Date: 07 Jan 2011 8:50 PM Title: Chapter 1 In Which I am the Clairvoyant
Brilliant opening chapter. Absolutely rivetting.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for your glowing review! Chapter 6 will be up next Friday. See you then! Jayne
Date: 07 Jan 2011 8:35 PM Title: Chapter 5: Into the Woods
LOL Edward is probably trying to figure out what the hell is going on.....can't wait to see how this goes....
Author's Response:
Stupid, dumbass vamp! LOL! Hopefully he'll wise up in later chapters. EPOV will be posted next Friday. Thanks for your review! Jayne
Date: 07 Jan 2011 8:33 PM Title: Chapter 5: Into the Woods
I am glad she dumped him first. He preyed on all of her insecurities and used them as a weapon to not be with her.
Sure later she uses this as a weapon against him to manipulate him. But he started it.
Author's Response:
You're right! But he sounds like an awful lot like guys I've known in my lifetime. Hopefully Bella will teach him a few things and they'll both be stronger for it.
Thanks for your review! jayne
Date: 07 Jan 2011 8:28 PM Title: Chapter 5: Into the Woods
My words to Bella... "YOU GO GIRL!" Seriously, I never understood why in the books, Bella could stand toe to toe with so many mythical creatures, but never tell Edward where he could stick it. I love my husband as fiercely as Bella loved Edward, but I have bitched slapped him and more when he was acting the fool. I might have been hurt, but I made sure to give as good as I got, and through out the stories, Bella was always that sort of person. Who cares if she felt unworthy? That doesn't excuse emotions being toyed with. No one is beneath another that their emotions don't matter.
LOVE your ballsy Bella!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for your review and your support. Yes, I too agree that Meyer's Bella could have had a stronger spine! Just remember when reading my version...Bella is still a kid. There will be time for tears and self guessing in later chapters. I believe in HEA's and my story is pretty much angst free (tissue warnings will be posted in chapter notes!).
Glad you are enjoying this story! Jayne
Date: 07 Jan 2011 8:22 PM Title: Chapter 5: Into the Woods
haha i bet edward didn't see that one coming...haha bitchy bella is super...
Author's Response:
Yup...she sure took him by surprise! Thank God for Alice and Rosalie. Never did understand why Alice didn't help Bella out in the original version. What king of a gf is that?
Thanks for your review! Jayne
[Report This]Date: 07 Jan 2011 8:15 PM Title: Chapter 5: Into the Woods
I think she needed to tell Edward those things. He always thinks he is right. I have never been in a situation where I saw the break up coming, you know the saying "love is blind".
Author's Response:
Oh yeah, love is indeed blind! LOL! When I was 19 I walked in on my old boyfriend having a "pool party" for two. I was so dumb, I thought she was the cleaning sevice sent over to clean the pool. Boy was I naive! Needless to say we eventually broke up...but..nope..fool that I was...I still never saw it coming! Sheesh! Maybe thats why I am writing Bella to be a strong, smart, girl...makes up for the fool I once was.
thanks for your review! Jayne
[Report This]Date: 05 Jan 2011 4:47 AM Title: Chapter 4 Beer Blast
Bella freakin ROCKS!!! Oh poor Edward...he has no idea what Bella has in store for him....I can't wait until Friday!!!
Author's Response:
Can't wait to hear your response!
Thaks fir reading! Jayne
Date: 05 Jan 2011 1:14 AM Title: Chapter 4 Beer Blast
LOL oh my Bella is rocking
[Report This]Date: 04 Jan 2011 11:46 PM Title: Chapter 4 Beer Blast
She hopes she is taking him. Guess we will have to see.
[Report This]Date: 04 Jan 2011 11:40 PM Title: Chapter 4 Beer Blast
I loved Edward getting all jealous and upset with Mike, Kyle, and Tyler. It was so perfect! He is there to break up with her, but he's snarling into the phone, "This is Edward, her boyfriend" Priceless!!
I'm glad Bella is ready to put up a fight and march HIM into the woods!
Great Chapter!
Date: 04 Jan 2011 9:53 PM Title: Chapter 4 Beer Blast
I love it
Author's Response:
Yay! Thanks for your review!
Date: 03 Jan 2011 10:58 PM Title: Chapter 3 The Divine Miss Hale
Please finish this...Edward's lust is addicting...we want more! No, we need more!
Author's Response:
Chapters 4 & 5 will be posted this week. Thanks for your kind review. And yeah..his uh...LUST is addicitng!
Date: 31 Dec 2010 5:29 AM Title: Chapter 3 The Divine Miss Hale
i feel like you wasted alot of this chapter with roses back story ,it wasnt needed at this part in the story if at all,but not a bad beginning
Author's Response:
I tried to keep Roses back story as brief as possible. This story is about relationships (primarily Bella and Edwards) and will be delving into each characters personal stories in an effort to see what makes them tick.
Thank you for your honesty and your review. Happy New Year!
[Report This]Date: 31 Dec 2010 1:36 AM Title: Chapter 3 The Divine Miss Hale
Aw, I love Rosalie! She's so fierce. She taught Tyra the word. Thanks for sharing!!
Author's Response:
Yes, she is quite the girl! I am happy she came through for Bella!
Happy New Year and thanks for your review!
Date: 30 Dec 2010 10:10 PM Title: Chapter 3 The Divine Miss Hale
Wow
[Report This]Date: 30 Dec 2010 7:39 PM Title: Chapter 3 The Divine Miss Hale
You can tell that Rose is the master of seduction, lol. Cant wait to see what advice she has for Bella.
[Report This]Date: 30 Dec 2010 6:07 PM Title: Chapter 3 The Divine Miss Hale
This chapter made me laugh so hard. Poor Bella. teeheehee Update soon. Happy New Year. :)
[Report This]Date: 30 Dec 2010 5:36 PM Title: Chapter 3 The Divine Miss Hale
LOVE Miss Hale in this fic:) I hope Bella knocks E on his rump and he smartens up!!!
Author's Response: I think it is safe to say that being forewarned is forearmed. Happy New Year and thank you for your review!
[Report This]Date: 30 Dec 2010 5:29 PM Title: Chapter 3 The Divine Miss Hale
You did a fabulous job providing Rosalie's back story without making it boring for people who are already familiar with it from SM's books. I think you write Rosalie and Alice really well. Every time I read Alice saying the word "amazing" I can actually hear her singing it in my mind: "ah MAY zing"
Great chapter!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for your opinion. As I stated to another readerI tried to keep Rose's back story as brief as possible. In order for her to convince Bella that her motives for helping her are sincere, she needed to address her past and her subsequent jealousy towards Bella. I think she was rather succinct...at least we didn't have to suffer through the Royce King drama a second time around!
Thank you for your review! Happy New year!
[Report This]Date: 29 Dec 2010 3:26 PM Title: Chapter 2 Bitch Slap
I love angry Bella! I agree with you that if she really spent all those years taking care of her mom that she would be a stronger person. Of course, she still has some normal teenage insecurities, thus the need for the "bitch slap" to snap her out of it. Alice is great, and I can hardly wait to see what Rosalie will do!
Date: 29 Dec 2010 5:22 AM Title: Chapter 2 Bitch Slap
I can't wait to read next chapter
[Report This]Date: 29 Dec 2010 4:26 AM Title: Chapter 2 Bitch Slap
I LOVE this plotline. I always thought Bella could have seen what Edward was doing if she had just a tad more self-confidence, and with Alice (and Rosalie) on her side, she has just the things she needs to make this work out for her! Thanks for sharing!
Date: 29 Dec 2010 12:30 AM Title: Chapter 2 Bitch Slap
Love this so far, update soon!
[Report This]Date: 28 Dec 2010 11:04 PM Title: Chapter 2 Bitch Slap
I cant believe that Rose would help Bella at all.
Author's Response:
Pfft! Rose is going to surprise everyone...including Bella! Don't worry...she's still ROSE!
[Report This]Date: 28 Dec 2010 10:58 PM Title: Chapter 1 In Which I am the Clairvoyant
Now that Bella knows what Edward is going to do she needs to stop him.
Author's Response:
We shall see how this little drama unfolds. Be prepared...this is NOT Meyer's version! Chapter three will be up next week. Till then..thanks for the review!
Date: 28 Dec 2010 8:25 PM Title: Chapter 2 Bitch Slap
Awesome....
I wish they would have - that and rosalie taught bella the art of the Emmett slap.
Author's Response:
Aww...it's called a bitch slap. And I am quite sure Rose is the one who taught Emmett...repeatedly!
Thanks for the review!
Date: 28 Dec 2010 8:12 PM Title: Chapter 2 Bitch Slap
looks promising...wonder what the tigress will do! =)
Author's Response:
You'll find out in chapter 3! Rose is going to surprise EVERYONE!
Thanks for the review!
Date: 28 Dec 2010 8:09 PM Title: Chapter 2 Bitch Slap
lol poor edward will be the one going "WTF just happened?"
Author's Response:
Lol! Let's hope so!
Thanks for your review!
Jayne
Date: 28 Dec 2010 6:30 AM Title: Chapter 1 In Which I am the Clairvoyant
I am glad to see the sisters try to stop Eddie's lunacy and even more glad to see an Edward that actual sorta acknowledges his passions. I always thought she have seduced him after Voltera when they returned and the party night.
Author's Response:
You know, I thought so too! And for the record...I thought Edward acted very badly..blaming her for doubting his love for her. Honestly...I thought he needed to man up and at the very least take some resonsibility for his actions (which he eventually did in Eclipse). Hope you'll enjoy this version. Chapter three will be up next week!
Thanks for your review!
Date: 28 Dec 2010 4:05 AM Title: Chapter 1 In Which I am the Clairvoyant
Nice! Can't wait to see how this plays out.
[Report This]Date: 27 Dec 2010 11:14 PM Title: Chapter 1 In Which I am the Clairvoyant
I'm so glad that Alice is not abandoning her BFF at this critical time! Good for Alice!
And, that "goodbye" outside the Swan residence after the party . . . WOW. Very sexy!
This is a great start and I'm really looking forward to seeing where you take your "New Moon with a twist" !!