Date: 07 Aug 2014 12:57 AM Title: Chapter 7
I'm glad Natalie is doing okay so far. I'm sure it won't last though. It can't be that easy.
Date: 07 Aug 2014 12:03 AM Title: Chapter 6
Natalie is such a strong little girl. As horrible as it may seem it's almost a good thing that Heidi wasn't a dedicated mother. It will make it a little easier on Natalie. And we meet more of the Cullen clan.
Date: 06 Aug 2014 6:03 PM Title: Chapter 5
Thanks god for small miracles. I hope that with everyone in her side they let Bella keep her.
Date: 06 Aug 2014 6:02 PM Title: Chapter 4
Oh god. That it the worse thing I can think of. I hope he didn't have time to hurt her sexually.
Date: 06 Aug 2014 6:01 PM Title: Chapter 3
I'm glad Bella took responsibility. I hope it all works out.
Date: 06 Aug 2014 5:03 PM Title: Chapter 2
Bella is very strong. I'm glad she walked away when she did.
Date: 06 Aug 2014 4:51 PM Title: Chapter 1
Oh this could get tricky. I would of called the police right away. My daughters 11 and I can't imagine not taking action.
[Report This]Date: 25 Jul 2014 12:30 PM Title: Chapter 11
Fantastic story. Absolutely loving it!
Date: 25 Jul 2014 10:26 AM Title: Chapter 11
So much for a little girl to go through but she is not alone
[Report This]Date: 25 Jul 2014 12:38 AM Title: Chapter 11
What a special family they will be.
Date: 24 Jul 2014 11:28 PM Title: Chapter 11
Sad for Natalie!
Update soon please
Date: 23 Jul 2014 8:32 PM Title: Chapter 10
They are family already
Date: 23 Jul 2014 3:31 AM Title: Chapter 10
Perfect little family
Date: 23 Jul 2014 3:13 AM Title: Chapter 10
I think they may need a bigger bed..lol it's so sweet that Natalie wants them to be a family already...
[Report This]Date: 23 Jul 2014 1:06 AM Title: Chapter 10
Natalie is such a doll.
[Report This]Date: 22 Jul 2014 10:27 PM Title: Chapter 10
Sweet chapter.
Date: 18 Jul 2014 3:04 AM Title: Chapter 9
Just what the doctor order a great day of fun with loving people great day
Date: 17 Jul 2014 11:16 PM Title: Chapter 9
Nice 1st date.
Glad Natalie feels comfortable with other good people
[Report This]Date: 17 Jul 2014 10:30 PM Title: Chapter 9
Oh my is he special. Don't let him get away Bella.
Date: 17 Jul 2014 9:28 AM Title: Chapter 8
What a little girl so grown up so sad at least with Bella she will have a chance at some childhood but she will never have her childhood she cant unlearn the thing she has seen in her short life.
Date: 17 Jul 2014 2:50 AM Title: Chapter 8
Fun first date with dad
Date: 16 Jul 2014 8:44 AM Title: Chapter 8
Wonderful chapters! I'm some ways, Naralie is "older" than Bella. Experience can be a harsh teacher. Now, Natalie has a soft place to land - and many people who will help her lovingly. Bella's relationship with Edward seems right on the mark - not stressfbut open enough to share their feelings. Aice and Jasper's part had me giggling. ( while I do have a daughter, she is older and an old soul to boot.). Thank you for your ,marvelously thought provoking piece. I'd be willing to bet there are readers looking into Living Wills! I look forward to more from these characters. Thank you for all the thought and care you put into your work. It truly shows!
[Report This]Date: 16 Jul 2014 12:06 AM Title: Chapter 8
Way too grown up. Poor kid.
Date: 15 Jul 2014 10:02 PM Title: Chapter 8
Poor Natalie.
Date: 15 Jul 2014 5:51 AM Title: Chapter 7
wow that was a get to know you chapter they did a good job. Poor kid never had a chance until Bella came along
Date: 15 Jul 2014 4:40 AM Title: Chapter 7
Just found your story and added to my favorites and proceeded to read all 7 chapters... This is such a sad story but at the same time a very happy one as well...poor Natalie living in that kind of situation, wether her Mother was trying her best, is still unthinkable. Bella coming into her life at just the right time is just what she deserves...the chance to be loved, cared for, safe and to be a normal kid... Looking forward to more :)
[Report This]Date: 14 Jul 2014 10:34 PM Title: Chapter 7
Edward is such a nice guy. Just what they need. Poor Natalie. It sounds like you know a lot about head injuries. Unfortunately, so do I. Even if she pulls through it will be a very long haul. Natalie has had a very hard life so far. She needs some rainbows.
Date: 12 Jul 2014 9:08 PM Title: Chapter 6
sad but i do like it very much looking forward to policeward have been reading a lot of fireward so looking forward to the change
Date: 12 Jul 2014 8:30 PM Title: Chapter 6
She will do what ever she has to do to take care of that little girl
Date: 12 Jul 2014 9:25 AM Title: Chapter 5
Poor little girl what a thing to have to deal with. I am so glad Bella is there for her and Edward has made it clear he wants to go out with Bella. love it
Date: 12 Jul 2014 6:15 AM Title: Chapter 4
OMG poor baby . I hope Bella does not beat herself up for not being there.
Date: 12 Jul 2014 6:07 AM Title: Chapter 3
They are in a good rutin but what will happen when it changes??
Date: 12 Jul 2014 4:49 AM Title: Chapter 5
I certainly hope you keep working on this story because your work here is amazingly good. It touches the heart and soul not only with Natalie's predicament but Bella's history with Tyler. You've done more good with this work than I think you will ever know. Somewhere, a woman or young reader is seeing herself in Bella's previous situation for the first time. She is looking long and hard at the guy she is dating and begining to ask questions. On her behalf, I thank you oh so much! I sincerely hope to see an update in the future. I look forward to it in fact! Thank you and kudos!
Author's Response:
This review made me cry! Thank you So Very much!
[Report This]Date: 12 Jul 2014 2:44 AM Title: Chapter 6
Iion of the apartment will never leave her. I have mixed feelings Natalie seeing her mom.
Date: 12 Jul 2014 1:58 AM Title: Chapter 6
Is it Monday yet? Love love love
Date: 12 Jul 2014 1:46 AM Title: Chapter 6
Loving this so far!!!
Thanks for the update!!!
Date: 11 Jul 2014 11:52 PM Title: Chapter 2
Poor little girl at least her mom does care about her. I like that Bella told her she knows what she does
Date: 11 Jul 2014 11:13 PM Title: Chapter 1
Poor girl mother and daughter . Bella is a good person
[Report This]Date: 11 Jul 2014 2:28 PM Title: Chapter 5
An amazing story you have here. I hope everything works out for Natalie and everyone. While I can't condone child abuse, I am thankful that Heidi never let it slip far enough she pimped out her daughter and at least cared enough to never let it happen.
Date: 11 Jul 2014 3:28 AM Title: Chapter 5
Poor Nat and Heidi.
Please let there be no crazy family that is going to drag Natalie thru anymore drama. She needs Bella (and then they both need Edward)
Date: 10 Jul 2014 10:09 PM Title: Chapter 5
tough chapter but I understand it was needed gotta love Natalie
Date: 10 Jul 2014 9:17 PM Title: Chapter 5
Poor baby! I feel sorry for Heidi, too.
Date: 10 Jul 2014 9:08 PM Title: Chapter 4
Just can't wait to read the next chapter.
[Report This]Date: 10 Jul 2014 6:15 PM Title: Chapter 5
I think the courts will look favorably on a resonspible person who is willing to take a nine years old. Foster homes are to few.
[Report This]Date: 10 Jul 2014 5:58 PM Title: Chapter 4
That john should be locked up for a long time. And Heidi putting Natalie in that position, just horrible.
Date: 10 Jul 2014 2:27 PM Title: Chapter 3
Excited to know what happens next...is Bella going to end up with Natalie? Is Heidi going to get arrested or worse die at the hands of one of the johns? I guess I have to stay tuned!
Date: 10 Jul 2014 4:05 AM Title: Chapter 2
Well I am glad heidi isnt as bad as I thought
[Report This]Date: 10 Jul 2014 4:01 AM Title: Chapter 3
This is a sweet story. Looking forward to more.
Date: 10 Jul 2014 2:29 AM Title: Chapter 3
I am really enjoying this! I can't wait to read more.
[Report This]Date: 09 Jul 2014 9:54 PM Title: Chapter 3
That text was reassuring for me.
[Report This]Date: 09 Jul 2014 9:48 PM Title: Chapter 2
The itching has me concerned. What did Natalie bring home? Can't be something good. Bella is a good person, too bad Tyler came into her life. I got a kick out of Charlie.
[Report This]Date: 09 Jul 2014 9:30 PM Title: Chapter 1
Poor Natalie. Heide sounds like a piece of work. Think of all the Natalie's who don't have a Bella to look out for them.
Date: 09 Jul 2014 7:58 PM Title: Chapter 2
Great story so far!!
Date: 09 Jul 2014 5:54 PM Title: Chapter 1
keep going ... cant wait tell next chapter!!!!!
Author's Response:
Thank you. There are 10 chapters written and it leaves off in a good place. I don't have much time to spend writing these days so I don't know when it will get finished! Thanks for reading!