[Report This]Date: 10 Dec 2014 9:51 PM Title: Chapter 2 - Before the storm
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[Report This]Date: 05 Aug 2014 5:12 PM Title: Chapter 10 - Striptease and Wedding Bells
This was a delightful story. Thank you for sharing. I'm off to find the sequel!
Author's Response:
Hi samekraemer
Oh wow thank you so much for reviewing every chapter, and in such a short time too. You are amazing.
Glad you enjoyed the boys story.
Thank you again
Take care
maryhell
[Report This]Date: 05 Aug 2014 4:38 PM Title: Chapter 9 - Karaoke Confessions
Great coming out chapter.
[Report This]Date: 05 Aug 2014 3:58 PM Title: Chapter 8 - Let's Take You Home
Great chapter.
[Report This]Date: 05 Aug 2014 3:33 AM Title: Chapter 7 - Aftermath
Aw...I love seeing J take care of E. Edward's going to have a lot of shit to deal with, but with Jasper at his side, I have every faith he'll come out on the other side. Great chap.
Author's Response:
Hi samekraemer
I agree, love how these boys look after oneanother.
Take care
maryhell
[Report This]Date: 05 Aug 2014 12:56 AM Title: Chapter 6 - Our First Time
Great Chapter.
[Report This]Date: 04 Aug 2014 11:47 PM Title: Chapter 5 - We're Coming
Poor Edward...
[Report This]Date: 04 Aug 2014 11:11 PM Title: Chapter 4 - Wlho's Your Daddy
I'm biting my nails!! I'm so grateful I don't have to wait!! Thx.
[Report This]Date: 04 Aug 2014 9:40 PM Title: Chapter 2 - Before the storm
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[Report This]Date: 04 Aug 2014 9:12 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Meet the Pack
Just found this today! Looking forward to it. Great first chap.
Date: 14 Oct 2013 12:23 PM Title: Chapter 10 - Striptease and Wedding Bells
I loved this story. It showed the real love between them. So many of the slash stories do not show the whole relationship between the guys. It is all about lemons. These relationships are just as loving. Thanks for showing both sides of this loving relationship.
Author's Response:
Hi sonogal
Thank you sooo much for your wonderful review.
The honeymoon is full of Lemons, but then again a honeymoon should be. We then get back to more of the action in the third of the series.
I like to think my fics are story first, and that the lemons compliment the story, not make it.
Hopefully you will enjoy my other works.
Many thanks again for reading and reviewing.
Take care
maryhell
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[Report This]Date: 17 Jun 2013 4:19 AM Title: Chapter 10 - Striptease and Wedding Bells
Their ceremony was a cumplete...surprise and their vows were...beautiful.
Well, I'm ready...for another day, already ;D
Oh, loved the bit about the invitation for Tanya, getting lost in the mail, seeing the ring, watching Edward and Jasper kiss...and then, faint. LOL ;D
Effen flove your Emmett!
Thank you for sharing your talent and your time. I enjoyed the journey.
Take Care and Happy Writing
Rita ;D
Author's Response:
Hi CentauRita
WOW WOW WOW - thank you again for reading and reviewing every chapter. You are wonderful.
Over the moon, you enjoyed the boys adventure.
they ave more fun with Tanya in the follow up.
The writing will continue. After their Honeymoon, and I get a couple of things out of the way, I will be wring a 3rd in the series.
Again thank you, for your time, effort and encouraging words.
Take care
maryhell
[Report This]Date: 17 Jun 2013 3:36 AM Title: Chapter 9 - Karaoke Confessions
**sigh**
After each of Edward's and Jasper's karaoke songs...I missed them being able to a little PDA, However, they more than made up for it with that coming out kiss in their kitchen in front of The Pack ;* HAWT!
Author's Response:
Hi CentauRita
MMMM - the temperature certainly rises a few degrees from now on.
Glad you enjoyed their foray into the world of Karaoke. The bbq is about to be set on fire.
Take care
maryhell
[Report This]Date: 17 Jun 2013 2:50 AM Title: Chapter 8 - Let's Take You Home
Edward seems to be working it all out in his head...thanks to, Jasper.
Marcus, showing up...did not surprise me, Edward's venting...did, scary but understandably so.
My favorite part...
Well, it’ll take more than one measly fucker with a bullet to dispatch Eddie boy here. Ain’t that right, Eddie?”
That did the trick alright. It changed the course of Edward’s emotions, because Edward hated, loathed and detested, being called Eddie, and Emmett knew that.
“Don’t. Call. Me. Eddie. Fuckarthy.” Edward seethed through his teeth.
Made me, LOL ;D
Author's Response:
Hi CentauRita
Thank you yet again for such a lovely review.
Emmett acts the goof, but he is more perceptive than they realise. He knows exactly how to jerk someone's strings.
Take care
maryhell
[Report This]Date: 17 Jun 2013 1:53 AM Title: Chapter 7 - Aftermath
Jasper gave Edward a lot of food for thought...and he's happily chewing away, begging for more!
Author's Response:
Hi Centaurita
He most certainly did, and Edward will be all the stronger for it. Jasper is Edwards rock.
Take care
maryhell
[Report This]Date: 17 Jun 2013 1:15 AM Title: Chapter 6 - Our First Time
Well, Jasper happens to love Edward's...ups and downs**waggling my eyebrows** ;}
Author's Response:
Hi CantauRita
Yes Jasper loves Edward inside and out. There is nothing he wouldn't do for his man.
Thank you for reading and leaving such lovely reviews.
Take care
maryhell
[Report This]Date: 17 Jun 2013 12:41 AM Title: Chapter 5 - We're Coming
I would hate to think what would have happened if Carlisle had not been there. Edward may not have been resuscitated...DOA
Carlisle, question about Jasper and Edward being...more, than just brothers. Perceptive.
Author's Response:
Hi CentauRita
Thank heavens Carlisle was there. He has to have some extra ESP in his profession, but I think it's hightened with his boys.
I'd have found some way to keep Edward alive.
Take care
maryhell
[Report This]Date: 17 Jun 2013 12:14 AM Title: Chapter 4 - Wlho's Your Daddy
Hey, Cliffie wasn't a character, when last I read!
**as I dust the gravel off of my nose, from face-planting into that Cliff you imposed**
Something devilishly deliciously deviant needs to happen to James and Victoria! Let Marcus have Caius...he'll probably peel the skin off of him...okay, by me. Especially, for what they have done to Edward.
Author's Response:
Hi CentauRita
HAHAHAH - oh bless you.
Sorry about Cliffie, he can be a B****D
Caius won't get away with it, nor will James and Victoria.
Take care
maryhell
[Report This]Date: 16 Jun 2013 11:38 PM Title: Chapter 3
Can't hardly stand the abuse being given to Edward by these F'ers!
Oh, and the waiting must be killing Jasper, knowing that his love is harmed and, at the moment, can do nothing about it.
Those F'ers seem to know a lot about Edward, though. How? And more importantly...whom?
Author's Response:
Hi CentauRita
Wow, you do a lot of reading at one time. Thank you soooo much for reviewing each chapter. It really is appreciated.
Very true, the waiting is killing Jasper.
All gets revealed eventually.
Take care
maryhell
[Report This]Date: 16 Jun 2013 10:44 PM Title: Chapter 2 - Before the storm
Your Boyz are so sweet, I don't know how Jasper and Edward have been able to keep their relationship between them from everyone else.
Job well done...**cough, cough**saving Bree, of course! **winks and smiles**Jasper did a good job loving Edward, too!
Now, they've got another job to do. So, take that one to the bank ;}
Author's Response:
Hi CentauRita
Edward and Jasper are masters at undercover. As everyone believes they are brothers, their closeness wasn't in question.
Glad you enjoyed the other *cough cough* scenes
Take care
maryhell
[Report This]Date: 16 Jun 2013 9:50 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Meet the Pack
Nice…Intro-duh-ick-tion! Edward really 'packed' Jasper, to the hilt! ;}
Author's Response:
Hi CentauRita
HAHAHAHA - very good, love your play on words
Oh yes, Edward knows how to satisfy his man.
Take care
maryhell
Date: 16 May 2013 12:43 PM Title: Chapter 10 - Striptease and Wedding Bells
Awww, loved the ending but I'm sad to see it come to an end, so I was glad to read the notes and find out there's more.
Emmett as usual, was hilarious in this chapter, I just love him to bits. I'm glad they chose him for best man.
Edward's striptease - holy hell! I'm not surprised it drove Jasper wild - lucky boy - and the Christening of the kitchen counter later was HOT! I really shouldn't keep reading these things at work, hahha.
The wedding was beautiful; their vows were so touching.
Loved the story and I can't wait to see what's next for the boys!
Author's Response:
Hi Sarah
Thank you for reading and reviewing.
OMG you're reading them at work. AWWWWWWWW.
Glad you enjoyed their journey.
What's next for the boys - a lotta lovin.
Take care
Yvonne
Date: 15 May 2013 3:22 PM Title: Chapter 9 - Karaoke Confessions
Oh, I loved this chapter! Carlisle and Esme so supportive of them and Jasper's proposal brought a lump to my throat. Their love-making after was so perfect and hot.
Loved the karaoke too, Edward's song choice was perfect. I liked the way they told the pack, I had wondered if Emmett in particular had guessed something was between them. I'm glad nobody was completely horrified by their revelation and Leah and Alice get to stop hiding too! Great chapter all round and now I can't wait for the wedding, although I'm going to be sad to come to the end.
Author's Response:
Hi Sarah
Thank you for reading and reviewing. Over the moon you love this story so much.
More fun to come in the last chapter. They deal with a thorn in the side.
Take care
Yvonne
Date: 15 May 2013 5:42 AM Title: Chapter 8 - Let's Take You Home
Aww, so proud of Edward in this chapter - having the talk with Esme and Carlisle and then facing Marcus too. All of that must have been very hard for im; it's no wonder he has panic attacks. Can't wait for him to get home now and have some alone time with Jasper!
Emmett was hilarious in the way he diffused the situation when the Pack were in the hospital - I expected nothing less from him.
Author's Response:
Hi Sarah
Thank you for reading and reviewing. Always a pleasure to read your views.
Emmett bless him is a sweetie, he see's more than he lets on. More fun to come from him.
The worst is over for the boys - I see citrus and fun in their future.
Take care
Yvonne
Date: 14 May 2013 2:39 PM Title: Chapter 7 - Aftermath
Jasper's being amazing and I wouldn't expect anything less. I wasn't really surprised either to hear that Edward blamed himself and feels that his bloodline makes him a bad person. Awww.
The part where Edward remembered Jasper whispering and breathing life into him was so touching I had tears in my eyes.
So good to hear that Carlisle and Esme support them being together too. Now Edward just needs to get well enough to be able to take care of the blue balls!
Author's Response:
Hi Sarah
Thank you for reading and reviewing.
Yes, Carlisle and Esme were never in any doubt, re their support. They want their boys happy.
Sorry about the tissue moment - warning, don't think it's the last either. Jasper is Edwards absolutely granite rock.
Blue balls will be an issue, but lemons are on the horizon.
Emmet in the interim, gives some comic relief.
Take care
Yvonne
Date: 13 May 2013 2:01 PM Title: Chapter 6 - Our First Time
Wow, wow and WOW! I loved the flashback to their first time, you sure write a steaming hot and detailed lemon. I LOVED it, beautifully written.
And now Ed is awake and I bet Jasper isn't going to leave his side for some time. Can't wait to read more.
Sarah
Author's Response:
Hi Sarah
Many thanks for the compliments, they mean a lot.
You are right, Jasper won't leave his side.
Glad you are enjoying it. Thank you for reading and reviewing.
Take care
Yvonne
Date: 13 May 2013 12:33 PM Title: Chapter 5 - We're Coming
OMFG! I swear I chewed some nails off reading that chapter. Just as I thought he was safe and Jasper got him out, you shot him! Thank God he's going to be ok, but it sounds like a long recovery from all the injuries and loss of part of his liver. Awesome chapter - I love when a story has me so gripped!
Author's Response:
Hey Sarah
HEHEHEHE - yep, couldn't resist that one. Gotta throw in a few curved balls here and there. Glad I have you on the edge of your seat.
thank you so much for reading and reviewing.
Take care
Yvonne
Date: 11 May 2013 7:59 AM Title: Chapter 4 - Wlho's Your Daddy
Good grief! What a place to leave it! I wish I could keep reading. That was a heck of a twist to find out that Marcus is Edward's father. Poor Edward, I was grinding my teeth reading about how they hurt him. Jasper must be internally tearing his hair out. I hope they can get him out safely. So loving this story! :)
Author's Response:
Hi Sarah
Absolutely thrilled you are reading this. Yes Jasper is tearing his hair out. I loves me a bit of manly Carlisle too in this. It ain't over yet, not by a long shot. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing.
Take care
Yvonne
Date: 10 May 2013 2:24 PM Title: Chapter 3
Damn, this had me on the edge of my seat! Poor Edward, I hope nothing awful happens to him. You know, this would make an awesome movie, I'd be glued to the screen!
Author's Response:
Hi Sarah
Over the moon that you are enjoying it. OH WOW for the movie reference - thank you so much. You'll have to read on to find out about Edward, suffice as to say - it ain't all roses.
Take care
Yvonne
Date: 09 May 2013 3:25 PM Title: Chapter 2 - Before the storm
I like that the Volturi are the Mafia - perfectly fitting!
Emmett's hilarious, I can see him speeding and blowing things up. Wonder if he is after Rose or if he's just joking around ;)
Loved the lemon (of course) - you're spoiling us! Really enjoying the story so far.
Author's Response:
Oh yes, Emmett is a blast in this. I have a lot of fun with him. Thank you for reading and reviewing. Totally stoked.
Glad you are enjoying it. This was my first ever story that I wrote.
Take care
Yvonne
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[Report This]Date: 09 May 2013 3:16 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Meet the Pack
Ok, this is the first time I reviewed anything on TWCS and I'm appalling slow in reading too. I'm sure I read half this chapter on Fanfic a while back and then chaos ensued and I'm ashamed to say I forgot to come back :(
Anyway...I loved the description of the team, the nick names are very fitting. I've never read a storyline like this before and it sounds like it's going to be interesting. Not to mention the luscious, steaming hot lemons! The boys are so good together, I can't wait to read more!
Author's Response:
Oh wow - I can't believe you are reading my boys. OMG wonderful. Thank you.
[Report This]Date: 21 Feb 2013 1:39 AM Title: Chapter 10 - Striptease and Wedding Bells
Would love a sequel. They are so cute/sweet together. Looking forward to the honeymoon chapter! Thanks for a great read.
Author's Response:
Hello Flutterfli
Absolut tons of apologies for not replying to your review sooner. I got rather lost in my other projects.
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing, your compliments mean a lot to me.
I am determined there will be a sequel, but I have 2 things to tie up first then I can work on the story line. I have started the sequel and have 2 chapters written. When I have the storyboard complete, I will start posting.
All the very best
maryhell
[Report This]Date: 14 Oct 2012 12:17 AM Title: Chapter 10 - Striptease and Wedding Bells
The wedding is so beautiful I still cry EVERY time I re-read it!
Catherine
Author's Response:
Hi Catherine
Awwww bless you sweetie. I'm a wreck at weddings too.
Thank you for reading, reviewing and loving the boys.
Take care
yvonne xx
[Report This]Date: 28 Aug 2012 1:47 AM Title: Chapter 10 - Striptease and Wedding Bells
Fucking fantastic story...loved it more the second time around!
Nati
Author's Response:
Hi Nati
Over the moon to read your review - thank you. I am currently writing the boy's honeymoon. Must get my rear end in gear and finish it.
Take care
maryhell
Date: 28 Aug 2012 1:41 AM Title: Chapter 1 - Meet the Pack
I had to laugh at your reply to one of the reviews about sexy encounters...you do mean sex on the counter, right?
Nati
Author's Response:
Oh yeah.xx
Date: 29 Jun 2012 5:17 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Meet the Pack
omg!!!! i loved this story sooooooooooo much!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! seriously like the cutest thing ever! :)
Author's Response:
Hi JasperOhHaleYes
Love your penname. Over the moon that you like the boys. Thank you for reviewing - I look forward to hearing your thoughts on future chapters.
Take care
maryhell
Date: 26 Jun 2012 6:48 PM Title: Chapter 4 - Wlho's Your Daddy
Fantastic so far- can't beleive it doesnt have more reviews.
Feeling so bad for Edward right now! i really didn't expect the story to go this way.
Can't wait to read the rest and will definately have finished it by tonight.
Lovely detail, especially on the technical stuff, which can sometimes be skipped over in stories of this nature :)
Thanks for writing! x
Author's Response:
Hi lex306
Thank you so much for your review. It was originally posted on fanfiction where it had 399 reviews, but due to all the nasty over on the site, I moved it over to TWCS. Over the moon that you have found it. The sequel will be coming in the next few weeks - their Honeymoon, it will be drama free, but they will have some fun and laughs and some very sexy encounters. !!!!
Take care
maryhell
Date: 14 Jun 2012 1:39 PM Title: Chapter 10 - Striptease and Wedding Bells
Loved loved loved this story!
Like I said before, I loved reading it on FFiction:))
THnk UUUUUUUUUU!!
Hugs, Rashell
Author's Response:
Hi Rashell
YAYYYYY you made it to the end. Thank you for loving the boys. I have started writing, Hostage The Honeymoon - the boys are off somewhere nice for a spot of man loving. A total romance. There will be another story, maybe two featuring the boys that will involve more drama.
Take care
Maryhell
Date: 13 Jun 2012 12:14 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Meet the Pack
totally loved this story!!!
Rashell
Author's Response:
Hi Rashell
Thank you for reading and taking the time to review - it is appreciated. Enjoy the ride with the boys, they have quite the journey ahead of them.
I look forward to hearing from you again.
Take care
maryhell