Date: 18 Aug 2018 11:52 AM Title: When five words out of Bella's mouth fucked me up.
I can't stop smiling!! Can she walk away from the family is what i want to know? And is carlisle actually going to be set free?
Carlisle is in WitSec, so he's not technically free, but not behind bars. As long as she sticks with her claim that she was just a stripper, she should be fine.
Date: 17 Aug 2018 10:29 PM Title: When five words out of Bella's mouth fucked me up.
wow what a past she has! Emmett and Jasper deserved what they got. Now she wants to step down? Can she even do that without being killed? What a mind fuck for Edward. I think he will need time to digest this all...I hope she will wait, or that somehow things will work out for them. I really do. Thanks!
I am going with the fact that she never made it public that she was in charge, so the other families would just see her as a stripper. I don't know if that's realistic, but it's what's going down in ficland.
Date: 17 Aug 2018 9:08 PM Title: When five words out of Bella's mouth fucked me up.
I dont know how to feel about it. Such a bomb shell. I wonder how long its going to take Edward to let her in. Perfect chapter
It depends on what else she has to say. Those three words are missing.
Date: 14 Aug 2018 1:10 AM Title: When the rest of my night went well.
Oh my. She reached out and he's too angry to accept. Like you said, two steps forward, three steps back. It has never gone easy for those two. I applaud her for making an honest attempt to reach out to him. I think he's very torn, but wants to accept. I think he just needs time. With that sendoff to her, he may be waiting longer than necessary, though. These two...like oil and water. I loved the chapter! Thanks so much!
Thank you! He is angry.
Date: 11 Aug 2018 1:44 PM Title: When the carefully crafted life I'd built went to shit. Again.
I knew it was her!! The title to this chapter told me she found her way back to him! Funny that he chose the charity. I can't wait for the next chapter!!!! I'm so happy!
I knew someone would get it! Now we have to see how much they screw it up.
Date: 10 Aug 2018 10:57 PM Title: When the carefully crafted life I'd built went to shit. Again.
I sure didn't put it together. Stupid me! Well here we are. They almost meet again. Just when he was getting settled back in Chicago...here she comes! Is Edward in danger now that she and her bodyguards know where he is? Did she come looking for him? Oh, there are so many questions running through my mind. Maybe now we shall see what is to become of them...thanks dear. You surprised me! Again! I love it!
I was trying to dro a hint, but only within the chapter. Lol
Date: 09 Aug 2018 11:04 PM Title: How I came to be living with a mafia princess turned stripper.
Alright I'll be patience..I'm not sure how they will be able to work it out..But I hope so..thank you for a very good story
Thank you. It'll take some faith.
Date: 07 Aug 2018 5:22 AM Title: How I became truly fulfilled in my life.
This was a different kind of chapter. Like you said, Edward is being reflective on his future. I see he hasn't the heart to continue his previous work, and I'm glad to see him with his family and doing something worthwhile now for work. I like that! I'm wondering, big time, how Bella will reappear in his life. I'll wait, eagerly, to see how you do that. Thanks, once again, for quality entertainment!
It's a secret! But it's how I always saw it going, with maybe a few twists.
Date: 07 Aug 2018 5:06 AM Title: How I became truly fulfilled in my life.
I read this chapter & then had to go back and make sure this wasn't the last chapter. Shew it's not. bella still has a chance to go into witness protection and bump into edward in chicago. I'm still hoping for reconciliation!!
It's not the last. I would never spring it on you.
Date: 04 Aug 2018 7:58 AM Title: When I tried to pick up the pieces.
This is a bittersweet chapter. Edward's return home to the place he no longer feels like he fits, although his family is warm and welcoming. What a picture you have painted here. Edward is lost and is changing. I hope he finds Bella again...
It's true, he doesn't feel like he fits in anywhere at the moment.
Date: 02 Aug 2018 8:19 AM Title: When I was made to pay for all that I had done.
I trust you implicitly! You take us through the wringer and bring us back again. You tell one helluva good story. I'm in, all the way...I think you know that. Edward got off very lightly with just a 60 day suspension. Will Bella follow him home? Will she wait to connect with him until he returns? Guess I'll need to wait and see, along with everyone else! I've been gone a few days taking care of medical problems, but am back now...
I'm glad to see you're back. I look for your reviews because you're almost always first. I hope everything is okay.
Date: 31 Jul 2018 2:48 AM Title: When I was made to pay for all that I had done.
I wish he would have slipped her a little note or something in that diner. I know theyboth have to cover their butts but my heart is hurting. And on top of that he will be looking for another job....i hope it's not in chicago and at least near Bella.
I believe you will be disappointed.
Date: 28 Jul 2018 3:01 AM Title: The one time Bella should have told me her plans.
She did not want him there or she would have asked. She feels bad for betraying the trust he put in her. Oh well bad match for those two.
She tried so hard to keep him from getting involved in the end.
Date: 28 Jul 2018 2:21 AM Title: The one time Bella should have told me her plans.
It occurred to me that maybe Bella had abandoned Edward, though. Now his cover has been blown, so he needs to watch his back, I'm guessing. Can't wait to see how this all plays out! Outstanding plot line! Thanks so much. I love this story even through the brutal parts...
It is pretty much blown, though not everybody knows who he is. Thank you so much!
Date: 27 Jul 2018 1:48 AM Title: When I experienced pain that was worse than all the violence one should have to endure in a lifetime.
Thank you for the update..Well done..Is Edward gone forever?..can't wait to find out..until you post again
Ooh, well, he's got the next few chapters.
Date: 26 Jul 2018 7:01 PM Title: When I experienced pain that was worse than all the violence one should have to endure in a lifetime.
I hope the next chapter ends with him not leaving her in bed. :( the question still remains how will they make it work?
Sadly, it does.
Date: 24 Jul 2018 9:26 AM Title: When I experienced pain that was worse than all the violence one should have to endure in a lifetime.
oh no. I truly didn't see this coming. Edward is gone? They're over? No, I don't expect you to tell me. I will need to read it for myself. Damn, I don't much like non-HEA stories, but there are a few exceptions. We shall see...
I've got you, I promise!
Date: 21 Jul 2018 2:28 AM Title: When I had a screaming match with Carlisle.
OMG that was the most gag inducing gore I've read in a while. Good thing I wasn't eating a meal while I was reading it. How is Emmett not dead yet? Is the plan to have Jasper come in and think he was killing Emmett? Thanks for the reveal here. I don't know how this is going to end well. Sorry but I'm a bit queasy from reading this...
Emmett's life is going to be cut very short.
Date: 17 Jul 2018 12:06 AM Title: When the death toll rose higher than expected.
So you implied that Bella was up to something. Is she undercover too? No, forget I asked. I really don't want to know. Really, I don't.. What a mess. Garrett is dead? The garroter? Sounds like they were expecting to be hit, the shipment people, that is. Was someone setting Bella up? What a tangled web we weave...
Until next time...
So many answers come in the next chapter. And the one after that. Thank you for reading.
Date: 14 Jul 2018 12:22 AM Title: When I sort of made friends with Jasper.
My M.O., when reading a story, is to get immersed in each chapter as it comes. Read and digest it as thoroughly as I can. Glean what details I can understand, at the time. I don't really try to figure out any hidden agenda a character has unless it blatently comes to stare me in the face. With subtle indications, as this story gives, I try to just stay in the moment, go with the flow, and enjoy the story. What Bella is really up to has not yet become obvious, but I know from comments that she IS up to something specific and has some kind of agenda. I prefer to let all that unfold, naturally, during the story and not reach for guesses unless something smacks me in the face. I love how you've given subtle stage-setting clues, but nothing overt. I enjoy how each step leads up to the big reveal, whatever it is. Edward is more obvious, but his end isn't. Thanks for giving me such lovely entertainment!!
That's the way I would want you to read, so that's a good thing!
Date: 13 Jul 2018 7:02 AM Title: When it all went to shit.
Very interesting that she isn't getting completely naked now that edward is around. Also i wonder was she trying to get stuff to use against jake so she could protect Edward when it's all over. Or she is setting traps but doing so in ways to save edward.
Those are interesting theories!
Date: 12 Jul 2018 12:41 AM Title: When it all went to shit.
Thank you for the update...I don't like Emmett in this story...He is an ASS!!!! I don't know how Masen is going to get out of this...until you post again
I barely know myself! Thank you.
I barely know myself! Thank you.
Date: 10 Jul 2018 1:50 AM Title: When it all went to shit.
If she was wrong about where Emmett was, maybe she was wrong about other details. That could be dangerous, for her and for Edward. You ask a question about her before the chapter begins. Are you saying that we still haven't gotten what she is up to? Seems so. I'm just reading and making observations...
Of the vocal readers, most hate Bella. I've given them no reason to like her, really. A few have seen the façade, if you will, and they love her. I wanted to know if there were others, especially after a chapter where she is so harsh toward Edward.
Date: 06 Jul 2018 4:03 AM Title: When I discovered not even a shovel could dig me out of this hole.
lol you so funny who could turn down a lemon or two :). Bella has one down and two to go then what are they going to do. I think Edward is going to have to retire from his job.
There was a guest reviewer on ffn that said it was all angry lemons and no content. That was a dig at her, lol. Thank you for reading!
Date: 03 Jul 2018 7:55 PM Title: When I discovered not even a shovel could dig me out of this hole.
No I am ok how jimmy went down I really hope Edward leaves he’s job to be with Bella or maybe Bella can leave the mafia after her vengeance
We'll have to see if they're able to work something out.
Date: 03 Jul 2018 4:32 PM Title: When I discovered not even a shovel could dig me out of this hole.
thank you for the updates...I hope Edward gets out of this, I don't want him in trouble...Bella is in love with him..I'm sure of it...until you post again
Yes, she sure is. Thank you for reading.
Date: 02 Jul 2018 9:52 PM Title: When I discovered not even a shovel could dig me out of this hole.
I KNOW you're not sorry LOL! Neither am I. I am glad James got a quick end. Maybe he deserved to be tortured, but I liked his end just the way it was. I agree that Edward is in deep. How will he get out of this with his superiors after the job is done? Will he turn Bella? Go rogue? Something else? I have no idea, but am going to enjoy this all along the way until it ends! Thanks.
I can always count on you to go with the flow! Thank you.
Date: 30 Jun 2018 3:42 AM Title: The exact moment I realized the end of this case would break me.
Oh god, I hope this doesn't end in tragedy for either Edward or Bella, but I fear that is where you're going with this story. I'll read it, how could I not, but am cringing inside as to how this will end...
It certainly does feel that way.
It certainly does feel that way.
It certainly does feel that way.
Date: 30 Jun 2018 1:07 AM Title: The exact moment I realized the end of this case would break me.
I have no idea about Ed seems this undercover job has him turning a blind eye to a lot of things. Then he walks away she gets hurt again
I guess it depends on who you're rooting for.
Date: 26 Jun 2018 5:46 AM Title: When I finally stumbled upon the truth.
Eeeewwwwww James sounds so slimy. Just like I always picture the actor that played him in the original. I didn't like him AT ALL! So a lot happened in this chapter. Things are moving quickly. Can't wait to see what comes next!
Slimy and smarmy is how I picture him.
Date: 22 Jun 2018 10:31 PM Title: When I realized I'd gone too far to turn back around.
I still don't know what to make of Bella. I'm guessing her tough girl routine around Edward is either a remnant of the persona she uses in the mob world, or is some kind of protection against showing Edward her true self, or maybe both or some kind of mix. Either way, their sex is hot and I'm loving the story.
I loved your last sentence, it made me laugh. It's the combination of both.