Date: 17 Mar 2010 7:48 PM Title: Chapter 4
Bella is a calm person. Too calm. She hasn't tried to run. She is kind of doing what is asked of her. She at times snaps and seems to want and do something. Edward is being polite and acting as a gentleman, but he still scares Bella, a lot. I don't think this will change as soon as he would like it to.
Date: 17 Mar 2010 7:34 PM Title: Chapter 3
Edward is a man who thinks he can take and have whatever and whoever he desires. Somethings can be obtained in such way, others not. A wife doesn't fall in that category. He might love her, but his actions, sadly show ownership not love.
He will need to re-think his tactics, and soon.
Date: 17 Mar 2010 7:23 PM Title: Chapter 2
Crazy seems like an understatement. Imagine you are taken and then told you are to become someone's wife. Lets add someone you've never seen or heard of before. And you are expected to be happy and what else? Thankful? Bella is still in shock, it seems. We'll see what she does next.
Date: 17 Mar 2010 7:17 PM Title: Chapter 1
Bella's life has nothing special, it's an ordinary simple life. She feels she doesn't stand out and has no clue why someone might have been watching her.
It gets stranger when she is taken by men who seem to fear the "boss". Who can this guy be?
Date: 16 Mar 2010 3:44 AM Title: Chapter 6
Wow Bella is the one that is crazy I think!! If she tries to escape he is going to be pissed at her. hmmmm
Date: 16 Mar 2010 2:38 AM Title: Chapter 16
aww how sweet I love edward in this story you have the perfect balance. Bravo Bravo :)
~Flynnstones
Date: 15 Mar 2010 1:49 AM Title: Chapter 16
Great chapter update soon
Date: 14 Mar 2010 4:28 PM Title: Chapter 16
I am so glad Edward found her. I was shocked to see Felix let her go but very glad he did. James is one sick fucker. I hope it was Felix shotting James to keep him quiet. Great job! I cant wait to see if Edward will get her to safety and now that he has her what will he do about Aro.
Date: 13 Mar 2010 4:24 PM Title: Chapter 16
During your chase scene, it was as if I was watching a movie. The action and suspense was very well written.
Great job, and my heart is still racing.
Date: 13 Mar 2010 1:33 PM Title: Chapter 15
oh my god! This fic is so exciting, freaky, insane, and I love it! thanks for writing!
Date: 13 Mar 2010 12:09 PM Title: Chapter 16
Glad Bella escaped. i hope James is dead but I fear that he is not. looking forward to the next update
Date: 13 Mar 2010 8:09 AM Title: Chapter 16
James is one sick bastard. He gives me the creeps, with his singing, and sadistic nature. Wonder if he was the one shot or doing the shooting.
And an interesting turn of events with Felix changing sides. Does that mean that Felix let Bella escape in the first place? Circumstances don't seem to suggest this, but then why would he change sides? Linked to Demetri somehow?
And finally Edward and Bella are reunited. Hopefully they will be able to escape the industrial area before more damage is done.
Thankyou for the update. I look forward to your next installment...
Date: 13 Mar 2010 4:53 AM Title: Chapter 16
I liked it! Especially the tension as Bella tried to escape James in the factory. So happy Edward finally found her - I hope they can get away.
Date: 13 Mar 2010 3:52 AM Title: Chapter 16
Ho;y shit that was close. I have a feeling Demetri called in a favor and thats why Felix helped Bella. So glad Edward got to Bella. This leaves so many questions though. Does Edward eascape or is Aro going to catch them both?? Can't wait for the next chappy to find out.
Date: 13 Mar 2010 3:29 AM Title: Chapter 16
ALRIGHT BELLA!!
Date: 13 Mar 2010 3:17 AM Title: Chapter 16
Yessss he found her!!
Date: 13 Mar 2010 2:25 AM Title: Chapter 16
I loved this chapter... please update soon... this is a great story and I can't wait to see where it goes....
Date: 13 Mar 2010 2:11 AM Title: Chapter 16
So, why did Felix switch sides??
Date: 13 Mar 2010 2:10 AM Title: Chapter 16
Yes Edward got Bella!! loved the chapter and I can't wait to read more
Date: 13 Mar 2010 2:04 AM Title: Chapter 16
Great chapter....intense.... loved all of the POV's. Cool
Date: 13 Mar 2010 1:20 AM Title: Chapter 16
love it please up date soon
Date: 13 Mar 2010 12:53 AM Title: Chapter 16
very intense chap. awesome
Date: 13 Mar 2010 12:35 AM Title: Chapter 16
Please tell me they shot that SOB James.
Date: 13 Mar 2010 12:20 AM Title: Chapter 16
update fast! :D
Date: 13 Mar 2010 12:13 AM Title: Chapter 16
thanks for cliffy.. but yes love it.. Hate james what he tried to do her. Plz keep it up.
Date: 13 Mar 2010 12:03 AM Title: Chapter 16
Great ChaPTER
Date: 13 Mar 2010 12:02 AM Title: Chapter 16
Thank you for making Bella somewhat smart in this situation, she did not accept being a victim but was a fighter.
Date: 12 Mar 2010 11:13 PM Title: Chapter 16
LOVED IT VERY MUCH CAN'T WAIT TO SEE WHAT HAPPENS NEXT UPDATE SOON PLEASE SO EXCITED THANKS...
Date: 12 Mar 2010 10:54 PM Title: Chapter 16
OMG I need more!! Great Chapter!!!
Date: 12 Mar 2010 10:43 PM Title: Chapter 16
:) Great chapter!
Date: 12 Mar 2010 3:50 PM Title: Chapter 15
:)
Great job, unique and creative!!
Date: 12 Mar 2010 3:33 PM Title: Chapter 15
AHHH! Does she know ANY slef-defense or anything to impair James?! It might be hard with the ankle but the adrenaline might help her forget that pain briefly.
Date: 12 Mar 2010 1:42 AM Title: Chapter 5
OMG you just busted with Larry King. That's a cruel cockblock when you had me all swooning with Edwards explanation of his devotion to Bella. I know it's kidnapping but why do I want to fall in love with Edward? He's supposed to be the bad guy right? Yet I like his devotion...
Date: 11 Mar 2010 1:59 AM Title: Chapter 15
aaahhh she should have called 911 and just left the phone off the hook so they could trace it....I hate James so much and I really hope he doesn't catch her. Come on Edward go find your Bella!
Great Writing BTW.
Date: 10 Mar 2010 7:31 PM Title: Chapter 15
This getting so good!! Can't wait to see what happens!
Date: 10 Mar 2010 6:56 PM Title: Chapter 15
This is so exciting! I'm really enjoying your story x
Date: 10 Mar 2010 6:49 PM Title: Chapter 10
when is bella going to run away?
Date: 10 Mar 2010 3:01 PM Title: Chapter 15
OH NO!!! Great chapter!!
Date: 10 Mar 2010 8:17 AM Title: Chapter 2
AH? not sure
OOC, definitely
and loving it<3
Date: 10 Mar 2010 8:07 AM Title: Chapter 1
Intriguing.;-))
Date: 10 Mar 2010 4:59 AM Title: Chapter 15
Such a tense chapter! I love it!
Date: 10 Mar 2010 3:04 AM Title: Chapter 15
James' mere presence sends freaky shivers up my spine. He is so creepy, and violently unstable. This makes him such an unpredicatable character, and my fear of him is heightened because of this. I hope Bella will be able to sneak away from him, but something tells me she won't get that far.
I was very impressed that she was able to give Edward a location though. I am assuming that Aro called his cell phone and that is why Bella's call went direct to voicemail. Hopefully Edward will get the message ASAP.
I am also hoping that Aro's mignions were stupid enough to put something in the recording that would lead Edward straight to them.
Great chapter. Thankyou for the update. I look forward to your next installment...
Date: 10 Mar 2010 2:24 AM Title: Chapter 15
Aggghhh. A cliffie. Update soon :)
Date: 10 Mar 2010 2:06 AM Title: Chapter 15
Please.. please update soon....
Date: 10 Mar 2010 1:38 AM Title: Chapter 15
Please let help come before James finds her. Great Chapter
Date: 10 Mar 2010 1:26 AM Title: Chapter 15
My nerves are all in a tissy. I can hardly wait for the next chapter to see if James finders Bella or if she eludes his searching. Also what Edward does when he gets Bellas message. Ohh the Antisipation. :)
Date: 09 Mar 2010 11:19 PM Title: Chapter 15
I still love the story. The suspense is killing me on this one. I hope you can update soon. I can't wait to see what happens.
Date: 09 Mar 2010 11:02 PM Title: Chapter 15
Child needs to hide under the desk and let dumbass think she went out one of the doors.
Date: 09 Mar 2010 9:23 PM Title: Chapter 15
I am so freaked out right now James cannot get a hold of her PLLLLease. Why didnt Edward answer was he talking with Aro????? More MORE Please soon
Date: 09 Mar 2010 9:17 PM Title: Chapter 15
I dont know why Bella didnt just dial 9-1-1 and let them hear what is going on and send someone to check it out. I am glad to see she has a strong will to surrive and I mind to find ways to do so. God I hope James doesnt get to her. Awesome chapter. I cant wait for the next update.
Date: 09 Mar 2010 9:07 PM Title: Chapter 15
Loved it very much update when you can thanks
Date: 09 Mar 2010 8:47 PM Title: Chapter 15
Don't let James find her!!!
Date: 09 Mar 2010 8:42 PM Title: Chapter 15
oh oh....hope they dont find her
Date: 09 Mar 2010 1:57 PM Title: Chapter 14
Somehow i don't think Bella will make a successful escape, and i believe she will be punished brutally for attempting! Probably not the smartest move on here part, but i guess desperate times call for desperate measures! And what was the contraptions she took for?
Glad to see Edward has reigned in his anger, and become more productive and proactive. I was fearing his impatience and hostility would begin to tear his family apart.
Thankyou for the update. I look forward to your next installment...
Date: 04 Mar 2010 9:25 PM Title: Chapter 6
I love it- it's funny, and cooky( ery entertianing). Makes me laugh out loud
Date: 04 Mar 2010 7:57 PM Title: Chapter 4
I like Isabella's pet name for him...the Devil. lol
Date: 04 Mar 2010 1:05 AM Title: Chapter 5
Great chapter. I do want to know why Edward didn't simply approach her on the street and court her in the usual way...
Date: 04 Mar 2010 12:50 AM Title: Chapter 4
Great chapter!
Date: 03 Mar 2010 10:31 PM Title: Chapter 3
I really enjoyed hearing Edward's POV...
Date: 03 Mar 2010 10:13 PM Title: Chapter 2
I am really enjoying this so far...
Date: 03 Mar 2010 10:09 PM Title: Chapter 1
I am intrigued by this story and interested to see how it develops...
Date: 03 Mar 2010 5:26 PM Title: Chapter 14
I love it!
I hope you release the next chapter soon.
I'm really happy that Bella and Edward have a relationship now and I hope that Bella can escape her prison and will be safe, in Edwards arms soon!
Date: 03 Mar 2010 2:20 PM Title: Chapter 8
This is my favorite chapter so far........... I am starting to see how this might turn out to benefit everyone. I love that Emmett and Jasper are connecting with Bella and taking up for her. Great lemon from both POV the dichotomy was facinating. Thank You.
Date: 02 Mar 2010 9:17 PM Title: Chapter 8
Good for Emmett! Even though Bella liked ,rather enjoyed what Edward did, it did not mean that she wanted it! Well done!
Date: 01 Mar 2010 4:40 PM Title: Chapter 14
Yays!! Go Bella!!
Date: 01 Mar 2010 3:27 PM Title: Chapter 14
My leg is jumping and I am biting my nails hoping she gets away!
Date: 01 Mar 2010 12:03 PM Title: Chapter 14
Yeah....she escaped....keep running Bella
Date: 01 Mar 2010 10:02 AM Title: Chapter 14
I love your story. Read in FF. Eager fo all of them to be here. Please update.
Date: 01 Mar 2010 6:45 AM Title: Chapter 14
I am really hoping that Bella can save herself and show those men that she is a strong woman. go Bella. maybe she at least could get out of there and call edward to tell him where she is so he could come and save her that way. please just don't have bella get caught again by james. let her catch him and tie him up and "break" him. yeah, thats what we want.
then when she gets back to edward she can show him a thing or two on how to treat a lady. she could work for him by kicking some ass. now there is a bella i want to see. :)
thanks for updating so quick...you are my best friend <3
Date: 01 Mar 2010 3:43 AM Title: Chapter 14
This is a great read so far. I will definately be checking back for updates.
Date: 01 Mar 2010 3:06 AM Title: Chapter 14
I hope she runs TO freedom and NOT back to them...lol
Date: 01 Mar 2010 1:29 AM Title: Chapter 14
God I hope they dont find her because that will not end well for her for sure. But i am glad to see the fight in her and that she is seeing Edward completely through new eyes. Great work like always.
Date: 01 Mar 2010 12:42 AM Title: Chapter 14
Run Bella!!!
Date: 01 Mar 2010 12:23 AM Title: Chapter 14
oh my...I hope Bella doesnt get hurt...cant wait till they find her
please continue
Date: 28 Feb 2010 11:40 PM Title: Chapter 14
Can't believe she was able to get away! Loved it!
Date: 28 Feb 2010 11:11 PM Title: Chapter 14
run Bella run omg get to her fast Edward
Date: 28 Feb 2010 9:32 PM Title: Chapter 14
Run.. Run..Run.. Bella is a smart girl... Please let her get away... maybe hide and call Edward... don't let James get her again...I'm begging here... update soon.. please
Date: 28 Feb 2010 7:44 PM Title: Chapter 14
Bella's pretty resourceful, I gotta give her that much... I'm just worried that she's just made things worse for herself. :(
Date: 28 Feb 2010 7:42 PM Title: Chapter 14
Oh lord...Bella's in trouble! Let's pray she knows how to think straight in life-or-death situations, or just will learn very quickly how to run fast without being clumsy. Why am I thinking this just isn't going to turn out well for our lil' Bella? I can't wait for more! The suspense is killing me! :) Excellent chapter BTW :-)
Date: 28 Feb 2010 7:34 PM Title: Chapter 14
woo hoo you're almost caught up to where I was read on the other site. Love the story BTW
Date: 28 Feb 2010 7:22 PM Title: Chapter 13
I love the song you had James singing it was prefect for how he is in this story. I hope Bella stays strong and nothing really bad will happen to her and Edward and the boys get her out of there before James can put is dirty paws all over her. Great story cant wait for the next update.
Date: 27 Feb 2010 10:46 PM Title: Chapter 3
awww....Really?? You had to make a crazy Edward, how could you?? lol ;)
But seriously, Edward needs help!!
Date: 27 Feb 2010 6:24 PM Title: Chapter 13
Great chapter, James is such an ASS!! And Aro is gonna go down!!! I can't stand his!! Please update soon.
Date: 27 Feb 2010 5:33 AM Title: Chapter 13
I love that song- even though it was before my time. Keep up the good work.
Date: 26 Feb 2010 5:43 PM Title: Chapter 13
Edward should not have let JAmes and LAurent leave alive. Too many bad feelings from some deranged creepers. Because James knew how Edward and BElla "met", he is able to torture her psychologically and raise doubts. Not smart for someone running an empire.
Date: 26 Feb 2010 5:24 AM Title: Chapter 13
Enjoying this story very much. Scared for Bella. She should escape and make James pay. Edward can get rid of Aro once and for all too.
Date: 26 Feb 2010 4:43 AM Title: Chapter 13
oh no!!!! I hope they get Bella out in time and I also hope that this doesn't screw with the progress Edward and Bella made with each other.
Date: 26 Feb 2010 2:42 AM Title: Chapter 13
James is such a sleaze! It was so sweet that Edward didn't care if he came back alive, only that Bella did.
Date: 26 Feb 2010 2:36 AM Title: Chapter 12
I was afraid this was going to happen.
Date: 26 Feb 2010 2:31 AM Title: Chapter 13
Please update quickly. I love it. Read it in FF now will read here.
Date: 26 Feb 2010 2:29 AM Title: Chapter 11
I like how Bella and Edward are getting closer and that she has forgiven him for kipnapping her. Sounds like rough times ahead with the Voltaire guy! I hope he doesn't hurt Bella to get to Edward.
Date: 26 Feb 2010 12:42 AM Title: Chapter 13
I have shivers...so here are my thoughts:
1) James is a disgusting vile creature that i would love to see slowly tortured. I have a feeling he will go against Aro's wishes, and try to use Bella prior to Aro giving the 'okay'.
2) Thank GOD for Jasper and his cool calm demeanor. He is absolutely right about making a strategic plan, and was great at taking control of the situation, because clearly Edward is in no state to make decisions over this and think clearly. I am curious to see what strategies they plan out to get Bella out of this situation, and i assume, destroy Aro for good (because Aro is not going to let this slide now).
Thankyou for the update. I look forward to your next installment...
Date: 26 Feb 2010 12:21 AM Title: Chapter 13
Enjoying the story
Date: 25 Feb 2010 11:10 PM Title: Chapter 13
I hope that the email can be traced and Bella recued soon!
Date: 25 Feb 2010 11:05 PM Title: Chapter 13
James is such a creepy bastard and Aro I dont know if I could stop if I started on him LOL There has not been any bad guys that a person could hate like these two. Jasper good head on his sholders they will find a way before she gets hurt bad???????????? Cant wait for more.
Date: 25 Feb 2010 9:28 PM Title: Chapter 13
This is SO good!! How can you leave us there?!? With Bella TRAPPED?! Shame shame ;-) You know what makes up for that. A quick update. :-D Because this story is kinda fantastic :) :) Thanks for posting this chapter! I've been sick as a dog this week & you've made one sick lil' girl feel much better ;) Now if you could just cure the flu I'd be set! :) Have a great Thursday - looking forward to your next update!
Date: 25 Feb 2010 9:19 PM Title: Chapter 9
Wow, he's going to let her go back to her life! I didn't see that coming!