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Reviewer: lamelurker Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Nov 2015 12:37 AM Title: Chapter 20 Gateway

Thank you for writing and sharing your story! I really enjoyed it and look forward to the continuation.



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for reading and responding, especially when it's not a current story.  If you're interested in the continuation, it's called Fairies in moonlight, and I've just added chapter 20.  There are only a few more chapters until it's complete.  Thanks again!

Reviewer: artri Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 24 Sep 2015 11:10 PM Title: Chapter 1 Sacrifice

You are in for a treat if you have not read Anne Mc Caffrey yet, Get thee to a local book shop and pick up a copy of Dragonflight. It is a masterpiece This and the rest of the Dragonriders of Pern series pulls you into a facinating Universe, I'm sure you will love it. As for you own work I look forward to it being published.



Author's Response:

Right now we're in the process of mocing from North Carolina to Texas, and most of what we own is in storage.  Anne McCaffrey got some of that prized storage space, and I'll be digging into a lot of books once we're unpacked.  My husband is a big sci-fi/fantasy nut, and I've got a lot of catching up to do.  

As to the publishing, I'm an old dog trying to learn new tricks.  I suppose I could take my chances, and just toss a book up on Amazon and see what happens.  But I'm a planner, and I like to do things in the right order.  There's a bit of a learning curve, since I'm not very technical.  I've been advised to have a website or blog to deal with books and sales, and to set something up to monitor sales and deal with eventual taxes.  I'm also determined to have as few mistakes as possible, so I'm in the process of editing--again.  My husband is great with grammar, and he's read and marked the story for me to correct--bless him!  I've also got to find someone who can do covers.  I found a site where I can look for these creative typse, but I've been stalled--fear and procastination, pick one.  

Thanks again for your encouragement; it means a lot.

Reviewer: LoraB Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Sep 2015 1:11 PM Title: Chapter 20 Gateway

Love such a unique take on all the characters! Thanknyou for sharing your story with us! Looking forward to seeing what happens next with all of them. xo



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading and especially for reviewing.  I thought about trying to remove the Twilight references from this story, and just making it my own--maybe publish it.  But I think there's just enough of the original in here, it would force me to rewrite the whole thing to remove it.  I'd probably rather write one from the ground up instead.  Fairies in Moonlight is the second story of this trilogy, and I'm about two thirds finished with it, posting a chapter every four days.  

Thanks again for all your kind words

Reviewer: artri Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 22 Sep 2015 8:59 AM Title: Chapter 9 Transformations

An excellent book, They do come in trilogies, look at Anne Mc Caffreys. Keep writing and I look forward to reading all of yours when and I stress when you are published. Could not get in touch any other way, on FF too.



Author's Response:

I have a great love for fantasy novels and trilogies.  I've yet to read Anne McCaffrey, but she's on my list.

As to publishing, I've got some original novels I'm working on.  I'm still trying to figure my way through the maze of self-publishing.  I'm in the editing phase of a male POV romance novel, and I'm hoping to use it as a guinea pig to navigate e-publishing.  I've got a two others that are much heavier in smut I'm hoping to edit and self publish once I figure out how it's done.  And I've got a quirky little fiction I started writing during last year's NaNoWriMo, about a man who sells his soul to a deomn who promises him he will write a best-selling novel.  I'm really loving that one.  

As to the fan fiction, I've got this trilogy to finish, and my Crimson Rose of Texas still on the back burner.  Then I think I'm going to concentrate solely on my own original work.  I've got so many ideas....

Reviewer: artri Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 21 Sep 2015 10:36 PM Title: Chapter 20 Gateway

Going to find book two and post some reccomendations.

 



Author's Response:

I think I've got up to chapter six of the sequel up.  I'm still working on it, but I've got it plotted, as well as the third book.  I'm not sure why fantasy books often come in trilogies, but it's worked out well for this one.  I welcome all comments and criticisms, and I've really enjoyed your reviews.  Thanks for taking the time to read, and let me know what you think.  

Reviewer: artri Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 21 Sep 2015 10:35 PM Title: Chapter 19 Aristocracy

Like the way you put this chapter together.



Author's Response:

Thanks again.  I just had to look over the chapter to remind myself of what happened.  I probably should have split it into two chapters.  This story was really fun to write.  

Reviewer: artri Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 21 Sep 2015 10:33 PM Title: Chapter 18 Mainland

Love the twist.



Author's Response:

I'm a big fan of O. Henry, and I sometimes get carried away trying to surprise readers.  

Reviewer: artri Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 21 Sep 2015 10:15 PM Title: Chapter 17 Bird

So Good.



Author's Response:

Thanks again.  

Reviewer: artri Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 21 Sep 2015 10:13 PM Title: Chapter 16 Arise

There is so much in each chapter. It is so well written that I am surprised every time I finish one, It feels like no time has passed.



Author's Response:

Thanks again.  I'm like most writers, and love to hear that my writing is appreciated.  Nothing better than when a reader "gets it."  

Reviewer: artri Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 21 Sep 2015 10:06 PM Title: Chapter 15 Failures

Like the differing POV.



Author's Response:

Thank you.  I don't like to switch POV unless it's absolutely necessary.  

Reviewer: artri Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 21 Sep 2015 10:05 PM Title: Chapter 14 Sacrifice

Got to find out what happens next.



Author's Response:

I love this, when readers are so engrossed in a story they must keep reading.  

Reviewer: artri Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 21 Sep 2015 10:03 PM Title: Chapter 13 Countdown

You have the ability ti describe it so vividly.



Author's Response:

What a surprise, to see a pile of reviews for one of my finished stories!  Thank you for the compliment, and the sweet rating.  

Reviewer: artri Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 24 Aug 2015 8:05 AM Title: Chapter 12 Propriety

Love the way you wrote this chapter.



Author's Response:

This is the kind of review that makes a writer dance!  Plots and characters come and go, with varying acceptance and approval.  But "I love the way you wrote...."  Woop!  Thanks so much!

Reviewer: aelita48 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 20 Aug 2015 7:40 PM Title: Chapter 20 Gateway

Il est un très bon fiction.

Je passé Un moment très bon de lire DANS LA

Merci.



Author's Response:

I get a thrill when I see reviews in another language, knowing someone has enjoyed my story enough to translate it, or read in a less familiar language.  My one French class is barely adequate to know what you're saying without a translation.  So, I hope I get this right:  Merci Beaucoup pour la lecture.  

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Aug 2015 8:29 PM Title: Chapter 20 Gateway

And so the adventure continues! This will be all new territory for most of our intrepid band, Maybe they will find the answer to why the necklace repels J'spurr. I look forward to seeing what happens next!



Author's Response:

I'm getting part two ready, and trying to remember where I was heading with the story.  I learned a long time ago to keep notes on any story I worked on, but the planned order is still hard to grasp.  I do like a lot of the twists I have planned.  Thanks so much for reading and being faithful with your reviews.  

Reviewer: aelita48 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Aug 2015 8:17 PM Title: Chapter 1 Sacrifice

 

 

 

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Author's Response:

Thank you for your response and the sweet rating!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Aug 2015 10:41 PM Title: Chapter 19 Aristocracy

Loved this chapter, after the princess problem was dealt with, anyway! It tickles me that little Alyss is more powerful than almost anyone! It looks almost like they are about to find the gateway and get the dragons home!



Author's Response:

Alice in the books always had more power than anyone else.  She just offset it with her quirky personality.  Thanks for reading this one; I know it's not your usual genre.  

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Aug 2015 11:24 PM Title: Chapter 18 Mainland

Great! Just when we thought they would have five minutes of peace and happiness, along comes a whiny princess with a belligerent father! One good thing seems to be canceled out by the next!  From the sound of your author's note, you have been and will be a very busy girl! The news that this is the first part of a trilogy was good to hear, also! Try not to wear yourself out and we'll be seeing you!



Author's Response:

This story finishes with chapter 20.  A lot of fantasy stories, the characters don't get much of a break.  I'm hoping this isn't like one I read, where the hero and his true love fight battles all the way through the book.  Then, at the end they finally have peace, and book two picks up with them pulled apart by another horrible nasty battle....on and on through six books, with each adversary and trial bigger than the last.  It wore me out just reading it.  The next book focus's on Alyss and J'spurr, but they're not alone.  

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Aug 2015 10:40 PM Title: Chapter 17 Bird

Can't help wondering what magic turned Be'lah in to the fi'nyx, and what returned her to human? Great idea from Alyss for transporting the humans to the mainland. That gets them and the dragons over the ocean. The big question from there will be, what's next?



Author's Response:

It's a convoluted set of circumstances that made her what she is.  There's not much magic in the realm, but what's there is subtle.  R'ness did a lot of manipulation with her lineage, and Be'lah is connected to every people and race in that world.  Then through magical manipulation she's half elven.  Add in the prophesy, the magic of the gateway, and the laws of magic, and it was a combination that brought about the fi'nyx.  Since this is only the first book of a planned trilogy, there's a lot of story still to tell.  I'm only about halfway through book two, and book three is still barely an outline.  But I did finish my original book I was writing, and I'm about 3/4 finished with another.  So that's a total of three that need editing, one that needs finishing, and my two fan fiction stories I need to work on--Dragon trilogy, and Crimson Rose.  I've got to get a website up, then I'm going to get something out there in the real world of publishing.    

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Aug 2015 8:01 PM Title: Chapter 16 Arise

Am I seeing a glimmer of hope here, or is it merely wishful thinking? I think the phoenix bird is Be'lah, changed in the volcano. It would be kind of a match with Ehd Wryd's new ability, spewing lava on his enemies. Dare I hope for a happy ending after all this pain and misery? Crossing fingers and toes, I look forward to the next chapter!



Author's Response:

I like happy endings, and feel cheated if I go along with a story and find it's nothing but unrelenting misery.  Thanks again for reading and reviewing.  

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Aug 2015 8:39 PM Title: Chapter 15 Failures

Again, they did their best and destroyed Jheyms. Unfortunately, it appears Be'lah and her grandmother are also gone and Ehd Wyrd may soon follow! The volcano is erupting and dragons fly free, the curse is not broken and Alyss is a true fairy, so no total victory for anyone! How sad, how sad! I thought for sure magic would win the day, but guess I was wrong!



Author's Response:

It seems again and again Be'lah is snatching defeat from the jaws of victory.  Much more is at work here than one simple prophesy.  Thanks for reading, even through the fatal my sql errors.  

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Aug 2015 9:58 PM Title: Chapter 14 Sacrifice

She found a way to defeat his evil plan, but at such a cost! What good is winning if you die and lose your love into the bargain? I don't blame her for doing this to make sure Jheyms is done forever! I only hope Queen May, Princess Rose and Alyss made it out of the caves!



Author's Response:

Be'lah always knew this was her destiny.  She tried to run from it for years, but it caught up with her.  In sacrificing herself, she hoped to save Ehd Wyrd's family--if not him.  She also believes there's nothing left to live for, if he's gone.  

Reviewer: mysticfighter111 Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Aug 2015 4:21 PM Title: Chapter 14 Sacrifice

Did I get it right and Be'lah destroyed the gate for good?



Author's Response:

As part elf, Be'lah's can open the gate.  Her blood can freeze it open.  Her mixed race contaminates the gate, and it reacts as if it's under attack.  Her death can destroy the gate--once it's attuned to her.

Reviewer: mysticfighter111 Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Aug 2015 1:05 PM Title: Chapter 13 Countdown

Oh no! She gave up! The battle was horrible and of course Jhemys preyed on their feelings and put innocent people's lifes in danger to get his way. I'm so anxious to find out if the curse was lifted and what happened to everybody else. I really, really hope you found a way to make Be'lah and Ehd Wyrd somehow live.



Author's Response:

Just like Bella, my Be'lah doesn't want to go on without Ehd Wyrd.  And just like James, Jheyms uses the innocent to get what he wants.  There's still more story; I happen to enjoy happy endings.  I may be a fan of George R.R. Martin's Game of Thrones, but killing off beloved characters is a nasty habit of his.  

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Aug 2015 7:38 AM Title: Chapter 13 Countdown

The battle between good and evil was as horrifying as I imagined it would be! If Bel'ah and Ehd Wyrd are dying, at least it will be together! They fought as hard as they could and did great damage to the white leech and his black dragon!



Author's Response:

With all the plans, preparations, and even the sacrifices it's hard to see so many failures.  So much prophesy only makes seinse in hindsight.  I do still like happy endings.    

Reviewer: LeslieE Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Aug 2015 3:24 AM Title: Chapter 12 Propriety

I absolutely a adore this story!  Keep up the great work!



Author's Response:

Thank you for your kind words.  This one is finished, but part two is still a work in progress.  

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 02 Aug 2015 10:52 PM Title: Chapter 12 Propriety

Rather a bittersweet moment, wishing they had made love while they could! Back to training and hoping for the best outcome. I am wondering what objection Rose has to Be'lah?



Author's Response:

The prophesy is a bit heavy-handed, pushing them to be and do what's written.  Neither of them want to let it tell them how to live, or how to love.  Rose is next in line to rule, and marriage was often the best way to make an alliance for royals.  Edward's the youngest, and most expendable.    

Reviewer: mysticfighter111 Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Aug 2015 3:58 PM Title: Chapter 11 Kiss

Bella had the most marvelous idea, such a great gift for all the couples. I LOVED their first kiss, can't wait to find out what Edward needs to tell Bella.



Author's Response:

Thanks so much for your enthusiasm.  The transformation spell was a wonderful gift, but it takes too much out of her, so she won't be able to do it again.  As to what he needs to tell her, I did try to keep them in character.  

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 31 Jul 2015 5:59 PM Title: Chapter 11 Kiss

These transformations only prove what I suspected, that Be'lah is not only magical, but a very smart girl! I hope the changes last for a while, but who knows? There has to be a way to defeat the evil white wizard without killing all the good folks in the process!



Author's Response:

Right now their biggest problem is time.  With the training and everything she has to learn, there's not much time to just enjoy being in love.  This transformation comes so close to the full moon, and their confrontation, there probably won't be time  for more.  

Jheyms gets his, but as with most evil, power hungry people, it's not nearly as hard as it should have been.  

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Jul 2015 4:51 PM Title: Chapter 10 Talk

I just can't help but hope he's right and she's wrong, that somehow he saves her and becomes the man who loves her! Just call me a sappy old woman, but I'm a sucker for a happy ending! The encounter with the black dragon proves her training with her grandmother is taking hold!



Author's Response:

The prophesy is a booger.  It's cryptic on some points, but it does mention her death. Worse, she has all those nightmares proving it's right.  Sappy or not, I understand wanting a happy ending.  I fight against my own desire for neat, happy endings when I write.  Instead of happy, I strive for satisfactory.  In romance that usually means happy.  

Now that she's learning magic from an expert, her lessons are going much better and faster.  She's got a lot to learn, but it's taking hold.

Reviewer: mysticfighter111 Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 Jul 2015 1:04 PM Title: Chapter 9 Transformations

Of all the things running through Bella's mind asking Ehd Wyrd about his feelings has taken priority - astounding! I didn't expect Alyss to sprout wings, but it's fitting. I'm glad M was willing to share his story. Bella needs to know if she's indeed the person to fulfill the prophesy.



Author's Response:

Just like the books, Be'lah doesn't focus on all that's wrong with her situation; it's all about the connection she feels with Ehd'Wyrd.  Alyss is half fairy, and she just took in a big hit of pure magic.  M's story is a hard one for her to hear.  She's always known it, but she was trying so hard to deny she had any part to play in the prophesy.  

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Jul 2015 6:49 PM Title: Chapter 9 Transformations

This just keeps getting more complicated and dangerous, doesn't it? Too bad Alyss is upset over her new wings, I think they would be beautiful! Jasperseems to like them,too. M's telling Be'lah the story of his brother and his mate was another assurance of the fate that awaits her. It seems there is no escaping her destiny! Maybe she can draw comfort from what Ehd Wryd is about to tell her!



Author's Response:

Complicated and dangerous are two of my favorites!  Alyss is having trouble with not being normal.  M has a lot more he could tell Be'lah, but he doesn't feel any attachment to her, or a reason to share.  

Reviewer: LeslieE Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 26 Jul 2015 5:19 AM Title: Chapter 8 Training

Love this story!



Author's Response:

Thanks so much for your enthusiasm, and the sweet rating.  There are days I could really use those five cups of java.  

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Jul 2015 8:28 PM Title: Chapter 8 Training

Be'lah surprised R'ness with what she learned, but not more than Be'lah was surprised to learn about the fourteen laws of magic! Now she has to get Alyss away from the magic's influence! It seems to be making her drunk, or something similar. She also has to ponder the news that Ehd Wyrd wants to court her!



Author's Response:

There is so much Be'lah doesn't know about magic.  In her world there isn't much magic, so sorcerers, fairies, dragons, and elves are all rare.  Sorcerers have to use spells and components to do the magic an elf pulls from within.  She still has to learn how to tap into her inate magical ability.  Alyss is half fairy, so magic is a part of her too.  Magic is a wild card in this story, since it doesn't follow known laws.  Even the laws of magic can be broken.  

And then there's Ehd Wyrd's desire to court her.  Fun times ahead!

Reviewer: mysticfighter111 Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Jul 2015 8:10 PM Title: Chapter 8 Training

Be'lah comes up with unusual solutions when threatened, unpredicted reactions could be what makes the difference in a fight. How will she act towards Ehd Wyrd now that Alyss clued her in?



Author's Response:

Be'lah has a lot to learn in a short time.  Her solutions are much different than what she might choose if she had formal training.  R'ness doesn't understand that Be'lah hasn't really been trained at all.  She's used to elves, who are taught to use magic from the cradle.  Even after only six months of training, and elf would have a strong grasp of the basics.  

Reviewer: mysticfighter111 Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Jul 2015 7:35 PM Title: Chapter 7 Magic

Succeed or die - no pressure.



Author's Response:

R'ness is a tough teacher, no doubt.  She knows they're running out of time.  She and Be'lah may be related, but at this point she doesn't feel a thing for her.  

Reviewer: mysticfighter111 Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Jul 2015 7:11 PM Title: Chapter 6 Elf

I love how you weave things from the Twilight-books into your story. I'm amazed that Mis invisible and dragon-saliva has healing properties.



Author's Response:

Thank you.  In reading through this story again, I was surprised how much of Twilight seeped in.  As far as M being invisible; he's really not.  But he's the same color as the obsidian in the caves, and he manages to hide in the darke alcoves, so still he can't be seen.  As to the dragon saliva having healing properties, that's not true either, but Be'lah didn't know.  M just wanted a taste of her.   

Reviewer: mysticfighter111 Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Jul 2015 6:50 PM Title: Chapter 5 Prophesy

Who wouldn't love a guard-dragon to take them out for night-flights? I'M curious about what M has to tell about the prophesy.



Author's Response:

Maybe I was thinking a bit too much about Jasmine's magic carpet flgith in Aladdin.  Being able to soar on the back of a dragon would be an amazing flight--probably like walking on the wings of an old bi-plane.  Knowing he would catch her if she fell, probably helps her relax.   And even here we have Bella riding on Edward's back, as he shows her the world from a different angle.  

Reviewer: mysticfighter111 Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Jul 2015 6:11 PM Title: Chapter 4 Royalty

They're running out of time, indeed. How to undo the curse without giving in to marriage?



Author's Response:

Jheyms isn't the hunter in this story, but he's still a big pain, and he has a huge impact.  All it took was a casual refusal to set him off.  

Reviewer: mysticfighter111 Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Jul 2015 5:45 PM Title: Chapter 3 Dragons

The dragons' exterior sounds so familiar :)- I like the crown on the bronze one.

That was one hell of a dragon-fight!



Author's Response:

A review on every chapter is more than I usually hope for.  It's funny, but most of the people on the island haven't really paid attention to the dragons enough to notice there's more than one.  

Thanks for commenting on the fight.  I'm never sure if I get the excitement right.  

Reviewer: mysticfighter111 Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Jul 2015 5:22 PM Title: Chapter 2 Torture

Oooh, bronze and green. The pale leech in Be'lah's dream commands a black dragon. Maybe she was right all the time and the dragons-eat-virgins-myth is just that - a myth - and there's hope that Alyss isn't dead after all .... or I'm being overly optimistic.



Author's Response:

Thanks again for the reviews.  Seeing all those in my email put a huge grin on my face.  Green-eyes and bronze scales wouldn't mean much to someone who hadn't read Twilight, but it sets off all kinds of alarms to those who have.  Usually I avoid the word bronze in my writing, since it's so much a part of Edward, it's almost cliche'.  There's still a lot of story ahead, and since these responses can be read by anyone, I try to avoid spoilers.    

Reviewer: EdwardsGuardianAngel Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Jul 2015 5:11 PM Title: Chapter 8 Training

I am so loving this story. It's quite unique and rather fun. I fell in love with dragons when I read The Dragon Riders of Pern. So excited for future updates.

Author's Response:

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!  I wanted to write an AU story, where it was very alternate.  It's funny, since there's more Twilight in this one than I typically put in my canon stories.  I thought i could rewrite this one and make it completely original, but I see too many Twilight references in it.  

I haven't read The Dragon Riders of Pern yet, but it's on my someday list.  My daughter loves Anne McCaffery, and my husband read the whole series.  I am a big fan of fantasy, and dragons are so much fun to write.   

Reviewer: mysticfighter111 Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Jul 2015 4:42 PM Title: Chapter 1 Sacrifice

For an initiate Be'lah seems to be quite resourceful, even if she couldn't save Alyss. To me the leeches are the greater danger than the dragons. If they suck the life-force out of every living thing, why don't they destroy the dragons that way?



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!  Be'lah is resourceful.  One of her greatest gifts is she doesn't accept anything at face value.  She wasn't going to allow herself to be sacrificed, even though everyone thinks that's just how it should be.  The leeches are very dangerous.  They could probably attack a dragon with their magic--if they want to take a chance on being eaten or flattened.  They're cowards at heart.  Dragons are also magical, and leeching a dragon would be like trying to take a sip of water from beneath a waterfall.  Leeching also requires stillness and control.  Someone who is trying to escape or fighting isn't easy to leech.  

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Jul 2015 11:41 PM Title: Chapter 7 Magic

Now Be'lah is beginning to believe in her destiny, but it took a lot to convince her! M was scary to meet up with and I'm glad Ehd Wyrd was there to snatch her away from M's dangerous appetite!



Author's Response:

Sorry I missed responding to this.  Sometimes I barely have enough time to post a chapter before I'm off and running again.  

Be'lah has a lot to learn.  I can't imagine how it would feel to learn you had a role to play in history, and a destiny that's been mapped out.  Some strive for just that, but Be'lah didn't get to choose this path; that would be tough.  M is a real dragon, not some cushy transformed version.  Dragons just think differently, and he has no love for Be'lah, nor does he care much about her destiny.  He doesn't really want to eat her, though elves are catnip to dragons.  

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Jul 2015 7:09 PM Title: Chapter 6 Elf

Now perhaps Bel'ah will accept that she truly is the one to fulfill the prophesy. Since it calls for her death, I can certainly understand her reluctance! Can't wait to see what happens next!



Author's Response:

Be'lah has always known the truth; she just doesn't want to believe it.  She thinks she's normal, and unimportant.  She's had to move so often, she doesn't feel connected to any one or any thing, and she wants to believe she can just ignore what's happening, and it will become someone else's problem.      

Reviewer: zanath Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 21 Jul 2015 3:30 PM Title: Chapter 6 Elf

Of all the stories I am reading this is my favorite!  I like how you have incorporated the names and places into this story and yet it is all very new and different!  Thanks



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for reviewing, and for the sweet rating!  The names were fun to do, and I enjoyed trying to create something different, with the same flavor of the original.  

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Jul 2015 11:25 PM Title: Chapter 5 Prophesy

The prophesy calls for a great bird to defeat Jheyms and his dragon. This makes me wonder if Bella's last name factors into that? It's obvious , to me at least, that Ehd Wyrd likes Bella, a lot and will protect her any way he can!



Author's Response:

Bella's last name does play into this.  I always thought it was funny that Meyer in essence named her 'beautiful swan.'  Even more intentional when you think of the ugly duckling she saw herself to be.  For Ehd Wyrd, Bella is different from every girl he knew in his human life.  She's strong, independent, and not afraid of flying--or colored dragons.  She's also not grasping for his title.  

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Jul 2015 6:43 PM Title: Chapter 4 Royalty

Now we are close to discovering what role Be'lah plays in the lifting of the curse! I now wonder if the big black dragon might be Emmett? It makes sense, if May's sons are dragons. I'm sure glad Alyss escaped being eaten and she and Be'lah are reunited! It's going to be pretty tricky to lift this awful curse, so Be'lah better practice her magic!



Author's Response:

Oops, I forgot to respond last time.  Sometimes I barely have time to post before getting pulled away.  I'd forgotten how closely this story followed the original.  It's different enough to be interesting, I think.  I also forgot that this story moves faster than some of my others.  In this I tried to capture that action adventure feeling.  

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Jul 2015 9:28 PM Title: Chapter 3 Dragons

I kind of wanted to be riding on that dragon's back while they were escaping from the black dragon and his evil white rider! The cavern beneath  the sea sounds fabulous, I hope it hides them from detection! I think Be'lah is about to find out why she has been rescued and by whom!



Author's Response:

i love the idea of riding dragons!  I always imagined if I could have a super power, I'd choose flight.  It was funny how this story just unfolded once the characters slipped into a fantasy realm.  I love the parallels between dragons and vampires.  Be'lah has a lot to learn, and this story moves quick.  Thanks for reading and reviewing.

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Jul 2015 10:10 PM Title: Chapter 2 Torture

After that awful torture, I'm hoping the differently colored dragon means something good ! Since Be'lah always dreamed of a black dragon, this bronze colored one maybe isn't quite so bad!



Author's Response:

It's funny even when something isn't real, it's still possible to do research on it.  I had to look up dragons, and I figured out what the dragons in this story would look like, how they would move, and what would be their strengths and weaknesses.  As to the torture, these leeches can feed both on the life force of their victim, and on their pain and suffering.  They're pretty nasty individuals.  

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Date: 12 Jul 2015 9:58 PM Title: Chapter 1 Sacrifice

Poor Alyss, fed to the dragon, and her friend unble to save her! Worse, she can't save herself! Things are not looking too good for our heroine!



Author's Response:

I had what I thought was a response to your review, but it turned out it was a review.  I deleted it after copying my response, but apparently you can't do that on this site.  So, I'm rewriting my response.  

When I posted this, I got the dreaded fatal sql error.  I wasn't sure anyone would see it, but I guess it's fixed now.  This is one of those stories I thought I could claim as my own, if I changed the names.  But when I reread it, I realized it's recognizable as Twilight, if you know the story.  Not only that, but a lot of the mythology is based on Tolkein, so it's far from original or unique.  I'm also discovering novice mistakes that bug me, and force me to edit--I finally know how to fix an I-bomb.  

This story is a stand alone book of a planned trilogy  I got halfway into book two, and got side-tracked by my own writing.  Then there was the deleting drama on ffnet, and I just lost interest in finishing it.  I do want to finish it, though.  My first genre to read was romance, but I lost interest in it after my teens.  Fantasy saved me.  It was like a new world opened up and I found a place where I could get lost.  It's only natural that I combine my first two loves.  

Thanks for taking a chance on this new one.  You're a brave soul.

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