Date: 02 Jun 2014 2:51 PM Title: Chapter 18
It's good to see that the Cullens aren't as bad as Charlie and James, but it still seems as though Carlisle might have a little of the dark side with him...
Date: 02 Jun 2014 3:07 AM Title: Chapter 17
Great chapter... I think it has Edward thinking....
Author's Response:
I'm glad you're enjoying the story. Mic
Date: 02 Jun 2014 2:38 AM Title: Chapter 15
Hmm... What's Edward have in mind??? :)
Date: 02 Jun 2014 2:25 AM Title: Chapter 14
Charlie and James were stupid to treat Bella the way they did if they knew Edward was watching!!
Date: 01 Jun 2014 4:06 AM Title: Chapter 13
Maybe Edward does have a chance to really be different and get to know Bella :)
Author's Response:
Remember change doesn't happen overnight. Edward is going to screw up. He was raised to be a heartless bastard and it takes time to overcome years of raising.
Date: 01 Jun 2014 3:30 AM Title: Chapter 12
Edward, you should have listened to. Would they have noticed what else James did??
Date: 01 Jun 2014 2:59 AM Title: Chapter 11
I am so glad that Edward came to save Bella. I can believe he beat him up, though. James will take that out on Bella. Can't Edward take Bella home with him now???
Author's Response:
Soon.
Date: 31 May 2014 2:08 PM Title: Chapter 9
Unbelievable!!!!
Date: 31 May 2014 2:01 PM Title: Chapter 8
Poor, poor Bella :( Is there any chance that Edward could be a nice guy???
Date: 31 May 2014 1:42 PM Title: Chapter 7
Pure dogs marking her...
Date: 31 May 2014 1:21 PM Title: Chapter 6
Who will save Bella :( They are such pigs. I feel Bella's hate!!
Date: 31 May 2014 4:17 AM Title: Chapter 5
The punishment was worse than it should have been. Is Edward just as nasty??
Why did James smirk at Emmett and Jasper's marriage??
Date: 31 May 2014 4:01 AM Title: Chapter 4
She has to go through a whole year of this??? I can't believe Vicki went along with this!!
Date: 31 May 2014 3:41 AM Title: Chapter 49
So I totally thought the secret to her garden was going to be some poisonous herbs or an escape tunnel she was building or a hole about 6 feet deep just waiting for her to get the nerve to kill Carlisle... Therapy is not as exciting as I was hoping. And it wasn't really a secret.
Date: 30 May 2014 1:19 PM Title: Chapter 3
Can't she run away??????
Author's Response:
Please be forewarned the next 7-8 chapters are very dark and graphic and deal with abuse. I promise the story gets better and has a realistic happy ending.
Date: 30 May 2014 1:08 PM Title: Chapter 2
So humiliating... Poor Bella :(
Date: 30 May 2014 12:53 PM Title: Chapter 1
What happened to the special guardians set up to Bella through the lawyer?? Did she fall through the cracks??
Date: 30 May 2014 12:27 PM Title: A Mother's Love
Incredible first chapter
Date: 09 May 2014 6:31 AM Title: Chapter 48
FOR THE LOVE OF GOD.....SHE FINALLY GOT HER MOUTH TO WORK & TELLEDWARD WHAT HIS FATHER HAS PLANNED FOR HER....TO SODOMIZE HER.
THIS has been one of the hardest stories I have ever read. I've not skipped any chapters....I've read it all....& I can not believe the gall of Carlisle & how he has raised his sons' & then buying them wives AFTER they have been trained to satisify them sexually !!!!!
I just about took up biting my nails again in this chapter. It racked my last nerve.
Well, I'm off to read the rest.'
Thanks muches for sharing your story with me.
Jamie Crabtree (Messenger)
Author's Response:
Thanks for giving this a shot and congrats on making it through the beginning! I know it's not an easy read. I hope you enjoy the rest of the story.
Mic
Date: 06 May 2014 1:47 AM Title: Epilogue
When I started reading this I didn't think I could finish it. But man did it pull me in. Such a food read.
Author's Response:
Thanks for sticking with the story. I'm glad you liked it. I hope you'll try my other stories--none are like this one.
Mic
Date: 17 Mar 2014 5:44 AM Title: Epilogue
Amazing! I love your writing style and can't believe you haven't been published sooner. I hope you are planning on finding a way to put this story to print; your world is too dark and beautiful not to share. I would be honored to follow you as you fulfill your plan to tell the backstory of 'Esme' and 'Renee', as well as any other characters you'd like to tell us about. Only request is that one femme fatale manage to kill her 'trainer' & escape, only to find out how truly encompassing is the program. I think the idea was set here, but one could only actually understand it through living
Author's Response:
Thank you for your kind review. TPW took so much out of me I haven't been able to come back to their story. I did write a one shot for Esme though--The Perfect Christmas.
I have been published since writing this story. You can find both my novels at twcs, amazon & b&n under Michael Schneider. Blind Faith was my first and a stand alone novel. The Darkness of Perfection uses an element of tpw but it is not the same story retold with new names. Assume nothing. There will be a sequel to DOP if I ever finish writing it. Hopefully soon.
Thanks again. Mic
Date: 04 Mar 2014 1:01 PM Title: Contest Nomination
enjoyed this story
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading. Mic
Date: 24 Jan 2014 6:50 PM Title: Epilogue
Well this is the second time I've read this story and in the furture I'll read it again, and again, and again... It was so beautiful and heartbreaking. Definitely one of my favorites.
Author's Response:
Thank you! Be sure to check out my original work too.
Mic
Date: 22 Jan 2014 3:40 PM Title: Epilogue
I did it, I finished it I read it from beginning to end. I said I never would but crazy shit happens when you just open your mind. Great passion and emotion. I was taken on a roller coaster. I'm actually glad that you and I had the chance to talk on face book. Thank you for sharing this.
Author's Response:
I'm glad you made it! Thanks for taking a chance on the story and reading it. I enjoy chatting with you too.
Mic
Date: 12 Jan 2014 3:15 PM Title: Epilogue
I finally finished! I know I said I'd flounce but I've never done that with a story. I just didn't know how to do it. I started at the end and made my way back and skipped the gruesome details. It worked. I'm glad you gave Bella time to process. It wouldn't make sense for her to marry Edward before she healed herself. I think though that a future take with Edward and how he continues to heal as he experiences fatherhood and the challenges of being in a "normal" family might be interesting to explore. I'm also glad you touched on Esme and the potential to blame her for not doing enough. You didn't exactly absolve her completely but giving us the perspective that Renee never really "got away" either. She was enjoying artificial freedom. They were both imprisoned except one knew she was and the other didn't. Evil Carlisles are always difficult for me because Canon Carlisle's compassion and his search for atonement was so strong and ingrained in the Twi series that it's hard to see that name associated with evil. It's like when someone uses James or Tanya or Victoria as characters, I can almost hear the dun dun dun in the background. But all the characters in this story were difficult to process. (I mean, while emotionally I wouldn't want Jasper, Emmett and Edward to be serve jail time because of their part in human traficking, justice still wasn't served. They got away with it and even ended up benefiting from their crimes.). I can't say I "enjoyed" the story but I do think it's provocative. I certainly won't forget it. Thanks for sharing and I will check out your other stories.
Author's Response:
Thank you for leaving such a thoughtfilled review! The potential to blame Esme for not doing enough was deliberate. In real life there's always someone people will point to for blame saying they could have done more or why didn't they get out. The the problem with that question is that the answer won't make sense to anyone else. Esme didn't leave because Carlisle would have never let her go and take the boys. She weighed her options and felt it was better to stay and do whatever she could to balance Carlisle's evil. In her mind it was better than to live always looking over her shoulder. That's not saying that's the answer for everyone or even 99.9% of battered women. Everyone makes their decisions for their own reasons. It's not up to us to understand. If a woman can get out and get her kids out SHE SHOULD! This was a fictional character making a fictional decision that is made every day in real life by women all over the world from all walks of life. We are not her judge and jury.
Making Carlisle and Charlie the bad guys was important to making my point "Evil is always easier to believe when it's ugly". No one wants to believe that the so called good guy (teacher, preacher, movie star, neighbor or even close friend or family member) can be just as evil and hurtful as the expected monster (James, Tanya, Victoria or even Aro). Read my story Love of My Obsession you'll see me do this again with someone else (not to this graphic extent I promise).
Mic
Date: 12 Jan 2014 1:00 AM Title: Chapter 3
This is really disgusting. I may just skip to the end. I'm sure it's a good story but I think I've just encountered my first Twific that made me vomit. Poor Bella and everyone else who may be a victim of this life. The one positive feeling I have is lucky to have not experienced this life. Sorry I have to flounce. The writing is good though. I just can't read anymore.
Author's Response:
O understand completely. If you decide you want to read it later just skip past ch 11. That's the worst of the graphic.
I hope you'll try my other work instead. CAM and FtLOMO are not anything like TPW.
Date: 08 Jan 2014 4:17 AM Title: A Mother's Love
After seeing TPW mentioned on FB I thought I would check it out I'm glad I did I really liked the story. Glad you wrote it dark as it was I enjoyed it. Thanks :)
Author's Response:
Thank you for giving it a chance and reviewing. I appreciate it.Check out my other fanfics or original work. Nothing else is this graphic. If you like dark you'll probably like For the Love of My Obsession - it's B/Jasper.
Mic
Date: 07 Jan 2014 2:50 PM Title: Epilogue
This author is advocating a revolting setup where sexual assault is nothing but exploitative titillation. The idea that a woman could fall in love with the man who enslaved her, raped her, allowed others to rape her, beat her, allowed others to beat her, and basically human traffiked her to train her into his version of a perfect wife is ABSOLUTELY LUDICROUS!!! Edward ending up doing serious jail time would have been the only acceptable resolution of this vile story. Shame on this author and shame on all the reviewers who left positive comments to this #RapeCulture garbage!!! #StopViolenceAgainstWomen
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review.
Date: 14 Nov 2013 1:21 PM Title: Contest Nomination
Ladies. I just reread your story again. Still so dark yet good. Miss your writing. Take care.
Author's Response:
Thank you! I'm still writing (slowly) CAM and LOMO, but between RL commitments and working on my 3rd book things are a little insane right now. I've given up thinking life will slow down and let me catch up and have just accepted the fact that there aren't enough hours in the day unless I win the lottery. :)
Mic
Date: 11 Sep 2013 3:35 PM Title: Chapter 32
That Esme is truly a saint...
Date: 25 Aug 2013 4:11 PM Title: Chapter 47
:( Carlisle you sick bastard!!!!
Date: 24 Aug 2013 8:22 PM Title: Contest Nomination
lol, in a way it was, but I loved every minute of it.
Date: 24 Aug 2013 8:21 PM Title: Epilogue
I loved every minuite of this fic.
Yeah, it had me sobbing and what not, but I am so glad I came across it.
It is funny that I struggled more with Carlisle plans and him and Demetri chapters, that I did with the more graphic ones. They just left my heart pounding and my tummy churning. My hate for Carlisle was growing more and more. He was so delusional towards the end.
I forgot to say in that chapter, but I just had to love Emmett when he thought of the phone tracking.
I am glad everything came out in the end. It was the only way Bella could really get close to any closure. I have never been so glad to see a characters death as I was to see Carlisle's.
I am so glad Esme got her HEA too with Garrett. She deserves it more than anyone after all the years she suffered.
The new generation of Cullen's is born, and so help you if you mess with them.
I was so hooked in this fic and found it really hard to put down.
I look forward to reading more of your work.
Thank you for sharing you work.
Author's Response:
Thank you for taking a chance on my story! I know its a hard story to read and a tough subject. I wanted to show both sides of abuse. Obviously not all abusers learn and make the effort to change but for those who do, just imagine the joy of seeing the cycle of abuse end and die out and the hope for the next generation.
Creating a mate has all the traditional good guys/heroes. Its my twist on Twilight only a little darker and complex.
Love of My Obsession started as a one-shot for a dark contest and won 3rd place.
I hope yo'll give them a shot. Updates are slow but I promise they will be completed.
Date: 24 Aug 2013 8:01 PM Title: Chapter 53
Thanks.
This left me completely sobbing.
But Edward knew what he had to do.
He has done it once. He knew from Japser too.
Date: 24 Aug 2013 7:46 PM Title: Chapter 52
Wow.
You have me sobbing again.
Date: 24 Aug 2013 7:21 PM Title: Chapter 50
Carlisle or Marucs is who I fear, but for the love of God I hope it is Edward.
Date: 24 Aug 2013 6:58 PM Title: Chapter 49
I do love Esme.
I do feel for both Edward and Bella, these few weeks must have been hard on both of them.
I just hope it hasn't pushed Edward back too far.
Date: 24 Aug 2013 6:35 PM Title: Chapter 48
I sobbed my way through this chapter.
I think I have just fallen in love with Edward. He has just proved that he can keep his word to Bella and that he will do anything to keep her safe, although I understand why she can't fully forgive him just yet.
At least he is talking it through with her now.
Hopefully they can get through it.
I just hope he can keep Carlisle's Edward at bay for Bella, cause Carlisle will use Marcus as Demitri to get to him.
Date: 24 Aug 2013 6:15 PM Title: Chapter 47
OMG.
That has to be the worst chapter yet,
Please explain it to Bella, please Edward.
My tummy was churning all the way through this chapter.
I knew it wasn't over, but yeah this is defo the worst chapter yet.
Yet I can't wait to read more.
My heart is pounding franticly.
Date: 24 Aug 2013 5:46 PM Title: Chapter 46
This is coming to the part I am dreading.
Please Edward stand up to him.
I have to say, I have read some Carlisle's that I hate, but this one tops the list.
Date: 24 Aug 2013 5:24 PM Title: Chapter 45
No Edward.
Think it strange please.
That will just rub it in even more.
Date: 24 Aug 2013 4:52 PM Title: Chapter 44
Oh no,
If Carlisle finds out Bella is no way safe alone again.
Esp now Demitri is coming.
I wonder if he has made a start at voiding the papers.
I am sure he has something up his sleeve.
Date: 24 Aug 2013 4:43 PM Title: Chapter 43
I think Alice hit home a little morem just what they were all like back then, not really that long ago.
Date: 24 Aug 2013 4:33 PM Title: Chapter 42
Oh god, I am not liking where this could go.
I really, really hate Carlisle right now.
I hope that this would put a spanner in the works for Carlisle plans, but I am not so sure.
He needs to remember what he said, you would do anything for the one you loved, and that is exactly what Edward will do.
Date: 24 Aug 2013 4:21 PM Title: Chapter 41
I stand by what I said about Carlisle in my last review.
Personally even though there was not abuse/rape etc, this chapter was worse than the Paul Chatper for me to read.
He is one sick, evil bastard.
I just hope it doesn't come to this, but I have a feeling Bella is on for more hurt before she gets any type of HEA with Edward.
I knew something was fishy with the wills.
Damn Carlisle.
I love you writing though.
Date: 24 Aug 2013 3:55 PM Title: Chapter 40
Carlisle makes me sick, I want to tie him up, chop of his dick and balls slowly and chock him with them.
Yeah I knew Embry had something to do with this.
Poor Bella, she it doesn't look like she will ever be free from Carlisle.
She so needs to trust Edward, before Carisle tries anything.
Date: 24 Aug 2013 3:27 PM Title: Chapter 39
Gee and now I am sobbing again.
Well at least Carlisle isn't around for a few days, unless this is one of his tricks.
Date: 24 Aug 2013 3:04 PM Title: Chapter 38
I don't think it is going to be that easy, but this chapter brought me misty eyed.
It was just to presious.
Date: 24 Aug 2013 10:57 AM Title: Chapter 37
I had a few tears in this chapter.
I think Bella may be realising that Edward is also a victim, which I suppose in a way he is, like she said.
I think maybe once he speaks to Esme, he may start to heal to which will help matters.
But Bella didn't leave, that must show him something, she could have, she has the chance, but she didn't, he must be doing something right.
Date: 24 Aug 2013 10:43 AM Title: Chapter 36
Yeah, it is going to take time for both of them.
But there is hope.
I am still dreading when they go home though.
Date: 24 Aug 2013 10:10 AM Title: Chapter 35
Yes, what did happen to the will that states JJ and Teri were to look after her.
Funny how the will shown stated Charlie was to look after her.
I always thought something fishey went on, and that neighbour Embry, where is he now????
I think it will take time for Bella to stop thinking like that, it is all she has known after all.
I just hope that they can continue when they return.
Date: 24 Aug 2013 9:44 AM Title: Chapter 34
Oh Edward!!! I have a big smile right now.
But I am dreading them going back.
I think that maybe Jasper and Emmett may come in even more handy now, on how they balance it all out.
Date: 24 Aug 2013 1:11 AM Title: Chapter 29
I could fall in love with this Edward :)
Author's Response:
He'll get there. Thanks for reading!
Date: 23 Aug 2013 11:17 PM Title: Chapter 28
I'm glad she told him...now Carlisle better not get ahold of her :/
Date: 23 Aug 2013 10:32 PM Title: Chapter 27
Ok I like him a little now...
Date: 23 Aug 2013 7:54 PM Title: Chapter 33
Wow.
I know one person that wont be happy, but loads that will be very very happy.
Bella seemd to push the right buttons here.
Date: 23 Aug 2013 7:52 PM Title: Chapter 24
I'm still not liking Edward...and I can't stand Carlisle. Thank god for jasper and even Emmett...
Date: 23 Aug 2013 7:14 PM Title: Chapter 32
God, that had me sobbing.
Two down, one to go, but he seemed to be thinking about it for a while.
I am glad Esme has never given up hope.
She has been to hell and back, I am also glad that she has been there for Rose, Alice and Bella.
Author's Response:
Glad you're liking the story. Mic
Author's Response:
Glad you're liking the story. Mic
Date: 23 Aug 2013 6:59 PM Title: Chapter 31
I love Jasper.
But he has been there, he know what he is talking about, He is even bringing me to tears.
Date: 23 Aug 2013 6:17 PM Title: Chapter 30
Oh that was crafty.
Every chatper I HATE Carlisle even more.
I just want to shake Edward, that voice is getting to him. I can't wait till they move out. Will Carlisle manage to get Bella on her own before this.
Date: 23 Aug 2013 5:29 PM Title: Chapter 29
Just when I sense hope in Edward, I want to smack him, then he has hope again.
As for Carlisle, well I hate him more and more.
He is pure evil, pure pure evil.
Maybe that little girl issue is something that would snap Edward into realising.
He does seem to be trying so hard.
Date: 23 Aug 2013 3:40 PM Title: Chapter 28
Wow, that came rather sooner than expected.
Now he needs to put it into practice, but with out Carlisle finding out.
Will it be that easy????
I think he will still stuggle, Carlisle will still be there in his ear.
I can only imagine what Edward will do if he finds out about Carlisle, which I hope does happen.
Date: 23 Aug 2013 3:09 PM Title: Chapter 27
See he is learning.
And yeah, it is as if he is two Edward's, he is Bella's Edward and Carlisle's Edward.
There is hope for him yet.
Date: 23 Aug 2013 1:47 PM Title: Chapter 26
Oh dear. Is there any hope for Edward??? It really doesn't look like it at the moment.
But I blame Carlisle, like Jasper said, it does appear he was much harder or Edward.
He had some shocking moments in the club, can he put them all together and finally make some sense of them.
Date: 23 Aug 2013 1:10 PM Title: Chapter 25
Damn it, he didn't heat what James had done.
He can't question her as she will know he realised she was lying.
What Edward is doing isn't really much different to what James and Charlie did, as she is still kind of doing it for fear or being punished. He is just not as agressive.
I hope he realises soon.
Date: 23 Aug 2013 12:23 PM Title: Chapter 24
Really not liking Carlisle.
So he hasn't given up on the idea of having Bella.
Oh Edward, I really wish you would listen to Maddie and your brothers.
I can see it getting worse in a sense before it gets better for Bella.
Author's Response:
It was interesting to see if I could take the traditional good guys and make them the bad guys.
Date: 23 Aug 2013 10:57 AM Title: Chapter 13
I'm not liking Edward at the moment...although he's much better than the rest of the men in her life...
Author's Response:
For now he's the lesser of two evils, but he's going to have to figure out what's right if he wants her love
Date: 23 Aug 2013 2:47 AM Title: Chapter 7
Wow I'm not sure how I feel about Edward right now...
Date: 23 Aug 2013 1:41 AM Title: Chapter 5
Wow I never thought Charlie would be written this way...it's definitely different. :( poor Bella....
Author's Response:
Thanks for giving this a chance. Its easy to write James or the volturi as evil. I wanted to stretch and see if I could pull off turning the "good guys" evil. I think I did it. ;) I made Emmett the bad guy in another story, Love of my Obsession if you want to check it out too. I promise its nothing like tpw.
Date: 22 Aug 2013 9:35 PM Title: Chapter 1
This is going to he a tear jerker huh?
Date: 22 Aug 2013 9:19 PM Title: Chapter 23
Yeah, to tell you you need to do something about Bella's behaviour.
I do feel for Edward right now. He has been told this is the right thing to do and has thought that his brothers do the same.
He is kind of having the carpet riped from under him in a way.
His brothers and a patients relatives telling him on thingm the he has Carlisle in the other ear.
I hope Jasper is right and he figures it out it time.
Date: 22 Aug 2013 8:43 PM Title: Chapter 22
I practically wanted to bang their heads together in this chapter, both thinking the same of the other.
Glad the girls are there to help her through it.
I am sure Emmett and Jasper will work wonders with Edward over time.
I do hope that Carlisle is no longer interested npw that someone else have volated her, I hope that puts him off.
Maybe he is just waiting, who knows.
Looking forward to seeing how this will progress between them all.
Date: 22 Aug 2013 8:20 PM Title: Chapter 21
I forgot to mention in an earlier revirew, Carlisle makes my skin crawl.
Go Edward. One down not inc Charlie and one to go. That one may be a little harder since it is their father.
So Emmett and Rose don't have the 'Carlisle' relationship, maybe there is hope for Edward, he hasn't been as bad as I had feared, but there is still time esp if Carlisle has anything to do with it.
Paul and James I have no words. It was a stuggle but I have to say it was written well. It put the emotions across. Glad they will get their karma.
Looks like Em and Jaz can see what Edward really feels.
Will he listen????
Date: 22 Aug 2013 7:57 PM Title: Chapter 20
Uh oh, looks like you have broken your promise again Edward.
Whats the betting this whole thing was conducted between James and Charlie.
Date: 22 Aug 2013 7:34 PM Title: Chapter 19
Oh!!!
So what would Carlisle say if he knew about Japser and Alice 'real' relationship.
Will Jasper and Alice be the key for Edward and Bella.
Poor Bella, first James and now Carlisle, I do really hope that Edward does find out and they get just what the deseve. Karma and all that.
Date: 22 Aug 2013 6:47 PM Title: Chapter 18
Ok, so I almost cried in BPOV, I did with Edward reclling the events.
My heart broke.
I think Carlisle is delibratly pushing his buttons, part of me thinks he wants Bella to fail, so that he may be able to get his hands on her and 'teach' her.
Date: 22 Aug 2013 6:41 PM Title: Chapter 17
I think he has a heart deep down, but he has been 'trained' otherwise.
Poor Bella, I was almost crying with her. She is so scared, not that I blame her.
Date: 22 Aug 2013 6:30 PM Title: Chapter 16
Well, she has Rose, Alice and Esme now to help.
Date: 22 Aug 2013 4:49 PM Title: Chapter 15
Will she now maybe get some answers????
Author's Response:
Its going to take a while but I promise a happy ending to all those deserving of it.
Date: 22 Aug 2013 4:36 PM Title: Chapter 14
Yeah, I am not trusting Carlisle.
Date: 22 Aug 2013 4:19 PM Title: Chapter 13
Oh Edward, you will learn it time I hope.
Although he did make me tear up a little when he realised what Charlie had been doing.
I dread to think what he will do when he finds out about what James did, and what part Carlisle had in it.
Date: 22 Aug 2013 3:19 PM Title: Chapter 12
Yeah, not liking Carlisle just right now.
But then maybe he is more sus of James, and was hoping to prove that he has popped her cherry.
Edward is not too bad at the moment, but I think when he starts the training he may get worse.
He very much wants perfect.
He gets more brownie points for dealing with Tanya and putting her in her place.
I liked getting a few snippits into Edwards head.
Date: 22 Aug 2013 2:38 PM Title: Chapter 11
Oh Edward really doesn't like to share by the looks of it.
He is still not fully in my good books yet, but he did beat James, that has to earn some brownie points.
Date: 22 Aug 2013 2:26 PM Title: Chapter 10
I so hope James gets his, and I sure hope he is found out.
Date: 22 Aug 2013 2:11 PM Title: Chapter 9
Still not sure of Edward yet, he does seem different, but he has been brought up differently too. He is to expect certain things.
Date: 22 Aug 2013 1:38 PM Title: Chapter 7
It appears that James and Edward do not get on.
Not sure that is a good thing or not.
These people are sick.
Not too sure on Edward yet, it is how he has been brought up.
Date: 22 Aug 2013 1:15 PM Title: Chapter 6
Oh poor Bella.
They really are trying to break her.
I hope she can stay strong.
Date: 22 Aug 2013 12:24 PM Title: Chapter 5
So Carlisle is preping Edward, as he said he was not ready yet.
It is a shame that they know no better.
I do wonder if the accident was not such an accident, or was the next one Charlie got set as next in line for Edward???
Date: 22 Aug 2013 12:00 PM Title: Chapter 4
I don't think you will get to escape Bella.
I last girl is sounding like Alice.
Date: 22 Aug 2013 11:43 AM Title: Chapter 3
I refuse to skip.
It is so wrong on so many levels.
But credit to you writing, you capture it perfectly.
Date: 22 Aug 2013 11:23 AM Title: Chapter 2
I can see why you gave the warning at the start.
Poor Bella, she is at the age she knows right from wrong, yet is stuck in the situation from fear, yet most girls fact this from much younger age and really know no better.
So looking forward to reading more
Date: 22 Aug 2013 10:25 AM Title: Chapter 1
Wow, yeah, slightly hooked.
Poor Bella.
I have to say, I know you are covering a serious topic, but it makes a change to read an evil Charlie.
I have a feeling seeing she has ended up with Charlie and James that the Lawyer was somehow involved with them.
Date: 22 Aug 2013 10:02 AM Title: A Mother's Love
Oh wow.
Someone was asking about this fic and the dicsussion that followed intrigued me.
I have only read one other fic where Bella is kidnapped and sold to Edward, after being shown how to please her man, that was very boarderline and I believe that this will go much deaper than that.
I am sure there will be times where I am blubbering etc, but I am looking forward to reading more.
This first chapter has me hooked already.
Date: 23 Jul 2013 3:28 AM Title: A Mother's Love
Already put some in my favorites!
Author's Response:
Thank you. I hope you enjoy.
Date: 23 Jul 2013 2:47 AM Title: Contest Nomination
Yes indeed it was dark and fucked up, but a great story and ultimately a sweet edward, couldn't stop reading.....
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading. I hope you'll check out my other stories. None are this dark.
Date: 19 Jul 2013 7:14 AM Title: Chapter 11
well I officially dislke this edward along with all the other characters. sigh.
have to keep reading to know what happens next
Author's Response:
Thanks forgiving this a shot. I know the beginning is hard to read. I promise Bella and all the women get a happy ending.