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Reviewer: Canadaci Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 14 Dec 2010 11:12 AM Title: abandon and sacrifice

WOW, this is an amazing story.  The first of its kind.  Hurry with next chapter.

Reviewer: Rhiannon5 Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Dec 2010 7:31 AM Title: abandon and sacrifice

I can not believe Alice left her child.   I understand Bella's reluctance to tell.  But in the end Alice would not be safe, is not safe either way. 

Thank you.

Reviewer: gmteenz Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Dec 2010 5:38 AM Title: abandon and sacrifice

Really like this story, yes I know it's violent but it's good to read something that is not all fluffy.

Reviewer: thackebeil1 Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Dec 2010 4:43 AM Title: abandon and sacrifice

Um how many kids does she have now and is she pregnant again? That was so messed up of Alice

Reviewer: light023 Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Dec 2010 4:26 AM Title: abandon and sacrifice

when is the next chapter?

Reviewer: 22amazing Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Dec 2010 4:18 AM Title: abandon and sacrifice

oh edward, he is so mean............but still hott.  lol            i can't help but still love him even though he is horrible to bella.  great chapter

Reviewer: Thaigher Lillie Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 14 Dec 2010 3:52 AM Title: abandon and sacrifice

i think i want another chapter that's what i think! lmao you totally got a squeal and a *YES!* and a few fist pumpz from me this update lmao! loved it

Reviewer: lanigirl96003 Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Dec 2010 3:45 AM Title: abandon and sacrifice

well i would eventually think that he would give up! but i dont think he wont! keep the chapters and updates comming

Reviewer: nubian cutie Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Dec 2010 3:39 AM Title: abandon and sacrifice

Bella needs to find some of his old enemies that are just as powerful as Edward and use them for protection.  You know the old saying, "the enemy of my enemy is my friend."

 

Reviewer: lluvy21 Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Dec 2010 3:28 AM Title: abandon and sacrifice

Ok so I first started reading this story and liking it but then it was like she was just getting raped and raped and raped and edward just wasn't getting and and years went by, shouldn't they be kinda old now? And she abandon her kids absolutely no  relationship w/ them and edward is abusive to them and there ALL Fudged up now. I dont understand why your writing this. I mean it's like it's not even a beginning, middle,end story but just something to goddamn depressing.



Author's Response:

trust me there is a piont to this and if u remember the chapter where the kids were all fudged up it was a look into the future and right there, edward is 36, they had there kids young remember in the last chapter bella is only gone from the house for 3 years, this edward is one obsessive mofo who cant get enough of the chase he gets from bella. now i definantly do have this whole story figured out and in the end you'll figure out y this story is like it is.

thnx 4 the review

Reviewer: mayi Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Dec 2010 3:09 AM Title: abandon and sacrifice

Poor Bella I understand her frustration. she leaves her kids behind for a free life but in the end she left her kids and she still doesn't have a free life. Now I have a question why does Edward keep chasing her and going through all that, if he wants her that bad why doesn't he keep her home?

Reviewer: canadiantwilight Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Dec 2010 2:44 AM Title: abandon and sacrifice

edward calms down a little bit with bella and the kids kick his ass for doing that to their mom :)

Reviewer: JeanneC Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Dec 2010 2:17 AM Title: abandon and sacrifice

Is Edward ever going to turn out to be a decent guy? How many kids have they had now in total?



Author's Response:

they have had ten kids yeah its sad right. and those kids are all young.

Reviewer: nilo24 Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Nov 2010 7:11 PM Title: head start

long time no up date, please up date story if you put time between your chapters we will forget , i really want to know what you have i your mind about this story , i dont know where this story will go dear. thanx , edward back , i dont know but i like dark edward

Reviewer: nilo24 Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Nov 2010 7:04 PM Title: a life

tough chapter, really all the chapter i read are all about helpless bella , i dont know where you want to go with this story ,,but good luck , good chapter

Reviewer: searching4myedward Signed [Report This]
Date: 24 Nov 2010 8:31 PM Title: head start

come on now! bella needs a break. i know then there would be no story.  I just hope bella gets her revenge in the  end. update soon

Reviewer: Littleangel531 Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Nov 2010 2:10 AM Title: head start

WOW I must say very twisted but I loved it!! Couldn't stop reading this although I do feel bad for poor Bella! Seems she never gets a break !

Reviewer: seeker Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 22 Nov 2010 4:14 PM Title: head start

thanks pretty good story

Reviewer: krazi4TwiSaga Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 22 Nov 2010 3:45 PM Title: head start

haha...this Edward is crazy, but I can´t find it in me to hate him... and he must love Bella in his sick and twisted way, because he didn´t take on anymore wives... I´ve never seen him cheat on her..and the poor thing is crazy about him too.. I understand she doesn´t want to be, but let´s face it we can´t say no to Mobward,, he owns us!! great chapter!!

 

krazi

xoxo



Author's Response:

yes we can not resist mobward

Reviewer: janna Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Nov 2010 3:01 PM Title: head start

a fist really, that's....... wow a fist?



Author's Response:

lol i know speechles right

Reviewer: kitkatr Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Nov 2010 1:57 PM Title: head start

I guess Bella can handle a fist; she's had so many kids....but damn! A fist? Edward sure is dark, possessive, & creepy, but I can't get enough of him! Loving the story!

Reviewer: Rhiannon5 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 22 Nov 2010 7:51 AM Title: head start

So pleased you are back - i am suprised she didn't run after shooting Jasper. 

Reviewer: kaybrans Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Nov 2010 7:37 AM Title: head start

Run Bella RUN!!!!

Reviewer: edward4life Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Nov 2010 7:18 AM Title: head start

wow. great update plz update soon

Reviewer: sassycook Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Nov 2010 6:55 AM Title: head start

wow you think she has been thru so much shit. man yeah there mafia and they haven't been treated nicely but man don't they think that if they treated there women right they wouldn't be chasing them so much. i mean bella has what 10 kids with edward. i know it had to be hard on her leaving her kids. man edward you are aprick. i do want bella to take a knife to your throat. especially with the way you treat your kids differently. no supervision those kids are so lost who knows if there is hope for them since bella has left. wow this is one hell of a story



Author's Response:

lmfao ur tlkin like im edward.

lol best review ever

Reviewer: Thaigher Lillie Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 22 Nov 2010 6:51 AM Title: head start

more more more mroe more

Reviewer: sassycook Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Nov 2010 6:03 AM Title: lost, hurt, pain, and acceptance

the only thing that gets me thru reading this is that i am hoping the girls come together and kill them. i am not liking the boys being the ones doing the beating and raping. this is a hard one

Reviewer: gmteenz Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Nov 2010 5:10 AM Title: head start

love this story, love the dark Edward.

Reviewer: lanigirl96003 Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Nov 2010 4:59 AM Title: head start

well i hope they both can run ! keep the chapters comming

Reviewer: charleexx Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Nov 2010 11:35 AM Title: a life

tooo short. need more lol
love your story update soonnn!!

charl.x

Reviewer: shadow4092 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 17 Nov 2010 6:40 PM Title: a life

Will you write a chapter from Edward's p.o.v.? Glad your back, please continue writing.

Reviewer: Biancarose123 Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Nov 2010 6:36 PM Title: a life

love it hope for more

Reviewer: kitkatr Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Nov 2010 3:42 PM Title: a life

Bella is a baby machine! I can't believe Ewdard would tear a mother from her children! Nice to see Alice in the story - but not Jasper. I hope she killed him!

Reviewer: kitkatr Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Nov 2010 3:37 PM Title: lost

even the kids are screwed up!

Reviewer: kitkatr Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Nov 2010 3:18 PM Title: story teller

I hope Bella realizes she cannot run from edward...poor thing. He at least loves her in his twisted way!

Reviewer: kaybrans Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Nov 2010 3:18 PM Title: a life

PlEASE SAY SHE KILLED HIM!!  :)

Reviewer: krazi4TwiSaga Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 17 Nov 2010 2:48 PM Title: preface

that was quite a start... Edward is a meanie... but still sexy... can´t wait to see what Bella does..

krazi

xoxo

Reviewer: thackebeil1 Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Nov 2010 2:42 PM Title: a life

I think you picked the perfect baby, she is beautiful. Also I hope she shot him but not killing him. Edward Would surly kill her then

Reviewer: kitkatr Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Nov 2010 2:29 PM Title: so close but so far away

I hope Bella can keep running cuz Edward is never gonna give up!

Reviewer: kitkatr Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Nov 2010 2:21 PM Title: lost, hurt, pain, and acceptance

What is it with Edward wanting more kids? A power thing? Aren't 3 kids enough for such a young couple?

Reviewer: kitkatr Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Nov 2010 2:15 PM Title: re live and be damned

All the Cullen boys are dark...and fertile! Still loving the story!

Reviewer: kitkatr Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Nov 2010 2:02 PM Title: preface

This is a dark Edward ... I take him anyway I can get him! Love the story!

Reviewer: mayi Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Nov 2010 12:48 PM Title: a life

I am so glad you updated!!!!! i love this story and i thought it was over. I can't wait to see the next chapter and see what happends.

Reviewer: gmteenz Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Nov 2010 10:46 AM Title: a life

Well, I hope Bella shoots Jasper. Love the story.

Reviewer: cateyes38372 Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Nov 2010 7:21 AM Title: a life

oh my god, i can't wait for more that was so good

 

Reviewer: Thaigher Lillie Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 17 Nov 2010 7:21 AM Title: a life

i think she scares his ass. or something. or shoots him in the knee i hope. lmao

anything that could keep edward away! update again! update again please!

Reviewer: lanigirl96003 Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Nov 2010 6:04 AM Title: a life

well i hope she runs again! and her and alice stay together ! keep the chatpers comming

Reviewer: bammers Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 17 Nov 2010 6:02 AM Title: a life

Loved it I really hope she gets her kids back update when you can thanks....

Reviewer: xoxokristen Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 Sep 2010 10:56 PM Title: lost

Interesting story, I can't wait to find out what happened to Bella. Just one thing though- you really need to work on your grammar and spelling.

Reviewer: unicorngirl Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Sep 2010 1:27 AM Title: lost

wow this is some story update soon please

Reviewer: Thinkingofyou Signed [Report This]
Date: 24 Sep 2010 4:28 AM Title: lost

Geez, Edward is just a round about asshole. Your story is actually making me hate him. (in this story though)

Reviewer: Irish_charm Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Sep 2010 1:14 AM Title: lost

The kids are a mess, I'm suprised one of them didn't pop their dad yet. They should gang up and take them all out at once. It would make daddy dearest proud.

Reviewer: FutureMrsBCullen Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Sep 2010 6:48 PM Title: lost

OMG soo ok just soo i have this clear Edward doesnt like Adrina Amaya Annabelle or Alana ....Is it because they all have brown eyes like bella because ive noticed the rest have blue i think



Author's Response:

he oves Andrina just not the other three because they remind him so much of bella

Reviewer: mayi Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Sep 2010 12:17 PM Title: lost

WOW!!!! This story is soooo good and at the same time is sad. I can't believe this Edward he sucks. I am glad that some of the brother get along and that Bella was able to influence some of the kids!!!!

Reviewer: shadow4092 Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 20 Sep 2010 11:14 AM Title: lost

When will the next chapter be up?

Reviewer: Rhiannon5 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 20 Sep 2010 9:36 AM Title: lost

Love your story - yes it's twisted.  Go Daniel.  Why did he leave three of his siblings?  Are they closest to Edward.

Reviewer: ldydaydream Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Sep 2010 7:00 AM Title: lost

i am so confused right now. will you be explaining more with the other kids who weren't introduced? i had to read it a few times b/c i thought you made a mistake with the names. i love the story, but you stumped me a few times with this chapter. When you were in Alana's POV, talking about the hospital bed, i had no clue what the hell was going on. I get it now though (she was looking at a picture of him bleeding from the head while in a hospital bed) but it was written so confusing.

Other then that, i love the story so keep up with the chapters!!

:)

 

Reviewer: edward4life Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Sep 2010 6:59 AM Title: lost

wow. great update. im a bit suprised that edward would let bella leave so easily. especially when he idd so many things just to get her. I wonder what would happen if edward gets bella back in his life

Reviewer: bammers Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 20 Sep 2010 6:17 AM Title: lost

Wow he has all his kids trying to kill each other There is an animal out there that they let the babies kill each other till there is only one baby left thats the strog one So weird update when you can thanks.....

Reviewer: lanigirl96003 Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Sep 2010 5:12 AM Title: lost

well i like that you speed it up ! cant wait till they find her! 

Reviewer: Thaigher Lillie Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 20 Sep 2010 4:53 AM Title: lost

this was a twist. i wonder why edward started to act like that with her. why did he wait til she had 14,0000 children to let her go? he is such a dick. i casn't wait for more. did edward re-marry? i wonder if bella is happy, or if Edward still has control over her. Why didnt he like the girls. was it because they looked like her? does he have other kids? why wasn't he in the room? i have so many damn questions lmao. are you going to do a ed point of view? oh...by the way........love the chapter sweets lmao



Author's Response:

no edward did not re-marry but you will find out who is taking care of his needs, yes he was treating them wrong because they looked like her... guilt you know. and he wasn't in the room because he left. thnx for reviewing i was hoping someone would like it. thnx for the review.

Reviewer: Tamara Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 25 Aug 2010 3:29 PM Title: story teller

Awesome chapter!  I'm going to guess another girl...

Thank you and looking forward to the next update!!

Reviewer: xoxo42 Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Aug 2010 4:26 AM Title: story teller

a baby boy!

Reviewer: Twoonia Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 24 Aug 2010 8:33 PM Title: re live and be damned

this story is very dark, but interesting....so far i like it,  although i must say, if i were bella i'd calm down and stop trying to run, it obviously dose her no good

i can't wait to see where this goes....

Reviewer: Natsar Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 24 Aug 2010 7:58 PM Title: lost, hurt, pain, and acceptance

Seriously, poor Bella needs to chill or she won't live to see her kids grow up. I think Edward would be a lot less mean if she stopped fighting him so much. I am not saying for her to give up, just bide her time until she can escape.



Author's Response:

yeah but hey she's stubborn she'll learn soon enough

Reviewer: 22amazing Signed [Report This]
Date: 24 Aug 2010 6:58 PM Title: story teller

wow, excellent i am glad edward gets to name the next kid, bad edward is sexy as hell too.

Reviewer: jukeboxbliss Signed [Report This]
Date: 24 Aug 2010 4:54 PM Title: re live and be damned

Sweet as hell to the kids and to hell with the mother ..... Psycho!

Reviewer: jukeboxbliss Signed [Report This]
Date: 24 Aug 2010 4:38 PM Title: preface

Scary! What a psycho!

Reviewer: rtpobsessed Signed [Report This]
Date: 24 Aug 2010 4:19 PM Title: story teller

I love this story it's so different! The violence isn't to much, please. If people don't like it then don't read it. I can't wait for your update!

Reviewer: Flynnstones Signed [Report This]
Date: 24 Aug 2010 4:14 PM Title: story teller

awesome chapter

Reviewer: mayi Signed [Report This]
Date: 24 Aug 2010 2:32 PM Title: story teller

DAWM AWESOME story!!!!!! Can't wait for more!!!!

Reviewer: Kendall94 Signed [Report This]
Date: 24 Aug 2010 12:27 PM Title: story teller

i feel really bad for bella and the kids...i really think edward is in love with bella but i just think he only knows how to treat a girl bad because that is how he was raised...i hope he changes or bella and the kids get away for good...

Reviewer: twilightme1 Signed [Report This]
Date: 24 Aug 2010 10:44 AM Title: story teller

Well Jacob fucked up and now Bella is back. I hope she does get even with him. Edward needs to realize what he has. Glad for the update

Reviewer: edward4life Signed [Report This]
Date: 24 Aug 2010 8:26 AM Title: story teller

wow. great chapter. i love this story. plz update soon

Reviewer: nilo24 Signed [Report This]
Date: 24 Aug 2010 6:01 AM Title: story teller

What is love? baby dont hurt me, dont hurt me ,  No more ,...


well , can you believe if i say that from last up date until today i check this site everyday to see this chapter , yep , i love your story , you are very good writer and you are very good in charecters , Please dont listen to Others about why this story is Dark or why edward is like this and they want Softer Edward , you see many writers in Fanfiction or this story dont listen to others they have their oponion and they try to make whats they want in thier story and Reader have to be thank full to read the story , i love the way your story goes , so please dont give up , keepp up what your ideas of story , Okay Well, i dont get why edward wants babys so much , :D i hope the baby is girl Not boy . Girls are sweet and more to mommy until the boys but im sure if baby be girl ,edward try to make boy for next year. I like Mob eward .
Thank you for updating and writting this story , i know its really hard to write and Edit and do,....all the stuff but i know the reviews makes you happy i will review for all the chapters

Author's Response:

AAAwwwww thank you well i guess we know what the baby is. because you just made my day with that review

Reviewer: cateyes38372 Signed [Report This]
Date: 24 Aug 2010 5:41 AM Title: story teller

love it

Reviewer: ellenah Signed [Report This]
Date: 24 Aug 2010 5:23 AM Title: story teller

I think it's gonna be twins! That would suck for her but he might treat her a little better, if he gets to see her pregnant this time. If she loses it he'll have no one to blame but himself.

Reviewer: Thaigher Lillie Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 24 Aug 2010 5:16 AM Title: story teller

i stopped updating to read this story! i hope her ass has twins. i'm sad she's so helpless.but owell great fucking story!

Reviewer: Kendall94 Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Aug 2010 7:43 PM Title: so close but so far away

i really like this story...i dont like that the cullens are mean but i just hope they change...this is one of the best stories i read...

Reviewer: Irish_charm Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Aug 2010 6:42 PM Title: so close but so far away

Wow this story is intense. Edward is a prick, sorry just had to say that.... Is it wrong to want to see more Edward and Bella. Not him raping or beating her. But when he is nice it is kind of hot.

Anyway great job, can't wait to read more.

Reviewer: Flynnstones Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Aug 2010 12:13 AM Title: so close but so far away

great chapter

Reviewer: Tamara Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 12 Aug 2010 10:11 PM Title: so close but so far away

WOW - Edward and the brothers are real pricks aren't they?????  Can't wait to see what happens next!  Bella and babies better hide good!

Reviewer: korenx Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Aug 2010 8:20 PM Title: so close but so far away

love it. please update soon

Reviewer: nilo24 Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Aug 2010 6:36 AM Title: so close but so far away

i really love your story , why edward telling lie at the beginning , when he truley wants her to have child with him with the act he did in dr office. thank you for writting please up date soon oh also , in this sentence you have tiny mistake , and im surize how easy she could live edward mantion so easy and not anybody following her and how she got euro moneys ,emmmm, over all it nice story

“My father and uncles are incouraging me to marry someone. Someone who has had my kids  already.” He said grazing my face.

encouraging



Author's Response:

yea, thnx. and i really was going to expain all of that in the next chapter you kno her tell jake the how she got out easily and everything, because remember she was there for nine months, it will all make sense in the next chapter.

so yeah and sorry about that little mistake i was trying to hurry and post it.

Reviewer: edward4life Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Aug 2010 2:54 AM Title: so close but so far away

great chapter. plz continue soon

Reviewer: xoxo42 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Aug 2010 8:42 PM Title: so close but so far away

jake is gonna die



Author's Response:

lol i kno right, but you have to wait and see

Reviewer: anneboleyn333 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Aug 2010 7:21 PM Title: so close but so far away

love this story, I love Bella's strength and confidence, I know I'm not supposed to but I really like ur edward I like that u are consistent with his attitude, that he is always controlling and brutal, not varying, it's a different kind of edward and a different kind of bella and an altogether different kind of story which I really enjoy please keep em coming and quick!

Reviewer: ellenah Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 08 Aug 2010 6:40 PM Title: so close but so far away

Does he know about Jacob? And I can't believe Charlie shame on him!



Author's Response:

 i know right, if that ever happened to me i would be so pissed at my father

Reviewer: rtpobsessed Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Aug 2010 6:34 PM Title: so close but so far away

OH hell! I can't wait! She's gonna get it.

Reviewer: tehe123 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Aug 2010 5:08 PM Title: so close but so far away

great` chapter~!!!!!!!!!!!!!! update soon please!!!!!!!!!!!

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Date: 08 Aug 2010 2:11 PM Title: so close but so far away


Reviewer: twilightme1 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Aug 2010 1:14 PM Title: so close but so far away

Does everyone know the way he treats Bella??? Did he ever think if he did not treat her like that she may love him? Update again soon I really like this

Reviewer: lanigirl96003 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Aug 2010 1:02 PM Title: so close but so far away

cant wait to see what happens next 

Reviewer: Thaigher Lillie Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 08 Aug 2010 7:50 AM Title: so close but so far away

I was so excited when i saw you updated!!!! i hope you update again really fucking soon i love this!!!



Author's Response:

lol thanks

Reviewer: shadow4092 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 03 Aug 2010 3:35 AM Title: lost, hurt, pain, and acceptance

will you have a chapter with Edward's pov?



Author's Response:

i dont know. should i?

Reviewer: edward4life Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Aug 2010 5:37 AM Title: lost, hurt, pain, and acceptance

wow. great chapter. i love this story

Reviewer: exploringplanetearth Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 26 Jul 2010 7:10 PM Title: lost, hurt, pain, and acceptance

very interesting story.  am curious to see what happens next. keep up the good work.

Reviewer: xoxo42 Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Jul 2010 6:14 AM Title: lost, hurt, pain, and acceptance

wow this story is sooo intense but i like it..edward is crazy but im glad you took the risk because most people are scared to do so.

Reviewer: tehe123 Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Jul 2010 8:01 PM Title: lost, hurt, pain, and acceptance

this story is so ineresting! more please!!!!

Reviewer: Sleeping_Beauty247 Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Jul 2010 3:38 PM Title: lost, hurt, pain, and acceptance

I could see myself really liking this story if you were able to cut the violence down a tad, especially the rape & edward punching bella; I would definitely enjoy it more if bella just gave in and accepts that edward is controlling, possessive and a mafia man and if she was able to accept it, submit to it and fall in love with him then he wouldn't need to be so violent...I love a hot possessive controlling dominating edward, but this is too much....It would be so much more seductive and totally hot for bella to love him and accept him and submit to him and then the smut would be much more enjoyable and the possessive mafiaso would be fuck hot!!!!

I really love that Edward wants Bella knocked up with his kids and having his babies....I could totally see him with a fuck hot family and being all possessive and protective of them and Bella could be his seductive lil mafia queen!!!



Author's Response:

im sorry its too much but in reality, would you give in to someone you dont love. that beats you at every turn, gets raped for standing up for yourself.

slowly she is realizing that there is no way out of it. but to keep her babies out of the world edward holds dear, she is going to have to fight back. some how some way.

but ask your self this when a man is raised to belive that women are suppost to be by there side at all times willingly or not, and he comes across a girl that he has loved since the 8th grade and she doesn't want him back, he has gotten everything he has ever wanted except this once, hes going to take it for himself

thnx for the review and i promise it will get better in the future chapters

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