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Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Oct 2015 7:57 AM Title: Chapter 14 - EPOV

Thankfully Edward and the police arrived in time to save Bella. Broken bones and cuts will heal, but James was determined to kill her, so I'm thrilled he died instead!



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for all of your wonderful reviews. It's been a while since I posted this story so it's nice to see people still finding it. I'm glad you enjoyed the story.

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Oct 2015 7:38 AM Title: Chapter 13

As foolish as it was, at least Bella confronting James put an end to this nightmare! I was so happy when Edward was beating hell out of James and happier still when Detective Aro shot and killed him!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Oct 2015 7:20 AM Title: Chapter 12

See, this isn't keeping Edward safe at all! I hope she has a knife, or a gun and just kills the crazy creep!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Oct 2015 6:51 AM Title: Chapter 11

You better hope real hard, little girl, they all forgive you for being so ready to leave them! I'm exasperated with Bella, she just isn't thinking clearly about this !

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Oct 2015 6:27 AM Title: Chapter 10

I hope she gets this sacrificial nonsense out of her head and soon! Even if she goes to James, if he hurts or kills Bella, it would devestate every one who loves her! Plus there is no gaurantee that it would end his vendetta against her loved ones!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Oct 2015 5:30 AM Title: Chapter 9

Good lord what has this poor girl got planned? That bastard is too close to her all the time and I'm afraid he'll get ahold of her and that will be the end!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Oct 2015 5:07 AM Title: Chapter 8

I knew that sicko wasn't through  messing with Bella's life! It scares me that he watches her so closely!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Oct 2015 4:40 AM Title: Bonus: A Father's Sacrifice - CPOV

The fact her dad and her boyfriend get along so well has to make Bella pretty happy! Now if only there was a magic bullet out there with Jame's name on it!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Oct 2015 4:26 AM Title: Chapter 7

The weekend went great, but I'm afraid telling Edward how she feels isn't the only problem Bella has! James is still out there with murder in his heart!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Oct 2015 2:42 AM Title: Chapter 6

I'm thinking Bella needs to tell her dadthat James is the suspect in the campus murders!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Oct 2015 2:20 AM Title: Chapter 5

I'm afraid Bella is right and this will turn out to be the handiwork of James! According to the prologue, that sure can't be a good thing!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Oct 2015 1:46 AM Title: Chapter 4

After such a lovely birthday, I guess it had to turn bad! At least now Bella will tell everyone what happened to her mom!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Oct 2015 1:25 AM Title: Chapter 3

At least she told him a bit of her awful secret. Matbe she can tell him the rest later! It scares me that those flowers showed up like that! If it is her stalker, how did he find her?

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Oct 2015 1:15 AM Title: Chapter 2

Who the hell is calling her Sugar and scaring the hell right out of her?

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Oct 2015 12:42 AM Title: Chapter 1

This was a great start to her college career! It's so nice to like your roommate and liking her brothers has got to be a bonus!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Oct 2015 12:23 AM Title: Prologue

What kind of sick animal does this to someone? (that's probably giving animals a bad name, sorry!)

Reviewer: nello1418 Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 13 Mar 2014 7:23 PM Title: Chapter 13

Awesome ending, a great salute to the book. Loved it and now am off to read the sequel. Good job

Reviewer: PBellamy74 Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Feb 2014 4:30 PM Title: Chapter 13

really great story

Reviewer: gatorgrl91 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 03 Aug 2012 11:19 PM Title: Chapter 5

Great story! Loving it so far!!
:)

Author's Response:

I'm glad you've found my first fic and are enjoying it :)

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing.

Reviewer: shirley250 Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Jan 2011 5:03 PM Title: Chapter 6

i realy injot this story.

Reviewer: Canadaci Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 28 Jun 2010 12:19 AM Title: Chapter 14 - EPOV

Excellent.  Look forward for the sequel.

Reviewer: confettirainfall Signed [Report This]
Date: 31 May 2010 4:13 AM Title: Chapter 14 - EPOV

Fabulous! Wonderful! Edward is amazing! And thank goodness Bella talks in her sleep *chuckles*. Great story! Well done!

Author's Response:

Thanks so much, hun!  Yeah, that sleep talking will always give her away ;)  I fell in love with this Edward and couldn't help but make the sequel his.  I just couldn't get him out of my head.  I hope you like it as much.

Reviewer: confettirainfall Signed [Report This]
Date: 31 May 2010 4:00 AM Title: Chapter 13

OMG! James is dead! Bella and Edward are alive and the world is good!!!

Author's Response:

James had to die.  It was the only way to ensure he wouldn't bother them again.  You know jail doesn't really hold the truly ciminally insane.  Yeah, the world is good...for now *evil author laugh*

Reviewer: confettirainfall Signed [Report This]
Date: 31 May 2010 3:49 AM Title: Chapter 12

I have tears ... Must hurry to next chapter ...

Author's Response:

It warms my heart to know my writing brought you to tears, but sorry for doing that to ya ;)

Reviewer: confettirainfall Signed [Report This]
Date: 31 May 2010 3:30 AM Title: Chapter 11

Yay! They finally got together. You wrote a beautiful scene - I truly could feel their joy and love. I just wish Bella wouldn't do whatever it is she's planning. I'm worried for her and Edward.

Author's Response:

Awe, thanks.  I think that is the one lemon I'm most proud of.  You know Bella, she so self sacrificing.  Nothing will stop her once she puts her mind to something.

Reviewer: confettirainfall Signed [Report This]
Date: 31 May 2010 3:11 AM Title: Chapter 10

How is James doing this? Why is Bella still in that room? I'm upset the cops can't seem to find this maniac and now Bella's going to sacrifice herself to protect Edward. Noble perhaps but I'm not sure if it's smart ...

Author's Response:

Bella really doesn't see the point in going from place to place.  James will obviously find her no matter what room she is in, so she'd rather be in her own room.  Yeah, well, my cops are pretty much like the ones in a bad horror movie...completely useless.

Reviewer: confettirainfall Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 May 2010 11:30 PM Title: Chapter 9

The halloween costumes were great but poor Bella - geez! James needs to go and it totally freaked me out when they found the camera.  Now that it's gone, will James get worse since he can't see her?  Poor Mike - even though I don't like him, he really wasn't that bad.  Now I can't wait to find out what Bella has planned.



Author's Response:

I had fun searching for their halloween costumes.  It always makes me smile when readers like them.  I had one girl reading this late at night with all the lights out and actually get creeped out by the sounds around her. 

Mike was annoying but bearable.  A lot of people were actually sad to see him go.

Reviewer: confettirainfall Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 May 2010 1:15 PM Title: Chapter 8

Aww! The I love yous came out. They are so sweet together. Everything was perfect until ... I guess my thoughts were correct - he killed Tanya and Lauren for Bella but now he wants to hurt Edward. I don't think so. No one hurts our Edward! Humf!

Author's Response:

I'm glad you liked the I love you's.  As you can tell, I'm a romantic sap at heart.  Edward appreciates your love and possible protection from the psycho ;)

Reviewer: confettirainfall Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 May 2010 12:58 PM Title: Bonus: A Father's Sacrifice - CPOV

You did such a great job capturing Charlie's voice and although my inner romantic is jumping for joy, I was a little surprised that Edward 'fessed up to wanting to be with Bella forever. I thought it could go either way - he would either clam up or tell Charlie how we really felt. I'm glad it was the latter.

Author's Response:

I love Charlie!  I'm sure you can tell by the tons of Charlie one shots I've written.  Edward has a story of his own that will be told in the sequel.  Might make you understand him a bit more.  I'm a firm believer that when you find "the one" you know it.  My husband and I started dating at the end of January, were engaged by mid March, and married in August.  We've been happily married for 16 years this August.  A lot of people have questioned Edward & Bella's quick love, but as you can tell I'm writing from experience :)  Since Edward knew what he wanted he took advantage of having Charlie alone wihtout major distractions or possible escpape to plead his case.  I'm glad you liked it.

Reviewer: confettirainfall Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 May 2010 12:39 PM Title: Chapter 7

An entire of fishing with Charlie? Wow! Not to mention the game and the kiss! And Bella standing to Amy. Luckily I didn't have personal experiences with girls like that but I heard about them... And Bella luvs Edward. Will she tell him? Can't wait for the next one!

Author's Response:

Yeah, nothing better than your first real kiss in front of the person who tortured you in high school.  Ah, Amy.  She is based on my nemisis in high school.  We had a love/hate relationship.  She loved to hate me so I returned the favor.  Funny how crushing on the same guy once can create that kind of rivalry for the rest of high school.

Bella definitely loves Edward.  Declarations will come but Tommy has to have his fun first ;)

Reviewer: confettirainfall Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 May 2010 12:23 PM Title: Chapter 6

Unbelievable. I can't believe Charlie is allowing them to sleep in the same room let alone the same bed but under the circumstances I guess he would give in. He wanted her home and that was her condition. I like that this Bella has a backbone and not afraid to say what's on her mind. But James-if it's him ... It's weird he's killing girls who are jealous of Bella or who want Edward or maybe I'm just wrong but I'm intrigued.

Author's Response:

Bella had to learn to get a backbone when it comes to Charlie and Tommy.  If she didn't they would've had her locked in her room until she was 50.  The killer is one sick puppy and has a method to his maddness.

Reviewer: confettirainfall Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 May 2010 5:20 AM Title: Chapter 5

What in the world happened to Tanya? I'm not a fan of hers, but I'm almost afraid to find out *covers eyes*

Author's Response:

I'm not a fan of hers either and when some one had to go she seemed like the logical choice :)

Reviewer: confettirainfall Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 May 2010 5:06 AM Title: Chapter 4

All the Cullens were so sweet and loving to Bella, especially Edward and now they are officially together! Yay! And Tommy's surprise visit made her day until ... Holy shit- James!

Author's Response:

I loved her birthday chapter.  It was so much fun.  I'm glad you liked it.  Just wait, James is just getting started. *evil laugh*

Reviewer: confettirainfall Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 May 2010 4:48 AM Title: Chapter 3

I was so relieved that it was Mike who spoke to her and pleased when she enjoyed the game. And her little charade with Emmett and Rose was hilarious but then ... poor Bella. I can't even imagine how scary seeing those flowers must have been. Wow. So sad.

Author's Response:

Yeah, it was fun pulling Bella out of her shell with the little game with Em and Rose.  The gang has made her so comfortable :)  Of course we've gotta take the good with the bad.

Reviewer: confettirainfall Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 May 2010 11:10 PM Title: Chapter 2

I didn't peek at the next chapter but it's a good thing that it's already posted otherwise I'd be dying with anticipation. I really enjoyed the chapter especially how Edward already has befriended Bella and now Alice knows Tommy is Bella's brother. All good and happy until the end when anticipation abounds. Will read more soon!

Author's Response:

I'm having to go back and reread the chapters to remember exactly what happened.

Yes, you are lucky.  I earned the title queen of cliffies during this story.  Luckily I usually updated weekly so no one really had to wait long.

The frienships Bella has made with the Cullens is so important.  Alice wouldn't have let the whole Tommy thing go for long anyway.  She has to know everything about everyone :)

I'll be anxiously awaiting for you to get to the next chapter

Reviewer: confettirainfall Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 May 2010 3:10 PM Title: Chapter 1

I enjoyed that a lot and my heart feels a little better (I'm such a wimp with angst even though I love reading it *shakes head*) although . . . hearing freaky voices sends chills up my spine. And Tommy is so sweet - I'm glad she has him, although . . . I wonder what Edward thinks or did he even notice? At least he saved her from the vile Mike Newton. Ugh - does he never get over Bella? He seems to be hounding her in so many stories *snorts*. Anyway, looking forward what comes next!



Author's Response:

I'm a whimp with the angst too but can't seem to keep from reading it.  I'm glad you like Tommy.  He is based on someone in my life and it warms my heart when I hear that people like him.

Poor Mike will forever be the puppy panting after Bella in my stories.  Poor guy needs to get a clue ;)

Reviewer: confettirainfall Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 May 2010 4:52 AM Title: Prologue

OMG! You're killing me already! Angst - oh my ... I need to breathe ... Then I'll continue ...okay? *smiles shyly*

Author's Response:

The prologue took me forever to write.  It was hard to get it just right.  It's nice to see my agonizing paid off :)

Reviewer: TeamAllTwilight Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 30 Apr 2010 3:13 AM Title: Chapter 14 - EPOV

I really enjoyed this story thank you for sahring it with all of us!  Well done I think, the only thing I would have liked to see is some sort of resolution of what happened to Victoria, or could you be planning a sequel?????



Author's Response:

I'm glad you enjoyed My Sacrifice.  It was my first full story I posted.  The sequel is posted and complete.  Check out Knowing That You Love Me.

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing :)

~Jenn

Reviewer: cullengyrl Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Mar 2010 1:45 AM Title: Chapter 1

I like this chapter but I hope she tells them that Tommy is her brother soon... don't want Edward to think differently now...

Reviewer: cullengyrl Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Mar 2010 1:00 AM Title: Prologue

Sounds good so far.  I like that you are very descriptive without being too wordy.  I look forward to the rest of your storty

Reviewer: SnowyHedwig Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 02 Feb 2010 6:01 AM Title: Chapter 14 - EPOV

Great ending to a great story. I'm looking forward to reading the sequel.

Author's Response:

Thanks so much for all of your reviews.  I love knowing what people liked or didn't like or if I screwed something up.  I enjoy writing and want to learn so it's awesome being able to get reviews so I can learn.  I hope you enjoy Knowing That You Love Me as much as you did My Sacrifice.

Reviewer: SnowyHedwig Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02 Feb 2010 5:48 AM Title: Chapter 13

Loved it. Nicely done. Bella's confession spurring James on really didn't work quite the way she'd expected, did it?

Author's Response:

Thanks!  Yeah, she didn't quite expect him to get that psychotic with her confession.  She simply wanted to keep him distracted so Edward could have time to find her.  At least it all worked out in the end.

Reviewer: SnowyHedwig Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02 Feb 2010 5:38 AM Title: Chapter 12

The phone... and where are the notes she held up for James? Great cliffie!

Author's Response:

You are an observant one.  All will be revealed soon.  I just love writing cliffies.  I had quite a few people call me the evil cliffie princess because of this story.

Thanks again for your continued reviews.

Reviewer: SnowyHedwig Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02 Feb 2010 4:42 AM Title: Chapter 11

First, I loved the lemon. It was beautiful and perfect for them.

Now. Edward loaded the bags the night before and you made me worried that perhaps James put something in there to track them. His text could have been to give them a false sense of security.

Having said that, I loved the chapter. Great job!

Author's Response:

I'm glad you liked the lemon.  It was my first to write and I was so nervous about getting it right.

Your reviews have been so awesome.  Thanks so much for taking the time to leave them.

Reviewer: SnowyHedwig Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 02 Feb 2010 3:30 AM Title: Chapter 10

What has Edward been up to? James is seriously on my "love to kill" list. Evil nasty f*coin bastard, spying on them and continuing to terrorize her. And Jessica... I'm quite surprised the police are just using Bella as bait at this point. I'd be wanting to have done with it all, too, if I was her!

Author's Response:

Hopefully you will like what Edward has been up to :)  Yeah, stupid police are key to my plot ;)  I'm glad you want to kill James.  That means I'm doing my job making him a sick bastard.

Thanks so much for reading and reveiwing.

Reviewer: SnowyHedwig Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 02 Feb 2010 3:27 AM Title: Chapter 9

As soon as Mike was bothering her, I suspected he might be James' next victim - the costume clinched it for me -something James could wear undetected...

Loved their Halloween costumes, but Jessica was such a bitch! Add her to James' hit list for sure!

I'm sure he somehow set up the distraction for Edward and the others, too. Where were the other girls when James made his appearance? I cannot even begin to imagine the terror and sense of helplessness Bella is going through.

Author's Response:

I had so much fun picking out the Halloween costumes.  Don't you just love how Mike can't take a hint?  Too bad he had to learn that lesson the hard way.  Yes, James set up the distraction.  I didn't mean to leave Rose and Alice's whereabouts out.  I need to edit that in.  They were there, but figuring it was Mike in the costume they didn't pay much attention to what was going on between him and Bella.

Thanks so much for reading and reveiwing.

Reviewer: SnowyHedwig Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02 Feb 2010 1:09 AM Title: Chapter 8

I'm so glad they said it, and had such a wonderful evening. I'm even more glad that James didn't know where she was during that time.

I'd thought about if he was killing those who were bothering her, but brushed it off - stupid me! Gret job.

Author's Response:

Yeah, they need their place to get away from psycho James.  They needed the nice evening alone. 

You aren't that stupid ;)

 

 

Reviewer: SnowyHedwig Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 02 Feb 2010 12:52 AM Title: Bonus: A Father's Sacrifice - CPOV

Thank you for Charlie's POV. I think you did him justice, it was wonderful.

Author's Response:

It makes me so happy to hear you say that.  Charlie is my favorite Twilight character other than E&B.  This was my first attempt at his POV and I loved writing him.

Thanks so much again for reviewing.

Reviewer: SnowyHedwig Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2010 8:47 AM Title: Chapter 7

I loved the confrontation with Amy - every girl's dream to get payback on the bully like that. Tommy was cute with Bitt, and I just fell in love with Edward more.

Author's Response:

I really went to school with a girl like Amy.  She was perfect for the bitchy person I needed for this.  Yeah, it's hard not to fall more in love with Sweetward.

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing.

Reviewer: SnowyHedwig Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2010 5:42 AM Title: Chapter 6

So James is definitely responsible (like here was any doubt...) now we just have to see how far he's willing to go. I keep thinking of those after-practise showers Edward has - because Bella is on her own for that brief period of time...

Author's Response:

You are the first person to even think of the after practice showers.  I honestly never thought of that short period of time.

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing.

Reviewer: SnowyHedwig Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2010 5:20 AM Title: Chapter 5

Why do I have the feeling James is sending Bella a message, and perhaps mistook Tanya for Rosalie?

Author's Response:

James knew exactly what he was doing.

Thanks for your continued reviews :)

Reviewer: SnowyHedwig Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2010 4:52 AM Title: Chapter 4

I was sure it was James! Bastard! I wonder if she'll tell them the whole story now?

Author's Response:

Just wait.  You haven't seen anything yet.  James is so much more than a bastard.

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing.

Reviewer: SnowyHedwig Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2010 4:11 AM Title: Chapter 3

Another awesome chapter. You just keep the suspense building. I'm glad she's started to tell Edward.

Author's Response:

Thanks so much for all of the great reviews.  They are truly appreciated.

Reviewer: SnowyHedwig Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 31 Jan 2010 10:49 PM Title: Chapter 2

Loved the chapter, thanks for the pics of her outfit. What a cliffie!

Author's Response:

I kinda suck with the whole fashion thing, so I was glad we can add pics to the chapters.  I love writing cliffies.  I'm sure you'll figure that out fast.

Thanks for reading and reviewing.

Reviewer: SnowyHedwig Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 31 Jan 2010 5:02 PM Title: Chapter 1

Nice introduction of the Cullens. And the "sugar" whisperer was subtle enough to leave us wondering if she imagined it or if it really happened. I noticed that Bella hasn't outright said that Tommy is her brother, can't help but wonder if they think he's her boyfriend.

Author's Response:

I had so much fun with the whole is Tommy her boyfriend issue.

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing.

Reviewer: SnowyHedwig Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 31 Jan 2010 4:11 PM Title: Prologue

I've read some of your other stuff, and wanted to read more stories by you. And this opening has most definitely got my attention! Bravo on this prologue, it really makes me want to keep reading.

Author's Response:

I'm so glad you've read some of my stuff.  It makes me happy that the prologue grabbed your attention.  I worked hard to get it just right.

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing.

Reviewer: mrsmodd Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 Jan 2010 5:32 PM Title: Chapter 14 - EPOV

that was  such a great story! thank you for sharing it with us!i am looking forward to the next installment! 



Author's Response:

I'm so gla dyou liked this story.  The sequel, Knowing That You Love Me is already complete and posted.  I hope you like it too.

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing.

Reviewer: tigga14 Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 Jan 2010 12:47 AM Title: Bonus: A Father's Sacrifice - CPOV

this story has an amazing storyline and its something you can believe happening in reality



Author's Response:

Thanks!  I tried hard to make it believable.

Thnaks so much for reading and reviewing.

Reviewer: Vampfan4 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 29 Jan 2010 8:25 PM Title: Chapter 14 - EPOV

Great story, can't wait for the sequel!



Author's Response:

I'm glad you liked it.  The sequel, Knowing That You Love Me is posted here in it's entirety.  I hope you like it as much.

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing.

Reviewer: marijee Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 Jan 2010 3:42 PM Title: Chapter 14 - EPOV

Enjoyed your story. Thank you for writing!



Author's Response:

I'm so glad you liked My Sacrifice.  It was my first endeavor into writing and I learned so much from it.  All of your reviews were wonderful and appreciated more than you could ever know.  Again, thank you so much for reading and reviewing.

Reviewer: marijee Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 Jan 2010 3:36 PM Title: Chapter 13

Yay! Edward to the rescue. Silly Bella thinking she could pull this off and forgetting her phone. Thank goodness James is dead...will they find Victoria?



Author's Response:

Nothing better than Edward riding in on his white horse to save the day :)  Obviously Bella wasn't thinking too clearly, and thank goodness for that.  Yes, James is dead.  He will not rise from the grave.  Now, Victoria...you'll just have to wait and see.  Thanks so much for reviewing!

Reviewer: marijee Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 Jan 2010 3:17 PM Title: Chapter 12

Love how Bella is standing up for herself...but she's playing with fire. I bet Edward is going crazy.  James kind of gave some personal information to Bella.  He is totally losing it.



Author's Response:

Bella just wouldn't be Bella if she didn't play with fire.  Yes, poor Eddie is going crazy.  LOL, I don't think James ever had it to lose.

Reviewer: marijee Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 Jan 2010 2:58 PM Title: Chapter 9

Loved the costumes.  How is James always there and watching? James is way too creepy.  I can feel the tension building.



Author's Response:

Thanks!  The costumes were so much fun to fine.  James is a sneaky, slimy snake, and yes, he is extremely creepy.  Thanks so much for your reviews!

Reviewer: marijee Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 Jan 2010 6:38 AM Title: Chapter 10

How is James watching them? Why haven't they closed the school down? So Bella is preparing for her escape so that James will go after her.



Author's Response:

All will be revealed about James in due time.  Now wouldn't it make too much sense to close the school down?  Of course this is fiction and that doesn't work with my plot ;)  LOL.  Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: marijee Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 Jan 2010 5:58 AM Title: Chapter 8

Edward was so romantic and so sweet when he told Bella he loved her. I love that Bella asked Esme to be her 'mother' so she could confide in her. I can see the wheels turning in Bella's head...she's worried about the safety of her loved ones and she fears she will never be happy....sigh.



Author's Response:

I'm such a sap.  I love all things romantic.  Sweetward just wouldn't be the same if he wasn't romantic.  Poor Bella needs that role of mother in her life desperately.  Isn't it just typical Bella to be worried about everyone else's safety and well-being above her own?  Thanks again for the great review.

Reviewer: marijee Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 Jan 2010 4:57 AM Title: Bonus: A Father's Sacrifice - CPOV

Sweet look at Charlie and his love for his daughter.



Author's Response:

This was my first venture into writing Charlie and I loved it.  He is such an interesting character.  There's nothing better than an overprotective daddy who is truly a teddy bear deep down.  I know you're probably tired of hearing it, but your reviews are greatly appreciated.

Reviewer: marijee Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 Jan 2010 4:47 AM Title: Chapter 7

Oh I think Edward feels the same way as Bella. She picked up on him saying 'Love' to her...he loves her! Well Edward won over Charlie, Tommy's friends and stuck up for Bella against Amy. Looks like the Swan kids are falling in love!



Author's Response:

This was such a fun chapter to write.  Eddie is one smooth operator.  He knows the way to a woman's heart is through the ones she loves.

Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: marijee Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 Jan 2010 3:44 AM Title: Chapter 5

Oh! Now I feel bad thinking that Tanya would be trouble. Good twist, I never thought she would be killed...by James, I bet. Like seeing Bella and Edward getting closer. First kiss for them....really first kiss for Bella. I worry about the gang...I am sure they are all in danger. I keep thinking about the prologue.... Love all the TW references. Renee's death really sucked. So they do have a restraining order, but James is too elusive. I'm surprised Charlie didn't have Bella disapear for awhile.   Enjoying!



Author's Response:

I didn't want huge drama with Tanya.  I needed someone to be killed and it just fit that it would be her.  James is a sneaky little bastard so restraining orders really don't mean anything to him.  Even if Charlie wanted Bella to disappear he felt she would be safer with him and he couldn't just up and leave his job as Chief of police.

You are completely awesome for reviewing :)

Reviewer: marijee Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 Jan 2010 2:40 AM Title: Chapter 4

Well at least Bella had a nice birthday. It was good to meet Tommy, it must be hard for him with his mother dead and the stalker James. Why hasn't she gone to the authorities?? Does she have a restraining order against him? I guess there's still a lot of blanks to be filled.  I am glad that Edward and Bella talked. So Edward feels the same as Bella and he feels the sparks and the pull. Taking it slow is good. I loved it when Bella talked to Rose and Alice about how safe and protected she felt with Edward. Safer than with anyone else. So I wonder what Rose is going to tell Tanya? She sounds like trouble. (claws...)   Enjoying.



Author's Response:

It's hard for Tommy losing his mom, but he wasn't as tormented as Bella by James.  He is more bothered that Bella's life was so disrupted by James and still is.  Bella has been through all of this with the authorities concerning James and feels it won't help.  Plus, she doesn't want to draw any attention to herself.

How can you not love Edward and feel safe with him?  You know Rose has Bella's back ;)

I'm glad you are liking the story.  Thanks so much for your reviews.

Reviewer: marijee Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Jan 2010 7:29 AM Title: Chapter 3

I forgot that Mike had a Southern accent.... So who is the stalker? Mmmm.  Soccer playing Edward is pretty hot! I laughed when Bella teased Edward with Em. Like your sweet Edward. Enjoying.



Author's Response:

I couldn't resist soccer playing Edward.  LOL, of course I wrote that chapter during soccer practice for my son and thought, "Hmm, Edward needs to play soccer :)"  I almost left out Bella and Em teasing Edward.  It seemed very forward of Bella, but decided it showed how comfortable she was with all of the Cullens.  *sigh* Sweetward.

Thanks so much for reviewing.

Reviewer: marijee Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Jan 2010 7:15 AM Title: Chapter 2

Well I hope that was Jasper calling Bella sugar and not the bad guy.  I live in Oregon and my daughter lives in Portland. I've been to the downtown Saks. I don't think I could survive an Alice shopping trip! LOL! Love how caring Tommy is, calling Bella every morning to check on her dreams. Edward was pretty sweet to rescue Bella. Enjoying! 



Author's Response:

I've never been to Oregon.  I did all my research online.  I would be tired with very sore feet, but I would love a shopping trip with Alice :)  Tommy is such a sweetheart.  I based him off a dear friend who is for all intents and purposes my little brother.  I loved writing this Edward.  It was so easy to write Sweetward as so many people have called him.

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing.

Reviewer: marijee Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Jan 2010 6:51 AM Title: Chapter 1

Well Bella has Edward on her mind! I wonder who called Bella 'Sugar'?



Author's Response:

LOL, can you blame her?!  Thanks so much for reading and reviewing.

Reviewer: marijee Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Jan 2010 6:32 AM Title: Prologue

Wow, Bella is ready to give up her life to this killer to save her loved ones... It makes me wonder why this killer is after her and why she is giving in to him. Reading on!



Author's Response:

I'm glad you liked it.  All will be revealed in due time ;)  Thanks so much for reading and reviewing.

Reviewer: krstn Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Jan 2010 5:09 PM Title: Chapter 3

I'm glad that Bella has friends that she can lean on...



Author's Response:

Lord knows that poor girl needs some good friends.  Thanks so much for reading and reviewing.

Reviewer: krstn Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Jan 2010 5:01 PM Title: Chapter 2

Good to see they are helping each other out and getting to know each other...



Author's Response:

I'm glad you liked it :)  Thanks so much for reviewing!

Reviewer: krstn Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Jan 2010 2:37 PM Title: Prologue

WOW I'm looking forward to reading more..



Author's Response:

I'm glad the Prologue got your attention.  Thanks for reading and reveiwing.

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