appreciate it.

Reviewer: ceceprincess Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Mar 2013 7:47 PM Title: Chapter 19 - The Swan's House

Charlie was really awful!! love the story!



Author's Response:

Yeah, he was.  He'll come around though, I promise.  So glad you're enjoying the story.  Thanks for the review, I appreciate it.

Reviewer: Jane3105 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 06 Mar 2013 4:58 PM Title: Chapter 19 - The Swan's House

Not so happy thanksgiving.  Let's hope shopping with Maggie goes a little better.

Great writing



Author's Response:

Yeah, definitely not a happy Thanksgiving for Bella.  The good news is, Maggie's maturity seems to be higher than Charlie's right now, so that's in Bella's favor.  ;)

Thanks for the review, I appreciate it.

Reviewer: xXCicadaXx Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Mar 2013 3:59 PM Title: Chapter 19 - The Swan's House

Wow! Very disappointed in this Charlie. I know Bella is his little girl but he took it to a whole new level or in his case "a new low". My dad is very old school... You know where women and men have their roles and he was difficult when I was a teenager - well difficult from a teenage girls perspective. But when I became an adult my choices were my choices. He may not have always agreed with all of them and he never held back in telling me but never did he have an epic meltdown like this Charlie did. And never has he left nasty parting shots like Charlie. The thing is ... Bella came to them and she didn't have to - she is an adult. And she doesn't need their approval although its nice to have she just needed to know that her parents support her kind of like how parents of adult children should. AND if anything were to go wrong her parents should just be there - not screaming I told you so. First Alice's funky behavior and now her dad .... Yea I'm questioning Bella's support system. I didn't think everyone would be cheering and its ok to be painfully honest but geez ...being nasty and vicious because someone isn't doing what you think they should do is just ridiculous. 

Love the chap - looking forward to what's next. 



Author's Response:

You're absolutely right.  Charlie's reaction was disappointing and out of line and he never should have reacted that way.  Unfortunately people aren't perfect, they make mistakes, say things they shouldn't and have to find a way to make them right after.  Charlie WILL come around, it's just going to take time and meeting Edward. 

Thanks for the review, I appreciate it.

Reviewer: aelita48 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 06 Mar 2013 3:23 PM Title: Chapter 19 - The Swan's House

Wow! Charlie is really angry!

Thank you.



Author's Response:

Yes he is.  I promise that he will come around though.   Thanks for the review, I appreciate it.

Reviewer: Bobbysgirl Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Mar 2013 2:59 PM Title: Chapter 19 - The Swan's House

THIS CHAPTER LEFT ME A LITLLE UPSET AND WONDERING......ARE THEY LIVING IN THE 50'S. REALLY!!!!!  I HAVE GROWN CHILDREN AND I WOULD NEVER TREAT THEM  THAT WAY. ONCE YOUR CHILDREN REACH ADULTHOOD THEY HAVE TO LIVE WITH THE CHOICES THEY MAKE AND SUFFER THE CONSEQUENCES. WE MAY NOT ALWAYS AGREE WITH THEM BUT WE ALSO CAN'T LIVE OUR KIDS LIVES FOR THEM. WE HAVE TO BELIEVE WE TAUGHT THEM RIGHT FROM WRONG AND HOPE FOR THE BEST. OF COURSE THERE GONNA MAKE MISTAKES BUT AS PARENTS WERE SUPPOSE TO HELP THEM WHEN THEY ASK FOR IT NOT DICTATE. HER MOTHER STARTED WITH THE SAME TONE AND OK SHE KINDA CAME AROUND STILL DEGRADING BELLA BUT NOT AS BAD AS HER FATHER. IF I WERE BELLA I WOULD HAVE LEFT AND GONE BACK HOME RIGHT THERE AND THEN. MAYBE I SEE THINGS DIFFERENTLY BECAUSE I WAS A YOUNG MOTHER OR BECAUSE I BELIEVE IN MY KIDS....... OH WELL SEE YOU NEXT WEEK. 



Author's Response:

Yeah, Charlie was way out of line.  I wouldn't say that Renee's tone was anywhere near the same.  She was concerned, which is valid, and she expressed them constructively.  Charlie was completely out of line.  Thanks for the review, I appreciate it.

Reviewer: debslmac Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 06 Mar 2013 12:36 PM Title: Chapter 19 - The Swan's House

:) loved this



Author's Response:

So glad you liked the chapter.  Thanks for the review, I appreciate it.

Reviewer: lanigirl96003 Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Mar 2013 12:22 PM Title: Chapter 19 - The Swan's House

Looking forward to more 



Author's Response:

The next chapter will post tomorrow.  Thanks for the review, I appreciate it.

Reviewer: Shemilliah Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 06 Mar 2013 7:33 AM Title: Chapter 19 - The Swan's House

Well smart move there charlie boy lol. If Bella is the "adult" they claim to be, why are they lecturing her. Fair enough give advice but telling her "they feel its not right".
Anyway greay update as always, can't wait for the HEA!

Author's Response:

Yeah, unfortunately Charlie wasn't really thinking straight.  Renee's concerns and the way she expressed them were valid.  Charlie's approach was a disaster.  Glad you liked the chapter. 

Thanks for the review, I appreciate it!

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Mar 2013 5:57 AM Title: Chapter 19 - The Swan's House

WOw  Renee supportive and Charlie going cookoo.   imagine that



Author's Response:

Yep, quite the chapter, huh?  Thanks for the review, I appreciate it!

Reviewer: GrandeDame Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 06 Mar 2013 5:15 AM Title: Chapter 19 - The Swan's House

I hope Charlie doesn't do something stupid like reporting Edward, making false claims or charges against him, or getting him fired. Hopefully, Renee will go upstairs and put a pillow over his head! LOL  

I also hope that E&B will eventually get to have a baby. But you're right...now is definitely NOT the time.



Author's Response:

Charlie is very upset, but although he threatened, he won't do anything to that would hurt Bella like that.  Not to mention the fact that Renee would never let him.

And yes, now would be the worst time for them to have a baby, but it's always a possibilty in the future.  You'll just have to wait and see.  ;)

Thanks for the review, I appreciate it!

Reviewer: lanigirl96003 Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Mar 2013 4:23 PM Title: Chapter 18 - The Dining Room

looking forwqard to more 



Author's Response:

Thank you! The next chapter will post tomorrow!

Reviewer: romance4me2 Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 Feb 2013 4:24 PM Title: Chapter 18 - The Dining Room

Great chapter!



Author's Response:

Thank you so much! Glad you enjoyed it!

Reviewer: Bobbysgirl Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 Feb 2013 8:56 AM Title: Chapter 18 - The Dining Room

i'm glad you wrote this situation in a positive way. looking forward to more.



Author's Response:

So glad you liked the chapter.  The next one will post tomorrow!  Thanks for the nice review, I appreciate it!

Reviewer: sherylbaby Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 27 Feb 2013 7:27 PM Title: Chapter 18 - The Dining Room

Doesn't edward realize Bella was asking about a second child-with Bella?



Author's Response:

I know why you interpreted it that way, but Bella actually wasn't asking that.  Bella's pretty blunt.  If she'd been wanting to ask Edward about a child with her, she would have said that specifically.  She and Edward will discuss their possible future eventually, but right now Bella's too focused on everything else to worry about marriage and children with Edward.  They have to tackle the immediate stuff first. 

Reviewer: tigger5600 Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Feb 2013 4:12 PM Title: Chapter 18 - The Dining Room

So happy that the dinner went well! Love Rose as the voice of reason! :) Can't wait for more.

 

-Kate



Author's Response:

Glad you liked dinner! It did go well.  Rose is definitely the voice of reason, and it's great that Bella has someone like that to turn to.  Thanks for the nice review, I appreciate it!

Reviewer: Jane3105 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 27 Feb 2013 10:05 AM Title: Chapter 18 - The Dining Room

Dinner was a success. Let's hope they find some common ground when they are shopping.

Great chapter



Author's Response:

Yes, it really went a lot better than I think either Edward or Bella expected.  The shopping trip will be the chapter after this one.  Thanks for the nice review, I appreciate it!

Reviewer: rclaurel3 Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Feb 2013 6:51 AM Title: Chapter 18 - The Dining Room

Excellent Chapter, I enjoy reading your story.. I am not good on reviewing every chapter

Author's Response:

Aww, thank you! I am glad to hear you're enjoying it.  I understand that you can't always review every chapter.  I do love hearing from you when you are able to though!

Reviewer: debslmac Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 26 Feb 2013 10:05 PM Title: Chapter 18 - The Dining Room

:) love this chapter



Author's Response:

Aww, thanks, sweetie! Glad you enjoyed it! 

Reviewer: aelita48 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 26 Feb 2013 9:53 PM Title: Chapter 18 - The Dining Room

The reconciliation between Bella and Maggie is nice.

Edward was very happy.

Thank you.



Author's Response:

So glad you liked the reconciliation between Bella and Maggie.  It was a really good beginning for them.  Edward was very happy to see them get along.  :) 

Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: theladykt Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 26 Feb 2013 9:11 PM Title: Chapter 18 - The Dining Room

Sounds like maggie is doing good with therapy.  great E welcome to her coming over.  LOL for her agonizing over clothes.  So nice of Bella to make plans with Maggie.  lol for the sweet tooth pouters.

Great advice from Rose.  



Author's Response:

Yes, Maggie is making some real progress.  Glad you liked Edward's welcome and the way Bella agonized about clothes.  It's a bit silly, but totally understandable.  And yes, Bella was nice to make plans with Maggie.  It'll give them a chance to actually get to know each other a little.  I've been having fun with Maggie and Edward's sweet tooth and them pouting! I'm glad you enjoyed that part.

Rose's advice was great, and once Bella takes a deep breath and relaxes, she'll be able to see that Rose is right.  Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: OcSickGirl Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Feb 2013 12:10 AM Title: Chapter 17 - Thirst Wine Bar

Whew, I needed a moment to myself after the ending. ;) 

Loved hearing how Bella was dealing with all of this and I am glad she was able to spend some time with Tanya. She seems to be a good friend and I am glad that she is giving her the some leeway and not pushing too hard. Hopefully she sees how genuine Bella is when she says she WANTS to share details but she just can't right now. More importantly I am hoping that when it all does come to light she undertsands what they were dealing with and why it was so important to keep it a secret, not matter how great the friendship. 

Thumbs up for Bella taking the initiative and talking to Jasper herself rather than letting Edward be the one to bring it up. I think a deatil like that iwll make a difference later on when everything comes to light. At least Jasper will know that Bella apporached him and it wasn't Edward trying to get some typy of favoritism on the sly. No matter what the circumstances I think it would always look fishy if the initial request came from Edward. 

Looking forward to some sexy times and I hope dinner with Maggies goes well or else these two will probably spontaneously combust!!  

Great chapter Dissy, can't wait for more!



Author's Response:

So glad you enjoyed it! 

I think all things considered, Bella is doing remarkably well, and the time with Tanya helped.  Tanya is trying to be a concerned friend and not push.  But she is concerned of course, so it's difficult. 

Glad you liked Bella taking the initiative in talking to Jasper.  It will be a huge thing in her favor.  Jasper will appreciate it, and it makes Bella feel good about herself. 

I promise, dinner with Maggie will be some definite progress for all of them. 

Glad you enjoyed the chapter! Thanks for the review.

Reviewer: GrandeDame Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 21 Feb 2013 6:16 AM Title: Chapter 17 - Thirst Wine Bar

I'm sorry, but I still feel that Maggie is being selfish and manipulative. She's no fool, and seems to be definitely using this situation to her fullest advantage...playing upon her father's sympathy...keeping all of his attention and focus solely on her. That is, after all, what she admitted to Edward that she wanted...why she disliked Bella...the crux of everything. And what do ya know...she's getting exactly what she wants!

Honestly...an affair(s) that her mother had years ago, as well as her parents divorce, which is also way in the past, shouldn't be effecting her to this extent all of the sudden. I could understand her being sad or depressed, or lashing out like she is...IF she was much younger, or IF it was something that just happened recently, or IF she was really close with her mother, but none of this is the case. While I realize that people handle things differently, this has just gone too far.

To me, she saw an opportunity quickly arise from the ashes of her other failed devious  plot, and she took it, and ran with it. Plus, this supposed grudge that she has with her mother now is just another added bonus. As long as she doesn't speak to, or make up with her, she gets to stay with Edward full time...cutting in to the weekends...which she knew, or at least figured out was E&B only time together.  

And even though she was punished, which if you ask me, Edward was too lenient with her, she's STILL getting her spoiled little way. Attention is attention, whether it be positive or negative, especially when you're a spoiled brat like Maggie. And what's two weeks without her car or hanging out with friends compared to what Edward and Bella are having to suffer through? At least she still gets to see her friends at school, in the meantime.

Don't get me wrong...I agree that her father should be there for her always, which he certainly HAS been. However, what I don't agree with is him putting his life on hiatus over this. He's already had his life basically on hiatus for the last 16 years at least, as it is! He can be there for Maggie, and still live his life, too.

Now she's getting help from a therapist, which is just more attention for her, despite her acting like she doesn't want to go. That's just more of her ploy.

To me, therapy for this situation is a bit extreme, and really not necessary. She doesn't need it. What she NEEDS is a reality check....a wake-up call. But most of all, she NEEDS to grow up, and get over herself!

She's only got two years or less before she's out in the real world, and she needs to realize and learn NOW that the world DOES NOT revolve around her, nor does it go your way, most of the time. She has such a sense of entitlement that when she gets out there, she'll be in for a very rude awakening when she sees that no one else will cater to her ass, or put their lives on hold, or tolerate her shit like her father has, just because she's sad, upset, jealous, pouting, or throwing a tantrum.

Also, by Edward putting his life on hold indefinitely, he's given Maggie ALL of the power and control. He's really weakened his position by indulging her every whim, whether he realizes it, or not.

He's also sending Maggie mixed messages where Bella is concerned. He tells Maggie that he loves Bella, and that she's going to be a part of their lives, but then keeps Bella away, contingent upon Maggie's "healing". Kids aren't stupid...especially teenagers, and like I've said before, Maggie knows exactly what she's doing. At this rate, with this knowledge and power that she's been unwittingly given, she will drag this out as long as she can...and Bella won't be back around for a long time, if ever! Good thing she bought a vibrator! LOL! However, I bet that if E&B broke up, Maggie would suddenly make a miraculous recovery.  

It's really no wonder that Heidi ran over Edward for years. He's a push over, and allowed it, no matter the excuse or reasons! And now he's making the same mistake with Maggie by allowing her to run the show, and control his life! She'll be another Heidi, or worse, if he doesn't nip her shit in the bud, as well as his own! He's being played by his daughter - big time!

Edward needs to put his foot down, and give Maggie some tough love for once...make her put on her big girl panties, and let learn that life is hard, and that "shit happens" - most of which is usually out of our control. Better she learn that now than later. She also needs to learn that she is the child, and Edward is the parent - a very good one at that - and that she should be thankful for him, and start respecting him, his life, and anyone who is in it! She SHOULD want him to be happy. He deserves it! She also needs to learn that her feelings are not the only one's that matter.

Please don't take offense at any of this. It's all toward Maggie, not the story. I love the story, and just want to see Maggie get her little ass straightened out! LOL

Looking forward to the next chapter! ;)

 



Author's Response:

First of all, I'm not offended.  And I really do love that you are so invested in the story that you're passionate about it.

I am really hesitating to say to much until you read through the next few chapters though.  Because you're going to get a chance to see Bella and Maggie interact and I really think that might change your opinion on her after that. 

I will say this though.  Warranted or not, her feelings toward her mother are genuine.  I think it depends very much on the person involved, but I know several people who had a parent who cheated on the other, and they were very, very hurt by it.  And although it happened two years prior, Maggie is just learning about it now.  To her, it's much more recent. 

Either way, her wanting to stay with Edward is not a manipulative move on her part.  She has lost respect for her mother, and is trying to sort through some very confusing, hurtful feelings.  In addition, her mother is dating the man who Heidi betrayed Edward with.  Heidi isn't the type to ask Felix to step back for a bit while Maggie works through this, and Felix certainly wouldn't think to do that on his own. 

You'll see a shift in the way all of them are interacting over the next few chapters, and I hope your opinion of Maggie slowly changes. 
Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: lanigirl96003 Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Feb 2013 5:19 PM Title: Chapter 17 - Thirst Wine Bar

looking forward to mroe 



Author's Response:

Thank you! Glad you're enjoying it!

Reviewer: debslmac Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 20 Feb 2013 6:32 AM Title: Chapter 17 - Thirst Wine Bar

:) loved this



Author's Response:

Glad you liked it, hun! Thanks!

Reviewer: tigger5600 Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Feb 2013 6:04 AM Title: Chapter 17 - Thirst Wine Bar

Great chapter!! I think it was great that Edward ended up being distracted and Bella was able to approach Jasper on her own, looks much better down the line! :) Can't wait to read more!

 

-Kate



Author's Response:

Glad you liked it!  And yes, it worked out much better for Bella to approach Jasper.  It makes her look great!  I think you'll love the next chapter!

Reviewer: Bobbysgirl Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Feb 2013 4:27 AM Title: Chapter 17 - Thirst Wine Bar

IS IT POSSIBLE THAT EDWARD'S EX WILL BE BELLA'S NEW BOSS HMMMMMMM!!!!!!!!!



Author's Response:

Oh yikes, that would be terrible!  No, Heidi is in a totally different department.  She works in the hospital fundraising department, and Bella is going into Marketing.  The departments would certainly work together from time to time, especially for big hospital galas and such, but no, Heidi wouldn't be her boss in any way.  Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Feb 2013 4:18 AM Title: Chapter 17 - Thirst Wine Bar

Tanya's being a good friend.  Glad Heidi is keeping her word so far.    B is so understanding.  Yumm phone time.  Glad the Jasper introduction went well.



Author's Response:

Yep, she definitely is.  Now let's just hope she isn't toooo upset once she learns the truth.  Yeah, Heidi is still feeling really guilty about things.  And Bella is trying her best to be understanding of the situation.  Glad you liked the phone sex!  And yes, the Jasper introduction was a great start.

Reviewer: Shemilliah Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Feb 2013 12:59 PM Title: EPOV Outtake - Maggie's Room

Firstly I want to apologise for my last review. Typing on a tablet is quite frustrating.
But I love Edward explaining to Maggie her behaviour was a bit selfish regardless. As always well written, I absolutely adore this story so, CANT WAIT FOR MORE!

Author's Response:

No worries! I understand.  Auto-correct can make for some very funny reviews. 

Glad you liked Edward's talk with Maggie and I am thrilled that you're enjoying the story so much!

Reviewer: Jane3105 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 13 Feb 2013 8:11 AM Title: EPOV Outtake - Maggie's Room

You've got great parents.

Great story



Author's Response:

I do! :)  And thank you, so glad you're enjoying the story.

Reviewer: roseblossome Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 13 Feb 2013 1:47 AM Title: EPOV Outtake - Maggie's Room

I think that Edward handled Maggie the way a loving father would.  I think that she will try and it will help when she sees that Bella was worried about her and cares for her too.  Great Chapter!!!!!!!!!



Author's Response:

So glad you liked Edward's talk with Maggie.  It's a definite turning point for her, that's for sure.  Thrilled that you liked the chapter and thanks for taking the time to review.

Reviewer: sherylbaby Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 13 Feb 2013 1:05 AM Title: EPOV Outtake - Maggie's Room

Edward is the best dad ever!



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Aww, yay! Glad you like him!  Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: Bobbysgirl Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Feb 2013 12:48 AM Title: EPOV Outtake - Maggie's Room

WELL DONE I APPLAUDE YOU!!!! FOR NOT HAVING KIDS YOU DID VERY WELL. THESE TYPES OF SITUATIONS OCCUR EVERYDAY AND KIDS CAN  AND DO AJUST VERY POSSITIVELY IF GUIDED IN A CARING AND LOVING MANNER AND MAY EVEN LEARN TO CARE DEEPLY FOR A LOVING STEP-PARENT.



Author's Response:

Aww, thank you.  I'd say Edward is doing his best to guide Maggie and I can promise that she will come around.

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Feb 2013 12:01 AM Title: EPOV Outtake - Maggie's Room

You did a great job with that chapter.   Hopefully things will be better with Maggie.  Bella is so mature for her age.  love this story!!!



Author's Response:

Aww, thank you!  Trust that Edward will help Maggie get to where she needs to be.  Bella is mature, but hopefully it's still realistic.

Glad to hear you are enjoying the story!  Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: lanigirl96003 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Feb 2013 9:56 PM Title: EPOV Outtake - Maggie's Room

looking forward to more 



Author's Response:

Thank you so much!

Reviewer: tigger5600 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Feb 2013 9:35 PM Title: EPOV Outtake - Maggie's Room

wow!! I LOVE how Edward handled everything! Looking forward to see how the dinner goes! :)

 

-Kate



Author's Response:

Aww, thanks!  Glad you enjoyed the way he handled the conversation with Maggie.  It was difficult, but necessary.  And the dinner is actually 2 chapters a way, but I think you'll like it a lot!  Thank you for the review!

Reviewer: debslmac Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 12 Feb 2013 9:33 PM Title: EPOV Outtake - Maggie's Room

:) loved this



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Thanks, hun!

Reviewer: romance4me2 Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Feb 2013 12:53 AM Title: Chapter 16 - The Entryway

Great chapter.



Author's Response:

Thank you so much! I am glad you enjoyed it!

 

Reviewer: gigi9598 Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Feb 2013 12:07 AM Title: Chapter 16 - The Entryway

Wow what a chapter! Heidi ripping into Edward, shame on her! she knew her daughter was waiting in the car, did she think she would sit there forever? too bad Maggie heard all of this, but at least now its out in the open and can be dealt with. And Bella? I wonder how long this is going to go on, and will she be hanging on by her finger nails waiting for Edward to find time for her? Of course his priority is his daughter but he has to make some time at least for Bella. Can't wait for the next update.

Author's Response:

I know! Kind of an emotional roller-coaster, wasn't it?  Yeah, Heidi was too focused on her own needs to think about her daughter.  It is good that it's in the open now, and Edward can deal with it. 

I promise it isn't going to be tooo long, and they'll find ways to be together without making the situation worse.  They're going to have to be a bit creative, but they'll do it!

Thanks for the review! Glad you enjoyed the chapter.

Reviewer: Shemilliah Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Feb 2013 5:46 PM Title: Chapter 16 - The Entryway

Magie is what age again? Both her parents a e there for her whether they're divorced or not.
I have no sympothy for her, she acted kike a brat.
Guess she dont love her dad as she claimed she did.
If it wasn't for her selfish actions she wouldnt of found out that secret.
Surely I don't want to know my parents dirty secrets (if they have any). She brought it on hrrsekf eith the liesbsgaimst her DAD not bella her DAD!
Looking forward to more x

Author's Response:

Maggie is sixteen.  And yes, she did act like a brat.  Unfortunately at that age you can't always see what impact your actions have.  But I think you'll like the next chapter.  It's EPOV and you'll get to see Edward dealing with the fallout of what happened.  Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: OcSickGirl Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Feb 2013 8:55 AM Title: Chapter 16 - The Entryway

Well you already know how I feel about Heidi and karma is a wonderful thing. It is too bad Maggie got caught in the crossfire. Although, she did deserve a bit of her own karma. The bratty teenager excuse only goes so far. She was downright malicious with her lies about Bella and her threats on Halloween when her father was not around to hear. So while I do agree it sucks for her to find out about her mothers whorish ways in the manner she did, I just have to say this. Payback is a bitch. And in this case it was her mother. 

Bella is a saint for how understanding she is about the whole situation and I hope Maggie comes around soon because it doesn't seem fair that she gets to call the shots, Edward does need to spend time with her so it is super awesome that Bella agrees with not being able to come over for however long it takes, I just hope it;s not too long. I don't think either one of them will survie. 

 



Author's Response:

Karma IS a wonderful thing.  And it couldn't have happened to a more deserving person.  It is a shame that Maggie got caught in the crossfire.  She might have deserved it a bit, but it is a possible learning experience for her.

I think you're really going to like the chapter I am about to post.  It's EPOV and might give you a slightly different view of Maggie and Edward, and how he's dealing with the situation. 

Thanks for the great reviews! I appreciate them so much!

Reviewer: OcSickGirl Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Feb 2013 8:33 AM Title: Chapter 15 - The Front Porch

So I am probably way off base but in the Cafe chapter Angela and Bella were walking behind those guys and they said something about a party and some girl named Lauren. 

Maggie has a friend named Lauren and they were at a party recently also....they aren't the same girls the college guys were talking about are they??? Just curious. :)

So glad they finally said I love you to eachother. 

Nice to see the Heidi is training Maggie in her bitchiness. What a fucking brat. Unfortunately I am thinking that this behaviour is going to be excused for awhile because Edward feels guilty and sorry for his "liitle girl" aka heathen demon spawn. 

What a great chapter!! :)



Author's Response:

I replied to this on FB, but yeah, sorry about the fake-out there.  That was me not paying enough attention.  Two totally different Laurens.  :)

Glad you liked the ILYs.  I had that chapter written for a while and I was so anxious to post it! 

 

Reviewer: OcSickGirl Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Feb 2013 7:44 AM Title: Chapter 14 - The Cafe

 So glad she and Alice patched things up and the Brownies were a nice gesture but teenage girls are nothing if not bitchy hormonal brats. LOL 

 



Author's Response:

Yep, she and Alice will work it out.  The brownies were a good gesture, but what can you do?  Maggie doesn't want to see the gesture for what it is.  She'll come around eventually.

Reviewer: OcSickGirl Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Feb 2013 7:23 AM Title: Chapter 13 - Bella's Living Room

As for Alice, I think whatever valid points she might have had were lost in her bitchiness. She is in man hater mode and while she is obviously looking out for her friend she completely went about it the wrong way.

Surprise kitches sex is ALWAYS good!!

Love Rose and Emmett!!



Author's Response:

Yeah, unfortunately Alice's delivery totally buried the messages. 

Glad you liked the surprise kitchen sex.  And Rose and Em.  :)

Reviewer: OcSickGirl Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Feb 2013 6:46 AM Title: Chapter 12 - Bella's Desk

The way she feels so guilty about lying to Tanya makes me think that is going to be a big deal in the future. On one hand I understand and agree with her reasons for not telling her but I can't help but think it would be nice for her to have an ally or a confidant to help her get through this. I see hard times ahead with uber bitch ex wife and Bella is gonna need friends I think.



Author's Response:

It is a big deal in the sense that Bella and Tanya will have to deal with that as far as their friendship goes and that Bella is frustrated by having to do it.  Bella does have other friends and you're going to see more of them in the near future.  Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: OcSickGirl Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Feb 2013 4:52 AM Title: Chapter 11 - The Boardroom

Oh crap!!!!!!!  It's Heidi isnt it?? Why the fuck would she care? She doesn't love Edward!!! Grrrr......



Author's Response:

lol, I love hearing your responses.  And yes, grr to Heidi no matter what!

Reviewer: OcSickGirl Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Feb 2013 4:28 AM Title: Chapter 10 - Edward's Library

Seems like they are settling into a nice routine. Now to just get Maggie on board.....easier said than done. 

Edward is too good for that....Heidi.



Author's Response:

Yeah, they're finding a good routine. Maggie is going to take a while before she's on board. 

Edward is definitely too good for Heidi.  Ugh. 

Reviewer: OcSickGirl Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Feb 2013 3:40 AM Title: Chapter 9 - The Terrace

Catch me m falling!!!  That was thee most romantic evening.....I know it's fiction but damn.....lucky bitch....lol. 

I think Tanya is too nosey and the Anthony story is gonna bite them back later. She's gonna have to come up with a picture of this "guy" eventually. 

Love it Dissy!!!!!



Author's Response:

Wasn't it?  I had such fun writing their romantic evening.  Bella is a lucky bitch.  Bella and Tanya will have to work out the lies/half truths that Bella told. It's not an easy situation, that's for sure. So glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: lanigirl96003 Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Feb 2013 2:57 AM Title: Chapter 16 - The Entryway

looking forward to more 



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Thank you so much!

Reviewer: OcSickGirl Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Feb 2013 2:14 AM Title: Chapter 8 - The Past

I feel so sad for Edward and want to hug him and make him feel better, surprisingly not in a secxual way....lol. Poor guy is just getting shit on by that witch every chance she gets. What a whore. 

Loved hearing from Edward even though he is down on himself it's not pathetic. He's just a good guy who tried to do the right thing and now he deserves some goodness and fun in his life. 



Author's Response:

It is sad for Edward, isn't it?  He really does make you want to hug and comfort him.  It's been a shitty, shitty life for him so far.  So glad it doesn't come across as pathetic, I knew it was kind of a fine line there.  And not to worry, Bella will bring the goodness and fun into his life.  Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: roseblossome Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 06 Feb 2013 2:05 AM Title: Chapter 16 - The Entryway

Poor Maggie...she may be a spoiled brat but she didn't need this.  Bella did what was right in leaving because of Maggie.   I think Maggie will see that Bella really cares about her.  Great chapter!!!



Author's Response:

Well, she might NEED this, because it's a great experience for her to learn from.  But no matter how bratty, she didn't deserve it.  You're absolutely right that it's going to change Maggie's opinion of her.  So glad you liked the chapter! Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: GrandeDame Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 06 Feb 2013 12:49 AM Title: Chapter 16 - The Entryway

I'm sorry, but I DO NOT feel sorry for Maggie one bit! My heart is definitely NOT breaking where Maggie is concerned. She brought all of this upon herself with her manipulative, lying ways. She played one parent off of the other - oldest trick in the book.

There are numerous kids in this world that have REAL problems, with truly horrible parents, or no parents at all, coupled with a terrible life. Maggie's only problem is that she has an entitled "princess" attitude that needs knocked out of her ASAP!

As I've said before, she's jealous, selfish, and spoiled - wanting to control her father's life without a thought about his feelings, wants, or needs. She's worse than a spoiled toddler needing and wanting all of Daddy's attention, and doing whatever she has to in order to get it. There isn't a kind or mature bone in that girl's body, that I've seen. It's hard to believe that Edward raised this monster! She's DEFINITELY Heidi's kid! 

Last chapter, when she went trick-or-treating (at 16, no less!) supposedly for the hospital kids...I don't buy it. She doesn't strike me as the altruistic type, AT ALL! She probably only gives it away to keep her teenage figure intact. Daddy gave her gas money, and she got to dress up, go out and play, and have fun with her friends. Hard telling what else they did, afterwards! Not to mention her deplorable behavior towards Bella, which regardless of how she feels towards her, she was still a guest of her father's, and in his home! Her little slut friends wouldn't give it a second thought about screwing her "DILF" daddy. Would she treat them like she does Bella? I doubt it...she'd probably just roll her eyes, and say, "whatever".

She was willing to use her bitch mother to try to control the situation, so she could get her way - the nerve! Her mother has a significant other...and a whole week, EVERY week without Maggie to enjoy him (Felix). Maggie isn't that stupid, or blind. WHY doesn't she feel that her father deserves someone? I'll tell you why...competition. Maggie sees her as a threat to her spoiled, selfish existence, where she has E all to herself, his money, and manipulates him. She KNEW what she was doing by involving Satan Mommy...who has absolutely NO right to try to dictate shit to Edward, nor threaten him! Plus, she brought Maggie along with her - that speaks volumes within itself! I wonder what Maggie thought she would accomplish? It probably didn't matter, as long as she caused some trouble for E&B. Like I said...totally & completely selfish!!!

She blatantly lied to her mother to get her to come over and threaten Edward, and it backfired in her face...momentarily, anyway. What pisses me off is the audacity of both Heidi & Maggie - like mother, like daughter. What really pisses me off even more is that even though things have turned out the way that they did - Maggie still got what she ultimately wanted, which was getting rid of Bella - even if only temporarily. All of the focus and attention is back on her little spoiled ass, and she's revelling in it. Boo-hoo...poor little wounded, traumatized Maggie - NOT!!!

Maggie ultimately won, got her way, got what she wanted, despite the revelation about her mother's affair. If you ask me, Maggie is using this to her fullest advantage - while it may be shocking what her mother done in the past, it's nothing that should truly concern her, especially at her age, to the point that she's portraying that it is. Just another way for her to get and keep Edward's attention all to herself - playing off of his sympathy, concern, & love.

Maggie is old enough to understand adult problems & situations, especially ones that have nothing to really do with her. Sixteen year olds are almost always too absorbed in their own lives to really care what happened in their parents past, especially when those parents aren't even together anymore, and it really doesn't effect them. But Maggie...she has an agenda...and apparently, a vendetta, as well.  

She's far TOO old for any of them to be coddling her and catering to her every need and whim. I'm not saying that Edward should disregard her feelings, but he shouldn't stop living his own ADULT life for once, either! He's always put her first, and NEVER done anything to jeopardize her well-being, so he deserves respect, and the benefit of the doubt. But Maggie is far too selfish to give that. She cares nothing about his happiness...only her own. Maggie is cunning & manipulative enough that she saw her opportunity, and she took it. The perfect wedge.

If Edward was my dad, I would want him to be happy, and not so lonely, no matter who he was with. Edward has never been irresponsible, so I'd have to trust his judgement of character where Bella was concerned. I'd realize and remember all of the time that he's devoted to me, and still does, and all that he's sacrificed for me, and still does! I'd be happy for him, and try not to interfere. "You go, Dad!", I'd say in my 16 year old way with a smile. But not Maggie. :(  The ONLY way I would ever involve myself in my father's adult affairs/relationships is if I felt, or knew for certain that Bella, or whoever he was with, was using him, or was hurting him in any way. Maggie hasn't even given herself a chance to get to know Bella, let alone what she's like, or what her agenda may be. Another sign of Maggie's extreme immaturity.

I most certainly DO NOT agree with E&B staying away from each other while Maggie comes around. Maggie isn't stupid, and knows that she has the upper hand here. She will milk and manipulate this for all that it's worth. I have a feeling that if this is allowed to continue...letting his 16 yr. old. kid run & rule his life, E&B wont be seeing each other for a long time...if ever, if Maggie has anything to do with it. She'll come between them...cause so much stress and hurt, that no matter how much they love each other, this won't work. I bet she can't wait. It wouldn't surprise me if she didn't sprout horns, and have a gleeful, sinister smirk on her face, once the door to her room is closed.

Like I've said, Maggie is old enough to know and accept that her parents are divorced, and have been for some time. Bella didn't split them up. She knows & accepts that her mother has moved on...lives with Felix. Why can't her dad move on? Heck, the poor guy doesn't get all the free time that Heidi has & still does. Is Maggie truly so selfish that she couldn't even allow her dad a weekend of happiness, and some "adult" time? Yes, she apparently is!

In less than 2 years, Maggie will be gone...off to college I assume, and moving on with her own life, as she should be. What will Edward be left with, then, if she continues to get her way? I'll tell you...loneliness! :(  I have a feeling that Maggie would try to run anyone off her dad chose to date...not just Bella. He better realize that, and quit giving her the upper hand. HE is supposed to be the adult, the parent, so he needs to start acting like it! Don't let her use, abuse, and run over him like he let Heidi. He needs to put his foot down, and set some rules for Maggie's spoiled ass. What he does in his private time should be NONE of Maggie's concern, nor should she control or have domain over it, whether it works out with B, or not.

Maggie also seems concerned about her dad's money...her potential inheritance, I assume. Edward needs to make her little spoilt ass get an after school/weekend job - let her learn the true value of a dollar, and how hard they are to come by! Take her sense of entitlement away. It would also give her less time to stick her nose into adult affairs that don't concern her. Give her the attitude adjustment that she so desperately needs!

Edward better wake up and smell the coffee before it's too late! He needs to open his eyes, and see his daughter for who she really is, and what she's becoming - she'll end up with a personality worse than Heidi's *shudder*.

And while Bella may be understanding, it wouldn't be wise to abuse it, or assume that she will just stick around, and take shit. She is, after all, young, too. Their relationship is difficult and strained enough as it is! Now this shit, all because Maggie wanted to throw a tantrum! She's putting A LOT on the line just to be with him - and while he is, too - she's not nearly as established as E is, which means it would cost her far more if things didn't work out. I'm sure this is all very hurtful to her, regardless of what she says - she's just trying to keep a strong, brave face for Edward's sake. Not to mention that she almost lost one of her best friends over E, which she was willing to do. She vehemently defended him, and their relationship. She's shown E her love...proven it to him. I think it's time he do the same!

I'm not saying for him to choose Bella over Maggie. He's right by putting his child first...but that's the thing - she's NOT a child anymore! Yet they all handle her as if she is! She's supposed to be a young woman - let her start acting like one! She's not that much younger than Bella! Regardless, he definitely needs to get his priorites straightened out - find a healthy balance - not just kiss Maggie's ass, and let her continue to call the shots, whether inadvertently, or not.

What would happen if Edward were to remarry, or God forbid, have another child? Would he let Maggie control all of that, too? Put his new child last? Sacrifice everyone else's thoughts and feelings for the sake of Maggie's happiness? When he lets her get away with her shit, this is the message that he not only conveys to her, but to everyone else - that NOBODY means more to him than her, and never will. She'll keep using this to her advantage until she runs Edward into the ground, eventually. Heck, it wouldn't surprise me if Maggie didn't try to harm her new sibling, if she were to ever have one! 

He needs to get this under control...get her under control, or else his life will be dominated, manipulated, and controlled by Maggie...and then he'll be left out in the cold once she gets her own life.

He can't feel guilty forever for Maggie's mother not being a very good one, or not being there very much. That wasn't his fault. It was a personal, selfish choice that the worthless bitch made. If Maggie wants to place blame on someone, it's time that she does so, but in the proper place - her mother! Edward more than made up for any shortcomings - done the right thing when most men don't or won't! That alone should mean something to Maggie. He doesn't owe her anything more other than what a parent normally gives a child. It's time E realizes that!  

He needs to sit her down, talk to her like a mature, young adult, and tell her everything, especially about her mother - no bad mouthing, just no candy coating, either. She deserves to know the truth, and she's not a baby, anymore. It might help change her attitude if she knew just how much her father has done for her! He should be on the pedestal, not Heidi! He needs to assure her he loves her, that she's still first, still his daughter - which shoud be obvious, and then tell her how things are GOING to be from now on - starting with her excepting the fact that E has a girlfriend now - one that he loves, and that she will be coming over, and that Maggie WILL be expected to be respectful to her, whether she likes her or not! He needs to let Maggie know that her behavior is no longer acceptable, and will NOT be tolerated! 

If they keep treating her like a child, that's exactly how she'll continue to behave. Time for a wake-up call - a reality check. I wouldn't allow her to run me, my home, or my life. It's ridiculous that he does, and that everyone else is willing to help him cater to her. He basically made the same mistake with Heidi by letting her always get her way, and run over him - never making her take responsibility, and grow up! Does he want history to repeat itself?!

Sorry to be so long-winded, but Maggie & her behavior upsets me, even if she is just a fictional character. It means you're doing a good job as a writer when you inspire such feeling/emotion from your readers.  ;)

But please...some good ol' retribution for both Maggie & Heidi would be greatly appreciated! Put both of them in their places! And PLEASE...NO more feeling sorry for Maggie the brat! She needs to be punished for her lying - not mollycoddled and fawned over! She needs to learn that there will be consequences to her actions. She could've cost her father his job, his custody, and who knows what else! It could've cost Bella everything, too, not that Maggie would care - but Edward definitely SHOULD! No more tip-toeing around.

As always...looking forward to the next chapter! ;)

 

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Feb 2013 12:09 AM Title: Chapter 16 - The Entryway

While I feel sorry for Maggie for finding out this way, maybe she'll change her crappy attitude and lying.

Bella is more grown up than them all I think.



Author's Response:

Yes, it's a great opportunity for Maggie to learn from the situation.  It was a harsh thing to have to hear that way, but it's a chance for her to grow up.  You're probably right about Bella being more grown up than everyone else, although Edward is certainly trying.  Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: Bobbysgirl Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Feb 2013 11:27 PM Title: Chapter 16 - The Entryway

can't wait for the next update. you are an amazing writer thank you for your time.



Author's Response:

Thank you so much! I am glad you are enjoying it.  Thank you for taking the time to review!

Reviewer: OcSickGirl Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Feb 2013 10:51 PM Title: Chapter 7 - The Shower

Ahhhh poor Edward.....he needs to build up that confidence!!!!! With lots and lots of sex preferably!!! LOL



Author's Response:

Yeah, he's struggling.  The good news is, Bella is definitely up to the tasking of helping him with that.  By having lots of sex, and verbally reassuring him.  ;)

Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: OcSickGirl Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Feb 2013 9:46 PM Title: Chapter 6 - The Living Room

I think they were very wise to approach it the way they did, and Edward is business mode is sexy for sure. ;) One step at a time......and I love that they are being so honest with each other. They have enough to overcome without putting lack of communication on the list also. I just hope it stays that way. 



Author's Response:

Isn't Edward in business mode sexy?  Rowr.  The honesty is what will get them through this, because you're right, they have more than enough to deal with otherwise.  Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: Jane3105 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 05 Feb 2013 8:19 PM Title: Chapter 16 - The Entryway

Poor Maggie, she didn't deserve to find out about her mother's affair that way.

Bella's reaction to this situation is so mature, much more mature than most 23 year olds. 

Great story



Author's Response:

Yeah, that was a really horrible way for her to learn the truth, wasn't it?  Bella's reaction was very mature.  Frankly, I think a lot of much older adults wouldn't have dealt with it as well either.  So glad you're enjoying the story! Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: OcSickGirl Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Feb 2013 8:19 PM Title: Chapter 5 - Edward's Office

If it weren;t for Maggie I would say go for it now, but she is right. They both have a lot to lose. At least he gave her a little something to help ease her mind about how he felt. Some time to think is a good thing. But that notoriznig excure isn't gonna work for long so they better get creative!!  LOL



Author's Response:

They do have a lot to lose.  And it's important that they consider it all before they jump into things.  He did do what he could to reassure her. And yeah, the notarizing thing can only work so many times, huh?  Thanks for the review, hun!  I love hearing your thoughts.

Reviewer: tigger5600 Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Feb 2013 8:18 PM Title: Chapter 16 - The Entryway

wow! Poor Maggie :( Hopefully Heidi will realize that all she would be doing is hurting Maggie more if everything comes out... Can't wait to read more!!

 

-Kate



Author's Response:

Yeah, it's a rough time for Maggie.  And Heidi has seen how devastated Maggie is, she knows she needs to keep her mouth shut.  Thanks for the review! I appreciate it.

Reviewer: debslmac Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 05 Feb 2013 7:31 PM Title: Chapter 16 - The Entryway

:)



Author's Response:

Glad you enjoyed the chapter! Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: aelita48 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 30 Jan 2013 10:29 PM Title: Chapter 15 - The Front Porch

Edward and Bella love Maggie but I'm afraid it will hurt Bella.



Author's Response:

Thanks for taking the time to review and let me know what you think of the story!  I appreciate it so much!

Reviewer: Azlady2003 Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 Jan 2013 5:32 AM Title: Chapter 15 - The Front Porch

Love it



Author's Response:

Thank you so much! I appreciate that you took the time to review.

Reviewer: tlwatkins36 Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 Jan 2013 12:41 AM Title: Chapter 15 - The Front Porch

BEAUTIFUL!



Author's Response:

Thank you! I appreciate that you took the time to let me know you enjoyed it.

Reviewer: Jane3105 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 29 Jan 2013 10:12 PM Title: Chapter 15 - The Front Porch

That was beautiful.

Great writing.



Author's Response:

Aww, thank you so much!  I am glad you enjoyed it.  I appreciate that you took the time to review and let me know.

Reviewer: romance4me2 Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Jan 2013 5:40 PM Title: Chapter 15 - The Front Porch

Great chapter! Thanks.



Author's Response:

So glad you enjoyed it.  Thanks for taking the time to review!

Reviewer: lanigirl96003 Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Jan 2013 5:33 PM Title: Chapter 15 - The Front Porch

looking forward to more 



Author's Response:

Thank you! :)

Reviewer: tigger5600 Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Jan 2013 5:30 PM Title: Chapter 15 - The Front Porch

Amazing!!! LOVED IT!!! :)

 

-Kate



Author's Response:

Aww, yay! So glad you enjoyed it.  Thanks for the nice review hun.

Reviewer: debslmac Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 29 Jan 2013 5:27 PM Title: Chapter 15 - The Front Porch

:)



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Glad you liked it!  Thanks for the review.

Reviewer: tigger5600 Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Jan 2013 3:01 PM Title: Chapter 14 - The Cafe

I am so happy that her and Alice were able to really talk and patch things up, and Alice really had some good advice now that it didn't come out so harsh.  Can't wait to read more!

 

-Kate



Author's Response:

Yep, it's good progress.  They haven't worked it through completely, but it's a good start for them.  And yes, Alice's advice, when worded more politely, was easier for her to take.  Thanks gor the great rview, as always!

Reviewer: lanigirl96003 Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Jan 2013 1:24 AM Title: Chapter 14 - The Cafe

Looking forward to more 



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Thanks!  So glad to hear you're enjoying it.

Reviewer: tlwatkins36 Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Jan 2013 7:59 PM Title: Chapter 14 - The Cafe

Well i am hopeing for a treat not a trick!  I really do hope that Maggie comes around sooner than later... its hard to read someone not liking Bella, other than the usual jealous skanks...



Author's Response:

There's actually going to be a little bit of everything in the next chapter!  And Maggie will come around, there's a bit that has to happen first, but she will get there.  And yeah, it is a little bit different than the usual jealou skanks.  :) 

Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: debslmac Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 22 Jan 2013 7:48 PM Title: Chapter 14 - The Cafe

:)



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review, hun!

Reviewer: romance4me2 Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Jan 2013 6:32 PM Title: Chapter 14 - The Cafe

As for the Halloween chapter, I think naughty can be very nice! ;)



Author's Response:

Naughty is nice!  They're going to have a little bit of everything next chapter, actually!  Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: momof2jcs Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Jan 2013 5:37 PM Title: Chapter 14 - The Cafe

I enjoyed it - I hope they are both relaxing a bit but keeping their guard up. I really want to fast forward to her graduating and getting a job in Jasper's dept so they can take their relationship public. Hopefully there won't be too much drama between now and then. Thanks for sharing.

Author's Response:

Thank you so much.  And yes, they are finding the right balance between relaxing, but being careful at work.  The next few chapters will skip forward in time some.  There will only be a couple of chapters between Halloween and Thanksgiving.  There will be some drama, but a lot of good will come from it.  Just be patient! :) 


Thanks for the great review, I appreciate it!

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Jan 2013 5:18 PM Title: Chapter 14 - The Cafe

glad she talked to Alice.    maggie is going to be a hard sell.  ah well.



Author's Response:

Yes, Bella and Alice have made some progress.  Maggie is going to be a harder sell, but she'll come around.  Thanks for the great review!  I appreciate it.

 

Reviewer: tigger5600 Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Jan 2013 6:28 PM Title: Chapter 13 - Bella's Living Room

Great chapter.... and Well Alice's reaction was justified, but a bit harsh, she probably could have voiced all of her concerns a bit nicer, but I think that Bella is right her break-up with James is part of why it came out the way it did.  Edward's visit to her apartment was risky.... probably not a good idea for them to make a habit of that one.  Can't wait to read more!

 

-Kate



Author's Response:

Thanks, hun!  And yeah, Alice was pretty harsh.  Bella certainly would have listened better if Alice had approached it differently. They will work it out, it's just going to take some time and effort on both their parts.

Edward's visit could have been risky, but I think they needed it.  And it was certainly better than doing something at work. 

Thanks for the review, hun!

Reviewer: roseblossome Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Jan 2013 7:15 PM Title: Chapter 13 - Bella's Living Room

I think Alice had a few good points for Bella but the way she did it was so wrong.  She should have listened to what Bella had to say.  She is acting like if she isn't happy no one should be.  Keep up the good work!!!!  I also loved the suprise visit.



Author's Response:

It definitely wasn't the best way Alice could have approached it.  They have a lot to work out, but they will get there eventually.  Glad you enjoyed surprise visit from Edward!

Thanks for the nice review!

Reviewer: lanigirl96003 Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Jan 2013 6:23 AM Title: Chapter 13 - Bella's Living Room

looking forward to more



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review! The next chapter will post tomorrow!

Reviewer: tlwatkins36 Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Jan 2013 3:19 AM Title: Chapter 13 - Bella's Living Room

Alice was way out of line!!!! period that was hurtful and cruel!!



Author's Response:

She was really hurtful, but I wouldn't quite count her out yet.  She and Bella will work things out.  They both could have dealt with the conversation better.

Thanks for the review, I appreciate it!

Reviewer: gigi9598 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 15 Jan 2013 10:33 PM Title: Chapter 13 - Bella's Living Room

While Alice was being a bitch, I think she is just concerned about Bella. She had some valid points and I have a feeling things will come to a head at work. Ah well, true love never runs smooth does it? Looking forward to the next chapter

Author's Response:

Alice is concerned about Bella.  Her delivery was horrid, and she had her reasons, but she could have been far more tactful.  You're definitely right that true love never runs smooth!  These two have quite a ways to go.  Thanks for the nice review! 

Reviewer: debslmac Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 15 Jan 2013 6:53 PM Title: Chapter 13 - Bella's Living Room

:)



Author's Response:

Glad you liked it! Thanks! :)

Reviewer: tiffanyleigh Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Jan 2013 5:48 PM Title: Chapter 13 - Bella's Living Room

While Alice may have brought up some very valid points, I feel they were negated by her nastiness.  She didn't even try to listen to anything Bella had to say.  I agree that she may have been taking her anger over her breakup out on Bella, but that was just not right.  Rose and Em handled it much better.  I hope she can continue to confide in them.



Author's Response:

Rose and Emmett's approach certainly was more tactful.  But this isn't the last of Alice and Bella's friendship.  They will work through it.  And yes, Em and Rose will be around for Bella to confide in when she needs it.

Thanks for the nice review! I appreciate it.

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Jan 2013 5:34 PM Title: Chapter 13 - Bella's Living Room

Wow  Alice was being a complete biatch.   She may have had some valid points, but the nastiness was uncalled for.  Glad Rose/Em were there for her.



Author's Response:

Love hearing your thoughts on Alice.  You're definitely right that Rose and Emmett's approach was a lot more tactful.

And not to worry, Alice and Bella will talk it through, and work it out.  Thanks for the review, I really appreciate it.

Reviewer: lanigirl96003 Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Jan 2013 6:37 PM Title: Chapter 12 - Bella's Desk

Looking forward to more 



Author's Response:

Thanks for reviewing! The next chapter will post tomorrow.

Reviewer: tigger5600 Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Jan 2013 6:32 PM Title: Chapter 12 - Bella's Desk

they are lucky! Good job on them keeping to themselves at work, but it was only really 1 week, will they be able to keep it up? Only time will tell! :) Can't wait to read more!

 

-Kate



Author's Response:

Yes, things could have been muuuuch worse.  They're certainly going to try to be on their best behavior.  You're right though, only time will tell if they manage to pull it off.  Thanks for te review!

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