Date: 10 Apr 2014 9:40 PM Title: Chapter 47 - Thoughts of the Aftermath
Wow! Rose!!!!!! I'm so glad they were able to get rid of them so quickly and she only had broken ribs ;) and I'm in total agreement with Edward that they wait until she mentally stable and they get married asap ;D
Date: 10 Apr 2014 5:35 PM Title: Chapter 41 - A Time of Healing
Its great that she is healing but when Paul s trial comes I think it will go down hill a bit I was thinking is Alice watching out for the volturi? If they go with her and the press capture there image there will be big trouble ;)
Date: 10 Apr 2014 1:04 PM Title: Chapter 34 - What's Next?
So cool that Bella is religious I thought Edward was going to propose I hope he does soon! Just a thought "when" she is changed will her physical scars disappear? Plus I hope they hold off consummating their relationship until their at least married and she's changed because of the damage to her body also with her having a hysterectomy why isn't she on hrt?;)
Date: 08 Apr 2014 3:33 PM Title: Chapter 13 - A Haunting Past
Wow! I have a theory on what happened to her that her parents were murdered in front of her and they gang raped her afterwards? I loved the personal interaction between them and Edward having his first erection was hilarious! ;D
Date: 07 Jun 2013 10:59 PM Title: Epilogue
I usually comment on each chapter, but I really wanted to wait until the end of the story on this one. I loved this story!!! Very well written and such a superb story line. I really liked how Bella and Edward mated while she was still human. Incredible!! Now I'm off to read more of your stories!!
Date: 08 Jan 2013 9:39 AM Title: Epilogue
Yeah, I can't get behind their little vigilante spree. It was wrong. Bella didn't want that to happen and just because they found a loophole doesn't make it right. It would kill her to find out otherwise and shatter her trust in them. It would serve them right. Justice had been done, and done fairly. They didn't need to mess with it. It also takes away from the courage and strength Bella had in going through with the trials for them to just go behind her back and kill them anyway. Life in prison was her justice to them and they took that away from her.
Not to mention death is infinitely easier than life in prison.
Date: 08 Jan 2013 9:23 AM Title: Chapter 50 - How Eternity came to be
Before Edward bit her he really needed to sit her ass down on that moldy matress and tell her that she needs to stop pulling this 'somethings wrong so I'm not going to talk to you' thing. She's done it more than once and let a problem fester between them that could have been solved with a simple conversation. I understand she has issues but this is one she really needs to work on.
Date: 08 Jan 2013 8:14 AM Title: Chapter 46 - What have I done
That bit of the book/movie always bothered me, it's impossible to suck venom from a snakebite!!! Not your fault, like I said, they did it in the books and movie, it's just something that always urked me.
Date: 08 Jan 2013 7:20 AM Title: Chapter 42 - Getaway
Alice is bugging me in this story, she's pretty selfish. It's pretty messed up that she'd even hint that she wanted to go on this vacation with them, let alone make a deal with Edward. She really needs to learn some respect for peoples personal space. And Bella needs to not just get back at Edward, she needs to tell him that it's not okay. Enough choices have been taken from her in life, she's the one who says where she'll go and who with, not a selfish sister and her boyfriend.
Same thing with her being changed, that's Bella's choice and no one elses. And Rose can take her baggage and leave it on someone elses porch. Just because she doesn't like her life doesn't mean everyone else will hate it too.
Date: 06 Jan 2013 7:50 PM Title: Chapter 21 - A Day at the Cullen's
"So I have to ask, who here likes and who hates the Spider Monkey comment in the movie?"
I don't mind the spider monkey comment in the movie or the book (don't remember if it was in the book to be honest) but I'm not a fan when lines from the book or movie end up in fanfiction. People are always putting quotable lines from the movie/books into their stories and we've all read them a hundred and one times now and it's gotten old and unclever. Sometimes I wonder if authors read other peoples fanfiction because so many things are repeated across fics that they must not. So yeah, I'm glad you skipped it. You are borrowing characters but the story is your own, good call.
Date: 06 Jan 2013 9:10 AM Title: Chapter 13 - A Haunting Past
Man...I've read tons of stories where Edward and Bella are mated and are obvlivious to it yet the whole family knows and keeps it from them while teases them about it and every time I wish I could reach into the story and shake them senseless!
Date: 06 Jan 2013 5:47 AM Title: Chapter 4 - Lunchtime Observations
"She also had very little support for women who went back into abusive relationships."
Edward is 100% right and if Rose really feels this way she needs to stop volunteering. This is the time when these women need support the most and withholding it is doing more damage than anything. It can ensures a women wont leave and seek help again due to being judged.
Date: 02 Jul 2012 9:51 PM Title: Chapter 3 - The One That Sings
ok well you answered my previous question...he just wasn't close enough
Yeah, things were a bit chaotic in the begining and she wasn't right there for him to know it was her
Date: 18 Jun 2012 3:47 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Returning Home
I just wanted to tell you that I loved your story but... I did think the end chapters were rushed. The comments in the end notes saying that you were trying to just get it done really showed in your writing. The rest of the story and it's progression was believable but the whole James scene, then the rushed barely one and a half chapter marriage/honeymoon part and then the Voltera part... Seemed like you were just ready for this story to be over and I was a little disappointed because up until then I thought your writing was a breath of fresh air with all of your details and realistic timing. Very good job with the whole thing, I just wished the last part would have had as much effort put into it as the beginning. Keep writing because your awesome! :)
I love your review. I really do and I agree with most of it. It wasn't that I was ushed to get it done it was that anytime I tried to add filler and fluff it sounded horrible to me so that made all the rest become rushed. I really hate how the end worked bcause I don't think it flowed well. Sorry to disapoint.
Date: 17 Jun 2012 7:07 PM Title: Chapter 38 - Trying New Things
I just wanted to let you know that i think you are a beautiful writer, the story just pulls me in and I can just feel the emotion of everything. I love to read and honestly your writing is better than a lot of published writers. I love Emmett in your story... He is a breath of fresh air and a comical relief to her sadness. His comments do get me sometimes and I find myself laughing out loud. Thank you for sharing this wonderful story and that it is from Edwards point of view! I love that and I found sm version a little lacking in the characters. I have honestly enjoyed what the people on this site do with her character more than she did herself... But a big thanks to sm for creating tanthony that sites like this let people get more creative:)
I'm glad you like Em. I think he is what keeps the story from being depressive and overly angsty.
Date: 16 Jun 2012 6:54 PM Title: Epilogue
the story was awesome! I'm glad they were able to heal Bella as much as was possible before having changed her, and I'm glad her happy memories were clear for her instead of taking the bad memories and having them be the clearest.
Date: 14 Apr 2011 4:01 AM Title: Chapter 2 - Learning What's Wrong
oh gosh...if you saw a weird review from me I was trying to fav your story and that was the blurb I was writing to identify which story it was. SORRY!
I absolutely LOVE this story though!
Date: 01 Mar 2011 8:12 AM Title: Chapter 42 - part 1
Great chapter. can't see what's going to happen next. I know that the trial is going to be rough. I also worry about the Volturi finding out about Bella. I also wonder will Edward change Bella eventually if she wants to be changed.?
Date: 08 Feb 2011 9:51 PM Title: Chapter 42 - part 1
DEFINITELY sticking this on 'Favourites'!! But could you do us all a favour?! If you ever have to go on hiatus again, would please, please stick it on the story's frontpage?! So at least we'll know...... :-(
Date: 20 Jan 2011 1:28 PM Title: Chapter 42 - part 1
Another awesome chapter.
I think they are pushing Bella too much. Edward does not need to be at the trial, Bella is going to suffer enough as it is she doesn’t need to added pressure of worrying about him too.
Date: 20 Jan 2011 1:19 PM Title: Chapter 42 - part 1
I really liked the session with Jasper and Bella and Edward, planning for the trial. i like that everyone will be there with her. I think that as much as she wants to do it on her own, somewhere inside she must want that support. I completely understand why she might nto want Edward to hear her testimony and why he wouldn't want to see the video. Shiver.
I was wondering if you have this story posted on FFN. i've recently begun posting my first fan fic over there, and i'd love to recommend this, but I think we're only allowed to post FFN links. Anyway, if it does exist over there, let me know in a review response, or on twitter--I'm sherriola on twitter--or a PM from FFN. I'm sherryola on ffn.
Again, i love this story so much, one of my very favorite twilight fics.
Date: 20 Jan 2011 3:40 AM Title: Chapter 42 - part 1
I really enjoyed this chapter. Bells had a great discussion with E and Jazz.
And the progress is amazing! I cant wait until the trial is over and she can move on
I love it, I cant wait to read part two! :)
Date: 09 Dec 2010 11:59 PM Title: Chapter 15 - Meet the Cullen's
I came across this story today, and I usually dont comment until I have caught up with the writer, but I just had to interject here by saying I absolutely LOVE this story!
Your style of writing has captured my interest and I am curious and intrigued to watch everything unfold.
So I just wanted to say thank you, and I cant wait to see what happens next :)
Date: 03 Dec 2010 7:11 PM Title: Chapter 39 - Her Dimonds
"She agreed, and that night I slept holding my angel as she tossed, turned and fought the demons I couldn’t fight for her."
Edward slept? Lol... it seems that in mating with Bella, he's lost some of his vampiric nature and is sleeping now! COOL!! ;)
Sorry, had ta tease... Good chapter. I really know where Bella is. Granted, I never went through all that she did, but I have experienced PTSD, and from the recollections of my husband when I was going through the healing period, it was something similar. Most people write about PTSD, but don't get the reality of it across... You write excellently.
Date: 03 Dec 2010 6:33 PM Title: Chapter 38 - Trying New Things
it was good! Quick and too the point (pun definitely intended!)
I LOVE Em's addition... although I would think Carlisle would have had everyone leave the house, knowing how private Edward is. I'm not saying he would have everyone leave every time, but for Edward's first forray into the sexual realm, it seems a reasonable idea for Carlisle to have. Either that, or I would have had Carlisle tell Edward to go out somewhere else, and he would keep everyone else in the house.
Any which way, I liked the chapter!
Date: 30 Nov 2010 11:10 PM Title: Chapter 41 - A Time of Healing
O.k I want to point out that in SM's story. Bella and everyone else was completely healed of any scars,nicks, or bruises (no matter how old). Once they were turned.
So those scaring on Bella would go away once she is turned.
I kind of want shake my head at Rose and Edward about their ignorance towards the whole 'turning' disicion.
Now, about the recent chapter. Hmm....It was all goodI suppose.lol
Date: 30 Nov 2010 10:22 PM Title: Chapter 41 - A Time of Healing
Another awesome chapter.
I am reading the chapters as slowly as I can now to drag out the enjoyment as I know there aren’t many more to come. I’m sad I didn’t manage to convince you to go to War and Peace word counts.
The whoopee cushion under Carlisle’s chair made me laugh my ass off and the capture the flag/Bella game was very original.
Bella did very well at the party and dealt with Lauren fabulously.
Date: 19 Nov 2010 12:51 AM Title: Chapter 40 - Moving Forward
Oh I'm so glad that you haven't stopped writing this great story.
Another great chapter. thank you
I know how much it sucks to have writers drop a story so nope, I can't do that. I'm glad you're still reading!
Date: 18 Nov 2010 4:31 PM Title: Chapter 21 - A Day at the Cullen's
Love the story, its so intense, I can feel Bella's pain, it's worse than anything I have every read about before, good writing on your part. Can't wait to see how this unfolds.One can always be hopeful - can't one?
Date: 18 Nov 2010 4:27 AM Title: Chapter 40 - Moving Forward
As i told you on twitter today, this is one of my very favorite stories, certainly one of my favorite vampire stories. I liked all the different aspects. Bella's confused emotions, the date, their sweet tentative physical explorations. The story has so much love woven in every chapter, in spite of all the horror we see through Bella's experiences.
Seriously you are to sweet!!!! Thank you. I admit that vamp Edward is hot. I love writing him and so I'm just glad that others like reading it too. Can I also say thank you. I have felt that my last chapters have been flat. The tension that was there before with trying to learn Bella's secret isn't there anymore and I just don't know that the chapters feel good anymore, so thank you for the review. I feel I am tying up a ton of loss ends and still trying to keep people interested so I'm glad that you are still liking it.
Date: 18 Nov 2010 3:07 AM Title: Chapter 40 - Moving Forward
I'm so sorry to hear about your computer troubles! But I'm so very glad you didn't give up! You've done a wonderful job with this story and I'm always glad to see a new chapter. Always worth the wait.
Speaking of waiting, it is nice that Bella and Edward are on the same page in terms of taking the next steps in their physical relationship. Sometimes it's nice to read a story where they wait.
I'm glad you are ok with them waiting a bit. The way I have constructed them both it would be terribly out of character for them to be ok with jumping into bed with each other. I admit I like some smuttier fics but sometimes having them wait is sweeter. Depends on the story. So thank you :)
Date: 18 Nov 2010 1:13 AM Title: Chapter 40 - Moving Forward
i think that was the best thing they could have done in making that agreement to tell each other their likes and dislikes. i hope she does move in with them.
thanks. I love it when readers like what I have my characters doing. I agree that their relationship would be doomed if they don't communicate. Then again maybe I just want Edward to start talking dirty . . .
Date: 17 Nov 2010 7:34 PM Title: Chapter 40 - Moving Forward
Another awesome chapter.
Sorry to hear about the computer fail. I'm very glad you didn't give up though. Sad to hear there are only 10 chapters left, I'd be happy if this story grew to War and Peace like word counts. I really love it.
My jaw is on the ground!!!! War and PEACE!!!! DANG I dont' have that much in me. sorry. The idea makes me shudder but wow that you love that story that much. That is soooo awesome. Thank you!
Date: 17 Nov 2010 4:32 PM Title: Chapter 40 - Moving Forward
no giving up......
Great chapter and sweet date.
I won't give up. I won't!!!!! I have plans for these two and I need to see it through. Thank you that you still read adn care! Seriously, thank you!
Date: 13 Oct 2010 5:53 AM Title: Chapter 39 - Her Dimonds
Wow, I understand why Bella needed to do this, its part of healing herself. It would be hard to sit and watch someone you love go through something like this and doing nothing but be there for them.
Your other story sounds interesting I look forward to giving it a read.
Yeah Edward, who's never been around a girl weeping was REALLY out of his element but he got through. Thanks for the review! :)
Date: 12 Oct 2010 4:37 PM Title: Chapter 39 - Her Dimonds
Wow, that was so emotionally painful for both of them, more for Bella of course. Maybe now her future will change?
Her future . . . it will change slowly. It can't be overnight but this is the biggest step Bella's taken to healing.
Date: 12 Oct 2010 2:42 PM Title: Chapter 39 - Her Dimonds
I'm sure this was difficult to write, but you do such an excellent job with these intense chapters.
Thanks. this was a difficult chapter to write. I dont' know why it was so bad but it was. Thank you for the review!
Date: 12 Oct 2010 1:58 PM Title: Chapter 39 - Her Dimonds
0__ _ _o update soon I really love how you put the feeling in the story it's really good it made me feel what they felt and it was really good okay now I'm going to stop talking now lol update soon
oh you mad me LOL, seriously. Never stop tlking! What fun is that! Thank you for the incredibly sweet review!
Date: 12 Oct 2010 1:20 PM Title: Chapter 39 - Her Dimonds
Wow, this chapter was very good. Yes, painful sad, but so necessary for her recovery, so it was excellent. I loved all the things the family did to support her too, even as she slept. It was beautiful.
Thank you. I'm glad you liked the Cullens. They are soooooo awesome for Bella.
Date: 06 Oct 2010 11:27 AM Title: Chapter 38 - Trying New Things
great chapter, very nicely done i thought edward in the shower that is, the conversation the family had about edward's problem was amusing especially emmett, love this story thanks tracy
Glad you liked the chapter. Glad you had fun with Edward in the shower!
Date: 04 Oct 2010 7:16 PM Title: Chapter 37 - Ignoring the Holidays
hi there super chapter, liking just like jasper bella's growing confidence in making good choices and not just going along, all in all i dont think her christmas was too sad or distressing it was just calm and peaceful just what bella needed really, love this story thanks tracy