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Reviewer: mrsvixter Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Sep 2015 7:40 PM Title: Chapter 22

LOVE THIS FICT

WELL DONE

Reviewer: MouseKitty Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Sep 2015 7:32 PM Title: Chapter 22

Welcome back

Reviewer: ThatsMzPeachesTYVM Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 May 2015 4:54 PM Title: Chapter 21

I hate Mr. Cheney... I hope his son makes it through the change soon and rips him apart. Angie had better be okay! 😢

Reviewer: ThatsMzPeachesTYVM Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 May 2015 7:23 AM Title: Chapter 20

Oh, no... Ben won't be able to handle it if Angela dies!!

Reviewer: ThatsMzPeachesTYVM Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 May 2015 5:47 PM Title: Chapter 19

Ben is PISSED!!

Reviewer: ThatsMzPeachesTYVM Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 May 2015 11:55 AM Title: Chapter 18

Ugh!! She really IS a danger magnet. Edward is going to FREAK! I just hope he doesn't doesn't get as far as marking er against her will. She's been through enough. 

I'm windering if her blood illness has anything to do with taking vampire birth control. Maybe it causes storage of blood in tissues outside if the uterus, and when she has her mentration, it releases? (Spitballing a guess)

Reviewer: ThatsMzPeachesTYVM Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 May 2015 7:20 AM Title: Chapter 17

Oh, joy. 

Reviewer: ThatsMzPeachesTYVM Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 May 2015 7:50 AM Title: Chapter 15

Did someone get word to Aro, somehow about Edward transitioning?? 

Reviewer: ThatsMzPeachesTYVM Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 May 2015 6:54 AM Title: Chapter 14

Why do I suspect that his trepidation and fear that he severed their bond through his behavior is what is makin him so sick? The thought of living without her is literally killing him.

Reviewer: ThatsMzPeachesTYVM Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 May 2015 10:23 PM Title: Chapter 13

It's sad that her flow mixed with his arousal caused a riot!!

What a mess. I bet she won't be forgetting about her cycle again.

Reviewer: ThatsMzPeachesTYVM Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 May 2015 4:45 PM Title: Chapter 12

Mike's a dead vampman! I hope Edward is registering her emotions right now. That's her only hope, I fear. Mike went a little bit nuts-oh after seeing Victoria slice her face.

Reviewer: ThatsMzPeachesTYVM Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 May 2015 6:50 AM Title: Chapter 11

I had all but forgotten about Tanya. I wonder how she is going to deal with all of the changes! This could prove interesting...

 

Reviewer: ThatsMzPeachesTYVM Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 May 2015 9:51 PM Title: Chapter 10

She's all about the mating, now! LOL

Reviewer: ThatsMzPeachesTYVM Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 May 2015 1:51 PM Title: Chapter 9

I kinda want to think that Hames may be the one who killed Bella's parents. Maybe, for some strange reason, he had been stalking er for a long time??

Reviewer: ThatsMzPeachesTYVM Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 May 2015 12:51 PM Title: Chapter 8

Victoria just wrote her death sentence, I'm afraid... and I am ASSUMING that James is the one who is finding and draining the Bella doppelgängers. I am hoping that Angela will be visiting over the party weekend, and that Ben will claim her.

Reviewer: ThatsMzPeachesTYVM Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 May 2015 10:43 PM Title: Chapter 7

I have a suspicion thAt the vampire gov'tis trying to find a medication that would allow them to draw blood at least weekly.

Reviewer: ThatsMzPeachesTYVM Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 May 2015 9:09 PM Title: Chapter 6

Yeah, I have a feeling that they will discover that some people have bad reactions to the pills.

Reviewer: ThatsMzPeachesTYVM Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 May 2015 8:17 PM Title: Chapter 5

I have a feeling that something bad is going to happen to Renee as a result of Tamya being scorned. 

Reviewer: ThatsMzPeachesTYVM Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 May 2015 7:48 PM Title: Chapter 4

I hope that someone overheard that conversation.

Reviewer: ThatsMzPeachesTYVM Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 May 2015 7:31 PM Title: Chapter 3

I hope James gets in SERIOUS trouble for his behavior.

Reviewer: ThatsMzPeachesTYVM Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 May 2015 7:05 PM Title: Chapter 2

I take it, as Carlisle has red eyes, that vpires cannot live on animal blood in your world? Is the synthetic blood Carlisle is creating going to turn their eyes golden?

Reviewer: ThatsMzPeachesTYVM Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 May 2015 2:42 PM Title: Chapter 1

Someone rec'd this to me in a FB group this morning. Looks good so far!

Reviewer: kraftgirl84 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 11 Dec 2014 5:19 AM Title: Chapter 21

Awesome!!  I LOVE your story.  stayed up all night to read it so far can't wait to see what happens

Reviewer: woahdere9 Signed [Report This]
Date: 24 Oct 2014 7:46 AM Title: Chapter 1

where are you? lol

Reviewer: Midnight Angels Say Goodnight Signed [Report This]
Date: 02 Sep 2014 3:32 AM Title: Chapter 21

Every so often, I come bace and reread this story. I always laugh when I read this final chapter end note claiming to only wait two weeks before the next post. But, I don't know what might be going on in RL so I can judge you at all. Looking forward to the completion of this story.

 

Reviewer: kaylade22 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 29 May 2014 11:59 PM Title: Chapter 5

 

DAMN .... I HAD TO GO TURN ON MY A.C. IT GOT SO HOT IN HERE.... LMAO !!!!

I would have told mine...'screw the parents being home....MARK ME'!!!!!!!

 

I am so loving this story .... I wish you would at least finish this one.

If there is an issue where you are needing help to finish it, I am also a writer on FF (which sucks) & would gladly be willing to help any way I could.

Thanks muches for sharing your story with me.....

Jamie Crabtree (Messenger)

jdcm0630@yahoo.com



Author's Response:

I'm so sorry for the late reply. Thank you so much for your comment. It made my day when I read it.  And thank you for offering your help, I deeply appreciate it. As of now, I'm still writing, just at a much slower rate. Life is busy and it hasn't been easy. But I promise the story will be completed. I have some extra help to finish the story. Thank goodness lol. I do have a few chapters completed, however, I'd like to have at least up to ch 30 completed before I start posting again. Initially I had wanted up to ch 26 completed and then start posting, but it's difficult to get chapters out with all that's still going on in my life. I'm on the fence about posting the completed chapters that I have now since I can't promise a regular updating schedule. It could be a couple of weeks or even many months between chapters. I'd hate to disapoint everyone, but I guess Im doing that anyways because I haven't posted in a long time. Anyways, thank you again. I'm currently adding more scenes to chapter 24. =) I will see what I can do and sorry for the wait.

 

~Jells

 

Ch 22 snippet

The trial went on like this for another two hours or so. Sometimes, it was just the three judges speaking directly to Edward and Tyler and other times the lawyers spoke heatedly amongst themselves. I wondered if they would call on me, but Carlisle said most likely it wouldn’t happen. Humans weren’t considered worthy enough to speak in vampire court, although it did happen on rare occasions. This probably wasn’t one of them. I had a feeling the judges could’ve cared less about what I had to say. I tried to listen carefully as Carlisle and Charlie translated the important parts of the trial. Occasionally, I picked up a few familiar words, but it was never enough for me to truly understand everything that was going on without the help of my family. I asked a few times if the judges seemed to lean more in favor of Edward or Tyler, but Carlisle informed me that we won’t know until they come to a decision at the end of the trial. The judges kept their expressions impassive.

 

After what seemed like forever, the judge in the middle, the one with the shoulder length black hair, stood abruptly, waving his hand in the air to signal silence.

 

Charlie leaned closer to me. “This is it, Bella. They have a verdict. They will start with Edward first, and then move on to Tyler’s fate.”

 

At this point, the eerie silence was torture as I waited. “Dear Lord…” I breathed out nervously. I could hear my heartbeat drumming in my ears.

 

Carlisle glanced down at me and took my hand in his, giving it a gentle squeeze. He translated what the head judge was saying. I nodded, encouraging him to keep going.

 

 

 

“REUSEM!” the dark haired judge growled suddenly. “Edver Cullen REUSEM!”

 

I jerked around in my seat to face the platform where all three judges now stood, confused at the outburst.

 

 

 

* End*

 

Reviewer: Jenny_B Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Mar 2014 4:22 PM Title: Chapter 1

Please update soon. I really love the story and it has been such a long time since the last chapter was added. Can't wait for more!!! :)



Author's Response:

Thank you and I'm sorry for the long hiatus. I'm re-editing ch 22 and I will post it asap. Again sorry for the wait.

 

ch 22 snippet (not edited)

 

Bella's POV

 

At every corner and crevice, a torch was mounted onto the stony walls. The flames seemed to flicker menacingly, mocking us. Massive court guards stood at each torch with weapons strapped across their chests and more at their sides. Their cold, dark red eyes always ended up snapping to me, watching every little step I took as we passed by them. I couldn’t help but wonder if the three judges would look just as cold and unforgiving as the guards. My heart stuttered in my chest at the mere thought of losing Edward. I quickly pushed the ill thought away as we continued our trek further into the cold, dimly lit cave. With each step, the air grew colder and denser. I shivered next to Edward. He quickly took off his grey pea coat and draped it over my shoulders.

 

I glanced up at him and smiled my gratitude. Even with the thick sweater I wore, I had been freezing ever since we entered the ominous cave. The entire atmosphere down here felt chilling and foreboding yet the beauty of the stalagmites helped put me at ease slightly. The ceiling of the cave had to be at least 200 feet high. We came to a stop by a stone archway guarded by two heavily armed court guards dressed in gray uniforms. Their dark eyes narrowed on me before flashing to Edward.

 

The burlier of the two guards spoke. “Edward Anthony Cullen?” he asked in a gruff tone.

 

“Yes.”

 

“You’ll need to get changed and restrained. Follow me.” The burly guard turned on his booted heel and stomped away, expecting us to follow.

 

Edward pulled me behind him and snaked his arm around my waist when the tunnel grew more narrow and darker. Not even the flickering flames helped aid my sight. The torches were placed too far apart. I leaned against Edward, letting him guide me. The walk through the tunnel didn’t last long. We came to a stop in front of a small cavernous room filled with shelves full of uniforms and black chains. In the center of the room, a huge platform made of stone stood ominously as the centerpiece.

 

The court guard stalked over to a shelf and grabbed a pair of baggy cloth pants that were burgundy in color with black stripes. “You will need to put these on while I prepare your restraints and the bite cuff. After you finished changing into the convict garb, sit down on the restraint table over there and wait for me,” he instructed in an icy tone while pointing to the big stone platform. “You can change behind that wall over there, the changing divider.  Just leave your clothing on the shelf when you’re finished. If you’re found innocent, I will escort you back here to change back into your clothes. If you’re found guilty, you will remain in this uniform I have given you to be immediately escorted to the maximum security prison by the prison guards assigned to you. Any questions?”

Reviewer: RAH07890 Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 Feb 2014 5:03 AM Title: Chapter 1

Yay!!  Cannot wait to read more!



Author's Response:

Thank you! I'm re-editing ch 22 since I ran into some problems. Have 23 completely written and 24 will need some more work, unfortunately. However, the story will be completed =) Sorry about the hiatus.

 

Jells

 

ch 22 teaser

 

Bella's POV

 

At every corner and crevice, a torch was mounted onto the stony walls. The flames seemed to flicker menacingly, mocking us. Massive court guards stood at each torch with weapons strapped across their chests and more at their sides. Their cold, dark red eyes always ended up snapping to me, watching every little step I took as we passed by them. I couldn’t help but wonder if the three judges would look just as cold and unforgiving as the guards. My heart stuttered in my chest at the mere thought of losing Edward. I quickly pushed the ill thought away as we continued our trek further into the cold, dimly lit cave. With each step, the air grew colder and denser. I shivered next to Edward. He quickly took off his grey pea coat and draped it over my shoulders.

 

I glanced up at him and smiled my gratitude. Even with the thick sweater I wore, I had been freezing ever since we entered the ominous cave. The entire atmosphere down here felt chilling and foreboding yet the beauty of the stalagmites helped put me at ease slightly. The ceiling of the cave had to be at least 200 feet high. We came to a stop by a stone archway guarded by two heavily armed court guards dressed in gray uniforms. Their dark eyes narrowed on me before flashing to Edward.

 

The burlier of the two guards spoke. “Edward Anthony Cullen?” he asked in a gruff tone.

 

“Yes.”

 

“You’ll need to get changed and restrained. Follow me.” The burly guard turned on his booted heel and stomped away, expecting us to follow.

 

Edward pulled me behind him and snaked his arm around my waist when the tunnel grew more narrow and darker. Not even the flickering flames helped aid my sight. The torches were placed too far apart. I leaned against Edward, letting him guide me. The walk through the tunnel didn’t last long. We came to a stop in front of a small cavernous room filled with shelves full of uniforms and black chains. In the center of the room, a huge platform made of stone stood ominously as the centerpiece.

 

The court guard stalked over to a shelf and grabbed a pair of baggy cloth pants that were burgundy in color with black stripes. “You will need to put these on while I prepare your restraints and the bite cuff. After you finished changing into the convict garb, sit down on the restraint table over there and wait for me,” he instructed in an icy tone while pointing to the big stone platform. “You can change behind that wall over there, the changing divider.  Just leave your clothing on the shelf when you’re finished. If you’re found innocent, I will escort you back here to change back into your clothes. If you’re found guilty, you will remain in this uniform I have given you to be immediately escorted to the maximum security prison by the prison guards assigned to you. Any questions?”

Reviewer: Alica1992 Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Feb 2014 8:32 PM Title: Chapter 20

I love this story *.* every week i come back to check if you updated ...but nothing :( can you just maybe upload the 22 chapter, so we have our fix? Pretty pretty please ;)

 

Love Alica



Author's Response:

Thank you so much. I really apologize for the long hiatus. I'll send ch 22 to my beta in a few days and post once I make the corrections. I almost have ch 24 complete. Thanks again, Jells xx

Reviewer: elenalena Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Feb 2014 11:22 PM Title: Chapter 7

Love it!



Author's Response:

Thank you! I hope you continue to like it. Working on ch 24 atm. Thanks again! 

Reviewer: elenalena Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Feb 2014 1:14 PM Title: Chapter 5

Love it so far! I love intense vampire mating fics!



Author's Response:

Thanks so much!! 

Reviewer: woahdere9 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 31 Jan 2014 12:52 AM Title: Chapter 21

LOVE this story & cannot wait until you update. 



Author's Response:

Thank you so much!! I have two chaps written that need to be beta'd. I'm going to write a couple more before I start updating again. Thanks again :)

Reviewer: jillapet Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Jan 2014 4:32 PM Title: Chapter 2

I really hope that you are able to finish this fic... I love it ever so much!

 

 



Author's Response:

Thank you :) I promise to finish the fic. Already have ch 22 and 23 written. Just need to have it beta'd. Will post when I finish ch 25. 

Reviewer: jillapet Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Jan 2014 4:31 PM Title: Chapter 1

I really hope that you are able to finish this fic... I love it ever so much!

Reviewer: CBohnas Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Dec 2013 11:56 PM Title: Chapter 21

This is a really interesting story and I was wondering if you were going to continue writing it?  Would love to see where you are going to take it from here.  Please continue this story and finish it.



Author's Response:

Thanks so much! I promise to finish. I have a couple chapters written which need to be beta'd. Will post as soon as I finish ch 25. 

Reviewer: Alica1992 Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Nov 2013 10:19 PM Title: Chapter 1

Hey :) just wanted to say that i love your story and cant wait for you to update ! :D please update soon;)



Author's Response:

Thank you :) I promise to post soon. 

Reviewer: twideb Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 Oct 2013 2:13 AM Title: Chapter 21

Really hoping you finish this fic. It's so good.



Author's Response:

Thank you! I promise to post soon. I haven't forgotten. As soon as I finish ch 25, I will start updating again. 

Reviewer: Chiisuture Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Oct 2013 8:40 PM Title: Chapter 21

i was wondering if this story will be continued?



Author's Response:

Yes! As soon as I finish ch 25 I will start posting again. :) 

Reviewer: dizzykaz Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Oct 2013 9:52 PM Title: Chapter 21

When are you updating Hun xxxx



Author's Response:

Sorry for the late reply. I haven't forgotten about this fic. When I finish ch 25 I will start posting again. Currently I'm starting ch 24. I wanted to come back with a few chaps. :) xxxx

Reviewer: xoxokristen Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 16 Sep 2013 2:34 AM Title: Chapter 21

great story! i hope you come back and finish it one day



Author's Response:

Thank you :))) I will start posting again soon. Currently writing ch 24. If like to have at least one more chap completed when I start updating again. 

Reviewer: DanaLynn Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 04 Sep 2013 4:52 AM Title: Chapter 19

Jells, you have kept me on my toes! I have laughed, cried, cussed, and wanted to throw my phone across the room! (I read on my Android.) I have put off reading all of my other stories, because this story has captivated me! You are one hell of a writer! Don't ever give up on your writing! You have a gift! Well, it's bed time for me! HAGN! Dana

Author's Response:

Thanks so much! That means a lot! I won't ever quit, I promise! 

Thanks again,

 

Xx

 

Jells

Reviewer: DanaLynn Signed [Report This]
Date: 02 Sep 2013 1:42 AM Title: Chapter 10

Your story caught my eye when I was scanning through stories to read. It has really captivated me. I love how it is written. It is beautifully done, and I can't wait to read more! Dana

Author's Response:

Thank you for your kind words. I'm happy that you gave my story a chance. I'm in the process of editing my chapter after a long hiatus. It's taking longer than expected but I will have something soon. Thanks again.

Reviewer: mmmsexy Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Sep 2013 9:00 PM Title: Chapter 21

love this story update pleassse



Author's Response:

Thanks so much! I haven't given up. I'm in the process of editing my chapter which is taking longer than expected. Will have something asap.

Reviewer: cowgirl7919 Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Jul 2013 2:57 AM Title: Chapter 20

So just a continuity issue. In the woods Bella was in a dress and back in the house Edward is putting his had up her shirt to touch her stomach.

Around the same spot in the first scene is what looks to be a garbled line it doesn't make any sense

 



Author's Response:

Thank you for pointing that out. It totally slipped my mind. Yes, she's still wearing her blk dress. I will change it as soon as I can. 

 

Thank you! 

Reviewer: jillapet Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Jul 2013 2:30 AM Title: Chapter 20

i really hope you finish this story- so creative and hot!



Author's Response:

Thanks os much! Glad you enjoy the story so far. And yes, it will be completed. I'm still working on  ch 22. ( I just started writing again recently). I wasn't able to write for a long time due to some RL situations. 

 

Thanks again,

 

Jells

Reviewer: sonja Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Jun 2013 6:46 PM Title: Chapter 21

Hey Jells,

I haven't stopped reading this story. I just wanted to let you know that real life got in the way for awhile but I'm back! I can't wait until you update!

 

Hugs,

Sonja



Author's Response:

Hey! *waves*

 

No problem. The same happened to me. I had some RL emergencies that happened and now just recently I've gotten back to writting. Glad to have you on board still.

 

Hope all is well now =)

 

*Hugs*

 

Jells

Reviewer: i am mrs emmett cullen Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Jun 2013 8:16 PM Title: Chapter 1

When are u going.to update?????

I understand that you lost your grandma and I know it is hard. but i, and plenty of other readers and dying to find out what happens next. 

PLEASE update soon



Author's Response:

Still writing ch 22. It will be up soon. i'm not givin' up =)

Reviewer: DeeZ750 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 03 Apr 2013 3:10 AM Title: Chapter 21

Please don't forget about this story. I'm hooked and can't wait for more. Great story.



Author's Response:

I'm sorry for the long hiatus. I had a death in the family so it's been difficult for me. The days are getting better, however, and I find myself being able to do things I enjoy again, like write. =) I'll have an update soon. I promise to finish this story. And thank you. 

Reviewer: x-Holly-x Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 26 Mar 2013 12:37 AM Title: Chapter 8

Hope everything is getting better for you and I cant wait to see you back :)



Author's Response:

Thank you, Holly! 

I'm sorry for the long haitus. My grandmother passed away from cancer and it's been a very difficult time for me. Just recently I started to write a little again. I promise to finish this story and I'll have an update asap. 

Reviewer: littlebella13 Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Mar 2013 12:37 PM Title: Chapter 21

I can't wait for the next chapter...it has been a while since you posted...Please, please, please update soon!!!

Author's Response:

I promise to finish the story and I will have an update very soon (hopefully by June). My grandmother passed away so it's been difficult on my end.... but the days are getting better. I apologize for the long hiatus.

 

Reviewer: lissalou72 Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Mar 2013 10:26 PM Title: Chapter 1

I am so sorry to hear about that. I can't wait to see what you come up with once everything settles.

Keep up the great work



Author's Response:

Thanks so much and thank you for understanding. =) 

 

~Jells

Reviewer: lissalou72 Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Mar 2013 3:08 AM Title: Chapter 21

I just found this and I spent all day reading it. I am all caught up and I can't wait to see what happens next. Does Bella and Ben get to finish the ceremony? Is Angie ok will her and Ben's baby be ok? I can't wait to se please come back soon



Author's Response:

Thanks so much. I promise I'll have some new chapters up soon. RL has been tough esp with a death in my family. 

 

~Jells

Reviewer: kini_113 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 26 Jan 2013 8:51 PM Title: Chapter 21

Truely enjoying your story...  I hope your RL things get better but family is the most important thing so we'll wait until your more important priorities have been taken care of.    



Author's Response:

Thank you. I promise I will finish this story. RL's been very difficult with an illness and a recent death in my family. I'm just trying to cope. 

 

I hope I can return soon

 

 

 

Reviewer: kessafan Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 30 Nov 2012 1:45 PM Title: Chapter 21

Well, I've finally caught up...  I hope you still plan to finish this story.  I've enjoyed the originality of it while still keeping to the 'flavour' of the books. 



Author's Response:

Thank you! I promise to finish the story, It's been diffiuclt since I had a death in the family. Just recently I've been able to start writing a little again. 

Reviewer: lovedimitri Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Nov 2012 5:11 AM Title: Chapter 21

cant wait for more!

Reviewer: katie0422 Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Nov 2012 5:30 AM Title: Chapter 1

cant wait for more

Reviewer: katie0422 Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Nov 2012 5:29 AM Title: Chapter 21

can't wait for more

Reviewer: GreyFan513 Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Nov 2012 8:14 AM Title: Chapter 21

Just found your story and I love it. Hope you are able to update soon. 

Reviewer: CGRN0611 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Sep 2012 11:40 PM Title: Chapter 21

Found your story on a favorite list. love,love,love the story. I may be a newbie to the story, but, i'm truly tweekin' to find out what happens next. Hope RL is goin' ok. Hope to see an update soon.

Reviewer: raedeath13 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 14 Aug 2012 7:45 AM Title: Chapter 21

I love this story! I'm sticking with you. Keep writing!

Reviewer: Kelsluna Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 03 Aug 2012 2:38 AM Title: Chapter 21

Please please keep writing I love this story!!! Great job!!! 

Reviewer: Kelsluna Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02 Aug 2012 9:26 PM Title: Chapter 20

I lOve love this story keep up the good work !!!! 

Reviewer: i am ms emmett cullen Signed [Report This]
Date: 02 Aug 2012 12:04 PM Title: Chapter 21

hey,

understand that RL get super busy i myself have heaps going on

BUT you can't leave us on a cliffhanger like this!!! i'm dying to know how angela and the baby are? how edward is going to be knowing that Bella will be Ben's Submissle(?) still? how ben will eact if the baby dies (which i hope it doesn't)
PLEASE UPDATE SOON!!!!!!!!!!!

Love the story

May

Reviewer: monica37 Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Jul 2012 8:43 PM Title: Chapter 1

Great chapter can't wait for the next one. Please update soon

Reviewer: almondgirl3 Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Jul 2012 3:48 AM Title: Chapter 6

Hmm, I think that the second blood donation is definitely suspect, as are the pills. Maybe they're a ploy used by Aro to get Edward to join his guard?

Reviewer: almondgirl3 Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Jul 2012 2:20 AM Title: Chapter 5

I liked that Edward slowed the car down of his own accord when he noticed that Bella was uncomfortable with the speed. It's a small gesture but I think a really big one.

Also, about the blood donation, do females give less than males because of their monthly cycle? Odd question and you're probably never going to read this review, but I was just curious as to what your answer would be.

Reviewer: wwench Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Jul 2012 11:31 AM Title: Chapter 1

looking forward to your update!

Reviewer: brandofcullencrazy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 29 Jun 2012 6:51 AM Title: Chapter 21

Good story you should really finish this. I want to know how it will end!

Reviewer: fleur50 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 15 Jun 2012 2:48 AM Title: Chapter 21

si délicieusement tordue!  J'adore!

Reviewer: twilightlover127 Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Jun 2012 11:35 PM Title: Chapter 21

I personally think that it should have been Edward and Bella to have a baby and Ben and Angela. I mean I know it's bad to say this but that's what I think.

Reviewer: twilightlover127 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 13 Jun 2012 10:42 PM Title: Chapter 19

Why couldn't Bella be the one to get pregnant!!!!! Ugh you should have made Bella be the one pregnant. Just saying and btw  is Jacob in this story cause I'm thinking that he's not but idk!!! Super good story loooove it but still wish Bella was pregnant just saying.

Reviewer: LAmaike Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jun 2012 10:57 AM Title: Chapter 5

good story :-)

 

Reviewer: Daisy Crazy Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jun 2012 3:49 AM Title: Chapter 21

So, a lot happened here!!!!  That was some crazy stuff with primal Edward.  I knew we hadn't seen the last of Mr. Cheney, but now Bella has to remain his submissal for longer, poor E&B, poor B&A.  I hope Angela and the baby can survive all of the trauma they've been through.  I'm sorry I didn't R&R sooner, somehow my alert got mixed in with other emails.  I just found it today & was pleasantly surprised that you updated.  My prayers are with you and your RL stuff.  :)

Reviewer: ScaryMary Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 05 Jun 2012 11:16 PM Title: Chapter 21

Bloody brilliant! please update LAH too

Reviewer: twilightlovergirl Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 05 Jun 2012 3:37 AM Title: Chapter 21

Loved this chapter.

Thanks for updating.

Reviewer: Teeam_Emeett_4_Lifee Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Jun 2012 3:54 AM Title: Chapter 21

this story is the bomb.com lol!!! i love it!!!!Hope you updte soon!!!

Reviewer: gingersnaps07 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 31 May 2012 4:08 AM Title: Chapter 21

I love this story so much! please don't keep us waiting!

Reviewer: fall up Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 May 2012 10:23 PM Title: Chapter 21

Kudos to you for writing this story as you want and not changing it b/c some readers might be pissed. 

Oh Shit, talk about drama. I so want Mr. Cheney to die. I loved the intense blood play between E/B which is usually not my thing. Hoping you update in 2 weeks and that R/L drama stays away.

Reviewer: sogian Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 May 2012 6:58 PM Title: Chapter 21

omg!!!! No!!! Did she lost the baby after all??? Carlisle managed to save her and the baby the first time but now??? Ben's dad is such an asshole??? He might not want Angela but he couldn't just act like that... And what about Bella??? Is there a reason why Ben didn't have time to make the release ceremony??? Maybe because Edward's trial is Monday and Bella being a Submissal could help her being protected even if Edward goes in prison after all??? no?? What will happen??? Can't wait to read more....

Reviewer: Canadaci Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 30 May 2012 1:04 AM Title: Chapter 21

Hum!  father Cheney is lethal.

Reviewer: Pricklypearess Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 May 2012 3:49 PM Title: Chapter 21

Feral Edward.....yum.  Ben's dad is a real pain in the arse.  God!  Thanks for the update.

Reviewer: Charlie0925 Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 May 2012 10:59 PM Title: Chapter 21

Love this! ;o)

Reviewer: neecee Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 28 May 2012 5:31 AM Title: Chapter 21

I never review but I had to tell you that I LOVE your story. It's very original and captivating from the beginning of every chapter to the very end. I have no idea how you come up with some of this stuff, but it keeps me entertained and on the edge of my seat. It's the BEST story I have read so far and I hope that you keep updating. I understand that rl can get in the way but PLEASE don't ever abandon this story. I'm in love with it. You're talented and I can't wait to read more.

 

Much love,

neecee

Reviewer: shiftyless Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 May 2012 3:53 AM Title: Chapter 21

wow so much srama in one chapter just love it also written well

Reviewer: lb8931 Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 May 2012 5:41 PM Title: Chapter 21

Wow that was intense last two chapters. Might have to explain more on the submisive when ben did it that and the claiming. I hope Ben is ok and Angela and baby are too. I do hope you can update sooner. I also understand rl gets in the way sometimes and that has to come first. 

Reviewer: lovingrobpatz Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 27 May 2012 4:45 PM Title: Chapter 21

Loved it. I'm still here, and I damn sure will be waiting for the next update soon!!!  Jesus, I didn't know what to think with Edward and Bella 's last sex apace. I guess it served the purpose of the bloodletting.  He was so feral. I freaking loved it. Thank u so much for updating. Hope to see u soon

Reviewer: TwiAddictcrzy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 27 May 2012 3:26 PM Title: Chapter 21

I can't wait until they try claiming! 

Reviewer: aura1975 Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 May 2012 12:44 PM Title: Chapter 21

The ceremony will be? Ben abused friendship between Bella and Edward. I would not when no longer have to maintain relations with it. He should come back and perform ll0;m0;m1;k2;l3;.h1;kl5; ungrateful, he is obliged to Edward and Bella all, he and Angela provide shelter, gave protection, food and k4;l6;k6;m1;.h8; is how he thanked them???

Reviewer: cjrich Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 27 May 2012 5:39 AM Title: Chapter 21

I'm still here and still loving this story!!  Can't wait to find out what "claiming" is!   Thank you - Cheri

Reviewer: forbiddenred Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 27 May 2012 4:52 AM Title: Chapter 21

I want E and B to try the "claiming" I think it would be very erotic ;-) 

Reviewer: kaykay85 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 27 May 2012 4:43 AM Title: Chapter 21

MORE PLEASE!



Author's Response:

More in a few days =)

 

Thank you

 

Jells

Reviewer: lambykins Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 May 2012 4:09 AM Title: Chapter 21

Wow that was intense!!! *waves hi*. Ben needs to come back!!! What about the ceremony!! Iam super stressed now. Sigh. I'm going back to bed until the next update. Hehe. Can't wait for the "claiming" barbedpeenward sexin

Author's Response:

Laaaammmbyyy *waves*

 

LOL!!

 

I feel ya, i'm still stressed, but I'm pushing through. I'll have the chap posted in a few days. 

 

I can't wait til the claiming, it's gonna be.... different lol

 

Thanks again,

 

*huggles*

 

Jells

Reviewer: cgooden Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 May 2012 1:52 AM Title: Chapter 21

Wow.  I feel so sorry for them.  They have had one thing after another thrown at them.  I look forward to more.



Author's Response:

Thanks so much =)

 

New chapter will be up in a few days

 

Thanks again,

 

Jells

Reviewer: topazeyes11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 May 2012 12:26 AM Title: Chapter 21

Excited for more!



Author's Response:

Thank you so much =) More to come =)

Reviewer: Kbeck Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 27 May 2012 12:24 AM Title: Chapter 21

I'm still here Jells. Thanks for that great update. I'm still in love with this story and I'm looking forward to more.



Author's Response:

Thank you so much =)

Reviewer: Siobhan_Whitlock Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 27 May 2012 12:04 AM Title: Chapter 21

You still have your readers, dont fret  ;)

 

Great chapter!  The bathroom scene was... wow. 

 

So now what do they do about the release ceremony?  Oh boy, when can Ben be set free from his parents, this is heart wrenching!



Author's Response:

Hey *waves*

 

Thank you, glad you liked it =)

 

Next chap will be up in a few days.

 

Thanks again

 

jells

Reviewer: theladykt Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 26 May 2012 11:22 PM Title: Chapter 21

oh wow oh wow. for the end.  Mr cheney needs to get his arse kicked quickly.

 

Poor Ben,  Ang sick, baby in jeopardy, Edwards mad, Daddy furious.  Poor kid

 

Yummy "play" time for B &E



Author's Response:

Thanks so much! Glad you likey.

 

I'll have the next chap up in a few days

 

Thanks again,

 

Jells

Reviewer: x-Holly-x Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 26 May 2012 8:52 PM Title: Chapter 21

havent read this chapter but plan to very soon !!! im still very much an epic fan but in the mist of exam season :(



Author's Response:

Hey! *waves*

 

Thanks so much. =) No prob, take your time.

 

Next chap (mini) will be up in a few days. 

 

Best wishes for exams

 

Jells

Reviewer: missy889 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 26 May 2012 7:29 PM Title: Chapter 21

Thanks for another update. This chapter was intense but I understand why Edward was upset, however, I understand Bella's side also. I'm just relieved that they're back to how things were between them. I love their love. I wish I had what they have. Please post ASAP. 



Author's Response:

Thank you! I'll post in a few days =)

 

Thanks again,

 

Jells

Reviewer: dreamsEC Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 26 May 2012 7:22 PM Title: Chapter 21

I hope RL treats you better. I"ll be waiting for more. Take Care

 

Ash



Author's Response:

Thank you, I hope so too. 

 

Jells

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