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Reviewer: jodyrae Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Oct 2017 4:30 PM Title: Chapter 5

This has always been one of my favorite stories. I loved loved loved The Perfect Wife and have read both your published novels. I hope to see you continue soon with your writing . I think you are a amazing writer.

Reviewer: LookingForIt Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Sep 2016 5:08 AM Title: Contest Nomination

I just wanted to say I've been re-reading your stories lately and I've fallen in love with Better Than Perfect all over again (is it possible that it gets better every time I do?)! I absolutely love Alice and Jasper and I would love to to see this continued! I know you've been focusing on your other work right now, but I hope one day soon you'll be inspired to pick this up again, so I thought I'd take a minute to let you know people still love and are interested in the story. Your writing is amazing! You've got the dark, epic romance down. Thanks!



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for your lovely comments! Life has been hectic the last few years with kids leaving home, getting married, becoming a Gigi (grandmother) and just working my "daytime" career. Hubby is still doing okay and we haven't had any major surgeries lately which is another plus. The dust has finally settled and our youngest child just left the nest permanently this summer. I'm also FINALLY in a great work environment so I'll actually have a life again. This year I focused on another passion of mine - quilting. I've had so much fun creating beautiful quilts for my family (this is what everyone is getting for Christmas). My plan for 2017 is to find balance again in my life so expect to see some stirring in my fanfic world though I'm not sure what direction it will take just yet.

Take care,

Mic 

Reviewer: milk05 Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Feb 2014 7:22 PM Title: Chapter 1

I love your stories. This one is my favourite story of yours.

Do you think you will continue it this year?

 

I`m sorry for my bad english, so I keep this review short. :)



Author's Response:

Thank you for your kind words. I doubt if I will get back to this until later this year. I have two original novels I am working on right now that I have to give priority. I promise I will get back to my fan fictions soon.

Reviewer: Lisalou Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Jun 2013 8:10 PM Title: Chapter 1

I have put on you on favorite author so I will get all of your updates. I will check out your published novels. I didn't realize you had published.
When is the next book coming out?
You are an awesome author!! Thanks for writing and sharing.
Lisa

Author's Response:

My published work is under Michael Schneider . Blind Faith and The Darkness of Perfection. Before you ask, neither novels are "pulled to publish" fanfics. They're both original works. DOP is similar in cncept to Perfect Wife, but there isn't one line in the novel that was in tpw. Assume nothing. My novel I'm working on now is the sequel to dop. It will be next year sometime. 

Thank you so much for the wonderful complement. I'm glad you like my writing. If you purchase a book let me know what you think.

Mic

Reviewer: Lisalou Signed [Report This]
Date: 24 Jun 2013 7:45 PM Title: Contest Nomination

Will there be any more chapter? I really hope so!! Thanks for writing,
Lisa

Author's Response:

I've thought about how to finish their story. I put this story on hiatus so long ago I'm not sure if I'll come back to it or not. I haven't completely given up the idea of finishing it, but I have so much other writing on my plate right now between CAM & LOMO, plus my 3rd novel, and that's just my writing list. I also work full time, have a disabled husband and my mom is having medical issues now that require my help in my "free" time. Keep it on your alerts and you never know, but don't count on it any time in the near future.

Mic

Reviewer: bella-me Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Aug 2012 7:55 PM Title: Chapter 1

Hey! I love this story just as much as I loved The Perfect Wife. You deal very well with very hard and complicated issues in your writing. Are you ever going to continue writing BTP?



Author's Response:

I'm glad you liked TPW and BTP. I do have plans to continue the story, but just haven't had time or the energy this particular storyline. It's hard dealing with the subject matter and takes a lot to handle it just right. I've had too much going on in my personal life over the last year and a half to give it the attention it needs. I've also got too many irons in the fire right now. Keep it on your alerts though because I'm not giving up on it, it will get finished. I'm hoping I can focus on it more in a few months so I can finish it.

Reviewer: Trm Cullen Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 14 Jun 2012 2:26 AM Title: Chapter 1

Great story

Reviewer: MrShyRockstar Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Jan 2012 7:26 PM Title: Chapter 1

I totally understand the need for a break :) Ahhh I'm glad to know you will. I happened to just run across it and was like "noo wait noooo I need more" XD Take your time :) Glad to know you don't plan to just scrap it all together!

XOXO



Author's Response:

Thanks for understanding!

Reviewer: MrShyRockstar Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 15 Jan 2012 3:02 AM Title: Contest Nomination

ah fuck what the fuck please finish this D: I was so excited to see Jasper and Alices story! And Im not even a J/A fan XD Lol but I loved TPW and realy really want to see how this one goes :( Fuck.. I just love your writing and and I feel sooo bad for Alice, and for Jasper because he was raised that way he doesn't know better but ya can kinda see his inner kindness :P Lol.

 

Fuck..

xoxo

Panda



Author's Response:

After TPW I needed a break from their "world". Don't worry though I plan to pick it back up very soon.

Reviewer: Razzamatazz1 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 15 Dec 2011 10:02 AM Title: Contest Nomination

Please Please Please finish this story. Jasper and Alice our my favorite charecter and all during The perfect wife I wanted to know their story. I am begging you to update it soon so we know how Jasper and Alice became the couple we love.



Author's Response:

I will pick this back up after the first of the year. After finishing TPW I really needed to take a break from "their" world for a while. Check out my other stories if you haven't already. I also have 2 original novels that have been published through twcs ph if you're interested. Blind Faith and The Darkness of Perfection. BF is completely original and DOP follows a similar premise as TPW, but with completely new material. There isn't a single event from TPW in DOP. Thank you for reading and caring enough to comment.

Merry Christmas!

Reviewer: The Antimatter Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Dec 2011 10:49 AM Title: Contest Nomination

When are you going to update this story? I love A and J!! :)



Author's Response:

I plan to pick this story back up after Jan.

Reviewer: skydala_rose Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Nov 2011 5:34 AM Title: Chapter 1

I was coming to ask the same thing as everyone else, apparently, lol!!!  I am so glad to see that you are planning to come back to this.  I know you've been busier than shit, and I was really hoping that when things started to calm down a bit, you'd be back with more.  I'm very much looking forward to it!!!!


Oh, and one more question - are you planning to do a Rose/Emmett view eventually as well?  Certainly no rush on that, simply curious.  :)


Can't wait for more!!!!



Author's Response:

LOL! Yes, I will pick this back up after the first of the year. After finishing TPW I just really needed to take a break from "their" world for a while. I've toyed with the idea of doing something for Rose & Emmett but I won't start anything there until AFTER BTP. Y'all deserve this to be finished first. Check out my other stories if you haven't already. I also have 2 original novels that have been published through twcs ph if you're interested. Blind Faith and The Darkness of Perfection. BF is completely original and DOP follows a similar premise as TPW, but with completely new material. There isn't a single event from TPW in DOP.

Thank you for reading and caring enough to comment. Have a great Thanksgiving and Christmas!

 

Reviewer: Laureniaa Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Nov 2011 7:44 PM Title: Contest Nomination

Hello :)

I'm writing to ask if you'll continue writing "Better than perfect"

I really like it :)

Have a nice day!

Laureniaa



Author's Response:

I have plans to continue the story after the holidays. Thanks for reading and your interest in BTP.

Reviewer: ficklin112 Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Oct 2011 8:53 PM Title: Chapter 1

Wow I absolutely love this story, and the Perfect Wife...I can't wait until you update this story...do you have any idea when that may be?



Author's Response:

Thanks! I'm glad you like it. After writing TPW, starting BTP and then publishing Darkness of Perfection (which is based on a similar concept to TPW) I had to take a break from this storyline for a while. I will be continuing it after the first of the year.

Thanks again for reading. I hope you'll check out my other fics as well as take a look at my two published novels - Blind Faith  and Darkness from twcs publishing house or amazon under Michael Schneider.

Reviewer: coupfatal Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Aug 2011 1:39 AM Title: Contest Nomination

as i was reading this the song love the way we lie came on. i think it fits perfectly with the perfect wife theme. but anyways, i am totally addicted to this story. excellent job.



Author's Response:

I'm glad you like it! I'll have to check out the song.

Reviewer: rekhardt954 Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Aug 2011 2:32 AM Title: Chapter 1

will you be updating this anytime soon?



Author's Response:

I'm working on bringing all my stories up to date. I've posted for CAM and LOMO so far in the last two weeks. I'm working out the details for the next chapter for BTP and should have a chapter up soon.

Thanks for reading.

Reviewer: Christine Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 May 2011 1:02 AM Title: Contest Nomination

Please update this soon!



Author's Response:

This story is on hold for right now.

Reviewer: knae Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 15 Apr 2011 6:51 AM Title: Contest Nomination

please update!

Reviewer: kmk Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Mar 2011 8:36 PM Title: Chapter 5

When is the next chapter going to be posted?????

Author's Response:

Sorry, right now this story is on hold. I needed a break from the TPW world. Although now I'm writing an original novel based on the concept behind TPW of white slavery. I am keeping up with CAM and LOMO when I have time, but this one will need to wait until the novel is complete. Darkness of Perfection is due out this summer.

Reviewer: Twilightobsessed09 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 06 Jan 2011 8:55 AM Title: Chapter 4

This is such an incredible read! I just re-read it and is even more fascinated this time around... Terrific job!

I pray you could find the time and patience to enter back the TPW  universe and continue or better yet complete this...

I love Alice and Jasper's part of this so very much!

Reviewer: mujeak Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Nov 2010 4:40 PM Title: Chapter 3

When do you plan on updating?



Author's Response:

I plan on working on this story after the first of the year. I needed a break from the TPW world.

I wrote a book that is available thru twcs publishing house. Check it out.

Reviewer: Alice05 Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Nov 2010 9:17 PM Title: Contest Nomination

Please write a new chapter to "Better than perfect"!
I love your writing, I love your story, I'm so interested in Alice' and Jasper's life... Don't forget this story, please.

I hope it will be continued soon. :)

 

Love,

Alice05.



Author's Response:

I haven't forgotten it. I just needed a break from TPW's world. lol  Plus I wrote a book this year that is available thru twcs publishing house - Blind Faith.  I'll probably start working on this story again after the first of the year.

Reviewer: Mick Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Oct 2010 3:27 AM Title: Chapter 5

Angst away! Thanks for writing!



Author's Response:

I'll be continuing this story after the holidays

Reviewer: Mick Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Oct 2010 3:25 AM Title: Chapter 4

Finally, a chapter that shows a glimpse of hope for Alice. Thanks so much for writing another great chapter.

Reviewer: Mick Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Oct 2010 3:20 AM Title: Chapter 3

and with the first paragraph of this chapter, I forget to feel bad for Jasper. I like the way you described her wedding ring as a symbol of purchase, it's brilliant. 

Reviewer: Mick Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Oct 2010 3:16 AM Title: Chapter 2

Awww, she wont even speak for Jasper? Now even after all she's been through, I feel sorry for Jasper?! Twisted.

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Oct 2010 5:22 AM Title: Contest Nomination

voted.  cant wait for more of this story

Reviewer: ERIKA SHOVAL Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Oct 2010 10:45 PM Title: Contest Nomination

an amazing story, lots of imagination. Your story very interesting, cant wait for the rest of it.



Author's Response:

I'm glad you liked it. I'll be continuing this story after the holidays.

Reviewer: ERIKA SHOVAL Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Oct 2010 10:43 PM Title: Chapter 5

you wrote an extremely sad chapter ,yet very impressive. I am very impressed with your abilities

Reviewer: mujeak Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Oct 2010 9:04 PM Title: Chapter 1

I love your stories,please,please ,please post Esme's story soon,I cant wait to read it.Thankyou for your wonderful writing xx

Reviewer: ERIKA SHOVAL Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Oct 2010 8:17 PM Title: Chapter 2

 It was a pleasure to read your story.

Reviewer: ERIKA SHOVAL Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Oct 2010 5:20 PM Title: Chapter 1

I really loved this chapter

Reviewer: fanfictionalcolic Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Sep 2010 10:30 AM Title: Chapter 5

Hello,

Do you plan to uptade that one or is it on hold?

Thanks for sharing your beautiful work.

Bises.



Author's Response:

Right now it's on hold. I'll start working on this again after the holidays

Reviewer: Violet Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 14 Sep 2010 8:34 PM Title: Chapter 5

hey i love your story!!

please update soon!! Please!!!!!!!!!!!!!!



Author's Response:

I'm working out what I'm going to do about this story.  I have plans to turn TPW into an original book and may publish it as a series.  If I do then I would not continue this version.  If I don't make it a series then I'll continue this story soon.

Reviewer: MissSara Signed [Report This]
Date: 02 Sep 2010 11:08 PM Title: Chapter 5

I love this story!! Very curious about Alice and Jaspers story.. Please continue this story! Update soon!

Reviewer: JD Switz Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 11 Aug 2010 4:35 AM Title: Chapter 4

Oh my god, I just tickle inside at Jasper's frustration.

Reviewer: JD Switz Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 11 Aug 2010 4:07 AM Title: Chapter 2

My goodness!

Girl, you just cease to amaze me!



Author's Response:

Thanks!

Reviewer: JD Switz Signed starstarstar [Report This]
Date: 11 Aug 2010 3:48 AM Title: Chapter 1

Stroke of genius of you to start this story off with Jasper. I could never really picture Jasper as a meany and it's kind of neat to see you play with his normally good natured character.

I think I'm ready to go on this trip....again. lol



Author's Response:

I hope you like the story.  I know I haven't gotten too far into it yet, but I will just as soon as I wrap up a project I'm working on

Reviewer: lene Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Aug 2010 8:52 AM Title: Chapter 5

hey i like this story very much and really hope to hear more from alice and jasper. the perfect wife was great but i like this story even more and i can´t wait to know how alice and jadper will work it out without help.

I hope very much that this story will be continued.



Author's Response:

Everything is on hold for just a couple more weeks.  I'm wrapping up an original project that's almost done and due to be published later this year.  I just hope everyone likes it.  The first 2 chapters are posted here on twcs just to give a taste.  I promise I haven't forgotten about J/A

Reviewer: xSofiax Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Jul 2010 10:45 AM Title: Chapter 5

Gah, poor Alice.. Nice work, thus far though. :)

-Sofia(:



Author's Response:

Glad you like.  Check out the two shot I have - Blind Faith.  It's an original that is being published later this year.  It's almost finished and then I'll be back to working on my ff stories.

Reviewer: xSofiax Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Jul 2010 10:32 AM Title: Chapter 1

I'm incredibly happy that you have Jasper and Alice's beginning. I began to go through and look at one of your stories to read after reading, TPW, and I was always curious about their relationship. Can't wait to read more. :)

-Sofia(:

Reviewer: LookingForIt Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jul 2010 10:12 PM Title: Chapter 5

Her protection my ass! Jasper doesn't seem as bad as Edward was in the beginning of TPW, but you certainly see Carlisle in him. I love this story; I'm glad you decided to show Alice and Jasper and how they managed to become the couple we saw in TPW. I hope you update soon; I can't wait to read more!

Author's Response:

I'm glad you like the story so far.  I promise I haven't forgotten the story.  I've just been swamped with rl lately.

Reviewer: SvassGudinna Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Jun 2010 3:06 AM Title: Chapter 5

Been waiting patiently for updates to this story and "Creating the Perfect Mate".  What's up?  Are you still planning to continue with these stories?  I've really enjoyed your writing and would be really disappointed if we didn't have your wonderful stories to look forward to anymore.



Author's Response:

Yes I'm still continuing my stories.  It's been an extremely busy month with RL and I'm working hard on an original work right now.  I plan to return to CAM and BTP later this month.  I also have Esme's outtake from TPW to finish.

Reviewer: BethyBooW Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02 Jun 2010 7:53 PM Title: Chapter 5

Please, please, please update soon! I really like this story.

Reviewer: loolpool Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 May 2010 2:23 AM Title: Chapter 1

wen r u gna update this?



Author's Response:

Right now this is on hold since I'm publishing TPW.  I have been asked to publish the entire story (Esme and Renee, Alice/Jasper, Rose/Emmett, and TPW) as 4 original books (taking out Twilight references). 

Reviewer: twi-pixie Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 May 2010 2:00 PM Title: Chapter 5

I know that you are currently getting The Perfect Wife ready for publishing but are you coming back to this story any time soon?

Reviewer: Lebo Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 May 2010 11:28 AM Title: Chapter 5

I just started reading this and just wanted to say that I like it so far... although I feel sorry for Alice... and is Jasper really as naive as he appears? It's like he can't relate at all to how Alice might feel after being in James' house and everything... reminds me of a little child a little bit. Like: yes, okay, they were the bad guys, but I'm the good one, so she has to be okay instantly. When will he start understanding her situation? Also, I thought it was so funny when Jasper couldn't even imagine that Alice might want to flee =)

So, I hope that it's going to be better for Alice soon (although the story would be over by then ... which I am not looking forward to ;)

Reviewer: The Antimatter Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 May 2010 1:18 AM Title: Chapter 5

Poor Alice!!

Please update soon, cos I've been aiting for the next chapter for aggesss!! D:

Reviewer: jenie16788 Signed [Report This]
Date: 02 May 2010 12:40 AM Title: Chapter 5

i loved the perfect wide and its great to get some of the background story, really hoping you continue with this,a d it woudl be brilliant to see a story based on emmett and rosealie aswell! cant wait to read more

 

j x

Reviewer: erinehudson Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23 Apr 2010 5:50 PM Title: Chapter 5

Excellent! Can't wait til' it's finished and I can read all of it!!

Reviewer: lykexomj Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Apr 2010 9:41 PM Title: Chapter 1

when are you updating this?



Author's Response:

Right now I'm focusing on the epilogue for TPW.  I'll let everyone know what's going on with my writing schedule in the TPW a/n.

Reviewer: twi-pixie Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Apr 2010 12:22 PM Title: Chapter 5

I like how Jasper started treating Alice better with out others telling him. Its nicer. Just wondering when you might update.

Twilight's Evil Pixie,

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Apr 2010 6:08 AM Title: Chapter 5

Poor Alice!  Jasper has hiss moments of humanity here but it takes time.  You bring the emotions and terror alice feels home beautifully!

Reviewer: SnowyHedwig Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 14 Apr 2010 4:54 AM Title: Chapter 5

Short but powerful. Her thoughts and attempt to escape broke my heart - and her reaction to Jasper was even more devastating. However, it was Jasper's response to everything that was the worst. His attitude toward her - the idea that she shouldn't be crying, that she can fix his arm and then make breakfast... ouch.

But he didn't raise his hand to her, at least. I like that she was comforted, almost against her will, by Jasper - a bit of the empath coming out, I see. Looking forward to the next chapter!

Reviewer: SnowyHedwig Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 14 Apr 2010 4:42 AM Title: Chapter 4

He so reminded me of the way Edward was at first with Bella. I'm very glad the day ended the way it did. If Jasper had tried to go any further than Alice, I'm not sure she would ever have recovered...

Reviewer: SnowyHedwig Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 14 Apr 2010 4:32 AM Title: Chapter 3

And now we know what she was thinking. Wow. I didn't realize that James started the night she arrived... Five months of it? No wonder she jumped. I can appreciate that seeing someone she knew only as her future husband - who had not only condoned her "training", but PAID for it as well? Yeah, just wanting to have it stop would drive anyone to such an act.

So she was in a life of luxury before her parents - if one could call them that - died. And they left her with nothing? Nice. I can understand her attitude toward Esme as well. Why hope, when you are so completely trapped?

Her silence spoke volumes. But that little bit of hope at the end also speaks loudly.

Reviewer: SnowyHedwig Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 14 Apr 2010 4:26 AM Title: Chapter 2

He decorated the house the way he wanted - just one more piece of evidence that women aren't of any worth in the Cullen family.

James. What a bastard. A slimy, scummy, rat-ass bastard. And his friends aren't any better. Poor Alice, I can't imagine. And then, Carlisle wants to give her back to Charlie and James for keeping? WTF? Isn't that like rewarding James for his freakin' crimes?

I am SO glad Jasper fought for her. I love that Esme cares so much for her as well - Jasper's surprise at that just shows how cold Carlisle has made him.

Alice not saying anything during their wedding was heartrending. I can only imagine the thoughts running through her mind through all of this ordeal.

Reviewer: SnowyHedwig Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Apr 2010 4:22 AM Title: Chapter 1

I can't believe I hadn't seen this before! I was always curious what happened for that time that Jasper and Alice stayed in their house alone...

I hate Carlisle here as much as I do in TPW - the whole attitude of be wild now, while you can! What an ass... I loved Rosalie's little look of anger - Emmett was such a jerk. I hated seeing Jasper treat Esme that way.

Author's Response:

Glad you like it

Reviewer: ckat Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Apr 2010 1:22 PM Title: Chapter 5

I really love your story and hope you update soon :)

Reviewer: fr_larsson Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 26 Mar 2010 1:40 PM Title: Chapter 5

Loved the chapter, and the insight to Alice and Jasper.

best wishes, Linda

Reviewer: Twilightobsessed09 Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 23 Mar 2010 6:27 AM Title: Chapter 5

stories/815/images/screening_RATHBONE.jpgProtect her.. really?! I can't wait to see the change come..

Reviewer: Twilightobsessed09 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 23 Mar 2010 6:19 AM Title: Chapter 5

Gripping...It was good to from Alice. Trying to get out of there showed a bit of fight in her and I was happy to see it.

The torement and torture she had to sustain has destroyed her but not beyond repair, that I'm glad for.

I can't tell you how I love this story, the glimpse at what they were like before Bella"s addition to the bunch.

I can't say I love Jas right now because I see him as Carlisle's Jasper maybe just a bit gentler, but then again I don't know what you have planned for this but I'm with ya.

I definitely like him in TPW, as he and Alice are my breath of fresh air from the madness.

I hope the next chapter will be soon. I can't wait to read their progession...



Author's Response:

Glad you like it

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Mar 2010 4:17 AM Title: Chapter 5

her protection my arse.

Reviewer: darkvampluvr Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Mar 2010 1:07 AM Title: Chapter 5

I really love TPW and I'm so glad to hear that you're going to concentrate on that for now and finish it up. I hope it's really soon cuz this story is really phenomenal also and I can't wait to read more.

Reviewer: reader_giggles Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Mar 2010 10:13 PM Title: Chapter 5

having read TPW this one's easier going for me or maybe becasue this isnt as scary as that....for now! update as soon as you can please?!

Reviewer: tracygoodey1 Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Mar 2010 10:05 PM Title: Chapter 5

the poor girl really dosent know which way is up after everything cant say i'd blame her for trying to run either just sheer blind panic made her do it, wonder when realisation will drop in on jasper and he works out her terror is now of his making and changes into the jasper from tpw, alice is already warming to him despite her brain telling her its dangerous they both change so much, more please thanks fantastic chapter  

Reviewer: AmethystDancer Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Mar 2010 9:42 PM Title: Chapter 5

Alright, so this was a bit short, but I'm still super glad to be able to read it... and to hear that TPW will be finishing up soon. It'll be sad when it's over, but I have to know how it ends!!!

I just also wanted to say how wonderful a job you're doing with Jasper, and the whole realizing this is wrong thing. I reread the first four chapters before reading this one and it's just so realistic that he could be that way and still change, even without someone there to help him along, like he is to Edward later.

Reviewer: SouthernBelle Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 22 Mar 2010 8:31 PM Title: Chapter 5

Gay! You updated this! I love this story :-) Although the thought of wrapping up TPW saddens me, because (as you already know) it's my favorite fanfiction ever! :-) So I guess *someone* is going to have a lot of writing to do once that's finished...in order to create my SECOND favorite fanfiction ever ;-) This story is looking promising to fulfill that spot :-) I hope life is going well, and I'm looking forward to hopefully hearing from you soon in an update of one of your stories!

Reviewer: TM Twilight Girl Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 22 Mar 2010 5:11 PM Title: Chapter 5

Great chapter!  I'm still on edge wondering what will happen when Jasper decides it's time to have sex.  Thank you for updating.

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Mar 2010 4:30 PM Title: Chapter 5

Thank you for the update. This was wonderful. You are doing a GREAT job with this one and The Perfect Wife. You said you were trying to finish The Perfect Wife...I am soooooo excited about that but also a little sad I always hate to see a good story end...but I guess they all have to at some point.

You are a really good writer. You have kept all os uf in supense and always leave us wanting MORE!!!!! Thank you!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Reviewer: daisy12 Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Mar 2010 3:43 PM Title: Chapter 5

great chapter, I could feel Alice's panic when that alarm went off!

Reviewer: deltagirl Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Mar 2010 1:14 PM Title: Chapter 5

Poor Alice, she has not idea what to expect from Jasper after what she has been through. I can't wait to find out what it is that causes Jasper's epiphany and how to help Alice. He is no Edward but I can still see traces of his father.

Reviewer: NelumOnelius Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Mar 2010 12:36 PM Title: Chapter 5

:)

Reviewer: Raven Jadewolfe Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 22 Mar 2010 12:27 PM Title: Chapter 5

Poor Alice....

Reviewer: JodyG Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Mar 2010 12:12 PM Title: Chapter 5

I was so happy this morning to get a new chapter of this story :)

Reviewer: peoplelikeus Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 22 Mar 2010 8:22 AM Title: Chapter 5

I have followed all of your stories and I am so excited about TPW being completed as well as Creating a Mate. But I love this story, it is so full of tenderness and of how they grew together.  Brilliant chapter.  Thanks.

Reviewer: sassycook Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 22 Mar 2010 5:53 AM Title: Chapter 5

well james and charlie got what was coming to them. probably more should have happen so they would know what the torture was like for these poor girls. but there was no heart or soul for these two pigs

alice my heart goes out to you

love it

love all the stories for this one, thanx

Reviewer: Luminesk Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Mar 2010 5:26 AM Title: Chapter 5

I just feel so awful and sad for Alice. She is so frightened and confused. Jasper is kind but still in an agressive way, like you don't know when he is going to snap. It holds you in constant fear and anticipation.

Thankyou for the update. I look forward to the next installment...

Reviewer: twilightfan4ever09 Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Mar 2010 4:58 AM Title: Chapter 5

i love the chapter. i cant wait for the next chapter. i hope you update both stories soon. i cant wait or for the next chapter of the perfect wife.

Reviewer: funkydiva1978 Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Mar 2010 4:48 AM Title: Chapter 5

Mic!  i freaked out.  I was like please please please don't let Jasper get violent. Please please.... i just couldn't take it. 

Le sigh. perfect chapter lovely.

Muah!!

xoxo---FunkyD.

Reviewer: arianneoo Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Mar 2010 3:45 PM Title: Chapter 1

I love this!!! I love Alice and Jasper stories and Jasper seems to be a great guy in The Perfect wife so I want to see how that came to be.  Hope you keep writing!



Author's Response:

the next chapter is being beta'd now so it should be up in a couple of days.

Reviewer: The Antimatter Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Mar 2010 7:31 AM Title: Chapter 1

Ohh, that's cool - it can be exhausting trying to write a few stories at once... that's why I only stick to one at a time. :)

Excited!! >.<

Reviewer: JayNahNah Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Mar 2010 12:23 AM Title: Chapter 4

Great insight to JxA. Are you going to continue this story?



Author's Response:

Yes, I'm continuing the story. I've just had my mind focused on TPW.  I've also been playing with an idea for a new story that just won't leave me alone.  I promise this and CAM are my focus this week.

Reviewer: The Antimatter Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Mar 2010 8:43 AM Title: Chapter 4

You haven't updated ion ages, and I'm about to DIE here!!

 

Oh my god, I ho[pe Jasperdoesn't treat her TOO bad -- poor Alice. I wanna cry for her. :(



Author's Response:

Sorry, I pushed three chapters for TPW out in just a few weeks so now I'm 'retraining' my brain to write a chapter for BTP & CAM.  I'm also playing with a new story idea that I just can't get out of my head.  I hope to have a chapter up by the end of next week.

Reviewer: TM Twilight Girl Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 25 Feb 2010 11:13 PM Title: Chapter 4

Are you going to update this one anymore?  I really like this Alice and Jasper back story.  It seems like it is going somewhere, but maybe that's the end.  I hope not.  Great job!



Author's Response:

This story is not finished.  Right now I'm trying to focus on TPW to finish it in the next few weeks.  Then I promise to get back on this and CAM.

Reviewer: purplelettuce Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 24 Feb 2010 1:01 AM Title: Chapter 4

I'm loving this side of TPW story. I've always wanted to read this! Every chapter is like candy; can't wait for the next update! :)



Author's Response:

I'm focusing on TPW for the next few weeks to finish the story then back to BTP & CAM

Reviewer: jenn6231 Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Feb 2010 5:07 AM Title: Chapter 4

i love reading alice's and jasper's story

i can't wait to see how and when jasper changes!!

update soon pretty please

Reviewer: peoplelikeus Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 12 Feb 2010 9:38 PM Title: Chapter 4

I love their story!

Reviewer: Tacara Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Feb 2010 4:38 AM Title: Chapter 4

Jasper makes me smile. Plain and simple.

Reviewer: tracygoodey1 Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Feb 2010 5:28 AM Title: Chapter 4

how long for jasper attitude to begin to soften i wonder?  soon i think

Reviewer: tracygoodey1 Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Feb 2010 5:20 AM Title: Chapter 3

oh poor poor alice she  ended up having a crap childhood as well, shes so broken she'll settle for crumbs of kindness and expect worse,

Reviewer: tracygoodey1 Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Feb 2010 5:09 AM Title: Chapter 2

that poor girl what on earth must she be thinking? james needs to shot already i'm glad the cullen boys  eventually take care of that, at least jasper recgonises his feelings and i'm pleased to see him back alice in the face of carlisle wanting to give her back

Reviewer: tracygoodey1 Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Feb 2010 4:57 AM Title: Chapter 1

wow jasper has changed big time and emmett does he already treat rosalie correctly in private and put on the show for carlisle? their attitude is appalling pooor esme living with it for so long, big time changes for the cullen boys coming soon

Reviewer: TM Twilight Girl Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 04 Feb 2010 3:35 PM Title: Chapter 1

I cried while I was reading this story.  I mean, I know how it goes from your other story, but your writing is so beautiful here that I found myself aching for Alice and hoping that Jasper will snap out of it and realize what a jerk he's being.  I can't wait until you post again.  I want to see what finally brings him around.



Author's Response:

Jasper won't be as stubborn about change as Edward is. He's going to have a little incentive to get his act together quickly

Reviewer: Violet Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Feb 2010 1:15 PM Title: Chapter 4

i really like this story and i can't wait to read more of it......please update!!!!

Reviewer: Vaneria Signed [Report This]
Date: 31 Jan 2010 2:26 PM Title: Chapter 4

Ha, that's what he thinks!

Reviewer: camianbu88 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 31 Jan 2010 3:24 AM Title: Chapter 4

I'm soo exited with this story, I know it's gonna be really really hard, especially because Alice suffered much more than Bella, I guess there are differents kinds of torture.



Author's Response:

I'm glad you like it.  It's hard to write Jasper as an ass since basically this story is going back from where he is now

Reviewer: Christine Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Jan 2010 7:27 PM Title: Chapter 4

I like seeing Alice and Jasper's POV. It's really very nice. I cannot wait for more! Just out of curiousity, do you ever think that you would write Emmett and Rose's POVs?



Author's Response:

I'm thinking about it, but haven't decided yet

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Jan 2010 4:36 PM Title: Chapter 1

I sure hope this isn't the  end!!  I love seeing behind Alice and Jasper's front door, so to speak.  In many ways, their story touches me most of all.  Bravo!



Author's Response:

This isn't the end.  We haven't seen his transformation yet

Reviewer: mistresselektra Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Jan 2010 4:41 AM Title: Chapter 1

This was great! Is this the end? I hope not!



Author's Response:

No this is not the end.  We haven't seen Jasper's transformation yet

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