Date: 27 Jun 2019 4:40 PM Title: The Best Years
They are horrible parents. The example they set has come back to bite them in the ass. So willy nilly with their sons having casual sex. Surprised a pregnancy hasn't happened before now. At least Edward was pissed off at CC and Natalie. Bella was like, ok whatever, let Natalie move in and I'll babysit. They didn't do their sons any favors by being so foolish about their sexcapdes. Why would CC and Natalie want a baby now when neither have graduated high school or can support themselves? Guess they figured stupid Bella would be there with open arms and open door to take care of them and not hold them responsible for anything.
Date: 22 Mar 2019 6:22 PM Title: Alex Outtake
I just reread The Story of Us and Instructions Not Included. I loved this family just as much as I did the first time! I’ve got my fingers crossed that you’ll one day add the CC outtake and maybe more. I hate to see their story end.
I love all of your stories and go back to reread them periodically. Thank you so much for not pulling them. I hope you’ll decide to write again going forward. If you have anything published I’d love to know about it.
Date: 22 Mar 2019 4:09 PM Title: Epilogue
You I just reread “The Story of Us”, and then “Instructions Not Included” and I love their story. I know there is a couple of chapters after this one, but I hate to see it end! I love this family so much!
I have loved your stories for years and appreciate that you haven’t pulled them. I would be super excited if you were to write something new. If you’ve published anything, I’d definitely be interested in reading it.
Date: 06 Mar 2016 7:24 AM Title: Alex Outtake
Jake should die. Like, he was driving then his fake leg got stuck against the accelerator, hit a tree and died instantly. Lol. Kidding aside, I'm glad Alex is not that stupid to pursue Jake. I would love to read more about her love story with Dan. I love the Cullens in your story. I feel like I personally know them, like they're neighbors or family friends. Thank you for writing a feel good family story.
Date: 11 Feb 2016 4:54 PM Title: Epilogue
Sometimes I feel like fanfics have too much of a fairytale ending, you know? Like it becomes unrealistic. I really loved the epilogue. It wasn't perfect at all, but at the end of the day, most of them were happy and it showed just how close they are in that family. I loved that. It wasn't just about their love lives, it was about their family and the love they share.
I've had my dissapointments throughout this story. But there will never be a story where I won't feel like that. All in all I thought it was great, obviously, or I wouldn't have read the whole thing :) So thank you for a great story, and I hope you keep writing!
Date: 08 Feb 2016 10:47 PM Title: Gray Matter
Okay seriously this family has a way of ALWAYS blaming Edward for everything. He didn't let Bella help. So hey it's okay that Bella cheated on him. WTF! Edward shouldn't have hit her. No one can argue with that. But good god! She was wrong! I don't care if her intentions were good, that shit was fucked up. I could never agree with Carlisle. Kissing is still cheating.
I get that she was doing what she thought was best. Did she not learn anything from this whole debacle? Things escalate when you lie or keeps things from your husband. That's what got them into this whole situation in the first place. She should have told Edward the truth about Randall from the beginning. She admitted that herself? Yet she made the same mistake again... I don't get it. But maybe that's just me.
At the end of the day I'm not saying I don't understand where she is coming from. Because I would do absolutely ANYTHING for the people I love. Even something like this. But at the end of the day, she did it for herself, for her piece of mind. She knew that sleeping with Randall would hurt Edward a lot more than anything Randall could ever do to him.
Carlisle was right about one thing though. Don't let Randall win.
I loved their reunion. And I totally started bawling my eyes out when Bella did! :) So glad that she apologized. So sweet what she said about not being able to live without him!
I liked how EJ got to understand where Edward was coming from. Debbie turned into a real bitch...
Michael is really my favorite character in this story. He's adorable and so funny!
Date: 08 Feb 2016 9:33 PM Title: BIG girl panties
I thought Bella was horrable in this chapter. She should have talked to Edward as soon as Randall called her. How could she think that Edward would ever just be okay with it? She seemed so shocked when he walked out. What did she expect? He loves her, and no way would he ever be okay with her doing that, even if it kept him out of prison. And the way she treated Randall really pissed me off. So he's in love with her? Boo fucking hoo, not her goddamn problem. How could she feel sorry for him after what he did?
I didn't like that Edward hit her, even though had I been him I would have done the same thing. And he did warn her to stay away. Doesn't make it okay to ever hit someone! But I do feel like she would have slapped him too, had the situation been reversed.
I hope he doesn't forgive her too fast. She really doesn't deserve it.
Date: 07 Feb 2016 3:15 AM Title: Unchained Melody
Glad Rosie stood up for Edward here. It was about time someone did.
In this sequel I am really starting to dislike Alice, she seems so judgemental and has an opinion on everybody else's bussiness when really it seems like she's the one with the most problems... Glad Rose told her off.
And the whole hitting EJ thing, I'm with Rose on this one. Bella shouldn't have such a double standard. It isn't justified just because EJ would hit back? WTF? Now I really don't believe in hitting your children at all. But I really hate double standards..
Really not liking the whole let's hit on a hot guy even though we are married, just to keep our husbands on their toes. I don't have a lot of respect for people who that. Glad B didn't agree. They really were being immature. They're adults not high schoolers.
Glad they talked and worked things out. He shouldn't have put his hands on her and I think it was important they had that conversation. And Oh my god, I love it when he calls her turkey leg!! Thanks for not dragging it out.
Holy shit. ADULTS helped some kid beat up EJ. What the hell is wrong with some people. That's just fucked up! Poor little Michael had to see that. He was so adorable. I'm glad EJ talked to his parents finally. And so sweet how he let Michael sleep in his bed :)
Michael has to be my favorite, he's just precious!
Date: 07 Feb 2016 2:05 AM Title: Choices
I can't really get my head around how this happened? How did Bella blow things so out of proportion? This came out of nowhere for me and it kind of confused me. But at this point I guess Bella is just like that. I feel like she blows every fight they have out of proportion... I can't comprehend how she could act like he beat her. I mean fuck. I guess I just can't understand her behavior because I would never have reacted like that. Her insecurities are getting a little annoying at this point.
I mean I am not saying that Edward wasn't wrong at all. Because sure he was. But he just wasn't alone in this.
For me, she was the one who startet it with the whole baby thing. I guess maybe I think like a man. Because I often find myself sympathysing more with the males than the females, and I always feel like there is such a double standard from the women.
And EJ should really stay out of it.
Loved the explanation Edward gave Michael. That was seriously adorable!!! :)
Date: 17 Jan 2016 4:56 PM Title: Alex Outtake
I want a future take on the Cullen's like did ej have more kids and did cc marry Bethany and what happened with Natalie and did Alex ever find love and did Edwards dad die. I also want a outtake on the day Bella and Alice meet Phils kids
Date: 27 Dec 2015 6:48 AM Title: Epilogue
Enjoyed this story! To be honest I'm disappointed with the pairings. I can't stand that EJ ended up with Cecilia and Al with Emily. I wished CC and Natalie stayed together, and Alex with AJ. So disappointed. Btw I don't mean to be rude.
Date: 15 Jul 2015 4:15 AM Title: Holidaze part two
Glad they finally broke up, she wasn't good for him. And I love that Natalie is so comfortable with her breasts, truth is when they are huge everyone notices - just roll with it and be comfortable in your own skin.
Date: 13 Jul 2015 12:18 PM Title: At a loss
I can't even imagine the hell that would break loose if a physician/family member extubated a patient/family member - yikes (but I'm also thinking that he will probably have his ass very well covered), and it makes for a good story point. I hope these two find some common ground, my heart is breaking for them here.
Date: 10 Jul 2015 11:43 AM Title: Asshole
I hate cliffhangers, so much so that I only read completed Fics. That and I've gotten absorbed into too many characters only to see the story abandoned for one reason or another, and I get we all have lives; but I obsess over it and find myslef wanting to complete the story in my own head. It's like that little unresolved thing hanging out there in fantasyland is driving me nuts. And yes, when I go into a room if the pictures on the wall are askew, I straighten then.
I love this story, I love the dynamic and the depth to which you have explred these charaters. I thought initally when I read that part II was going to revililve around the kids I thought - "I'm going to hate it, but oh well at least the first one was good". And now I am totally invested.
Date: 09 Jul 2015 4:05 AM Title: That's Amore
I like the little nod you gave to the original here in the interaction between EJ and Debbie. Nice. Alternating POV are fun when they dont rehash the same scenes and repeat the same dialogue, glad to see you using it to explore the characters.
Date: 19 Apr 2015 6:22 PM Title: The Best Years
I love love love this story and have not been able to stop reading it since I found it in FanFiction. I would love to read more. I can't seem to get enough of these two and their family and friends. Thank you so much for sharing this story and I only hope you did continue it in "Some Instructions" I am so excited;-) Thank you again for sharing this FREAKINGFANTASTICAMAZING Story ;-)Narcy
Date: 13 Apr 2015 3:03 AM Title: That's Amore
I absolutely loved this chapter, EJ is sooo much like his father and I love that this Debbie seems like Bella and doesn't put up with anything. She is playing him really good and I can't wait to read more on these two. Thank you for sharing this story I have fallen in love with it and can't seem to stop reading, but I had to review this chapter. YOU ROCK! Narcy ;-)
Date: 17 Mar 2015 4:09 AM Title: Shut up and Drive part two
I think he's a huge manwhore, and if he was my son, I'd be embarrassed and pissed off! He treats woman horribly, and is a spoiled little bitch. Edward and Bella are enablers, and should restrict him and kick his ass! I wishes he would get an STD....maybe it would teach him something!
Date: 07 Mar 2015 2:53 AM Title: Asshole
Often, it's not clashing personalities....it's that they're a lot alike. I was like that with my Mom as a teen, until I matured and realized that I like who she was, and who I was, too. Unfortunately, I lost her to leukemia when I was 27. Luckily, we were extremely close! I have wonderful memories.
I think that Edward and Bella have spoiled their children, and have been somewhat enabling. They don't seem to have to do much to earn their cars, money, etc. That's JMHO!
Date: 27 Nov 2014 11:01 AM Title: Choices
you know, i get what Edward did was wrong but so is Bella. not once, since this moment did he know that he hurt her. if he doesn't know then how can he correct his behavior. she says its done, but acts like he beat her. thats bullshit and she needs to grow up.
Date: 06 Aug 2014 3:40 PM Title: Alex Outtake
I love this story and 'The Story of Us' They're one of my first Twi fanfics and just made me fall in love with your writing. I always felt like this ended too soon or with a little more to go w/ this outtake and maybe just a bit more of my favorite E&B. Hope you're doing well and enjoying life.
Date: 31 Mar 2014 11:15 AM Title: Epilogue
I just re-read this story for about the 10th time. This story is my favorite of all fan fiction stories and trust me, I have a lot!
I love how your write, I love the characters and their personalities.
I want so bad to be in this crazy family!! I imagine myself right there with them in the house arguing or chasing kids. LOL
I have a 13yr and 16yr old so I feel Edward and Bella's pain a little with raising them. LOL
Whenever I need a good laugh all I have to do is read this story. I just love it!
Date: 09 Jan 2014 11:57 PM Title: BIG girl panties
Hey, I don't want to be rude, but the further i get the more dramatic this story is getting. What happened to the happy times? And seriously... hitting? That's not cool at all. Rough sex i get, but hitting... I'm not sure if I'm going to continue reading this story, although it was really good... I don't do well with angst, nothing personal. Sory
Date: 23 Sep 2013 5:06 AM Title: Epilogue
I just loved this whole story! Couldn't get enough of it and am sad it's come to an end. I fell in love with all the characters and this family. You did a wi fearful job bringing them all to life! I wish it could continue on ...I would read it all! Thank you!
Date: 15 Sep 2013 10:59 PM Title: Alex Outtake
Kind of blew through the epi and this out take . . . loved them both. This has been a fun ride and I truly enjoyed all your words. You really have a gift for this storytelling. Thank you so much for putting this out in the fandom for us all to enjoy. Christy Wicklund
Date: 15 Sep 2013 3:21 AM Title: Thor, Loki, and the gang
I liked that talk between AJ and EJ, well done. If I were AJ, I would stay the fuck away from Alex . . . those boys that are so nice to him right now, will squash him like a bug if he acts out and touches her. Perhaps, when they are seniors, AJ and Alex can find each other again . . . who knows. Everyone of the kids took the news well . . . although they have had a bt of practice . . . LOL. Why am I worried about the fact that Debbie tried so hard to get EJ into bed? And, not only that, she handed him the condom . . . did she poke a hole in it to trap him? She had the comment of 'a lot can change in three to six months'. Seems a little odd to me. Glad to hear the baby is okay and the tests have been coming back clear. Poor Al really has no clue about AJ. The parent pulling the ostrich route is never a good thing. Kids have sex . . . and it is early now. Just because he didn't have it until he was eighteen, doesn't mean his kid will wait that long.
Date: 14 Sep 2013 5:28 AM Title: Testing Testing
Alex chose the correct route with breaking up with AJ. He had changed so much, peer pressure will have that effect on teenagers. He was, in fact, pushing her to do stuff she was nowhere ready to do. I was her age, and yes, that is too young. She needs to keep thinking the way she is thinking and wait until she is ready. Interesting to find out that the phone sex was one sided, but AJ has no idea. I hope she stays stubborn and keeps separated . . . at least for a little while. Stay friendly though. Funny how fertile Myrtle is preggers again . . . not really surprised there. Especially with all the crazy amounts of sex they have with each other. The baseball field bathroom stuf was great humor. Your bantor is fantastic as always.
Date: 14 Sep 2013 4:07 AM Title: Spring is in the air part two
The market scene with Edward and CC had me giggling so hard when they got to the anal sex stuff . . . that was funny! Thanks for the frozen idea for headaches. The husband gets them and they start off small, but can get really bad sometimes. He came home tonight with one, I handed him the frozen peas . . . and it faded down to manageable . . . we both thank you for that tip! EJ's POV for this chapter was fun. He had both Roni and Cecilia approach him . . . I still think that EJ and Cecelia should be together, but I digress. At least Roni and EJ are back to friendly . . . sarcastic too! Fun! The adults nearly coming blows was hilarious . . . the kinda are all correct in saying that they are all Kinds of crazy in the Cullen family . . . but fun, that's for sure! They all explode on impact, but settle later and everything is fine. Love it!
Date: 13 Sep 2013 11:28 PM Title: Spring is in the air pt one
That little glimpse into the day Michael was born was really cool. Poor Charlie, cranky from chemo and nobody knowing why he was being so cranky. That must've sucked to find out later the reason why was from the chemo. Speaking of cranky, Edward was a bitch to just about everyone in this chapter. He was awful to his kids, awful to Bella and then really awful to Emily. What's his problem? Will we find out in a later chapter? Geez.
Date: 13 Sep 2013 6:58 PM Title: Happiest Place on Earth
CC was out of his darn mind at the beginning of the chapter. Typical teenager though. Not wanting to go without the girfriend is very normal. However, thinking Natalie was going to cheat . . . that's just odd . . . he has absolutely no reason to even think this. I am glad that EJ jumped in before CC could make a bafoon out of himself. The whole furry-sex at the end . . . weird. At least he knew it was weird as it was happening and he didn't want to, but still wanted to have sex . . . too funny.
Date: 13 Sep 2013 5:13 AM Title: Imagine that
I'm glad that Alex asked her mom about getting release, and not just relying on CC. I was a little shocked that she still hadn't done it. Funny. So very happy to hear that Carmen got pregnant. Couldn't Bella step in and take over? She trained with Carmen and did get the job down. Although, they may go crazy working and living together . . . that would translate to 24/7 and I think that may be too much time together. What do I know though. They have worked together in the past. I liked the couple they met at the reunion. Perhaps, they can move up to where the Cullen's live? If they hate it so much where they are and a position becomes available . . . why not. Wow, some people really don't grow up and stay mentally in high school . . . that Dalton was a piece of work. I liked that Edward knocked him out for calling Bella a whore, but liked it more that she got her own heel in his crotch for the same. Loved that Edward fulfilled a fantasy with her in the bio lab! Fantastic!
Date: 13 Sep 2013 3:39 AM Title: West Side Story part two
I think it was really cool that Emmett sat there and truly listened to his long time friend Al, telling his whole story. I loved that Emmett slowly went from wanting to kill Al to wanting to, and almost literally, killing Gabe. Gabe is a douche . . . just like you've mentioned here and there through this story. Open relationship . . . pfft. Dick. Rose was more upset that Emily didn't come to her when all this was happening, than the possibility of Al and Emily getting together. That was oddly interesting to me. The play seemed like it went really well. Bella cracked me up with her tears, shouts and clapping. Great mom that one. She made me smile. Edward shouldn't have smoked earlier, as he was worthless and kept falling asleep. Bad daddy! The hint during the play from Natalie about Roni getting hurt by John and then Michael seeing it . . . I'm glad EJ and 'Michael Cullen' came to the rescue. Michael was so funny in parts of that . . . love that kid!!! Then Gabe picking up Roni the same night Emily broke up with him . . . the nerve of him even showing up there in the first place . . . ugh! I'm glad that EJ was there to get her away from Gabe. What are you going to do with those two? EJxR?
Date: 13 Sep 2013 12:10 AM Title: West Side Story Part One
Why is it that I find their hangovers so funny? You make me laugh with those. I loved the fact that he didn't want sex and that she didn't either, yet later CC and Alex hear them in his room. Too funny . . . they are insatiable. It was kind of funny that EJ caught Alex grinding on AJ . . . she is just so curious . . . and hey, it felt good . . . why not grind. LOL. Then I adored the masturbation conversation between CC and Alex . . . that was perfect!!! She had so many questions and he kept telling her to speak to mom . . . so funny . . . crunchy uncofortable for both of them, but she had questions damn it!!! I think he did so well. He couldn't believe she ahdn't yet touched herself at fourteen . . . I was very surprised to learn that as well . . . seems a little old to have not explored. She will tonight . . . then she will have opened a whole new world . . . they may not get her out of her bedroom. LOL.
Date: 12 Sep 2013 7:24 PM Title: Romeo and Juliet
Poor Al never got the chance to talk to Rose and Emmett first, before Emily outed them. Eek!!! This will be a hard sell to the parentals. Edward may freak out too, not that that should have any bearing in AxE's relationship. Satan will attack Al though. LOL. I was quite happy that Emily had her first orgasm with a man. It was funny when she had to get back up off him half way down, to adjust to fit him . . . but hilarious when Al realized that not only was Gabe small, but a minute man at that. I laughed. I like how AJ is taking all of this . . . he's a cool kid.
Date: 12 Sep 2013 5:59 PM Title: love taps
Loved the EPOV and the BPOV . . . the ALPOV was strange. Edward being hung on by all the young ones just had to boost his ego. He was needing that lately. As he was feeling pretty down and out about getting older and not getting the attention he used to. Bella not wanting to go out at all and fine staying at home was entertaining. Then CC and EJ's reaction to what she as wearing was super funny. Loved the Gloria and Chris bit at the bar. Now, poor Emily has fallen in love with Al who is old enought to be her parent . . . however, she may just be in love with the fact that he listens and is attentive. If she has time away from Gabe, perhaps she will realize this. Who knows. He does care about her, but fresh out of a divorce . . . not such a great idea. I am glad he decided to speak to Emmett and Rose . . . that is really a good idea. They need to understand what Gabe is asking and how wrong that truly is . . . open marriage this young . . . ummm, no!!!
Date: 12 Sep 2013 4:40 AM Title: SOngs from the heart
You are probably sick of hearing this from me, but that chapter was great. I loved that Bella wasn't mad about the car, just the spending without discussing . . . I agree. Even though he's the one that brings the money home, he still should have discussed the amount . . . quarter of a mil . . . on a car . . . hehehe. Loved that CC finally drove. That he finally was done waiting for Natalie to come to him and made that giant romantic gesture in the middle of the cafeteria . . . he has amazing friends. Yay . . . they finally do it!!! Woo~Hoo!!! I loved that she stripped and said this is me . . . being his POV and him just thinking how beautiful she is . . . just made me all warm and fuzzy inside . . . he truly loves her and she him. This was just a great chapter. Who knows what's up with EJ . . . the only thing that I can possibly think is that he treating Roni so disrespectful and he NEVER treats girls that way . . . he's feeling really awful about it.
Date: 11 Sep 2013 8:26 PM Title: Shut up and Drive part two
I didn't see that coming . . . Cecelia using EJ . . . at least she realized she did not wantit that way and told him as much. She was honest with him. I don't think she will be as forgiving when she finds out he rushed over and fucked Roni to show Roni she can't get away with that crap. I was hoping Roni and EJ would remain friendly, but she ruined it by getting all teenage girl on his ass. LOL. I just hope that Cecelia will understand, or perhaps, it is best for him to stay celibate for a while. The guy needs a break. He's all over the map. hehehe
Date: 11 Sep 2013 6:27 PM Title: Shut up and Drive part one
Yay!!! CC got his license . . . whoot-whoot!!! I wonder if the gossip Bella heard was what Edward seemed to walk in on in the doctor's lounge . . . Al and what's-her-name? Anyway, I wonder if they've been caught doing something they shouldn't. I'm sure you will fill the readers in at some point. Seemd juicy though. Edward was fantastic in this chapter . . . you call it boring, but I really like when you get the characters like this. He took care of the younger kids . . . took care of Bella . . . got dinner cooked and fed everyone. The CC and Edward moment was pretty cool also. Then the bed time with all four of them was funny . . . and adorable!!!
Date: 11 Sep 2013 5:11 AM Title: The Hills Have Thighs
How much did I love the Michael POV? So much!!! That was fantastic. The kid and his bond with EJ was so precious. Balloons . . . HA!!! Loved how EJ actually took the time to explain that they were not, in fact, balloons. Michael saying, I like sex . . . then describing all the different people . . . great stuff! Glad that Bella and Roni got to talk. Mixed feelings on the Jake and Bella bit, but very glad that in doing so, she feels so much more relieved. How hot was Edward to the rescue? Too hot! Great stuff there at the end as well. I love their insatiable sex life . . . so wonderful.
Date: 11 Sep 2013 3:22 AM Title: Back in the day
That was fun with the way CC wanted to know how his dad was in high school. Then he cockblocked his parents to find out about how Jake and Bell met. Again, fun. The bit with EJ playing he was Michael's father backfiring, but not until the last second was brilliant. Well played. Michael really misses Roni . . . EJ and her don't need to get back together, but she needs to still be friends with the family, Bella misses her, Michael misses her . . . and she was good for EJ. You can have friends of the opposite sex, I always did. Yeah, they should be friends.
Date: 10 Sep 2013 8:12 PM Title: Stupid Cupid
Loved the office visit with Dr. Cullen and Nicole Stevens . . . how sexy was that? What a great idea for her to have had. Carmen is the best as well. Love her. So Bella finally saw Jake and she sort of freaked out a little as we expected. I am glad she was in the safety of her car and not in the market. Loved Edward singing to Bella and playing the piano. What a great gift. Mmmm, strawberries. So happy that CC went over to Natalie's house and that they talked it out. They are really sweet together. I am glad she told him the true reason she was not well. Poor girl. I guess for as many times as CC has caught their parents in sexual situations . . . EJ has not . . . his shock was so funny!!! I was really laughing quite hard on that.
Date: 10 Sep 2013 5:48 AM Title: Mr. LoverMan
I actually really liked the conversation between Roni and Jake . . . they are bonding and that is really quite cool. I like that she likes the idea of switching schools and moving into Jake's house. Loved when she went out and Shelly was on her knees and she thought, dad's getting his groove back . . . too funny! EJ was a man-whore and that was way overboard . . . super funny though. Him thinking CC told Natalie and Natalie told Roni . . . that too was funny. When it was EJ bragging and the two girls he was with we're probably bragging . . . too many people knew . . . she was bound to find out anyway . . . it just sad that it hurt her. I feel sorry for Roni. Grandpa Carlisle still cracks me up . . . he would have had a threesome . . . hehehehehe . . . now that was funny conversation. I hope that Bella keeps a friendship with Roni for the little time she may stay in Port Jarvis. Edward and Bella were funny there at the end . . . she went from not in the mood to straight up attacking him. Fun!