Date: 01 Aug 2014 5:31 AM Title: Chapter 16
So glad to read your work again! I more than understand about prioritizing time when loved ones are ill! I went through that with both my parents. Our priorities shift and change for a while. I'm glad the new treatment seems to be working. I'll keep those prayers going, just the same!
I really enjoyed these chapters. Bella and Jasper are so comfortable and trusting with one. Another here. Emmett, Rose, Charlotte, Peter and Garrett just round out the family. I look forward to your updates - whenever they may be!!! Think of it this way, the time between was a perfect excuse to reread the whole story whenI saw the new chapters there! Thank you for he lovely gift of your work and yourself!
Date: 27 Jul 2014 6:10 AM Title: Chapter 5
I enjoyed the story so far. With care, I think it shows real promise. You've set it up well and now you need to redefine the characters. For instance, there is a world of differance between Jasper and the Major. He must sound and behave like the Major now. Please keep writing. I'd like to see where this story takes us! Thanks for all the hard work!