[Report This]Date: 18 Apr 2014 1:46 AM Title: Chapter 17
Wow why did Bella let Mike keep messing with her why didn't she stop him and what does he really want from her update soon
Date: 18 Apr 2014 1:01 AM Title: Chapter 17
I've been meaning to say or guess I should say instead that I'm thinking Miss Honey might be Sue? As in Sue Bee Honey??? Just guessing is all and would that make was it Guido(??) Harry then or Billy, maybe? I admit I'm a bit confused with all the name changes but was it really Mike that sent the flowers?? I wonder if it was Jacob that sent them. He always was possesive of Bella and always wanted her. This is awesome, squeal, and I can't wait for more. thanx ;o)
Date: 18 Apr 2014 12:43 AM Title: Chapter 17
Ugh im so stoked to find out her past! Will it come out before she gets a chance to tell him?
Date: 18 Apr 2014 12:42 AM Title: Chapter 17
You guys ROCK so hard.. I'm so in love with you two. I itch for more updates. I thank you for making them fast and frequent. . This story is the best. I do believe Guido is Dora. I just hope Edwards family is not deeply involved. But this fic is my absolute fav. Please contiue the update schedule. I live for them..As always you guys rank numero uno for me. There is no one better.
Can't wait til next time
E/k
Date: 18 Apr 2014 12:04 AM Title: Chapter 17
Thanks for the double dose of info in these chapters. I am sickened with Roscoe's behavior and turned on by Stark's protective stance and his loving care if someone were to harm his girl.
Date: 17 Apr 2014 11:50 PM Title: Chapter 17
Yay, you guys are awesome! Thanks for another update. I'm addicted ;)
Can't wait to see what Roscoe planted in her car or what he was doing. I also can't wait to find out what Edward thinks about her building the computer and her knowledge security. You have created a Badass Bella. Jasper should call her Buttercup not stich :)
[Report This]Date: 17 Apr 2014 11:27 PM Title: Chapter 17
Damn! You're killing me sweetly.
Date: 17 Apr 2014 11:22 PM Title: Chapter 17
Mercy!
I bet Dora is Felix, cause he is one scary dude in the the Twilight movies!!
Mike is a sick duck!!
Looking forward to more :)
Date: 17 Apr 2014 11:20 PM Title: Chapter 17
Thanks for giving us another chapter today! I'm loving this nickname thing....you can talk about a character without giving away who they really are for a while! Nicely done. Not guessing anything here.....just along for the ride. I'm really enjoying just how take with her he is....when he doesn't know yet that she's had her eye on him for a while, right?? Great story.
[Report This]Date: 17 Apr 2014 11:15 PM Title: Chapter 17
Love it and can't wait to read more and get some answers to the questions going around in my head.
Date: 17 Apr 2014 11:02 PM Title: Chapter 16
I'm adding that I think Bella may have or does belong to a mob family herself. And maybe, just maybe with "Ursula" being attacked it was a retaliation for how she was towards Bella. Or, someone wanted info from "Usula" and tried to beat it out of her???? maybe??? Theories, yeah!! I love their banter too.thanx ;o)
Date: 17 Apr 2014 10:50 PM Title: Chapter 17
Everyone wants a piece of Bella and Edward is going to protect her one way or the other love it.
Date: 17 Apr 2014 10:43 PM Title: Chapter 17
Can't wait for more. This is one of the best stories I've ever read. :-)
Date: 17 Apr 2014 10:36 PM Title: Chapter 17
happy to get another update today. can't wait for the next :)
Date: 17 Apr 2014 10:36 PM Title: Chapter 16
Yay she is the nanny. Finally going to get more info on her next chap I hope.
[Report This]Date: 17 Apr 2014 10:20 PM Title: Chapter 17
You know how some people are addicted to chocolate and drinking drugs. Well I'm addicted to this story. I watch my email for the next chapter. I love it. I can't wait till mike gets what is coming to him.
Date: 17 Apr 2014 10:20 PM Title: Chapter 17
Hm... I like that Rose worried enough about Bella to tell Edward, but is it more about her or him?!
Esme is great, she has a really fast brain and I think Molly is a great name for her and a big compliment as well;)
Mike... He might have an idea about Edward, but I'm sure he's clueless about Bella!
Date: 17 Apr 2014 10:15 PM Title: Chapter 17
grrr Newton is even more annoying than usual. Wonder if she'll keep the necklace on knowing its got GPS?
Date: 17 Apr 2014 9:50 PM Title: Chapter 17
I think Dora is Jenks?
Date: 17 Apr 2014 9:46 PM Title: Chapter 16
I kind of figured Edward would ask Bella to be the kids' nanny. They just love her to bits.
Date: 17 Apr 2014 9:44 PM Title: Chapter 16
The next chapter should be really good since its the talk one. I am so looking forward to reading it. Such an awesome story and I'm loving the daily updates
Date: 17 Apr 2014 9:23 PM Title: Chapter 16
LOVE THIS!!! :)=)
Date: 17 Apr 2014 9:04 PM Title: Chapter 16
I'm so glad they can get things out of the way in their own style too;)
Its cute to watch them get to know each other and I'm pretty curious how much both will give of the truth to the other and when the first veto is called and by whom...
Date: 17 Apr 2014 8:35 PM Title: Chapter 16
So many theories about Bellas past, especially when she isn't hiding it from Edward as much as just not being completely truthful. Can't wait to hear her story.
Date: 17 Apr 2014 7:32 PM Title: Chapter 16
So I was wrong that Aro was Guido :(. You really have me guessing and I love it! I hate when the plot is obvious. Thanks for spoiling us with early updates
Date: 17 Apr 2014 7:31 PM Title: Chapter 16
Just when you think you're going to dish you cut us off
Date: 17 Apr 2014 7:27 PM Title: Chapter 16
I am dying for her to tell him everything
[Report This]Date: 17 Apr 2014 7:18 PM Title: Chapter 16
First question:
When Aro referenced 'Dora's', could he be talking about Miss Honey and Guido?
Why would Bella be using her real name is she is part of a witness protection program?
Why isn't Hawk still protecting Bella?
Is Angela a significant character?
Glad Aro is looking deeper into Jessica.
The sexual tension and accompanying banter is fun to read!
Impressed that Bella freely let stark know that her past is hidden for a reason. That way she can divulge tid-bits in a non-threatening
way at her own pace.
Date: 17 Apr 2014 7:17 PM Title: Chapter 16
Loved it! She's finally opening up some.
Date: 17 Apr 2014 6:44 PM Title: Chapter 16
Mike is too nasty to be Roscoe. More like the evil Sherriff in the Cannonball run movies. ROFL
you are making me more and more interested in her real back story.
Date: 17 Apr 2014 6:42 PM Title: Chapter 16
I love your nick names Roscoe fits Mike because he is a tool lol. I think the talk will go well but she will only tell him bits and pieces I wonder how much he will tell her in return.
[Report This]Date: 17 Apr 2014 6:40 PM Title: Chapter 16
Loving it! More please more!
Date: 17 Apr 2014 6:38 PM Title: Chapter 16
thank you for my smile today. i truly needed it read you soon.
Date: 17 Apr 2014 6:35 PM Title: Chapter 16
Very nice! This chapter allows us to see what Bella's life with Edard and his children could be. In many ways, she is quite open when asked by Edward. She is willing to tell him that only the physicality is different. She,herself, remains the same in character. I thought the previous nickname of Stitch for her was particularly poignant. Jasper is wiser than he knows, I think! Loved this! Thanks for the update, and have a wonderful holiday!
Date: 17 Apr 2014 6:23 PM Title: Chapter 16
i wonder if dora is miss huney or even bella
Date: 17 Apr 2014 6:20 PM Title: Chapter 16
Loving it, and Yay to more soon
[Report This]Date: 17 Apr 2014 6:16 PM Title: Chapter 16
Although I enjoy a good lemon, I'm more intrigued with Bella's secrets.
[Report This]Date: 17 Apr 2014 6:08 PM Title: Chapter 12
Great chapter!
Date: 17 Apr 2014 6:00 PM Title: Chapter 16
The kids are going to love her being their nanny. So Edward is not responsible for Ms. Wattles death. I still say that it was Jacob that was at the library visiting Bella. I think he had something to do with her death. Love the bantering between Edward and Bella. Thanks for the update. Can't wait for more.
Date: 17 Apr 2014 5:48 PM Title: Chapter 16
Oh I was so hoping they would kiss when he was tickling her! Is she in witness protection? I'm dying to find out! Thanks!
Date: 17 Apr 2014 5:20 PM Title: Chapter 16
Roscoe from Dukes of Hazzard-perfect for Mike.
Date: 17 Apr 2014 5:18 PM Title: Chapter 16
loved it cant wait for the reaveal
[Report This]Date: 17 Apr 2014 5:00 PM Title: Chapter 7
Great chapter!
I was hoping that Spike was a reference to Buffy. Loved his caracter.
[Report This]Date: 17 Apr 2014 4:59 PM Title: Chapter 16
Well Edward is in deep with her but who cut the video feed and why well Edward and Bella start anything before he kno2s about her past hmmm update soon
Date: 17 Apr 2014 4:55 PM Title: Chapter 16
She's going to tell him. Why does she think he will be pissed when he hears who she really is? Love that she accepted the job! Banter, huh? Yeah, that's what she loves about him....uh huh....
[Report This]Date: 17 Apr 2014 4:47 PM Title: Chapter 6
What the H is wrong with Jessica? She really shouldn't be in charge of childrens.
Great chapter!
[Report This]Date: 17 Apr 2014 4:45 PM Title: Chapter 4
Love her nickname for Edward!
[Report This]Date: 17 Apr 2014 4:45 PM Title: Chapter 2
Loving your story!
Bella is pretty smart to be able to do all that... wonder who taught her?!
[Report This]Date: 17 Apr 2014 2:30 PM Title: Chapter 14
Great chapter!
[Report This]Date: 17 Apr 2014 2:23 PM Title: Chapter 13
Great chapter!
[Report This]Date: 17 Apr 2014 2:17 PM Title: Chapter 12
Great chapter!
[Report This]Date: 17 Apr 2014 1:33 PM Title: Chapter 15
Love your story can't wait for more .
Date: 17 Apr 2014 4:22 AM Title: Chapter 15
I just have to tell you how very much I'm enjoying this fiction! Your characters have depth - and I love the nicknames, by the way! I look forward to more of the story and discovering more about Bella. Thanks for all your hard work!
Date: 17 Apr 2014 4:15 AM Title: Chapter 15
So Mike has another nickname other than Roscoe? I thought tat nickname was perfect for him. E&B are so sweet with each other but also so snarky! It makes for the best story!
Date: 17 Apr 2014 2:53 AM Title: Chapter 15
I'm starting to think Bella was involved with another mob family that possibly killed her family and is why she got shot. Coming to Edward for possible safety but with his children would he want that kind of danger around his kids. This maybe the reason she'll think he could be angry??? Bella is obviously afraid someone is after her, thence the reason for her disguise. She is opening up a tad to him, like about her eye color so she's defenitely not really afraid of him. hmm. Can't wait for this info to come out. As for Newton, well, he could be just an obnoxious cop or paid off by someone. You never know when it comes to those kind of things. The UST in this is driving me crazy....forget what it's doing to B&E, lol. thanx ;o)
Date: 16 Apr 2014 11:49 PM Title: Chapter 15
THANK YOU for the extra chapter. Love this story!!! So this is my theory, since I just found this story thought I should give it.
- Guido is Aro
- Ms Honey is Sulpicia
- Hawk Marcus...Cauis
- Charlie was part of the Mob or hit man maybe; or was deep under cover to bring down the Blacks. Bella knows to much of the organization for him not to have been involved.
Date: 16 Apr 2014 10:10 PM Title: Chapter 15
I love this story. So much fun to read. I would like to know who hurt Ursela and I hope it wasn't Stark or his associates, that would be low.
Date: 16 Apr 2014 9:49 PM Title: Chapter 15
I loved that Edward got a bit if shower fun of his own;) And of course he has some stalking done on her sleeping form... Can't blame him!
Its sweet that he has no problem with Bella getting the kids from school and I'm glad she starts letting him in! She really sounds like she could use a friend, and I'm sure he wants to be that - and more;)
Date: 16 Apr 2014 9:26 PM Title: Chapter 15
What a great chapter!!! I'm absolutely dying to have Edward and Bella finally get together! Also wondering who Miss Honey is? You are truly a great writer and I'm so enjoying your story. Thank you!
Date: 16 Apr 2014 8:51 PM Title: Chapter 15
I am so no worried about lemons. Right now I want INFORMATION.lol
Date: 16 Apr 2014 7:45 PM Title: Chapter 15
Well, I like the pace. I love a low build up. Love the tease. A lot of stories seem to run out of steam after the lemons start.
Date: 16 Apr 2014 7:44 PM Title: Chapter 15
What happened after the last update. ? I feel that we missed out on the 'talk' between Edward and Jessica. Will we ever get to see what happened between Edward breaking up the fight and the next morning? .
Author's Response:
Edward spoke to Jessica in 14, until the investigation they do is done, he has no reason to contact her again. No worries there will be a conversation in the future. Here is the recap of their conversation.
the first conversation:
I walk straight to Jessica's room knocking on the door before walking in. I see she's still sobbing and Randall looks like he wants to blow his brains out.
"Jessica, why does Cassie have a nasty red mark on her arm—her arm that is in a cast, I may add?"
"She tripped and I tried to stop her from falling. I caught her, but it shouldn't have been that bad. Oh, you know maybe the whore, Bella, did it."
I use everything I have not to glare at her, it's clear to me she's lying through her teeth.
"Jessica, I have had a word with my kids, they back Bella's story to a T."
Jessica looks at me in shock. "She must've gotten them to lie. I know they're afraid of her. Please, Eddy, baby, don't let her make a fool of you," Jessica says with what I think she thinks is her sexy smile.
Who the fuck does this twit think she is? Eddy, baby?
"My name is Edward, or Mr. Platt to you. Don't ever call me anything like Eddy or baby again. As for my children, they're not afraid of anyone, because they know I will take on anyone to keep them safe. Start packing your things and don't leave anything behind, because you're not welcome here. Oh, and before I go, were you in my office or bedroom?"
"No, of course not," Jessica says.
I don't say anything just walk out of her room.
The last conversation:
I head back to Jessica's room seeing that she's still crying, but her room looks clear.
"Randall's going to give you a ride and drop you off."
Jessica tries to give me puppy eyes, but just looks pathetic.
"Jessica," I say as she gets to the door of her room.
"Yes, Eddy ... uh, Mr. Platt?"
"For your sake, you had better not have been in my office, or bedroom. If I find that you have, and you lied to me about it, well, that would be a huge mistake. If you lied, I will let Bella nail your lips to the floor. For the record, I don't take kindly to people threatening my kids. I'm watching you closely, if there's anything you think I should know, or if you're helping anyone that's planning on hurting my family, I will kill you in the most painful way possible."
Date: 16 Apr 2014 7:34 PM Title: Chapter 15
Loved it!! Looking forward to more :)
Date: 16 Apr 2014 7:15 PM Title: Chapter 15
Lmao Roscoe from the Dukes of hazzard.
Date: 16 Apr 2014 6:57 PM Title: Chapter 15
Love the pacing. While a good lemon is always appreciated, I think the anticipation & how the story flows is more important.
Great job!
Date: 16 Apr 2014 6:18 PM Title: Chapter 15
Ok i think I have a theory. Bella was promised to Jake and either she ran away or she snitched on him and Jake is looking for her
Date: 16 Apr 2014 5:18 PM Title: Chapter 15
Loved it can't wait for more :)
Date: 16 Apr 2014 4:14 PM Title: Chapter 15
I am glad that Bella is letting Edward in, little by little. So Guido and Honey believes that Bella can trust Edward. Wow, I am surprised at that. So I am taking it that Edward and his mob did not kill Bella's dad. I am thinking that Jacob Black probably did. I am also thinking that Marmaduke is Jacob and that he had something to do with Martha's attack.
Date: 16 Apr 2014 4:10 PM Title: Chapter 15
..... yeah it has something to do with her
[Report This]Date: 16 Apr 2014 4:10 PM Title: Chapter 15
LEMONS ARE ALWAYS WELCUM BUT I LOOK FORWARD TO YOU SHARING IN YOUR GIVEN TIME. READ YOU SOON.
Date: 16 Apr 2014 3:53 PM Title: Chapter 15
You are telling a good story here and while I love reading lemons, they are always better when they fit the story well. I'm glad she let Edward in a bit. I'm curious as hell to know who she is, really.
[Report This]Date: 16 Apr 2014 3:48 PM Title: Chapter 15
I love all the mystery that goes along with this story.
[Report This]Date: 16 Apr 2014 3:37 PM Title: Chapter 15
Wow Edward can't stay away from Bella he is drawn to her and she him plus the kids now who hurt the book org and why what will Edward say update soon
Date: 16 Apr 2014 3:35 PM Title: Chapter 15
Can't wait for the next chapter post soon
[Report This]Date: 16 Apr 2014 3:14 PM Title: Chapter 15
Loving this story. As for nick names for mike, I'm thinking eye of newt, Mr Twit (Rhold Dharl), Sheriff Rottingham (men in tights)? Can't wait to find out.
*cracks whip* mush, mush on with the writing. ;)
XoxoxoxoxoxoX
Ashmerlin.
Ps. If I don't get around to replying Thursday through Monday Australian NSW time it is only because I'm exhausted from all the festivities at The National Folk Festival. 4.5 Days of music drinking and dancing.
Date: 16 Apr 2014 3:01 PM Title: Chapter 15
I want Officer Pattinson to handle my problems too.
Date: 16 Apr 2014 3:00 PM Title: Chapter 15
She is opening up to him she needs to trust him and that is really hard for her. Mike is an ass .
Date: 16 Apr 2014 2:49 PM Title: Chapter 15
Love that she is letting him in. As always great chapter and can't wait for more
[Report This]Date: 16 Apr 2014 2:48 PM Title: Chapter 15
Isn't Bella's nickname for Mike, Roscoe? As in the Dukes of Hazard? Or was she talking to Eric Yorkie?
Edward is falling at the same rate as Bella.
I noticed when she used his name, not Stark, he replied in kind with her name.
Bella doesn't trust cops. Was it's a dirty cop that killed her father and put the hit on her?
How much do Miss Honey and Guido know about Edward Platt? Are they privy to inside information? I wish I knew there true identities as well as Hawks.
The shower scene goes to........Stark. This flirting game is going to escalate until Edward needs to act on his feelings. Will he know enough about her past by that time?
Date: 16 Apr 2014 2:48 PM Title: Chapter 15
Newton is such a tool. LOVED her making him wait untill she called the cops.
Date: 16 Apr 2014 2:18 PM Title: Chapter 15
So then Roscoe is Erik or Mike? I know where you got that one from :). He was the sheriff's dog from The Hazard Dukes.
As for Bella letting Stark in, for Misss Honey and Guido it's okay tpfor her to do so. If they thought otherwise they would tell her. But still she will keep on treading slowly, or at least trying.
Date: 16 Apr 2014 2:18 PM Title: Chapter 15
I LOVE THIS!!! :)=)
Date: 15 Apr 2014 10:50 PM Title: Chapter 14
You are hilarious with the nicknames. Jessica is digging herself in deep. ROFL for shower. kids are too cute.
Date: 15 Apr 2014 10:43 PM Title: Chapter 13
I'm thinking that Jacob and his crew took out B's parents and she's looking at a way to take them down.
Jessica is a real piece of work. Guessing she is working for Jacob and his crew.
Date: 15 Apr 2014 10:37 PM Title: Chapter 12
Donkey ROFL kinda sucks though cause I really like Shrek Donkey.
hmmm not what is B really hiding I wonder.
Date: 15 Apr 2014 10:27 PM Title: Chapter 11
hmmmm guessing Marmaduke and Kato are Jacob and Sam??? Hope she's not involved with those creeps.
Date: 15 Apr 2014 9:08 PM Title: Chapter 14
You have left Emmett out.. Now why is that? Hmm maybe because he is there? Jacob I think is Marmaduke, not sure about Kato