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Reviewer: Lelly Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 Dec 2017 9:35 PM Title: Chapter 13

Sorry, freezing jeans does not adequately kill the germs on them, at least according to the Smithsonian Institute. https://www.smithsonianmag.com/science-nature/the-myth-of-the-frozen-jeans-129092730/

Other than that, I am enjoying the story, although I am not certain how far you get before the chapters stop. We are still reading it, years later. Maybe you would consider finishing it? Thanks. 

Reviewer: artisticteach Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Apr 2016 7:15 AM Title: Chapter 23

Umm are you ever gonna come back to this story? I know it's been a while but it is really good and I've loved every minute of it. Please continue?

Reviewer: AdriZuMe Swan Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Mar 2016 5:14 PM Title: Chapter 1

Hola me ha gustado mucho tu historia cuando actualizas me encantaría que la terminarás!  

Reviewer: supdude27 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 16 Jul 2015 7:14 AM Title: Chapter 1

I'm not sure of you will see this, but I love this fanfiction! I am not even in the Twilight fandom, yet your story captivated me in a away that other fanfictions have not been able to do. This story has inspired me to explore my own desires and needs. The more I read your story, the more I looked into Daddy, little girl relationships. I've read this amazing piece of writing in two days and am sad to see there haven't been updates in quite awhile. Are you still writing this? Thank You for introducing me -- and many others -- into this very welcoming lifestyle. Hope to hear fron you!



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for the review. Unfortunately, I haven't written for this fic in a year or two, and since then have evolved as a person and writer. This isn't a fic I can simply go back to, I'd have to rewrite it, a task that I do not have the time for as of right now (being an adult sucks and all that jazz). Don't give up hope just yet though

Reviewer: PINKSAPPHYR Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 31 Dec 2014 12:34 PM Title: Chapter 23

Ooohhh.... I can't wait for you to update... This is such a great story! There are quite a few BDSM stories out there, some very good, some terrible, and yours is simply delightful! I love the theme and your writing style... I love the depth and complexity of your characters and the accuracy of the plot! You portray them as real humans, making mistakes and all, and you always do your best to highlight the psychological aspect of their relationship. It's a real treat so thank you!

I don't know how many chapters you're planning on writing, but you could go on forever like that... There are still soooooo many things to discover and soooo many people to meet *hint hint * :D Rest assured that I'll be along for the ride!!!

And I love the Q&A at the end, so entertaining ;)

I hope to hear from you very soon.... Happy New Year, X Cecile

Reviewer: MaluTara Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Oct 2014 6:34 AM Title: Chapter 23

I miss them!

i hope you're well and will come back to these two soon :)

thank you!

Reviewer: Suzanne Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Oct 2014 4:34 PM Title: Chapter 17

I absolutely love all of your stories and I am looking forward to more

Reviewer: msliss8 Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Sep 2014 1:27 PM Title: Chapter 23

i'm so sad you havent finished this stroy.

but you will note i started reading it anyway

thank you

Reviewer: msliss8 Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Sep 2014 11:13 AM Title: Chapter 4

I'm so sad this is not complete

but I'm reading anyway!

lol

Reviewer: PetralouiseSahriSahri Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 Mar 2014 7:49 PM Title: Chapter 23

Just got done reading this story an I hope that you will post another chapter

Reviewer: Useablesub Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Nov 2013 5:50 PM Title: Chapter 23

I hope you update again soon. It's been so long since we got a new chapter this is a great story. 

Reviewer: coulierb Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Sep 2013 4:20 AM Title: Chapter 23

Just found this story. Totally in love with it. I hope you plan to continue posting chapters. 

Reviewer: Belighted Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 29 Jul 2013 1:06 AM Title: Chapter 18

So glad I looked under your author name or I never would have seen this story! The updates on here are hard to keep up with unfortunately, but love the freedom to read uncensored works unlike other sites. This chapter for me was fantastically written, though hard for me to read as I don't *think* I could handle that kind of punishment when my actions that earned it came from a place of mental anguish. As a parent I truly understand the need for punishment that isn't pleasant for either parent or child as a part of shaping behavior, however when my kid misbehaves as a direct result of my lack of my own parental responsibilities (kid beyond hungry bc dinner is late, let him stay up late to watch movies til 2am and is crabby the next day and makes a bad choice by lashing out when defensive etc), I tend to not choose those battles to make an example of what is/is not acceptable. Granted these are two adults, who make their own rules, but it seemed a bit of an overreaction on his part. He is setting a precedent I suppose, but a warning and less demeaning punishment seems more fitting. It's like he can screw up and apologize or beat himself up mentally, but he's not exactly getting punished if hes enjoying being a twit to her all day and getting off on it. I have a pretty good idea, as well as identification with the submissive mindset, but my buttons are not pushed by complete humiliation, where Isa's are. I'm not criticizing you at all, just giving feedback so I won't continue mulling it over for a few days and be a grouch to my hubs bc of a chapter I read that didn't gel with me. It's happened before, don't laugh. I'm off to read the next few chapters and wait for more updates. Great job overall, you are one of my favorite writers no matter what your characters make you communicate in a chapter. Thanks!
Annie B

Author's Response:

I completely understand. I got a hell of a lot of stick for this chapter, and I expected that. The situation comes off as unfair, but the punishment was for Isa's sake not for Edward to get off on her humiliation. Isa wanted to get punished ( see chp 17 where Edward mentions that she's been purposefully bad in order to get a reacion out of him) so that she could, in her mind, leave all the crap they'd gone through behind. It was also a move to help rebuild trust between and exercise their capabilities. 

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Jul 2013 9:31 PM Title: Chapter 11

Meet the family yug!

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Jul 2013 8:39 PM Title: Chapter 10

You sure have this all twist up?

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Jul 2013 8:19 PM Title: Chapter 9

Hot!  Dang!

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Jul 2013 7:16 PM Title: Chapter 8

Intersting thoughts

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Jul 2013 4:42 PM Title: Chapter 7

Again hot!  Can't wait for the kink though!

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Jul 2013 4:01 PM Title: Chapter 6

Cool...she is a daring miss!

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Jul 2013 3:51 PM Title: Chapter 5

Wow! It is getting hotter!

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Jul 2013 3:25 PM Title: Chapter 4

Hot...ed is freaking HOT

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Jul 2013 3:12 PM Title: Chapter 3

Hummm.....where is it all going to go?

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Jul 2013 3:04 PM Title: Chapter 2

Hot together...Edward is a teenager in a thirty year old body.  You have to have your butler wake you up in the morning.  I was almost ready to have you say Carlisle was going to give him a hand job or something at first!  LOL

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Jul 2013 2:53 PM Title: Chapter 1

Interesting 

Reviewer: Kitacullen89 Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Jul 2013 7:24 AM Title: Chapter 1

Ohh okie dokie xx

Reviewer: RAH07890 Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Jul 2013 5:52 PM Title: Chapter 23

Amazing :)  I really loved it!

Reviewer: debslmac Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 13 Jul 2013 9:04 AM Title: Chapter 23

:) loved this

Reviewer: Kitacullen89 Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Jul 2013 8:57 AM Title: Chapter 23

Thr is a chapter missing

Author's Response:

no there isn't. It's just got the wrong number

Reviewer: sogian Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Jun 2013 7:58 PM Title: Chapter 21

perfect!! I absolutely Love this story!! I'm so jealous of their relantionship!! lol.. I want one of those too!! They have a long way ahead of them till they manage to find a relantionship that is perfect for them but I trully beleive that they will!! Will they consult Garrett about moving together andwhat to expect? And will Carlisle be ok with that? He isn't against Isa any more but moving together? Can't wait to read more... Will they go to the the party that Madam Rosa is hosting? Till next time...

Reviewer: romance4me2 Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Jun 2013 5:58 PM Title: Chapter 21

I loved that she gets to see herself though his eyes in the painting. Can't wait to read Carlisle's reaction to Isa moving in!

Reviewer: debslmac Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 15 Jun 2013 10:47 AM Title: Chapter 21

:) loved this

Reviewer: mommymac0508 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 15 Jun 2013 8:33 AM Title: Chapter 21

I loved it this was very intimate and now they had another really big talk and are taking a big step how slow will they take it and will both be happier now that they will live together and dive deeper into the d/l part of them update soon

Reviewer: hayleek Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 19 May 2013 8:21 PM Title: Chapter 20

like it

Reviewer: Irish_charm Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 May 2013 9:30 PM Title: Chapter 20

It's really nice to see how even though he was incredible rough with Bella he is still incredibly tender and loving.  

Reviewer: beachlover Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 May 2013 5:43 AM Title: Chapter 20

Very possessive Edward! Oh she eggs him on doesn't she.

Reviewer: Irish_charm Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 May 2013 3:47 AM Title: Chapter 19

Oh wow. And I thought my extended family was crazy. Lol

Reviewer: beachlover Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 May 2013 2:38 AM Title: Chapter 19

Damn, her family is more fucked up than my husbands! lol

Reviewer: beachlover Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 May 2013 5:51 AM Title: Chapter 18

I so wanted to be caught up when you got back fr. the wedding, but I have obviously been playing ...and working.
In my defense though this was a hard chapter. I think it took me 4 sittings to get though, not that it bothered me. Well the belt maybe. The scene was definitely needed for their relationship.

Reviewer: RAH07890 Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 May 2013 3:04 AM Title: Chapter 20

SO AMAZING :)  I really loved it :D

Reviewer: joice84 Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 May 2013 6:08 PM Title: Chapter 20

hi!! I was looking for a story daddykink and when I find this I was so happy!! I loved this theme!!! and is so sad it is too hard to find!! anxious for the next hope you can understand my horrible English

xoxo and please keep going!!!



Author's Response:

I had that same problem, which is why I started writing it. It's a hard to find genre. I'm glad you're enjoying the story

Reviewer: Jane3105 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 14 May 2013 9:38 AM Title: Chapter 20

Wow....just wow!

Reviewer: sogian Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 May 2013 8:57 AM Title: Chapter 20

Loved it!!!!!!!!!!! That was so fucking hot!!!!Ilove whenEdward let his beast out to play!!! Can't wait to read more... I hope everything go well with your studies!!!

Reviewer: mommymac0508 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 14 May 2013 1:56 AM Title: Chapter 20

I loved it hot damn did I ever what a way to turn a crappy night into a hot a sext one hebehehehee n9w what is next for them update soon

Reviewer: courttzuniga Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 May 2013 8:12 PM Title: Chapter 20

MY FAVORITE CHAPTER OF THE ENTIRE STORY. more, more, more! 

Reviewer: justginger Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 13 May 2013 8:06 PM Title: Chapter 20

loved it and I'm so glad that you are back!

Reviewer: smileya987 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 13 May 2013 5:53 PM Title: Chapter 20

I have absolulty loved reading this story, but please tell me u are not abandoning writting this story!!!Even if u not longer have a set schedule Please let me know that u plan on continuing with writting this story!!! I truely am enjoing reading this beautifully captivating & intriging story!! Thanks for all ur hard work & dedication in writting this story. I most definatly give this a 10 star rating!!

Reviewer: debslmac Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 13 May 2013 10:43 AM Title: Chapter 20

:)

Reviewer: dpennell007 Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 May 2013 10:30 AM Title: Chapter 20

Following here as well as fanfic so I don't lose a word. LOVE Edward and Isa's powerful dynamic. Sigh.

Reviewer: monkey22marie Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 03 May 2013 11:13 PM Title: Chapter 19

I'm really loving this story and how there starting to really the Daddy/Little girl roles 

Can't wait to read more 

Reviewer: loventherussian17 Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Apr 2013 6:25 PM Title: Chapter 19

love it

Reviewer: momams Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Apr 2013 9:01 PM Title: Chapter 4

Edward was surprised, and although he was shocked at first, later it caught his attention. They never imagined they could share this, both are kind of clueless, which makes this interesting and different.

Reviewer: momams Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Apr 2013 8:32 PM Title: Chapter 3

I guess he's not inviting her because she will be there, but not on a date, but playing her cello ;)
So they're boyfriend/girlfriend and both are happy with not going too fast, thanks for letting us know they won't go too slow either.

Reviewer: momams Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Apr 2013 8:14 PM Title: Chapter 2

The thrill of wanting to want to feel what you had given up on. It has to be amazing.

Reviewer: Bec Rose Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 24 Apr 2013 10:49 AM Title: Chapter 19

Well I'm a little late with the review, but, it was a great chapter, slightly cock blocking, but still good. :)

Reviewer: RAH07890 Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Apr 2013 10:02 PM Title: Chapter 19

SO amazing :)

Reviewer: luxmcghee Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Apr 2013 1:25 PM Title: Chapter 1

I'm really enjoying this story- I think you're doing a great job and I can't wait to read more. So please take this small criticism in the spirit it's intended... Is Sue supposed to be mentally handicapped in some way?  First, if you're getting your idea of what New Jersey people sound like from "jersey shore" you should probably know that most of those idiots are not from New Jersey. And they're idiots. Second, in that vain you may want to consider leaving the description that she speaks with a heavy nj accent and leave it to the readers' imaginations instead of spelling the inflections phonetically. Reading the "word" youse over and over was actually painful.

Again, I've been with this story from the beginning and will stay with it till the end but that scene was so jarring to read that I almost skipped it. 



Author's Response:

You made me laugh. I was in no way offended by your review. I am happy to tell you that I have never watched Jersey Shore nor do I intend to (I like my brain too much for that). I purposefully made Sue a little...strange. Its how she appeared in my head, though she wasn't supposed to come off as mentally handicapped

Reviewer: kanergirl88 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 22 Apr 2013 3:10 AM Title: Chapter 2

I love it can't wait till I get farther in the story I fell addicted to it already!!!!

Reviewer: sogian Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Apr 2013 11:41 PM Title: Chapter 19

Loved it!! Yet agsinyou out did yourself!! Each chapter is better than the last!! I totally love the relantionship that they have!!! They are so perfect for each other!! They have can to know and anticipate some times what the other will need!! Isa's family are crazy!! They think that they have a say in her life when they don't!! It is her life and since she is happy they should be happy and not trying to control and change her!! I loved how Edward didn't fear Charlie in the end but stood up to him... He is a Dom after all and I loved how he just said "yes" daring him to say anything else!!! I just can't wait to read more... Will Isa's family interfere with her life a lot? Or will they live her just live it as she wants? 

Reviewer: Lasharp15 Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Apr 2013 10:36 PM Title: Chapter 19

Great chapter. I think it gave a lot of insight into Isa by meeting her family and seeing her interacting with them.

Reviewer: MinaWritesFanfiction Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 21 Apr 2013 8:19 PM Title: Chapter 19

Great update, Isabella. I wonder if her father is going to present a problem? He looked very strict and unyielding. I feel sorry for Isa, it does seem like her family disaproves everything, she can never do anything right, but at the same time I think she was overwhelmed and overreacted a bit by storming out. I don't blame her, tho. I'm glad Edward was there to soothe her.

Can't wait for the next update.

xoxo

Mina

Reviewer: romance4me2 Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Apr 2013 6:58 PM Title: Chapter 19

Regarding the question about Edward the boyfriend, I really like that they can be equals some of the time. I honestly think that is more realistic than 24/7. Isa is independent and it makes sense that she would not always want to be a sub or a little. The scene in this chapter when Carlise interrupted was hot! I'd hate for them to lose that aspect of their relationship. Love the story! Love that Edward loves that Isa is not a stick figure woman.



Author's Response:

Being in a 24/7 relationship isn't about losing your independence. Isa still has a job and other extracurricular activites that allow her a wide range of freedoms, and even if they did go 24/7, there would also be time set apart each week for them to connect as a couple. 

I'm glad that you are liking the story (curvy chicks rock!) and how I'm portraying my characters. See you next chapter!

Reviewer: debslmac Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 21 Apr 2013 9:55 AM Title: Chapter 19

:)

Reviewer: justginger Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 21 Apr 2013 9:40 AM Title: Chapter 19

I loved this chapter and I love how ther relationship is growing

Reviewer: mommymac0508 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 21 Apr 2013 7:39 AM Title: Chapter 19

I loved it they are eo cute and funny together and yummy too but wow the Carlisle problem is fixed only to have one with her family pushy bunch aren't they update soon

Reviewer: Frances Fatuma Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Apr 2013 8:46 PM Title: Chapter 1

Awesome first chapter!

Reviewer: lambykins Signed [Report This]
Date: 24 Mar 2013 8:15 AM Title: Chapter 17

ok so ready to meet the monster now! that is going to be all kinds of yummy!

Reviewer: MinaWritesFanfiction Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23 Mar 2013 2:57 PM Title: Chapter 17

Holy crap, should have read this before my morning shower becasue I think I'm in need of another one! DAMN!

I'm glad they have reached and understanding and they are ready to move on.

I can't wait to read the next chapter.

xoxo

Mina

Reviewer: romance4me2 Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Mar 2013 1:43 PM Title: Chapter 17

Whew, great chapter!

Reviewer: kitkatr Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Mar 2013 12:45 PM Title: Chapter 17

Lovely!  

Reviewer: sogian Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Mar 2013 12:24 PM Title: Chapter 17

Loved it!!! I don't know how you do it but I think every chapter is better than the previous!!! Garret and Kate are great mentors and they helped both Edward and Isa understand what is going on. I so glad that they got past the awkward phase again!! Can't wait for their weekend!! Will Edward follow Garret's advice?? What is Carlisle problem?? Why did Edward "had" to sent him on vacations?? Does he think that he is losing Edward to Isa? All their lives it was just the two of them and non of the other girlfroends were very important but Isa is!! Can't wait to read more...

Reviewer: debslmac Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23 Mar 2013 7:02 AM Title: Chapter 17

:)

Reviewer: Parasite Goddess Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Mar 2013 11:47 PM Title: Chapter 2

Oh how I love these two. Gah Edwards got me all swooned!

Reviewer: almondgirl3 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09 Mar 2013 8:45 AM Title: Chapter 16

I've never seen or head someone other than me use "finicky". Ah! I loved seeing that. I also loved this chapter. Daddy Vinnie has some great stuff on his blog, and I like that you used him as inspiration for Garrett. 

Oh, Garrett. Thank god for him. I was so pissed at Edward. I understand why he did what he did, but I was reading it and I was like, Oh no! You fucking bastard, Edward! I felt so, so sorry for Isa. That would've been horrible to go two weeks without hearing from her Daddy. I think I would've fared much worse than her. Oh, that'd be devastating. 

Such a good chapter! :) There was one thing I wanted to make you aware of but I can't for the life of me remember it, so it obviously wasn't very important.

Look forward to the next chapter :)

Reviewer: Snow one Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Mar 2013 1:44 AM Title: Chapter 15

been missing this story  hope you can update soon

Reviewer: cbmtmorris Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Feb 2013 3:19 AM Title: Chapter 15

Wow, Isabella Kinza, just wow.  Again, I have picked up on a very short passage, and once again, it speaks to me as almost summing up the entire chapter

Reviewer: sogian Signed [Report This]
Date: 24 Feb 2013 8:40 PM Title: Chapter 15

Perfect as always!!! Loved it!! I loved that they found a mentor!! Both Garrett and Kate will help them so much to fully understand every aspect of their fetish! They are doing great alone so far but a mentor is essential!! They can confide to the other about aspects that Isa as little wouldn't understand for Edward as her Daddy and the other way around!! Can't wait to read more. .

Reviewer: Irish_charm Signed [Report This]
Date: 24 Feb 2013 6:21 PM Title: Chapter 15

It great to see that Edward and Bella found something that they can be completely honest with. I can see that it is really going to be great for them to have someone there that they can go to with the fears and concernes and not have to worry about being judged. 

Reviewer: Irish_charm Signed [Report This]
Date: 24 Feb 2013 6:43 AM Title: Chapter 14

I'm glad that they finally talked about what they truly want out of their combined relationship. It's nice to see them so comfortable and finally relaxed in their new roles. But I have to admit I cringed when she got her nipples pierced. While I find that it can be very attractive and beautiful even the thought of having it done makes me wince. 

Reviewer: beachlover Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23 Feb 2013 11:01 PM Title: Chapter 15

I like the addition of Garret & Kate

Reviewer: RAH07890 Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Feb 2013 10:59 PM Title: Chapter 15

That was amazing :D

Reviewer: MinaWritesFanfiction Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23 Feb 2013 1:35 PM Title: Chapter 15

This chapter made me so happy! They found their mentors, and now Edward's wings have been unclipped. This was what he needed to put all his doubts to rest. I can't wait to see them delve deeper into their Daddy/Little relationship.

I was wondering about Madame Rosa... I see Emmett as an overgrown child out of control, he IS sub material, and I get the feeling you are preparing that encounter. I can't wait to see it.

I'm still mad about Carlisle and theory on him is getting impatient. I hope Edward addresses his rude behavior towards Isa soon.

Thanks for the update, loved the lemon at the beginning, and I can't wait to read more!

xoxo

Mina

 

Reviewer: almondgirl3 Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Feb 2013 8:57 AM Title: Chapter 15

Excellent chapter! I love getting the email for this :)

Reviewer: justginger Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23 Feb 2013 8:50 AM Title: Chapter 15

Great chapter! I love how their relationship has evolved!

Reviewer: mommymac0508 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23 Feb 2013 8:07 AM Title: Chapter 15

I loved it they are becoming more in sync with each other and I think have the mentor will br8ng them to new heights so good update soon

Reviewer: debslmac Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23 Feb 2013 7:10 AM Title: Chapter 15

:) love this

Reviewer: sogian Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Feb 2013 10:09 PM Title: Chapter 14

I know I've said it a lot but I LOVED it!!!!!!! It was perfect!!!!!! I loved how they talked about everything!!!! They are so honest with each other and that is the most important think in every relantionship and in their Daddy/Little relantionship even more!!! I love that they decided to have more and can't wait to read more... Edward is a natural and giving orders like that was so hot!!! He knows how to play her body perfectly!!  Will they make it easily? Or will it get hard to be in Daddy/Little mind set with their lives going on and them having responsibilities throught out the day? Will they move together soon? Can't wait to read more....

Reviewer: roseblossome Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 10 Feb 2013 4:15 PM Title: Chapter 14

Good Chapter.  It showed how Bella felt that she had no childhood and feels the need to feel like a little girl.  I think that if they can keep an open communication between them things will work out well.  I'm sure Edward's need to take care of Bella will bring out a lot of good and I'm sure a little bad.  I wonder how long it will be before they start to live to gether.  If they are going into a 24/7 relationship it will be a must that they live togerher.  I guess I'll just have to wait and see.  Until nest time!

Reviewer: smileya987 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 10 Feb 2013 3:28 AM Title: Chapter 14

This story is not showing up under most recent any longer!! It showing u haven't updated since Jan 26th which I know is untrue because u were only at ch 13 not 14!! Many people who are reading this story is not going to realize it has be updated or new chapters have been posted since then PLEASE FIX U PROBALLY HAVE CHANGE DATE 4 IT SHOW UP UNDER MOST RECENT BUT PLEASSSSSSSSSE FIX THIS AWSOME STORY!!! I had to do a search for this story to even check if it had been updated. Thanks 4 all ur hard work!! This is truely an such an amzingly well written story than so many people don't even realize it has been update & will believe it hasn't be updated since then ssssooooooooooooooo please fix!!!

 

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Author's Response:

I have told the administrators about this problem and they are doing everything they can to fix it. They manually changed the dates last time

Reviewer: cbmtmorris Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Feb 2013 11:32 PM Title: Chapter 14

Oh wow far these two have come in just a few short months.  It seems the more control that Isa wishes to relinquish to Edward actually the more control Edward wishes to capture.  Isn't strange how meeting Isa and having the first discussions with her with regard to pursuing the Daddy/little relationship has actually tapped into Edward's inner Dominant side.  It would seem that by Isa confronting some of her demons, specially admitting/sharing with Edward the last diastrous relationship where she shared some of her desires with her at the moment partner, only to have her words and desires scoffed at, used as fodder for gossip and ridicule obviously left her afraid to be open and frank.  However, now that she is feeling much more comfortable with Edward, and she realizes that they both need this type of relationship, she can feel much more comfortable embracing more fully her need to be a "little" on a much more frequent, or should I say, regular basis.

I believe that by Edward presenting Isa with a "play" and everyday collar it is going to help them both--Edward will be able to embrace the "possessive" nature that Isa brings out in him and further strengthens his need fo ownership of Isa, and it will most definitely "ground" Isa in a way that  will assist her in giving up more control, and allow Edward to more fully take the reins of the relationship.  Something that seems obvious that they both need.

When Isa state the following:

"I promise to only wear your collar when trust, honesty, communication, and intimacy are represented. I pledge to be the best Little I can be, to obey without hesitation, to trust without doubt, submit to you in both body and in mind, and give my best in everything you ask of me."

It was a nice sentiment; however, I think we all know the part in which she stated to "obey without hesitation", this is not going to be easily accomplished.  I truly believe that she means each and every word of this vow, but it will most definitely make for some interesting chapters when she fails to accomplish this.  I belive Edward realizes that she will not be able to accomplish all of this or other new restrictions and rules he has put into place without some punishments.  Afterall, won't they need to continue to push limits to keep the relationship healthy and exciting? 

You handled the trip for her piercing quite masterfully.  It was a true testament to how far these two have come for Edward to take it upon himself to schedule the appointment without consulting Isa.  This allowed him to take the control, and at the same time nudged Isa to do something that she desired, but I do not feel she ever would have without Edward removing the decision making from Isa's hands.

As far as Carlisle is concerned, I am still "creeped out" by his behavior.  I actually hope that we do not see his reappearance in the story frequently.  Unless, of course, he have some truly "redeeming" chapter in mind.  LOL

As always, I really enjoyed this chapter; and honestly, I cannot wait to see them become more of a 24/7 couple.  Looking forward to your next post.  BTW, when I began writing this review, I vowed to keep it shorter and more concise, but as you can see I once again got verbose. 



Author's Response:

Don't hold back on the length on my behalf. I love reading every word that you have to say. I'll start with Isa' vow:

"I promise to only wear your collar when trust, honesty, communication, and intimacy are represented. I pledge to be the best Little I can be, to obey without hesitation, to trust without doubt, submit to you in both body and in mind, and give my best in everything you ask of me."

We all know that she won't be able to uphold most of what she vowed, but the point of it was to remind herself that she pledged these words, and thus, in future when she is unsure, she can remember them and gain confidence from them.

The whole carlisle debacle will be sorted out within the next few chapters. I won't keep you waiting too long, and yes, he will be redeemed. The man has his reasons.

I'm glad you enjoyed the nipple piercing scene. Having a few peircings myself made me understand Isa enough to know how it feels. The trepidation, the unease about the pain. She needed her Daddy and he was there *le sigh*

These two are chugging forward in their relationship, and I hope that you stay with me until our journey is finished.

Reviewer: courttzuniga Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Feb 2013 5:19 PM Title: Chapter 14

GREAT CHAPTER!

Reviewer: ravenstwimom Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Feb 2013 5:17 PM Title: Chapter 14

im really enjoying their exploration of this new reality. i am usually disappointed when i read bdsm fics cause they dont explore the emotional side of it. but so far you are doing an excellent job of that. cant wait for the next chappie. thanks for writing.

Reviewer: almondgirl3 Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Feb 2013 11:58 AM Title: Chapter 14

Ah! It was so good. And I'm really happy with where you're taking this. 

I also wish that when I had my nipples done that it just like Isa's. Mine hurt like a bitch and I would've loved to have sat in my Daddy's lap. 

I would've sent you a message but you've disabled the feature, but I think it might've been chapter 12 maybe? Anyway, I posted a link to it on my tumblr, a Daddy/babygirl blog called merry-babygirl [dot] tumblr [dot] com, because this is really just the best BDSM story I've read--and the best Daddy/little girl story. I hope you don't mind that I did that, and I also wanted to let you know that I was planning on posting a link to your latest chapter. Anyway, if you'd rather me not, then just let me know.

Looking forward to the next chapter :)



Author's Response:

Thank you for the link to your blog. I'm always looking for these kinds of blogs to follow. You can link the chapter, I really don't mind. Thank you for reviewing and enjoying the story

Reviewer: BigEyes Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Feb 2013 10:25 AM Title: Chapter 14

Love it love it love it!!!!

Reviewer: debslmac Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09 Feb 2013 8:50 AM Title: Chapter 14

:)

Reviewer: peoplelikeus Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09 Feb 2013 8:37 AM Title: Chapter 14

an awesome chapter!! I love the way that their relationship is developing.

Reviewer: MinaWritesFanfiction Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09 Feb 2013 8:19 AM Title: Chapter 14

Lovely chapter, and the collar! Oh god, I think I whimpered he locked it in place... *sighs* so good.

I guess I was lucky when I had my nipple pierced [got a vertical one] 'cause I wasn't in much pain. It really just felt sesitive, but it did take me a month or so to wear a hard cup bra again.

Can't wait to read what happens next. xoxo Mina

Q: Now that Isa is collared, will they start seeking out other types of enviroments like the tattoo parlor for them to be Daddy/Little more often, or will they remain in their privacy bubble for a bit longer?

 

Reviewer: mommymac0508 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09 Feb 2013 8:13 AM Title: Chapter 14

I loved it to see them grow in the relationship more is great they are finding themselves together I can't wait for more update soon

Reviewer: Irish_charm Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Jan 2013 4:40 AM Title: Chapter 13

Wow! So Carlisle is the hold out. Interesting! I wonder where that will go.

Reviewer: Irish_charm Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 Jan 2013 9:40 PM Title: Chapter 12

Oh that was fun. I'm sure that there are really shops like that out there. How interesting it must be to see a place like that. 

Reviewer: EandB Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 Jan 2013 9:30 PM Title: Chapter 13

i loved their conversation. so glad they can be so open with each other. 

piercing next chapter or the chapter after?

also, i hope the mentorship doesn't mean the mentor is physically involved in the scene. is it going to turn into that type of situation, the three of them? i hope not. :(

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