Date: 08 Aug 2018 9:55 PM Title: Chapter 31
Glad Charlie is ok. Would love to see a wedding outtake someday.
TY for writing and sharing with us.
PS If you ever want help copying over your stories from FFn, email Kelly@starslibrary.net and she'll do it all for you.
Date: 08 Aug 2018 9:06 PM Title: Chapter 30
Go Bad Ass Bella taking out the carrot top
Date: 08 Aug 2018 9:02 PM Title: Chapter 29
Ah her shield appears. Wonder how long until Tanya appears to start trouble.
Date: 08 Aug 2018 8:49 PM Title: Chapter 28
Of course Bella goes after her alone. Sigh. Hope Charlie will be ok.
Date: 08 Aug 2018 8:44 PM Title: Chapter 27
Yea Lying to Charlie is really hard for her I bet. He's been through a lot. Oh no...poor Charlie
Date: 08 Aug 2018 8:38 PM Title: Chapter 26
E really needs to get off the grumpy train
Date: 08 Aug 2018 7:09 PM Title: Chapter 25
Yea Rose always was a little selfish but ce la vie. Wonder what B's gift is going to be if not shield and self control. hmmm
Date: 08 Aug 2018 6:44 PM Title: Chapter 24
Sigh....Rose...what can you say about her. Well at least she's changing now. Take the Q's to James' ashes. that may help
Date: 08 Aug 2018 6:39 PM Title: Chapter 23
Poor Esme. Glad Edward got there in time. Ugh the whole sucking out thing again?
Date: 08 Aug 2018 6:33 PM Title: Chapter 22
aww for the first kiss. CRAP for James. Too bad Esme didn't get out of the car and smell him around. Where are the mutts when you need them. ACK
Date: 08 Aug 2018 6:29 PM Title: Chapter 21
Esme cooking always was so sweet. Aww for the 
Date: 08 Aug 2018 6:23 PM Title: Chapter 20
Well at least sam is the reasonable one still in charge. Jacob was always a brat. JMHO
Date: 08 Aug 2018 6:18 PM Title: Chapter 19
Glad they are going along with the guarding at her house.
Date: 08 Aug 2018 4:31 PM Title: Chapter 18
Wow. Lots on info exchange. Glad she is opening up a bit.
Date: 08 Aug 2018 4:23 PM Title: Chapter 17
Glad she is opening up a little.
Date: 08 Aug 2018 4:16 PM Title: Chapter 16
Wow Jacob has some ball just showing up that way.... well, I suppose the same could be said of Edward too. LOL
Date: 08 Aug 2018 3:53 PM Title: Chapter 15
Glad that E is getting used to her. But yes Victoria is going to be an issue.
Date: 08 Aug 2018 3:49 PM Title: Chapter 14
ROFL for the cannibal thing. I do think its premature for Alice to think B's ready to become a vamp esp with her mom dying and all.
Date: 08 Aug 2018 3:40 PM Title: Chapter 13
Oh my Victoria already appearing. That doesn't bode well.
Date: 08 Aug 2018 3:35 PM Title: Chapter 12
Ah the Blacks are already starting in on them.....don't think B is going to take that very well.
Date: 08 Aug 2018 3:28 PM Title: Chapter 11
Glad she thinks that Esme can be someone for her to talk to.
Date: 08 Aug 2018 3:07 PM Title: Chapter 10
Glad she opened up to Esme. Hopefully the others can pretend that they don't know.
Date: 08 Aug 2018 2:57 PM Title: Chapter 9
Ah the infamous beast appears. LOL Poor piano and seat. LOL. Glad they are all there wanting to help Bella.
Date: 08 Aug 2018 2:50 PM Title: Chapter 8
Yea a brush is too obvious. Something out of the hamper, while still creepy, would work better. Like that Rose isn't so hateful
Date: 08 Aug 2018 2:44 AM Title: Chapter 7
Hopefully, this is a turning point for her and Charlie. He's freaking out right now I bet.
Date: 08 Aug 2018 2:39 AM Title: Chapter 6
What an ass he was. Angela should have told Mr Varner what happened. Glad E got there in time to make her pause to think.
Date: 08 Aug 2018 2:26 AM Title: Chapter 5
Sounds like broody Edward is here for a bit. Hopefully that will change soon.
Date: 08 Aug 2018 2:09 AM Title: Chapter 4
Going to be a long road back for her I'm afraid.
Date: 08 Aug 2018 2:01 AM Title: Chapter 3
Not sure exactly what Bella expects them to do. I realize she's in pain but Charlie is probably afraid for her life at this point.
Date: 08 Aug 2018 1:56 AM Title: Chapter 2
Can't blame Charlie for feeling helpless. Hopefully B will get a little better soon.
Date: 08 Aug 2018 1:53 AM Title: Chapter 1
Wow what a start.
Date: 06 Dec 2017 2:25 AM Title: Chapter 31
I like this better than the original
[Report This]Date: 26 Apr 2015 7:48 PM Title: Chapter 31
that was a cool short story ;) i was so shocked that edward changed her so quickly and james and victoria were killed so easily and charlie was awesome :) thanks for sharing this on here with us ;D
Date: 17 Sep 2012 5:34 AM Title: Chapter 11
I was reading a chapter after another but I had to stop to leave a review. The story is lovely, I like the differences you manage to insert in a plto that is basically in canon
Date: 31 Mar 2012 9:26 PM Title: Chapter 26
i'm not trying to flame you or anything but earlier u said that alice snapped the deer nek and then yo said that bella could hear the heartbeat, ive noticed this kind of thing a couple times and i just wanted to bring it to your attention. i do enjoy this story though and i think you are doing a good job of writing it.
[Report This]Date: 16 Sep 2011 11:57 PM Title: Chapter 31
loved this story. I'm sorry I hadn't reviewed on previous chapters, I kind of just read the entire thing through since I'm stuck in bed with broncidus. I'm sure I spelled that wrong, but oh well. haha. anyways, it was well written and kept my attention unlike a lot of stories I attempt to read. You're a good writter and I may be checking out your other story on fanfiction.net. I'm not too sure yet though, I'm not the biggest fan of that website, honestly it's always so bright on the screen that it hurts my eyes since I'm prone to migraines, lol.
Right, back to my point. I loved this story, I though you protrayed the characters very well in comparasion to SM's versions. I also liked that you had Charlie find out what she was, and his reaction to it, I thought it was very realistic in comparasion to the book.
thanks for writing.
:)
Author's Response:
Don't worry about not reviewing! If I was posting the story a chapter at a time, the reviews may have helped me to write a little more, but I wrote this about 4 months ago maybe. I'm just glad that you enjoyed it.
As for my other story, I stopped posting it here because there wasn't a repsonse from the readers. I didn't know if anyone actually liked it or not, so didn't see much point in it. If you don't like fanfiction.net, then try finding it on Twilighted.net. It's up to chapter 10 there, and posts roughly once a week. However, it is up to chapter 32/33 on fanfiction. So I guess it depends on if you like it or not! It's not for everyone. I've upset a lot of people with it. It's kinda angsty.
I hope you get well soon. Must be horrible to have to stay in bed. It's a good thing that there's such a thing as fanfiction to keep you company!
If you have twitter, there is a nice group of people on it that I talk to regularly. I'm lulabelle98 on there too. Pretty much addicted to it. And you'll probably find some more great fics that way. I know I could recommend a few!
Date: 25 May 2011 9:20 PM Title: Chapter 15
I just discovered your story. There are not many that I like on this website, so it was a pleasant surprise. A rereading of Twilight but with enough differences to make it interesting. I go on reading, now.
Date: 19 May 2011 6:31 PM Title: Chapter 8
Great another day with out Alice.? I hope the Cullens get back at Mike.
Date: 27 Apr 2011 3:44 PM Title: Chapter 1
So glad you are posting here:) The more people who read it, the better:)
Good luck!
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