[Report This]Date: 06 Jul 2010 3:27 AM Title: Chapter 24
omg noooooooooo.... that is crazy........to survive all this to break her ? not what i thought would happen .. right now not happy at all
Author's Response:
have faith.
Date: 06 Jul 2010 1:14 AM Title: Chapter 24
oh please let someone kick Edward's butt for thinking that he would go to jail for killing those bastards...no-one would investigate really.
cant wait to read more
Date: 05 Jul 2010 11:55 PM Title: Chapter 24
hes still an idiot! cant wait til lthe next chapter
Author's Response:
Yes, but he's an idiot for all the right reasons, and he is trying to think of some other way around his original decision; that is why he listed his points. He is trying to clarify things in his mind so he can work on them.
Date: 05 Jul 2010 11:45 PM Title: Chapter 24
They should just burn the bodies and dispose of the ashes. Or something like that. If there are no bodies then no crime. I know I am reaching a little I just hated to read Edward being so upset. He did what had to be done. They were murders and showed no remorse what so ever. I know that he still murdered them but he was doing the world a favor.
Author's Response:
Well, at this point, the bodies would have to be dug up. That would take tons of labor from everyone. Machinery could do the job quicker, but they have none. Bringing some in would definitely be noticed. Edward knows that the tabloids would have no problem either spending the money (on equipment or to pay for 'witnesses') or rousing the curiosity of anyone, as long as they got a big story.
Date: 04 Jul 2010 3:03 AM Title: Chapter 23
I wish that Edward did not feel so much gulit. The guards. James and Royce had to die. I know that I too would feel guilty if I had to do something like that but I just wish that he did not feel so broken up about it. I am glad that Edward won the Oscar. Keep up the great work.
Date: 04 Jul 2010 12:35 AM Title: Chapter 23
wow i would be excited but sad that i couldnt be there to recieve it! cant wait till the nexct chapter !
[Report This]Date: 03 Jul 2010 9:43 PM Title: Chapter 23
That was a beautifully written chapter. I had a feeling the newest captives were Charlie, Carlisle & Esme.
Gald there seems to be hope at last!
Date: 03 Jul 2010 9:24 PM Title: Chapter 23
Aww...yay!!!! The wedding rings are there somewhere and Edward won an Oscar...yay!
Date: 03 Jul 2010 9:14 PM Title: Chapter 23
cool chapter ... love the revelations!
Date: 03 Jul 2010 8:43 PM Title: Chapter 23
oh how sad is that. I mean it is so sweet, but oh so sad. Poor them.. Now, really.. how do you get out of a country without a passport. humm? In that movie, "Not without my daughter" with Sally Field... she got a fake one just to get out of the country.. but of course she was in Afganistan or something. I wonder... maybe they will find them??
This was another very emotional chapter. Thanks.
Date: 03 Jul 2010 8:34 PM Title: Chapter 23
wow - good chapter
Date: 03 Jul 2010 8:26 PM Title: Chapter 23
Awe so talented!! They need to get out of there soon!
Date: 03 Jul 2010 8:17 PM Title: Chapter 23
hope they find the rings
[Report This]Date: 02 Jul 2010 10:49 PM Title: Chapter 22
WOW, this story is soooo great, it gives me goosebumps it's so great.
Author's Response:
What a wonderful comment! Thank you very much! I have a bit of writer's block right now, but I hope I can continue to entertain you soon.
[Report This]Date: 02 Jul 2010 6:15 AM Title: Chapter 22
i have to say this is a great story......plz dont kill bella off ... plz let her recover
Author's Response:
Thank you very much. Poor Bella... I just don't know if she's going to make it or not.
Date: 02 Jul 2010 4:43 AM Title: Chapter 22
Oh ... sad ... I'm whimpering and crying too ... how heartbreaking for parents to witness the cruelity inflicted upon their child.
Date: 01 Jul 2010 9:21 PM Title: Chapter 22
Poor Edward! How are they all going to get out of this place? I hope Bella gets better!
Date: 01 Jul 2010 8:39 PM Title: Chapter 22
sigh...wow...great job!
Date: 01 Jul 2010 8:28 PM Title: Chapter 22
awww poor eddie
Date: 01 Jul 2010 8:25 PM Title: Chapter 22
Thank god she is better. Hope no other nightmares turn up soon. I need to relax a little bit. Are they going to find the passports? Maybe the mansion has a hidden panic room. Or the girls find something in the garden? If all of them head for an embassy the questions would be quite funny! But the answers where the masters are.....no good!
Date: 01 Jul 2010 8:18 PM Title: Chapter 22
wow is all i have to say baout that chapter cant wait til lthe next one!
Date: 01 Jul 2010 6:31 PM Title: Chapter 22
I really felt for Edward when he was telling his parents all that happened to him while he was a slave. Keep up the great writing.
[Report This]Date: 01 Jul 2010 6:38 AM Title: Chapter 6
James is disgusting but not much anyone can do about it. Sincerely hope none of his fantasies about Bella come to fruition.
[Report This]Date: 01 Jul 2010 6:19 AM Title: Chapter 3
I know it's a story with horror & angst. I haven't read the rest yet but I hope James does not harm Bella.
[Report This]Date: 01 Jul 2010 6:13 AM Title: Chapter 2
Interesting premise.
Date: 01 Jul 2010 6:08 AM Title: Chapter 1
Saw this on a rec. Intrigued.
Author's Response:
Somebody recommended my story? OMG!!!!!
Date: 30 Jun 2010 9:50 PM Title: Chapter 21
Please don´t let her die. I will be a good girl. LOL. Thanks for saving me. I hope I can sleep now. ( It´s ten to midnight in Germany ;O) Good night!
Date: 30 Jun 2010 9:07 PM Title: Chapter 21
Yea Papa Carlisle is there
Date: 30 Jun 2010 8:27 PM Title: Chapter 21
Oh my goodness!! This is such an intense story! Good, very good!!! When she got whipped my heart broke! Glad those evil men got what they deserved! I think Rose still should've taken off their manly bits!! And Yeah! Carlisle, Esme and Charlie have arrived!! Save Bella!!!
Author's Response:
I am so glad you are pleased with my tale.
Date: 30 Jun 2010 8:17 PM Title: Chapter 20
Oh please don't let her die!
Date: 30 Jun 2010 7:57 PM Title: Chapter 21
OH GROSS... but yeah Edward.. His father is better than google any day... I did find a few more "Natural" antibotics... if you are ever lost in the Jungles of Africa and cut your leg... Just let me know..
Thanks for the chapter.. I am soo glad they are there...
Date: 30 Jun 2010 7:33 PM Title: Chapter 21
yay! Maybe Bella can get better now?
Date: 30 Jun 2010 7:27 PM Title: Chapter 21
That was a little gross but I know that it was needed in the story. I know that I could never watch and assist with that I do not have the stomach. Keep up the great work.
Author's Response:
Oh, Gawd, I would heave! That's why I didn't really get graphically descriptive; I would have gagged right onto my keyboard. Pus. Ewwww.....
Date: 30 Jun 2010 7:10 PM Title: Chapter 21
im happy they are finally there !! cant wait til lthe next chapter
Date: 30 Jun 2010 2:04 PM Title: Chapter 20
I so hoped that the vehicles coming into the compound were Carlisle and Charlie. I just hope that they make it. Keep up the great work.
Date: 30 Jun 2010 1:58 PM Title: Chapter 19
That was so beautiful at the end. I hope that Bella can last until Carlisle gets to them.
Date: 30 Jun 2010 11:16 AM Title: Chapter 4
Moist lemon cake with lemon drizzle icing!! :)
Author's Response:
It's the first time I ever made lemon anything; glad you liked it.
Date: 30 Jun 2010 9:24 AM Title: Chapter 20
oh dear lord! This is intense...I can't wait for more!
Date: 30 Jun 2010 8:37 AM Title: Chapter 20
Where is Carlisle? One of the captives and ready to help???
I´m in tears. You can´t let her die. I take everything back I wrote before.
you need to update. LOL
Author's Response:
Hey, you were nice; there's nothing wrong with expressing your opinion in a respectful manner, and that is exactly what you did. Now, I just need to decide our dear Bella's fate; I have three options in mind... hmmm...
LOL!
Date: 30 Jun 2010 5:13 AM Title: Chapter 20
Please tell me the "new recruits" include Carlisle & some medication for Bella.
Author's Response:
I would tell you, but then I'd have to kill you, LOL! I will admit it is one of the possible options, but I don't know if it is the one that i will use.
Date: 30 Jun 2010 5:05 AM Title: Chapter 1
OLIVE LEAF EXTRACT... very good for fighting infections... RUN ALICE RUN.. go get some.
Date: 30 Jun 2010 5:02 AM Title: Chapter 20
I may never forgive you if she dies.. hahahaah..kidding.. kind of.. not really.. lol. I am already crying.. if that really does happen, could you send me a PM so I can prepare myself. I am already way too attached to your characters.
Banana leaves will relieve the swelling ... how about some coconut milk.. doesn't that have some type of healing properties... THINK PEOPLE THINK... OHHHH.. how about alcohol... you know those bastards had some vodka or something stashed somewhere... Wouldn't that help fight the infection... It always helped the cowboys in the old western movies.
SEEE.. I am becoming way to attached.. I may just have to stop reading until it is finished. I can't take it.
I am going to google more natural antibotics found in Africa now....
Author's Response:
OMG! Google all you want, sweetie, but it won't help them; they can't google.
Date: 29 Jun 2010 3:58 PM Title: Chapter 19
wow that was so freaking good! I can't wait for more!!
Date: 29 Jun 2010 3:41 PM Title: Chapter 19
The ending to this chapter was so very sweet and touching. So emotional. Love how Edward, Jazz & Em are taking care of everyone & being so fair.
Eager for the next chapter.
Date: 29 Jun 2010 1:05 PM Title: Chapter 19
wow hope daddy carslie makes it in time cant wait till the next chapter
Date: 29 Jun 2010 10:35 AM Title: Chapter 19
that was so sweet at the end!!! I cant wait to read more... I hope Bella makes it
[Report This]Date: 29 Jun 2010 5:46 AM Title: Chapter 19
Great story! Have eagerly been checking for updates.
Date: 28 Jun 2010 5:38 AM Title: Chapter 18
love this chapter can't wait for more.
Date: 28 Jun 2010 4:29 AM Title: Chapter 18
hope bellla will be ok
Date: 28 Jun 2010 3:50 AM Title: Chapter 18
Wow I was not expecting an update today. So thank you. I love that they got to clean up a bit. I also loved the interaction between Edward, Emmett and Jasper about killing the guards. I am glad that they did not make him feel bad for killing them. They deserved to die and I usually do not feel that way. Keep up the great work.
Date: 27 Jun 2010 1:06 AM Title: Chapter 17
WOW!!! Is it sad to say that I am really liking this story (b/c they were slaves)? Well anyway I am. I really loved Alice and Rose going all Rambo on the guards. :) Cant wait for the next chapters!!!
Author's Response:
I'm so glad you like it, but don't feel guilty; it's really a story about triumph over adversity. That's a good thing. And if you want to know the truth, I think most of us would go a little Rambo in this situation.
Date: 26 Jun 2010 3:37 PM Title: Chapter 17
oh god please let them be alright!!! I cant wait til the next chapter!! love the story
Date: 26 Jun 2010 10:09 AM Title: Chapter 1
Another great chapter!!! So full of emotion. Thank you :O). I hope they will find them soon, considering how big the country is.
Date: 26 Jun 2010 4:47 AM Title: Chapter 17
This story keeps getting better. I love that that Carlise and Charlie are going to come and help them. I honestly never thought about passports or that other people besides the guards and Royce could have been behind all of it. I hope that nothing else bad happens. Thank you for writing such a good story and for updating so fast.
Date: 26 Jun 2010 4:31 AM Title: Chapter 17
well im happy that they finally got contact with family! cant wait till the next chapter
Date: 26 Jun 2010 4:12 AM Title: Chapter 16
Carlisle to the rescue.
Great chapter. Wonder how all the rest are managing ... hope they don't resent those in the mansion. Hope help comes quickly.
Date: 25 Jun 2010 8:24 PM Title: Chapter 16
woo saved!!!!
[Report This]Date: 25 Jun 2010 1:54 PM Title: Chapter 16
Good God at the cliffhangers woman!! ;)
I really NEED you to update soon!! lol
Great story....great plot!!! Love it!! Thanks for updating so frequently! I hate really getting into a story that only updates once a month or something like that!!
Author's Response:
Thank you. Well, cliffhangers... I gotta keep ya coming back, ya know :) I will really try to update tonight. I share your sentiment about waiting; I usually only read completed stories, for that reason. I read a lot, and I just can't keep up with several different plotlines, so completed stories let me at least know what I'm reading about! But I do appreciate all you who are reading this as it unfolds; I love the input.
Date: 25 Jun 2010 11:07 AM Title: Chapter 16
Wow the end had me in tears. Please let Bella be OK. I am glad that Edward killed the guards and Royce. They were evil people who showed no remorse for anything. Keep up the great work.
Date: 25 Jun 2010 8:05 AM Title: Chapter 16
OMG... what are you doing to me.. That was wonderful.. but oh so sad...
BUT...they have a PHONE.. yipee... and it is a satelite phone... maybe they can get there coordinates from its reception. (I am reaching here.. but hey.. it could happen..)
Thanks for the quick updates.. I love it.
Date: 25 Jun 2010 6:00 AM Title: Chapter 16
well they seam much happier cant wait till the next chapter to see his dads reaction!
Date: 25 Jun 2010 5:57 AM Title: Chapter 16
Woo Hoo Daddy to the rescue.
[Report This]Date: 24 Jun 2010 8:30 PM Title: Chapter 15
I hope he blew those fuckers to kingdom come!!!
Date: 24 Jun 2010 7:43 PM Title: Chapter 15
Hello! Well I really think you improved a lot and the last chapter was fantastic! What I don´t understand is why you sometimes put excuses or explanations at the end of your story. It is your story and you should be proud of it! If you take two weeks to update so what? We will not run away ignoring you! If you are not happy with what you came up with than don´t publish it until you are happy or your beta had the time to read it. You had so many positive reviews you don´t need excuses. Take your time and enjoy the whole thing. Enjoy the writing process as much as we enjoy reading your chapters! Cheers
Author's Response:
Thank you, thank you, thank you! Well, I know that I get very anxious waiting for updates when I read, so I assumed it might be the same for my readers. Everyone has been so nice; I hate to let them down. Also, they are now accustomed to fast updates. The story is sort of dying to be told, and I just can't help myself sometimes; it just bursts free. And, uhhh... I don't have a beta. Just lil' ol' me.
Date: 24 Jun 2010 1:16 PM Title: Chapter 14
Ah, lovely Rose! You made me laugh! This chapter was perfect. A lot of details. Very well writen!!!!! Sorry have to go. Back for the last chapter later. KR Sandy
Author's Response:
Thanks! I am so glad that you feel that I am improving :)
[Report This]Date: 24 Jun 2010 12:51 PM Title: Chapter 15
Thank you for an interesting story. The plot is definately unique compared to the other stories that I have read on this site and on fanfiction. In the early part of the story you showed the cruelty and depravity of human nature (through Royce, James and the guards), but you also showed the softer side, the compassionate side through Edward, Bella and the gang. In these later chapters, you give the reader hope, which the human sentiment that keeps us human looking and moving forward.
Author's Response:
Oh, thank you so much! I tried to convey the cruelty and the unexpected ways it affected the slaves. I am so glad that I was at least a little successful. I truly appreciate your kind words; this is my first attempt at a story, and I am overwhelmed at the response I have received. I hope you enjoy the remainder of my tale.
Date: 24 Jun 2010 3:41 AM Title: Chapter 15
oh wow.. was it a bomb???? I had to re read this like five times... Did he close them in the mine..? THat is wonderful..
Are they staying there for a few DAYS?? Is that because of Bella..? Why don't they just leave..? I really don't want them staying there. REALLY!!!
Drive away.. Drive away..
Rose is wonderful. She did GOOD.
thanks for the fast update.. I need it.. otherwise this is all I will think about.. hahaha
Author's Response:
You will find out soon why they need to stay for a few days. I am so glad you like the story. I know what you mean when you say it is all you think about... this thing is almost always in my brain; I have trouble falling asleep at night for all the possibilites...
Date: 24 Jun 2010 3:38 AM Title: Chapter 15
well i would kill them all!!! cant wait till the next chapter
Date: 24 Jun 2010 3:36 AM Title: Chapter 15
I love that you update so quickly. I feel spoiled. Loved the chapter.
Date: 24 Jun 2010 3:21 AM Title: Chapter 15
can't wait!!
Date: 23 Jun 2010 11:38 PM Title: Chapter 14
I am glad that pulled everything off. I am glad that Royce was made to suffer. I love how fast that you update.
Date: 23 Jun 2010 10:50 PM Title: Chapter 14
DAYUMMM I love Rose
Date: 23 Jun 2010 7:05 PM Title: Chapter 6
Still a nice story, and you are getting better.
Author's Response:
Thank you. This is my first story, and I do hope to improve.
Date: 23 Jun 2010 6:32 PM Title: Chapter 2
Well, I really like the idea of the story, but you should take your time and give more details. This is like a diary. The conversations are missing. The emotions from the people after being kidnapped...... I can picture them, but you should work on the details.
Author's Response:
I know... I have a great deal of difficulty with that. I feel like I'm droning on and on... But as this is all Edward's POV; I think you have a fairly decent idea of his emotions, at least. I have some other stories in my head, with more conversations, but not this one. Very few conversations came to me, I guess because the slaves are allowed so little free time, and there is little opportunity for conversation. Now that they are free, I hope they speak to me more.
[Report This]Date: 23 Jun 2010 5:30 PM Title: Chapter 14
Update soon!!! Loving this story!!!
Author's Response:
Thank you for your rating!
Date: 23 Jun 2010 4:13 PM Title: Chapter 14
how come i have a feeling that this is the calm before the storm. love this story..it is so different from others. cannot wait to see what happends.
Date: 22 Jun 2010 9:59 PM Title: Chapter 13
I love warden Alice. She is awesome. Update soon.
Date: 22 Jun 2010 12:04 PM Title: Chapter 13
LOL a little... can't wait for the next chapter.. now I am caught up.. great little story you have here..
well done!
Author's Response:
Thanks. I'm still trying to work out an important scene for the next chapter, and work will keep me too busy today to work on it, so there will be a bit of a delay in posting. I am extremely flattered at your praise; thank you so much!
Date: 22 Jun 2010 12:04 PM Title: Chapter 13
whew.. yes.. a little.. but.. is this the calm before the storm.. I think it is..
Thanks for Alice... That was too cute.. love it.
Author's Response:
why, thank you. I like our little Alice, dirt and all :)
Date: 22 Jun 2010 11:55 AM Title: Chapter 12
lol cross your fingers people!! you are a crack up
Author's Response:
oh, now I have to go back to this chapter and see what would have cracked you up :)
Date: 22 Jun 2010 6:40 AM Title: Chapter 11
oh hell..
I am glad you aren't listening to others.. with what you said the hardest part is to find the middle ground in not going over board and dragging out the story or cutting it too short and not putting enough details in..
What I as a reader would like to see is the home coming if they do get there and how they go back to a 'normal' life.. if that is where you are heading..
Author's Response:
Thanks. Let's see if I can walk that fine line between a satisfying ending and just droning on :)
Date: 22 Jun 2010 4:02 AM Title: Chapter 10
oh that is good.. nice chapter..
Date: 22 Jun 2010 3:41 AM Title: Chapter 9
ahh I feel your pain with the ending.. my advise.. stick to what you see and don't be influenced too much.. hard yes.. but worth the out come.. people who listen to others their story gets lost along the way..
Author's Response:
I'm not being influenced; I just don't know where to end the story, and where to begin the epilogue. I just don't know how far I want to go, or how much detail I want to include. I guess I'll just continue to play it by ear. Go with the flow.
Date: 22 Jun 2010 3:34 AM Title: Chapter 8
okay didn't see that one coming that was awful.. okay let me kill james NOW please...
Date: 22 Jun 2010 3:20 AM Title: Chapter 7
LOL it did work.. I just hope James doesn't do that to him again.. that is so hard for anyone to bare..
Date: 22 Jun 2010 2:37 AM Title: Chapter 6
oh yeah he would blame him self.. human nature.. and james.. yeah I would want to kill him.. that would be fun to watch...
Date: 22 Jun 2010 2:29 AM Title: Chapter 5
and eww.. understand but ewww... and take the pill Bella.. I am thinking bad thoughts here.. just swallow it..
Date: 22 Jun 2010 2:26 AM Title: Chapter 4
you did quite good.. and weird weird weird situation.. do wonder why they don't just give all the woman a shot for fertility but who knows what is available to them..
and again... weird weird weird.. LOL so not my scene.. NEVER GOING ON SAFARI....
Date: 22 Jun 2010 2:16 AM Title: Chapter 3
yeah... not going on a safari...
Date: 22 Jun 2010 2:11 AM Title: Chapter 12
OH MY GOSH.. I am so nervous.. Good grief.. I am going to go light a candle or something..
Author's Response:
Between you and the spoilt one reading my story, I am over the moon; you guys are among my favorites. Thank you so much. Yeah... ya might wanna light a candle... or a dozen...
Date: 22 Jun 2010 1:21 AM Title: Chapter 12
This story keeps getting better. I just hope that they can pull it off.
Date: 22 Jun 2010 1:17 AM Title: Chapter 2
god how horrible.......
Author's Response:
you ain't seen nothing yet... gosh THE Spoilt One, reading my first story... I'm in awe.
Date: 22 Jun 2010 1:11 AM Title: Chapter 1
great 1st chapter as I would like to read more.. so well done..
Date: 21 Jun 2010 4:17 AM Title: Chapter 11
I am glad that guys decided to let Alice and Rose help. It makes sense they know the grounds and the manison better. This story keeps getting better and better. Update soon.
Author's Response:
Thank you, my charming friend. But it's not like those gals gave them a choice, huh? Poor dudes, they're so whipped... :)
Date: 21 Jun 2010 3:55 AM Title: Chapter 11
love love love. I hope i get my one Slaveward ;)
Author's Response:
Well, good golly, Miss Mollie, I hope you get one too! Hmm. Maybe we could pass Slaveward around... it appears that he's packing enough for all of us, heehee...