[Report This]Date: 06 Jun 2014 11:13 PM Title: Chapter 10
Oh my goodness the poor girl is so traumatized she thinks no matter what everyone will think they are guilty but Edward is helping every one see the truth about them
Date: 06 Jun 2014 9:20 PM Title: Chapter 10
Yes, lots of therapy
Date: 06 Jun 2014 8:13 PM Title: Chapter 10
Looking forward to the next chapter
Date: 06 Jun 2014 7:47 PM Title: Chapter 10
She has every right to freak out it is a good thing Edward is going to go through every step with her. That case worker better go to jail and become someones bitch.
Date: 06 Jun 2014 7:37 PM Title: Chapter 10
Loved it can't wait for more :)
Date: 06 Jun 2014 7:11 PM Title: Chapter 10
I can't believe the ignorance and neglect perpetrated on Bella and Peter. That whole fucking town allowed this to happen. I am angry. At a fucking story! See what you do to me?? LOL! Seriously, this is some heavy duty subject matter, stuff that all too infrequently gets addressed. I think that house is a living testament to how abusive Charlie was with his children. He locked away the food? That alone is proof of abuse, let alone the urine soaked mattress that Peter was forced to sleep on. Great story!
Date: 06 Jun 2014 7:10 PM Title: Chapter 10
Their house sounds awful. Poor Peter having to sleep in that bed. Gross. Locking food away from your children, awful. My heart just goes out to them. Why was Bella mad when Edward and his dad came back in the room? What was Esme upset about?
Date: 06 Jun 2014 7:09 PM Title: Chapter 10
The house was ghastly, but in lone with what we have learned of Charlie so far. I hope Bella will tell Jasper everything and I also hope that he makes all efforts so that Peter can stay with Bella, since she now is an adult. I wonder want went on between Bella and Esme... Why she was so mad.
[Report This]Date: 06 Jun 2014 3:25 PM Title: Chapter 9
I can't wait for momma Esme to come and take charge. No one wants to cross her when she is on a mission.
Date: 06 Jun 2014 5:13 AM Title: Chapter 9
i am sooo loving this story. i was wondering how and when the other cullens were going to come into the story. i like stories that draw all different emotions out of you. thats when you know its a good story. thanks cant wait for the next chapter
Date: 06 Jun 2014 2:48 AM Title: Chapter 9
Loving this story!!! XOXO,Cheri
Date: 06 Jun 2014 2:40 AM Title: Chapter 9
Poor Peter...but I think his love for Edward will help him heal and trust pretty quickly...now Bella may take some time. I hope Charlie hadn't already gave Bella to a guy and someone will be coming for her that they don't know about. Please say these kids get to stay with Edward..
Date: 06 Jun 2014 2:15 AM Title: Chapter 9
Really glad hes dead
Date: 06 Jun 2014 1:35 AM Title: Chapter 9
Poor kids. Those adults should all feel guilty for not taking a closer look into what was really going on.
[Report This]Date: 06 Jun 2014 12:10 AM Title: Chapter 9
Crying now, poor child, poor Bella. (Good writing)
Date: 06 Jun 2014 12:03 AM Title: Chapter 9
Had me choked up great job
Date: 05 Jun 2014 8:27 PM Title: Chapter 9
Loved it can't wait for more :)
Date: 05 Jun 2014 8:23 PM Title: Chapter 9
OMG please post soon, amazing chapter.
Date: 05 Jun 2014 7:55 PM Title: Chapter 9
I hope the damn stupid social services workers don't try to take Peter from Edward, but in truth they would probably try to do just that. Good for Rose and Kate that they NOW believe what Charlie was doing to those poor kids. Let's hope the evidence is enough to keep everyone safe from now on.....great fucking chapter!!
[Report This]Date: 05 Jun 2014 7:10 PM Title: Chapter 9
it's about time Rose and Kate opened their eyes
Date: 05 Jun 2014 6:42 PM Title: Chapter 9
I am so happy they hurd what Peter was talking about. I think things have started to turn how Edward is thinking about Bella.
Date: 05 Jun 2014 6:36 PM Title: Chapter 9
Wow.. the abuse was awful...
Damn this is sad.....
Date: 05 Jun 2014 6:02 PM Title: Chapter 9
Arhhhhhhh......lovin it....xx
Date: 05 Jun 2014 5:50 PM Title: Chapter 9
I am so happy that Peter is able to stay with Edward. Bless those kids hearts. I can not believe that he made Bella dig her own mother's grave. That is just sick. What was Charlie doing whoring his own wife out for money?? Glad that Jasper is on the kids side. I know Rose and Kate feel horrible. Can't wait for the next chapter! !!!!
Date: 05 Jun 2014 5:48 PM Title: Chapter 9
I hope they end up finding out that lady from social services had been sleeping with Charlie too...
[Report This]Date: 05 Jun 2014 5:37 PM Title: Chapter 9
Oh goodness the poor kids to have to dig the grave for your mom that had to kess with her head and Edward was right to call them out on not seeing the truth update soon
Date: 05 Jun 2014 5:29 PM Title: Chapter 9
Omg, if only this Edward were real. Can't wait to see how the town reacts to all the new evidence that was uncovered. Rose had some nerve to ask why would Bella believe everything Charlie has told her. It's not like anyone was proven him wrong. Can't wait to read the next chapter.
Date: 05 Jun 2014 5:17 PM Title: Chapter 9
Looking forward to the next chapter
[Report This]Date: 05 Jun 2014 5:54 AM Title: Chapter 8
Oh my goodness the poor kids will the town know the truth now will they go after all the others who helped Charlie update soon
Date: 05 Jun 2014 5:33 AM Title: Chapter 8
Oh man, that was a heart breaking chapter to read but I really think Bella will learn to trust him if he can puill through. I bet he is calling Carlisle.
Date: 05 Jun 2014 5:32 AM Title: Chapter 8
Well at least CHarlie is dead now. Wonder if the people who bought Bella will still be coming around?
[Report This]Date: 05 Jun 2014 5:00 AM Title: Chapter 8
I don't know how you guys can do this so fast...yo are so great at keeping us all happy reading and reading! Thanks - Xanath
Date: 05 Jun 2014 4:17 AM Title: Chapter 8
I want to say that he's calling his parents. Am I right?
Date: 05 Jun 2014 3:24 AM Title: Chapter 8
Loved it can't wait for more :)
Date: 04 Jun 2014 11:27 PM Title: Chapter 8
Love this story!!!
[Report This]Date: 04 Jun 2014 11:10 PM Title: Chapter 8
This story went differently than I thought. Which is a good thing. Great even.
[Report This]Date: 04 Jun 2014 10:39 PM Title: Chapter 8
Thank God for that, Charlie needed to be dead, dead, dead. You write a really baaadddd Charlie (I mean the character , not the writing) this is a good story, edge of the seat stuff.
[Report This]Date: 04 Jun 2014 10:38 PM Title: Chapter 8
Omg poor Peter. I hope they nail Angela and Ben too.
Date: 04 Jun 2014 9:13 PM Title: Chapter 8
Oh.. explain how she killed charlie?
I have read it three times. How did she shoot charlie?
Glad the dick is dead!
He had her sold, to who??
Looking forward to more :)
Author's Response:
She didn't Peter did, but she wanted Edward to tell the police that she did it.
Date: 04 Jun 2014 8:38 PM Title: Chapter 8
Tense......can't wait for another update xx
Date: 04 Jun 2014 7:18 PM Title: Chapter 8
I am just so happy that prick Charlie is dead. I am so glad that Bella told Edward how she was feeling.
[Report This]Date: 04 Jun 2014 6:44 PM Title: Chapter 8
Loving it. I love that I can have faith with your stories that the bad guys get what's coming to them and the good guys all get their hea.
Date: 04 Jun 2014 6:15 PM Title: Chapter 8
This is the worst Charlie I have ever read. I'm glad this character is dead and I never say things like that. Now the kids can be safe. I hope. You won't kill Bella too, I just know it. Who is he calling? His mother, maybe? Jasper?
Date: 04 Jun 2014 6:13 PM Title: Chapter 8
OMGosh! !!!! Whay made Charlie come to the ranch?? I hope Charlie dies. I think he is calling his mother.
Date: 04 Jun 2014 5:57 PM Title: Chapter 8
I know you said you would update every day but could you put another one up today.
[Report This]Date: 04 Jun 2014 9:59 AM Title: Chapter 7
Awesome awesomeness!!
Date: 04 Jun 2014 7:28 AM Title: Chapter 7
Great chapter!!!! I hope Bella lets Edward help her soon! I think she is so afraid and has been hurt to much she does not know how to trust. Also I think she is afraid something will happen to Edward for helping them. And jasper is very intellligent he just acts as if he were stupid.
Date: 04 Jun 2014 5:25 AM Title: Chapter 7
The more I hear about Charlie the more I want to string him up by something and its not his neck!!!
[Report This]Date: 03 Jun 2014 10:21 PM Title: Chapter 7
Loving your story! And looking forward to reading more.
Date: 03 Jun 2014 9:17 PM Title: Chapter 7
Looking forward to the next chapter
Date: 03 Jun 2014 6:19 PM Title: Chapter 7
I hope Bella comes to her senses very fast and rethinks what happened the last few weeks. She really has nowhere to go and her brother is still a minor, so even if she leaves, the law still has to bring him to their father.
Jasper seems to be a nice guy and I hope they find a way to protect them. That Angela from Social Services seems to be as crooked as they come.
[Report This]Date: 03 Jun 2014 6:10 PM Title: Chapter 7
Charlie is a real piece of work
[Report This]Date: 03 Jun 2014 6:04 PM Title: Chapter 7
Oh wow now she is 18 will Charlie still go after her and will Bella finally let Edward in update soon
Date: 03 Jun 2014 6:01 PM Title: Chapter 7
Please post the next chapter soon !!!!!
Date: 03 Jun 2014 5:35 PM Title: Chapter 7
I am glad that Jasper seems to know what is going on with the kids and wants to help them and not their father. Poor Edward and poor Bella. I understand both of them. Bella is sooooooo scared to trust anyone. Edward has tried sooooooo hard to help her and she is not letting him in. He is at his wits end.
Can't wait to find out what he gave her for her birthday. Now after his little blow up maybe she will let him in some more.
I can not believe that Charlie would sell his own daughter. That is just awful. Hope hope he gets what is coming to him.
Can't wait for ttomorrow's update! !!!!!!
Date: 03 Jun 2014 5:11 PM Title: Chapter 7
I hope Edwards words to Bella doesn't cause her to want to take Peter and run again... That would be a disaster... If she sees that Peter is safe and bonding with Edward maybe she'll try giving him a chance and start to open up to him as well... I love all the updates...keep em comin !!!!
Date: 03 Jun 2014 4:43 PM Title: Chapter 7
It's a disturbing story. To think that this can happen makes me cringe. It's an engaging story, though, and I have hope.
[Report This]Date: 03 Jun 2014 4:07 PM Title: Chapter 7
I love this! Amazing writing and plot. Yes, Edward and Jasper know a lot but seem to be caught in the middle.
Now that Bella is 18 and legally an adult, Charlie can't send her away, right? But he would use Peter as a pawn to get her to do his bidding if they are ever found.
It's been a while so how has Edward convinced Rose and Kate that he no longer needs them to cook and clean for him. Rose already seems to have her suspicions so they all need to be careful that no one comes snooping around and sees the kids in Edward's home. I'm almost thinking that he could do an Anne Frank kind of thing where he fixes up his attic and the kids have a safe place to be be when he's not at home.
Date: 03 Jun 2014 3:56 PM Title: Chapter 7
Well thank god shes 18 but that means little since he sold her....
[Report This]Date: 03 Jun 2014 3:14 PM Title: Chapter 7
Well at least Jasper has some sense. At this point if local and state social services won't help, time to call in the FBI Esp if he thinks she's been sold into white slavery.
Date: 03 Jun 2014 3:01 PM Title: Chapter 7
I don't blame him. Hopefully, that will help Bella trust him more.
Date: 03 Jun 2014 2:36 PM Title: Chapter 7
I hope this scares her out of her hate for Edward she needs to see his is only trying to help them
Date: 03 Jun 2014 7:54 AM Title: Chapter 6
cant wait for the next chapter. Bella is so afraid she is going to fail to take care of Peter. How long is Edward going to be able to keep them hide.
Date: 03 Jun 2014 4:19 AM Title: Chapter 6
Loving this story and love that you will try to update daily. So hard to love a story and wait a month to see what will happen. Shouldn't be grousing when you are providing me a wonderful story for free so thank you and excited to see where you plan to take this. XOXO, Cheri
Date: 03 Jun 2014 4:18 AM Title: Chapter 6
those poor kids. I wonder why nobody believes them? can't they see all those bruises on those little bodies? what the fuck is wrong with people?
Date: 03 Jun 2014 3:05 AM Title: Chapter 6
So sad for Peter and Bella...I hope her father wasn't also sexually abusing her by her saying those things to Edward... Maybe by Peter getting attached to Edward and trusting him Bella will see he's really trying to help and open up to him more. Waiting on the next one :)
Date: 03 Jun 2014 2:53 AM Title: Chapter 6
Oh my gosh, I just want to kill Charlie myself. Great job ladies. I hope your family issues are not too serious. I look forward to reading more when you get the chance to post.
Date: 03 Jun 2014 2:36 AM Title: Chapter 6
Jesus christ bella
Date: 03 Jun 2014 2:03 AM Title: Chapter 6
I am glad that Bella and Peter are staying. Wow, Bella is serious about protecting her little brother. Bless her heart. I can't wait for tomorrow's update.
Date: 03 Jun 2014 1:23 AM Title: Chapter 6
Poor kids. I can't believe that there are all of these people who had to see but ignore what was going on with Peter and Bella. Charlie should be in jail!!!
[Report This]Date: 03 Jun 2014 12:14 AM Title: Chapter 6
please tell me she will trust edward and rose kate stay away or see the truth of charlie lying and jasper arrests him
[Report This]Date: 02 Jun 2014 10:38 PM Title: Chapter 6
What do you do, it is an impossible situation. You would think people would ask some questions.
Date: 02 Jun 2014 10:33 PM Title: Chapter 6
Looking forward to the next chapter
Date: 02 Jun 2014 10:26 PM Title: Chapter 6
Man, poor Bella... What a ordeal they have been through. One question, how old are Bella and Peter?
Thanks :)
Date: 02 Jun 2014 10:08 PM Title: Chapter 6
Why do I have the feeling that Rose is going to open her big mouth. Smart with taking the pictures.
Date: 02 Jun 2014 9:27 PM Title: Chapter 6
Glad they are safe with Edward. I hope he can keep them that way
[Report This]Date: 02 Jun 2014 9:24 PM Title: Chapter 6
Poor kids to live that way and have no one believe what is smacking them in the face ugh but now Edward has them and hopefully will earn their trust update soon
[Report This]Date: 02 Jun 2014 12:13 AM Title: Chapter 5
Wonderful and very sad story. I hope it has a HEA ending.
Date: 01 Jun 2014 5:53 AM Title: Chapter 5
It's interesting how people choose to believe what's easy when faced with a conundrum like child abuse. It only takes one hero. Great work! Thank you!
[Report This]Date: 31 May 2014 2:52 PM Title: Chapter 5
Loved it... And of course Kasi... I'm here if u have anything yummy to share with me... haha... u know how impatient I am. Waiting is not one of my strong suits.. I am on the edge of my seat waiting to see what happens next.
[Report This]Date: 31 May 2014 10:30 AM Title: Chapter 5
Love the story!!
Date: 31 May 2014 6:08 AM Title: Chapter 5
What is Rose's deal with Bella? She seems a little jealous or oblivious...not sure which.
[Report This]Date: 30 May 2014 9:40 PM Title: Chapter 5
Wow most people don't want to see it very sad because it happens in real life every single day I loved it update soon
Date: 30 May 2014 9:36 PM Title: Chapter 5
Edward should have told Rose off.
Date: 30 May 2014 9:01 PM Title: Chapter 5
Looking forward to the next chapter
[Report This]Date: 30 May 2014 8:55 PM Title: Chapter 5
Very good so far! Looking forward to future chapters. Really like this Edward!
Date: 30 May 2014 8:02 PM Title: Chapter 5
I feel bad for Bella. She is so browbeaten, she can't trust anyone.
Date: 30 May 2014 7:40 PM Title: Chapter 5
Okay, I understand why Anthony was waiting on Edward. No one in the town believed him. This leads me to question what made the towns folk decide Charlie was more credible than Anthony.
I wish Edward had asked Rose if she spanks her own kids & why she thinks spanking would work