[Report This]Date: 31 Dec 2019 4:07 PM Title: Chapter 123
I love this story and had to read it again! I hope you find the time to finish it.
[Report This]Date: 31 Dec 2019 3:56 PM Title: Chapter 123
I love this story and had to read it again! I hope you find the time to finish it.
Date: 01 Apr 2019 7:31 PM Title: Chapter 123
I really hope you intend to finish this story. I’m loving this crazy group you’ve put together. Even though it’s been a while, my fingers are crossed.
Date: 04 Dec 2018 5:17 PM Title: Chapter 1
I was just wondering if ever finished this story???? I read it again and just hoping I didn't miss something...
Date: 04 Dec 2018 5:17 PM Title: Chapter 1
I was just wondering if ever finished this story???? I read it again and just hoping I didn't miss something...
Date: 09 Nov 2018 1:48 PM Title: Chapter 116
I love this so much, is there any chance you would update? I’m sure I’m not the only who waits.
Date: 24 Dec 2017 1:35 PM Title: Chapter 70
Goodness. Bella needs a baby like she needs a whole in her head.
Date: 18 Dec 2017 4:18 PM Title: Chapter 123
I keep rereading thins fic over and over because I just love it. Keeping my fingers crossed more will be added!
Date: 30 Jul 2017 11:54 PM Title: Chapter 123
I hope you are still updating...Bella has improved so much 😊 I can't wait to see where things go 😊
Date: 12 Jul 2017 12:45 AM Title: Chapter 108
Ok seriously I hope you are making Alice this unlikeable so when she is killed or cheats on Jasper or goes to jail all the readers cheer!! What a BITCH!! I Forgot about their mom dying during childbirth but who says that shit about the baby dying? She is such a horrible person but not in an evil way, in like "I am the most self centered person" kind of way. I wanted Edward to throw her out the window
Date: 11 Jul 2017 11:27 PM Title: Chapter 107
Man I'm with Edward (but you know that) Alice playing both sides, Alice causing drama...Riley could have killed Jasper because of her big trap!! This girl NEEDS to have a downfall!! Everything bad that has happened can usually be tied back to Alice. I can't believe that Edward has to kill Riley because he used to screw Alice!! I am bitterly disappointed! I liked Riley and he was a loyal hard worker. Just seems really fucked Up
Date: 09 Jul 2017 7:37 AM Title: Chapter 96
I think Edward is dead wrong in his assessment. They need to start fresh and not go backwards. They really have no foundation. Childhood friends who reconnect a decade later, spent 1 night of passion, caught up with each other and then was dealing with crisis after crisis. They have no clue who and what they are and Bella has no clue who she is without a man to prop her up. Edward is just as lost and clueless. He's jumped from being a hired gun for the marines to a hired gun for the mob. He has never had a girlfriend but is too selfish in wanting power, respect, etc. The 2 of them probably need to be alone and do the dating thing instead of playing house with a stranger
Date: 09 Jul 2017 7:09 AM Title: Chapter 94
You just wrote the perfect example of why people don't like Bella. She throws a temper tantrum, cries and has Edward running around like the nutless wonder. If she says "sorry" it's insincere and here she should be apologizing but she's crying in the bathroom. She doesn't work, go to school or anything and she "knows" what's up growing up on the block but she is clueless. Why not ask the question "why are you working so much?" Or "why haven't we been having sex". Edward is not Dr. Phil and I would have slapped her stupid ass like a 3 year old and out her in a time out...that's her level of maturity. But, once again, Edward feels like shit and she will run to idiot from the block Alice for advice which will be "he's an ass hole" and nothing will change. Will this girl ever get professional help? On the flip side, Bella just wanted to go to the court house to get married and they need to do that ASAP. I do think she deserves to be married when the baby comes to alleviate some of her insecurities
Date: 08 Jul 2017 1:05 PM Title: Chapter 92
If that wasn't the biggest Fuck You to Jasper I have ever seen!! God, give the guy a set of balls!! And why wouldn't they have arrested Emmett? If it's DEA as Bella pointed out then even if he was cut out when Jake gave up the goods, they would still have a case against him...I hope your not saving people because they were main Twilight characters. And your right Mobward stories are a dime a dozen but you are a super Mob writer and that's why I keep reading 📖
Date: 08 Jul 2017 12:43 PM Title: Chapter 90
I don't think Edward's anger was misplaced. As fragile as Bella is, he has to get real with her...I get her calling when the cops started swarming but her non-stop calling saying she was worried is a line of crap. This needs to be step 1 in her getting some thicker skin...Edward can't be doing a hit and have her calling because she's afraid he will be upset that's she making hamburgers instead of spaghetti. I'm hoping the next few chapters are Edward/mob related so we can get a break from her
Date: 08 Jul 2017 11:21 AM Title: Chapter 89
I had to come back to this chapter and say 1 thing...is Edward even going to be able to WORK? Jesus, he was gone an hour and she called twice? Right after she says she lived on the block and knows what's up? He wasn't meeting a nobody. Bella needs to get her head out of her ass!
OK, and one other thing...Jasper never left the block, had a huge chip on his shoulder about the whole thing and now (actually since they went to the club) Carlisle and CJ are full of trust for him and are fine with him knowing stuff yet they never involved him till Edward came back? He and Bella struggled and struggled and they just watched? That doesn't make any sense. Just because Alice is boning him I don't think that would open doors right away for him...maybe eventually but for Carlisle to trust him with his daughters life? A guy who doesn't even have a gun? If you can't tell, I REALLY want Alice out of the picture. Her periphery presence is soiling the story.
Date: 08 Jul 2017 10:15 AM Title: Chapter 86
Man, talk about some high maintenance issues to deal with in a new relationship! Edward is being overly optimistic and although he has good intentions, no man is going to want to be with a "woman" who can't even decide if she should watch TV. The professional help seems to be placed on the back burner where I think it needs to happen NOW!! She feels somewhat secure so it's now or never!! Also, she needs new friends!! CJ knowing she was pregnant was the final straw for a situation that was going to be terminated. Alice is a total POS...who talks to a dudes sister about her brother not going down? She is just a self centered little bitch!!!
Date: 04 Jul 2017 11:34 AM Title: Chapter 70
No no no!!! I agree with Edward thanking her but what a load of bull! She definitely needs to go and Bella needs to dump her!!! What a bitch!!!
Date: 04 Jul 2017 11:01 AM Title: Chapter 69
I'm glad they are having honest communication it's about time!!! I think Edward was just trying to do the right thing I mean he was dealing with a rape victim so if he started playing grab ass? It probably would have back fired. I'm glad she told him that Jake raped her all the time. The only question plaguing me now is why Alice told Jasper since she had already loaned Bella the money. Maybe Bella needs to tell Jasper about Riley or maybe she should tell CJ what's up since she likes to screw all his low men? I am so damn mad about that and Alice needs a taste of her own medicine
Date: 03 Jul 2017 5:09 PM Title: Chapter 67
Is this the final straw with Alice on both accounts? (1) she stole those keys from CJ (WRONG), (2) Bella finally gets the nerve to talk to E and she picks that time to "gossip" to Jasper about Bella being pregnant (WRONG...bad friend & shit starting girlfriend), (3) tries to fight Bella knowing she's pregnant AND that she is the catalyst for EVERYTHING that happened? Who needs that in their lives on all fronts!!! They all have enough to deal with & Jasper loves Bella too much to let this slide. She was a good friend this past month but the min she could make it all about her, she totally went for it!! She is the definition of a cooz!!!
Date: 03 Jul 2017 10:10 AM Title: Chapter 63
Edward is on point...considering he has no clue she is pregnant this conversation makes perfect sense. Plus she was acting weird before she found out because she won't get counseling and Alice and Rose don't count because In General their advice sucks and Bella hasn't been honest with ANYONE so how can she move forward. It's actually really sad because she is looking for something to fix her and she needs to fix herself
Date: 03 Jul 2017 1:19 AM Title: Chapter 60
This girl needs therapy something fierce! Edward cannot save her, Jasper ornAlice...the thought of trapping Edward is all the is propelling her forward? This is depressing
Date: 03 Jul 2017 1:00 AM Title: Chapter 59
I wish he would pull a New Moon is Jasper blind to how a Bella acted when Edward first got there? Prancing around naked almost? Jesus...Edward is not the bad guy here
Date: 03 Jul 2017 12:56 AM Title: Chapter 58
Oh my WOW...I thought she was acting idiotic but this takes the cake...she tells him there's another guy??? Is she going for the jealousy card? I am totally baffled and Bella the victim? Again? Is it so hard to say "I have a problem that I'm trying to work on and I can't talk about it right now"...I'm trying to figure out if she just chose her words poorly or what exactly came out of her mouth. If she is that terrified, I know with her love of children she could not get an abortion but Jake IS DEAD so if she doesn't want to tell Edward then say it's Jake's kid and be a single parent...shit IDK but I don't think Edward has done anything but treat her like a princess until this moment and has been 100% loyal to that family so what she is doing is such a slap in the face to who Edward's character has proven himself to be...she doesn't deserve him
Date: 03 Jul 2017 12:42 AM Title: Chapter 57
She is a grade A moron!!! Cries when Rose interrupts, then acts all weird when he makes a move? I can see Edward being physically attracted to her but a connection? Whatever thin reason he has been holding a torch over has to have just flown out the door. Just the fact that she refuses professional help and thinks Jasper or Edward can be her salvation for being raped is a lot to put on anyone. I know she's pregnant which like all FF is always a reason to be insane which I have never gotten. Anyway, still like the story and was starting to like Bella but this one and the Bella POV chapters have slid her backwards. I would love a Jasper POV chapter because Jasper and Alice are NOT right for each other and she is a stalker which is pathetic...using Bella to entrap Jasper!!
Date: 01 Jul 2017 11:15 AM Title: Chapter 49
I know this comment is A little late but is Emmett a moron? Why would he take Jake's side at Colloni'a house? Seems very foolish in this line of work. Also, still not feeling Alice & Jasper...she's pulling the 'ole ill use my friend to get to her brother and Rose half ass stood up for Bella but since Emmett became her man, it was pretty weak. No wonder Bella kept her mouth shut...with friends like them, who needs enemies
Date: 28 Jun 2017 10:16 AM Title: Chapter 35
That was incredible sad and I partially understand Bella and the feeling of being taken advantage of or being with someone and not wanting to but doing it because it's your duty. I have a whole new view of her...I was 17 going on 18...boyfriend 26, drug dealer...ugh bad memories
Date: 26 Jun 2017 9:51 PM Title: Chapter 29
Hey I appreciate your intro and you made a really good point about Nella being a typical immature 18 year old...no need to push the J&A connection though. Every time you see her name...her telling Bella "were the type of girl you marry" then it turns out she's been screwing married men? I will say that Jasper seems like he has standards and I don't think A - he would get involved with her simply because of her family and B - he is to proud to date someone seriously who has cruised the block like Alice...just fitting the pieces of your character puzzle 😊
Date: 23 Jun 2017 7:22 AM Title: Chapter 22
Edward should just leave Christ on a cracker, he lives with the girl and she's with Alice? Sorry, but this is just too much of a push and Edward is sitting next to Jasper who is the only reason he is not taking the bait so why would anyone chose to stay?
Date: 23 Jun 2017 7:16 AM Title: Chapter 21
Oh come on...let Edward hit Christy or whoever she is...also, CJ would not be letting 18 year old girls in his club so the cops get called? This Bella is no BeBella...she's an idiot!! I hope she grows a brain because Edward is pretty worldly and I just can't see him with a whiny baby.
Date: 22 Jun 2017 5:48 AM Title: Chapter 20
Hey, I'm actually totally fine with Edward hitting someone else and these die hards need to step off...Bella is technically off limits and he needs to get it in...Bella HAS a boyfriend so she is providing her services to her man. It's more realistic what's going on. Ya, he's thinking about her but he is also confused about his feelings little sister, temptress, idiot? He's not sure what she is or how he feels so let Edward play the field...he will figure it out.
Date: 21 Jun 2017 8:46 AM Title: Chapter 16
Sorry, Jasper is a douchbag!! He lets Edward buy him a new wardrobe and accepts $200 but he scoffs at him getting something for himself and Bella and then being the selfish ass he is, says "oh, buy a new car so I can be yo wing man bro"...whatever!! I think Edward has repaid him in spades!!! Now let's sit back and talk watch Judgy Jasper get bent out of shape when someone else rises in said car
Date: 18 Jun 2017 12:43 PM Title: Chapter 15
What? Because Edward crashes at his place for a few days Jasper's now his business partner? I didn't even understand why he sat down when CJ left the restaurant. I think a man like Carlisle would have given Edward that information in private and Jasper was just rude!! Especially after he has done nothing but bad mouth the family since Edward arrived. What, he afraid Edward was gonna turn dope slinger in a single "nice to see you again"? I am a little put off by him and Bella but I hope Bella will grow on me.
[Report This]Date: 20 Apr 2017 9:38 PM Title: Chapter 123
Wow. this is amazing, but i just hate Carlisle so much. its sad to know the position Elizabeth is in, but i hope that - if Edward does find out - he keeps his composure until he's within touching distance of replacing Carlisle, and then take him out. E didnt like it when Bella was in that position wth Jake so Im sure he'll be distraught hearing that Carlisle was the reason his mother was/is they way she is.
anyway, I haven't found a good modward fic in a loongg time, i'm still working my way through the 'Quiet Storm' stories which are fucking awesome, and i read Bold Gestures ages ago which was also bloody amazing!
I hope you get the inspiration to update this story, you are an awesome writer! thank you for sharing this story with us xx
Date: 03 Dec 2016 2:33 PM Title: Chapter 1
Love this story so far! Any plans on completing it?
[Report This]Date: 24 May 2016 3:54 PM Title: Chapter 123
Please continue this story pls!!! It's really good and in so hooked!!!!
Date: 20 Apr 2016 2:18 PM Title: Chapter 1
Loved it! Poor Jasper!
Date: 27 Sep 2015 1:37 AM Title: Chapter 123
I've said it a few times and I'll say it again! I love your stories so well writen. I really really hope you finish this story... You have amazing talent in writing!!
[Report This]Date: 26 Jan 2015 1:41 AM Title: Chapter 123
Great update
Date: 22 Jan 2015 4:38 PM Title: Chapter 123
I figured thy sleep together but not in Edwards house. I hope you will be able to finish this one day. I love your mob stories! I think I need to go back & read your storm series again.
Date: 22 Jan 2015 4:27 PM Title: Chapter 122
Yeah I think their stories don't completely add up.
Date: 22 Jan 2015 4:16 PM Title: Chapter 121
That really is such a normal family dinner.
Date: 22 Jan 2015 4:07 PM Title: Chapter 120
He wants her by his side as a buffer for all the crazy! Liz is a piece of work. Talking to Esme like that!
Date: 22 Jan 2015 3:59 PM Title: Chapter 119
Does Esme know that Liz is there?
Date: 22 Jan 2015 3:38 PM Title: Chapter 118
I wonder if Edward will ever find out what Emmett said to her that day by the pool and will he ever know that he saw jake abuse her.
Date: 22 Jan 2015 3:32 PM Title: Chapter 117
It just hit me that Elizabeth will be able to tell Bella & jasper about their mom. They will probably have a bond.
Date: 22 Jan 2015 3:25 PM Title: Chapter 116
Little Eddie will be awake soon! I'm shocked they didn't get cock blocked with all the yelling going on between them. ;)
Date: 22 Jan 2015 3:03 PM Title: Chapter 115
So Edward's back story was very interesting!
Date: 22 Jan 2015 9:02 AM Title: Chapter 114
Yep bad choice Joshie!
Date: 22 Jan 2015 8:58 AM Title: Chapter 113
Wow! Let's get a pile of dead bodies together.
Date: 22 Jan 2015 8:55 AM Title: Chapter 112
Was it Joshie? I just don't know???
Date: 22 Jan 2015 8:47 AM Title: Chapter 111
Call the cleanup guys!
Date: 22 Jan 2015 8:33 AM Title: Chapter 110
Someone is about to lose their life!
Date: 22 Jan 2015 7:31 AM Title: Chapter 109
Little Eddie has arrived!
Date: 22 Jan 2015 7:19 AM Title: Chapter 108
They are having their baby! Now the real stress will come!
Date: 22 Jan 2015 7:04 AM Title: Chapter 107
Looks like we have the next to leaders in the mob
Date: 22 Jan 2015 6:53 AM Title: Chapter 106
She is having his baby. Looks like he found his balls in th parking lot!
Date: 22 Jan 2015 6:42 AM Title: Chapter 105
Iz'm laughing so hard! Toni Braxton contractions! You kill me!
Date: 22 Jan 2015 6:37 AM Title: Chapter 104
Having the baby is the perfect alibi
Date: 22 Jan 2015 6:29 AM Title: Chapter 103
Bella is about to into labor & she is getting freaky!
Date: 22 Jan 2015 6:23 AM Title: Chapter 102
Hey go out this guy in a grinder I need to have sex with Bella. Crazy!
Date: 22 Jan 2015 6:16 AM Title: Chapter 101
I hear a mob war coming to town!
Date: 22 Jan 2015 6:06 AM Title: Chapter 100
I figured Riley would have to go since he played both sides too well
Date: 22 Jan 2015 5:58 AM Title: Chapter 99
Did SR just save Jasper?
Date: 22 Jan 2015 5:50 AM Title: Chapter 98
His little mob wife. I just love it!
Date: 22 Jan 2015 5:31 AM Title: Chapter 96
There are hills & valleys in every relationship.
Date: 22 Jan 2015 5:24 AM Title: Chapter 95
Ok I totally didn't see that coming. Jasper is going to freak!
Date: 22 Jan 2015 5:19 AM Title: Chapter 94
Things re getting stressful and now he needs to give Bella some good lovin!
Date: 22 Jan 2015 5:12 AM Title: Chapter 93
I wonder if Riley is going to make it?
Date: 22 Jan 2015 5:00 AM Title: Chapter 91
Love it, love it, love it!
Date: 22 Jan 2015 4:55 AM Title: Chapter 90
Ok everyone is safe!
Date: 22 Jan 2015 4:50 AM Title: Chapter 89
He is movin on up & CJ is dead dead dead! I hope Bella was calling just to check on him.
Date: 22 Jan 2015 4:43 AM Title: Chapter 88
I hope Bella is ok.
Date: 22 Jan 2015 4:32 AM Title: Chapter 87
I'm glad she brought that up just to give herself some clarity.
Date: 22 Jan 2015 4:25 AM Title: Chapter 86
Bella likes to be controlled & probably needs it. She is a perfect mob wife!
Date: 22 Jan 2015 4:16 AM Title: Chapter 85
What is going down????
Date: 22 Jan 2015 4:11 AM Title: Chapter 84
He was giddy like a girl. It is fun to imagine this massive Edward hard core killer brought down to squealing like a girl over some much needed sex.
Date: 22 Jan 2015 3:56 AM Title: Chapter 82
Don't pause a second! That was a very steamy answer to Alice's question!
Date: 22 Jan 2015 3:49 AM Title: Chapter 81
He is constantly cockblocked!
Date: 22 Jan 2015 3:43 AM Title: Chapter 80
I just love how smitten they are.
Date: 22 Jan 2015 3:38 AM Title: Chapter 79
I'm glad he & Jasper are better.
Date: 22 Jan 2015 3:32 AM Title: Chapter 78
Bella could make a pizza pie with him.
Date: 22 Jan 2015 3:25 AM Title: Chapter 77
They only got 2 seconds of fun!
Date: 21 Jan 2015 11:27 PM Title: Chapter 74
You are killing me with these endings!
Date: 21 Jan 2015 11:11 PM Title: Chapter 72
CJ is sooo untrustworthy!
Date: 21 Jan 2015 10:52 PM Title: Chapter 71
The girls are going to be all over him
Date: 21 Jan 2015 10:46 PM Title: Chapter 70
He needs to tell her he wants the baby. She needs to know.
Date: 21 Jan 2015 10:34 PM Title: Chapter 69
He says the sweetest things to her.
Date: 21 Jan 2015 10:27 PM Title: Chapter 68
Her staring in the bathroom looking at her heaven.