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Reviewer: momams Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Mar 2010 7:48 PM Title: Chapter 4

Bella is a calm person. Too calm. She hasn't tried to run. She is kind of doing what is asked of her. She at times snaps and seems to want and do something. Edward is being polite and acting as a gentleman, but he still scares Bella, a lot. I don't think this will change as soon as he would like it to.

Reviewer: momams Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Mar 2010 7:34 PM Title: Chapter 3

Edward is a man who thinks he can take and have whatever and whoever he desires. Somethings can be obtained in such way, others not. A wife doesn't fall in that category. He might love her, but his actions, sadly show ownership not love.

He will need to re-think his tactics, and soon.

Reviewer: momams Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Mar 2010 7:23 PM Title: Chapter 2

Crazy seems like an understatement. Imagine you are taken and then told you are to become someone's wife. Lets add someone you've never seen or heard of before. And you are expected to be happy and what else? Thankful? Bella is still in shock, it seems. We'll see what she does next.

Reviewer: momams Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Mar 2010 7:17 PM Title: Chapter 1

Bella's life has nothing special, it's an ordinary simple life. She feels she doesn't stand out and has no clue why someone might have been watching her. 

It gets stranger when she is taken by men who seem to fear the "boss". Who can this guy be?

Reviewer: Luereetwilitejunki Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Mar 2010 3:44 AM Title: Chapter 6

Wow Bella is the one that is crazy I think!! If she tries to escape he is going to be pissed at her. hmmmm

Reviewer: Flynnstones Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Mar 2010 2:38 AM Title: Chapter 16

aww how sweet I love edward in this story you have the perfect balance. Bravo Bravo :)

~Flynnstones

Reviewer: xxcharlie93xx Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Mar 2010 1:49 AM Title: Chapter 16

Great chapter update soon

Reviewer: DestanyRose Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 14 Mar 2010 4:28 PM Title: Chapter 16

I am so glad Edward found her.  I was shocked to see Felix let her go but very glad he did.  James is one sick fucker.  I hope it was Felix shotting James to keep him quiet.  Great job!  I cant wait to see if Edward will get her to safety and now that he has her what will he do about Aro. 

Reviewer: hockeymom4 Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Mar 2010 4:24 PM Title: Chapter 16

During your chase scene, it was as if I was watching a movie.  The action and suspense was very well written.

Great job, and my heart is still racing.

 

Reviewer: Tennyson10 Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Mar 2010 1:33 PM Title: Chapter 15

oh my god!  This fic is so exciting, freaky, insane, and I love it!  thanks for writing!

Reviewer: HopelessRomantic Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Mar 2010 12:09 PM Title: Chapter 16

Glad Bella escaped. i hope James is dead but I fear that he is not. looking forward to the next update

Reviewer: Luminesk Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Mar 2010 8:09 AM Title: Chapter 16

James is one sick bastard. He gives me the creeps, with his singing, and sadistic nature. Wonder if he was the one shot or doing the shooting.

And an interesting turn of events with Felix changing sides. Does that mean that Felix let Bella escape in the first place? Circumstances don't seem to suggest this, but then why would he change sides? Linked to Demetri somehow?

And finally Edward and Bella are reunited. Hopefully they will be able to escape the industrial area before more damage is done.

Thankyou for the update. I look forward to your next installment...

Reviewer: BelleDuJour Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Mar 2010 4:53 AM Title: Chapter 16

I liked it!  Especially the tension as Bella tried to escape James in the factory.  So happy Edward finally found her - I hope they can get away.

Reviewer: Barbr9 Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Mar 2010 3:52 AM Title: Chapter 16

Ho;y shit that was close.  I have a feeling Demetri called in a favor and thats why Felix helped Bella. So glad Edward got to Bella.  This leaves so many questions though.  Does Edward eascape or is Aro going to catch them both?? Can't wait for the next chappy to find out.

Reviewer: Anadabyel Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Mar 2010 3:29 AM Title: Chapter 16

ALRIGHT BELLA!!

Reviewer: idancecullen Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Mar 2010 3:17 AM Title: Chapter 16

Yessss he found her!!

Reviewer: cjngrls Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Mar 2010 2:25 AM Title: Chapter 16

I loved this chapter... please update soon... this is a great story and I can't wait to see where it goes....

Reviewer: Kougas Older Woman Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Mar 2010 2:11 AM Title: Chapter 16

So, why did Felix switch sides??

Reviewer: Ezzy Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Mar 2010 2:10 AM Title: Chapter 16

Yes Edward got Bella!! loved the chapter and I can't wait to read more

Reviewer: BUTTON Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Mar 2010 2:04 AM Title: Chapter 16

Great chapter....intense.... loved all of the POV's.  Cool

Reviewer: annabell2009 Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Mar 2010 1:20 AM Title: Chapter 16

love it please up date soon

Reviewer: lambykins Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Mar 2010 12:53 AM Title: Chapter 16

very intense chap.  awesome

Reviewer: SammyJo Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Mar 2010 12:35 AM Title: Chapter 16

Please tell me they shot that SOB James.

Reviewer: PAYMENTiNBLOOD Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Mar 2010 12:20 AM Title: Chapter 16

update fast! :D

Reviewer: queen_cullen0527 Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 13 Mar 2010 12:13 AM Title: Chapter 16

thanks for cliffy.. but yes love it.. Hate james what he tried to do her. Plz keep it up.

Reviewer: edwardbabymomma Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Mar 2010 12:03 AM Title: Chapter 16

Great ChaPTER

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Mar 2010 12:02 AM Title: Chapter 16

Thank you for making Bella somewhat smart in this situation, she did not accept being a victim but was a fighter.

Reviewer: bammers Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 12 Mar 2010 11:13 PM Title: Chapter 16

LOVED IT VERY MUCH CAN'T WAIT TO SEE WHAT HAPPENS NEXT UPDATE SOON PLEASE SO EXCITED THANKS...

Reviewer: sarahlynn81 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Mar 2010 10:54 PM Title: Chapter 16

OMG I need more!! Great Chapter!!!

Reviewer: Candice461 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Mar 2010 10:43 PM Title: Chapter 16

:) Great chapter!

Reviewer: hockeymom4 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Mar 2010 3:50 PM Title: Chapter 15

:) 

Great job, unique and creative!!

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Mar 2010 3:33 PM Title: Chapter 15

AHHH!  Does she know ANY slef-defense or anything to impair James?!  It might be hard with the ankle but the adrenaline might help her forget that pain briefly. 

Reviewer: shar0525 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Mar 2010 1:42 AM Title: Chapter 5

OMG you just busted with Larry King. That's  a cruel cockblock when you had me all swooning with Edwards explanation of his devotion to Bella.  I know it's kidnapping but why do I want to fall in love with Edward?  He's supposed to be the bad guy right? Yet I like his devotion...

Reviewer: katstooldforthis Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Mar 2010 1:59 AM Title: Chapter 15

aaahhh she should have called 911 and just left the phone off the hook so they could trace it....I hate James so much and I really hope he doesn't catch her.  Come on Edward go find your Bella!

 

Great Writing BTW.

Reviewer: erikajo Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Mar 2010 7:31 PM Title: Chapter 15

This getting so good!!  Can't wait to see what happens!

Reviewer: tiakie Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Mar 2010 6:56 PM Title: Chapter 15

This is so exciting! I'm really enjoying your story x

Reviewer: sinister thing Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Mar 2010 6:49 PM Title: Chapter 10

when is bella going to run away?

Reviewer: Anadabyel Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Mar 2010 3:01 PM Title: Chapter 15

OH NO!!! Great chapter!!

Reviewer: farsideomoon Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Mar 2010 8:17 AM Title: Chapter 2

AH? not sure

OOC, definitely 

and loving it<3

Reviewer: farsideomoon Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Mar 2010 8:07 AM Title: Chapter 1

Intriguing.;-))

Reviewer: BelleDuJour Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Mar 2010 4:59 AM Title: Chapter 15

Such a tense chapter!  I love it!

Reviewer: Luminesk Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Mar 2010 3:04 AM Title: Chapter 15

James' mere presence sends freaky shivers up my spine. He is so creepy, and violently unstable. This makes him such an unpredicatable character, and my fear of him is heightened because of this. I hope Bella will be able to sneak away from him, but something tells me she won't get that far.

I was very impressed that she was able to give Edward a location though. I am assuming that Aro called his cell phone and that is why Bella's call went direct to voicemail. Hopefully Edward will get the message ASAP.

I am also hoping that Aro's mignions were stupid enough to put something in the recording that would lead Edward straight to them.

Great chapter. Thankyou for the update. I look forward to your next installment...

Reviewer: HopelessRomantic Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Mar 2010 2:24 AM Title: Chapter 15

Aggghhh. A cliffie. Update soon :)

Reviewer: cjngrls Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Mar 2010 2:06 AM Title: Chapter 15

Please.. please update soon....

Reviewer: edwardbabymomma Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Mar 2010 1:38 AM Title: Chapter 15

Please let help come before James finds her. Great Chapter

Reviewer: Barbr9 Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Mar 2010 1:26 AM Title: Chapter 15

My nerves are all in a tissy.  I can hardly wait for the next chapter to see if James finders Bella or if she eludes his searching. Also what Edward does when he gets Bellas message.  Ohh the Antisipation. :)

Reviewer: mebk03 Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Mar 2010 11:19 PM Title: Chapter 15

I still love the story.  The suspense is killing me on this one.  I hope you can update soon.  I can't wait to see what happens.

Reviewer: SammyJo Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Mar 2010 11:02 PM Title: Chapter 15

Child needs to hide under the desk and let dumbass think she went out one of the doors.

Reviewer: troberts Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Mar 2010 9:23 PM Title: Chapter 15

I am so freaked out right now James cannot get a hold of her PLLLLease.  Why didnt Edward answer was he talking with Aro?????  More MORE Please soon

Reviewer: DestanyRose Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09 Mar 2010 9:17 PM Title: Chapter 15

I dont know why Bella didnt just dial 9-1-1 and let them hear what is going on and send someone to check it out.  I am glad to see she has a strong will to surrive and I mind to find ways to do so.  God I hope James doesnt get to her.  Awesome chapter.  I cant wait for the next update.

Reviewer: bammers Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09 Mar 2010 9:07 PM Title: Chapter 15

Loved it very much update when you can thanks

Reviewer: Kougas Older Woman Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Mar 2010 8:47 PM Title: Chapter 15

Don't let James find her!!!

Reviewer: cynful407 Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Mar 2010 8:42 PM Title: Chapter 15

oh oh....hope they dont find her

Reviewer: Luminesk Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Mar 2010 1:57 PM Title: Chapter 14

Somehow i don't think Bella will make a successful escape, and i believe she will be punished brutally for attempting! Probably not the smartest move on here part, but i guess desperate times call for desperate measures! And what was the contraptions she took for?

Glad to see Edward has reigned in his anger, and become more productive and proactive. I was fearing his impatience and hostility would begin to tear his family apart.

Thankyou for the update. I look forward to your next installment...

Reviewer: avery elisabeth Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Mar 2010 9:25 PM Title: Chapter 6

I love it- it's funny, and cooky( ery entertianing). Makes me laugh out loud

Reviewer: avery elisabeth Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Mar 2010 7:57 PM Title: Chapter 4

I like Isabella's pet name for him...the Devil.  lol

Reviewer: Dulcinea21bella Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Mar 2010 1:05 AM Title: Chapter 5

Great chapter. I do want to know why Edward didn't simply approach her on the street and court her in the usual way...

Reviewer: Dulcinea21bella Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Mar 2010 12:50 AM Title: Chapter 4

Great chapter!

Reviewer: Dulcinea21bella Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Mar 2010 10:31 PM Title: Chapter 3

I really enjoyed hearing Edward's POV...

Reviewer: Dulcinea21bella Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Mar 2010 10:13 PM Title: Chapter 2

I am really enjoying this so far...

Reviewer: Dulcinea21bella Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Mar 2010 10:09 PM Title: Chapter 1

I am intrigued by this story and interested to see how it develops...

Reviewer: K-princess Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Mar 2010 5:26 PM Title: Chapter 14

I love it!

I hope you release the next chapter soon.

I'm really happy that Bella and Edward have a relationship now and I hope that Bella can escape her prison and will be safe, in Edwards arms soon!

Reviewer: BUTTON Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Mar 2010 2:20 PM Title: Chapter 8

This is my favorite chapter so far...........  I am starting to see how this might turn out to benefit everyone.  I love that Emmett and Jasper are connecting with Bella and taking up for her.  Great lemon from both POV the dichotomy was facinating.  Thank You.

Reviewer: twihard4evr Signed [Report This]
Date: 02 Mar 2010 9:17 PM Title: Chapter 8

Good for Emmett! Even though Bella liked ,rather enjoyed what Edward did, it did not mean that she wanted it! Well done!

Reviewer: Anadabyel Signed starstar [Report This]
Date: 01 Mar 2010 4:40 PM Title: Chapter 14

Yays!!  Go Bella!!

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Mar 2010 3:27 PM Title: Chapter 14

My leg is jumping and I am biting my nails hoping she gets away!

Reviewer: HopelessRomantic Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Mar 2010 12:03 PM Title: Chapter 14

Yeah....she escaped....keep running Bella

Reviewer: bellabells7279 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01 Mar 2010 10:02 AM Title: Chapter 14

I love your story. Read in FF. Eager fo all of them to be here. Please update.

Reviewer: katstooldforthis Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Mar 2010 6:45 AM Title: Chapter 14

I am really hoping that Bella can save herself and show those men that she is a strong woman.  go Bella.  maybe she at least could get out of there and call edward to tell him where she is so he could come and save her that way.  please just don't have bella get caught again by james.  let her catch him and tie him up and "break" him.  yeah, thats what we want.

then when she gets back to edward she can show him a thing or two on how to treat a lady.  she could work for him by kicking some ass.  now there is a bella i want to see. :)

 

thanks for updating so quick...you are my best friend <3

Reviewer: Descartes1 Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Mar 2010 3:43 AM Title: Chapter 14

This is a great read so far.  I will definately be checking back for updates.

Reviewer: dannysmitten Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Mar 2010 3:06 AM Title: Chapter 14

I hope she runs TO freedom and NOT back to them...lol

Reviewer: DestanyRose Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 01 Mar 2010 1:29 AM Title: Chapter 14

God I hope they dont find her because that will not end well for her for sure.  But i am glad to see the fight in her and that she is seeing Edward completely through new eyes.  Great work like always.

Reviewer: Kougas Older Woman Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Mar 2010 12:42 AM Title: Chapter 14

Run Bella!!!

Reviewer: erikajo Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Mar 2010 12:36 AM Title: Chapter 14

Yay Bella!!

Reviewer: cynful407 Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Mar 2010 12:23 AM Title: Chapter 14

oh my...I hope Bella doesnt get hurt...cant wait till they find her

please continue

Reviewer: lovingit3 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 28 Feb 2010 11:40 PM Title: Chapter 14

Can't believe she was able to get away! Loved it!

Reviewer: troberts Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 Feb 2010 11:11 PM Title: Chapter 14

run Bella run omg get to her fast Edward

Reviewer: cjngrls Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 Feb 2010 9:32 PM Title: Chapter 14

Run.. Run..Run..  Bella is a smart girl... Please let her get away... maybe hide and call Edward... don't let James get her again...I'm begging here... update soon.. please

Reviewer: SammyJo Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 Feb 2010 9:31 PM Title: Chapter 14

Run Bella Run!

Reviewer: MarchHare5 Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 Feb 2010 7:44 PM Title: Chapter 14

Bella's pretty resourceful, I gotta give her that much... I'm just worried that she's just made things worse for herself. :(

Reviewer: SouthernBelle Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 28 Feb 2010 7:42 PM Title: Chapter 14

Oh lord...Bella's in trouble! Let's pray she knows how to think straight in life-or-death situations, or just will learn very quickly how to run fast without being clumsy. Why am I thinking this just isn't going to turn out well for our lil' Bella? I can't wait for more! The suspense is killing me! :) Excellent chapter BTW :-)

Reviewer: theladykt Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 28 Feb 2010 7:34 PM Title: Chapter 14

woo hoo  you're almost caught up to where I was read on the other site.     Love the story BTW

Reviewer: DestanyRose Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 28 Feb 2010 7:22 PM Title: Chapter 13

I love the song you had James singing it was prefect for how he is in this story.  I hope Bella stays strong and nothing really bad will happen to her and Edward and the boys get her out of there before James can put is dirty paws all over her.  Great story cant wait for the next update.

Reviewer: dannysmitten Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Feb 2010 10:46 PM Title: Chapter 3

awww....Really?? You had to make a crazy Edward, how could you?? lol ;)

 

But seriously, Edward needs help!!

Reviewer: Wowgal Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 27 Feb 2010 6:24 PM Title: Chapter 13

Great chapter, James is such an ASS!! And Aro is gonna go down!!! I can't stand his!! Please update soon.

Reviewer: nessiebells Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Feb 2010 5:33 AM Title: Chapter 13

I love that song- even though it was before my time. Keep up the good work.

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Feb 2010 5:43 PM Title: Chapter 13

Edward should not have let JAmes and LAurent leave alive.  Too many bad feelings from some deranged creepers. Because James knew how Edward and BElla "met", he is able to torture her psychologically and raise doubts.  Not smart for someone running an empire.

Reviewer: Sewpark Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Feb 2010 5:24 AM Title: Chapter 13

Enjoying this story very much. Scared for Bella. She should escape and make James pay. Edward can get rid of Aro once and for all too.

Reviewer: Ezzy Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Feb 2010 4:43 AM Title: Chapter 13

oh no!!!! I hope they get Bella out in time and I also hope that this doesn't screw with the progress Edward and Bella made with each other.

Reviewer: SammyJo Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Feb 2010 4:00 AM Title: Chapter 13

Good Chapter

Reviewer: rabbit681 Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 26 Feb 2010 2:42 AM Title: Chapter 13

James is such a sleaze!  It was so sweet that Edward didn't care if he came back alive, only that Bella did.

Reviewer: rabbit681 Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 26 Feb 2010 2:36 AM Title: Chapter 12

I was afraid this was going to happen. 

Reviewer: bellabells7279 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 26 Feb 2010 2:31 AM Title: Chapter 13

Please update quickly. I love it. Read it in FF now will read  here.

Reviewer: rabbit681 Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 26 Feb 2010 2:29 AM Title: Chapter 11

I like how Bella and Edward are getting closer and that she has forgiven him for kipnapping her.  Sounds like rough times ahead with the Voltaire guy!  I hope he doesn't hurt Bella to get to Edward.

Reviewer: Luminesk Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Feb 2010 12:42 AM Title: Chapter 13

I have shivers...so here are my thoughts:

1) James is a disgusting vile creature that i would love to see slowly tortured. I have a feeling he will go against Aro's wishes, and try to use Bella prior to Aro giving the 'okay'.

2) Thank GOD for Jasper and his cool calm demeanor. He is absolutely right about making a strategic plan, and was great at taking control of the situation, because clearly Edward is in no state to make decisions over this and think clearly. I am curious to see what strategies they plan out to get Bella out of this situation, and i assume, destroy Aro for good (because Aro is not going to let this slide now).

Thankyou for the update. I look forward to your next installment...

Reviewer: HopelessRomantic Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Feb 2010 12:21 AM Title: Chapter 13

Enjoying the story

Reviewer: Kougas Older Woman Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Feb 2010 11:10 PM Title: Chapter 13

I hope that the email can be traced and Bella recued soon!

Reviewer: troberts Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Feb 2010 11:05 PM Title: Chapter 13

James is such a creepy bastard and Aro I dont know if I could stop if I started on him LOL There has not been any bad guys that a person could hate like these two.  Jasper good head on his sholders they will find a way before she gets hurt bad????????????  Cant wait for more.

Reviewer: SouthernBelle Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 25 Feb 2010 9:28 PM Title: Chapter 13

This is SO good!! How can you leave us there?!? With Bella TRAPPED?! Shame shame ;-) You know what makes up for that. A quick update. :-D Because this story is kinda fantastic :) :) Thanks for posting this chapter! I've been sick as a dog this week & you've made one sick lil' girl feel much better ;) Now if you could just cure the flu I'd be set! :) Have a great Thursday - looking forward to your next update!

Reviewer: Rabbit681 Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 25 Feb 2010 9:19 PM Title: Chapter 9

Wow, he's going to let her go back to her life!  I didn't see that coming! 

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