Date: 20 Jun 2021 1:03 AM Title: Simple
Oh my!!!!!! Please tell me this is going to be finished. I started reading because it was marked "COMPLETE ".
Date: 20 Jun 2021 12:58 AM Title: Wanted
At least they have each other. They are not alone.
Date: 19 Jun 2021 8:42 PM Title: Worth It?
Glad Alice and Bella have each other to talk to.
Date: 19 Jun 2021 6:31 PM Title: Drifting
Poor Bella. She had an awful childhood. What happened to Carlisle and Esme? How did they die?
Date: 19 Jun 2021 6:12 PM Title: Simple
Sounds interesting. Can't wait to read more.
Date: 30 Sep 2012 3:47 PM Title: Simple
Please, please, please tell me you're going to continue this story. I love it! Can't wait to find out what happens. Beautiful work! :-)
Author's Response:
I suck at updating on here. The story is actually finished. You can find it on FF under the same penname
Date: 16 Sep 2012 4:04 AM Title: Wanted
Oh please, please, please tell me you are going to continue with this story. I absolutely love it! Completely bawled my eyes out with this last chapter. I so hope there's an update soon! Brilliant story!
Date: 19 Jun 2012 11:01 PM Title: Wanted
I was a bit confused at all the chapter 4's posted but only one being accessible. I'm sure its a simple posting issue.
Was this story originally on FFN.net? I think I have read further out than this current chapter but don't want to spoil it for your fans.
I do like this story very much. A young Bella that has already experienced so much loss and a determined Edward just coming into his own.
Alice is also very determined to land her man.
Date: 12 Jun 2012 8:39 PM Title: Wanted
So good so far!!Cant wait to hear more!!!keep it coming!!
Date: 24 May 2011 9:17 AM Title: Worth It?
Again, another story that is unique and different from the normal story and plot. I'm so glad I found you from the Tsunami compilation. I'm really interested to see how Edward and Bella eventually bridge the gap and get together. Something tells me he probably has noticed her but isn't sure how to go about it or is in denial of his feelings. It's nice that Bella has a good friend to confide in who is in the same predicament she's in. Can't wait for more! :)
Date: 22 Nov 2010 3:22 AM Title: Worth It?
well interesting story, can't wait to see where it goes from here.
Date: 15 Nov 2010 2:46 PM Title: Worth It?
bien por favor continua y actualiza pronto
Date: 07 Nov 2010 1:51 PM Title: Worth It?
I am enjoying it!
Date: 07 Nov 2010 4:00 AM Title: Worth It?
this was a pretty amazing chapter
Date: 07 Nov 2010 12:23 AM Title: Worth It?
Im really likikng it...post soon please
Date: 06 Nov 2010 11:54 PM Title: Worth It?
You're doing good so far. I really like this story so far. I can't wait for you to update. I hope it's soon!
Date: 06 Nov 2010 7:57 PM Title: Worth It?
Best Part:
"Did someone run over Mr. Jack?" I asked concerned. Mr. Jack was Alice's little pug dog that meant the world to her. In my opinion he was the ugliest, annoying little thing ever. He didn't like any one accept for Alice and he put up with me because Alice liked me, but I swear every time I come over he gives me evil looks.
Date: 06 Nov 2010 1:04 PM Title: Worth It?
First of all, WTF was Maria and Jasper thinking kissing like that in front of a student. Does Maria see the way Alice looks at Jasper and wanted to flaunt in her face that he is hers? It sucks to be so young and so in love with someone like they are. At least Bella doesn't look at the situation with stars in her eyes like it will work out. She's a bit more realistic that Edward might only have sister/daughter feelings for her. At least she knows she wants to be happy and in love in five years.
Not bad for an unbeta'd chapter. I didn't notice too many errors. I could never post an unbeta'd chapter. Mine are always too much of a mess.
Date: 06 Nov 2010 10:40 AM Title: Drifting
I am loving the build up.
Look forward to the next chapter.
Date: 06 Nov 2010 10:36 AM Title: Simple
Liking the start of this story.
Looks like it could be a great rollercoaster ride!
Date: 06 Nov 2010 10:17 AM Title: Worth It?
Please write some more. I` sick of bad Edward... dominating Edward... and others ...ward.
Silent, responible and sensitive Edward is such an refreshmant,
Date: 06 Nov 2010 7:43 AM Title: Worth It?
I like so far... Keep it up!!!!!
Date: 06 Nov 2010 7:34 AM Title: Worth It?
They are really sure that the guys feel the same way that they do. I hope that they are right because other wise they are going to be heartbroken.
Date: 06 Nov 2010 7:25 AM Title: Drifting
That is so sad that Renee damaged her like that. It is sad when any parent does that to their child. What happened to Carlisle and Esme??
Date: 06 Nov 2010 7:15 AM Title: Simple
I am cracking up!! Alice in love with a teacher is kinna funny because Alice will go to no ends of the earth to get what she wants and Mr. Whitlock doesn't stand a chance here.
Date: 06 Nov 2010 6:12 AM Title: Worth It?
great chapter - Bella and Alice seem to have an uphill battle ahead of them, though...
Date: 12 Oct 2010 10:58 AM Title: Drifting
I am intrigued, this story sounds like it can be very intense when you finally get it going. I really would love to know when you update and I don't think TWCS has authors alert. I think it was wonderful that Edward took Bella in, she has been pushed around and tossed around and this was her only real family. I hope things work out for her, you have to admit its a bit racy, isn't he her step brother? I wonder what is going through his mind? Will you be doing any EPOV's? I would love for them to be together, they aren't actually blood related but she would have to be an adult first. That means he needs to wait until she is over 18 considering he is 9 years older than her, that makes a huge impact on them and where their lives are headed.
My E- Mail is JRAlderton72@aol.com, please let me know if you decide to update this story. I don't want to miss out because I really want to know how this story turns out.
~Jennifer
Date: 27 Sep 2010 9:14 PM Title: Drifting
Update please! I am begging you!
Date: 25 Sep 2010 10:22 PM Title: Drifting
So sad that Carlisle and Esme died. At least we now know how he became her guardian. So far I really like this and can't wait to see what you have planned for Bella.
Date: 25 Sep 2010 10:09 PM Title: Simple
That's an interesting beginning. I can't wait to get a bit more interaction with Edward and see how he acts around Bella.
Date: 24 Sep 2010 5:20 PM Title: Simple
well I love it already :) xx
Date: 24 Sep 2010 9:10 AM Title: Drifting
Hmmmm interesting i am looking forward to seeing where this goes.
PS: do you know you have named your story Parentan instead of Parental
Date: 23 Sep 2010 8:54 PM Title: Drifting
I like to know what happens as she gets older, like 18 or 19 year older. To me, it would be better if you fast forward to her senior year in highschool.
Date: 23 Sep 2010 6:27 AM Title: Drifting
What a traumatic event for her, poor thing. Well written, very detailed. Good job.
FYI, I think the last three paragraphs got misplaced from the middle of the flashback.
Date: 22 Sep 2010 12:15 PM Title: Simple
It's intersting and witty. It's funny how she got caught daydreaming- it's happened to all of us. You know teachers asking you a question to put you on the spot because you're not focused. Don't kid yourself they notice when their students are not paying attention.
Date: 22 Sep 2010 12:12 PM Title: Drifting
I didn't get that last bit after the 'my sleep would be peaceful now'. Did she go into another dream sequence? Are you going to write this in Edward's POV as well. Reason I ask is because her explanation of Edward's dating life seems as if he already might harbor some unexplored feelings for her. He obviously loves her, but he just doesn't realize the type of love he has for her? One more question how will you be updating will it be on a schedule or random? No pressure intended just a mere inquiry. I really like the premise of your story line. I look forward to reading more.
Date: 22 Sep 2010 4:57 AM Title: Drifting
ohhh I can not wait to read more, please update soon!
Date: 22 Sep 2010 4:57 AM Title: Simple
This looks really good I am excited to see more soon!
Date: 22 Sep 2010 2:32 AM Title: Drifting
aww poor bella! and poor esme and carlisle! cant wait for the next chapter :)
Date: 21 Sep 2010 5:12 PM Title: Drifting
wow great story
Date: 21 Sep 2010 4:19 PM Title: Drifting
this was really really good - You did a great job of creating a little of the back story to Bella. I am really looking forward to the next chapter.
great story
xoxo
Date: 21 Sep 2010 2:23 PM Title: Drifting
Ummm... Okay....the ending kinda confused me, but it has me on pins and needles waiting for the next chapter!!!
Krazi
xoxo
Date: 21 Sep 2010 2:08 PM Title: Simple
Ok...so far so good... I´m liking where this is heading, but how did she end up in Washington from Florida, or is that coming later..
Krazi..
Date: 13 Sep 2010 3:38 AM Title: Simple
Loved it, hope you update soon!
Date: 05 Sep 2010 7:12 PM Title: Simple
keep the story going good beginning.
Date: 04 Sep 2010 11:41 PM Title: Simple
like it so far. look forward to more.
Date: 04 Sep 2010 5:01 AM Title: Simple
So what's the age difference? He's still living at home?
Date: 03 Sep 2010 11:29 PM Title: Simple
great start i cant wait to read more!
Date: 03 Sep 2010 6:04 PM Title: Simple
i liked it can't wait to read more
Date: 03 Sep 2010 6:03 PM Title: Simple
keep going - and I love teacher Jasper! Older Edward - hmmmm
Date: 03 Sep 2010 5:47 PM Title: Simple
I like it. very well done. hope you continue it. please update soon
Date: 03 Sep 2010 5:25 PM Title: Simple
OOOH so far soo good. I love Edward so is Edward like away at school that's why he doesn't spend time with Bella or does he live at home too? just wondering because if she's raised as his sister wouldn't she not feel for him as a sister would? Yep I have questions and you have the answers so I am here for the remainder. lol keep up the great work. i love it so far. thanks again bye
Date: 03 Sep 2010 4:04 PM Title: Simple
Sounds very good so far :)
I am looking forward to reading more ;)
Date: 03 Sep 2010 4:03 PM Title: Simple
Love it! Looking forward to these young girls crushing on the older guys! Maybe sparks will fly?