Date: 01 Dec 2015 12:25 PM Title: Chapter 1:
Ok, one, you need to learn about the places you are writing about....Arizona is in the aris southwestern United States....no ocean, no beach, sorry. It makes the story hard to accept if the writer has no idea what they are writing. Second, baseball is majors and minors...aka big leagues, the show, etc versus semi-pro or farm teams.
While the premise is interesting, you need to know your material. There is no suspension of disbelief when you are describing a real place.
Keep trying and thanks for sharing.
Anything is realistic in fiction I didn't mean to offend anyone that was not my intention. :)