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Reviewer: 3kdz4me Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Feb 2011 7:07 PM Title: Chapter 30

Yikes!  I'm still LOL about Charlie's attempt at the sex talk!

Reviewer: Mrs M Cullen Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Feb 2011 6:03 PM Title: Chapter 30

OOO interesting Twist!!!! I can't wait to find out what they want!!!!! Great Chapter!! Loved that she caught the biggest fish ;)! Keep it up!!

Reviewer: ldyidori Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Feb 2011 5:13 PM Title: Chapter 30

Gahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh cliffie from hell loved the chappy but now you got me going "what happens telll me tell me wait not not til next chappy nooo i wanna know sigh"

Reviewer: monkeymansgirl Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Feb 2011 4:49 PM Title: Chapter 30

ohhh i cant wait. i am on the edge of my seat!

Reviewer: twigirl2010 Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Feb 2011 4:33 PM Title: Chapter 30

now I am curious I have to say...cause if he is her grandfather then is he renee's dad or is Liam her father..hmmm...hope you update soon!

Reviewer: TrueLovEph28 Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Feb 2011 3:52 PM Title: Chapter 30

Oh lord...I had no idea this was coming! But it's a great twist :) I love how she caught that fish. It could be a great confidence booster for her. I know it's a small thing, but sometimes it's the small things that count the most. And Edward is so completely sweet and perfect with her :) Well, okay, no one's perfect, but still. You know what I mean, lol. I can't wait for more!

~Rae

Reviewer: Iteachu4600 Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Feb 2011 3:23 PM Title: Chapter 30

Ahhh you're going to leave it at that please update soon.

Reviewer: Humble Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Feb 2011 2:24 PM Title: Chapter 30

I love Bella's first fishing experience.

 

Best Part:

When I reach the bottom of the stairs, Noel is running as fast as she can to beat me to the living room. I slow down, knowing that my legs could easily beat hers. I like to let my baby think she can win. She jumps on the sofa and sits on the arm of it staring at Dad in his recliner. He gives a small chuckle and reaches over to pet the top of her head.

Reviewer: TexasTwilight77 Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Feb 2011 2:00 PM Title: Chapter 30

Loved it! I can't wait to see how things go with the new addition. Excellent job. ;)

Reviewer: Library Lolita Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Feb 2011 1:44 PM Title: Chapter 30

Good to see you back!  I can't wait to learn about Grandpa!!

Reviewer: sonogal Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Feb 2011 11:16 AM Title: Chapter 30

This is getting crazier This must be Renee's dad and brother. He must be so proud of his daughter. I can't wait to her this conversation.

Reviewer: Mrs M Cullen Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Feb 2011 6:19 AM Title: Chapter 29

I just caught up on the story and I just wanted to say I love it!!!!!! Keep it up!!!

Reviewer: mfoxee Signed [Report This]
Date: 31 Jan 2011 11:37 PM Title: Chapter 29

Very goods story dealing wit an important issue that we all shopuld be aware of. Love your characters they have depth and are very believeable and easy to relate to. Hope to have a new chapter soon.

Reviewer: TexasTwilight77 Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 Jan 2011 4:07 PM Title: Chapter 29

Great chapter, can't wait to find out who the ?POV was. ;)

Reviewer: redbug Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 Jan 2011 9:19 PM Title: Chapter 29

Love this story and can't wait for the next chapter. Soon please :)

Reviewer: Sarabella79 Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Jan 2011 4:14 PM Title: Chapter 29

Great chapter!  Looking forward to the sex talk with Charlie.  Seriously though, if you find that manual I would love a copy.  I need to have that same talk with my son before too long and I'm not exactly looking forward to that either!  I feel you pain Charlie!

Reviewer: nellie1 Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Jan 2011 11:18 AM Title: Chapter 29

Wow, I have spent the last 2 days reading this story. I book marked it ages ago and have had a quite few days at work. YOur story is amazing I'm loving the twist and turns. It is well written and it's good to see a story with more than one point of veiw!!! Can't wait who elses point of veiw that you are going to use and can't wait for the next update! Shonelle

Reviewer: Rayday Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Jan 2011 7:44 PM Title: Chapter 29

I can only imagine who the sex talk is going to go between Bella and Charlie. This shoudl be really interesting. I loved the gift Rosalie gave to Bella, and I'm very curious to know who the Mystery POV was.

Reviewer: benna Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Jan 2011 8:09 PM Title: Chapter 29

Loved this chapter it was so sweet and I am so glad we got to read about thier Christmas. I was so glad to see an update from you I really enjoy this story. I can't wait to see how Charlie is going to handle "the talk". Thanks for the update, looking forward to more.

Reviewer: troberts Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Jan 2011 8:48 PM Title: Chapter 29

That was a big step she called him dad and know he has to have the sex talk lol.

Reviewer: troberts Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Jan 2011 3:31 PM Title: Chapter 28

Bella and Edward were getting pretty hot and heavy.  I am glad that Bella now believes that they truly love her.

Reviewer: MzSexyBBW Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 12 Jan 2011 4:54 AM Title: Chapter 29

I'm so liking this story. Can't wate for your update.

Reviewer: mmsa Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Jan 2011 1:19 AM Title: Chapter 29

Really sweet chapter. I definitely loved Bella's gift to Edward. I thought it was unique and the rest of the gifts were thought out. Can't wait for more.

Reviewer: Sherry80 Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Jan 2011 6:08 PM Title: Chapter 29

awesome chapter

Reviewer: Sherry80 Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Jan 2011 5:50 PM Title: Chapter 28

awesome chapter

Reviewer: Canadaci Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 11 Jan 2011 2:43 AM Title: Chapter 29

This is so good.  I can't wait to see how Charlie handles the TALK!!!!!

Reviewer: Canadaci Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 11 Jan 2011 2:03 AM Title: Chapter 28

This is the best story (Homecoming) I've read for originality.  I love this Bella.  I started reading this story when you first started writing it.  I got to the chapter when the Cullen's and the Swan's with the the ball game and Renee came back into Bella's life. I stop until yesterday and have just about finished what you've written so far.  I was so out of it with all the angst that I couldn't read it anymore.  As Julia Roberts said in Petty Women, "Big mistake, Huge".  I sold myself and you short and will regret it.  You have done an amazing job with this.  I read Bella's POV and I almost transform into her when I'm reading it.  I fell breathless reading the words especially when she Um...stutters. Renee makes me want to stick pins in a voodoo doll of her 24/7.  I love this Edward he is such a wonderful person in this story.  I am so in ah with the descriptive POVs.  Great Job!!!!! 

Reviewer: Canadaci Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 10 Jan 2011 5:46 PM Title: Chapter 19

I love it.  Bella is so, so innocent that it is un-imaginely sweet!

Reviewer: amwine Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Jan 2011 3:36 AM Title: Chapter 29

I am so glad she finally felt secure enough to call Charlie Dad.  What a special Christmas gift for him and for her.  I can't wait for the talk.  Great job...thanks so much!!!

Reviewer: Jilli90 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09 Jan 2011 8:19 PM Title: Chapter 29

love it!!

Reviewer: vampaddict10 Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Jan 2011 6:17 AM Title: Chapter 29

awwww....lol.. poor charlie he is freaking out...lol

 

plz update soon.. i cant fot what charlie will do

Reviewer: My Not-So-Secret Obsession Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jan 2011 6:57 PM Title: Chapter 29

Great story and very sweet. I'm so glad Bella finally called Charlie Dad=) Please keep writing and update as often as possible=)

~My Not-So-Secret Obsession

Reviewer: Jennmc75 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jan 2011 2:16 PM Title: Chapter 29

That Mystery POV worries me.  Is that one of Renee's exes that thinks Bella coudl be his daughter?  I'm afraid that guy showing up could really screw with Bella's head. 

Christmas was great!  Everyone's gifts were perfect. I love seeing Rose open up more and Bella slowing warming up to her.

I was really shocked at Edward's reaction to his gift from Bella in front of everyone.  I guess the gift made him not care that her brother and father were both present for their display of affection. LOL

I teared up a bit when Bella called Charlie Dad.  That was so sweet and definitely the best Christmas gift she could've given him.

I'm dying to see how your Charlie handle's "the talk" with innocent little Bella.

It sucks that you've had to deal with a plagiarist.  If you or any of your readers find your story plagiarized on this site, please don't hesitate to contact an admin.  We do not tolerate that and will take immediate action.

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jan 2011 3:28 AM Title: Chapter 29

great chapter....you have me wondering with this mystery POV though.   One of renee's old boyfriends maybe?  oh well.

Reviewer: Humble Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jan 2011 2:23 AM Title: Chapter 29

I am shocked that Noel didn't get a Christmas gift.  What the hell!???!

Reviewer: cedward2417 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jan 2011 1:49 AM Title: Chapter 29

"Oh Fudge"...hee hee!  OMG, I can't wait for the sex talk with Charlie...LOL!  (I think that part in Eclipse was hysterical.)  Great Chapter, as always.

Reviewer: kimee0479 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jan 2011 1:31 AM Title: Chapter 29

I am so glad you're back. I  have missed this story.

Reviewer: tuggerpie Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 08 Jan 2011 1:23 AM Title: Chapter 29

Sweet chapter! The "talk" is sure to be hysterical. : )

Reviewer: ENAddict Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jan 2011 12:59 AM Title: Chapter 2

Had me in almost in tears - can't wait to read the rest of the story! Who needs sleep anyway?

Reviewer: SeaShells421 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jan 2011 12:36 AM Title: Chapter 29

Was the woman Siobhan?

Reviewer: sonogal Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Jan 2011 11:56 PM Title: Chapter 29

I am just glad the drama is over. Let's get back to the story.

I loved this chapter. It was so sweet and funny. Charlie does not do well with the whole sex talk subject. Luckily the kids learn alot in school with science and health classes. Pluse there is tv. Bella is not stupid. Edward also has been very  kind and answered her rather nieve questions. I just would not want Emmett to do the talk. He would scare her.

Reviewer: cullengirl08 Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Jan 2011 11:16 PM Title: Chapter 29

I loved Edward's reaction to Bella's gift; PDA in front of the family - way to go, Edward.... hehe

Reviewer: cusic1981 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 07 Jan 2011 10:56 PM Title: Chapter 29

Love this chapter!!! It is very nice to see the progress Bella is making. Esme and Charlies talk cracked me up. I cant wait to see how he handles the sex talk with Bella.

Reviewer: ldyidori Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Jan 2011 10:54 PM Title: Chapter 29

Awesome chappy and awwwe Bells called Charlie Dad (hugs).  Love the story and eagerly read is as soon as it shows up in my inbox :)

Reviewer: Lady Shakespeare Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Jan 2011 10:12 PM Title: Chapter 29

Great chapter!  And don't worry about the plagiarist.  She'll get what's coming to her.

Can't wait for the update....

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Dec 2010 2:16 PM Title: Chapter 28

I am so sorry that I am just now reviewing. I love this story and I am soooo happy that you updated this story. I know it has been awhile since this chapter but the holidays have been here. I know everyone here will be happy to hear from you when you update. Please just take your time updating. PLEASE PLEASE do not stop with this story.
We all will patiencely wait for you. LOVE LOVE this story.

Reviewer: TexasTwilight77 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 21 Dec 2010 4:06 AM Title: Chapter 28

Sorry about the late review. Great job, I can see how things are changing more for Bella. Her relationship with Emmett and Charlie, also the physical tension between her and Edward. Can't wait to see what happens next. ;)

Reviewer: luv4jake Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 04 Dec 2010 1:21 PM Title: Chapter 28

lol & cute: "Alright, I have some notes on what happened in the past with Renee and I just wanted to go over a few things with all of you." We nod in unison. Huh, maybe it's a genetic nod.

aw so freaking sweet: "He's right, Bella. Renee is the guilty party. That's why she is in jail. Hell, if we wanted to play the blame game we could find ways for us all to be guilty somehow I'm sure. The bad guy is Renee and now, Tanya, and probably that Jean woman too. You, Dad and I? We're a family, baby sis, we love each other, unconditionally. The three wicked bitches can go to hell, because they will never be happy, they will always be miserable and mean because they will never know and never have that unconditional love that we do."

"That was profound, Emmett." Liz says with a smile.

"You love me?"

"Haven't we've said that before, Bella?" Charlie says with his own smile.

"Yes." I blush, "I umm... you know, love you both too." Emmett jumps up and pulls me into a hug, Charlie wraps his arms around us as well.

"Good, good I think we've made a lot of progress today, Swan family," Liz exclaims, "now if you need me, call my cell, you have the number. For now, I'm going to go and let the three of you spend time as a family." Charlie pulls out of our hug first to walk Liz to the door.

lol: "Wouldn't be the same without you and that pornstash of yours." Emmett laughs as he claps Charlie on the shoulder.

Until next time I got my Noel fix and some sweet goodness.

Reviewer: lynnl29 Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Nov 2010 9:17 PM Title: Chapter 28

this is an awsome story, can't wait for the next chapter

Reviewer: Jennmc75 Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Nov 2010 2:48 PM Title: Chapter 28

Life's been busy and I had like 3 chapters to catch up.  I'm kinda glad I let them pile up.  I would've gone crazy waiting for those updates.

All I can say is Holy Hell!  I thought Tanya could be the crazy stalker but I never saw the exact reason for it coming.  Damn she's as crazy as Renee and her momma.  I have a feeling Renee's treatment of Bella will help her avoid the whole crazy thing the 3 of them have going on.

I was never worried aobut Edward's reaction to the Tanya revelation.  I was more worried about how it would affect Bella.  She's so nieve and sensitive that I was scared it would cause her to pull away.  I'm thinking maybe her nievety is what kept her from having a bad reaction.

I just hope the town doesn't come down hard on Charlie for all of Renee's crazy ass shit.

Reviewer: interview_withavampire21 Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Nov 2010 6:23 AM Title: Chapter 26

Dude!

...nice twist!

Reviewer: interview_withavampire21 Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Nov 2010 12:48 AM Title: Chapter 20

Poor Bella!

I bet Rosalie was raped...

Reviewer: Sarabella79 Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Nov 2010 1:24 AM Title: Chapter 28

So glad that Bella is really healing!  Great chapter!

Reviewer: sonogal Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Nov 2010 8:05 PM Title: Chapter 28

I am glad that Bella is ok with the whole Tanya thing. She needs to get in her head that Emmett and Charlie love her. She seems to accept Edwards love.

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Nov 2010 5:46 PM Title: Chapter 28

Glad Eddie is being honest with her and Liz is there for them all.

Reviewer: Rayday Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Nov 2010 4:15 PM Title: Chapter 28

I loved the most recent chapter and am so glad that Bella seems to be doing better. I'm glad that Liz spoke to all three of them.

Reviewer: amwine Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Nov 2010 3:19 PM Title: Chapter 28

Bella is getting there.  She is growing and healing and that is what matters most.  Great job...thanks so much!!!

Reviewer: famaggiolo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 15 Nov 2010 5:36 AM Title: Chapter 28

Oh thank god you did not let the story go, I was wondering what happened.

I hope yourlife get back on track soon.

Fiorella

Reviewer: goldfishie1 Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Nov 2010 5:25 AM Title: Chapter 28

Yay, a new chapter!! Sorry, it doesn't take much to get me excited. After a long, not so fun night at work, this made me happy. I just love Edward. He is so sweet to Bella. I thought it was really cute Emmett quizing Liz on her education! Loved it all!

Reviewer: tuggerpie Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 15 Nov 2010 3:40 AM Title: Chapter 28

Great chapter, thanks for updating!

Reviewer: kimee0479 Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Nov 2010 3:29 AM Title: Chapter 28

thank you so much for posting! I was terrified that you had discontinued the story. I loved this chapter. This whole story is a great rising from the ashes story w/ Bella as the phenioxs. 

Reviewer: cusic1981 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 14 Nov 2010 11:48 PM Title: Chapter 28

Great chapter!!!! I am glad that Bella is healing and that Charlie told her she shouldn't feel guilty for what Renee and Tanya did.

Reviewer: Lady Shakespeare Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Nov 2010 11:25 PM Title: Chapter 28

Yay!  Glad another chapter was up; I was worried about it.  Great job on this one!

Reviewer: Humble Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Nov 2010 11:13 PM Title: Chapter 28

Best Parts:

He jokes that Esme still makes them write Santa letters to take to Macy's to mail to Santa. It's for charity though, a fun silly way to give back. Last year, Edward and Alice hired a guy to dress as Santa and show up at the door on Christmas Eve with a bunch of letters asking if they didn't think they were a little old for writing him. Carlisle had gotten a kick out of it. From what he said, Esme not so much.    You're my baby girl. I'm at a loss of what to do or say here to fix things. I wish it was as simple as buying you ice cream and telling you 'I love you'. I'm good at dolling out food and love; it always fixed Em's woes. But we are getting there one step at a time, sweetheart." I stand up shocking him by reaching my arms around him for a hug.

"I could go for the ice cream too." I say into his ear. In my own way, the only way I can really get out right now I'm letting Charlie Swan know that I do love him.

 

The three wicked bitches can go to hell, because they will never be happy, they will always be miserable and mean because they will never know and never have that unconditional love that we do."

 

 

Reviewer: vampaddict10 Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Nov 2010 11:07 PM Title: Chapter 28

omg... shes healing.... :) i am so glad she is....

 

plz update soon

 

hows emmett and rosalie doing???

Reviewer: My Not-So-Secret Obsession Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Nov 2010 10:47 PM Title: Chapter 28

This is amazing. I'm still waiting for Bella to call Charlie Daddy. I picture it to be an emotional scene, but i don't know what u have in mind for it. I'm sure it will be amazing however you write it. Keep writing you're amazing!

~My Not-So-Secret Obsession

Reviewer: clhrice Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Nov 2010 2:49 PM Title: Chapter 27

I love everything about this story for far. I beg u to please update it soon.....

Reviewer: FlSunshine Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 Oct 2010 5:52 PM Title: Chapter 27

wow, very involved story. So many plots and twists.  I am encouraged that youare an Edward/Bella HEA girl.  please don't let me down.  Thanks for sharing your story ,

ps. please let Edward get to 2nd base !!!!! He deserves it !!!!  Dinner cruise and all !!!! 

Reviewer: Humble Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Oct 2010 11:44 PM Title: Chapter 27

I hope that Charlie and the gang can nail Jean, Tanya and Renee for the conspiracy, blackmail, theft, vandalism, harrassment and every other crime they have committed....they all deserve to rot in jail

Best Parts:

Edward was just a baby at the time, but Emmett loved to watch him. You probably don't remember this, Em, but you would try and load Edward's crib up with toys before bed, so he wouldn't be lonely. It was so sweet." Dad gets this smile on his face and I can tell he is remembering baby me. I was a damn cute kid.   "Hey, old man, screw them if they believe you could do something like that. You were misled during a crappy time in your life." I stand up and walk over patting him on the back.    If only Renee and her crazy family was as easy to discard as tossing in the trash can and sending to the dump.

 

Reviewer: Humble Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Oct 2010 10:53 PM Title: Chapter 26

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Walking into the kitchen I see Bella sitting on a stool at the kitchen island holding Noel, rocking her and gently humming, a half drunk glass of milk sitting in front of her.

 

Noel was burrowed under the covers at the bottom of the bed, we could hear her little snores every so often. Bella would get the sweetest smile when she heard them and I couldn't help but smile back at her.

 

I notice Bella move. She is glaring at Em and Jazz.

"Out." She says in a quiet but firm voice. I never thought I would see her this assertive. She's leaning over me like a Momma bear protecting her cub.

"But, Bells..." Em whines.

"Be nice then." She says simply. Jasper takes one look at the glare and stops his laughing.

 

"Hurry up before Emmett eats Noel!" Alice yells up the stairs. Bella's eyes go wide and she takes off running to save her baby.

  While Kate and Tyler could not vouch for Lauren's whereabouts on the night in question, Jessica Stanley and Mike Newton could. In fact, they had video proof of where they were. Proof they were extremely embarrassed to pass over. The little trio had made a sex tape while wearing costumes that looked like stuffed animals. Mark told me that this was some kind of odd alternative lifestyle called Furries or something like that.(this has to be the funniest thing that I've read in quite some time)   So, I introduced her to cyber Monday, the time that I did most of my Christmas shopping. Bella loved it.  

"She... umm... she stares at me and it... well ...it's not friendly." Bella's timid voice reminds me so much of when she first got to us. If this is Tanya, I want to rip her throat out for doing this to my girl.

 

 

 

Reviewer: Humble Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Oct 2010 10:31 PM Title: Chapter 25

Noel is seriously my Favorite character in this story.  She is so precious.

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My Bella is beautiful, scars and all. Though in the dress you can't see the scars I know they are there, both inside and out. Tonight I hope to bring her some happy memories to help push some of those hurtful, bitter away. I have a theory that the more happy we can give her, the more we can push the bad away.  

I rush over to the dj booth and pass the guy some money, he promises after this song he will play my choice. The song is perfect for Bella. I go back to the dance floor and pull her back to me. She giggles when I jokingly twirl her around.

"This is a special dedication going out from Edward to his Bella." The fast music fades and the soft strands begin to play. Bella's blush takes over and I pull her into my arms.

 

 Edward upon hearing this offered to take me Trick or Treating, but I would have felt silly at my age doing something like that. I'm more than happy with the plan for this evening.

 

By the end of The Ring, I was half way onto Edward's lap, Noel all the way in my lap. I'm not sure I like scary movies. I mean the suspense is one thing, being scared out of your mind is another. The phone rings and I jump a mile off the sofa.

 

I look down at Noel and sigh as well.

"Thank God we remembered to take Noel with us." I say out loud. We had gotten down the street earlier when I remembered to go back for my baby. She had been napping on my bed oblivious to being left alone.

 

"Even if we have to go all Scooby gang, we'll figure it out." Emmett says and Alice laughs.

 

Reviewer: Humble Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Oct 2010 9:24 PM Title: Chapter 24

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I wanted to ask her what was wrong, or whether she needed help, but my own fears held me back. I felt guilty over that and told Alice everything. I know she and Rose are trying to patch up their friendship, so I figured if I couldn't help Rosalie, then maybe Alice could.   "With Esme you said dream, why was that?" She asks, it's not judgmental it's like she really wants to understand, but I can't help but blush.

"Umm... well, if I... if," I pause, looking at the floor before going on, "if I could pick out the perfect Mom, it would be her. She is like my dream Mom."

"And for Edward, you said home?"

"It was hard to pick just one word for Edward. I guess I went with 'home' because to me, he is everything home is supposed to represent. He makes me feel safe, secure and well-cared for. Home is where you are supposed to feel all of those things and uhh... yeah, Edward makes me feel that way. He feels like home." I'm not sure I'm making sense, but she seems to get it."

 

"My baby." I sigh a little happy. "She is cute and fluffy and she loves me no matter what." I pull out my cell phone and show her the picture of Noel that I have as my wallpaper.

"She's adorable." Liz says, her smile extremely warm. "Did your Dad get her for you?"

"No, Edward did." I sigh again. I'm reminding myself of Alice. "She was a surprise. But Charlie said I could keep her and bought this whole box of supplies for her in pink, it was nice." I tell her excitedly.

"Wow, that's a great gift from both of them." She tells me.

"Noel always makes me feel better, when I have bad days, I can just hold her and she'll cuddle into me. She loves to lick my nose. She's soothing to be around." I look at her hoping she doesn't take this next part the wrong way. "And the best part is that I can trust her, I don't have to worry about her suddenly changing. She is a lot easier to trust than humans."

 

She smiles more. She laughs more and she jokes more. It's cute as hell when she tells a joke then blushes after doing it.

 

 

She blushed when she told me she couldn't dance and I informed her that she did just fine when we danced before. However, because this was in front of our peers and not some people on a boat, I gave Bella a few lessons to help her feel more confident going to the dance.

 

Emmett wasn't going to attend the dance, but when Ben Cheney, Angela Webber's boyfriend came down ill with chicken pox of all things, he asked Emmett to step in. He didn't want Angela's dress to go to waste. Angela and Emmett both agreed. I think Emmett was relieved, because he could attend the dance and watch out for Bella, without having to worry that his date was thinking this might be more than just two people attending a dance as friends.

 

Needless to say, I made Mom get me a new bed and burned the linens.Needless to say, I made Mom get me a new bed and burned the linens.

 

Overall, the fundraiser for the senior trip went well. They had a silent auction, the raffle and game tables on top of all the food. And in the end, they raised enough for the trip, so the bake sale in November - that generally happens to pick up the slack of tonight - was no longer needed. I was glad, because there were a few kids from less fortunate families that could never afford to go on this trip without this fund. And this way, no one is embarrassed because the school pays for everything.

 

"Yes." Bella responds cuddling the huge teddy bear Edward won for her in some game tonight. He also bought her a pretty necklace with a rose gold butterfly charm on it from the silent auction. From the way some of the other ladies eyed it, I have this feeling it wasn't cheap.

 

Reviewer: Humble Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Oct 2010 8:44 PM Title: Chapter 23

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 I pick up my baby and go down the stairs to feed her before we go. While in the kitchen, I also heat up some of the soup - that I made for Edward yesterday - for Emmett to eat, today. I pull out a tray and plop that, two slices of homemade bread, lightly buttered, the now warm soup and two brownies on it for Emmett. I reach into the fridge and grab him a Dr. Pepper, before taking it to him in the living room. There he is slouching in front of the TV, the pre-game show going.

"I thought you might be hungry." I offer setting the tray in front of him. A grin breaks out on his face.

"Thanks, Bells." He picks up a slice of the bread and hums around it in appreciation. "You know it's true, the way to a man's heart is threw his stomach." He says with a laugh. "This is awesome, sis."

 

 

 Noel is finishing up her meal. I can't help but smile indulgently at her when she keeps falling over trying to clean herself up. Poor baby, her balance is as bad as mine.

 

"Emmett, can Noel stay here with you? I don't want her getting ticks and fleas out in the woods." I ask, though it's only half true. Noel makes me feel better and I can't help but hope she can do the same for Emmett.

"Yeah, Bells, no problem." I pick her up and set her on the sofa beside Emmett, who slips a bite of the chicken from the soup to her. After she eats that, she nuzzles in beside him and starts snoring. "I seriously don't think she'll be a problem." He laughs.

"Emmett, can Noel stay here with you? I don't want her getting ticks and fleas out in the woods." I ask, though it's only half true. Noel makes me feel better and I can't help but hope she can do the same for Emmett.

"Yeah, Bells, no problem." I pick her up and set her on the sofa beside Emmett, who slips a bite of the chicken from the soup to her. After she eats that, she nuzzles in beside him and starts snoring. "I seriously don't think she'll be a problem." He laughs.

 

"Don't you dare judge him, Jacob Black. Edward is so much more than his looks and money. He's smart, caring, loving and wonderful. No, he isn't too old for me, he's seventeen and I'm sixteen, that's a year difference!" I yell. "For the first time in my life, I feel safe, happy and loved. And that is due in a large part to Edward Cullen." I turn away from him and rush into the house to find Charlie.

 

"Bella, please forgive my naïve fifteen year old son who, in his lack of wisdom, lashed out like a three year old who was told he couldn't have candy before dinner. Instead of taking rejection like a man, he took it out on you like a child."

"Bella, please forgive my naïve fifteen year old son who, in his lack of wisdom, lashed out like a three year old who was told he couldn't have candy before dinner. Instead of taking rejection like a man, he took it out on you like a child."

 

I was forgiving him, because in the long run, he really doesn't matter enough for me to waste emotions on. I had enough problems holding me back; I didn't need anger or resentment at Jacob Black being one of them.I was forgiving him, because in the long run, he really doesn't matter enough for me to waste emotions on. I had enough problems holding me back; I didn't need anger or resentment at Jacob Black being one of them.

 

sweetheart, your heart is too sweet and pure to be like that."

"Thank you." I whisper, feeling warm and content at his words.

"No, thank you, sweetheart, for being the best daughter any guy could ask for."

 

"Was that the boy who glared at me?" I giggle.

"No, that was Edward."

"And, Edward is?"

"My boyfriend." I blush.

"Well, good for you, Bella." She grins. "He seems very protective of you and very handsome." She gives a wink.

"He's wonderful." I sigh.

 

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Date: 20 Oct 2010 10:42 PM Title: Chapter 22

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"What the fuck were you thinking?" He corners me. You know Edward is pissed if he's tossing out the f-bomb. "What if you did or said something fucked up to Bella there?" Ahh, the reason for the glare.

"I didn't and I wasn't thinking. The past few days have been fucked, Edward. Just let it rest, Bella's fine." He glares some more.

"You do know that the smell of alcohol reminds Bella of Renee, that Renee drank a lot?" No, I didn't know this.

"No, I didn't know that."

"It's something she let slip when she was telling me about what happened in Seattle on Saturday."

"Fuck." I mumble.

"Yep." He replies giving me one last glare, before the teacher comes in.

 

 

I glance to Jasper in case he knows what is going on, but he is gazing adoringly at Alice and his look just seems to say, 'Alice is my queen'.  

Emmett took the time to tell me what happened and I couldn't help but hug him. It was just so sad. After hearing everything though, I couldn't help but be worried about him. He just seems so torn up and depressed. I could tell the others were just as worried about Emmett. The fact that they dropped everything to come and make sure he was ok was a big indication of how much they care about him. The fact that they stayed until Charlie sent them home showed how worried they are about him. The warmth and love they all had for my brother made me feel blessed to know these people.

 

I called him after school like he asked. Though his throat was sore, he said he wanted to hear my voice. I ended up reading to him. He assured me he enjoyed it.

 

Saturday dawned sunny, even though Edward was still sick. In an effort to make my boyfriend, internal Alice squeal inserted here, feel better I made a huge pot of homemade chicken noodle soup and a double batch of the triple fudge brownies that I know Edward loves. Charlie took me over to deliver telling me how great it all smells. I didn't tell him at the time, but I had extra brownies and soup at home for us as well. I wanted to surprise him.

 

When we arrive back home, I present Charlie with the brownies, he pumps his fist and shouts 'yes'. I almost fall over laughing at the sight.

 

Charlie really seems to care about me. And as hard as it is for me to let someone in, especially a parent, I can't help but want to let Charlie in. I can't help but want to get to know my Dad better.

 

 

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Date: 20 Oct 2010 10:21 PM Title: Chapter 21

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My headache was finally easing off, and Noel was curled up with me watching TV in my bedroom. Charlie had brought me breakfast in bed. It was sweet and slightly burnt. It meant the world to me that he did it though. I was glad he left the room and didn't watch me eat. The sausage was so chewy even Noel wouldn't eat it.   

As if sensing my internal sadness, Noel licks my face before bounding over to pick up her stuffed bear, bringing it over for me to play with her. I run it over the bed and she chases it giving little playful growls. A soft knock on my door interrupts our play and Noel gives a small ruff. I love her little bark.

 

Noel looks sad, but maybe next time - if there is a next time - we'll take her with us.

 

Edward made these little tiny pizza rolls and mozzarella sticks, while I watched. He joked that he was finally showing me his mad cooking skills. I couldn't help but laugh at how silly he was acting. He put this fake Julia Child (we watched the movie Julie and Julia not too long ago) accent on and was using it for every step he took. He started with, "first we open de bag, den we pour it onto the cookie sheet."

 

"Baby, if you don't want to talk about it, that's fine. Just sometimes it helps to tell someone. My Mom always says 'a trouble told is a trouble halved'; which makes the burden on you less and a solution quicker to find, since two minds work better than one."

 

"Listen, Bella," He turns us where we are facing each other, his hand on my cheek now, "you are not a burden, nor would you burden me if you shared this with me. You are my special girl, whom I adore and you have made my life better just by letting me know you. You've lived in hell for so many years and still are able to be sweet and loving. I don't know anyone else with more reason to be bitchy and hateful. Yet, your compassionate and sweet nature is genuine and honest. Isabella Swan, I want to share your problems, your fears and your happy times. I want you to share mine as well. What kind of boyfriend would I be if I didn't want both the good and the bad with you?"

"Boyfriend?" I repeat, but it comes out as a question.

"Will you let me be your boyfriend? Will you do me the honor of being my girlfriend?" I nod excitedly. He wants to be my boyfriend, he said he adores me.

"Yes." I adore him too. Should I tell him? He wants to share the good and the bad. "I umm... adore you too." I almost whisper. He leans forward and kisses my lips gently.

 

I saw a man trying to take a little girl, I was only eight, but I knew it was wrong. She was struggling, so I ran over to help her, screaming at him 'no'.

  The last straw was when my parents discovered me sleeping on the floor of Alice's bedroom, my baseball bat beside me. They found out that I had been keeping guard over her at night to make sure no one tried to take her, like the man had the little girl."

"Oh, Edward." I whisper running my hand through his hair. He had always been a protector, I could see it in him now, as I had the first day I met him. No wonder I always felt safe with him. He pulls my hand out of his hair and kisses each of my fingers before going on with his story.

 

And Renee is wrong and a lying bitch who has a special place in hell waiting for her.

 

"I wouldn't want you anywhere else other than here. And I can't help but care, you're my daughter. And you are a great one at that. Don't worry about anything else we'll get there, baby girl. We'll get to a day when you know you don't have to thank me for caring because you'll know you deserve it."

 

I call Noel and she runs her cute fur ball self in and I pick her up. I pull her food out and heat it up. She eats noisily for something so small. After she eats, I take her outside to do her business.

 

 

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Date: 20 Oct 2010 7:45 PM Title: Chapter 20

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To thank him for asking me out again, I baked him banana nut muffins. Edward seems to like my cooking and I like him. So, if my cooking makes him happy, I'll do it for him often.

After finding out what happened, Edward turned red in the face and glared at Lauren across the parking lot. I put my hand on his arm and he seemed to calm down. Edward came over after school and helped me ice my knee. That time I didn't bite his tongue.

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Date: 20 Oct 2010 2:21 AM Title: Chapter 19

I am so glad that Alice's plan with Rose didn't work out.  It was very selfish of Alice.  She may have not minded ruining her first date but for her to consider springing Rose on the group like that on Bella's first date... Shame on her.

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He gives me this amused look. He's having way too much fun looking at the bouquet of flowers in my hands.  

Outside I watch as she and Noel run around the fenced yard. Noel is trying to catch Bella, her little legs running as hard as she can. Bella is running slow, so the pup can keep up. I hear her calling Noel her baby and telling her she can do anything and I know that these are words Bella probably never heard from her Mother. It breaks my heart that this sweet and loving girl was treated so badly the majority of her life thus far.

 

Should I tell her that I spent twenty minutes on Google trying to find the perfect flower and color to give the right sentiments? The light red for the admiration I feel for her and all she has gone through, the white for my gratitude that she is trusting me and giving me a chance and the deep red to convey my growing affections for her. Would this scare her? Maybe one day I'll tell her. "Carnations are unpretentious and naturally beautiful, they reminded me of you."

 

Without all the bells and whistles you are ten times more beautiful to me than any of them."

"I think you're beautiful too." She says so quietly that I barely hear her. Though this gives me some hope and encouragement; that I'm not in this alone.

 

Tonight, it was yellow roses. Friendship with the promise of more.

 

"Well, anyways, Aunty Jem would sit with me and play on the piano for hours. She would go on and on about the depravity and lack of work that goes into modern music. We really bonded over the few months she was with us and even when she went to her new assisted living facility, I would still play. Twice a month, Mom would drive me to Seattle where Aunty Jem and I would play on the piano my parents donated to the facility, just for that purpose. She died four years ago at the ripe old age of a hundred and two. She was buried with her copy of a composition that she and I wrote together, just as her will asked." I smile, yet feel a little melancholy remembering the old Dame who was so important to my life.

 

"Yeah, it's a dinner cruise. We drift around Port Angeles Harbor up to Dungeness Bay, while we enjoy a gourmet Italian dinner." And you my beautiful Bella can't look at the menu and see prices, it's all paid for in advance. "They have live music, some dancing and my Mom says the chocolate cheese cake is the best part." I smile as she giggles.

 

We had talked the whole ride home about the cruise, about plans for the next day. Bella and Emmett were going to be joining us at church in the morning and then have lunch at our house, since Charlie was on duty the whole day.

 

Note to self, Google kissing.

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Date: 20 Oct 2010 1:49 AM Title: Chapter 18

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I still hate that this has to be a group date, but at least Dad said ‘yes'. He's so getting a kick-ass Christmas present.

 

 I turn on the radio and some vintage N'Sync is playing, so I have to get down with my bad self.

 

After staring at the closet a few more minutes I look out to find Bella sitting half awake on her bed playing with Noel.

 

"There wasn't any, I'm sorry." I didn't want to be rude and remind him that he had eaten the one left over taco last night. Maybe we should get Dr. Cullen to test Emmett's memory? Is this the early stages of dementia? Perhaps Dr. Cullen should test him for a tape worm while he's at it. Emmett eats more than anyone I've ever seen. Not that I've seen many people, but still eight tacos, dip and a salad has to be a record.

 

"Thank you." Edward says politely. I love Edward's manners, they remind me of the men in my favorite books. It was dazzling.

 

"He did this odd happy dance, it was kind of scary." Emmett says seriously. "It was this odd jerking and hopping around."

"I thought he needed an ambulance." I add in shyly. I had walked in on Charlie and his "happy dance" and thought something was wrong with Charlie. He kind of looked like he was having a seizure.

"That was pretty funny." Emmett laugh, probably remembering Charlie's face when I went to call 911.

 

"Bella..." He hesitates and I turn to look at him, gently biting my bottom lip. He groans a little and then looks me in the eyes. "I know it's the end of next month, but I was wondering if you'd attend the Homecoming dance with me?" A date?

"A date?" I really need a better filter between my thoughts and what I say.

"Yes." He smiles.

"Ok." I reply with my own smile.

"Ok." He repeats and reaches over and takes hold of my hand.

A small sigh of contentment slips through my lips and the smile doesn't leave my face for the rest of the movie. I know next to nothing about dating and boys. But if this is what it's like; Edward Cullen holding my hand, then I think I really like it. I think... I really like him.

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Date: 20 Oct 2010 1:20 AM Title: Chapter 17

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"Whew, for a second there I thought you meant Edward and Alice dating each other, I was worried. 

 

"Baby sis, you told a joke!" He gets up and gives her a hug and I have to hold back a laugh. Emmett gets so excited whenever Bella jokes and if she picks on him he loves it even more.

 

Esme wanted to go over some ideas. Bella picks up Noel and takes her along.

 

"Wondering what, Edward?" I question him, giving him the look I give suspects that I'm interrogating. He cringes a little and looks to Jasper for support. Jasper doesn't seem to be much of a help though, he is staring at a blade of grass and mumbling to himself.

 

"And, Edward, Bella is fragile. Very fragile." I say honestly. I look at Edward and he is looking up at the second floor window, I turn my head and there you can see Bella looking down at him with a sweet bashful smile. She blushes and turns around. I look back at Edward and he is grinning and suddenly he is standing straighter.

"With all due respect, Charlie," Ahh, so we are back to Charlie instead of Chief Swan; and seem to have recouped our confidence, "I'm well aware of Bella's need to be handled with care, I've been here helping her to heal along with you and Emmett. I would never hurt Bella. She is the sweetest and kindest girl I've ever known. I would do anything to protect her from getting hurt." He stares me in the eyes. "Charlie, most guys my age would have just asked the girl out, I respect you enough to come to you first and ask your permission. I hope that you have enough faith and respect in me to allow me the honor of taking your daughter out." He finishes.

 

Really, it should be called Bella's fence, since it was put in to make her happy. She loved running around the yard with Noel off the leash. It was a sight to see, Bella free and giggling with the little dog trying to keep up on those short legs of hers.

 

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Date: 20 Oct 2010 12:42 AM Title: Chapter 16

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Hey, guys! I got someone who has been at home all day alone." Jasper comes in grinning. He's holding my sweet little Noel in his arms. She's in her cute pink turtle neck sweater Alice bought her and looks so adorable. When she sees me she struggles against Jasper to get down and I move to go to her. She curls into me and I hug her warm furry body tight.

 

Noel and I were walking around the Cullens' vast backyard. She was busy trying to find the perfect spot to do her little business. It was funny, she would sniff then turn her nose up and go to a different spot. At home she has her own area she prefers and I'm guessing being away from her own environment has upset her routine. Which is why we've been doing this for almost five minutes.

 

"Edward?" He turns his head and looks at me again. "Tomorrow, would you sit..." I trail off trying to get the courage to ask him to sit next to me, I feel braver and safer with him next to me. He gives a quick smile.

"Bella, would you do me the honor of sitting with me tomorrow in court?" He does this awkward bow, while still holding onto my hand. I have to laugh, he looks so silly.

"Yes."

"Good, I was scared I'd have to sit with Emmett again, that's no fun. He doesn't smell as sweet as you do." He rushes at me and sniffs my neck making me laugh again. It tickles.

 

"Ahhh." Edward has a gleam in his eyes, when suddenly he rushes up and pick me up tossing me over his shoulder. "I've got you now, my pretty." He gives this fake evil laugh and Noel starts barking as he spins me around. I can't help but laugh.

 

"Oh hell! I fucking like Bella, ok!" I grumble. I still want to fight it, but hell, it's out there now.

"And I like Alice." Jasper says calmly. "And I'm going to ask her out." He also says and I lunge at him. Only I never make contact, because Emmett grabs me and pulls me back.

"Dude, seriously, you want me to kick your ass for liking my sister?" Umm...no. "Listen, here are the rules. You want to date Bella, Jasper gets to date Alice and I get to be in the room when you ask the Dads for permission to take their daughters out." He laughs. Shit! Charlie owns guns. Jasper pales, he must remember that Dad owns a gun too.

"Hurt her, make me an uncle, or have sex with her and die." I tell Jasper.

"Same goes for you, Romeo." Emmett warns me and I nod.

 

"Or we could run. We'd only have to hide out for two years and Bella would be eighteen and Renee wouldn't be able to touch her." This thought comes to my head. "We can go to Europe or Mexico and come back when it's safe."

 

"And, Edward, if Renee walks, you will not go on the run. Charlie and I already have a plan of action. I'd tell you, but the fewer who know about it, the less likely any of us will go to jail." Dad says in a very cool and calm voice. "Trust me though, Renee will be in jail and we won't have to worry about her anymore." He nods at us and goes back up the stairs.

"Dude." Emmett says in awe.

"I know, right?" I add.

 

"It will be ok, baby." I assure her. It's funny, until the guys had pointed it out, I never realized how often I call her ‘baby'. Huh.

 

Emmett suggested we go to Barnes and Nobles. When we got there, I realized why, it was clearly Bella's Disney World. She rushed over to the classical section, a huge smile on her sweet face. At least, I know how to handle Christmas shopping for her.

"See anything you want?" I ask.

"My copy of Jane Eyre fell apart." She gives a small pout, looking at the four different editions of Jane Eyre on the shelf. Ahh, she is trying to decide which one she wants. I can see her fingering a hard back edition, with a pretty dust cover. I can also see the price is thirty dollars. She sighs and walks over to the Dover Thrift Editions section and starts looking at the discounted classics.

 

Mrs. Dwyer, you are a horrible mother and person. If it were within the law for me to sentence you to more time, I would. As it is, I'm giving you the maximum sentence under the law. Eight months for the assault and ten years for the attempted kidnapping. To be served consecutively. I am also adding that no parole can be considered for a period of five years. And there will be a lifetime restraining order to keep you away from Isabella Swan. Go within five hundred feet of her; and go back to jail, Mrs. Dwyer. Court adjourned, bailiff take her away."

"I hope you become big Bertha's bitch!" Alice screams as Renee is being taken away in cuffs. I have to hold back my laughter and from the look on the judge's face as he was leaving, he had to as well.

 

She shakes her head in the negative. "Come on, kiddo." She giggles and it's beautiful and you can tell she is feeling light-hearted and free. My beautiful butterfly, flying free.

I know we still have to face her healing, I know I still have to face my feelings and her father... but for this moment in time, everything was right. Renee was going off to jail, to hopefully become Big Bertha's bitch. And my sweet Bella is giggling and smiling like an angel. I couldn't be happier. I pull out my phone to tell Jasper the news and follow my family to the cars, so we can go get some ice cream.

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Date: 20 Oct 2010 12:08 AM Title: Chapter 15

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Finally, dealing with the wicked bitch of Boston. Or where ever the hell she is from.

 

"Edward." Charlie calls before I leave Dad's study. I turn and he gives a quick Charlie-knows-all grin. "Just be careful, son, things will fall into place in time." I look at him like he's lost his mind and Dad starts to laugh.

"Edward, when you figure out what Charlie just said, things would have already fallen into place and it will no longer be a problem. Just keep it in the back of your mind, son." I nod and look at them like they are both loony before going to find the girls.

 

Happy birthday, Bella. You look enchanting tonight." I say coming over to her at last. I can't help but to take her right hand and kiss it. She giggle and blushes. It's so adorable.

 

Slowly, I kiss her forehead first very gently. Then whisper in her ear, "Don't worry, sweet Bella." Before lightly brushing my lips against hers. A jolt of electricity jumps through me and I'm guessing Bella because we both pulled away and looked at each other in amazement. She, of course, blushes and I wink, because it just felt right to do. She gives a little giggle, bites her bottom lip and looks at me from under her eyelashes. It's like we are in a bubble of our own making. I didn't deepen the kiss, now wasn't the time or the place. I wasn't even sure this was a good idea. Bella is so fragile and this life is all so new to her.

 

Vicky gave me a cute outfit for Noel. Smart girl giving me something for my baby instead of for me, I actually hugged her for it.

 

"Well, you might need this to go with it." He thrust a small package into my hand and I rip it open to find a new Ipod, eight gigabytes. And it was purple. I love it. I give an Alice squeal and hug Emmett.

"Thank you!"

"You'd think she likes it better than the car." Carlisle jokes with Charlie who laughs and nods.

 

"You are very welcome, now open it." He laughs and I roll my eyes and open it. Inside is a bracelet, sort of like a charm bracelet, only this one has different forms of butterflies in soft colors. It's beautiful. Edward leans over in my ear he whispers, "For my beautiful butterfly, just emerging from her cocoon and learning how to fly. You're free now, baby." A tear comes to my eye and I hug him tight.

"I... I love it." He squeezes me back. Of all my gifts, I know this one I will treasure forever.

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Date: 19 Oct 2010 11:07 PM Title: Chapter 13

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"Tanya, you're a bitch. Bella let's go." He grabs my hand and begins to walk us away.

"Eddie, call me later, we can make a play date." She giggles, "I have to be more fun than the mute." Mute? Was she talking about me or someone else?

"I'll tell you what, Tanya. You go home and wait by the phone for the call. Stay there until it comes in. That way I never have to see you again." He gives her an evil grin

 

"Alice will like you even if you tell her ‘no'. And if she pushes, let me know and I'll tell her ‘no' for you, ok?" He gives a smile.

"Honestly she won't hate me for saying ‘no'?" I like a lot of the things Alice puts me in, but there are some things in my closet that are too tight and too low cut for my taste. I just don't feel comfortable showing too much skin. I have scars I'd prefer the world didn't see.

"She won't hate you for it, I promise, baby." He pulls a hand off the wheel and lightly pats my thigh. His touch shoots electric sparks. It's startling, but feels good.

 

"Yeah." She moans, "but I'm going to kick Emmett's ass once I can walk again." Ok then.

"Ok." I really don't know what else to say to that. I mean, it would be awfully rude if I told her that I'm not sure she is even tall enough to reach Emmett's butt in the first place. Should I offer her a step stool?

 

I want my bed and my Mom. My tummy hurts." Alice pouts. She has a weak stomach and I swear she is the biggest baby about puking. She always wants Mom afterwards. You'd think she'd want her doctor father, but no. Mom gives her ice cream and they watch silly Disney movies.

 

I was a little sad. I kind of wanted to show off my pretty purple backpack.

 

They were really proud of this site. They talked about it for fifteen minutes. I know, I timed it on the Timex watch Charlie bought me.

 

Sometimes, I wish I had an Aliceism dictionary. Not that I'd tell her that. I wouldn't want to hurt her feelings or make her want to stop being BFFs with me. So, I just smile and pretend to understand what she is saying. And sometimes, if it's really confusing, I ask Edward what she'd meant later in private. He is always so sweet to me.

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Date: 19 Oct 2010 10:10 PM Title: Chapter 12

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"A mad man holds you hostage and you are asking how I am? Sweet Bella, you have to be the most selfless person alive." He gently kisses my forehead before sitting down in a chair beside me. The kiss had sent sparks through my body. I blush, then look at Edward with my peripheral vision. Edward had an odd look on his face. He seemed torn and confused all at once.

 

"That's how BFFs dress." Bella informs her as well. Alice has brainwashed my baby sister, she can now spout off Alice-isms off the top of her head.

 

In fact, we stood in an awkward silence watching Emmett's advance on Rosalie and this Dorkie guy. I felt bad for the guy, his parents must not have liked him that much to name him Dorkie.

 

We agree and Edward and I take off to look for Emmett. I give a small hidden smile when he takes my hand in his. I love it when he does that.

 

 He gives me a hug. And I felt my body tingling all over. I really didn't want the hug to end. 

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Date: 19 Oct 2010 9:51 PM Title: Chapter 11

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"Noel!" Bella yells. "He threw her into the wall." She turns to the shut closet door and opens it. Little Noel is laying there in a ball whining, "Noel?" Bella says softly the pup's head pops up.

"Be careful, Bella, injured dogs can bite even the ones they love the most." Dad warns.

"Noel." She says softly sitting on the ground beside the dog. Noel gets to her little feet and hobbles over to climb on Bella's lap. Bella picks the dog up to her chest and rocks her like a mother would her newborn baby. I couldn't hear what she was saying exactly, but Bella was cooing softly to her puppy.

 

"He hurt Noel." Bella tells him, carrying her puppy over to Edward.

"We'll take her to the vet's to get her checked out, ok?" Edward says softly, smiling reassuringly at my sister.

"Ok." She whispers, tears brimming her eyes again.

"Shock..." Carlisle says automatically, just as Bella's slight frame starts shaking.

Edward gently takes Noel out of her arms just as Carlisle takes over. He sits Bella on her bed and talks calmly to her. Her head is shaking badly and body is thrashing wildly. Noel whines from Edward's arms and I feel like my gut is being ripped out.

 

Before I even have the chance to do it myself, Edward picks Bella up and carries her, bridal style, out of the room.

 

Without thinking, I rushed forward and slammed my fist into his nose, you could hear the crunch. If felt so damn good to do. I then slammed my fist into his stomach; he doubled over and screamed in pain, landing on his knees and his head bent over. That's when I noticed the blood. Blood that wasn't coming from his now broken nose.

"Edward, back off." Mark tells me, "Carlisle, do you want to take a look at him, Charlie had to shoot him. He pulled a gun on him." Dad, who is generally the most compassionate man I know, looks at the piece of shit in front of us and shakes his head in negative.

"The ambulance is right there, the medics can do their job. I can't touch him. I don't feel like getting sued for malpractice, because this man feels I didn't do a good enough job, due to my connections with the Swan family." Nice one Dad. Dad goes inside the house and before I follow, knowing no one is going to stop me now, I take a sharp hard kick into Phil's groin. He screams again.

 

So, I did the one thing I could for her, I went and got a warm cloth to wipe away her tears. Then I carried her out of the house and put her into the back of the Volvo with Noel curled up in the passenger seat beside me. I drove them both to my home. When I got there and had Bella safe with my Mom and Alice, I called the vet and brought Noel in to see her. I knew Bella would want Noel taken care of right away.

 

An hour and a hefty vet fee later, Noel was proclaimed fine. She maybe a little achy I was told, but there were no fractures or broken bones. So, I loaded her back into the Volvo, where she sat in the passenger seat again. When I told her I was taking her to see Bella, I swear she began to look at me adoringly and seemed to glow with happiness, which was cute and weird all at the same time.

 

Mom hangs up the phone and walks over to me. "Hi, honey, how is Noel?" Mom asks with real concern, picking Noel up to give her love.

"Just a little sore, but no real damage done. 

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Date: 19 Oct 2010 9:24 PM Title: Chapter 10

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"Hey now, none of that." He pushes aside my apology, "I just wondered if you'd mind some company, in the form of this little lady who has been sitting outside your bedroom door." He opens the door further and Noel rushes in. I pull her to me and she licks my face.

 

I move quickly taking a fast shower and getting Noel's meal ready for her. She is so sweet waiting patiently, her tiny face under all that hair seems to be happy and glowing. She eats her food and walks back over to me, asking to be picked up. She likes to be lazy and have me carry her around. I put her harness on to walk out into the back yard so she could relieve herself and stopped cold.

The whole back yard was now fenced. I blink because I'm stunned and not sure I'm really seeing this. But it really is fenced. I let Noel off her lead so she can run around. I have almost all of this month and some of last month's allowance money left, next chance I get, I'm going to buy a toy or two to play with her in the backyard with. Maybe a soft ball would be nice, or a squishy little bone she can play fetch with.

Noel stands there looking at me and I have to laugh internally, she doesn't realize she is free to roam. I take off in a slow run around the yard and she follows. My ever faithful baby, keeping pace with me as best as she could with her little legs. I slow even more and I swear her eyes flash with gratitude.

 

I bring Noel back inside for some water and a puppy treat. She accepts both then runs her little self into the living room and barks at the TV. My poor baby is addicted to the television. She is barking to let me know it is off and she wants it on. And being the over indulgent puppy-mommy that I am, I turn the TV on to Animal Planet and watch the funny animal video show with Noel curled in my lap.

 

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Date: 19 Oct 2010 9:03 PM Title: Chapter 9

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"Edward has bronze hair, not ginger." She says firmly.

"Ok, ok." Em looks at me a little smirk playing on his mouth. He loves to get her going. And Bella has been even more overprotective of Edward since he gave her Noel.

 

"It's nothing, Chief, though if you pay her for grades like you do Emmett, you might need to get a second job, the girl is a straight-A student." I had to laugh, everyone knew about my paying Em for grades. I also felt damn proud that my baby girl was so smart.

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Date: 19 Oct 2010 8:30 PM Title: Chapter 8

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Esme had called me late last night to let me know that the kids were all passed out asleep in Edward's room. From what she said, they all had disappeared from Edward's party and when she and Carlisle went looking for them, they were found spread out around Edward's room with a movie going and a whole lot of snoring. She also told me she took pictures so I can see later.

 

My sweet Bella, when the boys brought me dinner the other night and said she had made it and had especially made up a to go plate for me, hell, it warmed my old heart. For someone who has gone through heaven knows what kind of horrors in her young life, to put others' needs before herself; and she did so without even having to be asked was just amazing. I was coming to realize that my daughter was an extremely caring and responsible individual; so vastly different from her mother. Thank God.

 

"It was ok, a lot of food and music. And I danced with Edward." She smiles and I swear she is glowing. Uh-oh, I owe Carlisle ten bucks. Damn!

"I've never danced with someone before. He was really sweet and patient when I stepped on his feet." She gives a cute little giggle. I swear that was the longest sentence I've ever heard her say all at once.

 

The next morning after my birthday, once Jasper, Emmett and Bella had left to go home, I went back up to my room and was stunned to find a book on my bed. It was the complete works of Jane Austen and inside was a note:

No matter how hard life gets, these stories always have a way

of making me happy. I hope you can find joy in them too.

Bella

I felt privileged that she shared something that personal with me. In her own sweet way, she was giving me access to her happy place. The place she went when life was shitty. Of all the gifts I received, I knew this one was my favorite. Though it was girlie and not something you'd normally give a seventeen year old guy, still it was truly from the heart. I knew I'd cherish it always. I slowly laid on my bed and opened the book. I folded the note and placed in the back of the book before laying down to get lost in Bella's happy place.

 

Bella she just stepped back and gave me this pissed off little look. It sort of said, 'I want to yell at you but I won't, I'll just glare instead'.

 

"Bubba couldn't come." Bella pouts a little.

"Huh?" I was lost.

"My dog, he wasn't allowed to come." Vicky explains with a chuckle, "Bella tried to argue that he could be her date, but my Dad explained that the fireworks later would scare him too much."

"Bella is in love with that dog." Emmett tells me.

"He's sweet." Bella smiles.

 

"Cullen." Jacob says in a cold dead voice to Edward. The fact that he is looking at Edward like he wants to hurt him, makes me take an immediate dislike for this Jacob boy.

"Bella, sweetheart, come on." Edward pulls me gently away, his hand now holding mine. I can feel my body begin to relax.

"Thank you." I whisper gently to him.

"For what?" He asks looking at me.

"He..." I don't know how to put it. What if it was a trick? But Edward makes me feel so safe.

"What is it, baby?" A chill went up my spine when he calls me that. I don't think he even notices.

 

Edward comes in cuddling this ball of white fluff to his chest. He smiles and walks over to me; kneeling down in front of me he gently places it on my lap.

"She's for you; she'll only get a little bit bigger." I look down and realize it's a puppy. A sweet beautiful ball of white fluffy puppy.

"Me?" Is all I can say.

"Yes, you." He laughs gently, "It's a thank you for going with us and also a homecoming gift. Your home now, Bella Swan." He pats my knee and I look in his warm green eyes, the puppy whines and I lift her up.

"Can I keep her?" I ask Charlie, who is grinning like a crazy.

"Yep, Edward already told me he was getting her for you."

"Thank you." A tear slips down my cheek.

"What are you going to name her?" Emmett asks.

"Noel." I whisper pulling her close. Every year I always wished for a puppy, or kitty at Christmas and birthdays. I always said for a boy it would be Bingley and a girl would be Noel.

"I think she likes her name." Edward says as the puppy starts licking my fingers.

I cuddled with my new baby and promised her I would never let her get hurt, or feel alone. I made a mental note to go to the library and get books on puppy care. Oh and I have the internet. Google, I can search about puppies!

"Can she sleep in my bed?" I ask Charlie. He nods.

 

Before long, Emmett is back with a box that Charlie motions that it's for me. Inside was a pink collar, a pink puppy harness and leash set. A cute pink and white feeder and some puppy food. Charlie had done this for me. I set Noel on Edward's lap and rush over to Charlie. I spontaneously throw my arms around him in a hug.

"Thank you, Charlie." I say softly into his ear.

 

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Date: 19 Oct 2010 8:06 PM Title: Chapter 7

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"Happy Birthday." Bella says in her sweet hushed tones.

"Thanks." I smile at her and she blushes again. She is so freaking adorable.

"Bella made you a treat for your birthday breakfast." Alice cheers and produces a platter of Danishes.

"Wow! Seriously if there is cherry in there, I'll love you for the rest of my life." I exclaim.

"Cherry and blueberry." She blushes harder and then points to one side then the other of the platter.

"Son, I suggest you get one and start eating. We weren't allowed to have any until you got one and I've been waiting an hour now." Dad says seriously, looking at the platter with longing. I grab one of the cherry filled pastries and I think my mouth just had an orgasm, "Fuck! That's good." I moan.

"Edward, language!" Mom says her scolding voice.

"Fuck, that is good." Dad repeats my words around a blueberry pastry. Mom smacks him and Alice and Bella giggle.

"Carlisle! You are a bad example for our children." She admonishes then takes a blueberry and moans into it.

"Bella, dear, these are wonderful." Mom tells her and Bella glows.

 

Your Mother is the most wonderful loving woman and the love of my life, but there are times when she scares the shit out of me and I hide like a two year old scared of being scolded." He says with a loving smile.

 

"Ok, so we fish." I smile and laugh knowing that I will never have to do this silly hiding out. Of course, eight years later I would have to eat my own words and I also sent my Dad and Charlie thank you cards after it happened. But that is a tale for another time. (I hope we get to hear that tale)

 

 He looks like the 'king of beige land' in his khaki pants and lightly stripped button up.

 

Emmett, Jasper and I put out the word very quickly that anyone who fucks with Bella would be dead. Newton did his all American boy, 'I mean no harm, but I am thinking dirty thoughts about you' flirt with her. Bella just blushed then hid behind me. I pulled him aside later and explained that flirting with Bella will land him with just as many broken bones as flirting with Alice. Actually, probably more, since Emmett would probably want to handle him. Newton backed off though. He's not a bad guy, just a major flirt who loves shiny new things. Be it a person or a toy.

 

But Lauren never got a chance to answer because Edward came in like a white knight to save me. He called my name and I rushed to his side.

 

"I don't want to talk about it." Bella whispers, "I just want to go home." I look at her sad little face and I can't help it. I walk over and pull her back into my arms. She curls into my body and I know then and there that I would rather die than see her hurt. That I would kill to protect her. Somehow this little fragile girl had become an important part of my very existence. I'm not sure what this means or why I feel so protective of her, but I am. She matters and I didn't want her to leave.

"Bella," I say gently and her beautiful brown eyes look up at me, "How about we go upstairs and put a movie in, eat a ton of junk food and pretend these people aren't down here enjoying my birthday more than I am?"

"But it's your party." She whispers.

"A party that Alice wanted; not me." Alice giggles and nods.

"It's true, all me."

"We can give you your gifts. I'll go grab them." Jasper says with a smile.

"I'll get the food." Alice offers.

"I'll help Alice." Victoria says. The two of them going towards the kitchen.

"Hey, I'll be right back." Emmett says giving me a look. I knew where he was going. I nod letting him know that I won't leave her side.

"Come on, Bella, let's go pick out the movie before Alice gets up there and we have to watch Raising Helen again." She giggles and follows me up the stairs, her little hand firmly held in mine.

 

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Date: 19 Oct 2010 7:27 PM Title: Chapter 6

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"Work was fine. I avoided the two banes of my existence Nurse Stanley and Nurse Mallory." We shared our usual joke; Carlisle is a devoted family man who is madly in love with his wife. All, but two of the women on staff at the hospital, respect that. In fact, he has a wonderful working relationship with everyone except Stanley and Mallory, or as he calls them slutty nurse one and slutty nurse two.

 

I was a little shocked that after we sat down, a huge black lab came rushing out tongue dangling out of its mouth. The dog took one look at Bella and rushes over to her. Bella looks longingly at the dog.

"Can I pet him?" She asks softly of Vicky, her eyes almost pleading.

"Of course! Bubba, meet Bella." Vicky laughs as the dog reaches its paw towards Bella to shake, "It's his favorite trick, greeting people." Bella giggles and shakes the dogs paw. And I can tell it is love for both of them at first sight. My shy and reserved little sister is cuddling and cooing with a dog almost as large as she is.

"Looks like you made a friend, Bella." I joke. She gives me the cutest goofy grin.

"I always wanted a pet." She says simply. Vicky grins at me and winks.

"Bella, if you want to take Bubba to the back yard and play with his toys, he has a Frisbee and a baseball that if you toss them for him he'll fetch. It's fenced in completely, so it's ok for him to be loose." Bella nods enthusiastically.

"Yes, please." Vicky shows her outside and I can't stop smiling. Somehow the dog made her act like a normal carefree teenager. I stand up when Vicky comes back in.

"I can't wait to tell my Dad his dog wants to leave him for a younger woman." She jokes I laugh and follow her to the door.

 

"And the dog kept bringing it back over and over again." Bella laughs as she recounts her morning activities to Jasper on our way to Port Angeles.

"Sounds like you had a blast, Bella." He smiles.

"It was so much fun." She says in one of the happiest voices I've ever heard her use. Playing with the dog has brought a flush to her skin; she is almost glowing with her pleasure. It's so sweet. Now she is just staring out the window smiling, I think day dreaming about playing with Bubba again. Jazz smiles at me and I have to smile back we are both happy that she is happy right now.

 

"Don't hurt Edward." She huffs cutely and stares at him. I think Emmett is a little scared.

"I won't, I promise, Bella." She smiles sweetly like her little show of strength never happened.

"Ok." And back to her timid voice. Apparently the one way to piss off Bella is to threaten Edward, because she said nothing about staying out of trouble.

 

"Wow." Jasper laughs lightly.

"I know! Clearly if you hurt Edward, you face the wrath of Esme and Bella." I joke.

 

"Cheese taco dip." She says. I grab a chip and dip it. And, oh my God, I'm planning on going lesbian and marrying Bella if she cooks this for me at least twice a week.

 

"Dad is going to be sad he missed this." Emmett is leaning back rubbing his stomach after downing six tacos.

"I know, old man lost out." Jazz laughs. He downed six as well. Good thing Bella made enough for an army. She looks around goes to the cabinets pulls out one of those divided Tupperware things. She fixes three tacos up on one side and scoops a little bit of the left over dip on the other and puts some of the chips in a baggie.

"Umm... when you go out could you..."She stops and looks at her feet biting her lip.

"You want us to take that to Charlie?" Edward asks reading her mind.

"Please." She smiles at him.

"No problem, Bella." He smiles back.

 

"Ok." With a small nod she starts filling out the Facebook info. I help her to find and add me and the guys. I also get her to add Mom because I know it will make her day, Dad doesn't have Facebook.

 

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Date: 19 Oct 2010 6:36 PM Title: Chapter 5

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I was still hoping that some of those people on there are using stage names or nicknames, if not, their Mothers must have hated them as much as Renee hates me. Really, who names their child Ludicris or Lil' Bow Wow and actually loves the child? Automatically the children are going to get picked on in school for their names alone. No loving parent wants that.    Not going to happen, you over processed slutty blond woman.

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Date: 19 Oct 2010 6:12 PM Title: Chapter 4

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Then he took his first bite of pancakes and gross I think we just all witnessed Dad's orgasm face.   He takes the plate from Bella and gives her a sweet smile, "You look very pretty this morning, little one." And she blushes harder. I cover my laugh in a cough.

"Thank you." She says shyly. Aww... so cute. Edward sat down and took a bite of the pancakes.

"Holy shit! These are even better than Mom's." Bella gets the cutest grin on her face at his praise.

"Thank you." She says again.

 

"Ok, thanks so much for these kick ass pancakes, Bella." I gently rubbed my hand on the top of her head and she gave me a soft grin.

"Thank you." Ok generally people say you're welcome but if that is what works for Bella, I'll deal with it.

 
Uh no, horny teenage boy, you are not coming near my baby sister.

"She'll be sixteen in September." I keep my smug grin to myself, "It's so cool how quickly she and Edward hit it off." Jake looks depressed.

 

Dumb question, but she was throwing me off by acting like I was the boogey man.

 

"I have to say, Edward was right. You are adorable." She blushes but I swear when I say old Eddie's name, a small gleam comes into her eyes and she seems to relax.

"Edward is coming over?" She looks at Em asking.

"I think he's stuck doing family shit tonight, kiddo." He pats her on the head and her little face falls. I swear it's like we took away her doll or cotton candy.

 

Out of nowhere Bella looks at Charlie and sadly says, "Edward isn't coming."

"Aww, sweetheart. Alice and Edward have to go home sometime. You'll see them tomorrow. I promised Esme we'd have dinner at their house." And the kid comes back to life.

"Ok," She gives a small shy grin again.

 

"Edward, how can we make this look older?" I ask my son as we look at the new laptop I just bought for Bella. I knew she would need something decent for school and I didn't want Charlie to waste money on it. I know he's saving to send both of his kids to college.

"Peel the stickers off?" Edward, my partner in crime in this effort, says.

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Date: 19 Oct 2010 5:49 PM Title: Chapter 3

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"Yep, she told pretty boy over here she prefers to be called Bella. It seems if we want her to talk all we have to do is have Edward around." Em laughs.

"Well, alright then." Charlie looks a little uncomfortable and gives me a small assessing look, "If it had to be any guy, I guess she at least picked the best." He mumbles. What the hell? Bella is just a sweet little girl and she needed reassurance and I gave it to her. That is all.

 

 

Bella finished up her plate long after the rest of us were done. Sorry, let me rectify that; long after everyone but Edward was done. He had gone back for seconds and took the longest time eating it, so she wasn't left eating alone. He had the gentlest look about him when he gazed at her. He also seemed to be almost on guard, as if one wrong move towards Bella and he'd kill or maim someone.

"No, Rose, you just reworded your earlier insult. God, Rose, she is scared of her own shadow and you made her uncomfortable in her own home. You are so lucky no one told Charlie."

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Date: 19 Oct 2010 5:04 PM Title: Chapter 2

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"Rosalie, you are such a bitch!" He was growling. Holy shit! I didn't know he could do that. Edward, big brother, don't do that for the girls at school they'll try to rape you.

 

"Listen, Bella," Rose says coming at Bella, who has moved to stand slightly behind me. She is also positioned to run up the stairs. This girl has mad escapage skills I think,

 

"Rosalie, your fucking apology sounded like the same insult worded differently. God! Can't you see how fucking timid and scared my sister is?" He's pissed. Emmett has always been the champion of the weak and I think because this one is family, he is more so. Though what comes out of his mouth next shocks the shit out of me, "Listen, Rosie, I love you, but I think maybe you should go home for now. Bella doesn't feel comfortable around you right now and honestly, I'm pissed off that you were so mean to my baby sister. Intentional or not."

"Emmett!" She sounds shocked. I don't think anyone has ever asked Rose to leave before.

"No, Rose, you need to realize that your actions and words do affect people. You need to find a filter. Just because you are the hottest woman on earth, it doesn't give you the right to say anything at anytime."

Go, Em. I mean, don't get me wrong, I love Rose like a sister but that wasn't cool what she did to Bella.

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Date: 19 Oct 2010 4:32 PM Title: Chapter 1

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and Edward won the carpet cleaner. He loves a carpet cleaner. I think he gets off every time he dumps the dirty water tank down the drain. He makes everyone come and see just how fucking dirty that area was. Right now, he is downstairs chomping at the bit to get it going. We made him wait downstairs because he was driving everyone nuts about us not being done yet so he can start the cleaner. He claims it's because he was worried it wouldn't be dry in time. We all know the truth though... the carpet cleaner is his secret lover.   Edward joked coming up the stairs with his carpet cleaner.

"We're not ready for that yet." I told him.

"Yeah, yeah. I just was bringing her up so she's ready to go." Sadly I think he's caressing the handle bar.

 

 Edward was spending the night since he was passed out on the sofa. I think the bliss from using his carpet cleaner wore him out.


 

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Date: 11 Oct 2010 1:42 AM Title: Chapter 27

Great story! Can't wait for the next chapter.

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Date: 10 Oct 2010 9:51 PM Title: Chapter 19

I really am liking your story. I have had tears in my eyes half the time. Great job.

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Date: 04 Oct 2010 11:42 AM Title: Chapter 23

You are very brave to share that with all of us. This story does read like it comes from a very real place.  Thank you for writing it!

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Date: 03 Oct 2010 10:49 PM Title: Chapter 19

That was a very creative date.  Very romantic -- just what I would expect of young Edward.  I hope they practice kissing some more soon!

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Date: 03 Oct 2010 10:36 PM Title: Chapter 18

I can't believe that Bella didn't realize it was a date.  I am glad she wised up.  Hand-holding and dances!  Can't wait for more!

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Date: 02 Oct 2010 2:45 AM Title: Chapter 9

I was so worried about what Bella alluded to a little while ago.  I am sorry she had to see Renee again, but its nice to know that Renee is starting to get some of her just desserts.

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