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Reviewer: Simaril Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Oct 2010 5:38 PM Title: Chapter 38 - Trying New Things

Another awesome chapter.


I laughed my ass off at the family discussion of Edward’s lusty problem. Emmett was especially fun to read.



Author's Response:

Awe thanks!  glad you liked the chapter and had fun with it!

Reviewer: helluvabell Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 Sep 2010 5:08 AM Title: Chapter 38 - Trying New Things

Oh my god, I was just thinking about sparkly cum and it made me giggle. Another great chapter. It's so sad that he'll have to watch the tape. You're going to make me cry in that chapter aren't you?



Author's Response:

I don't want to make you cry.  I don't think that I will be doing the chapter showing Edward watching the video.  It will be more of a flashback. I cant' write him watching it, I can't write anyone watching it.  Nope.  So dont' worry to much.

Reviewer: kneon Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 28 Sep 2010 10:20 PM Title: Chapter 38 - Trying New Things

Your first citrus fruit was very well done and tasteful.

I know we have a long way until we get a Edward/Bella citrus fruit, because of the situation.



Author's Response:

Thank you!  Writing citrus is not easy!  There is a ways to go for B&E's citrus but it is a ways to go in time not chapters.  Chapters will be fast forwarding in time begining with chapter 41. 

Reviewer: mjwpg Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 28 Sep 2010 10:20 PM Title: Chapter 38 - Trying New Things

Awesome chapter



Author's Response:

thank you.

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 Sep 2010 5:47 PM Title: Chapter 38 - Trying New Things

poor eddie.   Em has got to be hard to live with sometimes.  At least Jasper and Carlisle are the voices of male reason



Author's Response:

ok, I admit I LOVE writing Em, he keeps the story from being depressing.  BUT I do admit I wouldn't want to live with him!

Reviewer: Coleen561 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 28 Sep 2010 5:30 PM Title: Chapter 38 - Trying New Things

I can imagine that was a challenging chapter to write (for several reasons).  But, as usual, you did an excellent job.  It was sensitive, not outlandish, in character, and fit very well in the story.  Poor Edward!  I did feel sorry for his lack of privacy, but I guess turn-about is fair play.



Author's Response:

Thank you so much.  I figure in a vampure household there are few secrets about anything much less sex.  Can't keep that noise from being heard with their senstive hearing.

Reviewer: mountainlion718 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 28 Sep 2010 2:29 PM Title: Chapter 38 - Trying New Things

i'm glad Edward was ok with everything in the end..(even with Em's teasing) let's hope Bella's workouts and therapy will do wonders for her

Author's Response:

Edward, the poor boy, I do admit to feeling bad for writing him such a hard time but it was needed for him to ever move forward with Bella.

Reviewer: Lisabebe11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 Sep 2010 2:17 PM Title: Chapter 38 - Trying New Things

Limeade - I love the story.  I wonder if Bella knows what a horndog he is?

 

 



Author's Response:

hee hee, Edward a horndog!!!   To funny!

Reviewer: sherriola Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 Sep 2010 1:09 PM Title: Chapter 38 - Trying New Things

I really liked this chapter. I loved the various interactions with the family and bella.  i enjoyed te discussion with edward regarding masturbation.  i found that to be actually logical and realistic, not sexual or titilating.  I love bella's progress, how she hugged everyone in the family.  You know, this is one of my favorite stories I'm currently following and I expect it will end upbeing an all time favorite.



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review!  WOW what praise.  Thanks.

I'm glad you found the whole discussion about Edward's sex life realistic.  I know it was embrassing but in a family of vampires there can't be many secrets so I am sure they are more open about talking aout things and want Bella and Edward to be safe. Thanks

 

Reviewer: kneon Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 17 Sep 2010 3:12 AM Title: Chapter 37 - Ignoring the Holidays

I like how you handled the money situation.  I like how they both are growing together.  Still learning about each other.  All part of a relationship.

Reviewer: helluvabell Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Sep 2010 2:13 AM Title: Chapter 37 - Ignoring the Holidays

I wish I had a psychic vampire watching over my ten million dollar account...if I had one that is! Another great chapter.



Author's Response:

how true!!!  Heck I just wish I had 10 miioln dollars, I'd even settle for 1 million!!!!

Reviewer: skydala_rose Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Sep 2010 12:15 AM Title: Chapter 37 - Ignoring the Holidays

I don't see anything for chapter 37.  If there was something here before, it's gone now!  :(



Author's Response:

hmm I don't know.  It's there now.

Reviewer: Jilli90 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 14 Sep 2010 10:59 PM Title: Chapter 37 - Ignoring the Holidays

Love this story but I think I say that every time I reveiw, but that is the truth. Cannot wait until the next update!



Author's Response:

trust me, I don't get tired of people saying they love the story :)

Reviewer: Coleen561 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 14 Sep 2010 3:14 PM Title: Chapter 37 - Ignoring the Holidays

I love your story and always look forward to new chapters.  I was curious as to how many total chapters you plan for this story, if you don't mind me asking.  Thanks for writing this!



Author's Response:

I'll let you know when I know?????   hhmmmmm, I'm thinking 3 or 4 before a big angst, then the angst will be 2ish and then 1 or 2 before a big event which will be 2 chapters and then a HUGE event that will be 2 chapters and then an epi?????   This is ALL a guess off the top of my head.  so 10-15 more?????  wow, we're closer to the end than I thought.  hmmmmm

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Sep 2010 1:39 PM Title: Chapter 37 - Ignoring the Holidays

awww they are sweet



Author's Response:

hee hee they are . . .

Reviewer: sherriola Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Sep 2010 1:10 PM Title: Chapter 37 - Ignoring the Holidays

Wow, what can I say?  A wonderful chapter.  I liked everything about it.  loved that Emmett is going to do her physical training, rose her self defense, the talk about the money, going to church.  I just love the way they have all rallied around and are working to make her better, as they make her part of their family.  Each step builds her security.  I think this is going to end up being one of my very favorite fics of all.



Author's Response:

oh wow!!!  Now I feel the pressure!   One of the things I wanted from the beginning was for Bella to be part of the coven, the family, and for everyone to contribute to her healing.  Edward, of course, id primary and most important, but the rest of the Cullens are important in their own way as well.

Reviewer: mountainlion718 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 14 Sep 2010 1:06 PM Title: Chapter 37 - Ignoring the Holidays

she's definately taking bigger steps. i'm so glad she went to church with Carlisle and Edward. Can't wait to see her in the gym with Emmett

Author's Response:

yep, she took some pretty big steps and church with Carlisle def gave Edward things to think about!

Reviewer: Simaril Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 14 Sep 2010 12:43 PM Title: Chapter 37 - Ignoring the Holidays

Another awesome chapter.

I especially loved the Carlisle hug; it was very sweet but not overdone. Bella has been through so much and it’s good that you are showing the progress at a natural pace rather than rushing through it all, even that simple hug is a huge step for her.

I’m looking forward to some Emmett and Bella time when he starts her training sessions. Emmett will be a good person for Bella to bond with as he is very light-hearted he will provide some reprieve from her more serious real life issues.

 

 

 



Author's Response:

Thank you!  I have a few people that through the story want to rush, but I am trying to be as realistic as possible with Bella and her healing and reactions.  Thank you!

Emmett will be a help for her, then again it depends on how you define help.  If you mean locker room pranking than yes!  But that's good for her too!  She wasn't a 100% serious person 3 years ago, she was feisty, she needs that back and Em's the perfect one to help her!

Reviewer: mountainlion718 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 11 Sep 2010 11:49 AM Title: Chapter 36 - Balancing Relationships

i'm so glad that Jasper can spend time with her alone, i think it will benefit her greatly. i love the touching aspect between Bella & Edward, even though they can't consummate the bond, the touching is very intimate to them....for now

Author's Response:

Touching is almost more intimate because they aren't consumating the bond.  You're very perceptive!

Yeah, it's a good thing she can trust Jasper enough, though he is about to push her which will make her mad, but will have to happen.  So be prepared!

Reviewer: carol0922 Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Sep 2010 3:34 AM Title: Chapter 36 - Balancing Relationships

I just found this story and love it! Please update soon!



Author's Response:

Well thank you so much for reading and reviewing!  I try to update everyother Tues and I am back on track I think!

Reviewer: Ezzy Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Sep 2010 3:00 AM Title: Chapter 36 - Balancing Relationships

I love this chapter it's a really sweet one and I cant wait to read more!! I hope there is more good times like in this chapter for Bella, she deserves it.



Author's Response:

well . . . yes there are more good times . . . but I have more angst planned as well, cause yeah I'm mean like that!!!!

Reviewer: tracygoodey1 Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Sep 2010 12:48 PM Title: Chapter 36 - Balancing Relationships

superb chapter,  loved the ice skating it was a great idea and bella had fun and that's the main point,  i'm sure edward can balance out his time with bella and the family's time with bella, great chapter thanks for posting and great to hear your all settled and writing again thanks tracy



Author's Response:

Hey Tracey!!!!

Glad you liked the skating. I had fun writing it and you're right they will find a balance but it will be a trial and error thing for a bit. Edward needs to have confidence in Bella, that she will tell him what she needs though as well.

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Sep 2010 2:13 AM Title: Chapter 36 - Balancing Relationships

lol for the intervention.  Rose is such a biatch sometimes though



Author's Response:

I'm glad you liked teh intervention.  Eddie needed it to a point, but you'r eright Rose, asusual, took it to far. 

Reviewer: Simaril Signed [Report This]
Date: 31 Aug 2010 10:20 AM Title: Chapter 36 - Balancing Relationships

Thank you, thank you, thank you for the new chapter.

I did a Alice-esque happy dance when I got the update email.

I loved the Ice Skating it was a perfect moment of fluffy family time.

 



Author's Response:

lol, I'm glad you liked that there was a chapter and that you could happy dance!

The ice skating was fun.  glad you liked it.

Reviewer: kneon Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 31 Aug 2010 7:34 AM Title: Chapter 36 - Balancing Relationships

Great chapter.  Hope everything is well with you and your family.  I have truly missed you.



Author's Response:

Hey kneon!!!

Thanks. Everything with the family is good.  I think we are all settling into a new normal.  So that helps! 

Thanks for the review.

Reviewer: Coleen561 Signed [Report This]
Date: 31 Aug 2010 3:59 AM Title: Chapter 36 - Balancing Relationships

I'm so excited to see an update for this story!  I loved the comment from Carlisle about the hospital being on alert.  Priceless!  Thanks for updating this story!



Author's Response:

Thank you.  I was worried about Carlisle joking like that, but he can'tbe seriouse ALL the time! Thanks for the review.

Reviewer: mjwpg Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 31 Aug 2010 1:57 AM Title: Chapter 36 - Balancing Relationships

Full review on FF but as always awesome chapter!

Reviewer: Jilli90 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 31 Aug 2010 12:00 AM Title: Chapter 36 - Balancing Relationships

Yes a update!! Love it, good chapter.



Author's Response:

Thanks, I'm glad you liked the update.

Reviewer: Simaril Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Aug 2010 2:13 PM Title: Chapter 34 continued

Another great chapter, I loved it.

I cannot believe that Bella was damaged further by incompetent doctors, The poor girls never catches a break does she.

I loved the idea of a Jasper Piñata, it really caught my funny bone.



Author's Response:

I did make poor Bella's past screwed up all around.  I have a sick twisted mind, don't you feel bad for my kids!

lol, a Jasper pinata, that would be funny.  So you made it to the end.  Sorry that you will have to wait a bit for more updates but I hope you stay tuned!

Reviewer: Simaril Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Aug 2010 2:06 PM Title: Chapter 34 - What's Next?

The spider scene was hilarious, The perfect bit of humour to lighten some very dark chapters.



Author's Response:

Thank you!  my pre-readers didn't like it, but I thought we needed the fluff as well, and seriously we ALL need to observe the appendage rule! it's an important rule for life!

Reviewer: Simaril Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Aug 2010 1:41 PM Title: Chapter 33 - Important Conversations

I am glad Bella is going to talk to Jasper.

She was very accepting of the mating issue too, I really enjoyed this chapter,



Author's Response:

The hardest part of EPOV is that we don't get to see where Bella is at.  She came to terms with her feelings for Edward after the kiss at Homecoming.  So being told she was mated was like when she found out the Cullen's were vampires, she already knew they weren't human so the what wasnt that important.  In a lot of ways Bella is and has been more trusting of her relationship with Edward that he has with her.  Now that he gets the mating that's switched a bit, if that makes sense.

 

Reviewer: Simaril Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Aug 2010 1:12 PM Title: Chapter 32 - Into the Night

In a way this was worse than the last chapter as we found out the true level of abuse she suffered but also better as Bella didn't have to go through the trauma of seeing their reactions to what happened to her.



Author's Response:

It was very inetersting to me.  There was a definate split between who thought this chapter or last chapter was worse. I think it depends on you and what is harder, emotional or physical abuse.

Reviewer: Simaril Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Aug 2010 1:01 PM Title: Chapter 31 - Bella's Story

It was worse than I expected. However it was wonderfully written I am constantly impressed by this amazing story.



Author's Response:

yeah, it was worse than many expected.  Most figured out the date rape, though I made that worse than most pictured, but no one really expected the Riley incident.   I'm glad you liked how I presented it. It was very difficult to write.

Reviewer: Simaril Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Aug 2010 12:42 PM Title: Chapter 30 - Now that She's Home

I cannot believe the scarring Bella has, what kind of vile beast would mark her like that?



Author's Response:

Vile beast, doesn't even define the scum that did it.  doesn't even come close!

Reviewer: Simaril Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Aug 2010 12:14 PM Title: Chapter 29 - Being Away from Her

Wow... Amazing chapter.

Poor Bella its awful that she is going through all of this, I will be much happier when she is back with Edward.



Author's Response:

I know, she is really not doing well.  Edward is broken and I wish I could say all will be ok when they get back together but alas it won't be all sunshine and roses right away.

Reviewer: Simaril Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Aug 2010 11:19 AM Title: Chapter 28 - Mated

Edward knows, Edward knows, Edward knows... These are the lyrics to my little happy song and dance I was doing while reading this chapter.



Author's Response:

I am picturing you dancing and singing that.  LOL did anyone see you dancing?  I would love a picture.  hee hee

Reviewer: Simaril Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Aug 2010 11:06 AM Title: Chapter 27 - Being Left Alone

They finally had a real night together, and it was perfect.

I am getting very excited now about the coming chapters but I am also sad that I only have a few more published chapters to read before I have to wait for updates.



Author's Response:

yeah they got a night and sorry to say you are coming to the end of what is out there. On the plus side the chapters coming are action packed, I hope that helps!

Reviewer: Simaril Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Aug 2010 10:52 AM Title: Chapter 26 - Aftermath

Someone smack Edward round the head for me, I can’t reach!

I know he has serious issues with his Vampire nature and is melodramatic to the extreme, but he should know Bella better than this. To think she would send them away... what a twit.

Poor Jasper, I hope he doesn’t stay away from Bella now. I think he is going to be needed in the coming chapters as we are approaching trial time.


 

 



Author's Response:

Oh my word!!!!  I soooooo can help you smack him!!!   This was my twist on Sm's world.  I HATED that Edward took off, but more than they I HATED that the Cullens not only allowed him too but went with him.  I just don't think that would have happened. So I changed things around so that it matched what I wanted.  I get why SM did what she did, she needed to in order to introduce Jacob (Whom i KNOW you love) and that whole triangle aspect, but I just don't think Alice would have left Bella.

Poor Jasper.  I feel bad for him. Bella and him work things out, you're right he's very important him her healing.

Reviewer: Simaril Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Aug 2010 10:12 AM Title: Chapter 25 - Just a Little Bite

I loved the fluffy family time at the beginning of the chapter. Emmett really needs to work on that brain/mouth filter bless him.

As for the ending... WOW
It was brilliant, When her birthday was mentioned (can't remember when but it was a fair few chapters back) I was wondering if there would be the infamous 'papercut' scene again but naturally as with the Van Crash you took a scene and made it your own.

Great chapter. I hope this hasn't damaged the progress Bella has made too much.



Author's Response:

If Emmett worked on his brain to mouth filter my sotry would be sooooo boring!  I LOVE his lack of filter!  Some days I wish I could be that open, well maybe not!

Of course there had to be a paper cut incident of some kind!  Edward had to face her blood!

Reviewer: Simaril Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Aug 2010 2:22 AM Title: Chapter 24 - Two Steps Forward, One Step Back

An awesome chapter. It was hard to read in the beginning as I could see how easy it would be for them to lose the progress they had made together but it all turned out well in the end.

The meadow scene was very sweet, I had never thought of Bella's point [No one blames the lion for killing the gazelle.  That’s what he’s made to do. No, we would praise the lion that didn’t.] Its a valid point and it is an apt way to describe the base nature of Vampires.



Author's Response:

I know the beginning was difficult, but it could have been worse.  I considered having Bella gone the entire chapter but figured that would be to mean, even for me.  LOL  And I know I can be pretty more!

Glad you liked Bella's words to Edward.  That boy needs someone to make him think!

Reviewer: Simaril Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Aug 2010 11:40 PM Title: Chapter 23 - Homecoming

They kissed!!! I was bouncing in my chair clapping like Alice hopped up on caffeinated deer blood while reading that part. It was perfect. sigh...

On a less happy note, Lauren - I can't think of any words bad enough for her that won't require me to wash my mouth out with soap so to quote my 5 year old neice "She is a poop head".



Author's Response:

They did kiss. Finally, it only took 23 chapters to do!  I assume you are happy with the kiss?  I know I freaked writing it because I didn't know what people would think of it and I knew everyone was waiting for it.!

Lauren is a poo-poo head.  Some girls just need a smack!

Reviewer: Simaril Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Aug 2010 10:00 PM Title: Chapter 22 - Where are we now?

Ordinarily I would be preparing banners for the next meeting of the 'Bella is pissing me off' and 'Edward is an idiot' clubs after their clueless behaviour in this chapter but to be honest they both have so much going on I'm not surprised that they keep missing the signals from each other.

A great chapter.



Author's Response:

oooohhhhhh  they both appreciate that you aren't making banners, no matter who clueless they are!

Reviewer: Simaril Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Aug 2010 9:34 PM Title: Chapter 21 - A Day at the Cullen's

I am glad Bella is letting Carlisle help her, that panic attack was so sad it as hard to read. I was also sad that my theory about Bella being scarred was right. The thought that someone whipped her is abhorrent, I had thought that her wrist cuffs were to hide scars from her cutting her wrists but Edward’s thoughts made me consider that maybe is she was held captive for a period of time is she had been restrained by the wrists there may be scarring from that.


The image of Jane propositioning Edward had me laughing my ass off. As did the idea of them all watching Buffy The Vampire Slayer.


Shouldn’t Alice have already know Bella’s clothing size as she brought her outfit for the party?


 As for the Spider Monkey comment, I'm not bothered either way to be honest I didn't particularly like it but didn't hate it either,


All in all another fabulous chapter and a wonderful long one too.


 I am loving this story and I'm trying to slow my reading speed now to eke out the chapters already published before I beging my inbox stalking looking for updates, I am a nightmare when I am really into a story I am constantly checking for updates and I have been know to do an Alice-esque happy dance when new chapters are posted.



Author's Response:

I know her panic attack was difficult.  A lot of people struggled with it.  That was kinda the point :(  Is it weird that we want to pull someone out of a story and bring a fictional character home with us to cuddle with and tell her that life will be ok?  Her cuffs do hide scars that were not self inflicted.

I have NO clue why I had Jane be the instigator like that.  I know that most FF has Tanya as the tramp after Edward, but here I went with Jane.  Can you not TOTALLY picture Emmett watching BtVS??  I can.  Easily!

Alice knowing Bella's dress size, good point,  good catch!  I will have to do something about that.

I know about wanting updates.  This summer I have been sooooo FAIL in my updating.  I am hoping to get back to updating regularlly in a few weeks.  I HAD been updating every week on Tuesdays, but this fall I have another story (Domella and subward) that I will be writing.  I am thinking I will update on Tues and switch off week to week which story I update.  But I will get a few more chapters of this story out first because I have been so fail on updates.  I feel really bad about the whole thing.

Reviewer: Simaril Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Aug 2010 7:52 PM Title: Chapter 20 - Abiding Friend or Soulless Monster

The underwear conversation had me laughing so hard I cried. Poor Edward I hope Emmett never finds out about that conversation or Edward may well dismember him.

I thought of something I forgot to mention in my review for the Alice out take. Bella's reactions to changing in front of the others and when Carlisle tried to listen to her lungs both time she had a reaction be being exposed in front of other people. Is this just because of the trauma of her past sufferings or is she scarred in some way physically?

Jacob - I know I have said before I am not a fan of him but in this story I find him actually quite tolerable - This is real progress as usually when reading about him in any story I am imagining ways for him to be turned to kibble. So respect to ya for breaking my cycle of hatred



Author's Response:

Just remember ALL the rest of the Cullen men are still commando . . . sigh.  I know that thought keep me motivated!!!!

Bella's reaction is for both.  She has scars and she also likes to keep covered.

Glad I broke your cycle of hating Jacob.  like I said in a pervious review I won't have him cause trouble.  Honestly Seth causes more trouble, but not very much.I normally HATE self pimping, but I will say I wrote a one-shot with Tanya, who most people hate, and received many reviews saying that after that one-shot they liked her.   So if you're a Tanya hater you might want to check it out.  LOL if you don't want to it is just fine!

Reviewer: Simaril Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Aug 2010 7:28 PM Title: Chapter 19 - The Deal

I was roarling with laughter when I read what Bella had asked, I can see why Alice is so upset. But I totally understand Bella's reasoning. If it means she stays its a good thing.

I hope Bella's opinion in Edward's soul will have some affect on him.



Author's Response:

Honestly.  I can't keep the Cullen's from learning of Bella's past if alice can keep seeing all of Bella's future.  I want it to remain secret and that darned pixie makes it soooooo difficult to do. I love Alice but she messes with plots!

The whole soul issue will come up again.

Reviewer: Simaril Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Aug 2010 6:48 PM Title: Chapter 18 - Reactions

I loved this chapter, I was hooked from start to finish.

Poor Bella I can't imagine how she must feel finally feeling that she has friends that she can be 'normal' with then finding out how much they really know.

I like that her first thought was Angel's to her it would seem that way after everything she has been through.

I am off to read the out take now I can't wait to read some of Alice's thoughts.



Author's Response:

Sorry I'm late getting responces back to you.

It would have to be incredibly hard to think that you finally found normal people to learn they are vampires that have been watching you!!  yickes!

I know I would totally guess that Edward was an angel.  sigh

Reviewer: Simaril Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Aug 2010 5:58 PM Title: Chapter 17 - Not Her

Blimey!!! A seriously action packed chapter. I loved it.

First off Eric... WHAT A VILE (insert appropriate foul words here)BEAST. He is horrible, I hope he finds himself a nice 'buddy' in jail that can show him what it feels like to be on the receiving end of what he was planning (dark thought I know but I have a serious problem with the date rape situation)

Van Crash... So wasn't expecting that, In truth I have been so caught up in the human issues facing Bella in this story and the way you write Edward so well I forget sometimes that there is also a vampire element to this story (duh). It was great I like that you switched it up a little from the usual Twilight car park scene, to be hinest I have read that so many times in fan fiction I am getting a little impatient with it. You made it different enough to be original without losing the basic objective of it, which is to show Bella that Edward is different.

All in all an awesome chapter, I am loving this story.  



Author's Response:

Eric is vile and I hate to say if you hate date rape then you might not like where this stroy leads.  You won't see Bella date raped but that happened to her on en exponetial scale. 

You are sooooo sweet.  I have thought, a few times, that the vampireness of Edward gets lost.  Not a bad thing but you're right, incidence like the van bring it home.  I am trying to incorporate the story itself as much as I can, but since I have the story written with a different base, things like the van are different as well.  I'm glad how you liked it worked.

Reviewer: Simaril Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Aug 2010 5:31 PM Title: Chapter 16 - Coming Back from the Dark

I'm really glad Bella seems to be doing a bit better now. Her prank with the donation was hilarious, her and Emmett will be a force to reckoned with when they are working together.



Author's Response:

Bella is doing better.  Kinda, I mean she is repressing but she is functioning which s good.  I'm glad you liked the joke!  Her and Em will be a force!  hee hee.  I always thought he needed someone in the family that could laugh and play like he can, to an extent.

Reviewer: Simaril Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Aug 2010 4:32 PM Title: Chapter 15 - Meet the Cullen's

I am glad the rest of the family are more involved in the story now. I bet Esme is delighted to finally have an excuse to meet Bella although it is an unfortunate one.

I hope Jasper got the message across to Mike if not maybe someone could just 'accidentally' slip and break his legs. I'm sure Emmett could do it and make it look like an accident.

I had a thought could Jasper not come and help Bella sleep at night? He could hide with Edward and flood her with calm like he did in Twilight when they went to Phoenix.



Author's Response:

Esme has ben wanting to meet Bella.  she is happy to finally meet her.  I want all the Cullens involved with her healing.  This is the first major step to achieving that.

Mike, yeah Jasper scares the piss out of him, literally.

I like your idea of having Jasper keeping her calm at night.  hhmmmm  Maybe later he can do that.

Reviewer: Simaril Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Aug 2010 4:08 PM Title: Chapter 14 - Is She at Rock Bottom Yet?

Ugh Mike is back, I was hoping he would have heard about Edward scaring Jessica and steered clear.



Author's Response:

you are assuming Jessica told anyone and that Mike has a brain.  LOL Big assumption.  hee hee

Reviewer: Simaril Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Aug 2010 3:41 PM Title: Chapter 13 - A Haunting Past

This story is getting better and better with every chapter.

Time for some more supposition... From the phone calls I have deduced that Bella's parents are dead they were who were murdered and as they said the 'last trial' it was by a group of people rather than one or two acting indepentently. It also explains Alice's vision of Bella comminting suicide in the spring - she is living now to see the attackers brought to justice after that she hads no reason to live.

I am impressed with the amount of Twilight character that you have included in this story in alternate roles than their canon selves, such as Jenk's. You obviously planned this story out well and it really shows in the quality of the plot.



Author's Response:

Most people ended this chapter with the thought you have.  That Bella's parents are dead and a group of people killed them.  I won't say either way but just keep in mind I am leaving bread crumbs to figure some thing out, but some of them lead to false trails . . .

Thank you sooo much. WOW.  You are super sweet.  I had this sotry in my head for a while, I admit.  And I also want to use Twilight characters as puch as possible, so if I'm not using them in a Canon type way I will stick them in other places.  Honestly, I do feel bad, cause the poor Rez guys (well many of them) end up getting a bad place in my story.  I love the Rez guys, but alas I needed some bad guys and they were the only major group not mentioned otherwise (Jake is not one of the baddies)

Reviewer: Simaril Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Aug 2010 1:00 PM Title: Chapter 12 - Mental Meanderings

I am glad you clarified Alice's behaviour in the last chapter regarding the party I am back to loving her now rather than being annoyed with her. Also the authors note cleared up some issues and although I am eager to understand what has happened to Bella I understand why you are writing it the way you are.

Ordinarilly I would be begging for an alternate POV by now (I am a POV junkie in fan fiction) but in this story telling it from Edward's POV only makes sense and although it means we are left with many mysteries it means we are living the story along with him rather than waiting for him to catch up with us all the time.

The idea of Bella being in witness protection makes sense and it explains why Alice had the vision of Bella leaving if Jasper tried to dig deeper into Bella's identity as it would have alerted the authorities.

Long ass review I know but I had a lot to say this time, hopefully it will make up for some of my more stingy ones.



Author's Response:

First there are no stingy reviews!  I appreciate every one of them.

I am glad you are back to liking Alice.  LOL trust me you were not the only one that was upset with her from last chapter.

I am soooooo an alternative POV whore myself.  Starting next chapter I have a few other POVs in out takes.  None of the out takes will give ANY spoilers, more we can see a few things going on in the background that Edward can't.  They are all basically Cullen pov's but I have one Bella  down the way of her meeting Edward and chapter 2&3 from her POV, but I placed them in the out takes where you won't have to worry to much.I myself love EPOV in any story and this one it is fun watching him learn and figure things out on his own with the mystery still all there.

 

Reviewer: Simaril Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Aug 2010 12:35 PM Title: Chapter 11 - Working Together

WHy is Alice being sp pushy about Bella and parties? Its obvious she doesn't want to go and I would have thought that now she has a clearer idea of why Bella is so traumatised she would give her a break.



Author's Response:

The responce that some, like you gave Alice was unexpected.  I dont' want her pushy in that she wants Bella to do things, but more she is searchign for answers.  Bella is so darned closed up Alice is pushing at things to see what information she can get and what will happen.  She would not make Bella do something she si truly scared of or leave her hanging ever, I promise!

Reviewer: Simaril Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Aug 2010 12:16 PM Title: Chapter 10 - So We Meet

I loved the Jessica/Edward showdown, it was awesome.



Author's Response:

That WHOLE Jessica bit was not planned or thought of.  I was writing and literally Jessica wrote herself into that chatper.  I figured if she wanted in and to be threatened by Edward, I wasn't going to complain.

Reviewer: Simaril Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Aug 2010 11:56 AM Title: Chapter 9 - Learning More

Another great chapter.
I am pleased that I guessed right about the trial before, that will make for some very interesting chapters.



Author's Response:

lol, let's say the trial is a MAJOR turning point in the story.  MAJOR!

Reviewer: Simaril Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Aug 2010 11:46 AM Title: Chapter 8 - Revelations

They seem to be figuring things out now, thats good.

I am fraustrated by Rosalie's selfish thoughts, you'd think she be a little more sympathetic towards her.

I am curious about the wrist cuffs Bella wears. Are they merely a aesthetic touch or are they hiding scars?



Author's Response:

I have to say I have a very hard time with Rose, writing her I mean.  In canon she was a bitch.  Soryr but she was.  I am trying to keep the Cullens as canon as possible so therefore I need Rose to be a brat, BUT I also want her to have a bit of a softer side.  It's a hard balence. Right now she has no reason to like Bella or care about her at all. Not really.  So she is going to treat her with disdain like she doea ll humans.

The cuffs . . .

Reviewer: Simaril Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Aug 2010 11:36 AM Title: Chapter 7 - Breathing her Scent

I enjoyed reading the detail you put into describing Bella's home and the pictures were lovely.

You did a great job of narrating Edwards struggle with his inner monster, it was easy to follow and made for enjoyable reading.



Author's Response:

WPW thank you so much.  I tend to think I drone on to much so I'm glad you liked the detail!

Reviewer: Simaril Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Aug 2010 11:25 AM Title: Chapter 6 - If my Heart could Race

Ugh Jessica and Mike are equally repulsive, they should hook up and leave Bella and Edward alone.



Author's Response:

Jessica nad Mike are TOTALLY repulsive.  I agree!

Reviewer: Simaril Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Aug 2010 11:04 AM Title: Chapter 5 - Recon

I was surprised to seeJacob in this story, I thought we a evaded him by having this story set in college rather than Forks (I am not a Jacob fan). Never mind it was still a great chapter.

Is or will Jacob be a wolf in this story?



Author's Response:

there are no wolves in my story.  Jacob won't be an issue either.  Jacob is a straw man.  He's there to show how Bella reacts to a completely non-threatening male as opposed to how she reacts to the Cullens and Edward.  He likes her but it is not a huge amount and there will be NO love triangle of any kind.  I hate them cause EVERYONE ends up losing in the end.

So no reason to hate my Jacob ;)

Reviewer: Simaril Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Aug 2010 10:14 AM Title: Chapter 4 - Lunchtime Observations

Its very interesting reading about Edward's draw to Bella even though it is painful for him to be near her.



Author's Response:

I love the idea of that juxtaposition.  It isn't something we see a lot from BPOV in the Twilight books, but it had to be there.  Two opposing forces one pulling him towards her, one pulling him away. 

Reviewer: Simaril Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Aug 2010 10:05 AM Title: Chapter 3 - The One That Sings

Decisions decisions,

Poor Edward he is in a heck of a quandry, leave and let her kill herself or stay and risk killing her.



Author's Response:

good thing he stays, optherwise it owuld be a short story.  LOL

Reviewer: Simaril Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Aug 2010 12:06 AM Title: Chapter 2 - Learning What's Wrong

Poor Bella, It sounds like she is really suffering. I am curious about the phone call, when they mentioned 'the coming months' I thought perhaps she was pregnant but the fact that Alice met her last year and she was already so broken makes me doubt that.

Maybe it is the trial of whoever hurt her so much, I know in the summary it mentions rape so I am guessing that has already happened to her and maybe the attacker is coming to trial soon.

Oh well one way to find out, chapter 3 here I come...



Author's Response:

ohhhh, no one's thought she was pregnant.  She isn't.  Thank goodness for her.

Her past has a lot more than a "rape" in it but I needed to add at least that to the descrop[tion so people knew what to expect.  I know some people won't/can't read stories where rape of any kind happened/happens.

 

Reviewer: Simaril Signed [Report This]
Date: 02 Aug 2010 11:54 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Returning Home

It will be interesting to read about the Cullens in a college setting rather than high school.



Author's Response:

Hello, I admit I did college, because what I have Bella facing is bad enough but I couldn't do it to a child, and because I just like older people for sex and love and all that jazz.

Reviewer: sherriola Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Jul 2010 3:26 PM Title: Chapter 34 - What's Next?

this really is an amazing story.  I spent most of last evening reading it, and when I couldn't stay awake any longer, it was first thing on my list to do today.  I work from home, so between tech support calls, i'm finishing the last couple chapters here.  What can I say?  this is beautiful, amazing, heartbreaking, but so full of genuine love that it's magnificent.  I love vampire Twlight fics the best, and you're keeping these vamps very much in character.  I was on board with you in keeping bella's story a mystery till edward knew.  But it worked.  some stories, the revelations behind a character's issues are kept back for a while, but somehow, it doesn't work, and ends up just confusing the reader.  But you didn't do that.  You kept me with you, understanding and accepting, every step of the journey.  As for the changing bella thing, I kind of get what you mean about against edward's will, but on the other hand, I think edward truly did want it for himself, but felt guilty, due to the whole soul thing.  and I agree with bella in your story, how could anyone look at carlisle and think he doesn't have a soul?  So, my hope is that your edward will be able to come to terms with it, because the idea of a mated pair, with the woman aging and the man staying 17 is really gross, when you think about it.  grin.  also, regarding the subject in Twilight, Bella got married against her will, to some degree, but was happy when it happened, and i'd say the same for edward's part of the compromise.  It would have been a lot better though, if they'd both been on board with both issues together.  anyway, it's a truly beautiful story, and I'm glad I found it. 



Author's Response:

Thank you soooo much for the incredibly kind review!  I'm glad you think the vamps are canon.  I have been trying so hard to keep them as canon as possible so it truly gives me warm fuzzies when someone thinks they are! 

You are only saying you were ok with not knowing Bella's story because you weren't one of my readers that was waiting for 30 chapters/weeks to learn it.  LOL   I know with FanFic it's hard, because you do have to wait week to week for updates, but when you read straight through, like you did, you can see that it kinda had to happen that way.Though I admit, I had a ball reading and listening to people's theories on what happened to Bella.

I admit the idea of a 70 year old Bella with a 17 year old Edwardis creepy.  But imagine Emmett's fun hiding her dentures!!!!

 

Thanks for hte review1

Reviewer: Footroza Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Jul 2010 3:14 PM Title: Chapter 34 continued

oh gosh... i will take the short chapter any day... I am so happy for her.. This is so good.. I am worried though..

Is the BAD therpist JAMES??? god I hope not.. he is the only one we haven't seen yet.. and that is scary.

love the story.. great job.. anxiously waiting your update.



Author's Response:

nope the bad therpaist isn't james.  I don't know that I have or will name him.  He's unimportant.  We won't really end up seeing any of him.  a sentence here and there about Jasper getting rid of him.  Nothing else.

I'm glad you like the story and thanks again for all the awesoem reviews and thoughts!

Reviewer: Footroza Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Jul 2010 3:04 PM Title: Chapter 34 - What's Next?

hahahah... your A/N crack me up.. I think it is a great idea that they are both on the same page as far as her changing goes... (as long as they spend forever together in the end..lol.)  But

 

I love the way you have her trying to convince himself that he has a soul.. that is sweet..and it is how she can fix him.  love that.

 



Author's Response:

glad you liked it ;)

Reviewer: Footroza Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Jul 2010 2:52 PM Title: Chapter 33 - Important Conversations

That was perfect.  I love Jasper.. oh who am i kidding.. I love them all. 



Author's Response:

you even love Rose????

Reviewer: Footroza Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Jul 2010 6:03 AM Title: Chapter 31 - Bella's Story

oh gosh.. that was horrible.. poor thing.. What a weirdo that Riley is.. boo.  Great chapter.



Author's Response:

riley is Boo, i think that might be the least vulgar responce I've gotten ;)  Thanks for all the great reviews!  I LOVED them!

Reviewer: Footroza Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Jul 2010 5:15 AM Title: Chapter 28 - Mated

YEAHAAAWWWW.. I am so glad he knows.. thank goodness.



Author's Response:

About FREAKEN time, huh!

Reviewer: Footroza Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Jul 2010 4:41 AM Title: Chapter 27 - Being Left Alone

ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh... that is so sad  :(



Author's Response:

sorry I gave you sadz

Reviewer: Footroza Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Jul 2010 3:45 AM Title: Chapter 26 - Aftermath

I AM SOOO HAPPYYYY that she KNEW he was outside.. It just felt like something her character would KNOW.. you hit the nail on the head with that one.. Great job.



Author's Response:

yes, Bella is pretty sensitive to Edward.  We'll see more soon as to why that is.

Reviewer: Footroza Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Jul 2010 3:21 AM Title: Chapter 25 - Just a Little Bite

I love that each of them has had a "special day"... I am sooo incrediablly glad you didn't kill her off in this chapter.. wow.. That would have been.....  VERY BAD.

 

Great job.



Author's Response:

nah, I won't kill Bella off . . .at least not that way.  hee hee

Reviewer: Footroza Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Jul 2010 2:00 AM Title: Chapter 23 - Homecoming

NEVER in my life have I been more excited that the little Next button is there.  I almost didn't review.. ALMOST..

HEY.. you can put the polyvore on here.   I did it for our first chapter of Volturi Order. 

Just so you know.. Thanks



Author's Response:

really?  I can get the polyvore on here.  Oh yeah I cna put it on the chapter notes???  I will have to check that out.

glad you did review!

Reviewer: Footroza Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Jul 2010 1:36 AM Title: Chapter 22 - Where are we now?

Dang Jasper.. cool those jets will ya... Poor thing... she is just so lost...It makes me so sad...



Author's Response:

she is lost but I promise she'll get found . . . by a uber hot vamp no less!!!!

Reviewer: Footroza Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Jul 2010 1:07 AM Title: Chapter 21 - A Day at the Cullen's

Wonderful chapter.  I seriously love Emmett and the names they give each other.  I am so glad I am going into this story...even a bit late... I look forward to hitting that NEXT button SOOO much..

 

Thanks



Author's Response:

Hey it's never to late to get into fanfiction.  I love writing Emmett and Bella together and all their exchanges. He keeps things light and happy!

Reviewer: Footroza Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Jul 2010 12:29 AM Title: Chapter 20 - Abiding Friend or Soulless Monster

That's.. that's ... that's.. there are no words.. Edward commando means sweet dreams for me.. I wonder if he could sport a tent in my tree???



Author's Response:

well I hope you had sweet dreams.  don't forget ALL the other Cullen men are still commando!  makes you smile doesn't it!

Reviewer: Footroza Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Jul 2010 12:08 AM Title: Chapter 19 - The Deal

Wouldn't it have been great if she had said.. "and thanks for sitting in my tree every night..."  hahaha.. I am glad she didn't, but that would have been funny. 

Your chapter was perfect...



Author's Response:

thansk for sitting in my tress every night . . . would you like me to leave a pillow and blanket out there so you're more comfortable?

Reviewer: Footroza Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Jul 2010 11:42 PM Title: Chapter 18 - Reactions

oh wow.. now THAT is how is should have gone in the books.. that was perfect... I mean come ON.. wouldn't you be a bit pissed to find out that these people knew all about you... GREAT job.



Author's Response:

wow, thanks.  I admit if I found out I was being watched I would be freaked out!

Reviewer: Footroza Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Jul 2010 11:29 PM Title: Chapter 17 - Not Her

I am so nervous.. I really want her to find out about them... lol



Author's Response:

It's coming . . .

Reviewer: Footroza Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Jul 2010 11:11 PM Title: Chapter 16 - Coming Back from the Dark

you good.. i love this



Author's Response:

I'm glad :)

Reviewer: Footroza Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Jul 2010 3:09 PM Title: Chapter 15 - Meet the Cullen's

I was a sobbing mess when Emmett was talking to her. That was the sweetest thing.  Great chapter.  This story is written with such heart.. i love it...

 

Thanks



Author's Response:

That's Emmett lil' sister and he totally sees her as such and loves her to death. 

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Jul 2010 6:32 PM Title: Chapter 34 continued

Gotta love Jazz.  ANd those other psychiatrists need to dissappear before they hurt someone else.



Author's Response:

amen, those shrinks need a foot int he butt or something! 

Jazz is awesome!

Reviewer: Footroza Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Jul 2010 2:38 PM Title: Chapter 13 - A Haunting Past

OH THAT IS SO SWEET. I love it



Author's Response:

I'm glad you liked it! :)

Reviewer: Footroza Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Jul 2010 2:22 PM Title: Chapter 12 - Mental Meanderings

I think you are doing great.  AND it is very realistic.  I have seen many people who have gone through very horrible events in their lives gravitate to one person more than others.  I think that is completely realistic.  Almost like they are focusing more on "natural" instincts because their normal ones are so out of whack. 

I can tell that you put a lot of time and thought into your characters, and I really appreciate that. 

Loving the story so far.  Great job.

Reviewer: KaiaRose Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Jul 2010 6:03 PM Title: Chapter 34 continued

I really enjoyed this chapter.  It seemed like your beta readers caught a lot of errors.  I love the story and the lack of errors make it all the more pleasurable to read!



Author's Response:

thank you.  I'm glad it was more error free.  I will tell Ronnie she di da good job!

Reviewer: tracygoodey1 Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Jul 2010 5:36 PM Title: Chapter 34 continued

cool chapter, nightmares are still present but bella reactions stilling somewhat is she was able to stay asleep for some much needed rest thanks to edward interventions, thats good for her,  and after dealing with some very innept profesionals and ones that need to struck off (but jasper is sorting it) bella discovers that therapy with the correct person can be so beneficial,   love to see bella with a smile, thanks tracy

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Jul 2010 5:00 PM Title: Chapter 34 continued

Yeah I would love longer chapters BUT I dont want to have to wait a month to read it.  SOOOOO I would much rather have chapters like these.  Ok on to the story.  I think Jasper could help her but I think maybe Edward will eventually get jealous of that.  I am so anxious for them to start a more physical relationship.  They dont have to have sex to have pleasure.  I can understand Bella's fear but getting physical is the best part.  Is that going to grow anytime soon???? Also since you have mentioned that Edward is a Virgin, you haven't mentioned if or how he even knows what to do physically. 

Reviewer: kbaby Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09 Jul 2010 2:17 AM Title: Chapter 34 - What's Next?

I have really enjoyed this story a lot  and I can't wait to read more!!!!!!!!!! I hope that Bella is changed.  I have tried to read some stories where Bella stays human and Edward watches her die of old age and I just can't imagine being with someone that would never age along with me. Well anyway that is just my silly little opinion... YOu are a wonderful writer and can't wait to read more.



Author's Response:

I agree watching Bella agew ould be hard for Edward, but imagine the fun Emmett would have hiding her dentures =P

Thanks for the reivew and I'm glad you liked the story.

Reviewer: janefanatic Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Jul 2010 1:44 PM Title: Chapter 33 - Important Conversations

Thank you for Bella's response to finding out their mated status! I was afraid she would run again like after their kiss, but you seem to have a knack for understanding when drama is necessary for the story's sake, and when it's superfluous. I like that this story is both character and event-driven; it's a perfect mixture. Thanks for updating, I hope your Summer (Or Winter, if you're on the Australia side) is going well!



Author's Response:

wow, thanks for the huge compliments!  wow, they are awesome! 

I am in the States so it's summer here!  Hope yours is good too!

Reviewer: kneon Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01 Jul 2010 5:38 AM Title: Chapter 34 - What's Next?

Hope everything is going well with the you and your family.

No problem I really do see your point.

Great chapter, love the appendage rule.



Author's Response:

thanks so much.  Family is good, we're just BUSY! 

Stick with theappendage rule and it will not lead you astray!  Just telling you!

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 Jun 2010 7:35 PM Title: Chapter 34 - What's Next?

Can't blame B



Author's Response:

nope you can't balme her at all!

Reviewer: carrangi Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Jun 2010 8:34 PM Title: Chapter 34 - What's Next?

Awww a little fluff can go a long way lol. I loved the spider scene, it was nice after all the drama :) Im looking forward to her first Jasper session!



Author's Response:

glad you liked the fluff.   There has been some drama and thankfully it's over . . . for a little while  . . .

Reviewer: darkest-terror Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Jun 2010 7:10 PM Title: Chapter 34 - What's Next?

Is it sharing if the pixie is involved? I'm not really into that, but if it meant a private session with Jasper, she could be there, I suppose. If it means I get some Jasper. I suppose. Although it's not really private if the pixie is there. Well, close enough. I guess.



Author's Response:

LMFAO!!!!   uuummmmm  I will have to see what the Pixie says to that!  too funny!!!!

Reviewer: cecelouis Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Jun 2010 5:40 PM Title: Chapter 34 - What's Next?

when are you going to update again?  I miss Edward last week :(



Author's Response:

I'm sorry :(  I don't know.  I don't think I can update next week, so I will shoot for the week after.  I will try hard to keep to every other week.  sorry!

Reviewer: tracygoodey1 Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Jun 2010 5:12 PM Title: Chapter 34 - What's Next?

i liked this chapter, lovely to hear bella laughing and playing about this is one of the best bits, that girl needs some lighthearted fun after all that has happened, her serious conversation with edward about being changed was well thought out and she has some powerful counter arguments to edward ideals and refusal to change her,  personally i would like to see her changed as i can't work out how the age gap would work when its like 10 then 20, 50 years etc it just seems the more sensible option and i realise as i say it it sounds odd 'the most sensible' when we are talking about becoming a vampire,   look forward to more , thanks tracy and post when you can i think most readers realise you have a life as well as write,  



Author's Response:

wait!  are you saying vampires aren't sensible?   just kidding, I totally get what you mean. 

Glad you also like playful Bella.  She has a lot of heaing that needs to happen, true, but she also isn't in the depressive state she was in.  That's all good!

Thanks for the continued reviews!

Reviewer: lollyblu Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Jun 2010 4:31 PM Title: Chapter 34 - What's Next?

Hi, i may sound a bit dumb. but im not mad at E or any of the others, the plot goes where you take it, and i follow along for the ride, its the overall story and it would mean all storys were the same. and i love me a story.

so thank you for wrighting this, (sorry i dont review much, but im trying to be good:)

 

keep it up, eagerley awating.



Author's Response:

no problem on not reviewing all the time :)  I'mg lad you are reading and like it :)  

I'm also very ahppy you aren't mad at either one right now!

Reviewer: mjwpg Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 29 Jun 2010 4:22 PM Title: Chapter 34 - What's Next?

Awesome chapter I'm glad you're back!



Author's Response:

hee hee, I only pretened to leave.  I have just been busy, last week was CRAZY!  seriously crazy.  I had the chapter to my beta on time, but she forgot about it and I was to busy to track it down!  pathetic  I know!

Reviewer: Coleen561 Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Jun 2010 4:04 PM Title: Chapter 34 - What's Next?

You did a wonderful job with this chapter!  The discussion between Bella and Edward concerning his soul was masterfully done.  It was sensitive and logical, with Bella providing powerful and convincing arguements.  I hope Edward starts listening to her!  I liked the fact that your Bella has standards and morals and believes in marriage.  I hope that your story will eventually have Edward changing her. 

The spider bit was PRICELESS!  As always, your talent shines.

Typo alert:  You have the phrase "carves you and wants you in bed" where you mean craves.  This is where Bella is talking about going home.  Lastly, "All the Cullen's have married." should be "All the Cullens have married."  In this sentence the word "Cullens" is plural, not possessive.



Author's Response:

*snort*  LMAO!!!!  oh my word, yeah he shouldn't be carving her.  too funny!  Thanks I will change those!!!!

I'm glad you're happy with Bella sticking ot her morals.  I know not everyone will be but that's ok.  I know some people are happy and I had to write Bella like she is!

Spiders are evil horrid creatures!  just saying!

Reviewer: kneon Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 15 Jun 2010 7:34 AM Title: Chapter 33 - Important Conversations

All of that talking went well.  She has a long road ahead at least she won't be alone.



Author's Response:

it did go well.  LOL that doesnt' happen often enough in FFland!  hee hee!   She won't be alone, *sigh* isnt' that awesome!

Reviewer: KaiaRose Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Jun 2010 6:18 PM Title: Chapter 23 - Homecoming

That was a beautiful kiss.  It made me feel good too. ;)



Author's Response:

YEY!!!!  I'm glad you liked the kiss!  I had fun writing it!

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