Date: 06 Jan 2019 11:57 PM Title: Chapter 1
I’m really not trying to be mean here, but do you speak english as a second language? There are so many grammatical errors and missed pronouns it was hard to read. I highly recommend a beta or a re-edit if you plan to continue this. The basic idea of the story has merit.
Thank you for your comment and reading.
I'm sorry for the mistakes, I'm not so good in English. It's not my native language, and I have no one to check it out. I will be glad, if you have time, you will write me mistakes and how to correct them.