Date: 18 Jan 2016 9:25 AM Title: The Threat
I like the story, I like where it's going. Having said that, some of the conversations seems "awkward". I think what is throwing it for me is how they refer to each other as mates when talking to each other, it feels unnatural. I can see it the first few times they speak, but it feels out of place at this point and make the interaction between the characters feel less personal.
Date: 17 Jan 2016 5:23 AM Title: Meeting Fate
I like the premise - I'm looking forward to seeing the voice of the characters evolve.
[Report This]Date: 20 Oct 2015 3:32 PM Title: Epilogue
Great story, though I need the next one soon. Thanks.
[Report This]Date: 23 Jul 2015 11:14 PM Title: Epilogue
Eeek Can't wait for the sequel. TY for writing and sharing
Date: 23 Jul 2015 2:24 AM Title: Betrayal
Leah got off too easy. Poor Seth. hmm where is jacob in all this? Leah didn't seem to implicate him.
Date: 23 Sep 2014 2:48 AM Title: Forks
Don't like the idea of her being in those two psychopaths hands.
Date: 10 Jul 2014 7:54 PM Title: Going Back
Tattoo is a cool idea. Would think that Eric and Godrics healing abilities wouldn't allow it to stay though. Wonder who the betrayal will come from. Alice or maybe that jerk Anthony.
Date: 23 May 2014 7:00 AM Title: All Together
Charlie needs to pay for allowing Bella to be hurt by those jerks. Jacob is gonna be trouble I think.
Date: 04 May 2014 4:01 AM Title: Relaxation
Hope they all work out a great balance.
Date: 22 Feb 2014 4:59 AM Title: Sentencing
yea. If her father thought Anthony would be merciful, then he's a real idiot.
hmmm Jacob.... Not sure what I want done to him.
Author's Response:
Anthony will DEFINITELY get what's coming to him. You are the first person to not try to crucify me for what happened to Bella. They really do need the pride's help to kill off the people that are coming for them. It all has a point in the end... Well, at least in this installment. Thanks for reading. Sorry it took me so long to respond. I just found out how to find my reviews on this site.
Date: 22 Feb 2014 4:50 AM Title: Punishment
Guess I need to go back and figure out what she did that was so wrong cause I can't remember it. If he picks the lion, I'd let the mates kill him after for being overly vindictive. If I were Jasper, I'd channel her pain to everyone else in the "pride". Right now I'm calling BS to Daddy's last comment.
I wouldnt let B anywhere near them after this upcoming battle either. I'd be making sure everyone knew Anthony's thoughts and feelings as well. Him and Daddy were over the line.
Date: 22 Feb 2014 4:39 AM Title: Sweden
OOOh Hawtness. Think her dad is going to be in for a rude surprise when he tries to punish her.
Date: 22 Feb 2014 4:22 AM Title: Reassurance
Zander sounds like the typical big brother. SOunds like her father is a wanker.
Date: 22 Feb 2014 4:13 AM Title: Eric and Godric
Kinda sucks that being a guardian means not being able to have a mate.
Date: 22 Feb 2014 3:35 AM Title: Meeting the Guardians
Interesting bringing three different types of vampires all together.
Date: 22 Feb 2014 3:29 AM Title: Heading Home
hmmm they have a lot ploting against them all huh?
Date: 22 Feb 2014 3:00 AM Title: Waiting
lol for Peter. Glad B thought of leaving the area. Bet the wolves would be happy about it too.
Date: 22 Feb 2014 2:43 AM Title: Confrontation
What the heck? All the wolves and vamps there and they let V and M go?
Date: 22 Feb 2014 2:23 AM Title: Explanations
ugh Victoria is sooooo annoying.
Dayum for the hawt ending. Happy lemon Dance.
Date: 22 Feb 2014 12:58 AM Title: The Threat
Poor b. Maria really needs to die....finally.
Date: 22 Feb 2014 12:45 AM Title: Telling All
Love the twist to the polyamory so it's one woman. Hee hee
Date: 22 Feb 2014 12:35 AM Title: Meeting Fate
Sounds like Jake is going to be a pita. Good start. Very different from the norm.
Date: 30 Oct 2013 11:43 AM Title: Punishment
Really really good
Date: 17 Oct 2013 9:17 PM Title: Sweden
Can't wait for the next update