Date: 20 Jun 2016 1:53 AM Title: Chapter 5
wow I do hope you are going to continue this story because what you have so far is really good and I would love to know what happens next!
Melissa
Date: 01 Dec 2015 12:25 PM Title: Chapter 1:
Ok, one, you need to learn about the places you are writing about....Arizona is in the aris southwestern United States....no ocean, no beach, sorry. It makes the story hard to accept if the writer has no idea what they are writing. Second, baseball is majors and minors...aka big leagues, the show, etc versus semi-pro or farm teams.
While the premise is interesting, you need to know your material. There is no suspension of disbelief when you are describing a real place.
Keep trying and thanks for sharing.
Author's Response:
Anything is realistic in fiction I didn't mean to offend anyone that was not my intention. :)
Date: 28 Nov 2015 1:49 PM Title: Chapter 5
Dun dun derr :)
Date: 24 Sep 2014 3:00 AM Title: Chapter 3
Hello I like it so far different from what I have read before hope you update soon
Date: 20 Sep 2014 9:49 PM Title: Chapter 3
Hmm do the Cullens go to the sane School
Date: 20 Sep 2014 9:38 PM Title: Chapter 1:
Brilliant plot
Date: 20 Sep 2014 7:47 PM Title: Chapter 3
loved it, can not wait for more
Date: 08 Sep 2014 6:00 AM Title: Chapter 2
I really like this so far. It is very interesting.
Date: 08 Sep 2014 5:05 AM Title: Chapter 2
We meet shapeshifters, will we see the Cullen anytime soon? Will there be more danger for bella to face?
Date: 08 Sep 2014 3:24 AM Title: Chapter 2
Excellent, I wonder what powers she has and will Edward and his family show themselves soon
Date: 07 Sep 2014 8:52 PM Title: Chapter 1:
So bella is very different from all the creatures of forks. Bella going on a wild ride.
Author's Response:
She's different yes, but then again Forks in my story isn't the same. :)