Date: 13 Aug 2016 3:15 AM Title: Chapter 4
I am not sure about Jess and Lauren. I think her parents are awful. I get being careful but so mean. It is a wonder she has not run away.
[Report This]Date: 13 Aug 2016 1:38 AM Title: Chapter 4
Charlie is an ass & I feel so sorry for Bella,
Date: 13 Aug 2016 12:13 AM Title: Chapter 4
Wow a story where I like Jess and lauren, and hate Charlie.
[Report This]Date: 12 Aug 2016 10:50 PM Title: Chapter 4
Nasty buggerisn't he.
Date: 12 Aug 2016 9:46 PM Title: Chapter 4
I don't like her dad at all. I like her roommates.
Date: 12 Aug 2016 8:02 PM Title: Chapter 4
Love it! I definitely cannot wait until y'all get to the prologue!
Date: 12 Aug 2016 7:27 PM Title: Chapter 4
Who in the hell is watching her and reporting back to her parents? What a horrible way to tread one's child! Bella is like a babe in the woods. I hope she learns to take care of herself. Parents like hers don't deserve a daughter like her! They ought to be horse-whipped! Ugh!
Date: 12 Aug 2016 7:01 PM Title: Chapter 4
Sorry to say but her father is a asshole and I am glad the girls are looking out for her does Charlie have spies watching her does he have nothing better to do. I think Edward is sweet so far.
Date: 12 Aug 2016 12:45 PM Title: Chapter 4
How does Charlie know what she is doing? Charlie is being an ass. I think Jessica and Lauren are good in this story. Can't wait for more.
Date: 12 Aug 2016 11:14 AM Title: Chapter 4
Great chapter, her father is scary obsessive
[Report This]Date: 12 Aug 2016 10:42 AM Title: Chapter 4
Her patents arereally crazy!
Date: 12 Aug 2016 10:01 AM Title: Chapter 4
What an asshole and bully!!!
[Report This]Date: 12 Aug 2016 9:37 AM Title: Chapter 4
I wouldn't consider or call Charlie a father. Obviously he has tight reigns on Renee also.
I would like to know how he's getting his info about Bella also.
Date: 12 Aug 2016 7:49 AM Title: Chapter 4
each chapter makes me feel even sorrier for b and what we know is coming her way
Date: 12 Aug 2016 6:09 AM Title: Chapter 4
Oh no doubt, he has a "friend" that is a cop on campus or is paying someone to tell him what she is up to. I think Jess and Lauren did the right thing but I wouldn't put it past them to be the snitches, to her dad, because he did mention them. Besides she's 18 now she has rights as an adult, and her parents need to let her make her own mistakes. That's what I did when my girls turned 18, and they are now 3 responible adults, and didn't come home pregnant before they were in their 20's. My oldest just had her first baby last Oct. at 31, and is a school teacher. I guess my parents raised me to be indepented and that's how I raised mine. So I don't understand why Charlie and Renee would be so hard on her. Thanks for updating early, and can't wait for the next update.
Date: 12 Aug 2016 6:04 AM Title: Chapter 4
Very interesting. Wonder who Charlie's spies are.
Date: 12 Aug 2016 5:32 AM Title: Chapter 4
Her parents are terrible. Charlie needs someone to belt him up the side of his stupid head. He is a controlling SOB. I have never really liked him in any story or the movies either. He is controlling. No child should have to work for love from their parents.
[Report This]Date: 12 Aug 2016 5:01 AM Title: Chapter 4
Her parents are jerks! Is her father paying someone to spy on her?
Date: 11 Aug 2016 2:54 PM Title: Chapter 3
I love that Jasper was there answering Alice's door. I think Edward will broaden Bella horizons and slowly show her new things.
Date: 11 Aug 2016 9:55 AM Title: Chapter 3
LOVE.LOVE.LOVE. THANK YOU!
Date: 11 Aug 2016 4:57 AM Title: Chapter 3
I think Alice pushes Edward to date angela, using words of "a girl who wouldn't try to trap you"
Date: 10 Aug 2016 9:22 PM Title: Chapter 3
I am hooked. Is it Friday yet?
[Report This]Date: 10 Aug 2016 2:14 PM Title: Chapter 3
I hate the fact he'll be dating Angela from the first chapter. Can't wait for more chapters.
[Report This]Date: 10 Aug 2016 12:51 PM Title: Chapter 3
Alice is in others business but doesn't take her own medicine. I can't stand that little gnat. She's probably the brunt of the pending problems.
[Report This]Date: 10 Aug 2016 12:20 PM Title: Chapter 3
He def. doesn't love angela. I think alice is going to be an issue when this all goes down.
Date: 10 Aug 2016 10:49 AM Title: Chapter 3
They are so cute and comfortable with rack other
Date: 10 Aug 2016 7:23 AM Title: Chapter 3
Another good chapter :) Sorry my reviews are always short :P
Date: 09 Aug 2016 11:47 PM Title: Chapter 3
I still don't like Angela . She was already talking to someone while she still had something going on with Edward . I really like this Edward and I really hope we see him again.
Date: 09 Aug 2016 10:23 PM Title: Chapter 3
I laughed at Jasper when Edward showed up at Alice's door. Lol. I hope Emmett survives Iraq.
Date: 09 Aug 2016 10:22 PM Title: Chapter 3
I need to remember to read from this site in the future. Edward's a nice guy, just easily persuaded by Alice, Angela and eventually his family and lawyers to severe ties with Bella.
Date: 09 Aug 2016 10:03 PM Title: Chapter 3
Loving this so far. Just from what's been written so far you have to wonder if someone messed with the DNA results.
[Report This]Date: 09 Aug 2016 9:17 PM Title: Chapter 3
Weird that in the prologue he is back with his fuck buddy, Angela. who he has no real feelings for. Alice has got to be behind it.
Don't know how this will all work out-when Bella swears the baby is his, but the tests say No. Could the tests have been tampered with? (Angela? Alice?)
Date: 09 Aug 2016 8:37 PM Title: Chapter 3
Good chapter I read it on my Nook but I can not seem to review on that.
Date: 09 Aug 2016 7:00 PM Title: Chapter 3
He seems nice enough...now....but after going without sex for thirteen months, a boy that age might think first with his dick. She could be in trouble. Thanks for this, it's fun.
Date: 09 Aug 2016 5:49 PM Title: Chapter 3
I'm already so hooked can't wait for your next chapter
[Report This]Date: 09 Aug 2016 5:24 PM Title: Chapter 3
I think this is going to be an amazing story. I'm assuming their "firsts" will happen sooner rather than later. I think Alice will tell Angela the best way to get over a guy is to get under an new one and since she & Edward had a past, how easy it would be. I think Angela will be there for Edward (who I bet really wanted the baby to be his but can't dispute dna even it will prove wrong) and he feels obligated/guilted into a relationship with her. I think the hard part for the readers is when will he realize the baby is his and how the chimera will be revealed. Patience is not, at least mine, a virtue!
Date: 09 Aug 2016 4:03 PM Title: Chapter 3
Nothing wrong with f'buddies so long as both know that's the deal and E stepped away when A wanted him too. LOL for Jasper being in Alice's room. Hope Em will be ok.
[Report This]Date: 09 Aug 2016 3:59 PM Title: Chapter 3
Alice will push for Edward to keep her bff in the family. Not sure what method Angela will use to secure his attention. Affection won't be one of them.
Keep Emmett safe. Bring him home so he can secretly become the best Uncle Bella's little boy can look up to in awe. Introduce him to Dr. Rosalie Hale a geneticist that wants to figure out Bella's story behind the unclear paternity tests. Make them her support system.
Date: 09 Aug 2016 3:45 PM Title: Chapter 3
Loved it can't wait for more d84;a039;
[Report This]Date: 09 Aug 2016 3:20 PM Title: Chapter 3
Honestly Alice is so pushy and thats what I always hate about her character and how it always seems to be about her and what she wants or what she feels is right. It wouldn't surpise me that she pushed Edward to take back Angela because she feels they have a connection or something or that Angela wouldn't lie to Edward like Bella supposedly does with Ethan later on in the chapters even though we know that Ethan is Edward's. But it definitely showd on Edward that he isn't trust worthy or doesn't know Bella as well as he thought he did or that he relies too much on other people's opinions than what he thinks about the situation. Obviously when we reach the prologue it'll be interesting to see how he feels when he realizes he fucked up big time by not believing Bella. I doubt Bella will have moved on in those 18 months though but we shall see. Hopefully he doesn't marry skanky Angela or anything stupid like that. He's gonna feel like a major asshole though when he finds out Ethan is actually his.
Date: 09 Aug 2016 10:49 AM Title: Chapter 2
Talk about strict parents!! Holy cow! No wonder she wanted to go to school away from them. Hopefully Bella makes some really good and true friends.
Date: 09 Aug 2016 1:55 AM Title: Chapter 2
Loved it can't wait for more d84;a039;
Date: 08 Aug 2016 6:24 PM Title: Chapter 2
Bella has horrible parents. She is so scared of them that she lies to survive.
Date: 08 Aug 2016 6:06 PM Title: Chapter 2
Charlie is a control freak and why did she lie to save Jacob he cheated on her?
Date: 08 Aug 2016 5:42 PM Title: Chapter 1
Omg I know someone messed with the DNA test and I bet it was Angela
[Report This]Date: 08 Aug 2016 3:49 PM Title: Chapter 2
Charlie and Renee are both batshit crazy! Poor girl did right to try and get away from them. I see lots of heartache and tears down the road for her. Loved it! Thanks for sharing!
Krazi
Xoxo
Date: 07 Aug 2016 9:30 PM Title: Chapter 2
wow charlie is a ass, I love a hate Jacob story, but who is messing with the DNA tests?
Date: 07 Aug 2016 6:42 AM Title: Chapter 2
LOVE.LOVE.LOVE. THANK YOU
Date: 06 Aug 2016 11:17 PM Title: Chapter 2
Glad she gets along with her roommates. I can not believe that Bella Loeffler to keep Jacob put of trouble. He was throwing one that was cheating on her. Ok, I could understand maybe the 1st lie but the Lord about him being the one she slept with. No, she should have told to truth there.
Date: 06 Aug 2016 11:08 PM Title: Chapter 2
Sounds like he will regret it!
Date: 06 Aug 2016 5:27 PM Title: Chapter 2
Very good start. Charlie os crazy. I look forward to more
[Report This]Date: 06 Aug 2016 2:41 PM Title: Chapter 2
I really like her jessica & lauren being sweet! Her parents are pyschos!!
Date: 06 Aug 2016 5:03 AM Title: Chapter 2
feeling sorry for b. knowing her home life and what happens later . . . very sad for her
[Report This]Date: 06 Aug 2016 3:49 AM Title: Chapter 2
Love it so far.
Date: 06 Aug 2016 3:01 AM Title: Chapter 1
This will be hard. If the DNA was ran correctly it should give the correct results. If the baby is not his it is not his. What if? There is something going on you have not shared yet,but she is in a bad place. Hopefully she meets someone that will help her. If not then the baby should be adopted and not live in the gheto in an area they could both be killed. Perhaps the new parents would let her be keep in touch. Help her out of this mess. Not perfect but better than both os them starving.
[Report This]Date: 05 Aug 2016 9:48 PM Title: Chapter 2
I feel so sad for her. She's been beaten down so much by her drill sergeant father!
Glad she met Edward, but then I remember the prologue :(
Date: 05 Aug 2016 8:25 PM Title: Chapter 2
I'm not sure if I like Charlie. Seems very controlling and military. I really hope the roommates are nice but with their name sakes I'm not sure that will happen.
[Report This]Date: 05 Aug 2016 7:41 PM Title: Chapter 2
Edward seems nice. Charlie is a total douche. Renee doesn't seems much different than usual. Even tho Jessica & Lauren seem nice it's still troubling they are her roommates.
Date: 05 Aug 2016 7:38 PM Title: Chapter 2
I think Charlie is worse than a drill Sargent. Bella should stop lying about to her parents about the pregnancy scare. She needs to tell them it was Jacob and he was cheating on her. She has led a very sheltered life with a drill Sargent for a father. She needs to make some friends.
[Report This]Date: 05 Aug 2016 7:13 PM Title: Chapter 2
Prison Guard Charlie is a bit much. Renee is over the top emotional. No wonder Bella latches on to anyone that shows her any one on one attention.
Well, Bella's lie set up the groundwork for her parents lack of involvement with her pregnancy.
Date: 05 Aug 2016 7:01 PM Title: Chapter 2
She should have told them the truth about Jacob and what a lying cheating douche he is. So that sets a bad precedent now that she lied once already. Charlie is super strict I hope the girls are nice in this story and not back stabbing wenches.
[Report This]Date: 05 Aug 2016 6:50 PM Title: Chapter 1
4th story of yours I'm reading. I have never been disappointed! Altho, if my memory is working 'Meeting Her Needs' did emotionally destroy me at times::))
While reading this chapter, several times I did have a jerk-knee reaction & thought 'Oh come on, Edward!'. With everything Edward knows up to date, he's gone above & beyond what an average person would or should do. If my beginner speculations are correct...poor Bella:(
Date: 05 Aug 2016 6:37 PM Title: Chapter 2
Charlie is WAY too strict with Bella! OMG! Bella has been sheltered and has a rude awakening coming, I'm afraid. Edward, as usual, sounds yummy. I'm guessing he is at least 25 so that makes him about 8 years older than Bella? So far, so good....
Thanks for addressing the font issue so quickly. This chapter looks like all the others I read here at TWCS. The same size, I mean.
[Report This]Date: 05 Aug 2016 4:43 PM Title: Chapter 2
Loving it so far. I looked up what chimera means so yes, the baby is obviously Edwards. I hope the truth is revealed sooner rather than drawn out too long because I think the meat of the story will be how Bella and Edward co parent and rebuild a relationship. I do like seeing how their friendship began - sets a nice foundation.
[Report This]Date: 05 Aug 2016 4:43 PM Title: Chapter 2
From my teaching experience, children coming from a strict, sheltered upbringing usually are the ones that don't know how to deal with newfound freedom and can end up making wrong decisions.
Date: 05 Aug 2016 4:20 PM Title: Chapter 2
Wow Charlie is a piece of work....with Renee being a doormat I guess.
Date: 04 Aug 2016 2:20 AM Title: Chapter 1
Your stories NEVER dissapoint. LOVE YA!!!!!!! UPDATE SOON PLEASE!
Date: 04 Aug 2016 1:00 AM Title: Chapter 1
Another excellent story, thanks for this new.
Luz
Date: 03 Aug 2016 1:20 PM Title: Chapter 1
Oh wow. Hell of a start..... Why do I get the feeling that someone tampered with the DNA tests..... Maybe the same lab ran the tests? Ack you are killing me already
Date: 03 Aug 2016 10:01 AM Title: Chapter 1
Ooh. I hope that when he does see them, Bella is living in a nice place with a really good job and mildly wealthy. Being a strong independant woman, with a really good female friend and maybe a surrogate parents. I hope Ethan is a carbon copy of Edward, but I hope in some ways she tells them all to go to hell, but I then I hope she makes them work for her trust and then some
Date: 03 Aug 2016 6:22 AM Title: Chapter 1
Well even if Bella's son wasn't Edward's still makes Edward an asshole for treating them that way. Like the baby has a disease or something. Then to tell her that it wouldn't be fair for him to be a father to the baby just because he thinks its not his baby. Bella can do better than him anyways, he just told her he could never love or want to love a child that isn't his biologically because to him it wouldn't be fair to his bio children. I guess he only wants to have one so that the other isn't second best with his logic. I hope Bella has found someone to help take care of her son and treats them good. I hope Kate cheats on him and has another man's baby and makes him think it's his.
[Report This]Date: 03 Aug 2016 3:43 AM Title: Chapter 1
Oh, I hate Edward already. She needs to leave him be with his miserable life & let him crawl back to her & make amends. She tried, now he needs to try. Oh & he needs to dump Angela & please no kids with her.
Date: 03 Aug 2016 2:20 AM Title: Chapter 1
Loved it can't wait for more d84;a039;
Date: 03 Aug 2016 1:50 AM Title: Chapter 1
I love the basis of this story as I have seen this happen in real life and on TV. On TV (if this was your inspiration) was an episode of CSI, but also it was on Discovery Health. Beyond that it has a lot of play and I am excited that of course our favorite pair will end up together....happily of course.
I love everything you guys have written.
Now when are you guys going to make good on your promise to turn Charlies' Voice into a longer feature....this story of the thousands that I have read, really stole my heart. Please I beg you bring this one forward into the spotlight again. :)
Date: 03 Aug 2016 1:12 AM Title: Chapter 1
Please please update soon !!! I love it already
[Report This]Date: 02 Aug 2016 11:32 PM Title: Chapter 1
Another intriguing ride along with WeekittyandTat!
Date: 02 Aug 2016 11:06 PM Title: Chapter 1
How sad!!! But I am glad you are both posting a new story!!
[Report This]Date: 02 Aug 2016 10:53 PM Title: Chapter 1
I can't wait to see where this all began and ends.
Someone doesn't want them together and probably messed up the DNA tests. My 1st guess is Angela. We'll see.
Date: 02 Aug 2016 10:39 PM Title: Chapter 1
My stomach is twisting and it was only the prologue . I wonder if Angela of even Carlisle has something to do with the DNA . I bet if Edward did get a good look at the baby he would see himself . 18 months later he will be able to see himself in his son. I hope they all eat crow. My heart goes to Bella and baby Ethan . I hope she moves on and leaves Edward in the dust. He needs to earn he and his sons love.
[Report This]Date: 02 Aug 2016 7:22 PM Title: Chapter 1
Départ canon!
Lu avec Google Translate. french. Montréal, Québec.
Date: 02 Aug 2016 6:56 PM Title: Chapter 1
Gah, I hate waiting!! More!
Date: 02 Aug 2016 6:40 PM Title: Chapter 1
I was just wondering the other day about you guys. I'm glad to have a new story from you. I know yours are usually angsty, but you do give a HEA. Thanks for this and I'm happy to read.
A question about the font size here on TWCS, if I might? I read quite a few stories on TWCS and this one, and others of yours in the past, have had a significantly smaller font size than all the others I read. Has anyone else mentioned this? I know it can be remedied, at least for me, by increasing the size to read your story, but I wondered why this is?
Date: 02 Aug 2016 6:14 PM Title: Chapter 1
I trust you. Looks like a bumpy ride.
[Report This]Date: 02 Aug 2016 6:01 PM Title: Chapter 1
I feel so sad for Bella and Ethan :(
Date: 02 Aug 2016 5:50 PM Title: Chapter 1
So many questions! I know we will get the answers eventually.
Date: 02 Aug 2016 5:23 PM Title: Chapter 1
I have always loved your stories. Please update soon.
[Report This]Date: 02 Aug 2016 4:35 PM Title: Chapter 1
Hmmmm.....does Angela have anthing to do with where the DNA test was conducted? Mistakes happen all the time! I believe Bella and if Edward looked inwards, he would too. Angela cheated on him once before and now she loves him? Nope - she's using Edward and he's allowing it because he's conflicted on his feeling re Bella. 18 months until he sees Bella and Ethan again? Uh oh.....I already have the tissues on hand.
Great first chapter and I'm sure the angst will be epic so I hope it won't take too long to get to the present! Thank goodness you guys update frequently!! Angst is hard but I know the HEA will be worth it.
Date: 02 Aug 2016 3:26 PM Title: Chapter 1
Love it. I still say you should publish all of your stories. I would buy them all. You guys have pure talent.