Date: 14 Jun 2020 7:05 PM Title: Chapter 16
Hm, I'm conflicted on this story. There's a lot of things that I think Phil and the WTF group are doing wrong, and for a medical professional to not notice all of the previous cuts on her arm annoyed me to no end. Cutters are never trying to kill themselves and the fact that everyone ignored that still bothers me especially because that's a separate issue that has to be addressed. Cutters don't get better just because an issue is fixed, cutters still cut under duress if they don't learn proper coping mechanisms to avoid that feeling. I know because I know cutters. It's just like an addiction. It has to get addressed. Constantly pushing someone that's a cutter to talk with supplying other ways for them to cope will lead to them cutting more and potentially accidentally killing themselves how Bella almost did. In terms of realism she'd still be cutting, maybe even after all these sessions she's forced into.
Another thing that I find traumatizing is the way they ganged up on her, and how she has no alone time. Regardless of everything, people in therapy (including in patients) recieve ample alone time to process and work through things themselves, it sounds like she rarely has that. How can I be mad at her for lack of growth or willingness when she doesn't even get proper space to breathe. This girl also hasn't properly grieved her parents and still another medical professional hasn't picked up on that? There's a lot to unpack in the situation that is Bella's trauma, but no one is working with her on grief counseling either...
I obviously read this straight through, so those are all my thoughts up til this point on what doesn't make sense to me. Especially being someone who has worked with and knows these types of people on both sides of the coin. However, I think this is a great story. I enjoy your writing style. Is it new? It seems like you kinda firmly found your footing in it after the first few chapters. If I'm right congrats it really seems to suit you. I can easily imagine the pictures you're painting. I also think that overall these kinds of stories aren't told, so big kudos to you for the effort and dedication to tell one like this.
I hate combative Edward lol, but I love that Alice isn't extremely pushy in this story! I feel like a lot of authors would've done the opposite. I love Jasper with Bella, he's so kind. I feel like he'd be the perfect one to address the cutting if you decide to listen to my critique. And oh gosh, I hope Emmett is the next counselor she's paired with. I think he'd be great for her in general. He's so open and free as a character that I think it would spark something in anyone; Bella could use a spark.
Excited for the next chapter!
Thanks so much reading, I know a lot of things aren't the most medically sound but it's is fiction so I'm taking a lot of liberties. I am always open to feedback and willingly take suggestions But please keep in mind, that these situations are different for everyone. There's no exact way to sometimes notice something. While not an exact copy of Bella's and the gangs backstories, majority of this is based on my own 10+ year journey of dealing with mental health and some of the experiences I had with my own therapists and group sessions. Bella is still very early on in her journey. Just stay with me for a bit.