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Reviewer: Modiggy Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 20 Jun 2010 10:27 PM Title: Chapter 12

OMG!  So, Rose is still alive?  Jacobw & Edward HAVE to find Bella!!  Jasper HAS to have a trick up his undead sleeve!!!  Go Cullens, GO!!  Kill the BIOTCH!!!!



Author's Response:

Lol.  Question is, WHICH Jasper?  The one with Bella?  Or the one dying in the abandoned building?

Reviewer: Es My Brand of Heroin Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Jun 2010 7:53 PM Title: Chapter 12

Wristbands? Replicas? Different.
So Rose is alive and Jasper has to be too. Though how one determines when an undead creature is "dead" seems "different" too.

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Jun 2010 1:12 PM Title: Chapter 12

Oh no you didin't!  I say that if Jasper can survive Maria, he can control himself and his reactions here.  Personally, I think our boy is still kicking and hopefully escaping.  Can you imagine the hell he'd raise if he found out he was used to hurt his family!  Bella!  His Alice!   God help her, because the Major would be back in town!  Sneaky, perectly devious plot though!!



Author's Response:

Thanks, glad you're liking it.  I want Jazz to live too; could you see the smackdown between him and Victoria?

Reviewer: Raven Jadewolfe Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 16 Jun 2010 6:16 PM Title: Chapter 12

o wow! She jumped into this mess with some gene splicing techy stuff! cool!

Author's Response:

Pretty much.  Glad you liked it!

Reviewer: Andromida1964 Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Jun 2010 4:48 PM Title: Chapter 11

I'm really liking your story....I do have to admit though that I like the idea of Jasper and Bella together....the real Jasper though......thanks, Diane



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading!  I'm actually liking that idea too.  I may have to use it in another story.....

 

Here is your preview:

 

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Her body fit perfectly against mine.  I held her closer to me as her moans increased.  I couldn’t believe the feelings that were coursing through me.  I was already a goner.  I loved this woman and wanted her to know it with every thrust. 

She felt incredible, as though she was made for me.  Her beautiful breasts rubbed against my stone chest violently as my animal side took over.  I thrust hard and fast, reveling in her moans of pleasure.  I could not stop the noises that came from me either.  Nor did I want to.  I wanted her to know what she was doing to me; that she was driving me to the brink.  Any moment now I would come deep inside her and feel the white-hot streak of pleasure as my body warmed due to the sensation.    

I pressed my lips to hers forcefully and my tongue flew in her mouth.  Her tongue danced with my own, massaging it and biting it gently.  It sent a shiver down my spine and I wrapped her leg around me, driving me deeper.

“I-I’m getting close…” she breathed.  My thrusts increased.  I was having a hard time controlling myself, even though I promised I would.  I wanted her to feel her, consume her and possess her.  I gave her my soul (if I do have one) and took hers.  We were one.

Her hands found their way into my hair and she pulled me closer, if that was even possible.  Her fingernails felt incredible against my scalp and I moaned into her mouth.  They trailed down my back slowly as she attacked my neck.  I lifted up off her gorgeous body slightly to give her better access. 

Afraid that she would lose her contact with me, she wrapped her legs tightly against my hips, matching my thrusts perfectly.  The movement drove me wild and I reached up to grip the headboard as the white-hot streak started coursing through me.  My release was imminent.

I felt her shaking and trembling; her hands now gripping my forearms tightly.  She tensed up and her inner walls clamped down on me as she screamed my name as she came.  I threw my head back as my orgasm hit hard.  My mouth pulled back, exposing my teeth and a growl escaped my chest.  At that moment, I was an animal.  My control was gone.

I fell against her, laying my head between her breasts.  I listened to her breathing return to normal as I continued to hold her close to me.  Her hands were in my hair and she comforted me.  She always comforted me and I pressed my lips to hers gently.

“That was just…wow,” I said against her beautiful lips.  That was what she did to me; I couldn’t think straight.

She closed her eyes and sighed happily.  She looked into my still-black eyes.

“Thank you, Jasper.” 

 

Reviewer: Modiggy Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 10 Jun 2010 5:56 PM Title: Chapter 10

I don't know if Bella is getting a clue or not.  Jacob though,  if he is on this...I'm gonna KILL him!!!  Hurry with the next chapter, I need to know what happens... Please!



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading, Modiggy!  I plan to get it up soon. :)

Reviewer: acw1 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jun 2010 11:25 PM Title: Chapter 10

good chapter.



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Thanks!  The plot thickens even more, huh?

Reviewer: Es My Brand of Heroin Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Jun 2010 11:31 PM Title: Chapter 10

Um yeah. She really has some terrible instincts. Its amazing she's still alive.

Author's Response:

I know, right?  Maybe it's those terrible instincts that keep her alive.  She's too stupid to run!

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Jun 2010 9:05 PM Title: Chapter 10

hmmm why can"t alice see them  i forget



Author's Response:

They don't know yet, but Victoria's blocking them. 

Reviewer: acw1 Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Jun 2010 8:49 PM Title: Chapter 9

uh oh...I am so confused about whether it really is jasper or not and now this happens. very anxious here.



Author's Response:

Hi!  Remember chapter 6?  That is from Jasper's POV; it should give some insight.  :)

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Jun 2010 5:30 PM Title: Chapter 9

Nice and internal, this chapter.  Now if I could only read Jasper's thoughts I'll just bet that the puzzle would start falling into place!  Just when I yhink I've got it figured ouyt -bang- the gears shift.  Bravo!!



Author's Response:

Thanks for your kind words.  I'm glad you're liking the story.  Hope you stick around for the rest of the ride.

Reviewer: Modiggy Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 04 Jun 2010 12:54 AM Title: Chapter 9

It was Victoria on the other line.  I hope Edward & Alice can track them down.



Author's Response:

I hope so too.  We'll find out if they make progress soon.

 

Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: Raven Jadewolfe Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 03 Jun 2010 10:58 PM Title: Chapter 9

uh oh

Author's Response:

I agree. 

Reviewer: Raven Jadewolfe Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01 Jun 2010 1:12 AM Title: Chapter 8

hmmmm...makes me wonder how they're going to reach Bella and Jasper

Author's Response:

Good question, especially since B & J are already on a plane to Iceland and they can't seem to get a clue. 

Reviewer: acw1 Signed [Report This]
Date: 31 May 2010 10:45 PM Title: Chapter 8

:) good chapter.



Author's Response:

Thanks!  I hope you stick around; the best is yet to come.  :)

Reviewer: dr3 Signed [Report This]
Date: 31 May 2010 8:31 PM Title: Chapter 7

Are we talking vampire clones? This is getting ANNOYING! Yet, intriguing. But, no matter what this bella is a bitch (how can that be?).



Author's Response:

I like your thinking.  You're on target.

Reviewer: Modiggy Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 31 May 2010 8:15 PM Title: Chapter 8

The abandoned bldg?  I really hope they find her in time!



Author's Response:

Remember who's in the abandoned building.

Reviewer: dr3 Signed starstar [Report This]
Date: 31 May 2010 7:57 PM Title: Chapter 2

What's going on? Bella is such a bitch. Edward just died for pete's sake. "This was Jasper.  He loves Alice.  I love Edward."  This is making me crazy. Yeah, I want to kick both their asses. WTF!!!  My head hurts....



Author's Response:

I'm sorry you have a headache.  All will be answered.  :)

Reviewer: acw1 Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 May 2010 10:43 PM Title: Chapter 7

:)



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:)  Back at ya!

Reviewer: Modiggy Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 21 May 2010 2:04 PM Title: Chapter 1

LOL, LOL!

Reviewer: Es My Brand of Heroin Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 May 2010 9:33 PM Title: Chapter 7

I really hope B listens to the little voice in her head telling her something is wrong. Also if that's not really J, then how can he have the same power or talent? Kinda wish it was really J and he went all rogue on the Cullen's. Wouldn't make for a hea but they can't all be. LOL

Author's Response:

Good question about his talent.  It will be revealed.  :)

Reviewer: Modiggy Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 20 May 2010 7:57 PM Title: Chapter 1

I'm dying!!  My heart just fell out of my body.  In some form?  Oh, no!!  I don't know how much more I can take!



Author's Response:

Sorry, hope the heart attack wasn't TOO much.  :)

Reviewer: Modiggy Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 20 May 2010 7:36 PM Title: Chapter 1

What?  No!!  She's gonna give it up to Jasper?  Noooooooooooooooo!  I want B/E to get back together!!!



Author's Response:

They will be...in some form.  :)

Reviewer: Modiggy Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 20 May 2010 5:57 PM Title: Chapter 7

I don't know, but Edward needs to find her!!



Author's Response:

Oh he will, but it may not be what he wants.  :)

Reviewer: Raven Jadewolfe Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 20 May 2010 5:45 PM Title: Chapter 7

hhmmmmmm, the plot thickens

Author's Response:

Very much so.  It is Victoria's plan.  :)

Reviewer: smiling_in_pink Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09 May 2010 8:51 PM Title: Chapter 6

aahh what happens?

how is the other one not jasper?! how is that possible and where the hell is rose?!



Author's Response:

Hi smiling_in_pink.  You'll find out.  I hope to post this week.  Keep reading!

Reviewer: Modiggy Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 04 May 2010 1:01 AM Title: Chapter 6

Oh, no!! Poor Jasper!  Poor, Edward!  I hope they find Jazz in time!



Author's Response:

I hope they do too!

Reviewer: Newbie12 Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 May 2010 4:12 AM Title: Chapter 2

The reference to "manhood" and "unit" while describing Bella's erotic daydream during the car ride was oddly anachronistic. I'm sure the Harlequin Romance novels would do a better job. Mind you, I'm not a writer, so I'm not sure I would do better. But still...

 

You do a good job of making your point and moving on. It's (you story) is pretty easy to read.



Author's Response:

Hi Newbie.  Thanks for reading.  I'm sure they would do a better job as I'm not a romance author, but I've noticed that "manhood" and "unit" and even "cock" are used frequently on this site.  I am just following what seems to be tradition.  :)

Reviewer: vicki219 Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 May 2010 12:26 AM Title: Chapter 6

Oh my god that is so heartbreakingly sad. But i got to say, as far as evil plans go, it's very good. It's tearing everyone apart. I hope they find Jazz soon and realise he isn't with Bella and i really hope that Rosalie is alive. So can't wait for the next update.



Author's Response:

Hi Vicki!  Sorry for the delay.  Thanks so much for reading.  All will be revealed!

Reviewer: sweetmel21 Signed [Report This]
Date: 02 May 2010 3:56 AM Title: Chapter 6

Poor Jasper.

Reviewer: Es My Brand of Heroin Signed [Report This]
Date: 02 May 2010 2:46 AM Title: Chapter 6

Of course! And a copy?

Reviewer: acw1 Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 May 2010 9:39 PM Title: Chapter 6

hmmm

Reviewer: Raven Jadewolfe Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01 May 2010 7:03 PM Title: Chapter 6

omg poor Jasper!

Reviewer: Raven Jadewolfe Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 26 Apr 2010 1:46 PM Title: Chapter 5

I know Jazz will be manipulating Bella's emotions

Reviewer: Raven Jadewolfe Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 26 Apr 2010 1:43 PM Title: Chapter 4

okay psycho lady lol

Reviewer: Raven Jadewolfe Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 26 Apr 2010 1:41 PM Title: Chapter 3

someone has to be controlling Jasper

Reviewer: Raven Jadewolfe Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 26 Apr 2010 1:37 PM Title: Chapter 2

he's really messing with her head

Reviewer: Raven Jadewolfe Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 26 Apr 2010 1:34 PM Title: Chapter 1

he's lost his mind

Reviewer: acw1 Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Apr 2010 12:59 PM Title: Chapter 5

I have now accepted the confusion and will no longer try to guess what the hell is going on. I will just accept each chapter as they cme and hope they bring with them a little more clarity each time.  look forward to more.

Reviewer: Modiggy Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 26 Apr 2010 8:17 AM Title: Chapter 5

Oh, I can't wait for the next chapter!  We need to hear from the real Jasper too.

Reviewer: Es My Brand of Heroin Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Apr 2010 3:05 AM Title: Chapter 5

I don't care if J is the one creating (makesfor a nice plot twist rather than it all being at V's control.) I just really want B to be innocent in all this. However her grieving vs her wetting her panties over J might be nice.

Reviewer: Team Sparkle Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Apr 2010 11:09 PM Title: Chapter 5

okay, my theory is Rose is Vicotria's "pet".

Reviewer: thackebeil1 Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Apr 2010 5:14 PM Title: Chapter 4

Alright well we knew she was and evil boitch. But why is Jasper working with her? Does he really like Bella and playing Victoria or is this all part of the plan. The pet that she has is that how she's controlling Jasper or is he really working with her? So many questions



Author's Response:

Jasper's not working with her. 

Reviewer: Modiggy Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 22 Apr 2010 4:18 PM Title: Chapter 4

The real Jasper?  Come on with the next chapter LS, or I will drain you dry!!!  LOL



Author's Response:

Good guess. 

Reviewer: acw1 Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Apr 2010 3:12 PM Title: Chapter 4

God I have no idea what is going on with jasper now. thoroughly confused as to his motives. 



Author's Response:

Good.  Her plan is working. 

Reviewer: Modiggy Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 20 Apr 2010 4:27 PM Title: Chapter 3

Edward POV.  EDWARD  PLEASE!  Yes, or Jasper. 

Please hurry with the next chapter!!!

Reviewer: Modiggy Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 20 Apr 2010 4:14 PM Title: Chapter 2

Jasper is a RAT BASTARD!!!!!!!!!!!  However, Bella should have known better!

Reviewer: Modiggy Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 20 Apr 2010 4:01 PM Title: Chapter 1

Great, Great, Great!

Reviewer: Modiggy Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 20 Apr 2010 4:01 PM Title: Chapter 1

I know Carlisle, Esme, Edward, Alice, Emmett and Rose cant be dead!  It's a trick Bella don't fall for it Ms. Naive!

Reviewer: sprazinko Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Apr 2010 1:24 AM Title: Chapter 3

This is awesome think you should keep jaspers to yourself to make it more interesting

Reviewer: acw1 Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Apr 2010 5:11 PM Title: Chapter 3

hmm..confusing still but eager for more.



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading.  All will be answered.  :)

Reviewer: Es My Brand of Heroin Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Apr 2010 2:37 AM Title: Chapter 3

Ack! What the crap? I thought Esme was dead? Alice's head? V is in on J taking B? Can't wait!

Author's Response:

The bodies are a set-up.

Reviewer: sweetmel21 Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Apr 2010 8:33 PM Title: Chapter 3

intense



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading!  I hope to get chapter 4 up soon.  :)

Reviewer: Es My Brand of Heroin Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Apr 2010 2:10 PM Title: Chapter 2

Yeah and B's too. I'm going to chalk it up to some form of shock that she's experiencing. Not that she's a cold bitch who can really move on from her "true love" that quickly.

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Thanks for reading!  Here is your preview of any upcoming chapter:

 

“I can’t see anything past you, dog,” Alice said condescendingly to Jacob.  Jacob just growled at her.  I pinched the bridge of my nose.  We were supposed to be finding Bella and they could not stop fighting. 

“Stop,” I said.  They looked at me.  “Your constant bickering is not helping in the least to find Bella and Jasper.  We need to work together.  If you can’t do that,” I said looking at the wolf in front of me, “then you will have to leave.”

Okay, Jacob’s thoughts said.  I sighed.  I couldn’t believe we had the wolves helping us.  You know Jacob is in love with her.  He probably figures that if he can find her before you do, he can prove to be the better competitor for her affections.  I’m sure he would love to fight me, to fight all of us, but that would have to come later.  Right now, the woman I loved more than anything was missing and my backstabbing brother had her. 

When we find her, I will make that slut pay for stealing Jazz.  I growled at Alice.  She turned to me, eyes wide.  She hadn’t meant for that thought to slip out.  “I’m sorry, Edward.”  I narrowed my eyes at her.  “Bella is not a slut.  She had a rocky past, yes, but that does not make her a bad person.  And I don’t know what happened that made Jasper betray us like this, but there has to be an explanation.  He loved you, Alice.  He was loyal to the family.  Why would he suddenly turn?”

She shrugged.  “It doesn’t surprise me, Edward.  I mean, really, she slept with that…thing,” she pointed at Jacob.  He growled again.  “I’m surprised she didn’t go after the whole family as soon as we came back.  You know, in retaliation?”

I lunged at Alice and knocked her to the ground.  She kicked me off and jumped up.  I started to run at her and she held her hand up.  “You see?  This is what she wants, what Jazz wants.  They want us fighting so that we won’t find them.”  I stopped.  It made sense.  Running my hand through my hair, I looked down at the ground.

“I’m sorry, Alice.”

She smiled.  “I’m sorry, too.  I shouldn’t be blaming Bella, my sister, for Jazz’s actions.  He’s perfectly capable of saying ‘no.’”

I still had a hard time believing that she was gone and that Jasper was responsible.  Why would he do it?  He was a Cullen as much as the rest of us.  Why would he betray those that loved him?  It made no sense!

As if Jacob could hear me, his thoughts invaded my mind.  Maybe he doesn’t know you’re alive.  Maybe he thinks you’re dead and he feels like he is the only one who can protect Bella.  I hadn’t thought about that.

“That’s a good point, Jacob,” I said patting his furry head.  He licked my hand.  I laughed.

“What’s a good point?” Alice asked.  I explained what Jacob was thinking.  She cocked her head to the side for a moment in thought.  “That would make sense.  But why would he suddenly want to sleep with her?  Or her with him?  They have never shown interest like that before.  Besides,” she stopped for a second and glanced at Jacob.  “You and I both know he wasn’t very good with his control.”

It was true.  The whole reason I had left in the first place was because Jazz had tried attacking her at her birthday party when she got a paper cut.  Could he really have gained that much control?

“Stranger things have happened,” I said.

We came upon a run-down building that Alice had seen in a vision.  I took a deep breath and froze.

“Smell that?” I asked, turning to her.  Her nose wrinkled.  “Yes.  Like a dying vampire.”

Suddenly we heard maniacal laughter.  Victoria, I thought.  We ran towards the front door, Jacob breaking away and heading for the back.

It was unlocked.  We walked in and were assaulted by two scents.  One was definitely Victoria.  The other was still that dying vampire smell.  We followed it until we found some steps leading to a basement.  There was a steel door at the bottom. 

I charged the door.  It didn’t budge.  I charged again.  Nothing.  After the fourth time, the door fell off.  I somersaulted across it and immediately sprang into my crouching position.  It was the one used when on the defense. 

Alice drew in a sharp breath.  I followed her gaze.  My jaw dropped when I saw it.   

 

Reviewer: acw1 Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Apr 2010 2:48 PM Title: Chapter 2

a very confusing yet still hot and desirable jasper. look forward to more.



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Thanks for reading!  I hope you are enjoying the story.  Here is your preview of an upcoming chapter:

 

“I can’t see anything past you, dog,” Alice said condescendingly to Jacob.  Jacob just growled at her.  I pinched the bridge of my nose.  We were supposed to be finding Bella and they could not stop fighting. 

“Stop,” I said.  They looked at me.  “Your constant bickering is not helping in the least to find Bella and Jasper.  We need to work together.  If you can’t do that,” I said looking at the wolf in front of me, “then you will have to leave.”

Okay, Jacob’s thoughts said.  I sighed.  I couldn’t believe we had the wolves helping us.  You know Jacob is in love with her.  He probably figures that if he can find her before you do, he can prove to be the better competitor for her affections.  I’m sure he would love to fight me, to fight all of us, but that would have to come later.  Right now, the woman I loved more than anything was missing and my backstabbing brother had her. 

When we find her, I will make that slut pay for stealing Jazz.  I growled at Alice.  She turned to me, eyes wide.  She hadn’t meant for that thought to slip out.  “I’m sorry, Edward.”  I narrowed my eyes at her.  “Bella is not a slut.  She had a rocky past, yes, but that does not make her a bad person.  And I don’t know what happened that made Jasper betray us like this, but there has to be an explanation.  He loved you, Alice.  He was loyal to the family.  Why would he suddenly turn?”

She shrugged.  “It doesn’t surprise me, Edward.  I mean, really, she slept with that…thing,” she pointed at Jacob.  He growled again.  “I’m surprised she didn’t go after the whole family as soon as we came back.  You know, in retaliation?”

I lunged at Alice and knocked her to the ground.  She kicked me off and jumped up.  I started to run at her and she held her hand up.  “You see?  This is what she wants, what Jazz wants.  They want us fighting so that we won’t find them.”  I stopped.  It made sense.  Running my hand through my hair, I looked down at the ground.

“I’m sorry, Alice.”

She smiled.  “I’m sorry, too.  I shouldn’t be blaming Bella, my sister, for Jazz’s actions.  He’s perfectly capable of saying ‘no.’”

I still had a hard time believing that she was gone and that Jasper was responsible.  Why would he do it?  He was a Cullen as much as the rest of us.  Why would he betray those that loved him?  It made no sense!

As if Jacob could hear me, his thoughts invaded my mind.  Maybe he doesn’t know you’re alive.  Maybe he thinks you’re dead and he feels like he is the only one who can protect Bella.  I hadn’t thought about that.

“That’s a good point, Jacob,” I said patting his furry head.  He licked my hand.  I laughed.

“What’s a good point?” Alice asked.  I explained what Jacob was thinking.  She cocked her head to the side for a moment in thought.  “That would make sense.  But why would he suddenly want to sleep with her?  Or her with him?  They have never shown interest like that before.  Besides,” she stopped for a second and glanced at Jacob.  “You and I both know he wasn’t very good with his control.”

It was true.  The whole reason I had left in the first place was because Jazz had tried attacking her at her birthday party when she got a paper cut.  Could he really have gained that much control?

“Stranger things have happened,” I said.

We came upon a run-down building that Alice had seen in a vision.  I took a deep breath and froze.

“Smell that?” I asked, turning to her.  Her nose wrinkled.  “Yes.  Like a dying vampire.”

Suddenly we heard maniacal laughter.  Victoria, I thought.  We ran towards the front door, Jacob breaking away and heading for the back.

It was unlocked.  We walked in and were assaulted by two scents.  One was definitely Victoria.  The other was still that dying vampire smell.  We followed it until we found some steps leading to a basement.  There was a steel door at the bottom. 

I charged the door.  It didn’t budge.  I charged again.  Nothing.  After the fourth time, the door fell off.  I somersaulted across it and immediately sprang into my crouching position.  It was the one used when on the defense. 

Alice drew in a sharp breath.  I followed her gaze.  My jaw dropped when I saw it.   

 

Reviewer: acw1 Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Apr 2010 2:40 PM Title: Chapter 1

I am with Bella's line of thinking...what is going on?  good first chapter. looking forward to more of the story.

Reviewer: sweetmel21 Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Apr 2010 6:05 AM Title: Chapter 2

Ya I kind of do.  I wonder why the sudden interest in Bella.



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Hi sweetmel!  Thanks for reading.  Here is a preview of an upcoming chapter:

 

“I can’t see anything past you, dog,” Alice said condescendingly to Jacob.  Jacob just growled at her.  I pinched the bridge of my nose.  We were supposed to be finding Bella and they could not stop fighting. 

“Stop,” I said.  They looked at me.  “Your constant bickering is not helping in the least to find Bella and Jasper.  We need to work together.  If you can’t do that,” I said looking at the wolf in front of me, “then you will have to leave.”

Okay, Jacob’s thoughts said.  I sighed.  I couldn’t believe we had the wolves helping us.  You know Jacob is in love with her.  He probably figures that if he can find her before you do, he can prove to be the better competitor for her affections.  I’m sure he would love to fight me, to fight all of us, but that would have to come later.  Right now, the woman I loved more than anything was missing and my backstabbing brother had her. 

When we find her, I will make that slut pay for stealing Jazz.  I growled at Alice.  She turned to me, eyes wide.  She hadn’t meant for that thought to slip out.  “I’m sorry, Edward.”  I narrowed my eyes at her.  “Bella is not a slut.  She had a rocky past, yes, but that does not make her a bad person.  And I don’t know what happened that made Jasper betray us like this, but there has to be an explanation.  He loved you, Alice.  He was loyal to the family.  Why would he suddenly turn?”

She shrugged.  “It doesn’t surprise me, Edward.  I mean, really, she slept with that…thing,” she pointed at Jacob.  He growled again.  “I’m surprised she didn’t go after the whole family as soon as we came back.  You know, in retaliation?”

I lunged at Alice and knocked her to the ground.  She kicked me off and jumped up.  I started to run at her and she held her hand up.  “You see?  This is what she wants, what Jazz wants.  They want us fighting so that we won’t find them.”  I stopped.  It made sense.  Running my hand through my hair, I looked down at the ground.

“I’m sorry, Alice.”

She smiled.  “I’m sorry, too.  I shouldn’t be blaming Bella, my sister, for Jazz’s actions.  He’s perfectly capable of saying ‘no.’”

I still had a hard time believing that she was gone and that Jasper was responsible.  Why would he do it?  He was a Cullen as much as the rest of us.  Why would he betray those that loved him?  It made no sense!

As if Jacob could hear me, his thoughts invaded my mind.  Maybe he doesn’t know you’re alive.  Maybe he thinks you’re dead and he feels like he is the only one who can protect Bella.  I hadn’t thought about that.

“That’s a good point, Jacob,” I said patting his furry head.  He licked my hand.  I laughed.

“What’s a good point?” Alice asked.  I explained what Jacob was thinking.  She cocked her head to the side for a moment in thought.  “That would make sense.  But why would he suddenly want to sleep with her?  Or her with him?  They have never shown interest like that before.  Besides,” she stopped for a second and glanced at Jacob.  “You and I both know he wasn’t very good with his control.”

It was true.  The whole reason I had left in the first place was because Jazz had tried attacking her at her birthday party when she got a paper cut.  Could he really have gained that much control?

“Stranger things have happened,” I said.

We came upon a run-down building that Alice had seen in a vision.  I took a deep breath and froze.

“Smell that?” I asked, turning to her.  Her nose wrinkled.  “Yes.  Like a dying vampire.”

Suddenly we heard maniacal laughter.  Victoria, I thought.  We ran towards the front door, Jacob breaking away and heading for the back.

It was unlocked.  We walked in and were assaulted by two scents.  One was definitely Victoria.  The other was still that dying vampire smell.  We followed it until we found some steps leading to a basement.  There was a steel door at the bottom. 

I charged the door.  It didn’t budge.  I charged again.  Nothing.  After the fourth time, the door fell off.  I somersaulted across it and immediately sprang into my crouching position.  It was the one used when on the defense. 

Alice drew in a sharp breath.  I followed her gaze.  My jaw dropped when I saw it.   

 

Reviewer: lmb Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Apr 2010 4:03 AM Title: Chapter 2

Interesting!  I am quite interested to see how you get past the dismembered Cullen bodies?  Please update soon and let us know.



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“I can’t see anything past you, dog,” Alice said condescendingly to Jacob.  Jacob just growled at her.  I pinched the bridge of my nose.  We were supposed to be finding Bella and they could not stop fighting. 

“Stop,” I said.  They looked at me.  “Your constant bickering is not helping in the least to find Bella and Jasper.  We need to work together.  If you can’t do that,” I said looking at the wolf in front of me, “then you will have to leave.”

Okay, Jacob’s thoughts said.  I sighed.  I couldn’t believe we had the wolves helping us.  You know Jacob is in love with her.  He probably figures that if he can find her before you do, he can prove to be the better competitor for her affections.  I’m sure he would love to fight me, to fight all of us, but that would have to come later.  Right now, the woman I loved more than anything was missing and my backstabbing brother had her. 

When we find her, I will make that slut pay for stealing Jazz.  I growled at Alice.  She turned to me, eyes wide.  She hadn’t meant for that thought to slip out.  “I’m sorry, Edward.”  I narrowed my eyes at her.  “Bella is not a slut.  She had a rocky past, yes, but that does not make her a bad person.  And I don’t know what happened that made Jasper betray us like this, but there has to be an explanation.  He loved you, Alice.  He was loyal to the family.  Why would he suddenly turn?”

She shrugged.  “It doesn’t surprise me, Edward.  I mean, really, she slept with that…thing,” she pointed at Jacob.  He growled again.  “I’m surprised she didn’t go after the whole family as soon as we came back.  You know, in retaliation?”

I lunged at Alice and knocked her to the ground.  She kicked me off and jumped up.  I started to run at her and she held her hand up.  “You see?  This is what she wants, what Jazz wants.  They want us fighting so that we won’t find them.”  I stopped.  It made sense.  Running my hand through my hair, I looked down at the ground.

“I’m sorry, Alice.”

She smiled.  “I’m sorry, too.  I shouldn’t be blaming Bella, my sister, for Jazz’s actions.  He’s perfectly capable of saying ‘no.’”

I still had a hard time believing that she was gone and that Jasper was responsible.  Why would he do it?  He was a Cullen as much as the rest of us.  Why would he betray those that loved him?  It made no sense!

As if Jacob could hear me, his thoughts invaded my mind.  Maybe he doesn’t know you’re alive.  Maybe he thinks you’re dead and he feels like he is the only one who can protect Bella.  I hadn’t thought about that.

“That’s a good point, Jacob,” I said patting his furry head.  He licked my hand.  I laughed.

“What’s a good point?” Alice asked.  I explained what Jacob was thinking.  She cocked her head to the side for a moment in thought.  “That would make sense.  But why would he suddenly want to sleep with her?  Or her with him?  They have never shown interest like that before.  Besides,” she stopped for a second and glanced at Jacob.  “You and I both know he wasn’t very good with his control.”

It was true.  The whole reason I had left in the first place was because Jazz had tried attacking her at her birthday party when she got a paper cut.  Could he really have gained that much control?

“Stranger things have happened,” I said.

We came upon a run-down building that Alice had seen in a vision.  I took a deep breath and froze.

“Smell that?” I asked, turning to her.  Her nose wrinkled.  “Yes.  Like a dying vampire.”

Suddenly we heard maniacal laughter.  Victoria, I thought.  We ran towards the front door, Jacob breaking away and heading for the back.

It was unlocked.  We walked in and were assaulted by two scents.  One was definitely Victoria.  The other was still that dying vampire smell.  We followed it until we found some steps leading to a basement.  There was a steel door at the bottom. 

I charged the door.  It didn’t budge.  I charged again.  Nothing.  After the fourth time, the door fell off.  I somersaulted across it and immediately sprang into my crouching position.  It was the one used when on the defense. 

Alice drew in a sharp breath.  I followed her gaze.  My jaw dropped when I saw it.   

 

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