Date: 17 Apr 2010 1:27 PM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
Just kill the bastard and get it over with!! Of course, though, sending him to Aro would be the best form of justice- he'll definitely spend the rest of his life wishing he was dead! Maybe that is better- he doesn't deserve the easy way out! Can't wait for more!!
Date: 17 Apr 2010 1:20 PM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
I am so relieved that Bella and Victoria are saved and thrilled that James will get what is coming to him!
Date: 17 Apr 2010 11:45 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
brilliant - wo well worth the wait!!
Date: 17 Apr 2010 11:11 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
First I'm so happy that you are back.
I love this story.
Second if you want to write the back story of how Bella was before than go for it, because I know you wil do a great job.
Date: 17 Apr 2010 11:00 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
I this maybe a little sadistic of me but I wish James was awake. After they tied him up and gathered around him. I would have loved to see the look of panic in his eyes as Carlisle convinces Jacob(whom he knows is a cop) to give him James and allow him to do anything with him.Giving him no rights as a human(as it should be)...Ah...to bad..maybe it'll be in the next chapter...
Date: 17 Apr 2010 9:03 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
He should definately be taken to Aro!
Date: 17 Apr 2010 8:35 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
YES!!!! James is going to Aro and every little and big disgusting and painful thing Aro has will be used on that bastard! *laughs sadistically* I'm so proud proud proud of Bella that she found it in her to fight this monster! A great chapter :)
It really will be good to show Bella before she met James. After all, in a fanfic you more or less build the characters on the original book characters and the readers already know the basics about them. In an original fiction you'll have to build the characters from scratch and showing a young Bella will help with that, I think.
There are two more chapters left, will we see how James is tortur... I mean, handled by Carlisle and Aro? :)
I can't wait to read the happyending Bella and this story deserve.
Take care :)
Date: 17 Apr 2010 8:11 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
Amazing Chapter!
I loved that Bella took charge and fought back. Jacob should hand James over to Carlisle. If he went to trial there's always a possibility he could get away with it. He deserves whatever punishment Carlisle and Aro have in mind.
And wow...only two more chapters. I'm sad to see this end, but its an amazing story. Thanks for sharing.
I would definitely buy the original work and I think it would be great to show Bella before James.
Date: 17 Apr 2010 7:54 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
Oh guys... I can't fucking believe it! Only two more chapteers?? I am in the verge of tears just at the thought!
I love the story soo much! I can remember he day I found it like it was yesterday and it lit up my day (and let me say it was a shitty one...)
I adored the chapter! Bella is so strong!! I am so on for another round of torture!!
xoxo
Marianne
Date: 17 Apr 2010 7:27 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
Brilliant and well-written chapter. Turn it into a book! I would buy it. But for a book perhaps consider the pov's. Perhaps object pov. Don't get me wrong, I LOVE the story, just the way you wrote it. But I think am object pov makes for a bigger audience, if you chose to publish it. Good luck. Can't wait for the next chapter. YAY - you rock.
Date: 17 Apr 2010 7:09 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
yay there safe
i didnt really get that chapter for some reason
but i got the ending lol
lets see what Aro is going to do to the poor sucker :P
anyways loved it
UDPATE SOON!!
Date: 17 Apr 2010 6:45 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
Fantastic update ladies! I am interested to see what Aro will do to James. Thank you for writing!
Date: 17 Apr 2010 6:40 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
Yay, Bella is safe, Edward is with her, and I hope James gets his just punishment. I'm hoping for an extremely happily ever after.
Date: 17 Apr 2010 6:30 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
Bella and Edward seems so right for each other
Will there be a time that they can have a bdsm realtion also
like weekend play time . Edward isn't James so he would treat her right.
E&B were so hot in their D/s play at school.
Because now it would be Bella willingly submitting herself to Edward
I would like to see that
Date: 17 Apr 2010 6:03 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
Ladies, loved the way this chapter turned out. I can see Bella and Edward will be fine, however, I'm worried about Vicki. I don't think she has a strong enough mind to recover.
I would really like to read a prequal to this story. Bella pre James and maybe even Bella and James the early days.
I can't wait to read how y'all will wrap this tale up. Ya know... Are Bella and Edward going to go strictly vanilla or are they going to continue with the kink? Bella had gone through so much at the training school but she found herself there and even though she was a sub she found strength and thoroughly enjoyed the kink with Edward, but really, who could blame her for that. I think we all can admit Edward could dominate us anytime. Messy hair, bare chest, and crooked grin... we'd all drop into our submissive poses. ;)*
Thanks for the chapter update... I'll be on pins and needles waiting for the next one!
Amy
Date: 17 Apr 2010 5:55 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
Love it :)
Sooooooooooooooo much
Date: 17 Apr 2010 5:28 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
ohhh go bella, smack him on the head hard, poor victoria she is so scared and bella seems to realise she is in charge of helping that duo, so pleased the others got there quickly to help, two chapters left cant quite believe it's the end, i think its a great idea to make this a book and then publish and great to have bella before the school, what will happen to the school? what will happen to carlisle and esme? emmettt and rose as they live there? and i would love to hear what aro has in store for james, just one thing does he get to wear the cock cage for ever more please say yes thanks tracy
Date: 17 Apr 2010 5:24 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
I would love to have it in paper, but that is up to you ladies, I'll just have to work a little more to buy it :)
Much love!!!!!
Date: 17 Apr 2010 5:20 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
I like your idea and applaud your efforts. Getting a snapshot of Bella before James is an awesome idea. Also appreciate your leaving this story on the site. Any idea where you will publish?
Date: 17 Apr 2010 5:13 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
I love this story. My vote is to please continue it.
Date: 17 Apr 2010 4:53 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
OMG!!! Yeah !!! Bad Ass Bella wacked the shit out of his evil brain!!!!
Date: 17 Apr 2010 4:28 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
Oh My Gawd!! Two more chapters? I don't know what I am going to do ... I am addicted to the both of you. Don't make me go cold turkey.
Date: 17 Apr 2010 4:20 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
Thank god! I dont think i could handle it if james inflicted even more damage on those two lol I think turning it into an original work if a freakin awesome idea!
Date: 17 Apr 2010 4:07 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
I will follow anything you guys do!!!!!!!!!!
Date: 17 Apr 2010 4:02 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
Thank you...I was getting worried you guys gave up on it!
Good chapter but wished for more detail. Did James have anything to say when he was being taken care of by the boys? Guess all the questions will be answered in the next chapters and epi.
Think it could be an original and would love to read Bella's back story. Hope the censors don't mind the graphic ness since it should be as the detail in the chapters really bring the story to life!
Great job and look forward to more!!
Date: 17 Apr 2010 3:51 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
Yay! I finally figured out how to set an alert for new chapters, so I got a notification about this chapter promptly!!
Good chapter. I was kinda surprised by Bella's being so calm locked in the trunk, but I guess she just KNEW that she had to be strong for Victoria. (Once I was traveling with a friend who was sorta high strung and excitable. We had a flat, and I tried to be especially calm since I did not want to upset her. Once I had unloaded the truck to get to the spare tire, I had no idea what to do next, but someone stopped just then to help us! I guess Bella was doing the same calming thing for V.)
James to Aro -- that sounds good! Will give some insight into Aro.
Keep up the good work!
Emory
Date: 17 Apr 2010 3:44 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
Great chapter. Finally James will get his due rewards.
Date: 17 Apr 2010 3:14 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
How can this story be done in 2 more chapters. Is one of them going to be an epilogue? It feels like the story is only 3/4 the way finished. Whats going to happen to the school. Will Carlisle reopen it? What will happen with Bella and Edward? Will Bella go to college like she always wanted to? Will Edward continue with law? Will Bella and Edward ever go back to the Training school if it is opened to either work there or participate as students. I know Bella didnt like it there but she learned so much about herself therer. What will happen with Victoria and her baby. What happens to James? Will Bella's father ever find out. Lots of questions to be answered yet. Please extend it just a little longer than 2 chapters.
I did really love this chapter. Glad Bella got to beat on James for a bit.
Date: 17 Apr 2010 3:10 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
I am SO looking forward to James' punishment--I hope it's 10 times more painful than the cock-cage!!
Date: 17 Apr 2010 2:55 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
Please don't be so harsh on Carslile.
Date: 17 Apr 2010 2:38 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
Great chapter! I loved seeing Bella take charge and not be the victim this time. I'm also glad Edward and everyone else showed up to help out. I think Jake should let Carlisle send James to Aro. :0)
Date: 17 Apr 2010 2:36 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
Great chapter. Yes, I would love to read about the Bella before she met James. Thanks for the update.
Date: 17 Apr 2010 2:35 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
Wow. Very nicely done. I love Bella going medival on James. Hmm, I woud like to see more. Maybe more outtakes on Bella and Edward after this ends. I'm a exb loyalist at heart.
Date: 17 Apr 2010 2:06 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
I'd love to read it!
Date: 17 Apr 2010 2:04 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
I am so sad that this is coming to an end. I have been reading this story since last summer. I'm glad the girls weren't stuck with James for too long. They have been through just about everything.
I think some background into Bella could only enhance the story. So I say, go for it.
Date: 17 Apr 2010 2:01 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
I think it is a great idea to send James to Aro. I think Bella and Victoria would have more peace that way. I feel bad that Carlisle has lost his livelihood. He trusted the wrong person. I hope something could work out for him...well for everyone really. Great job...thanks so much!!!
This would be awesome as original work. I would buy it!!!
Date: 17 Apr 2010 2:00 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
That would be cool to see what she was like before she meet fuck head. I cant believe only two more chapters. I was impressed that it was Bella that took him down. I Love the idea of Aro getting James and what about a story of what happens to him with Aro WHAT YA THINK??????
Date: 17 Apr 2010 1:37 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
I'm glad it was Bella that took him down and I can't wait to see what Aro will do to him (is that evil of me?). Go Bella Go!!!!
Date: 17 Apr 2010 1:20 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
I'm so glad that Bella and Victoria are finally safe! I hope that Aro will make James suffer for all he did to the girls!
Date: 17 Apr 2010 1:20 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
I am SO happy that they found Bella and Victoria! Cannot wait to see what happens next!
Date: 17 Apr 2010 1:03 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
Yes, great chapter. Looking forward to the next chapter & their HEA
Date: 17 Apr 2010 12:56 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
Welcome back ladies:
Go bella!!!! beat the snot out of him.
Woo Hoo Carlisle has the right idea.
Date: 17 Apr 2010 12:48 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
ooops I totaly freaked a bit when I read "we are going to leave the story here...forever..." because I took it as you were ending the story with this chapter and felt instantly better when I read the rest of the note..duh..
I really liked the chapter and loved how Bella was able to fight for herself, and Victoria. Cant wait for the next chapter!
Date: 17 Apr 2010 12:33 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
I absolutely LOVE the idea of a prequel. There is so much potential in that idea! So, you won't be taking this down to publish? I'm eager to see where you would go on putting this together as an original work.
So Bella beat the shit out of James with the lamp? Brilliant. Thank you so much for letting her be able to do that. And their going to take James to Aro? Now THAT is the best fucking thing I've heard all day! I look forward to the next chapter.
Date: 17 Apr 2010 12:32 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
Ladies!!! Always great to hear from you ;)
My favorite part? Bella realizing she is strong, powerful and able to take care of herself. The way she looked back at James and didn't back down, doubt or hesitate, it is what she needed; even if not even her knew it until it happened. Also how she took care of Victoria, hiding her, keeping her safe. Bella has an amazing heart.
Part of this is over, not all. There's still the handling of James, and all the mess he has made, including Laurent. Of course Jacob would have a hard time agreeing to what Carlisle was asking for; to him James needs to face the law. Sadly there might be ways for him to wave out of the system and go back to hurting women, Bella and Victoria included. Is it the "best" idea to let the community handle him? Tough to say, but very understandable. And as Carlisle said, he needs to make it right by Bella.
Hope to see the next chapter soon :(, even if it means the end is closer.
Date: 17 Apr 2010 12:31 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
Great ending for James! Instead of showing Bella before she met James, I would like to see more of how James changed Bella during the relationship prior to dropping her off at the school. It is very easy for someone to manipulate and control someone else by various forms of abuse whether it be physical, verbal or emotional. I think showing that aspect of the story, although we see it in Victoria, would maybe shed the light to so many people that may not even realize it is happening to them. Given Victoria's own past, it is easy to see how quickly he got to her, but Bella is a whole other story. I think for the most part we all feel Bella is a strong character in general so I can't see it being so easy for James to change her. It must have taken a while to break down Bella and cut her off from her family and friends.
Only two chapters left!!!!! : ( : ( : ( : ( : (
Date: 17 Apr 2010 12:26 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
lovely...especially the book idea
Date: 17 Apr 2010 12:14 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
This was fantastic! Finally!...that bastard James..I can't express how happy I am about his recapture. Poor Carlisle though, I am so sorry about the school.
It was really uplifting to see Bella not fear him and even taking action against him.
Relieved that Edward and the gang found them also..
What will happen with Aro?
I'll just wait and see..
You're goddesses!!
Date: 17 Apr 2010 12:14 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
I wish the school could have stayed open. It was good in concept, Carlisle just needs to change a few things.
Date: 17 Apr 2010 12:07 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
OMG! I literally jump up and down when i got the alert! Finally. Aro is gonna fuck him up!
Date: 17 Apr 2010 12:06 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
It was great! i'm so glad you updated, I just checked not even half an hour ago, and then I got a hunch to check again and ... there it was!!!
I love that Carlisle wants to take care of James himself. I really hope Jake looks the pther way with this one.
Date: 17 Apr 2010 12:03 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
awesome work
Date: 17 Apr 2010 12:03 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
"Let me take him to Aro."- that makes me smile sadidistically. He deserves what will come to him there.
Any chance of seeing any of that?
Date: 17 Apr 2010 12:02 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
I hope we get to see what happens with James in Aro's care, what happened with the other women Laurent did this to, some punishment for Heidi (she was just as much an accomplice as Laurent and being terrorised by James wasn't enough) and some healing and future care for Victoria and her baby. Perhaps James' death could be faked and all his money goes to Victoria with the aid of some forged documents or maybe a trust for the baby.
Any sequesl would have to deal with Bella's trauma and how she eventually works submission back into her life. Edward is certainly a kind master, so it could be interesting to see how that could aid her psychological recovery.
Date: 17 Apr 2010 12:01 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
im glad their safe and back together. i cant wait to see what happens to james now.
Date: 16 Apr 2010 11:53 PM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
yay!! i'm soo glad that they are finally about to be rid of james forever. phew!!!! i wonder what bella and victoria are going to do now. they can't just depend on edward forever.. i hope bella will go to college...
Date: 16 Apr 2010 11:50 PM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
I think it sounds like a good idea...............now....are we going to get to see what Aro has in store? And if they do give James to Aro.....how will Laurent and that other woman be explained and/or dealt with? I know Laurent is dead and all...but that other stupid bitch will probably talk!
Date: 16 Apr 2010 11:46 PM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
Love it! Thank GOD they are okay! I am so happy now! I can't wait for the published result, it will be amazing. I think having Bella's POV before James is a great idea too!
Date: 16 Apr 2010 11:10 PM Title: Chapter 74: James
At this rate, this freaking story is never going to be finished. It's been what...well over a year already? It's not even that LONG, for crying out loud! This is like the thing that never dies. Why you can't just consolidate your efforts and wrap this thing up is beyond me. Who cares, though...I'm done.
Author's Response:
WOW...
Date: 16 Apr 2010 10:31 PM Title: Chapter 74: James
Wondering when the next installment is due...I know...patience...but I really LOVE this story and can't wait to see what's going to happen next! Muwah!
Date: 16 Apr 2010 5:28 PM Title: Chapter 4: Bella - DAY 3 PART A
Ho-ly shit. I would seriously pay money to be in a room with Alice and Jasper like that.... *le sigh* Fuckin awesome.
Date: 16 Apr 2010 3:02 PM Title: Chapter 74: James
James will NEVER get enough torture for his actions! He is one sick fuck. You wrote him so well.
Love this story and will be waiting with bated breath until there is an update. Thank you.
Date: 15 Apr 2010 5:13 PM Title: Chapter 74: James
OMG seriously what a cliffie!!! I hope James gets soooooo f'd up!!!
Date: 14 Apr 2010 5:48 AM Title: Chapter 74: James
Yea!!!! James is knocked out.
Crap I am all caught up....now what will I read Need some good story recs.
Loving this story.
Date: 14 Apr 2010 5:36 AM Title: Chapter 73: Edward Day 23 and 24
i was hoping James would lose his phone. Save the Girls!!!!
Date: 14 Apr 2010 5:13 AM Title: Chapter 71 - James: Day 23 and 24
one down two to go!
Date: 14 Apr 2010 4:52 AM Title: Chapter 70: Bella DAY 23 and 24
I know he found them because of the chip in Victoria...but it would have been funny to see James point of view of him running round the country side chasing a rat thinking Victoria was running from him. He could have put it in wrong and it got transfered to a rat somehow. lol. I could just see him running around saying come out come out wherever you are.
Date: 14 Apr 2010 4:34 AM Title: Chapter 69: Edward DAY 23
Jacob needs to fall in love with victoria and help her raise the baby!
I think Bella should go to business school and then help Carlisle open the school again and help out with the paperwork and interviewing and such.
Edward can become the Lawyer for the school.
Date: 13 Apr 2010 4:04 AM Title: Chapter 74: James
Yes! Finally some action against James. Well, it is time, since he got away from his earlier capture.
Date: 10 Apr 2010 11:44 PM Title: Chapter 74: James
Just wanted to say you guys are really good writers im loving this story and ur others aswell. Love the new site glad i finally checked it out.
Date: 07 Apr 2010 10:51 AM Title: Interview with the Master
Lmao...carlisle!
Date: 06 Apr 2010 2:59 AM Title: Chapter 57: James DAY 20 PART C
Clever Carlisle! This idea was brillant! Did Not see it coming. I always have had faith in Carlisle in this story - thanks for not letting me down! James will pay for being an ass! Thank You! Rose's touch also made me smile in the end - love the power on that girl:)
Date: 05 Apr 2010 4:01 AM Title: Chapter 74: James
more please!!!! :)
Date: 03 Apr 2010 2:26 AM Title: Chapter 74: James
please tell me they killed him and that they make it back to edward or get ahold of him and he saves them and then him and bella can start their journey of trust healing and lots of lemons and they eventually get married and work their way into the playroom which they both need and did not know it
Date: 02 Apr 2010 8:54 PM Title: Chapter 74: James
Please tell me that little bastard is going to suffer. He needs to die or have "little Jamie" permanently removed form his body!! I hope it was Bella who clocked him in the head.
Date: 02 Apr 2010 6:45 PM Title: Chapter 74: James
YES!!!! I hope he suffers! Can't wait to find out what happens next!
Date: 02 Apr 2010 6:30 PM Title: Chapter 73: Edward Day 23 and 24
*whew* I feel better knowing that they are on their way - soon!!
Date: 02 Apr 2010 6:12 PM Title: Chapter 71 - James: Day 23 and 24
Well damn -- didn't think that Laurant was that bad. Guess I was wrong!
Date: 02 Apr 2010 5:30 PM Title: Chapter 70: Bella DAY 23 and 24
Oh holy crap!!!
Date: 02 Apr 2010 3:53 PM Title: Chapter 57: James DAY 20 PART C
I'm still reading but i just have to do this.. GOOO ROSE. hihi alright done now and on to the reading
Date: 01 Apr 2010 9:32 PM Title: Chapter 74: James
I've so enjoyed reading this story. Please update soon.
Date: 01 Apr 2010 9:32 PM Title: Chapter 74: James
I've so enjoyed reading this story. Please update soon.
Date: 01 Apr 2010 9:31 PM Title: Chapter 74: James
I've so enjoyed reading this story. Please update soon.
Date: 01 Apr 2010 5:25 PM Title: Chapter 74: James
Upate?????
Date: 01 Apr 2010 11:13 AM Title: Chapter 74: James
TSO and Footrooza-
This is by far one of the best stories out there in fanfic land! I have been enjoying following this saga for quite some time, and though I lost you for a few chapters in transition to this website, I've read each new chapter as soon as it came out! You somehow manage to be realistic in the head of the sick piece of work that is James, while at the same time, you draw one of the most caring and kind Edwards around. You do this beautifully, especially when Edward is in full Dom mode, which I believe is what makes this story especially hot!
Thanks for continuing to write a great story, which I look forward to following to the end. I hope James dies with his cock cage on!
~BOH
Date: 01 Apr 2010 3:49 AM Title: Chapter 74: James
that was not very nice! first its late and then the chapter ends like that!!! your killing me!!! lol even with all this mania i still love the story send me mre chapters and quick!!! :)
Date: 31 Mar 2010 9:25 PM Title: Chapter 74: James
I can't believe it... I am dying here, but so well done I can't wait for the next chapter:)
Date: 31 Mar 2010 9:14 PM Title: Chapter 73: Edward Day 23 and 24
GPS... He lost his phone... I love it!!!
Date: 30 Mar 2010 4:44 AM Title: Chapter 74: James
Wow James world fades to black they weren't taking any chances. I can't wait for the next update. Until next time. I love how when you click on the link now it takes to the most current update that is new and I fucking love it.
Date: 29 Mar 2010 10:50 PM Title: Chapter 74: James
WTF...lol that was too short! Can't wait for the next Chapter! Keep up the awesome work ladies.
Date: 29 Mar 2010 7:30 PM Title: Chapter 74: James
I just spent the last few days reading all of this, and I freaking LOVE IT!
Date: 29 Mar 2010 4:28 PM Title: Chapter 74: James
Awesome. I hope they beat the shit out of him.
Date: 29 Mar 2010 3:58 PM Title: Chapter 74: James
The cliffies are killing me!
:)
Date: 29 Mar 2010 5:41 AM Title: Chapter 74: James
that was good cant wait to see what is going to happen and when edward and the gang is going to get there i remeber he has her phone that has gpc in it and cant wiat
Date: 28 Mar 2010 11:54 PM Title: Chapter 71 - James: Day 23 and 24
James is an evil, evil thing!
Date: 28 Mar 2010 8:05 AM Title: Chapter 74: James
Please please please say thats all the others coming to help them!!!! And I hope James stays out cold. He doesn't deserve to live after everything he has done to them. And Heidi was awful to, she helped James.
Great chapter guys!
Date: 28 Mar 2010 6:54 AM Title: Chapter 74: James
Bullyah!! I love it. Heidi's ass is going to jail too. No I don't feel sorry for her she didn't care about the girls so she chose her fate. Looooove it. Until next chapter:)
Date: 27 Mar 2010 11:45 PM Title: Chapter 74: James
He's evil but the poor guy still has a cock cage on. And he can still do all that! Gotta have a little respect for the fucker! Btw, becuz of this story I had to google cock cage. Yikes!