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Reviewer: Canadaci Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23 Aug 2010 10:15 PM Title: Chapter 15

Your stories are to be commended.  They are so original and good.  I contiune to look forward to reading them.  Thanks for the excellent entertainment.

Reviewer: Canadaci Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 22 Aug 2010 5:42 PM Title: Chapter 7

OMG, so many girls/ladies.  He was a sick SOB.



Author's Response:

Thank you for All the reviews to this story. I am currently working on the next chapter and hope to get it up next week. Alistair always creeped me out in the book, it seemed fitting! Thank you again!

Reviewer: Canadaci Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 22 Aug 2010 5:00 PM Title: Chapter 6

Alice and Walmart it doesn't get any better. 

Reviewer: Canadaci Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 22 Aug 2010 4:33 PM Title: Chapter 5

Reilly or James?

Reviewer: Canadaci Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 22 Aug 2010 3:18 PM Title: Chapter 2

Great chapter.

Reviewer: Canadaci Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 22 Aug 2010 3:05 PM Title: Chapter 1

WOW, this is very interesting.  I am looking forward to reading on!

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Aug 2010 4:55 AM Title: Chapter 16

Wonderfully action packed  and emotional chapters.  Alec?!  Who knew!!  Great turn there.  Sorry it took so long to catch up.  Ah, vacation! 

Reviewer: dispatchangel911 Signed [Report This]
Date: 02 Aug 2010 3:19 PM Title: Chapter 16

love your story!

Reviewer: sarahlynn81 Signed [Report This]
Date: 02 Aug 2010 3:00 PM Title: Chapter 16

love this story!! can't wait for the next chap!!

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Aug 2010 9:21 PM Title: Chapter 16

jane is going to be trouble

Reviewer: Sunshine Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Aug 2010 8:26 PM Title: Chapter 15

Please do continue this story.  I am still enjoying reading it.

Reviewer: LittleMoCUllen Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Aug 2010 7:57 PM Title: Chapter 16

Loved it ! Thanks for the updates :D

Reviewer: vdl17 Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Aug 2010 1:26 AM Title: Chapter 15

please finish this one first. i always wait for your updates and will like to read this story to the end.

Reviewer: Berrug243 Signed [Report This]
Date: 31 Jul 2010 8:55 AM Title: Chapter 15

I am loving this story. Please continue writing
Thanks

B

Reviewer: elizabethjulia Signed [Report This]
Date: 31 Jul 2010 5:12 AM Title: Chapter 15

finish please

Reviewer: BELLWARDC Signed [Report This]
Date: 31 Jul 2010 3:32 AM Title: Chapter 15

Great chapter.

Reviewer: SammyJo Signed [Report This]
Date: 31 Jul 2010 3:20 AM Title: Chapter 15

Good chapter.

Reviewer: ldyidori Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 Jul 2010 11:33 PM Title: Chapter 15

awesome chappy please continue

Reviewer: Momof4 Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 Jul 2010 10:57 PM Title: Chapter 1

Great Chapter.  Keep the story going.



Author's Response:

Since so many have asked it will continue. with all the all human stories being written i wasn't sure if people wanted the vampire ones to continue and thats why i asked what you people wanted. i cant give you what you want if i dont know but now i do so i will carry it full circle. next chapter is already half done and will be up in a few days. thanks for reading it. nails233

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 Jul 2010 9:22 PM Title: Chapter 15

I think that this kind of blackmail is offensive. I have favorited your story, which meant I was interested in reading it. But please yourself, if you don't want to continue, stop. I'll survive. For sure I'll not read anything else from you, because you don't respect readers.



Author's Response:

I am sorry you feel that way. I dont see where asking for the opinion of the readers is concidered blackmail or disrespecting. Where I come from it's called giving the readers what they want. All I asked was for your opinion if the story should continue. I am sorry you feel the need to stop reading my story because I asked for your opinion.

Reviewer: Alice R Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 Jul 2010 8:36 PM Title: Chapter 15

:D :D :D 

Please please please update soon soon soon..*

:D :D :D 

Please please please..*

:D :D :D 

Alice R..*

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 Jul 2010 7:17 PM Title: Chapter 15

ohh bree is with a Volturi I guess.

Reviewer: warnersl Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 30 Jul 2010 6:54 PM Title: Chapter 15

Great chapter! I hate the hangers though! You should feel ashamed for putting us through that.

Reviewer: leslieljs713 Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 Jul 2010 6:24 PM Title: Chapter 15

Of course I like this story and want you to continue! I know I'm a bad reviewer, but I read every update!  Can't wait to read more.



Author's Response:

You are forgiven. I know I dont always do it either but I am working on being better at it. I just needed to know if everyone wanted it. It looks like everyone so far is really enjoying this story so I think it will see its full cycle. I have so many twists to come I hope you enjoy them.

Reviewer: Melinda the Proud Bookworm Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 Jul 2010 6:16 PM Title: Chapter 15

I skimmed this chapter and hope to come back to it when I have more time. Just a thought- each character needs a new paragraph when speaking. It's hard to keep track of who is talking when it is formatted the way you have it.

Author's Response:

Please dont hesitate to tell me when I do something confusing. I dont want my work to be junkie and unreadable. So I have fixed those conversations and when you reread it, you will no problems - i hope. Thanks for skimming ti! i hope you enjoy it later!

Reviewer: Thatstheway Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Jul 2010 8:44 PM Title: Chapter 1

When you say dark, you mean dark, don't you.  Glad Bella and the two other girls were found.  Sounds like their master was a vamp, and drank from Bella.  Who was the master??  Oh sh*t  this is going to be a twisted story and the girls have a long way to go to come back to normalcy.  Good start.



Author's Response:

No it wont be too twisted. but it is the darkest i have written but i try not to make it too too dark. Hope you like it! thanks for reading it.

Reviewer: LittleMoCUllen Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23 Jul 2010 5:58 AM Title: Chapter 14

Cant wait for the update :D

Reviewer: LittleMoCUllen Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Jul 2010 5:54 AM Title: Chapter 13

Crazy! wow! loved it :D

Reviewer: LittleMoCUllen Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23 Jul 2010 5:49 AM Title: Chapter 12

good chapter :D

Reviewer: LittleMoCUllen Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23 Jul 2010 5:30 AM Title: Chapter 11

A++++

Reviewer: LittleMoCUllen Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23 Jul 2010 4:34 AM Title: Chapter 10

ah oh what gonna happen to Bella?.......ok reading on... cuz i need to know . PS again i really like this fic

Reviewer: LittleMoCUllen Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23 Jul 2010 4:11 AM Title: Chapter 9

Dang! that was a little intence...ok movie on so i can get caought up :D

Reviewer: LittleMoCUllen Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23 Jul 2010 3:58 AM Title: Chapter 8

Loved it as always

Reviewer: LittleMoCUllen Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23 Jul 2010 3:31 AM Title: Chapter 7

well u did not upset me. I love this fic. Its diffrent ;)

Reviewer: LittleMoCUllen Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23 Jul 2010 2:58 AM Title: Chapter 6

loved it :)

Reviewer: LittleMoCUllen Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23 Jul 2010 2:28 AM Title: Chapter 5

Huhh?! ok moveing to the next chapter to find out that going on :)

Reviewer: LittleMoCUllen Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23 Jul 2010 2:03 AM Title: Chapter 4

A+++ I loved it

Reviewer: LittleMoCUllen Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23 Jul 2010 1:28 AM Title: Chapter 3

go get em Edward :D

Reviewer: LittleMoCUllen Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23 Jul 2010 12:53 AM Title: Chapter 2

Holly WOW l Loved! ... not cuz what happend to her but its really good   :D



Author's Response:

Thank so much for reading it. I am really glad you found this site! It's really awesome and they are very supportive here. Next chapter is in the works. nails233

Reviewer: LittleMoCUllen Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23 Jul 2010 12:36 AM Title: Chapter 1

Im new to this sight . wanted to see what was here and i found your fic and so far i really like it :) I cant wait to get caought up

Reviewer: fleur50 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 19 Jul 2010 3:29 PM Title: Chapter 14

passionnant...

Reviewer: fleur50 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 19 Jul 2010 3:28 PM Title: Chapter 13

superbe!

Reviewer: ldyidori Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Jul 2010 3:06 PM Title: Chapter 14

intersting chappy and who is brees mysery vamp ;)

Reviewer: edwardbabymomma Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Jul 2010 7:33 AM Title: Chapter 14

I'm confused about who Bree is meeting up with, whoever it is called her love. OMG! Please tell me its not my babydaddy! Great Chapter

Reviewer: BELLWARDC Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Jul 2010 4:35 AM Title: Chapter 14

Great story so far.

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Jul 2010 1:44 AM Title: Chapter 14

As always...lovin' it!  You're pulling a larger family together now.  Wonderful!

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Jul 2010 11:32 PM Title: Chapter 14

good chapter

Reviewer: halloweenlover Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Jul 2010 10:29 PM Title: Chapter 14

loved it

Reviewer: edwardbabymomma Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Jul 2010 7:14 PM Title: Chapter 13

Great Chapter

Reviewer: old bat Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jul 2010 11:08 PM Title: Chapter 13

Sorry to hear about the surgery, glad to know you seem to be doing better. Don't like the cliff hanger. Are there any fans that do?

Reviewer: sarahlynn81 Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Jul 2010 2:41 PM Title: Chapter 13

Great story!! Can't wait to read more!

Reviewer: kiwivampire Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Jul 2010 6:00 AM Title: Chapter 13

ohhhh  getting real exciting  yay!  Hope you are feeling better now

:0)

Reviewer: SammyJo Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Jul 2010 2:14 AM Title: Chapter 13

Good chapter, but a little confused at the end.



Author's Response:

Sorry about that! it was meant to be that way because right now they're confused too. All will be straightened out next chapter

 

Reviewer: Footroza Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Jul 2010 7:45 PM Title: Chapter 13

oh no.. SETH!!... I am glad he is being protective.. but Jasper is going to kill him.. lol.

 

I am so sad this is the last chapter for now.. I am sorry about your surgery. I hope you are feeling better. 

Can't wait to here what happens.  Great job.

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Jul 2010 7:34 PM Title: Chapter 13

Glad Bella is feeling better.

Reviewer: Footroza Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Jul 2010 5:26 PM Title: Chapter 5

oh gosh.. who is this... scary...

 

Great chapter.. you do DARK very well.

Reviewer: Footroza Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Jul 2010 4:01 PM Title: Chapter 2

shiver....shiver ... shiver.

Great job.

Reviewer: Footroza Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Jul 2010 3:53 PM Title: Chapter 1

oh gosh.. I have been waiting to read this until you had more chapters loaded.. at eight.. I couldn't wait anymore.. hahaha.. and you did not disappoint.. this is going to be a scary fun ride.  yippeeee!!

Love it.

 

Reviewer: SammyJo Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Jun 2010 2:32 PM Title: Chapter 12

Good chapter.  Why would Bree think that Bella was the protected one and not Stella?

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Jun 2010 5:20 AM Title: Chapter 12

esme is so smart

Reviewer: jaijaimays Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Jun 2010 1:33 AM Title: Chapter 12

I LOVE THIS STORY, CANT WAIT TIL U UPDATE AGAIN!

Reviewer: edwardbabymomma Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Jun 2010 1:15 AM Title: Chapter 12

Great Chapter

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Jun 2010 12:41 PM Title: Chapter 12

Ah Esme started the ball rolling alright!  Nice, very, very nice!  I love the way you bring us through the relationships anhd then hit us with the heavy outside drama.  It works so well!

Reviewer: thackebeil1 Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Jun 2010 12:28 AM Title: Chapter 12

Oh my Bree is an evil little bitch isn't she. Bella wasn't too protected, she still managed to get her ass kick by The Master. He may not have let anyone else hurt her but he certainly did.

Reviewer: Sherry80 Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Jun 2010 8:25 PM Title: Chapter 12

great chapter she is coming along real good

Reviewer: fleur50 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 16 Jun 2010 7:41 PM Title: Chapter 12

j'adore l'évolution de Bella/Edward. J'espère qu'ils vont beaucoup se pratiquer cette semaine!

 Les conseils de Esme, un petit bijou, j'ai hâte de voir les prochains conseils du prochain chapitre. 

Reviewer: krstn Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Jun 2010 5:27 PM Title: Chapter 12

The shower touching was HOT -

thank you

Reviewer: peoplelikeus Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 16 Jun 2010 4:48 PM Title: Chapter 12

how sad - I read this on ff and here!! but this was a great chapter  - I like how you switch the POV'S up (bree is still a bitch and I hope they rip her limb from limb!!)

Reviewer: Sherry80 Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Jun 2010 3:31 AM Title: Chapter 11

great chapter

Reviewer: Sherry80 Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Jun 2010 3:15 AM Title: Chapter 10

Another great chapter

Reviewer: Sherry80 Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Jun 2010 3:02 AM Title: Chapter 9

Great chapter

Reviewer: Sherry80 Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Jun 2010 2:50 AM Title: Chapter 8

great awesome chapter

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Jun 2010 9:09 PM Title: Chapter 11

poor girl.   Glad she has the girls to talk too

Reviewer: edward4life Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Jun 2010 8:10 AM Title: Chapter 11

great chapter

Reviewer: Kendall94 Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Jun 2010 3:03 AM Title: Chapter 11

poor bella i hope she gets better...

Reviewer: kiwivampire Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Jun 2010 12:44 AM Title: Chapter 11

Awesome  Keep up the Good work!  Really enjoying this storyline

Reviewer: Coleen561 Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Jun 2010 8:31 PM Title: Chapter 11

You've done a great job with this story, even though it has very difficult subject matter.  I wasn't sure if I would like it, but I'm glad I gave it a chance.  This is very original. 



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for giving it a chance! It's hard to write but knowing the readers like it makes me want to do it, thank you! Nails233

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Jun 2010 4:58 PM Title: Chapter 11

This is most definatley dark, but handled extremely well.  When the "darkness" starts to creep up on you, that's the time to add something lighter.  Like Esme pulling Edward out of the room callin him by 3 names!  Such a mother thing to do and only we can give it that extra umph when our kids hear it!   It would make no sense if Isabella adjusted smoothly and swiftly; her road is bound to have setbacks.  Follow your instincts.  They haven't failed you yet!



Author's Response:

Thank You for reading my work and reveiws like yours definitely let me know that i am doing it right. Always feel free to tell me what you think because I rely on them to do a better job! Thanks again!

Reviewer: dragonfly Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Jun 2010 1:30 PM Title: Chapter 11

Excellent .... love the playtime both in the closet and more intimate. Eager for the next chapter.

Reviewer: SammyJo Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Jun 2010 2:08 AM Title: Chapter 11

Good chapter.  Will she ask Charlie about Renee her real mother?



Author's Response:

Yes next time Charlie see Bella he's bring along something to help her remember places and people.

Reviewer: sassycook Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 04 Jun 2010 2:03 AM Title: Chapter 11

So I feel bad that Bella and Stella are not back to where there were. They where so close they where everything to each other and now Bella feels threaten by Stella taking Edward from her. I ma very pleased that Jake and Stella are together and that they both feel that they belong together. That is cool. Yeah Esme had a talk with Bella about the family dynamics.  She needed that. I am surprised Edward didn’t. I love Esme grabbing Edward by the ear and pulling him into the office for the talk. That was great. Well abck att he farm the house sounds amazing. I am glad it seems she will be okay with it. I love her trying on the shoes and such. Like a kid in the candy store, how cute. Walking in on her naked look out Edward. She already knew how she felt. She could feel her feelings for him, hot. They will be so good together. When the time comes it will be out of this world. The have both waited for so long it deserves to be perfect. I can’t wait for the talk with Esme and Alice on sex. Now that will be a funny chapter. Love the story, thanx



Author's Response:

Have no fears Stella and Bella will find their way back to each others freindship, espescially when they come back from Alaska...just a little hint. Thank you so much for reading it!

Reviewer: Jilli90 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 04 Jun 2010 12:29 AM Title: Chapter 11

Wow still good, still can't wait to read the next chapter.

Reviewer: gabelle Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Jun 2010 12:00 AM Title: Chapter 11

I love this story.  It's so intense and well-written.  Keep updating. 

Reviewer: tink32542 Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Jun 2010 8:06 PM Title: Chapter 11

:)

Reviewer: Roon1 Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 03 Jun 2010 7:59 PM Title: Chapter 3

This was good.  I am impressed you used Alistair, he's not a vampire I come across a lot in this type of fiction.

Reviewer: Roon1 Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 03 Jun 2010 7:47 PM Title: Chapter 2

Oh no, the bad vampire is back.

Reviewer: Roon1 Signed starstarstar [Report This]
Date: 03 Jun 2010 7:40 PM Title: Chapter 1

This is a really good and creepy start to your story.

Reviewer: fleur50 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 03 Jun 2010 4:39 PM Title: Chapter 11

J'adore

Reviewer: Kendall94 Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 May 2010 8:45 AM Title: Chapter 10

this is getting good!!

Reviewer: edward4life Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 May 2010 5:24 AM Title: Chapter 10

great chapter

Reviewer: tigger5600 Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 May 2010 4:04 AM Title: Chapter 10

Great couple of chapters... crazy that Seth is a half/half now... and his parents disowned him... how messed up! Glad that Carlisle and Esme are going to take care of him though.... and I am happy that Bella finally came out of the black hole she was in! Can't wait to see more! :)

Reviewer: kiwivampire Signed [Report This]
Date: 24 May 2010 9:46 PM Title: Chapter 10

Great Story, Please Update, definately want to read more.....

Reviewer: annabell2009 Signed [Report This]
Date: 24 May 2010 9:30 PM Title: Chapter 10

love it

 

Reviewer: dragonfly Signed [Report This]
Date: 24 May 2010 3:20 PM Title: Chapter 10

Excellent chapter ... love watching the evolution of Bella's mind as she comes to terms with the change in her captivity allowing fun back into her life.

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed [Report This]
Date: 24 May 2010 4:04 AM Title: Chapter 10

Great stuff!  Bella's even dealing with her inner demons.  Darker next chapter, hmm?  Count me in!

Reviewer: fleur50 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 24 May 2010 4:02 AM Title: Chapter 10

J'aime quand c'est sombre! c'est différent...

Reviewer: SammyJo Signed [Report This]
Date: 24 May 2010 3:46 AM Title: Chapter 10

Good chapter.  If Edward doesn't change her she is always going to feel like he doesn't want her enough.

Reviewer: fleur50 Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 24 May 2010 3:40 AM Title: Chapter 9

J'adore!

Reviewer: old bat Signed [Report This]
Date: 24 May 2010 3:22 AM Title: Chapter 10

So, what's wrong with going on forever? Oh, yes, carpal tunnel, double vision, injuring your forehead on the key board.

Turning Seth, still able to phase to wolf form. Didn't think of that. Boo-hiss to his father. What a douche bag.

 

Reviewer: fleur50 Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 24 May 2010 3:15 AM Title: Chapter 8

beau chapitre

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