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Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 24 May 2023 9:29 PM Title: Chapter 43: Finale

All these first addition books Bella bought are ashes.
Victoria has been waiting for a chance to get revenge. She didn't succeed in ending Isabella and Edward.

Sequel????
Did I miss it?

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 24 May 2023 9:08 PM Title: Chapter 42: The Return

His confession of love soothes her unsettling mind. His admission gives her the confidence in their marriage she's been seeking.

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstar [Report This]
Date: 24 May 2023 8:50 PM Title: Chapter 41: The Search

He didn't realize his feelings and actions needed the reinforcement of heart felt words to let his bride know he loves her.
She has said it and acted upon those feelings giving Edward what he has so desperately needed.

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 24 May 2023 8:25 PM Title: Chapter 40: Consequences

Edward is going to loose his mind when he finally lays eyes on his wife.

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 24 May 2023 8:16 PM Title: Chapter 39: A Worried Husband

He's figured out she has been taken.
Now the hunt begins.
Does Edward suspect James yet?
Find Victoria and he will find James. Hopefully Bella will be able to fight back, her handgun training might come in handy.

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 24 May 2023 8:07 PM Title: Chapter 38: Chicago

Of course James would find his quarry.
Bella's limited understanding of the big city and the varying personalities wandering that environment have put her in danger.

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 24 May 2023 7:50 PM Title: Chapter 37: Soldier

Why don't the wives and female relatives get together as some form of entertainment? This would occupy Bella's time better.

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 24 May 2023 7:40 PM Title: Chapter 36: Practice

The outward expression of love is not something Edward has experienced in his 30+ years of life.
Bella needs to learn how to load the gun as well.

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 24 May 2023 7:32 PM Title: Chapter 35: Edward's Story

James is a half-brother; didn't see that coming.
Yup, James and Victoria need to be dealt with by the family.
Bella's acceptance of this situation will make Edward's handling of it easier.

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 24 May 2023 7:20 PM Title: Chapter 34: Pretending

Why did it take the encounter between the redhead and Bella to force Edward to reveal his past?

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Date: 24 May 2023 6:59 PM Title: Chapter 33: Closer

She has become his island of refuge.
Will he ever see her as his partner in life?

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 24 May 2023 6:51 PM Title: Chapter 32: Woman from the Past

Edward's past dalliance with the redhead in question will be back to interfere in their marriage. That mistrust issue Renée tried to implant on Bella will rear its ugly head.

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 24 May 2023 6:41 PM Title: Chapter 31: Chez Paree

Alice is the insider information that Bella's been needing.

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 24 May 2023 5:07 PM Title: Chapter 30: Preparations

The immediate infatuation due to their intense attraction created a unique bond. The 'I love yous' are buried just below the surface of their emotions. How long before they release their declarations of enduring love?

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 24 May 2023 4:59 PM Title: Chapter 29: Interlude

Bella needs a sense of belonging to Edward's world. There must be some connections he can facilitate that will bring her into the family unit.

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 24 May 2023 4:53 PM Title: Chapter 28: Confrontation

Does Edward not trust his young wife?
I have a feeling Renée will make one more attempt to seduce Edward.
Maybe Dr. Dwyer has the sense to hold Renée at arms length until he can truse her.

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 24 May 2023 4:46 PM Title: Chapter 27: Father Figures

You go claim what is your Bella!
Send your mother packing.

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 24 May 2023 4:39 PM Title: Chapter 26: The Return

Bella knows why her mother intentionally tried to interfere in her marriage.
Not only is Renée jealous of her daughter but also angry that she married a very weather older man.
Thankfully Edward is old fashioned in his approach to marriage.

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 24 May 2023 4:28 PM Title: Chapter 25: Letting Go

I'm chuckling at your author's note at the bottom of this chapter. Daddy issues.......lol.
Bella has lacked displays of affection because of her self centered mother. Of course she will seek interactions with her husband hoping he will teach her new and intriguing activities.
Their life is about to change again.

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 24 May 2023 4:19 PM Title: Chapter 24: Boat Ride

I am surprised that Renée had not heard of the mofia connection to the Cullen name as she tried to enter high society.
Bella's abrupt introduction to this life style could easily turn her against Edward. Yet her youthful innocence will bond her to Edward even more so than before.

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 24 May 2023 4:11 PM Title: Chapter 23: Glimpse at an Old Life

He is his own clean up team.
The repercussions of tonight's events should frighten Bella; If not concern Edward.

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstar [Report This]
Date: 24 May 2023 4:04 PM Title: Chapter 22: Discovering the Truth

I'm curious why Edward would go with Caius and Laurant knowing he is outnumbered by their threat.
What does this mean for Edward's family?
Will Bella want to learn how to protect herself from future threats?

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstar [Report This]
Date: 24 May 2023 4:50 AM Title: Chapter 21: Revelations

Bella's going to cause more grief for Edward by attempting to eavesdrop on their conversation.

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Date: 24 May 2023 4:43 AM Title: Chapter 20: A Release

Hehehe, she finally gets his full attention.
Who could be disturbing them at such a late hour?

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Date: 24 May 2023 4:37 AM Title: Chapter 19: All the Way

That was a more realistic first time.
She got what she wanted.

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Date: 24 May 2023 4:30 AM Title: Chapter 18: Deeper Water

Mutual satisfaction is a good place to start.
The age difference is causing Edward to overthink the consummation of this marriage.

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstar [Report This]
Date: 24 May 2023 4:23 AM Title: Chapter 17: The Honeymoon Part II

Is Laurant Calamon associated with James Kesey?
Maybe Edward should wear out his young bride so she sleeps through his meeting with the unwanted visitor.

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstar [Report This]
Date: 24 May 2023 4:15 AM Title: Chapter 16: The Honeymoon Part I

To what extremes will Bella go to attract her husband's touch?

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Date: 24 May 2023 4:09 AM Title: Chapter 15: The Wedding

So Carlisle makes an appearance.
Is he already married to Esme?
Will Bella meet Edward's parents soon?

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Date: 24 May 2023 4:03 AM Title: Chapter 14: A Look at a New Life

Will Renée fall under Edward's family protection as well?
In the rush to ensure Bella's safety, Edward has glossed over his feelings for the young beauty.

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstar [Report This]
Date: 24 May 2023 3:56 AM Title: Chapter 13: An Interruption

That was a very awkward conversation in front of Bella. How should she interpret Edward's intentions?
Renée is angry that her daughter caught a very eligible bachelor.
Does Alice reenter the storyline?

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstar [Report This]
Date: 24 May 2023 3:48 AM Title: Chapter 12: A Shocking Proposal

Will Bella agree to such a quick proposal?

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Date: 24 May 2023 3:43 AM Title: Chapter 11: A Close Encounter

I'm presuming James was her attacker.
Will Renée even worry about her daughter?

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstar [Report This]
Date: 24 May 2023 3:43 AM Title: Chapter 11: A Close Encounter

I'm presuming James was her attacker.
Will Renée even worry about her daughter?

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstar [Report This]
Date: 24 May 2023 3:43 AM Title: Chapter 11: A Close Encounter

I'm presuming James was her attacker.
Will Renée even worry about her daughter?

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstar [Report This]
Date: 24 May 2023 3:36 AM Title: Chapter 10: Edward's Return

Was Edward away earning his position within the family?
Bella is so enthralled by Edward that he knows she isn't involved with anyone else.

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstar [Report This]
Date: 24 May 2023 3:17 AM Title: Chapter 9: Searching for Him

So James attempted to get near Isabella and Edward's men frightened him away.
Is Alice related to Edward in the fic?

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstar [Report This]
Date: 24 May 2023 3:09 AM Title: Chapter 8: A Glimpse of His Life

Was Edward talking to Carlisle in the restaurant or some other connection within the family?
Edward seems very perceptive to Renées attempts at hold court in the restaurant.

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstar [Report This]
Date: 24 May 2023 2:50 AM Title: Chapter 7: Memories of a Monster

James is a double edged sword within the Cullen family.
What level of the mob does Edward represent?
At least Edward has expressed his intrest in Bella.

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstar [Report This]
Date: 24 May 2023 2:39 AM Title: Chapter 6: Secret Meeting

I haven't figured out the mob connection yet.
Bella skipping out of the house as her mother nurses a hangover shows a bit of independence.
Bella mentions how she has no support in the big city yet mother constantly leaves her to fend for herself.

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 24 May 2023 2:13 AM Title: Chapter 5: Life Imitates Art

Dropping notes like a school boy, how sweet Edward.
Mom is an opportunist that hasn't figured out she is not very smooth in her actions.

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 24 May 2023 1:50 AM Title: Chapter 4: Rainy Chicago Days

The tension between mother and daughter will gradually increase if Renée continues to pursue Edward.
Hopefully Edward's intrest is elsewhere and that he is looking for insight into Isabella's situation.

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstar [Report This]
Date: 24 May 2023 1:40 AM Title: Chapter 3: Edward Cullen

Were the 1950's so safe and relaxed that a young woman would easily have lunch and get into the car of a stranger?
I'm wishing for Edward's perspective right now.
I don't think Bella will share with her mother meeting Mr. Cullen on her first day in the big city.

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 24 May 2023 1:22 AM Title: Chapter 2: City Lights Books

Curiosity has me wondering how Mr. Cullen found her?
She has immediately displayed a submissive undertone in personality.
Something he is probably drawn toward.

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23 May 2023 8:28 PM Title: Chapter 1: A New Life

I wish I could remember where I came across the recommendation for this story so I can give proper credit. Alas, I cannot.
I'm always looking for a May to December romance story.
Throughout the years my family has many age gap marriages.

Reviewer: Rothetwifan Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jun 2020 7:07 PM Title: Chapter 39: A Worried Husband

I want to start off by saying that I am in no way criticizing you as a writer. I'm thoroughly enjoying this story. I just thought about how men back in the day used to spank they're wives to keep them in line. Most women got married at young ages and their husbands were most times older like a father type figure. I was just thinking of how those spankings started what we now know as spousal abuse. Can you see the parallel? Maybe it's just me idk,

Reviewer: sonogal Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Sep 2019 3:28 PM Title: Chapter 43: Finale

Just reread and still love it.

Reviewer: dreamkeeper1 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01 Nov 2018 2:17 PM Title: Chapter 43: Finale

Great story 

Reviewer: EdwardsGuardianAngel Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Apr 2018 2:09 PM Title: Chapter 22: Discovering the Truth

That one had me on the edge of my seat! Toodles...gotta get to the next chapter.

Reviewer: dreamkeeper1 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09 Dec 2017 10:40 AM Title: Chapter 43: Finale

Great story

Reviewer: troberts Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Oct 2017 8:56 PM Title: Chapter 43: Finale

OMG I love this story and I can not wait for what is next for them.  I put off reading the last few chapters because I didnt want it to be over lol so I am so happy there will be more of them.

Reviewer: troberts Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Oct 2017 3:57 PM Title: Chapter 42: The Return

Good things come to those who wait and she waited and has grown up so much.

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Date: 06 Oct 2017 9:43 AM Title: Chapter 41: The Search

WOW Bella is a bad ass OMG  So glad James is gone now they need to get the red headed Bitch to.  What did James mean about there father?

Reviewer: troberts Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Oct 2017 9:13 AM Title: Chapter 40: Consequences

December 2016 was a great time go glad you joined FF.  My heart is breaking for Bella she is just a silly young girl.  I cant wait for Edward to get to her. Love the puke lol

Reviewer: troberts Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Oct 2017 8:21 PM Title: Chapter 39: A Worried Husband

OMG he is a mess.  Bella is in big trouble once he gets her back safe and healed but he will not be hard on her she has learned her leason

Reviewer: troberts Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Oct 2017 3:58 PM Title: Chapter 38: Chicago

She did it now OMG Edward is going to lose his shit.

Reviewer: rosie Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Oct 2017 1:47 PM Title: Chapter 43: Finale

I really enjoyed Chicago, looking forward to the sequel and new adventures. ❤️

Reviewer: sonogal Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 25 Sep 2017 8:15 PM Title: Chapter 43: Finale

What a scary situation. I can't wait to find out how these two take on New York. Loved the story.

Reviewer: sonogal Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Sep 2017 4:14 PM Title: Chapter 39: A Worried Husband

Edward really is so good to Bella. I wish she realized how much he loves her and stop the tricks.

Reviewer: sonogal Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Sep 2017 4:06 PM Title: Chapter 38: Chicago

If only Bella could listen and trust someone besides herself. She has been asking for trouble.

Reviewer: debslmac Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 22 Sep 2017 12:30 PM Title: Chapter 43: Finale

:) loved this story. Looking forward to reading the sequel 

Reviewer: kittap2 Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Sep 2017 3:32 AM Title: Chapter 43: Finale

I loved this story  so glad there's a sequel 

Reviewer: sonogal Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Sep 2017 7:42 PM Title: Chapter 37: Soldier

Bella you wonder why he treats you like a child. You act like Lucy and you are trying to turn Emmett into Ethel.

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Date: 18 Sep 2017 6:29 PM Title: Chapter 35: Edward's Story

Edward needs to know that Bella still loves him no matter what. James is evil. Edward needs some peace.

Reviewer: bri Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Sep 2017 12:23 AM Title: Chapter 37: Soldier

Love your story! Can't wait to read more of it.

Reviewer: troberts Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Sep 2017 3:27 AM Title: Chapter 37: Soldier

Bella is going to be in so much trouble lol

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Date: 10 Sep 2017 10:07 AM Title: Chapter 36: Practice

Bella is a fast learner Edward has to be proud of her.

Reviewer: troberts Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Sep 2017 6:59 AM Title: Chapter 35: Edward's Story

James needs to die NOW and Victoria can go with him.

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Date: 10 Sep 2017 6:10 AM Title: Chapter 34: Pretending

I think Victoria is evil and wants to cause shit.

Reviewer: debslmac Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09 Sep 2017 8:23 PM Title: Chapter 37: Soldier

:) 

Reviewer: debslmac Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09 Sep 2017 8:22 PM Title: Chapter 36: Practice

:) 

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Date: 09 Sep 2017 8:22 PM Title: Chapter 35: Edward's Story

:) 

Reviewer: NeNee246 Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Sep 2017 5:26 PM Title: Chapter 37: Soldier

Oh boy! She is going to cause some serious trouble! ;)

Reviewer: 2mpix Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09 Sep 2017 3:43 PM Title: Chapter 37: Soldier

No no no bella!! James & victoria are out there.

Reviewer: 2mpix Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09 Sep 2017 2:09 PM Title: Chapter 36: Practice

I was hoping he would ravish her!! I think he's afraid of corrupting her which is hilarious!! 

Reviewer: 2mpix Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09 Sep 2017 2:05 PM Title: Chapter 35: Edward's Story

What a twist!!

Reviewer: troberts Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Sep 2017 11:18 AM Title: Chapter 33: Closer

They need to talk more so she knows what is going on and still feels safe

Reviewer: troberts Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Sep 2017 10:52 AM Title: Chapter 32: Woman from the Past

Bella is making peace with her hubby.  Who is the women

Reviewer: sonogal Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Sep 2017 2:48 PM Title: Chapter 34: Pretending

Bella needs to trust Edward and enjoy life. She doesn't need to know everything.

Reviewer: NeNee246 Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Aug 2017 3:00 PM Title: Chapter 34: Pretending

OMG! I'M DYING FOR MORE!!! ;)

Reviewer: NeNee246 Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Aug 2017 2:46 PM Title: Chapter 33: Closer

I love this!! ;)

Reviewer: NeNee246 Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Aug 2017 2:31 PM Title: Chapter 32: Woman from the Past

Fantastic!! I am dying to read the next chapter!! ;)

Reviewer: 2mpix Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 21 Aug 2017 2:11 PM Title: Chapter 34: Pretending

I'm betting victoria is about to die.

Reviewer: debslmac Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 21 Aug 2017 1:24 PM Title: Chapter 34: Pretending

:) 

Reviewer: debslmac Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 21 Aug 2017 1:24 PM Title: Chapter 33: Closer

:) 

Reviewer: debslmac Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 21 Aug 2017 1:24 PM Title: Chapter 32: Woman from the Past

:) 

Reviewer: prnlutz Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Aug 2017 8:28 PM Title: Chapter 1: A New Life

Hey...i noticed you updated on F2F but not here. If I may ask, is going to be 

An on going occurrence?

Reviewer: sonogal Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Jul 2017 5:59 PM Title: Chapter 31: Chez Paree

I love this story. Thanks for sharing.

Reviewer: NeNee246 Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Jun 2017 11:17 AM Title: Chapter 31: Chez Paree

I love this story! ;)

Reviewer: amcullen Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Jun 2017 3:04 AM Title: Chapter 30: Preparations

Loved it can't wait for more ’ 

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Jun 2017 12:05 AM Title: Chapter 31: Chez Paree

Edward must have had someone following and listening to Bella.  

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Jun 2017 12:03 AM Title: Chapter 30: Preparations

I reviewed over in fanfiction.  Loving   this story.

Reviewer: Petralouise Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Jun 2017 6:21 PM Title: Chapter 31: Chez Paree

A chapter in epov of this night would be great

Reviewer: 2mpix Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 12 Jun 2017 2:45 PM Title: Chapter 31: Chez Paree

Yes i would LOVE an EPOV. I BET HE DIDN't like all the men looking at her. 

Reviewer: 2mpix Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 12 Jun 2017 2:28 PM Title: Chapter 30: Preparations

He really does have strong feelings for her.

Reviewer: debslmac Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 12 Jun 2017 11:19 AM Title: Chapter 31: Chez Paree

:) 

Reviewer: debslmac Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 12 Jun 2017 11:19 AM Title: Chapter 30: Preparations

:) 

Reviewer: troberts Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Jun 2017 7:00 AM Title: Chapter 31: Chez Paree

Edward did not like Bella getting wasted and Alice telling her about her husband.

Reviewer: troberts Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Jun 2017 6:59 AM Title: Chapter 30: Preparations

She so in love with him.

Reviewer: 2mpix Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 07 Jun 2017 11:51 PM Title: Chapter 29: Interlude

I do wonder what he was thinking right before he walked in & interrupted her. 

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