Date: 01 Jun 2017 1:37 AM Title: In Clear Sight
Hi, I'm just wondering if you plan on finishing this story? I read it a long time ago and dropped in to check on it. I'm curious to find out how Edward ends up. I have a thought, and although I doubt it, I'd like to see if I'm right.
Date: 10 Aug 2014 8:40 AM Title: Consequences
Suprise suprise I knew that Angela would be back enjoy your little revenge now Angela but remember if he goes down you'll go down with him I can't say I feel sorry for Edward because I don't he did this to himself Please update I 'm glad that your books are selling but remember you have people that love your stories here too
Date: 11 Jan 2013 9:54 PM Title: Doubling Up
That would've been really intense for Bella, and I think that for Edward and Bella to just leave her like that is really irresponsible. If you want to have that kind of play then you have a responsibility to take care of the sub (I know it hasn't really been said, but that's what Bella is in this relationship). I've liked this so far, but this lack of care is offensive.
Date: 10 Jan 2013 12:09 PM Title: Biding Time
What I really like about this fic is the time jumps between perspectives. It's really interesting to see the story build through the chapters and find out what's been happening while you were seeing a different part of the story. I thought it was well done :)
Date: 09 Jan 2013 2:00 PM Title: Rosalie's Story
I was annoyed with this chapter. I get that this is fanfic and short and everything, I just prefer to read more and get to know the characters better before knowing their backstory. And often, I don't really feel it's necessary--and it kinda felt this way with this. Mostly, I just find narrating stuff like this kinda lazy; it's way more interesting to have characters talk about stuff like this. I'm still going to keep on reading anyway.
Date: 09 Jan 2013 8:35 AM Title: Miss Innocent
I think my favourite part has got to be a gay Emmett. I really like that. I also really liked that (and this is a while back chapter-wise) that Edward acknowledges that he was raped. I think it would've been all too easy to just glaze over that and not even talk about it. I thought it was a brave and interesting thing to do with a male character.
This has got to be one of the more interesting fics I've found on here. And I really appreciate the revising (not that I read the original version) but it's nice to have the typos and grammatical errors corrected etc.
Good job :)
Oh, and I like the change you've made to Edward's demeanor. There's obviously still attraction between him and Bella, but I like that he's not really likeable. It'll be interesting to read the dynamics between them and Jasper together.
Date: 27 Dec 2012 11:27 PM Title: In Clear Sight
I haven't started this story and before I do start I was wondering is this story on hold or complete . I really want to read it but I hate getting emotionally invested in stories that I won't ever be able to see the end of . please message me back I have heard really good things about this story and I would really like to read it!!!!
Date: 12 Nov 2012 9:33 PM Title: In Clear Sight
Gah!! I'm all caught up and you've left me on a cliff, teetering on the edge. I know you have no schedule for posting and it's just 'as and when' so all I will say is, this is a brilliant story and I can't wait to find out what happens so I really hope that 'as and when' is soon, lol. In the meantime I'll make myself comfy on the cliff edge.
Date: 12 Nov 2012 8:55 PM Title: Another Brick in the Wall
Oh my God!! Penny dropping, do you hear it, lol. Alec as in best friend Alec as in Emmett's Alec?? They have to be one and the same, I'd forgotten about his best friend, how slow am I, lol. Edward's headed to a bar will he meet him again? Who's Claire?
Can Jasper and Bella get past this? I hope so. What will Edward do now?
Date: 12 Nov 2012 8:26 PM Title: Consequences
Edward's life is well and truly falling to bits. He seriously underestimated Angela, but then so did I. Just goes to show that you can never predict what a jealous woman will do.
Will Bella really leave Jasper when they have their talk having just declared her love for him. She's totally forgotten about meeting Rose at the club, is she going to turn up at Bella's duplex?
Date: 12 Nov 2012 7:52 PM Title: Wake Up Call
Poor Bella her arse must feel red raw but it's the mental pain that will take longer to come to terms with and get over. I don't think Edward will be able to clean this mess up, he really could do with some help of the professional kind. His grip on his control has slipped and whatever he's kept burried is coming to the surface. There has to be more stuff that he needs to deal with besides what happened with Jane and Makenna.
Date: 12 Nov 2012 7:25 PM Title: Sticks and Stones
Where did Edward, the master of control, go to? It seems that he may have had some sort of epiphany though and it just goes to show that you can't avoid your feelings forever.
"Have you lost yer cotton pickin' mind!" Lol, sorry but that line, out of context, is funny.
Date: 12 Nov 2012 6:59 PM Title: New Girl In Town
Holy crap! Alice is working for Rose. Well I'm assuming it's Alice. Does she know who Bella is? Oh, the shit could really hit the fan now. What's she doing there? What's she thinking? Will she turn up at the club?
Date: 12 Nov 2012 5:54 PM Title: Freedom
Why is it that Edward is always the one behind Bella? When they start playing Edward is always the one to support Bella whilst Jasper goes down on her. Does this have significance or am I reading too much into this? Is this how Edward maintains some of his distance so that he can still say this is a game?