Date: 10 Dec 2014 3:23 AM Title: Chapter 69 - Epilogue Pt. 3
Honestly one of the best stories I have read between FF and TWCS. Loved everything about it. Kudos to you!!
[Report This]Date: 20 Aug 2014 9:41 PM Title: Chapter 69 - Epilogue Pt. 3
Beautiful story, I loved every word. If you ever publish this, I'll buy the book!
Date: 20 Jul 2014 2:38 AM Title: Chapter 29 - Road Trip! Pt. 3
Loved it!
Date: 20 Jul 2014 2:19 AM Title: Chapter 28 - Road Trip! Pt. 2
Loved it!
Date: 18 Jul 2014 7:45 PM Title: Chapter 20 - Details Pt. 2
I typed a second long comment to the previous chapter, only to have it rejected (and lost), as it was a second review for the same chapter; so I'm trying to rewrite it here.
Basically, I just read the third paragraph of Chapter 19 and it seems even worse to me than before, despite the fact that she is trying to say that everything has worked out and they are spending a lot more time together with the three of them. She has already contradicted that statement with her initial comments that she doesn't "infringe" on the guys time for having sex by themselves after their date nights. While she just finished saying that on her date nights with individual guys, she sends them to the other guy for sex by themselves, despite the fact that it was supposed to be her special night.
So really, this says to me that unless it is a quick hookup during the day or in the shower when the other guy is busy, it is either the three of them or the two guys by themselves. She sure isn't getting any special, planned time of individual sex at night from what is written here, which says that she isn't an equal in this relation. I know she finally said that on the guys date nights (it is implied that after they have their "alone sex") one of them usually ended up in her bed. That is no where near the same thing, as planned "I need time alone with you because you are so special and important to me" sex for her.
Again there hasn't been anything said about planned alone sex at night between her and either guy. I'm sorry but that isn't equal time or equal need for her with either guy. She has said that they need their alone time but neither guy regularly needs alone time with her... Planned alone time not just deciding to through her a bone because they finally realize that she's been left out. On a regular basis that really doesn't count!
Date: 18 Jul 2014 7:12 PM Title: Chapter 19 - Details
I've been reading this story and I enjoy your writing very much. Please forgive me for writing this before I even finish more than the second paragraph of this chapter but there is something that I am feeling a bit frustrated about (and please take this a simply a reflection of how invested I am in the characters not a criticism!). I have been feeling defensive of Bella, as despite the fact that this is in keeping with her personality and nature in this fic, she seems to be getting the short-end of the stick here with all of this need for Edward and Jasper to be together alone. I mean she goes out on a romantic date for her birthday and her date goes and has sex with the other guy... on both dates. Not to mention that she already gave them the night together alone before her big date night and the guys also went on a weekend together by themselves immediately afterwards. It seems that no matter all of the lip-service given by the guys about them being a true threesome in every sense of the word, so far it's the two guys that have all of this time alone (and that express the need for it and how grateful they are for her giving it to them), which is what it is but I still see her as being the one left out of things whether she's okay with it or not.
As I said, this isn't meant to be a "flame" or anything remotely like it. I love your writing and I am now working my way through all of your stories. I am just feeling put out on Bella's behalf. I also realize that this may get rectified later but I've been waiting for it to happen throughout the last number of chapters and a knot formed in my stomach when I just read about how she went to sleep on the couch so as not to infringe on their time together after their "date night" but after her date nights neither of them slept with her. Something seems wrong with this picture!
Anyways, I'm going to read the rest of the chapter and thank you for sharing your writing gift so convincingly that I'm obsessing about a character in a story!
[Report This]Date: 28 May 2014 1:10 AM Title: Chapter 69 - Epilogue Pt. 3
I really enjoyed this story. It's taken me a couple of days to read straight through, but I loved it throughout. Thanks for sharing you imagination and talent with words.
[Report This]Date: 09 Apr 2014 10:03 AM Title: Chapter 69 - Epilogue Pt. 3
this was awesome
[Report This]Date: 08 Apr 2014 9:59 AM Title: Chapter 51 - WotK Pt. 2
nurseries can be done without know the sex, green, yellow animals etc and be gender nuetral
[Report This]Date: 08 Apr 2014 12:13 AM Title: Chapter 45 - Mystically Yours Pt. 2
pregnancy
[Report This]Date: 07 Apr 2014 10:18 PM Title: Chapter 40 - Complete Insanity Pt. 2
a little paranoid
[Report This]Date: 07 Apr 2014 8:54 AM Title: Chapter 32 - TPOGI Pt. 3
plot keeps thickening
[Report This]Date: 06 Apr 2014 6:45 PM Title: Chapter 25 - Unexpected Skills Pt. 2
WELL WITH EDWARD YOU WOULDN'T EVEN NOTICE AND JASPER ALWAYS HAS SHIT HAIRSTYLES SO IT WOULD PROBABLY BE AN IMPROVEMENT
[Report This]Date: 06 Apr 2014 10:38 AM Title: Chapter 12 - Welcome Home
so so good
[Report This]Date: 06 Apr 2014 10:23 AM Title: Chapter 11 - Take Me Out...Pt. 2
I thought the story was gonna be that she was Edwards girlfriend and Jaspers manager
[Report This]Date: 06 Apr 2014 9:14 AM Title: Chapter 7 - She's Gone
he should not have gone thru her purse , I would be really upset
[Report This]Date: 05 Apr 2014 11:08 PM Title: Chapter 5 - The Warm Up Pt. 2
graphic is good :)
[Report This]Date: 05 Apr 2014 9:55 PM Title: Chapter 3 - The Starting Line-Up Pt. 3
yes me too anyway I could get him
[Report This]Date: 05 Apr 2014 9:11 PM Title: Chapter 1 - The Starting Line-Up
great start
Date: 12 Feb 2014 3:39 AM Title: Chapter 69 - Epilogue Pt. 3
Excellent. Thank you,
Susan
Date: 09 Feb 2014 11:11 PM Title: Chapter 29 - Road Trip! Pt. 3
OMG- I just love it when a story can have me guffawing out loud such that my husband has to come and check on me. Nice work!!!!!!!
Susan
Date: 07 Feb 2014 8:43 AM Title: Chapter 38 - WHAT?! Pt. 2
PA sounds more reasonable than CT or vermont.....I may be wrong, but that east coast area is not where I wld think the most tollerence was.
Date: 08 Jan 2014 2:27 AM Title: Chapter 69 - Epilogue Pt. 3
:)
Author's Response:
i owe you a lot for your reviews because this wasn't a very popular story, but somehow, a few people latched onto it, and I'm grateful. Now, do you think you could deal with another slash story...no Bella inclueded? Thanks for reading. SK
[Report This]Date: 06 Jan 2014 2:11 AM Title: Chapter 69 - Epilogue Pt. 3
Wonderful ending. TY for writing and sharing with us all.
Date: 06 Jan 2014 2:10 AM Title: Chapter 68 - Epilogue Pt. 2
awww poor Lex. Although they are right, she does need to tell him. ROFL for Ben.
Date: 06 Jan 2014 2:07 AM Title: Chapter 67 - Epilogue
ooooh can't wait to see what Bella is mad about.
Date: 06 Jan 2014 2:05 AM Title: Chapter 66 - Bottom of the Ninth Pt. 2
Love that thier kids aren't perfect. Yours are more like real life.
Date: 06 Jan 2014 1:59 AM Title: Chapter 65 - Bottom of the Ninth
lol glad Jazz kicked his butt into shape.
Date: 06 Jan 2014 1:57 AM Title: Chapter 64 - Ch...Ch...Changes Pt. 3
good news for E. Too bad people are more worried about people's bedroom habits than their work ones.
Date: 06 Jan 2014 1:45 AM Title: Chapter 63 - Ch...Ch...Changes Part 2
woo hoo for a girl this time. Wonder what E's job is gonna say now?
Date: 06 Jan 2014 1:31 AM Title: Chapter 62 - Ch...Ch...Changes
Gotta love Esme. Glad they are finding time to be together still. Woo hoo for new house. Happy that Em is being cool with everything. Surprised Renee hasn't come crawling out of the woodwork
Date: 06 Jan 2014 1:23 AM Title: Chapter 61 - Uncomfortable Conversations
ROFL for his mama.
Date: 06 Jan 2014 1:18 AM Title: Chapter 60 - Life's Lessons Pt. 3
Glad his mama is being a little more reasonable. LOL for B taking her shopping to get some alone time.
Date: 06 Jan 2014 1:08 AM Title: Chapter 59 - Life's Lessons Pt. 2
Soo Totally right. Bigots are everywhere.
Date: 06 Jan 2014 1:04 AM Title: Chapter 58 - Life's Lessons
Glad he got to make peace with his dad.
Date: 06 Jan 2014 12:56 AM Title: Chapter 57 - Who's Your Daddy? Pt. 3
Woo Hoo for new baby on the way!!!
Date: 06 Jan 2014 12:49 AM Title: Chapter 56 - Who's Your Daddy Pt. 2
Great family time. Glad the boys are making her feel special.
Date: 06 Jan 2014 12:41 AM Title: Chapter 55 - Who's Your Daddy?
babies love to come when least expected. I can feel for Bella. My first took forever.
Date: 06 Jan 2014 12:36 AM Title: Chapter 54 - He Loves Me...He Loves Me Not Pt. 3
Woo Hoo. Glad he got to go out with a bang. Hope he gets the job.
Date: 05 Jan 2014 11:51 PM Title: Chapter 53 - He Loves Me...He Loves Me Not Pt. 2
Poor Esme. Sounds like B needs more counselling as well as more attention from the boys in a non sexual sense.
Date: 05 Jan 2014 8:47 PM Title: Chapter 52 - He Loves Me...He Loves Me Not
Glad Alice was there to listen. Double Glad that she talked her down. I can get the mood swings and doubt though.
Date: 05 Jan 2014 8:38 PM Title: Chapter 51 - WotK Pt. 2
They should just have sex in the spare room, then join her in thier room. That way they wouldn't have to worry about moving her.
Love Esme and Carlisle's acceptance of everything.
Date: 05 Jan 2014 8:21 PM Title: Chapter 50 - Working out the Kinks
Glad they all made up. Yes E screwed up but he admitted to it and tried to make amends.
Date: 05 Jan 2014 7:44 PM Title: Chapter 49 - Fallout Pt. 3
Glad she heard him out. Wonder who the biatch was who ran into the elevator?
Date: 05 Jan 2014 8:12 AM Title: Chapter 48 - Fallout Pt. 2
oooh E you've really F'd up. Glad Esme called him on his shit. At least the coach let him go. So freaking stupid that this crap even matters (the orientation part). So long as its between consenting, legal adults, who the F cares.
Date: 05 Jan 2014 7:57 AM Title: Chapter 47 - Fallout
oooh Sooooooo Not good E. And of course his "wonderful" teammates are encouraging him to do that crap on his Wife. Glad Jasper is there for her. Esme is so smart.
Date: 05 Jan 2014 7:46 AM Title: Chapter 46 - Mystically Yours Pt 3
hmmmm Did E get drunk and/or arrested? Glad Jasper was so supportive.
Date: 05 Jan 2014 7:41 AM Title: Chapter 45 - Mystically Yours Pt. 2
Wow Bella is a crabby pants huh? Glad E called her on it after the road trip. Jake got what was coming to him. hmmm for ending. Prego I guess maybe???
Date: 05 Jan 2014 12:30 AM Title: Chapter 44 - Mystically Yours
Aww sucks they have to separate for awhile.
Date: 05 Jan 2014 12:07 AM Title: Chapter 43 - The Keys to Happiness Pt 3
Wonderful ceremony. Lol for hungover esme and Alice
Date: 04 Jan 2014 11:40 PM Title: Chapter 42 - The Keys to Happiness Pt. 2
Hmm what are the boys up to I wonder. Lol for the attic.
Date: 04 Jan 2014 11:26 PM Title: Chapter 41 - The Keys to Happiness
Glad Alice calmed down. Wasn't liking her there for a paragraph or two. Lol for her and irina though.
Date: 31 Dec 2013 6:12 AM Title: Chapter 40 - Complete Insanity Pt. 2
omg Renee ia a certifyable nut job
Date: 31 Dec 2013 5:39 AM Title: Chapter 39 - Complete Insanity
lol for sneaking Bella into their room. ooh Rose just had to sneak Renee in. This isnt going to be good.
Date: 31 Dec 2013 5:33 AM Title: Chapter 38 - WHAT?! Pt. 2
Great chapter. Glad they are working some things out. ROFL for Irina and her Bella affection.
Date: 31 Dec 2013 2:39 AM Title: Chapter 37 - WHAT?!
Well at least Kate should back off now. Riley really is asking for trouble.
Date: 30 Dec 2013 9:08 PM Title: Chapter 36 - Spring Fling Pt. 3
awww Garrett seems like a nice guy. Kate does need to back off. No means No goes the other way as well. B needs to curb the jealousy though. J didnt do anything.
Date: 30 Dec 2013 7:57 PM Title: Chapter 35 - Spring Fling Pt 2
oooh boys will be boys with their games. lol. Ugh more Jacob in the picture. Not good.
Date: 30 Dec 2013 7:50 PM Title: Chapter 34 - Spring Fling
Unfortunately Florida was like that with the Orioles training camp and others too. Kate seems nice. Hope she really is
Date: 30 Dec 2013 7:44 PM Title: Chapter 33 - TPOGI Pt 4
ooh its getting more and more interesting.
Date: 30 Dec 2013 7:39 PM Title: Chapter 32 - TPOGI Pt. 3
Ack I knew that was coming. ohhhh Jake is Riley's boyfriend and Sue is his stepmom???? Eeek
Date: 30 Dec 2013 7:26 PM Title: Chapter 31 - TPOGI Pt. 2
hmmm No note inwith the pics. Makes me think someone did intercept them from Rose before they got to E. Jazz needs to tell the others about the kid before it comes out.
Date: 28 Dec 2013 9:13 PM Title: Chapter 30 - The Price of Good Intentions
hmm Sounds like Em and Rose are perfect for each other. Em isn't being very nice. hmm so thinking Leah and either jake or embry. hmmm
Date: 28 Dec 2013 9:04 PM Title: Chapter 29 - Road Trip! Pt. 3
ugh Some people shouldn't be allowed to procreate. ROFL for E being embarrased.
Date: 28 Dec 2013 6:01 AM Title: Chapter 28 - Road Trip! Pt. 2
uh oh the cousins are coming. aww for Chef Bella baking up a storm
Date: 28 Dec 2013 5:43 AM Title: Chapter 27 - Road Trip!
LOVED the ending. ROFL. awww for E's little hissy fit.
Date: 28 Dec 2013 5:37 AM Title: Chapter 26 - Unexpected Skills Pt. 3
hmm dont really think her job as a fact checker would be a conflict of interest as long as she didnt cover baseball stuff. Ah well. Glad the police thing went well
Date: 28 Dec 2013 5:31 AM Title: Chapter 25 - Unexpected Skills Pt. 2
lol for the haircut.
Date: 28 Dec 2013 5:24 AM Title: Chapter 24 - Unexpected Skills
Glad Jasper is realizing his place in everything.
Date: 28 Dec 2013 5:21 AM Title: Chapter 23 - When Panic Sets In Pt. 2
Love Esme's speech.
Date: 25 Dec 2013 8:53 PM Title: Chapter 22 - When Panic Sets In
Jasper has more growing up to do it seems as well. So love Esme and Carlisle.
Date: 25 Dec 2013 6:08 AM Title: Chapter 21 - Details Pt. 3
I bet it was Jake who did the hitting. Poor E. So glad Carlisle and Esme are supporing him.
Date: 25 Dec 2013 5:52 AM Title: Chapter 20 - Details Pt. 2
Bear spray??? ROFL. hmmm thinking this Leah is connected to Jake....hopefully not seth. So nice of them taking care of her.
Date: 25 Dec 2013 5:41 AM Title: Chapter 19 - Details
oh yea. Thinking Leah is the one who is tailing them now.
OOOh I need them to come to my house. Yummy
Date: 25 Dec 2013 5:27 AM Title: Chapter 18 - Date Nights Pt. 3
bella is so smart sometimes. She does seem a little nervous about them leaving her.
Date: 25 Dec 2013 12:56 AM Title: Chapter 17 - Date Nights Pt. 2
woo hoo for the boys reuniting. Woo Hoo we get to meet alice now.
Date: 24 Dec 2013 6:22 PM Title: Chapter 16 - Date Nights
Glad B is wanting the boys to work things out. Hmm now you have me thinking that this reporter B is fact checking for is doing the spying.
Date: 24 Dec 2013 6:14 PM Title: Chapter 15 - Occasions Pt. 2
hmmm I'm thinking Embry is the photo culprit or maybe Jake. Not good though. Aww for the green eye monster coming out.
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Date: 24 Dec 2013 5:57 PM Title: Chapter 14 -Occasions
Rose is right. Gotta love oblivious Em. Think he'll be alright with it so long as the boys are good to her. I think he'll figure it out though.
Birthday presents sound nice.
Date: 24 Dec 2013 5:47 PM Title: Chapter 13 - Welcome Home...Pt. 2
hmmm Rose is a smart one. I like her and that B didnt back down from her either. Love this strong B. Yummy get together. They need stock in condom company. LOL
Date: 24 Dec 2013 5:25 PM Title: Chapter 12 - Welcome Home
Wow Bella is so sweet. Wish I could cook. LOL
Date: 24 Dec 2013 5:11 PM Title: Chapter 11 - Take Me Out...Pt. 2
hmmm that Embry thing is going to come back to bite them I think.
Date: 24 Dec 2013 2:36 AM Title: Chapter 10 - Take Me Out to the Ball Game
awww our boy Jasper is growing up. Too cute.
Date: 24 Dec 2013 2:27 AM Title: Chapter 9 - She's Gone Pt;. 3
wow his agent was a real arsehole. Glad Rose got E some info for them. Go Bella. Quick thinking on her part. I bet Esme sees through their story first time the three are in a room together. lol
Date: 24 Dec 2013 12:30 AM Title: Chapter 8 - She's Gone Pt. 2
Awww they are so sweet. Her little old lady on the bus was sweet too. Glad she wants to stand on her own but hopefully she'll accept help too.
Date: 24 Dec 2013 12:13 AM Title: Chapter 7 - She's Gone
Awww they are so cute. Can they adopt me?
Date: 23 Dec 2013 7:54 PM Title: Chapter 6 - The Warm Up Pt. 3
SOunds like its going to be harder for E than the others. At least they are being smart and talking it all over.
Date: 23 Dec 2013 7:47 PM Title: Chapter 5 - The Warm Up Pt. 2
Dayum. I wanna be Bella. So HAWT. You get a lemon dance for that one.
Date: 23 Dec 2013 7:30 PM Title: Chapter 4 - The Warm Up
hmmm this should be interesting. Ah Rose manage them both huh? This will be an interesting meeting.
Date: 23 Dec 2013 6:09 PM Title: Chapter 3 - The Starting Line-Up Pt. 3
oh Wow. B's had a hard time of it huh? What a way to find out.
Date: 23 Dec 2013 5:51 PM Title: Chapter 2 - The Starting Line-Up Pt. 2
Sounds like jasper has some more growing up to do.
Date: 17 Dec 2013 11:39 PM Title: Chapter 1 - The Starting Line-Up
SS you got booted off FFn. The morality police suck.....and not in a good way.
Great start, although Jasper seems like a bit of a drama queen. LOL
[Report This]Date: 21 Nov 2013 5:51 AM Title: Chapter 69 - Epilogue Pt. 3
I read this straight through, and loved every minute of it. Thank you for writing it.
[Report This]Date: 25 Sep 2013 12:53 AM Title: Chapter 69 - Epilogue Pt. 3
Absobloominlutely fabulous!
Catherine
[Report This]Date: 24 Sep 2013 10:09 PM Title: Chapter 51 - WotK Pt. 2
Hmmmm... since I go by shewoolf....*evil, wicked grin*... does that mean I get to attack the boys, too????
Catherine
[Report This]Date: 24 Sep 2013 2:07 AM Title: Chapter 1 - The Starting Line-Up
Okay.... definitely different than Trip of a Lifetime.... but I love it!
Catherine
[Report This]Date: 09 Jul 2013 4:38 PM Title: Chapter 69 - Epilogue Pt. 3
This is a great story it had all the elements to create the perfect epic comic suspense and romance with a lot of erotica to spice it up.
Date: 08 Jun 2013 12:51 PM Title: Chapter 27 - Road Trip!
Loved it!
Date: 08 Jun 2013 10:47 AM Title: Chapter 26 - Unexpected Skills Pt. 3
Loved it!
Date: 08 Jun 2013 9:36 AM Title: Chapter 25 - Unexpected Skills Pt. 2
Loved it!