Date: 04 Mar 2015 10:09 PM Title: Chapter 19- Epilogue
Love that she is getting closer to Charlie. Hope he and Sue get together sooner rather than later. aww for her and Morgan bonding over the pack. Glad she is "living" and not just going backwards. Great end.
This is my least favorite of the series book wise, but I'm glad you changed it enough for me to have a better opinion of your story.
Ty for writing and sharing. On to Book 3.
Date: 04 Mar 2015 10:04 PM Title: Chapter 18- You're Never Gonna Fit In Much Kid
Glad she's telling him what she needs too. But the V are still out there so she needs to decide some things with that as well. oooh Leah phased. That's gotta be hard being the only girl. wow E called jake. Good move. "the person" thing...you watch Grey's Anatomy don't ya.
Date: 04 Mar 2015 8:36 PM Title: Chapter 15- The Dog Days Are Over, Cuz Here They Come
BPOV: Can understand her wanting closure. Jake needs to admit what he did before she finds out. Ugh Jake is def a child in a big body. Never cared for Jake at all in any of the books. Glad B is not just being all accepting they are back. That was one of my sticking points with the books.
Date: 04 Mar 2015 8:25 PM Title: Chapter 14- Dead or Alive
EPOV: Gotta love Esme. Oh no. Now what was that vision about? ACK!!!
BPOV: hmm Sam et al wanted them back simply because the Cullens are coming back? or something else? Eeek
EPOV: oh wow for what Jake showed him
JPOV: that was so wrong of him.
BPOV: wow Bella is still selfless. Glad she protected the girls though. Jake needs a punch in the face now. Thought we were going to be able to avoid the Italy trip, but guess not
Date: 04 Mar 2015 8:00 PM Title: Chapter 12- And It Breaks My Heart
BPOV: Glad Leah has a job and a purpose. College isn't necesarily for everyone, esp not right out of High School. I know I wasn't. Well; at least Leah was told and not just left in the dark. awww for Jared making his move. OMG so LOVED her decking Sam and telling him off.
Date: 04 Mar 2015 7:02 PM Title: Chapter 9- Who I Run With
ooh Embry to the rescue. lol for him and Morgan. Stupid B running in the woods. of course Laurant it there....Sigh. LOL for bareback werewolf riding. lol for Bella observing everything. ROFL for Bella gagging. I'm with Bella. Sam handled it poorly. awww they want her to stick around. Like this introduction rather than how the book had it, esp since no nasty Jake in this one.
Date: 04 Mar 2015 6:32 PM Title: Chapter 7- Blocking
BPOV: poor leah. Sam has some really crappy timing. Wonder when B is going to break down. Sadly Jake is right with her keeping it all in. hmm so they are looking at B strange as well. The Nasty Jake is going to come out soon I'm afraid. Oh wow she's talking to Kim about it. Oh wow she's seeing V now. Sooo not good.
Date: 04 Mar 2015 5:58 PM Title: Chapter 6- Reminds Me Of Someone I Know
BPOV: Glad Jake is stayin in the friend zone. :-) awww poor Sue. Oh wow the witnesses to the imprinting. Always thought it was stupid that they didn't explain to Leah. Granted she was a bitch in the books, still feel kinda sorry for her.
EPOV: Carmen is so observant.
Date: 04 Mar 2015 5:43 PM Title: Chapter 5- Keep It Up
BPOV: Ah Sam. Time for Leah to get hurt I guess. Glad the girls got better grades. So long as they stay in friendville, Jake can stick around.
EPOV: In this case, he should read Jorge mind. Find a better way to help him that way. Carmen is quite the investigator with the questions
Date: 04 Mar 2015 4:57 PM Title: Chapter 2- Learning To Move On
BPOV: ugh always hated Charlie pushing Jacob on her. hmm french tutor huh? You are surprising me with B's hidden talents. Cool that she is going to tutor and earn gas money at the same time.
EPOV: Ah so alice did see. hmm so E can read minds at long distances? interesting. Maybe like demetri can sense where people are anywhere in the world if he has their "signature" in his brain.
APOV: Glad she's still watching out for B even if she's not there. Still thing it was wrong of them not to have the courtesy of saying goodbye.
Date: 04 Mar 2015 4:41 PM Title: Chapter 1- Easier Tomorrows
BPOV: Glad she is angry. Always thought New Moon sent the wrong image to impresionable young girls. Glad she is keeping busy in a positive way, although her as a waitress with her klutziness seems like a bad mix. LOL. Glad Charlie defended her to Renee. She is so annoying; moreso now that I knew Charlie moved too to try to keep B in his life more.
EPOV: hmmm so he's back to hunting huh? interesting twist to it. Ah only 2 weeks huh? surprised Alice didn't try to stop him somehow.
Date: 29 Mar 2012 5:47 PM Title: Chapter 14- Dead or Alive
Oh God, What a jerk Jacob is.
I really don't like all this part with the Pack and the wolf girls. I understand they are charachters dear to your heart but they don't speak to me.
you'll probably not like the rest of the stories from here on in as they will be a big part of it. they come from three other storys of mine, so this tying them all together.
Date: 29 Mar 2012 11:48 AM Title: Chapter 4- Downside to Immortality
This chapter was very good. The details of vampire life (unlife) and what they can and cannot do are so interesting to develop.
On the contrary I am not so taken by Bella and her interactions with the people in La Push. Not a subject that interests me.
Date: 29 Mar 2012 7:18 AM Title: Chapter 19- Epilogue
The next two stories are already written in my notebook, waiting to be filled in, Fighting An Eclipse and We Are Breaking Dawn. Can't wait! I like this ending, where they shake and introduce themselves. Being friends first is important, trust me. I've been married to my best friend for fifty-one years and we stll like each other and laugh a lot! See you soon!
Date: 28 Mar 2012 7:57 AM Title: Chapter 18- You're Never Gonna Fit In Much Kid
Things are certainly going to be different between Bella and Edward now. He's got his work cut out for him, expiating his sins, so to speak. The call to Jake is a sign of how his thinking has changed. Bella telling Jake all that went on is a sign she's in a forgiving frame of mind. Now all that's left is to destroy Victoria and have a little peace of mind.
Date: 25 Mar 2012 9:29 AM Title: Chapter 17- Awake and Unafraid
Thank you for the update. That was really frigthening and I'm glad Edward agreed so fast to change Bella, although he didn't have any option. Hope he makes all the right decisions to make Bella forgive him. She is very hurt.
Date: 25 Mar 2012 3:42 AM Title: Chapter 16- I Find Everything I Thought I Lost
Is there any chance Bella , Edward and Alice get out of Volterra without meeting Aro and his minions? One may only hope! Sounds as if Bella has some anger she needs to unload on Edward. I'm hoping she kisses the daylights out of him first and then gives him hell. I kind of want them to go home and hash things out and get back together, but that's just me!
Date: 24 Mar 2012 6:06 PM Title: Chapter 1- Easier Tomorrows
I really want them together again, but I think Edward will have to make a very good effort to convince Bella to take him back. She very hurt and I'm sure she doesen't trust him much - at least not at thens point. Thank you for your update.
no problem, thank you for your review!
Date: 13 Mar 2012 10:55 PM Title: Chapter 15- The Dog Days Are Over, Cuz Here They Come
I'll bet Bella would like to wring Jake's neck for causing this. She's also beginning to get a clue that maybe Edward lied to her and he still does love her. The seed has been planted, anyway. Hope it gets a chance to grow and they all make it out of Volterra alive. The next three days are going to be really interesting. Wish you could magically produce the next chapter, really fast! See you whenever.
Date: 25 Feb 2012 4:33 AM Title: Chapter 14- Dead or Alive
Just so you know, one of these days I am going to figure out a way to strangle Jacob Black, with my bare, short-fingered, fat arthritic hands! Edward and his "I know best" attitude is bad enough, Jake just adds fuel to the fire. Once more Bella has escaped Victoria, only to be blind-sided by the news of the Cullens return. I can't wait until she learns that Edward is on his way to commit suicide. Damn!
Date: 19 Feb 2012 5:54 AM Title: Chapter 13-You're The Only One That Knows
I am reading and enjoying, very much. I also read all of I'm His Lobster and liked Kim and Jared's story just as much. The background stuff in this chapter is good to know, especially how Bella is holding together without Edward. He needs to get back to his Bella, soonest. Just sayin'.
Date: 12 Feb 2012 8:30 PM Title: Chapter 12- And It Breaks My Heart
Not to be a broken recored about this,but I still think this Bella is behaving the way she should have in New Moon. Paul's crack about pack mother is just right and how great is it that Edward is on his way back!
its not a broken record at all. half the reason why i did this whole project is because the characters in the saga bothered me so much at times.
Date: 12 Feb 2012 1:37 PM Title: Chapter 12- And It Breaks My Heart
It's sad to say but i kinda love your version of the Twilight saga alot more than Stephanie Meyers. Can't wait for the next update.
thats the biggest compliment these stories can get. thank you.
Date: 04 Feb 2012 7:33 AM Title: Chapter 11- Story That Needed Telling
Words fail me, for a minute. Such a touching moment, with Carmen, and the drawing sounds wonderful. Nothing we do in this life is without a reason and a purpose, I truly believe that. Edward was fortunate he found what he did, and luckier it pushed him where he was meant to go.
the last two chapters have been my favorite to write of bdtnm so far. glad you're enjoying.
Date: 31 Jan 2012 11:08 PM Title: Chapter 10- Listen
Bless Carmen for sending Edward to Jorge, to hear the truth! It kind of choked me up a little, but I'm so glad the story was shared. Now I want Edward to run as fast as he can, back to his Bella.I'll think good thoughts for Jorge and Marisol and Carmen. They all had a hand in getting Edward's head screwed on straight!
Date: 16 Jan 2012 7:18 AM Title: Chapter 9- Who I Run With
I'm real glad Bella knows shehas protectors now and won't have to fear Victoria as much as she did. It's great, too, that the pack is cool with her knowing about them. I really like the path you have chosen for Bella in your version of the saga. She is stronger and better able to deal with all thst is going on in her rather different, magical life!
Date: 11 Jan 2012 10:29 AM Title: Chapter 2- Learning To Move On
Do you explain anywhere a bit more about Edward's gift?
Originally his range is a few miles, I think, and he hears everything at once within that range, though he can focus to listen to a particular mind out of all the buzz, and if he hears his name thought, it always calls his attention.
In your story it seems that he can listen in on Carlile and Esme's thoughts in France while he is in the US? How does that work?
I probably don't explain it right no. If I do it's in the first book. But basically if it's someone who he's attached to (family) he can read their minds whenever he wants to. Otherwise it's just the area hes in. I'll have a chapter in this book where he goes into detail about it
Date: 30 Dec 2011 8:34 AM Title: Chapter 7- Blocking
Let us hope that wasn't you-know-who Bella saw flitting past Jake's window. No wonder the Quileutes are phasing! It won't be long now for Jake, if his growth spurt is any indication. It was rather brave and generous of Bella to share herself with Kim, it helped her, I know. See you later!
Date: 06 Dec 2011 1:42 AM Title: Chapter 6- Reminds Me Of Someone I Know
This was a pretty heavy chapter, with the Clearwater's accident, Sam obviously imprinting on Emily and Edward sharing some of his love for Bella with Carmen. I hope the ache in his dead heart gets so bad he's forced to go back and throw himself on Bella's mercy, hoping she takes him back. Man, I wish he wasn't so damn stubborn and sure he's always right!
Date: 23 Nov 2011 8:33 AM Title: Chapter 5- Keep It Up
Bella and Edward are filling their time without each other in good, useful ways. I don't like it! They could get too comfortable being alone, and I really want them to be together again. I'm not having a tantrum, I just want them to be happy again, stubborn souls that they are!
patience darling ;)
Date: 20 Nov 2011 8:18 AM Title: Chapter 4- Downside to Immortality
Edward better watch out Carmen doesn't figure out what he is. Not that it would be a danger for her, she is dying, after all. He's got a well laid plan for staying in Argentina, a place to stay and a steady food supply. Now, if only he could get an injection of common sense, and go back to Bella, all would be well!
Date: 12 Nov 2011 9:43 PM Title: Chapter 3- Teaching and Being Taught
Sounds like Bella found some nice girls to help with their French, and their mother is a hoot! I like them already . Bella sees a lot more than some other people see, doen't she? Elan and Lulu, Billy and Yaya, there's something going on there, with both couples. Bella is struggling still and I have a hunch, Edward is also.
check out I'm his lobster if you'd like. thats where those characters come from
Date: 10 Nov 2011 9:45 AM Title: Chapter 2- Learning To Move On
Okay, I get it, they can get along without each other. The thing is, neither of them is truly happy and it's a big pain, right in the heart! At least Edward is in touch with Alice and Jasper, and Alice has an eye on Bella. This is good, in case she gets in trouble. Your Bella is stronger than SM's, which is better all around. Edward seems to be struggling, though. Hope he gets a clue soon.
Date: 10 Nov 2011 2:58 AM Title: Chapter 1- Easier Tomorrows
For a change, Bella is almost having an easier time alone than Edward is. He'a mess, killing and feeding off his kills. I'm glad he finally realized it was taking a toll on him and went back to hunting animals. No matter how busy these two keep themselves, it will do no good. Their souls will only find peace together, and the sooner they realize that, the sooner they'll be happy again. I'm wondering too, how sad the rest of the Cullens are and if they'll get smart and go back to Forks. Just wondering.