Date: 14 Aug 2014 7:29 AM Title: The Punishment of Isabella Marie Swan - Part One
JFC.........YOU ARE TOTALLY A WICKED SICK INDIVIDUAL !!!!!!!!! LOL
THIS CRAP HAS HAD ME NAUSEOUS AS HELL !!!!!!!
THEY COULD HAVE USED YOU AT GUANTANAMO !!!!!!!
I'M ALMOST HESITANT TO GO TO THE NEXT CHAPTER........EXCEPT I FEEL
SOMETHING IS GOING TO TURN IN FAVOR FOR THE VAMPIRES.....
ON MY WAY TO THE NEXT CHAPTER
Jamie Crabtree (Messenger)
Date: 14 Aug 2014 12:08 AM Title: Inside the Mind of a Monster
I am loving this 'Evil Edward'.....most every story I read he is either loving, romantic, & I have read a few evil Edward's.....but, I do believe you have written one of the most mean evil one's so far.
There is still the mating thing he is fighting here, or I'm assuming. I can hardly wait to see where you take these two.
Thanks muches for sharing your story with me.....
Jamie Crabtree (Messenger)
Date: 27 Jul 2011 12:25 AM Title: Saving Grace
and so begins the happily ever after! the cullen family were the only ones left to pick up the pieces and move towards forever, together.
congrats on finishing your story! sounds like it was a growing, learning and mostly good experience for you.
thank you for sharing your story
Date: 26 Jul 2011 11:50 AM Title: Mute
so bella is a powerful shield and it would seem a weapon if pushed too hard. she is gonna be the key to them escaping. glad to hear that jake has not forced anything physical on bella, other than snuggle buddies in bed.
Date: 26 Jul 2011 5:22 AM Title: The Punishment of Isabella Marie Swan - Part Two
well they have been saved? i think? at least now the boys and alice are not tied up, that we know of. maybe this is the break the boys need to come back and kick some ass and save bella?
Date: 26 Jul 2011 4:52 AM Title: The Punishment of Isabella Marie Swan - Part One
wow bella is really taking the punishment. eddie will have to change her when this is all done or she won't survive. funny to see carlisle all protective of her, it is because she reminds him of esme. still not sure how they are gonna get out of this. and what is up with eddie's eyes...?
Date: 26 Jul 2011 4:27 AM Title: The Truth Hurts
tanya? gotta have her pop up at some point right/ ans as the baddie heehee! wonder how they will get out of this? will rose and em come to save the day or will someonee else step up to be the hero of the day?
Date: 26 Jul 2011 3:35 AM Title: Be Afraid of the Big Bad Wolf
wow bella ya think?!?!? why would it be a good idea to listen to the people you know and love and trust over a stranger? for having a cop for a dad she is way too gulible and nieve(?) so glad that everyone will have the chance to scream a great big i told ya so at her.
Date: 26 Jul 2011 3:04 AM Title: To Touch a Psychic
i really do understand bella's point on this why is eddie being a dumbass? if she wants to change he should either help or let someone else do it.
who are they running from? will the boys get there in time to save them?
Date: 25 Jul 2011 11:29 PM Title: Doomed
i can see what carlisle is talking about that really would make having bella around that much worse. it seems that everybody is questioning what is so special about bella. and why she has made it through not only time with eddie but time with the monster as well.
Date: 25 Jul 2011 11:36 AM Title: Killing the Corrupt
stillno clue on who the spy is.i don't really think it is rose but that only leave alice and bella and it can't be either of them. unless bella is blocking without knowing....
it should be interesting to see the final confrontation between jake and ed....
Date: 25 Jul 2011 5:32 AM Title: Manipulations
so rose has brung home a pet too. and jasper and bella have had a good talk even if jasper needed to trick her into it.and eddie has given in to the fact for now that they will eventually have sex.
oh and we seriously need to get carlisle lais it might help dislodge the pole up his ass! lol
Date: 25 Jul 2011 4:21 AM Title: Bitter Heart
so that's what happened to carlisle. so sad. and i guess that means we won't be seeing esme in this fic. now the only one left of the original crew is em and you better not make him a bad guy!!! i wonder who was outside the window?
Date: 24 Jul 2011 3:11 PM Title: Cruelty & Kindness
that was cute how he was playing around with her. and he finally kissed her but obviously he got a little carried away with it. they are gonna have to take things slowly so he doesn't hurt her.
and we have now met eddie, human bella, jasper, human alice, carlisle, and rose. i wonder where em and esme are? will they be joining our little family too?
Date: 24 Jul 2011 6:34 AM Title: Magic Eight Ball
wonder what got eddie's panties in a bunch and made him pull bella out of her visit with alice? worried about something alice would say? or bella? and they shared a moment! ed liked it while in the moment but then as always got pissy and stomped off.
Date: 08 Jun 2011 8:24 PM Title: Saving Grace
Loved your story, =) love the ending and i´m glad you got a happy progress, too <3 Sorry to hear about your Scoliosis but i´m glad you´ve found something that helps.
All the best, hope to read more from you,
Date: 31 May 2011 3:37 AM Title: Saving Grace
I'm glad to see the story finished but it all just seemed really rushed. They went through so much and then suddenly BAM, it's just done in one chapter. Their master plan to get away seemed really poorly planned as well. I don't know what exactly they thought would happen to a human in the middle of an all out supernatural brawl. Of course the china doll is going to get smashed to bits. I dunno, all that torture, manipulation, trickery and then in one paragraph Bella just makes them all explode and it's over. It was all very deus ex machina. Not to mention didn't Rosalie betray them and help Jacob/Aro? Didn't she hate Bella? Then suddenly she and Emmett just show up and Rose is all smiley at Bella and no one says anything about her betrayal and no one finds out? That's pretty fucked up.
After all Jacob did to Edward, both in regards to Bella and the women he took before Bella, Edward didn't even get to have his vengeance? I mean, Jacob was the main bad guys and he didn't even say anything in the last few chapters. Not only did the hero and the villain not get to have their face off, they didn't even interact. He pretty much disappeared after Aro showed up as it was. With this ending, all the time they spend wandering around the castle seems pointless. As does the torture because Aro just decided 'okay, no more Jacob we are going to be nice now'. I mean, it was pretty obvious that the vamps didn't need the wolves and there was no reason for them to be there. Tanya just flitted away and didn't even have to answer for the torture/shit she did? Who was the guy on the wall? What exactly was Bella's power again? What happened to the really powerful vamp that was messing with their powers? What was up with her exactly? How did Emmett and Rose know that Edward had a plan? They jumped right into the fight like they knew what was going on. What made Rose have a change of heart after betraying them? So many unanswered questions. :(
Sorry, but it all just seemed rather unsatisfying and anticlimactic. Like I said, I'm glad their was an ending but it feels like you were trying to just hurry and get it over with and magicked all their problems away with Bella's unnamed, undefined, overly super strong power in one wave of her wand. 30+ chapters of torture, manipulating, fear and fighting for all their problems to go away in 3 paragraphs or less.
Side from the ending, I really did like the rest of the story. I really enjoyed what you did with Edward and the Monster. I like how they were almost two separate entities that are so tied together they are the same person, and both love Bella. Even if in their different ways. They'd both give their lives to love and protect her. I really enjoyed it when the Monster came out. I always love a dark, possessive, dominant Edward.
But yeah, those are my suggestions for when you write your next story. The main one being that the end is just as important as the beginning and middle of a story. It should have a flow to it and shouldn't just drop off. That can happen when you take a character and make them too powerful. No one can beat them so there is no struggle or worry so there is no fun in the victory.
I'm glad your back is feeling better and I look forward to your next story.
Date: 30 May 2011 2:51 AM Title: Saving Grace
I have enjoyed your story very much!! We have something in common, I have scoliosis Ihad a 40 degree curve, and have had a rod in my back sinceI was 14 which was about 30 years ago. I had bone taken from my hip to help fuse the rod to my spine and it was agonizing for about a year, and have had no trouble since and have given birth to 2 children with no complications. I am sorry for all the trouble you have had and hope that it gets better for you. Take care and thankyou for your story and hope to ready more stories from you.
Date: 29 May 2011 1:38 PM Title: Final Piece
I was a little dissapointed in the lemon. There was no mention of Edward having a release or if he simply wanted to give her pleasure. So yeah that was a little disspointing because it went so fast. I am so glad that he finally has a plan though.
Date: 29 May 2011 1:51 AM Title: Saving Grace
Writing is always the best way to get how you feel out in the universe especially when you do not want anyone else to know how you feel. It is very cathartic.
Yes, I am sure that we all have questions that will never be answered, but isn't that always the case regardless if your are reading a published book or a story in fanfiaction.
I am happy things have started to work out for you.
Can't wait to see what you do next....
Date: 25 Mar 2011 6:32 PM Title: Like a Moth to the Flame
OH I think they pissed off the wrong Vampire and now I think its time for him to kick some ass Please thanks for sharing this and update when you can......
Wow thanks sweetie! I'm glad you liked it :] the update will not take long, I promise xx
Date: 21 Mar 2011 6:43 PM Title: Like a Moth to the Flame
Oh, wow! A turn for Carlisle! hmm....
Edward has his work cut out for him, but he has started the wheels turning on this one already! :)
Yup! Carlisle is a little less of a dick haha :]
The wheels are definitely turning :] xx
Date: 21 Mar 2011 5:48 PM Title: Like a Moth to the Flame
There are many of us who love this story and wait anxiously for your new post. Don't let anyone or anything discourage you from doing something you obviously love and are so very good at. Most likely they are just jealous angry mean spirited people.
Wow thank you very much for the wonderful compliment :] I'm not going to let anyone stop me from finishing this story, its like my baby, and it needs to grow up :] hehe Thank you very much, it means the world knowing that I have such wonderful people like you supporting me :] xx