Date: 05 Jun 2013 12:03 PM Title: Chapter 2-Lesson 5
OMG that was hilarious! Points for Vicky ;)
Date: 26 Jul 2012 10:16 AM Title: Chapter 2-Lesson 5
* "big boy" hahahaha- that was awesome!
* reverse cowgirl is pretty good, isn't it?
* I liked the awkwardness and the trying to replicate porn. Thank you for writing.
Date: 11 Jul 2012 9:09 AM Title: Chapter 1-Lesson 2
aw, that's so sad. i like how realistic this is, and how subtle the sex is. awesome job.
btw, i was wondering who the couple is?
Author's Response:
Date: 06 Jul 2012 10:11 PM Title: Chapter 1-Lesson 2
Really nice! I love the anonymity. Very effective in this. You've managed to write a nicely complete story in so few words. I feel the woman's emotions clearly. And you capture the complete obliviousness of the "Dom" so well.
"She has explained what she is looking for, but he repeats something different back to her. She tries again and again he hears something other. "
"He is sated, she is empty. He is proud, she feels used. "
Exellent job!
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for your kind review. I am overwhelmed by all the support I've received for this little piece.
Date: 05 Jul 2012 1:14 PM Title: Chapter 1-Lesson 2
I love when an author can convey their message with only a few words. It's an impressive and difficult feat, and I think you did a great job here.
I think this line really encompassed the whole crux of the story: "She withers inside aware that he cannot or will not be who she asked him to be."
Great job with the lesson, and with the extra credit!
Author's Response:
I am overwhelmed with the positive comments I am getting on this little piece. Thanks so much for reviewing.
Date: 05 Jul 2012 1:44 AM Title: Chapter 1-Lesson 2
Intresting twist of the assignment great job :) ~MissFJU
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading and reviewing. This assignment made me nervous, so I really appreciate your comments.
Date: 05 Jul 2012 1:35 AM Title: Chapter 1-Lesson 2
Wow! You sure captured her emotions well, and in a short piece, that's pretty amazing. I am wondering who they are. For some reason, I think of Bella and Mike. LOL. (I'm probably so wrong, and it's beside the point — or is the point; it could be anyone.)
My favorite lines:
"His kisses leave a feeling of emptiness" — That is soo sad.
"She used to hang on his words, hoping to hear something that told her she was special to him; someone to cherish and hold."
"But he cannot articulate his wants any more than she can make him hear her needs."
Good job on your first assignment piece!
Author's Response:
I was originally going to assign names, but it worked better to leave their identities open. Thanks so much for your kind words. Writing is fairly new to me so you gave me a big boost.
Date: 05 Jul 2012 1:16 AM Title: Chapter 1-Lesson 2
This was prefect. You really captured her emontions very well. Great job!
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review. I wasn't sure about how this fit into the assignment, so I really appreciate your cudos!
Date: 04 Jul 2012 10:55 PM Title: Chapter 1-Lesson 2
* Who are these two and what is their background?
* I love your premise-what a great conflict idea.
* Thank you for writing.
Author's Response:
I left their identities open on purpose...a bit of mystery. Thanks for your kind words. I really appreciate your review!