Date: 10 Dec 2023 7:20 PM Title: Chapter 12 – The Uprising
Are you ever gonna come back and finish this?
Date: 02 Jan 2023 7:57 PM Title: Chapter 12 – The Uprising
I have read this story a few years ago, and I stil wish for you too continue to write it. This is a great story plot and all.
Date: 23 Apr 2022 6:53 AM Title: Chapter 12 – The Uprising
Love
Date: 23 Feb 2022 9:49 AM Title: Chapter 12 – The Uprising
Oh ! Je suis tellement triste que tu n'aies jamais fini cette histoire !
Date: 23 Feb 2022 9:14 AM Title: Chapter 11 – Shackles, Ropes, and Chains
What the fuck is this?
you thought Jasper and Bella didn't have enough on their plate?
Date: 22 Feb 2022 10:17 PM Title: Chapter 9 – Remember Me
I will not tell anything ! Otherwise it would be a wave of insult against Carlisle!
You are the first to make me hate him so much!
Date: 22 Feb 2022 9:36 PM Title: Chapter 8 - Persuasion
yuck! Carlisle disgusts me! I hope he will suffer a lot in the end!
Date: 22 Feb 2022 7:58 PM Title: Chapter 7 - Dogs of War
Wow ! wow!
Slender! What a mess !
What is Carlisle's fucking power? And why is he doing this??
I hope Marcus manages to save Bella and Jasper!
Date: 22 Feb 2022 1:17 PM Title: Chapter 4-The Perfect Storm
"What to do on your last day"
I love !
Date: 22 Feb 2022 12:53 PM Title: Chapter 3-You Move Me
I love !
Date: 22 Feb 2022 10:29 AM Title: Chapter 2 Devil Gets Your Soul
Donnez-moi ce Jasper ! Please ?
Date: 22 Feb 2022 9:37 AM Title: Chapter 1 - Fall
Alors... j'adore !
Date: 14 Oct 2021 10:19 PM Title: Chapter 12 – The Uprising
I guess you wont finish this story, but wanted to let you know that I enjoyed your writing style,your storyline and creativity.
Date: 17 Sep 2021 1:27 PM Title: Chapter 9 – Remember Me
Oh the end was a little scary.
Date: 26 Jun 2021 12:26 PM Title: Chapter 12 – The Uprising
Love
Date: 02 May 2021 1:58 PM Title: Chapter 12 – The Uprising
I'm a little late to the party, but do you have any plans to update this story?
Date: 07 Oct 2020 2:51 PM Title: Chapter 12 – The Uprising
Hi, its been a qhile since you updated I hope you haven't forgotten about this story cause I'd really like to see what happens
Date: 13 Sep 2020 1:19 PM Title: Chapter 12 – The Uprising
Please tell me you’re going to finish this story. It’s just getting to a really good part.
Date: 09 Feb 2020 9:11 AM Title: Chapter 12 – The Uprising
Please finish this story.
Date: 08 Jan 2020 5:19 AM Title: Chapter 12 – The Uprising
I love this story, I wish to know the outcome of the other covens and the dream state.
Date: 26 Oct 2019 8:31 PM Title: Chapter 12 – The Uprising
Hey, I'm paulswolfgirl on fanfiction you sent me an inbox today and hour stories on here so I thought I'd come take a look. I have to say I am actually really liking this story but at the same time I'm rather pissed with jasper doesn't he think bella has had enough people manipulating her dreams and such! At the same time I kinda feel like jasper wants her to be something more then she is like shes not good enough for him with who she is now. I hope when Bella comes out of this dream she is actually pissed off at jasper and let's him know that what he did was completely out of line especially for his mate. Cant wait for an update.
[Report This]Date: 19 Aug 2019 3:49 AM Title: Chapter 12 – The Uprising
Love it
[Report This]Date: 03 Jul 2019 11:12 PM Title: Chapter 12 – The Uprising
This story is so good. I've gotten nothing done in 2 days. I so hope you finish it.
Date: 03 Jul 2019 6:37 PM Title: Chapter 11 – Shackles, Ropes, and Chains
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Date: 03 Jul 2019 4:52 PM Title: CHAPTER 10 WHAT I WANT
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Date: 03 Jul 2019 12:51 AM Title: Chapter 7 - Dogs of War
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[Report This]Date: 02 Jul 2019 8:39 PM Title: Chapter 5 - In Another's Eyes
I prefer this breed as well. Great chapter!’
[Report This]Date: 02 Jul 2019 7:26 PM Title: Chapter 4-The Perfect Storm
Damn good story!
Date: 02 Jul 2019 6:17 PM Title: Chapter 3-You Move Me
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[Report This]Date: 02 Jul 2019 4:42 PM Title: Chapter 2 Devil Gets Your Soul
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[Report This]Date: 02 Jul 2019 3:21 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Fall
So far, I'm loving this pairing and story. Looking forward to the rest.
Date: 16 May 2019 8:49 AM Title: Chapter 6 - Move
I've been thinking. If Jasper had Peter suck his blood, would he turn into what Jasper is?? TTFN!!! JXB 😊
Date: 29 Sep 2018 5:25 PM Title: Chapter 12 – The Uprising
Ah... I forgot you never finished this story. I hope you will write more one day.
Date: 29 Sep 2018 7:52 AM Title: CHAPTER 10 WHAT I WANT
Really enjoyed this chapter.
Date: 26 Sep 2018 12:34 AM Title: Chapter 1 - Fall
Interesting start... I wonder what everyone's agendas are. Also I am guessing the timeline is a little different as Bella is just turning 18 but it says that she has known them for two years.
Date: 12 Aug 2018 10:04 AM Title: Chapter 12 – The Uprising
Liked the story so far. Enjoying the jasper and bella here. Always love peter and charlotte. Lots of action too. :)
[Report This]Date: 20 Jun 2018 7:16 PM Title: Chapter 5 - In Another's Eyes
Well,
Alice got a bit of what was coming to her!!!! Happy Dance!!!!!
Bella's change, her giving Alice more than Alice gave her was hot!!!
Bella and Jasper's after change six was incredibly HOT!!!!
The Volturi intervening, Not Good!!!!
[Report This]Date: 20 Jun 2018 6:17 PM Title: Chapter 4-The Perfect Storm
Jasper really doesn't quite get the "Swan Will or Stubbornness". Although, he will in time!!!
[Report This]Date: 20 Jun 2018 5:22 PM Title: Chapter 3-You Move Me
It was very sweet when Bella cared for the horse, sexy when they made love in the field and scary when Bella "Died".
I do hope Edward stays gone.
[Report This]Date: 20 Jun 2018 3:10 PM Title: Chapter 2 Devil Gets Your Soul
WOW!!! Alice has a mind controlling power no one knew she had!!!! She's also viciously murdered Charlie,cut off his head and sent it to the Whitlock's!!! Poor Bella, the blows keep coming!!
Edward is still a spoiled brat!!!!
Carlisle is clueless!!
[Report This]Date: 18 Jun 2018 8:46 AM Title: Chapter 1 - Fall
Excellent chapter!!!Sexy, loving and a bit of fun!!!!!
Date: 15 Jun 2018 11:24 PM Title: Chapter 12 – The Uprising
That was so good. I love this story.
Jasper's power is so awesome.
I can' wait for more.
Thanks for the chapter
Date: 27 May 2018 8:52 PM Title: Chapter 12 – The Uprising
Wow this is going to hurt b's relationship with Jasper in afraid. Glad Marcus has Renee. Poor Peter
Date: 27 May 2018 3:02 PM Title: Chapter 12 – The Uprising
Sitting at the edge of my seat waiting for more.
Date: 27 May 2018 5:07 AM Title: Chapter 9 – Remember Me
Never thought i’d Say I can’t wait for Carlisle to die.
[Report This]Date: 19 May 2018 8:29 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Fall
Bonjour,
grand chapitre,
cathy
Date: 25 Apr 2018 11:12 PM Title: Chapter 11 – Shackles, Ropes, and Chains
OMG so much going on. Of course the skank had to show up at the end there.
Date: 13 Apr 2018 1:26 PM Title: Chapter 11 – Shackles, Ropes, and Chains
Terrific story. Looking forward to reading future chapters!
[Report This]Date: 13 Apr 2018 5:06 AM Title: CHAPTER 10 WHAT I WANT
Ah, so my guess of CoM infection was wrong. The Aztec Sun God mythology is more interesting along with the reclusive Aztec vampire race itself. And much better!
[Report This]Date: 13 Apr 2018 1:09 AM Title: Chapter 8 - Persuasion
Damn. Carlisle and Aro and Alice are naughty, naughty creatures. Ugh ... poor Jasper. Why is everyone sitting on their thumbs not doing anything to rescue Jasper and Isabella?! How long are they going to wait? Surely Jasper and Isabella will be driven insane from their various tortures and separation! Great story!
Date: 12 Apr 2018 11:37 PM Title: Chapter 7 - Dogs of War
Hope Isabella and Jasper were freed by Marcus while his troupe was entering the building and Aro's minions were leaving with their captives? And perhaps Jasper and thence Isabella have CoM werewolf taint/infection that I suspected in the first chapter review? Look forward to reading further!
[Report This]Date: 12 Apr 2018 9:02 PM Title: Chapter 5 - In Another's Eyes
Glad your AN explicitly denies any intent of this story being a crossover. I was beginning to worry since all of your stories on FFn are crossovers and I don't read them (no offense intended). Only found this story because it was rec'd by another author's AN. I am enjoying your story and looking forward to the big reveal!
[Report This]Date: 12 Apr 2018 8:16 PM Title: Chapter 4-The Perfect Storm
That's a first for me. The Whitlocks' blood farm ... certainly different. Wow!
[Report This]Date: 12 Apr 2018 6:36 PM Title: Chapter 2 Devil Gets Your Soul
Now I'm very curious about what kind of creature Jasper was fighting? Did it "infect" Jasper? What's up with the nosebleeds? Especially in a vampire? Is it a byproduct of the power that Carlisle has been hinted at possessing? Guess I'll have to keep reading ... :) Thanks for sharing your story.
[Report This]Date: 12 Apr 2018 5:22 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Fall
Excellent beginning! Very curious about this "control" Jasper says Alice and Edward were exercising over the two of them. Doesn't seem like the type of problem that the gruesome twosome usually cause. And I'm curious about the references to Carlisle's involvement?! Thanks for sharing.
Date: 02 Mar 2018 4:10 AM Title: Chapter 11 – Shackles, Ropes, and Chains
Wow!!! Have to say this story just get better and better! I hope you will continue it.
Date: 01 Mar 2018 6:45 PM Title: Chapter 9 – Remember Me
Ok, I know I have not commented on this story but just wanted to say that I am really enjoying it.
Date: 29 Jan 2018 11:57 PM Title: Chapter 11 – Shackles, Ropes, and Chains
Well that was one hell of a cliffie...
Date: 29 Jan 2018 6:50 PM Title: CHAPTER 10 WHAT I WANT
another twist to start us off and explanantions. Good chaptere
Date: 29 Jan 2018 7:13 AM Title: Chapter 8 - Persuasion
two sane people and a cast of thousands to torment them to the depths of hell and back.. Hope someone comes up with a plan of action soon...I really want to see a few bon fires primarily holing the remains of the correct vampd.
Date: 29 Jan 2018 5:52 AM Title: Chapter 7 - Dogs of War
Holy Shit...Never a dull moment. fantastic I cringe in anticipation of the next chapter..Carlisle and Alice need to die the most painful death..
Date: 29 Jan 2018 4:59 AM Title: Chapter 5 - In Another's Eyes
This Alice is a psychotic one..and a coward.
Date: 29 Jan 2018 4:05 AM Title: Chapter 4-The Perfect Storm
you are filled with twists and turns and surprises..but one you are are not ever and that is boring...so well planned and written...Enjoying the heck out of this.
Date: 29 Jan 2018 1:19 AM Title: Chapter 2 Devil Gets Your Soul
OMG!!!!!..Never expected that particular turn of events..You have done one hell of a bang up job creating this plot..I'm loving it.
[Report This]Date: 28 Jan 2018 11:15 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Fall
Terrific chapter..Looking forward to reading more..well done.
Date: 23 Jan 2018 3:43 AM Title: Chapter 11 – Shackles, Ropes, and Chains
Wow!!! Such a great chapter and so much going on. I love this. How scary was the attack on Bella. I love this story!!! Can’t wait for the next chapter.
[Report This]Date: 19 Jan 2018 10:37 PM Title: Chapter 11 – Shackles, Ropes, and Chains
It's amazing what Jasper and Bella feel for each other!!! They're so dedicated and totally committed with a love beyond anything I can fathom!!!!
I'd been waiting for Evil, Mean and Nasty Maria to make an appearance!!!
I hope Jasper is able to make quick work of killing her and destroying her remains!!!!
Happy Writing!!!!
[Report This]Date: 19 Jan 2018 9:36 AM Title: CHAPTER 10 WHAT I WANT
Great Chapter!!!!!!
[Report This]Date: 19 Jan 2018 8:12 AM Title: Chapter 9 – Remember Me
It's a fascinating yet a little bit crazy story!!! It's one you can't put down because you want to know what happens next!!!!!
[Report This]Date: 17 Jan 2018 6:39 AM Title: Chapter 1 - Fall
I was a little confused in the beginning as the story seemed to taking so many different directions!!!! Once I figured it out the rest of the chapter was awesome!!!
[Report This]Date: 16 Jan 2018 12:14 AM Title: Chapter 11 – Shackles, Ropes, and Chains
This is great, I can't wait to read the rest. Thank you so much for sharing your amazing talent. 😄
[Report This]Date: 15 Jan 2018 9:04 PM Title: CHAPTER 10 WHAT I WANT
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[Report This]Date: 10 Jan 2018 11:51 AM Title: Chapter 11 – Shackles, Ropes, and Chains
Loved it, this is an amazing story, really enjoying it so far
Alexis
Date: 09 Jan 2018 4:25 AM Title: Chapter 11 – Shackles, Ropes, and Chains
Well, I caught up. Exellent story. And Maria shows her beautiful demented face.
See you in Chapter 12.
As much as I like your writing, I don't know any of the crossover males, never watched any of the series or movies, so not really interested in reading your other fics.
Sorry. I stick to the Twific non-canon trinity: Jasper, Peter and Garrett, and Cazzy20's Alistair.
Date: 09 Jan 2018 1:07 AM Title: CHAPTER 10 WHAT I WANT
Super chapter! So many things happen in your long chapters, after you've completed this fic, I'll read it again, straight through.
Date: 09 Jan 2018 12:30 AM Title: Chapter 9 – Remember Me
WOW! He broke her neck because he was too impatient and dogmatic to feed her properly. It's like the inmates taking over the asylum. Carlisle, Alice, Aro they're all crazy.
Thank goodness Jasper was able to reach Bella and snap her out of Carlisle's thrall. Now they have a future again. With Jasper free, Carlisle will be very surprised when he gets to Volterra.
Date: 08 Jan 2018 6:54 PM Title: Chapter 11 – Shackles, Ropes, and Chains
Wow! What a chapter! Like it very much.
Date: 08 Jan 2018 11:23 AM Title: Chapter 8 - Persuasion
Carlysle is crazy! Aro is crazy! Who is going to help Bella and Jasper?
Another great chapter.
Date: 08 Jan 2018 10:47 AM Title: Chapter 7 - Dogs of War
This fic is racing along. It's so good!
Date: 08 Jan 2018 10:20 AM Title: Chapter 5 - In Another's Eyes
So Jasper the Cold Vampire was turned, partially, by a more 'traditional' kind of vampire. But he can still go out during the day, and doesn't sleep. He doesn't sparkle, but he does have those cool fangs.
Alice has some nerve showing up. (but I knew she would) She is a heartless bitch.Edward or Carlisle can force behavior? By glamour? A gift?
Date: 08 Jan 2018 8:32 AM Title: Chapter 3-You Move Me
Good trick on Eddie by Jasper. Got rid of him for a while.
I'd feel safer if he turned Bella sooner rather than later. I think Alice will be back, "Bella's dead, we can be together again." Crackhead!
Date: 08 Jan 2018 7:15 AM Title: Chapter 2 Devil Gets Your Soul
Alice is more evil than I expected. I'm sure she will pay in the end.
This fic is fantastic,
Date: 08 Jan 2018 6:30 AM Title: Chapter 1 - Fall
Intense! Great beginning. So glad they finally got out.
Date: 02 Jan 2018 5:09 AM Title: Chapter 11 – Shackles, Ropes, and Chains
I hope he finds the invisible man. And tears Maria apart.
Date: 01 Jan 2018 11:56 AM Title: Chapter 11 – Shackles, Ropes, and Chains
Thanks for the update love this story can't wait to see where you take us next keep up the hard work looking forward to the next update
Date: 19 Dec 2017 9:28 AM Title: CHAPTER 10 WHAT I WANT
A great story
Date: 11 Dec 2017 12:42 AM Title: CHAPTER 10 WHAT I WANT
Excellent chapter. Can't wait for more. Reading your story is such a good moment.
Thanks
Date: 09 Dec 2017 8:47 AM Title: Chapter 7 - Dogs of War
Awesome chapter.
Date: 09 Dec 2017 7:16 AM Title: Chapter 6 - Move
Great chapter. Love That Emmett chose them against the Cullen