Date: 15 Sep 2018 12:11 PM Title: Epilogue
I just wanted to let you know how much I enjoyed reading your story!
The journey the two of them made together to have an happy ending like this :-)
Thank you very much for sharing this story with us readers!
Greetings from Germany,
Thank you so much for sharing your thoughts!
Date: 14 Sep 2018 11:21 PM Title: Epilogue
Just beautiful! You managed to end with a lemon even so soon after childbirth. I love that Gavin is a bald baby. 2 of mine were also. You indeed have taken us on a long and wonderful journey with these two. It was so worth the trip! I look forward to the outtake, the completion of this story, so I can save it to my own library of favorites. Thanks so much.
I regret being so late getting to these so that I didn't have the chance to thank you.
Date: 11 Sep 2018 5:39 AM Title: No lesson needed. Love truly is everything.
Nothing was a facade any longer. How wonderfully you worked the story title there into the closing moments. That was a nice touch! Beautiful wedding with just a smidge of the family interplay that I very much get a kick out of. Sorry I'm making weird sentences today. Lovely ending to a story that began hard, softened, and became full of love at the end. Very well done! Thank you!
Thank you so much! I tend to try to work the title in.
Date: 09 Sep 2018 9:37 PM Title: When I would do anything for my girls.
OK. Here goes. While I'm cool with everything that happened in this chapter, expected it to happen even, I'm sort of taken aback with the tone. There is a huge change in the tone of the chapter from just about everything else in the story. Maybe I missed it. Maybe there was a gradual change that I didn't notice? I'm not disliking anything but still it seems to me that this chapter doesn't quite fit with most of the rest of the story. Maybe the tone changed when Edward left Seattle and came to Chicago. I'm sorry. I don't want to be critical, or mean, or anything like that. I'm just noticing that this story has changed quite a bit. It's like two stories, almost, and I'm embarrassed to say that it probably has been a gradual change that I wasn't consciously aware of. I don't know what else to say here. I am at least ok, if not better than ok, with all of it. It's just different now...
I'm okay with criticism. I felt a little off with it too, and I even went back in and made changes. I think what you're describing has been gradual. I worried that Edward was too low-key in this one, but he was very concerned that Bella would be unhappy with the changes.
Date: 04 Sep 2018 9:32 AM Title: When guilt and worth were the words of the day.
She was bound to have a break down OMG it will be one of many but she has a good suport group with Edward in the lead. It takes time to heal and learn to cope.
I agree. Thank you!
Date: 03 Sep 2018 11:07 PM Title: When guilt and worth were the words of the day.
What a harrowing chapter! Even the pace of it conveyed Bella's frantic descent into her PTSD attack. I was worried, at first, that someone had physically attacked her. Not that what happened was in any way less than that, but still it was a relief that Edward got to her so quickly and got her to the help she needed. Their brief mention of the murder they committed together spoke of just how much need there is to not spill everything while still seeking help for it's aftereffets. Bravo.
I imagine she had panic attacks before, but this is the first when she was with Edward. Thank you for your kind words.
Date: 01 Sep 2018 9:43 AM Title: When I needed every ounce of my patience.
Bella is in so much pain from the guilt of her life she needs to talk it out just like Edward said. She is a good person she just needs to heal her heart and that will take time.
It's true. He's already forgiven her, but she can't forgive herself.
Date: 01 Sep 2018 2:13 AM Title: When our dinner plans were cut short.
Well where are we going here? I guess way back there I convinced myself that there was no HEA for them perse. So completely different.
They're working on it, but there are bound to be ups and downs.
Date: 01 Sep 2018 1:15 AM Title: When our dinner plans were cut short.
Did you hear that fly ball just now? You knocked it out of the park with this chapter!! The crowd goes wild!!
Now what will she be for halloween? Maybe a sexy kitten or wonder woman maybe? She could tie edward up with her lasso. Hahaha
Now THAT'S funny.
Date: 27 Aug 2018 10:09 PM Title: When I needed every ounce of my patience.
I didn't think that, but it was still surprising, even shocking, to see just how much her emotions were in turmoil. I love that she was able to verbalize her feelings to Edward. That's a start. She has a lot of baggage. It's not surprising that it will take time to unpack all of it. She seems willing to do that. She loves Edward enough to try. I love Vicki. She's a doll! Thanks!!
It was mostly in reference to a guest reviewer that said 'of course now Bella is perfect abus they'll have their hea'. It was mostly her reference that Bella is tainted- suggesting that a rape victim doesn't deserve love- that pissed me off.
So thank you for seeing the chapter for what it was. I do realism where I can.
Date: 25 Aug 2018 7:37 AM Title: When I dated Bella Swan.
Just perfect! I wouldn't have wanted to wait either! The hot fuck on her desk was just wonderful! The children are the most rewarding to help. They seem to regain their trust more quickly. I love the block building with Edward and Seth. Thanks, dear. This was a very lovely chapter!
Thank you so much!
Date: 21 Aug 2018 1:02 AM Title: When we found our new normal.
Ah, yes! I like where this chapter is going! At last they both can drop the facade and be real with each other. This was difficult to imagine happening, but you said it would and I trusted you. I'm surprised the other families allowed this to happen. I would have thought they would try and take out the remaining members, the ones who tried to go straight. Not in this story, I'm guessing. That's different, but I like it. Are we near the end? Thanks for everything...
Yes, I'm going with the just a stripper defense. It's nearing the end, but s few chapters to go. .
Date: 18 Aug 2018 12:52 PM Title: When five words out of Bella's mouth fucked me up.
I can't stop smiling!! Can she walk away from the family is what i want to know? And is carlisle actually going to be set free?
Carlisle is in WitSec, so he's not technically free, but not behind bars. As long as she sticks with her claim that she was just a stripper, she should be fine.
Date: 17 Aug 2018 11:29 PM Title: When five words out of Bella's mouth fucked me up.
wow what a past she has! Emmett and Jasper deserved what they got. Now she wants to step down? Can she even do that without being killed? What a mind fuck for Edward. I think he will need time to digest this all...I hope she will wait, or that somehow things will work out for them. I really do. Thanks!
I am going with the fact that she never made it public that she was in charge, so the other families would just see her as a stripper. I don't know if that's realistic, but it's what's going down in ficland.
Date: 17 Aug 2018 10:08 PM Title: When five words out of Bella's mouth fucked me up.
I dont know how to feel about it. Such a bomb shell. I wonder how long its going to take Edward to let her in. Perfect chapter
It depends on what else she has to say. Those three words are missing.
Date: 14 Aug 2018 2:10 AM Title: When the rest of my night went well.
Oh my. She reached out and he's too angry to accept. Like you said, two steps forward, three steps back. It has never gone easy for those two. I applaud her for making an honest attempt to reach out to him. I think he's very torn, but wants to accept. I think he just needs time. With that sendoff to her, he may be waiting longer than necessary, though. These two...like oil and water. I loved the chapter! Thanks so much!
Thank you! He is angry.
Date: 11 Aug 2018 2:44 PM Title: When the carefully crafted life I'd built went to shit. Again.
I knew it was her!! The title to this chapter told me she found her way back to him! Funny that he chose the charity. I can't wait for the next chapter!!!! I'm so happy!
I knew someone would get it! Now we have to see how much they screw it up.
Date: 10 Aug 2018 11:57 PM Title: When the carefully crafted life I'd built went to shit. Again.
I sure didn't put it together. Stupid me! Well here we are. They almost meet again. Just when he was getting settled back in Chicago...here she comes! Is Edward in danger now that she and her bodyguards know where he is? Did she come looking for him? Oh, there are so many questions running through my mind. Maybe now we shall see what is to become of them...thanks dear. You surprised me! Again! I love it!
I was trying to dro a hint, but only within the chapter. Lol
Date: 10 Aug 2018 12:04 AM Title: How I came to be living with a mafia princess turned stripper.
Alright I'll be patience..I'm not sure how they will be able to work it out..But I hope so..thank you for a very good story
Thank you. It'll take some faith.
Date: 07 Aug 2018 6:22 AM Title: How I became truly fulfilled in my life.
This was a different kind of chapter. Like you said, Edward is being reflective on his future. I see he hasn't the heart to continue his previous work, and I'm glad to see him with his family and doing something worthwhile now for work. I like that! I'm wondering, big time, how Bella will reappear in his life. I'll wait, eagerly, to see how you do that. Thanks, once again, for quality entertainment!
It's a secret! But it's how I always saw it going, with maybe a few twists.
Date: 07 Aug 2018 6:06 AM Title: How I became truly fulfilled in my life.
I read this chapter & then had to go back and make sure this wasn't the last chapter. Shew it's not. bella still has a chance to go into witness protection and bump into edward in chicago. I'm still hoping for reconciliation!!
It's not the last. I would never spring it on you.
Date: 04 Aug 2018 8:58 AM Title: When I tried to pick up the pieces.
This is a bittersweet chapter. Edward's return home to the place he no longer feels like he fits, although his family is warm and welcoming. What a picture you have painted here. Edward is lost and is changing. I hope he finds Bella again...
It's true, he doesn't feel like he fits in anywhere at the moment.
Date: 02 Aug 2018 9:19 AM Title: When I was made to pay for all that I had done.
I trust you implicitly! You take us through the wringer and bring us back again. You tell one helluva good story. I'm in, all the way...I think you know that. Edward got off very lightly with just a 60 day suspension. Will Bella follow him home? Will she wait to connect with him until he returns? Guess I'll need to wait and see, along with everyone else! I've been gone a few days taking care of medical problems, but am back now...
I'm glad to see you're back. I look for your reviews because you're almost always first. I hope everything is okay.
Date: 31 Jul 2018 3:48 AM Title: When I was made to pay for all that I had done.
I wish he would have slipped her a little note or something in that diner. I know theyboth have to cover their butts but my heart is hurting. And on top of that he will be looking for another job....i hope it's not in chicago and at least near Bella.
I believe you will be disappointed.
Date: 28 Jul 2018 4:01 AM Title: The one time Bella should have told me her plans.
She did not want him there or she would have asked. She feels bad for betraying the trust he put in her. Oh well bad match for those two.
She tried so hard to keep him from getting involved in the end.
Date: 28 Jul 2018 3:21 AM Title: The one time Bella should have told me her plans.
It occurred to me that maybe Bella had abandoned Edward, though. Now his cover has been blown, so he needs to watch his back, I'm guessing. Can't wait to see how this all plays out! Outstanding plot line! Thanks so much. I love this story even through the brutal parts...
It is pretty much blown, though not everybody knows who he is. Thank you so much!
Date: 27 Jul 2018 2:48 AM Title: When I experienced pain that was worse than all the violence one should have to endure in a lifetime.
Thank you for the update..Well done..Is Edward gone forever?..can't wait to find out..until you post again
Ooh, well, he's got the next few chapters.
Date: 26 Jul 2018 8:01 PM Title: When I experienced pain that was worse than all the violence one should have to endure in a lifetime.
I hope the next chapter ends with him not leaving her in bed. :( the question still remains how will they make it work?
Sadly, it does.