Date: 30 Mar 2014 9:25 PM Title: Sex Machine
you should do this into a three shot or even change the names and make this published i can see this as a black lace novel. But i wonder if there are engineers reading this if so i would love me and edward in my house.
Date: 28 Sep 2011 11:40 AM Title: Sex Machine
THAT!!! was was THE most erotic something I`ve red for months. I was realy, realy afraid at a half the you will take real Edward and put the robot in trash. And nothing would angry me more then that. I mean, let`s face it, who the hell wants substitute the PERFECT speciment with some moody real guy ( I mean Masen is perfect as YOU described him - a perfect cockyness whan situation request, a perfect gentleman, a perfect ( and strong and durable) lover, a perfect listener , a perfect man....just name the virtue.. he has it. You must be insane to want some human who has moods, different opinion, demands, and other shits that occcur in life.
C`mon, if the perfect love ( read: man) exist, we would not be meeting here. The basic concept of fan fiction is finding some perfection in love in this shitty world ( at least in written words) to give us hope.
And you saved the day ( as usual). How? One perfect Edward is good enough. Two perfect Edwards ...synchonized... heaven help me.....
I remember that last scene as one of the hotest in fan fiction from The Heartbreak Remedy. But there it`s spiced with some BDSM bullshit, and leave me a bitter taste. So yours is better. Much, much better, because I don`t like E& ...with anyone else then Bella. I`m 100% team E&B.
Also, I don`t think that anything in this story is on Bella`s blame. I mean, Edward was the one who cheated. He cheated Rosaly AND Bella by not saying to her that he is in relationship. Very serious relationship. Old people say: Where you make your bed you will lie in it. He.Was.Weak. Period.
( But he totaly redeemed himself with accepting Masen, and I adore you for that kind of ending, and I admire you, Soapy Mayhem, etc.etc.)
Date: 03 Sep 2011 9:36 PM Title: Sex Machine
That is a very interesting idea for a story (and also for a sex toy). This one shot had really lots of great things combined: erotic, humor, angst, sadness and a happy ending.
Somehow while reading I thought that it would be nice to know what the real Edward thinks of this whole developement and than he returned.
Bellas backgroundstory about herself and Edward was really heart beaking and than suddenly he is there. Without much drama the forgive each other and than the real fun can start. One of the most funny lines was, "Edward and I both moan loudly when Masen sets his cock to vibrate".
So cool story.
Date: 02 Sep 2011 5:46 AM Title: Sex Machine
At first I thought this would be really strange, but after reading it and thinking about it, it's really creative. I don't mean that in the "I'm trying not to say something negative sort of way"; it is a very creative story. I wouldn't mind seeing some future-takes or outtakes, like what Edward was up to or a couple years down the line.