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Reviewer: Bellnedward0 Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Jan 2020 10:14 PM Title: Epilogue

Aww please update this story soon.  It is so wonderful!

Reviewer: Bellnedward0 Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Jan 2020 10:14 PM Title: Epilogue

Aww please update this story soon.  It is so wonderful!

Reviewer: kopec82 Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 24 Mar 2016 3:15 AM Title: Epilogue

Yes! No annoying Alice!!!!  I realy like this story and problably the best writing on the naughty this they did ever!!!mwell done

Reviewer: twirob13 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 17 Jun 2015 5:22 PM Title: Epilogue

amazing story ;) i'm glad they got their hea ;) thanks for sharing this on here for us ;D

Reviewer: lilypad1588 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Jul 2014 11:53 PM Title: Epilogue

Loved it! Loved it.  Got this beauty from Ms.Swans bookstore.

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Dec 2013 11:07 AM Title: Epilogue

Really good story! I enjoyed reading it immensely! Very different Bella and very different Edward, but they fit together perfectly! I'm sensing a happy ever after!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Dec 2013 10:48 AM Title: Chapter 24

That looks like a good way to start a whole new life, dumping the thing that's weighing you down. I liked Edward's epiphany that Bella was smart enough to make up her own mind what to do with her life. He may not be perfect, by any means, but she wants him just the way he is.

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Dec 2013 10:36 AM Title: Chapter 23

That was a slick deal Edward made with Carlos! Bella really has a gift for helping them out of trouble, and he doesn't do a bad job of bluffing, either! Boy, that was a close thing! I about had a fit when the bastard pushed Bella in the room with a gun to her head! Luck was sure on their side this time!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Dec 2013 10:18 AM Title: Chapter 22

Oh shit! I had that bad feeling again and sure enough! Captain Lopez must be the mole in the police department, and he was just stalling Edward while Mala got there!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Dec 2013 9:46 AM Title: Chapter 21

Oh Edward, famous last words, just one more thing to do and then they will go! Now I'm really afraid that they might not make it out of Phoenix!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Dec 2013 9:25 AM Title: Chapter 20

All this snooping around is apt to have Mala breathing down their necks! I hope Edward has his gun on him, I have a bad feeling he may need it! Poor Phil, he really was falling for Renee, it's a shame the bad guys took her from him! I hope he keeps his mouth shut about Bella!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Dec 2013 8:52 AM Title: Chapter 19

So, definitely a cover-up! Looks like it goes as high as the police captain, who told the me's supervisor who in turn told the me. If anyone had returned Marlene's calls it would soon have become apparent that suicide was not the proper ruling! I still am curious, what did Renee know that got her shot?

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Dec 2013 8:31 AM Title: Chapter 18

Now that she's made him promise to stay away from Mala, and he's made her promise to stay behind if necessary, I hope  they don't run into Mala!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Dec 2013 8:11 AM Title: Chapter 17

It's beginning to look like Renee had some information she shouldn't  have had and Mala made sure she would never use it! I'm so glad Bella had Edward with her when she went back to her mom's place. I'm not happy that he lied to her , but maybe he'll tell her the truth before long. He's forgotten how she can see possibilities that he misses, and how she can practically read his mind!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Dec 2013 7:32 AM Title: Chapter 16

I get a feeling that Bella wouldn't necessarily be that opposed to Edward killing Mala, for a couple reasons. First he murdered her mother, then he kidnapped her, thinking to use her for a while, and thirdly, he's a creepy, psychotic criminal! Pretty good reasons, I think! I hope Edward has faith in her! If he can discover why Mala killed Renee, then he needs to hide Bella and the place I thought of that no one else i.e., the bad guys,! would is with Carlisle and Esme

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Dec 2013 7:01 AM Title: Chapter 15

That was so touching when Bella whispered that she wished Harold was her grandfather! I'm smiling at the lie Edward told to bolster his story about vacationing in Mexico! I remember Bella telling about the boring boyfriend who was studying to be an optometrist! It is a good sign that Edward has opened up a little about his past, I have hope for this pair!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Dec 2013 5:07 AM Title: Chapter 14

I was wondering when that solution would occur to him!, If he gets rid of the one big threat then they won't have to live in fear, looking over their shoulders the rest of their days! Harold has turned out to be a veritable godsend, what a cool old guy!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Dec 2013 4:54 AM Title: Chapter 13

That's a really good plan, if they can fet Harold to help them out! It will probably appeal to the old guy, he's got a strange outlook on life, after all! I wonder if Edward will ever feel that Bella loves him as he love her?

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Dec 2013 4:37 AM Title: Chapter 12

What a wonderful rainy day and they enjoyed it just like any honeymooning couple! I so much want this to turn out okay for them!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Dec 2013 4:23 AM Title: Chapter 11

With the way Edward feels about her, it was probably inevitable that this would happen, since Bella has feelings for him too! It would be really great if they didn't have the threat of Mala hanging over them. That part is still pretty much up in the air!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Dec 2013 4:06 AM Title: Chapter 10

I wonder what that little smile on Bella's face is supposed to mean? This was a pleasant little interlude with Harold and August on the beach. I'm glad they found their way there, and I'm glad that Edward is falling for Bella. Figured it had to be that, otherwise why would he care what happens to her?

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Dec 2013 3:43 AM Title: Chapter 9

Lord, what a thing to happen, both legs broken at the same time! The poor thing, and poor you having to watch over him ! I would be tearing out my hair! Now, about this story! UI think I really like Harold, he's sure a different old man! Bella, the wanna-be vet, probably likes his dog, August. I'm glad they are going to stay with Harold for a couple days, and even more glad that Mala sent the money, I think. Edward could be right, that it's just to lull him into a false sense of security. Hard to know, for sure!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Dec 2013 3:24 AM Title: Chapter 8

Bella is smart, thinking of the weekend banking thing. Then, Edward was right about the bike being noticeable, too , so I guess they really do have a good partnership!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Dec 2013 3:08 AM Title: Chapter 7

So, honeymoon in Mexico, huh? As good a cover story as any, and better than some. The biggest problem will be getting back into the states again, not an easy task with no i.d.! I trust these two to come up with a way to do it!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Dec 2013 2:54 AM Title: Chapter 6

These two really work well together. They are both smart, logical, and in her case especially , intuitive. Go where the bad guys won't be expecting you, throw them off the scent as it were! Sounds like a plan, if they can get over the border.

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Dec 2013 1:36 AM Title: Chapter 5

It took a while for the lightbulb to come on, but it looks like Edward has figured out why the police report was so screwed up! Mala has "friends" in the police department who, for a price, would file a false report! They have gone to so much trouble to make it look like she's dead, now is no time to let them know she's still alive!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Dec 2013 12:51 AM Title: Chapter 4

Oh yes, I like Juanita, she seems to be on the side of the angels in this deal! It's going to be a damn tricky situation and I hope they can pull this off without getting killed! I'm like Bella, I can't imagine why Mala would have murdered Bella's mother. I'm also not real sure why Bella would trust Edward to get her out of this mess.  Maybe because he's in as much trouble as she is if he crosses Mala!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Dec 2013 12:25 AM Title: Chapter 3

This guy, Rico/Mala, is a cold-blooded bastard if ever there was one! Edward has got himself into a real mess with this "job"! I can already tell he's not going to kill Bella, but that's going to put the both of them in danger. After all, if you're not with him, you are a "loose end"! Love to know what kind of threat a hundred pound girl is to Mr. Tough Drug Dealer, that he wants her dead?

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Dec 2013 11:40 PM Title: Chapter 2

So, Juanita is watching Bella for someone, someone she's afraid of, evidently. This whole encounter was strange, the night, the breakfast and the bike repair. Why does he want to linger and why does she look so hopeless? Can't wait to find out!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Dec 2013 11:29 PM Title: Chapter 1

Well, that was weird! Bet he's never run across anything like her before! Makes me wonder what Juanita had in mind, and who Mala is?

Reviewer: gatorgrl91 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 04 Nov 2012 4:45 PM Title: Epilogue

So good!! Awesome! I love HEAs. Keep up the great work!!!
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Reviewer: gatorgrl91 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 04 Nov 2012 2:31 PM Title: Chapter 22

Uh oh!!! The showdown is upon us!!! Great build-up!
:)

Reviewer: gatorgrl91 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 03 Nov 2012 7:21 PM Title: Chapter 16

Flove Harold!!!
:)

Reviewer: gatorgrl91 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 03 Nov 2012 4:06 PM Title: Chapter 10

Really good!! Can't wait for the mystery to unfold!!
:)

Reviewer: gatorgrl91 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 03 Nov 2012 3:47 AM Title: Chapter 5

Oh...the plot thickens!!!
:)

Reviewer: gatorgrl91 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 03 Nov 2012 3:47 AM Title: Chapter 4

:)

Reviewer: ghartling Signed [Report This]
Date: 02 Oct 2012 4:01 AM Title: Epilogue

I loved this story!!!

 

G

Reviewer: bmary Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Aug 2012 11:24 PM Title: Chapter 1

good story but the spacing makes it very difficult to read but i am enjoying it

Reviewer: BelleBiter Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 29 Jul 2012 3:07 PM Title: Epilogue

Thank you again for another beautifully written story. You are so skilled at balancing acts: the exposition of a crime plot that doesn't get bogged down in details, or veer towards gratuitous gore, or even melodramatic silliness; the gentle humor and playfulness that develops between Bella and Edward... moving along their love story by example vs. description (yay!), in the midst of all the tension that surrounds them as they are on the run. The image of Harold strolling down the beach in an old sundress is one that I will pull out on a rainy day when I need a good belly laugh. Seriously, though, every "side" character you introduce is believable and necessary, and makes the story seem that much tighter.

No pressure, but I can only hope that you will be inspired to write more & to write often. The dynamics between your Edwards and your Bellas are some of my favorites that I've ever read in ff, and I've fallen in love with them as easily and as naturally as they fell for each other.

Well, it's obvious that I am certainly a fan of your fiction. Cheers to you!

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Jul 2012 6:45 AM Title: Chapter 9

I have been trying to give this story a chance and it seemed really interesting until I realized that you are writing Edward and Bella as only friends.  Or at least that is what I think.  I mean if there are no lemons or even kissing then really I dont think you should rate it as NC 17.  I skipped to chapter 14 and I still didn't see any sparks fly with these two.  So I must say that I cant continue as it just is not exciting enough without the lemons.  Sorry.

Reviewer: bzwifenmom24-7 Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Jun 2012 4:56 AM Title: Epilogue

I love love this story. Full of action, drama, comedy and romance. Thanks for sharing your talent. 

Reviewer: bzwifenmom24-7 Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Jun 2012 1:58 PM Title: Chapter 6

I want to go honeymooning with Edward too. LOL

Reviewer: bzwifenmom24-7 Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Jun 2012 1:02 PM Title: Chapter 4

I like Juanita.

Reviewer: momma2fan Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 08 Jun 2012 10:26 PM Title: Epilogue

Great job. I loved every minute of it.

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jun 2012 8:30 PM Title: Epilogue

Loved it thanks for the story!

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jun 2012 8:26 PM Title: Chapter 24

Future looks bright!

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jun 2012 8:21 PM Title: Chapter 23

That worked well!  I was worried!

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jun 2012 7:25 PM Title: Chapter 22

Oh there you are mr mala

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jun 2012 7:20 PM Title: Chapter 21

One more thing,,,,I am worried about that!

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jun 2012 6:38 PM Title: Chapter 20

Well we know why she was killed 

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jun 2012 6:28 PM Title: Chapter 19

What a mystery!

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jun 2012 6:23 PM Title: Chapter 18

Big mistake Bella he is going to find you

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jun 2012 6:17 PM Title: Chapter 17

Poor Bella at least she got her info, Ed you are dumb don't leave her!

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jun 2012 5:58 PM Title: Chapter 16

They are so hot together! 

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jun 2012 5:46 PM Title: Chapter 15

Ed don't do it dont leave her!

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jun 2012 5:34 PM Title: Chapter 14

Interesting about harold.  I am still curious about he bells is involved

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jun 2012 5:23 PM Title: Chapter 13

They are good together!  Poor Ed I feel sorry for him!

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jun 2012 5:04 PM Title: Chapter 12

You can make me sore any time Ed!  HOT!  Take what you want beela, I would if I was you!

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jun 2012 4:54 PM Title: Chapter 11

Yeah!  But what now?

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jun 2012 4:40 PM Title: Chapter 10

Getcha some Bella!

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jun 2012 4:06 PM Title: Chapter 9

Well he got the money, but I still don't trust it.  Hope we get answers oon about why he wants Bella dead

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jun 2012 3:32 PM Title: Chapter 8

Totally complicated, not thinking it is the weekend that is stopping the money!

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jun 2012 3:27 PM Title: Chapter 7

Can't wait to see how this is going to play out!

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jun 2012 3:22 PM Title: Chapter 6

This doesn't sound god for them....can't wait to read more!

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jun 2012 3:07 PM Title: Chapter 5

Oh no not good he has the police in his back pocket.  Ed is going to have to kill him! And what did Renee know?  This is deep!

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jun 2012 2:55 PM Title: Chapter 4

Hum....what is the plan and why does that guy want her dead?

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jun 2012 2:54 PM Title: Chapter 3

Oh boy not good whatcha going to do Ed?

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jun 2012 2:53 PM Title: Chapter 2

Bella seems tough like that

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jun 2012 2:53 PM Title: Chapter 1

Looks like it is going to be good can't wait to read more!

Reviewer: Jacklynnfrost Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Jun 2012 7:49 PM Title: Epilogue

Great! thank you for sharing your story.

Reviewer: sarasue Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 04 Jun 2012 9:24 PM Title: Epilogue

good story new to the site this is the first one ive read enjoyed it but the spacing made it difficult to read sometimes



Author's Response:

You know, you're right.  I haven't been reading the chapters after I put them up, and I just realized the spacing's weird.  I'll have to see if I can fix it; it's annoying as all get out.  Thanks for letting me know, and I'm glad you enjoyed the story.

kts

Reviewer: tlwatkins36 Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 May 2012 3:11 PM Title: Chapter 20

Great chapter, loads of information...I like this Phil... Edward needs to go into detective  work maybe!!  He's good

Reviewer: Alabastdelf Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 May 2012 12:23 AM Title: Chapter 17

It was a great chapter,just like all the ones in this story.I hope Edward and Bella will be free to love each other in the rest of the story.The tension is building though.Hopefully all will end well for them.

Reviewer: sassycook Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01 May 2012 4:48 AM Title: Chapter 11

shocked they got together

glad how things are going

 

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Apr 2012 2:48 PM Title: Chapter 10

hmm

Reviewer: sassycook Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 29 Apr 2012 2:42 PM Title: Chapter 10

i am wondering why she wants to leave

seems it is perfect at harold's

he is so nice and seems maybe a  little lonely

seems a good fit for everyone

seems things might be heating up for our couple

Reviewer: sassycook Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 29 Apr 2012 2:05 PM Title: Chapter 9

good luck with your husband

thank god the money came through. but again i am not a hundred percent sure maas bought it

i would just disappear with my money and be done with all jobs from here out.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Apr 2012 6:27 AM Title: Chapter 9

Husband home with two broken legs. Oh POOR YOU. 

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Apr 2012 5:24 AM Title: Chapter 6

Well I say you should go to New York. Why because there are so many people you can get lost there. You want to be lost. Stay there a while then move along to an unpopulated area get a job and stay for  a year.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Apr 2012 5:17 AM Title: Chapter 5

The police are in on it.  I mean I even get that. LOL

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Apr 2012 5:00 AM Title: Chapter 4

You know this crap goes on. I live in Texas. New Mexico, Arizona all have problems with the Mexican gangs. 

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Apr 2012 4:26 AM Title: Chapter 3

well so long Bella. wonderful guy this Edward.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Apr 2012 4:16 AM Title: Chapter 2

Someone wants that little girl dead.. Mala?

Reviewer: renesmee26 Signed [Report This]
Date: 02 Apr 2012 6:21 AM Title: Chapter 1

hi hello,i just read your story,a very interesting one led me tell you..and i´m glad that you´re good writing into Spanish..i found many mistakes on lots of fan-fictions.So thumbs up!

Reviewer: sassycook Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02 Apr 2012 1:56 AM Title: Chapter 8

i am wondering why he wants to go back to the states when really it is not safe for either of them.

they both need to disappear it seems

 

Reviewer: hkimberly Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 29 Mar 2012 4:18 AM Title: Chapter 6

Loved it bb!!!!

Reviewer: moremoo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 28 Mar 2012 5:33 PM Title: Chapter 5

Oh crap the copers are bad guys aren't they. Can't wait for next one. I'm totally hooked now

Reviewer: sassycook Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 28 Mar 2012 5:57 AM Title: Chapter 4

man mala needs to be dealt with

i feel bad for juanita she has her hands full with mala

what to do i sure hope edward can stage a murder as well as he does one

Reviewer: sassycook Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 28 Mar 2012 5:37 AM Title: Chapter 3

so we meet mala

i sure hope edward has a plan

man oh man

Reviewer: sassycook Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 28 Mar 2012 5:21 AM Title: Chapter 2

wow very curious as to what is going on with bella

why she is there and who she is hiding from

what is edward's next job

Reviewer: moremoo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 27 Mar 2012 4:02 PM Title: Chapter 1

Ok I'm interested. Looking forward to the next one

Reviewer: IGOTEAMEDWARD Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Mar 2012 12:20 PM Title: Chapter 1

Interesting start!

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