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Reviewer: mialuvtwilight Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Jan 2011 5:51 PM Title: Chapter 28 - A Real Family

Inloved the wedding and that she's pregnant and the sex was hot as usual can't wait for more!

Reviewer: tuckerjnp1 Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Jan 2011 1:10 AM Title: Chapter 28 - A Real Family

I found your story a few days ago and have been reading it to catch up with it before I leave a comment.  This is a very good story and i can't wait to see what happens next.

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Jan 2011 2:01 AM Title: Chapter 28 - A Real Family

woo hoo. Glad they are married now. Guessing Renee has lukemia or something and they expect her to donate marrow or a kidney or something.

Loved the exchaning of stuff with Carlie. Glad for the Peter/Char intro into the story.

Reviewer: Kiwibeme Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Jan 2011 5:45 PM Title: Chapter 28 - A Real Family

That was unexpectedly hot! I thought I would lose respect for Edward if he took it up the tail pipe, but strangly, it's quite the opposite! It takes a confident man to let his wife do that. I hope Bella has respect for the amount of trust it took for him to allow her to do that with no experience. That was total submission.

Reviewer: amwine Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Jan 2011 5:28 PM Title: Chapter 28 - A Real Family

I love it all!!!  The baby is perfect.  I think Carlie will be so excited about that.  The way Bella told Edward was sweet. 

I know they have not talked about the D/s stuff, but that takes time.  They have gone through enough...don't rush everything at once.  I love Bella's surprise for Edward.  I don't blame her to try it on him first to see how he likes it.  They do need to talk about all this, but maybe they will be in a better place now to do that. 

I can't wait to see what happens next.  Great job...thanks so much!!!

Reviewer: famaggiolo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 20 Jan 2011 11:27 AM Title: Chapter 28 - A Real Family

Good chapter, I am not sure about the switch because it just seem to confuse her then actually help her.

I understand shy Bella did not want to go see her mum, but I have a feeling she might regret it in the long run.  Even if it is just to find out what the problem is and nothing more.  At least than she can have peace that she is the bigger person at the end of the day.  Unlike her mother.

Apart from that excellent chapter.

Fiorella

Reviewer: cullengirl08 Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Jan 2011 12:30 AM Title: Chapter 28 - A Real Family

I think what Bella did was wrong.   She went all domme on Edward, who loved everything about the experience, and then she's is probably going to tell him that she doesn't want to do any of it anymore, after they've been doing it basically since the beginning of their relationship.   That's not really fair of her to just stop it altogether, especially if it is something that he really likes and enjoys.   If this is the case, it should have been discussed prior to them getting married.  

Reviewer: mrsrpatz Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Jan 2011 10:05 PM Title: Chapter 28 - A Real Family

It was kind of a shock that Bella took charge in the bedroom. How great is it that they are going to have a baby too!!!

Reviewer: Roon1 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 19 Jan 2011 10:01 PM Title: Chapter 28 - A Real Family

That was a lovely chapter and I really enjoyed the wedding.  I loved that she topped him. He seemed to love it. LOL Will we be seeing more of Charlotte and Peter?  I am disappointed she did not talk to him because they need to communicate.  When they do talk I hope she will be honest with him.  

Reviewer: Siobhan_Whitlock Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 19 Jan 2011 9:39 PM Title: Chapter 28 - A Real Family

Ok, are we EVER gonna get her to come out with it and talk about the D/s stuff so it isnt such a pink elephant in the bedroom anymore?!

Jeesh Bells!  *bops her in the back of the head*

And.. um... Holy cow shit batman!  Thats some steamy secrets there!

PREGNANT?!

I knew, it, I just knew it!  If it wasnt her screwing up her pills it was some time of medicine they gave her in the hospital.

Here comes Baby Makes Four!

love it!  :)

Reviewer: luckychris37 Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Jan 2011 9:24 PM Title: Chapter 28 - A Real Family

I was wondering about Edwards sexual past did include sex with Aro?  Shouldn't Bella have know all about before the wedding. I know that you said that there was just a little bdsm but i think thats in the need to know .

Reviewer: aabc Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Jan 2011 8:05 PM Title: Chapter 28 - A Real Family

I teared up just a little... but then I always cry at weddings. 

I hope she see Renee and gets that and the D/s stuff sorted out in her head... with a baby coming (wonderful), she needs to get them all in a good place

As always thanks for the update.

Reviewer: sonogal Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Jan 2011 7:12 PM Title: Chapter 28 - A Real Family

The wedding was beautiful. They are now an official family. Bella needs to understand that you can play and only be D/s in the bedroom. Many couples do this once they have children. The strict way does not really work in a normal family setting. They just need to talk. Edward enjoyed their playtime and did not freak out when she took over playtime. It really is all about enjoying each other fully.

Reviewer: Celebrityhound Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 19 Jan 2011 7:04 PM Title: Chapter 28 - A Real Family

great chapter, hurry back soon

Reviewer: momams Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Jan 2011 6:54 PM Title: Chapter 28 - A Real Family

That talk, as needed as it is, hasn't happened yet because the timing hasn't been the right one. Both of them have done lots of thinking about it, and they are still doing so. After the thinking comes the talking and it's closer every moment and chapter. 

They did it, they finally did it. They are married and a family, a family that has begun to grow right from the start. Life will be good but not always easy. Carlie is growing and she has a temper, just like her dad. There will be quite some fights between those two I guess.

Still no clue were the Honeymoon will be. Bella apparently went along with the surprise factor.

One thing sadly clouded the chapter, Phil's call. I understand Bella putting it aside for now. It's not out of spite to her mother, but because she is doing what she wants and needs. She is putting herself first, and that's really good. About Renee, we'll have to give it some time....

Reviewer: momams Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Jan 2011 6:22 PM Title: Chapter 27 - Moving...Up and On

Life can't be perfect, there has to be a bit of ups and downs. Communication is their huge down point, it can't be fixed that easily. The good thing is they are talking instead of reacting and acting without thinking.

The house switch was a good idea, and it seems to be going really well and quick. So.. we are going to the wedding and then .... alone time in their honeymoon. Where is going to be? Will it be a surprise?

Reviewer: lanigirl96003 Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Jan 2011 6:21 PM Title: Chapter 28 - A Real Family

well i hope her mom dosent die and she dosent even bat a lash! excited that shes preggo its goign to be another wild ride for these 2!

Reviewer: luvrofink Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 19 Jan 2011 6:18 PM Title: Chapter 28 - A Real Family

I do love to see Bella pegging Edward. I was hoping that she would enjoy being the Domme in the relationship. Great chapter and I look forward to them hashing out their D/s issues.

Reviewer: mrsrpatz Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Jan 2011 3:38 PM Title: Chapter 27 - Moving...Up and On

It is great that they are back on track to where they want to be. I think that it might be a good thing that Bella is planning this wedding because I think that she would wind up with something like Emmett and Rose if she didnn't

Reviewer: mrsrpatz Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Jan 2011 2:47 PM Title: Chapter 26 - The Next Phase

Well it really seems that Edward had a fun nigh!! That was hillarious about the song!!

Reviewer: mialuvtwilight Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Jan 2011 10:20 PM Title: Chapter 27 - Moving...Up and On

I'm glad they're doing better and I love how Bella is mom now and that they're getting married. They're getting there, I'm excited!

Reviewer: sonogal Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Jan 2011 6:14 PM Title: Chapter 27 - Moving...Up and On

I actually think Bella has a lot more issues than Edward. He likes to be in  control. I don't see that as a problem. Someone needs to makes sure things gets done. He has had to be both parents for so long, plus work fulltime. He accomplished this because he maintained control. He is not overpowering. He is not cruel or mean. Bella just needs to let her wishs be known and he will work with them. He can't really tell her no. He problem is she doesn't say anything until she gets angry at him because he did things his way. He didn't know she wanted it differently. She needs to change more thatn him.

Reviewer: Siobhan_Whitlock Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 17 Jan 2011 3:34 PM Title: Chapter 27 - Moving...Up and On

oh...no...

NY, here we come....

*holds on tight for the ride*

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Jan 2011 1:04 AM Title: Chapter 27 - Moving...Up and On

great chapter.

Reviewer: famaggiolo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 17 Jan 2011 12:28 AM Title: Chapter 27 - Moving...Up and On

You push these chapter out like crazy, Love it.

Thanks for the update.

Fiorella

Reviewer: amwine Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Jan 2011 12:15 AM Title: Chapter 27 - Moving...Up and On

Well, I am glad Bella didn't make a huge deal out of the money Edward has.  The switching houses seems crazy on one hand but makes sense on the other.  I am glad that is working out for everyone.  I can't wait for the wedding.  Great job...thanks so much!!!

Reviewer: leslieljs713 Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Jan 2011 11:18 PM Title: Chapter 27 - Moving...Up and On

When are they going to talk about the D/s issue? That needs to come out before they're married.

Reviewer: Roon1 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 16 Jan 2011 11:16 PM Title: Chapter 27 - Moving...Up and On

Liked this chapter a lot.  

Reviewer: aabc Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Jan 2011 10:48 PM Title: Chapter 27 - Moving...Up and On

Excellent chapter... can't wait for the wedding.  When are they going to have the difficult talk, onavoidinge they've beeing ?

Reviewer: peoplelikeus Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Jan 2011 9:50 PM Title: Chapter 27 - Moving...Up and On

brilliant

Reviewer: lanigirl96003 Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Jan 2011 9:43 PM Title: Chapter 27 - Moving...Up and On

well if thats all they have then they match everone else in the world! keep the chapters comming

Reviewer: Celebrityhound Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 16 Jan 2011 8:54 PM Title: Chapter 27 - Moving...Up and On

great

Reviewer: mialuvtwilight Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Jan 2011 3:03 AM Title: Chapter 26 - The Next Phase

I like how Bella had that big a ha moment in therapy and I'm glad Edward proposed although it didn't seem as happy or rommantic in bellas part. I love that em and rose got married and the arch car elevator scene was priceless!

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Jan 2011 9:26 PM Title: Chapter 26 - The Next Phase

oh youtube lol. poor guy

Reviewer: mentalmute Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Jan 2011 2:34 AM Title: Chapter 26 - The Next Phase

I can't wait for Bella to actually find out what is on his personal balance sheet!! She's gonna freak!!

Reviewer: sonogal Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Jan 2011 6:37 PM Title: Chapter 26 - The Next Phase

Bella should not be angry. He was having fun and she was there and could have stopped him. She knows how to distracted him. She can't play victim anymore.

Reviewer: amwine Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Jan 2011 5:05 PM Title: Chapter 26 - The Next Phase

I can't believe in all this time Bella still doesn't know how much money Edward has.  That is another lack of communication between the two.  I know Bella doesn't want to be taken care of, but if they are getting married they should be able to talk about it. 

Bella and her little show was pretty funny.  I would be embarrassed too.  I love the way Edward responded back though.  I am glad they are on the right road to getting back to a better couple though.  Great job...thanks so much!!!

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Jan 2011 5:15 AM Title: Chapter 26 - The Next Phase

Yikes, being compared to Renee for running away must have been really tough for Bella to hear, that she essentially did to Carlie what her mom did to her.  I am glad they are in therapy and realizing all the mistakes they made along the way.  I didn't realize she was so bothered by the D/s aspect of the relationship and how it makes her uncomfortable [from memory, I haven't gone back to reread]...also I understand Bella's issue with money, but I don't get why Edward is so reluctant to share info on it, so maybe we will find out why soon...I can't wait to see what happens next.

Wow, 16 months with no sex...I can't remember exactly how long they were apart, but they have been living together for awhile, so I am shocked they have kept everything so PG-13.

Edward is such a dumbass.  He finally gets his woman back and successfully proposes, is promised a wild night of sex with a freshly waxed Bella hoohah, yet he gets stupid drunk, passes out alone, and pisses Bella off, again.  When will that boy ever learn.

Reviewer: Kiwibeme Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 13 Jan 2011 4:17 AM Title: Chapter 26 - The Next Phase

Brilliant wrap up and way to make Bella own her actions! I think you successfully fed all the naysayer Bella haters a big heaping spoonful of crow! Especially since you did it convincingly! Loving the drunk Edward that morphed into Miley! I also loved that he owned it in the text! Funny stuff! A+

Reviewer: famaggiolo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 13 Jan 2011 3:07 AM Title: Chapter 26 - The Next Phase

I am glad that they had their date, not so happy about Edward but I am sure that seeing him sing Miley would have made up for it.

Good chapter it is nice to see them move on.  I really like how you made Bella step up and let Edward know that he was not the only one to blame and I like how she talked to the rest of the family.

You did a wonderful job with this chapter and I cant wait to see what is going to happen next and how Edward is going to get himself out of this one.

Thank you

Fiorella

Reviewer: lanigirl96003 Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Jan 2011 2:21 AM Title: Chapter 26 - The Next Phase

well i would be upset that he got drunk enough to not remember anything and then do what he did! thats funny ! cant wait to see what happnes next

Reviewer: momams Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Jan 2011 1:50 AM Title: Chapter 26 - The Next Phase

Okay, so he had reason enough to get drunk, that doesn't make it okay. Especially with what Bella had planned, which he knew about. He has to pay for it, it might sound mean but lets face it, who doesn't like to be pampered after "he" feels bad for something? ;)

Bella wasn't happy with Dr. Mills making her face herself, she was almost ready to walk out. Good thing she didn't, she wouldn't have able to realize things that she needed to face. This doesn't she won't make a mistake again, but it will be less likely.

As for Emmett and Rose, that's what worked for them. I can't see them with a "regular" wedding. Even if Esme wants to come and hit me ;)

Reviewer: deazucar Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Jan 2011 11:36 PM Title: Chapter 26 - The Next Phase

Very awesome that Bella finally realized she's just as guilty :D great chapter

Reviewer: aabc Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 12 Jan 2011 11:30 PM Title: Chapter 26 - The Next Phase

Could Edward be any more of an idiot!  Good grief!  You did that on purpose to spoil our urgent need for them to finally have make up sex.  Perhaps you want them to have the D/s talk first...?  I trust you to get us there.

Thanks for the update.

Reviewer: Roon1 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 12 Jan 2011 11:11 PM Title: Chapter 26 - The Next Phase

Lovely chapter.  I am so pleased they are back on track.  Now all she has to talk to him about is the D/s stuff.  If she doesn't like she should tell him.

Take care.

Reviewer: Siobhan_Whitlock Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 12 Jan 2011 10:56 PM Title: Chapter 26 - The Next Phase

LOL!!!!!  Party in the USA?!  WTG Eddikins!

So funny!!

Reviewer: Celebrityhound Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 12 Jan 2011 10:54 PM Title: Chapter 26 - The Next Phase

great

Reviewer: shewoolf Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 12 Jan 2011 9:45 PM Title: Chapter 26 - The Next Phase

Isn't that just like a man!  ROTFLMAO

Reviewer: peoplelikeus Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 12 Jan 2011 9:39 PM Title: Chapter 26 - The Next Phase

loved it

Reviewer: shelly8721 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Jan 2011 8:57 PM Title: Chapter 26 - The Next Phase

I think you did a great job with this chapter.  My mom always told me "it takes two".  Even though as a woman I *really* wanted to lay all the blame at Edward's feet, I knew Bella really needed to shoulder some of it too.  Thank you for a wonderful chapter and hopefully we'll get back to the hot lovin' real soon!!

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Jan 2011 7:17 AM Title: Chapter 25 - Beginning to Heal

Poor Bella, her life is quite a mess.  I am glad she is back in town and with the Cullens, especially for Carlie's sake.  I also thought it was sweet that Edward saved her last 3 voicemails, but I think they still have a long way to go.  It's good that are going to couples therapy and being honest about the BDSM stuff.

I really like what you did in this chapter to mark the passage of time.  Now I am excited to see what happens on date night

Reviewer: jonesiia Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Jan 2011 5:46 PM Title: Chapter 25 - Beginning to Heal

Wow I just read this from chapter 1 till 25 and wow i love it!!! I'm from North County St. Louis and i love reading about my hometown. You have done us proud! My family thinks I'm nuts from laughing so much then crying then laughing again lol. I love it!! If you need any help with places just ask. Keep up the great work and i'll keep reading! ~ Mary

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Jan 2011 9:37 AM Title: Chapter 25 - Beginning to Heal

Okay I thought this story would end several chapters ago. Twice they broke up. I don't think she trusts him not to break again. 

The REASON BELLA bolted and started the last breakup is Carlie is not HER daughter and SHe could not stop Jessica. Edward was in control of that. She loved them both and she felt if she stayed both of the people she loved would be hurt. PLUS Jessica said if Bella left she would stop. Bella had just went through the thing at school because of Jessica trying to take Carlie. She did not want any bad publicity about her sexual life as she teaches young children.  THE fact Edward did not try and change her mind (as I think she wanted him to) played into her leaving. NOTE she did not leave for a while. He had time to change that. Bellas was not a strong person in that she submitted to him in every way. I also think she will not go down the BDSM trail again as she got blamed for his mess.  Lets face this if he had talked to her and written her and let his family she would have come back easier. Carley had been able to write her and call her even though there was a distance it would have eased things. So I am like Bella if she had not had the accident he would not have come to her!. Damn that says volumes.  Guilt, pity and lonliness are not reasons to start over.  She gave up on living it was too hard and if she starved to death the pain would end.  Engaged again. I think that would be a bandaid without fixing what is wrong.  Bella is a house guest to placate his daughter without a mother. Yes they love each other but so do a lot of nannies and house keepers in charge of someone else's children.  Sorry does not fix this.

Okay thank you for keeping this going.

 

Reviewer: Siobhan_Whitlock Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 10 Jan 2011 12:11 AM Title: Chapter 25 - Beginning to Heal

Ahhh!!!  I want them back together NNNNNOOOOOWWWWWW!

*pouts with arms crossed and hip jutted out*

 

Reviewer: linelia Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09 Jan 2011 11:08 PM Title: Chapter 25 - Beginning to Heal

great chapter i love this story

Reviewer: krazi4TwiSaga Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09 Jan 2011 7:31 PM Title: Chapter 25 - Beginning to Heal

I have not complaints.  I think the counseling and them taking things slow is a great idea.  So, you have my vote and I trust you completely! Great chapter!

 

Krazi

xoxo

Reviewer: mrsrpatz Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Jan 2011 7:34 AM Title: Chapter 25 - Beginning to Heal

I have to commend both of them for trying to work out their problems from the past and making their relationship work and be different from where they started from in the past. I don't really know what to think about Edward wanting to ask Bella to marry him again. I don't think that Bella is ready for that yet and I think that Edward will be disapointed if he doesn't get the answer that he is looking for but I think that they both just need time to sort everything out and for Bella to be in a place that she feels that she has control over her life and I don't think that she is to that point yet. I might be wrong though.

Reviewer: mrsrpatz Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Jan 2011 6:53 AM Title: Chapter 24 - Heartache

Jessica better hope that she never crosses any of the Cullen's again because of the shitstorm that she has caused them. It is really sad that Bella got hurt but now she is home where she needs to be.

Reviewer: leslieljs713 Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Jan 2011 6:12 AM Title: Chapter 25 - Beginning to Heal

I really don't know what to think about this chapter. Definitely still some issues to deal with. And WTF is Edward thinking? Proposing, already? Definitely will have to wait and see what happens next chapter.

Reviewer: amwine Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Jan 2011 4:21 AM Title: Chapter 25 - Beginning to Heal

Well, it seems like they are on the right path.  I hope they are better then they were before.  Great job...thanks so much!!!

Reviewer: mialuvtwilight Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Jan 2011 4:06 AM Title: Chapter 25 - Beginning to Heal

I'm glad they're going to counselingand they're working on their problems. Inalso like that Bella isnher own person now and although it was tough they all grew from it! Can't wait for more!

Reviewer: momams Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Jan 2011 3:46 AM Title: Chapter 25 - Beginning to Heal

About their resolving of their issues, I think it's going rather well. It has to be tough to re-start something again with the same person while both having changed so much. Some things should be easy while others have to be more complicated. But all relationships are. The huge pink elephant in the room came out and it was far less difficult than either expected. That was because Edward needs to face alone a huge part of that situation. The doctor hasn't mentioned again, simply because as Edward said, one problem at a time. But he has to realize she will bring it up and he will have to face it, and it will probably be sooner rather than later.

Edward's needs and desires for intimacy are more than understandable, and I am pretty sure Bella is feeling something similar. However, feeling it isn't exactly the same as being ready for it. Edward is starting to be reckless because of it. Going back to the place they went out for the first time is a great idea, the rest of the plan, not so much. I think the first big step back is about to make its appearance.

Some might wonder about Bella's weight issues. As grave in health as they were, the root of it was clear, and not so complicated to address. As soon as she was surrounded by Carlie and Edward at meal times, eating would stop being a pain. It wouldn't change from one day to the next but it has been progressing.

So... we are about to go out on a second first date...

Reviewer: Celebrityhound Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09 Jan 2011 3:10 AM Title: Chapter 25 - Beginning to Heal

I thik you are doing well, they had issues to resolve

Reviewer: 2grtkids Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Jan 2011 1:21 AM Title: Chapter 25 - Beginning to Heal

I love this story and please do not take it down! Glad to see you did not gloss over their issues and had them in counseling along with Carlie. Thanks for a wonderful story and I look forward to the next update....Marcy

Reviewer: raemoferg1 Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Jan 2011 1:16 AM Title: Chapter 25 - Beginning to Heal

He's going to propose again?! Has he learned nothing?! I hope she lets him know that's not a great idea...

Reviewer: cullengirl08 Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Jan 2011 12:55 AM Title: Chapter 25 - Beginning to Heal

Bella's really starting to bother me.   She blames Edward for everything that happened when they were both at fault.   They decided together to make a clean break and go their separate ways to protect Carlie.   She's the one who moved out and back to Washington without even letting him know about it.    How is any of this his fault?    And she blames him for what they used to do in the bedroom?  Please.   She never complained about it before and in some instances even provoked it.      Granted, Edward is not so innocent in all this either, but she's just as much to blame as he is, so I just wish she'd back off about it already. 

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jan 2011 11:43 PM Title: Chapter 25 - Beginning to Heal

counselling is a good idea for them all. Glad you didnt drop the story too. I really like it.

Reviewer: famaggiolo Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 08 Jan 2011 11:36 PM Title: Chapter 25 - Beginning to Heal

I am glad that they are moving forward, but I have one question for you that I would like answered if you have the time.  I understand why everyone is pissed off at them for the way it ended, but why did they blame Edward solely?  If Bella had not suggested it, it would not have happened, I understand Edwards should have grown a pair and said no, but he was doing what Bella had asked.  Now she seems to place it on his head as well.  I am just a little confused is all.  She is to blame as much as him if not more for suggesting they break up, if she had not planted the seed it would never have happened and they would probably be married by now.  

I just cant seem to get around this fact.  I love how you have made her stronger and I am glad that she is doing what she wants, but if she cant be honest with him about not wanting the BDSM life style she should be honest and tell him.  From what I can gather they are still yet to talk about it.  I can just imagine how hard it is for Edward to walk away from something that is ingrained in someone.  It is like telling an OCD person not to clean up a mess, it is the same with BDSM.  

I am worried that she is not going to be able to give him what he wants and what he needs in his life and then they are back at square one.  They have grown so much in this chapter but there are some thing that they have not even touched on yet and that is worrying, before they start a sexual relationship again.  I know this is only fiction and not everything has to be perfect just like life is not perfect.  But I really would like them to have that talk before they even go any where with their sexual relationship. 

I have to say that I am glad that they are moving forward and I know that my review have not been nice or stellar the last two chapters but you really threw me for a loop and all of this crap could have been avoided if they did not have their heads up their asses.  But I would really like to see someone place the blame on Bella for once.  She is the integrator of this colossal fuck up as I said.  It would be nice for someone to be on Edwards side, everyone always placed the blame on him.

Esme started but then she also included Edward, I would just like someone to call it as it is seen, why put someone in a position for fight for you when you were the person trying to get the easy out and then in the end still wish to be their.  We all know she did not want to go anywhere so why not stay and fight to begin with?  Then she and everyone places the blame on Edward.  Yes he fuck up I get it, I really do... but for once I would just like the blame to be placed where it belongs... On BELLA!

Thank you for a wonderful chapter and some insight into their minds. 

Fiorella

Reviewer: aabc Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jan 2011 11:09 PM Title: Chapter 25 - Beginning to Heal

Well... thanks for undating.  Perhaps they should switch roles for a bit, then they'd each understand the others perspective. 

I was looking forward to them getting 'together' more in this chapter but what you have done is much more realistic.  I look forward to seeing where things go from here.

Reviewer: cofey Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 08 Jan 2011 10:57 PM Title: Chapter 25 - Beginning to Heal

surprised they'd go 2 a counsellor who takes notes ... aside from becoming legal docs which have been known to end up in court ... once in writing can become an embarrassment if end up in the wrong hands

Reviewer: deazucar Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jan 2011 10:54 PM Title: Chapter 25 - Beginning to Heal

I'm glad that they're mending things, but I don't like the way it's being done.  For one, it seems that Bella has control issues herself. She's making do Edward all of the mending, even though she also made mistakes in the end. When Edward first suggested that he be the one in control in the bedroom, he also offered her an out and said that he could live with not being in control and stuff but SHE decided not to take it. Now, she's all 'ewww he liked to control me. He has issues.' blah blah blah. I'm sorry, but right now Bella is not my favorite character at the moment. Another good example is the eating disorder. She wanted to control her pain, so she didn't eat. I'm sorry, but she has issues herself. She's slefish, and immature. Like Esme said, SHE decided to leave. But is Bella owning up to that mistake? Nope. Anyway, great chapter :D

Reviewer: lanigirl96003 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jan 2011 10:44 PM Title: Chapter 25 - Beginning to Heal

i think that they are not ready to get engaged again. they still need to work thru everything. i just hope he dosent make a mistaake .... cant wait to see what happens in the next chapter 

Reviewer: Roon1 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 08 Jan 2011 10:42 PM Title: Chapter 25 - Beginning to Heal

I thought you dealt with this very well and covered the issues that bothered me and others.  I think its right she did not fall back into bed with him straight away.  I wonder if she will say yes?  Is it not too soon?

Anyway I loved it and am so glad you did not let the haters get you to pull your story. Its very enjoyable.

Take Care.

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviewer: leAnn0388 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jan 2011 10:29 PM Title: Chapter 25 - Beginning to Heal

Great chapter. 

Reviewer: peoplelikeus Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 08 Jan 2011 10:15 PM Title: Chapter 25 - Beginning to Heal

loved it!!

Reviewer: ksgeo Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jan 2011 9:03 PM Title: Chapter 25 - Beginning to Heal

I'm not sure what to think. I'm glad they're taking things slow, and that they are all going to counseling. Edward needs to go solo, too, because he's still a little delusional if he is seriously planning to propose again when they don't seem to have worked out their bedroom issues. It seems like Bella is backing away from the D/s element of their relationship. That's absolutely within her rights, but it's a little confusing because she seemed to enjoy their little kinkiness. Have they talked about this? (I still want to know what he did with the pictures from before!)

Edward is still kind of controlling - when they made dinner plans he basically said "Be ready at 7" like it was a command. He may have a more dominant personality in general, but Bella - and E acknowledges this too - is no longer willing to just submit to everything. They still have a ways to go, and I look forward to it!  :)

I'm glad you addressed the issue of everyone abandoning Bella after she left. Part of me thinks that works both ways; Bella could have attempted to stay in communication with Esme, and it sounded like Rose and Alice were the ones to call Bella and not the other way around.BTW, I'm interested to find out how things are going with Emmett and Rose.

One last observation: E/B and the family *really* need to be pro-active and plan for Jessica showing up again.  She sounds way too selfish and stupid to walk away for good, even with a million. I doubt she would take Edward's "threat" seriously; in fact she would probably try and use it against him. Instead of being blindsided they need to know exactly how they plan to handle her once and for all.

Reviewer: mjne Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jan 2011 8:35 PM Title: Chapter 25 - Beginning to Heal

Thank you for not having her forgive him and fall right back into bed with him. I love that she is stronger and voicing her needs. :) jpl

Reviewer: mialuvtwilight Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jan 2011 4:23 AM Title: Chapter 24 - Heartache

I'm so glad she's back! I can feel how hard the whole situation is going to be for Edward, Bella and Carlie! I know they'll get through it but they just have so many issues now that seems so overwhelming! I can't wait for more! I'm very excited for all the conversations and changes and Carlie seeing Bella again!Noh and Bella said that she's left Carlie twice now, I forget, what was the first time?

Reviewer: mialuvtwilight Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jan 2011 3:55 AM Title: Chapter 23 - Pain

WTF???? i am so confused that was a whirlwind!!

Reviewer: kittylove Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 07 Jan 2011 2:43 AM Title: Chapter 24 - Heartache

Okay...well...you redeemed yourself somewhat.  Still not happy you had to rip them apart like you did.  Now they are both in need of a lot of repair.  Hope you stay more consistent in the future because I really loved this story.

Thank you

Reviewer: peoplelikeus Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 06 Jan 2011 8:05 PM Title: Chapter 24 - Heartache

wow - I'm still here Darling and I have faith in you - This was a powerful and painful chapter.  You did a great job with this one.

 

 

Reviewer: famaggiolo Signed starstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 06 Jan 2011 2:10 AM Title: Chapter 24 - Heartache

I am going to hit you with this and it is probably not going to be nice.

I understand that Bella went through a shit load but so did Edward and if his family (espically Emmett) does not stop giving him shit, then I have to say that he will be even more fuck up than Bella.  He will be the one that is not eating and drinking himself into a stupor soon.

She decided to leave, yes Edward did nothing to stop her but SHE MADE HER MIND UP TO GO not the other way around.  When someone wants to leave they leave, she chose to go, so the blame can not fall on Edwards shoulders alone, like everyone seems to think.  Some of the blame has to fall on Bella as well, she seems to be getting off scott-free and this is not fair on Edward.  Come on there were two people in this relationship not just Edward, well actually there was three, but Carlie had was a bystander.

I like your idea of them getting couciling, I feel they all need it.  As a family, as a couple and as individuals.  As for when Bella was in hospital, I feel you got it close to what would have happened.  My sister had a really bad motorcycle accident and you had it close to spot on.  The only thing different with my sister she was in a drug induced coma for nearly 2 months but that was becuase they had her stomach open that long and she could not move around at all in bed.

I was really angry last week when I read that chapter and I have to say you have sort of redeemed yourself apart from everyone blaming Edward.  I understand that stories should have their ups and downs and I cant beleive that Edward ended up paying out Jessica... who is to say she wont do it again, really if all she is after money what is stopping her coming back for more, him telling her that he will ruin her life means nothing when she could pull the same card again.  It happens is all I am saying.

Thank you for the update, you will not loose me as a reader as I like to see where you are going to take this, but I will have my opinion when I dont like something.  You are doing a good job at your story even if I dont like what is being written sometimes, it is your story and you can write it anyway you want.   So thank you for sticking to your guns.

Fiorella

Reviewer: krazi4TwiSaga Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 06 Jan 2011 1:52 AM Title: Chapter 24 - Heartache

I'm just glad there on the road to recovery.  I was really worried in the beginning.  I can't wait until Carlie sees Bella that will be an interesting reunion!  Great chapter!

 

Krazi

xoxo

Reviewer: cullengirl08 Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Jan 2011 1:46 AM Title: Chapter 24 - Heartache

Edward has a lot of work to do to get he and Bella back on track again.   I really don't think he realized, or thought about what she was going through or how any of this would affect her.   Well, he sure knows now, and he's got his work cut out for him.

Reviewer: missielynn Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Jan 2011 1:44 AM Title: Chapter 24 - Heartache

the anorexia would make her feel like she had some kind of control in her life where everything else and everyone else had failed her. anorexia/bulimea can go hand in hand you can have both, and just knowing that you have the control over your sustinance is very powerful and makes you feel good knowing that you & only have that power

Reviewer: edward4life Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 06 Jan 2011 12:49 AM Title: Chapter 24 - Heartache

great update. i really hope bella doesnt forgive him easily. i hope that she first finds herself before she thinks about getting in a relationship with edward.

Reviewer: aabc Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Jan 2011 11:05 PM Title: Chapter 24 - Heartache

Of course you haven't lost me, at least!  This is one of my favorite stories... I can't wait when you update.... (I was so anxious today, I read this at work today!).

I can't wait to see how the rest of Edward's cluster f$%& plays out... so far you haven't let me down.  Although I must admit I hated the break up... I cried... hard (I'm a sap, I cry easily). 

Thank you for a wonderful story and thank you for the update!

Reviewer: Kiwibeme Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Jan 2011 10:41 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Moving Day

Alright, I am just going to say this. I have been following this story for awhile and was waiting to comment to see where the author took us. After these last two chapters, I went back and read some of the reviews and was SHOCKED at how ruthless and mean people can actually be. I am an author of many FF stories myself and it never ceases to amazes me that people think a good story can be written without some angst and drama. Seriously people, would the Twilight books have caught on the way they did, if Bella had skipped happily into the sunset with her vampire? NO! We came back for more, because we wanted what was next! And see who was going to try and tear them apart this time!

In my opinion, this is a great story. It's not loaded with trivial B.S. and dead end story lines that go no where. Shut up, ride out the angst and celebrate when they come out happy, healthy and stronger on the other side! For the person who suggested that E&B act like children...who doesn't? I've been married 17 years and my husband and I still compete with our 17 and 15  year old children to see who can act more childish! It happens. Love. Feelings. Emotions. They all combine and become combustible and bring out the worst in us in tense situations.

And for the Nit Picker who ran through all the legal logistics of the story line...IT'S A FAN FICTION STORY! Nothing is going into publication. The beauty of these stories, is that you can hold creative license over everything. It's your world and anything can happen any damn way you want it! If you want accuracy and a book that's gone through the whole editing and licensing process...GO TO BARNS AND NOBLE!!!

For now I give my props to the Author. You've given us a story that makes us empathize with the characters...that's not easy to do! Congrats and keep up the good work! :)

Reviewer: lanigirl96003 Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Jan 2011 10:10 PM Title: Chapter 24 - Heartache

well i hope for bellas sake that she starts to see some one about what happened! cant wait to see what happens next and i think that you should do an out take of some of the family durring these months that we will not speak of any more ! keep the chapters comming 

Reviewer: Celebrityhound Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 05 Jan 2011 8:54 PM Title: Chapter 24 - Heartache

hurry.....

Reviewer: leAnn0388 Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Jan 2011 8:48 PM Title: Chapter 24 - Heartache

I'm not laughing at anything from this chapter.  However, I love how Emmett revealed his new knowledge of Bella's health to Edward at the end.  It was so Emmett and despite the serious topic, it still made me chuckle.  Great chapter!

Reviewer: Celebrityhound Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 05 Jan 2011 8:27 PM Title: Chapter 23 - Pain

I can't believe Edward let her go

Reviewer: Sabs Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Jan 2011 7:51 PM Title: Chapter 24 - Heartache

Hi,

 

no, you haven't lost me, although I waspissed with the Jessica-stunt. But I was always sure, you would let them find their way back together! I would have been pissed if they had gotten back together just like this, because there is just too much to talk abut, But an eating disorder? Maybe it has got to do with her being submissive and she lost that, too? Anyhow, I will stay tuned for the next chapter, to find out how you will let our favorite couple find their way back.

Thanks for sharing.

Sabs

Reviewer: Celebrityhound Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 05 Jan 2011 7:46 PM Title: Chapter 21 - Unexpected Surprises

I think its sweet

Reviewer: L-Anne Cullen Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 05 Jan 2011 7:40 PM Title: Chapter 24 - Heartache

you forgiven!!! lol great Chapter!

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Jan 2011 7:31 PM Title: Chapter 24 - Heartache

poor bella and carlie.  jake is an ass. counseling sounds good

Reviewer: leslieljs713 Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Jan 2011 7:28 PM Title: Chapter 24 - Heartache

I think the Jessica issue was crap. How they handled it was double crap. They act like children. And if Edward had said he was gonna paddle my ass I would have junk punched him. That's been part of the problem all along.  I really don't see how they'll get out of this cluster. Neither one of them belongs in a relationship.

Reviewer: halloweenlover Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 05 Jan 2011 6:43 PM Title: Chapter 24 - Heartache

I could never leave this story it owns me heart and soul.I understand that they have a lot to get through in order to ever get back together but I belive that if you love someone as much as these two do that they can work it out.I am so happy Edward pulled his head out of his as and went after her sometimes in life you need a big push and the accident was what he needed to get him self together and fight for them and rebuild them together.I love this story like none other before .I thank you from the bottom of my heart  .

Reviewer: read522 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 05 Jan 2011 6:35 PM Title: Chapter 24 - Heartache

I like how she is not so forgiving. They have a lot to work out and it should take the right amount of time. Great Chapter.

Reviewer: shelly8721 Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Jan 2011 6:31 PM Title: Chapter 24 - Heartache

Great chapter--hard but good.  I know the last chapter was difficult, but it wasn't all Edwards fault.  Bella could've fought a little harder too, not just ran away. 

That being said, I'm really glad that you're not having her just roll over and forgive him right away.

I love this story and even though it's been a little angsty, I just can't wait for more!  Thank you!!

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