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Reviewer: debslmac Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 05 Jun 2016 3:36 PM Title: Chapter 4

:)  loved this story 

Reviewer: JMART664 Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Aug 2013 1:46 AM Title: Chapter 4

Wow! Great story! It was short but still good nonetheless.

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Dec 2012 7:40 AM Title: Chapter 4

It was pretty good the way you ended it. I would have liked to hear Bella get the information she wanted about her father, but you can't have everything! Total agreement on kick-ass Bella, by the way! Now the job is done, she and Edward can have forever together, as it should be.

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Dec 2012 3:55 AM Title: Chapter 3

That's just sick, that her uncle killed all her family! No wonder Bella has been taking them down, one by one! Hell, I would too!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Dec 2012 1:49 AM Title: Chapter 2

It may make you feel awkward, but that was a very well donesex scene. This whole concept , of avenging her father and herself is pretty interesting! I'm glad to see them married in Vegas, even though it will infuriate Alice!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Dec 2012 1:40 AM Title: The original O/S

Dark though it is, this was a very good start to a great revenge tale!

Reviewer: LBD Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 07 Dec 2012 1:37 AM Title: Chapter 4

Execellent story. Awesome job!!!!!!

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Dec 2012 8:59 AM Title: Chapter 4

Good story. I mean tough subject matter..

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Dec 2012 6:36 AM Title: Chapter 2

well good job so far so good.

Reviewer: sassycook Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 19 Feb 2012 7:02 PM Title: Chapter 3

wow so it seems bella is getting her ultimate revenge

it always seems though revenge has it reprucussions

go belle go



Author's Response:

You have a valid point...but she has her reasons for wanting that revenge...as hopefully you'll see next chapter... Now as promised...here's a preview....it's not been through the editing process so excuse any glaring errors. :-)


Bella, stay in the car.” His voice was stern and offered no room for argument. “Do you hear me?”


I nodded. “Yes daddy.”

He reached under my chin so I would look at him in the eyes. “And Bella. If something happens to me. I want you to run. Run as fast as you can away from here.”


My eyes grew large when I registered what he was saying. “But,”


No buts Bella, swear to me.”


I didn't know what to say. If something happened to him I didn't know if I'd have the will in me to run, but for him I would try. “I swear Daddy.”


He looked into my eyes once more. “I love you princess.”


It was torture waiting after he left the car and shut the door. I didn't hear anything for five long minutes then I heard three gun shots fire off in quick succession. Before I could think it through I opened the door. I had barely put a foot out of the car when I heard my father yell, “Bella run!”


I looked over to where I heard his voice coming from. He was struggling with a young blonde man. He elbowed the man in the nose and sent him reeling. I took one last look at my father and turned to make an escape. My path was immediately blocked by a very large man. A man that I recognized very well.


What do we have here?” He sneered. He reached for me and my instincts kicked in. I pushed the heal of my hand straight up into his nose. He staggered back slightly and I leaped around him. I didn't get far though. He was only a few steps behind me. He grabbed me by my hair and pulled me back to him. I struggled against his tight hold “Ah ah ah princess,” he said as he drew a knife and pressed it into my throat. “Drop the gun Charlie.”

 

 

Reviewer: sophdrea Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 19 Feb 2012 1:49 AM Title: Chapter 3

Excellent chapter, and a killer ending...

I love this story more with each chapter. I love reading a strong Bella, and this one definitely is. I love that Edward and the others are merely backing her up, and letting her do what she needs to do. Can't wait to find out more of the back story. Great work, Katiecav!!



Author's Response:

Why thank you *said in my best southern belle voice* I kinda love this story more with each chapter as well. We'll find out about Bella's past the next chapter...plus more on my vampire transformation... Now as promised...here's a preview....it's not been through the editing process so excuse any glaring errors. :-)

 


 

 

 

Bella, stay in the car.” His voice was stern and offered no room for argument. “Do you hear me?”

I nodded. “Yes daddy.”

He reached under my chin so I would look at him in the eyes. “And Bella. If something happens to me. I want you to run. Run as fast as you can away from here.”


My eyes grew large when I registered what he was saying. “But,”


No buts Bella, swear to me.”


I didn't know what to say. If something happened to him I didn't know if I'd have the will in me to run, but for him I would try. “I swear Daddy.”


He looked into my eyes once more. “I love you princess.”


It was torture waiting after he left the car and shut the door. I didn't hear anything for five long minutes then I heard three gun shots fire off in quick succession. Before I could think it through I opened the door. I had barely put a foot out of the car when I heard my father yell, “Bella run!”


I looked over to where I heard his voice coming from. He was struggling with a young blonde man. He elbowed the man in the nose and sent him reeling. I took one last look at my father and turned to make an escape. My path was immediately blocked by a very large man. A man that I recognized very well.


What do we have here?” He sneered. He reached for me and my instincts kicked in. I pushed the heal of my hand straight up into his nose. He staggered back slightly and I leaped around him. I didn't get far though. He was only a few steps behind me. He grabbed me by my hair and pulled me back to him. I struggled against his tight hold “Ah ah ah princess,” he said as he drew a knife and pressed it into my throat. “Drop the gun Charlie.”

 

 

Reviewer: Sleeping_Beauty247 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 19 Feb 2012 12:01 AM Title: Chapter 3

OH YAY! This was really good! I am anxious to here more of Bella's story!

Great update!!



Author's Response:

You aren't the only one anxious about finding out what happened to Bella. It for sure is on the books for the next chapter. Now as promised...here's a preview....it's not been through the editing process so excuse any glaring errors. :-)


Bella, stay in the car.” His voice was stern and offered no room for argument. “Do you hear me?”

I nodded. “Yes daddy.”

He reached under my chin so I would look at him in the eyes. “And Bella. If something happens to me. I want you to run. Run as fast as you can away from here.”


My eyes grew large when I registered what he was saying. “But,”


No buts Bella, swear to me.”


I didn't know what to say. If something happened to him I didn't know if I'd have the will in me to run, but for him I would try. “I swear Daddy.”


He looked into my eyes once more. “I love you princess.”


It was torture waiting after he left the car and shut the door. I didn't hear anything for five long minutes then I heard three gun shots fire off in quick succession. Before I could think it through I opened the door. I had barely put a foot out of the car when I heard my father yell, “Bella run!”


I looked over to where I heard his voice coming from. He was struggling with a young blonde man. He elbowed the man in the nose and sent him reeling. I took one last look at my father and turned to make an escape. My path was immediately blocked by a very large man. A man that I recognized very well.


What do we have here?” He sneered. He reached for me and my instincts kicked in. I pushed the heal of my hand straight up into his nose. He staggered back slightly and I leaped around him. I didn't get far though. He was only a few steps behind me. He grabbed me by my hair and pulled me back to him. I struggled against his tight hold “Ah ah ah princess,” he said as he drew a knife and pressed it into my throat. “Drop the gun Charlie.”

 

Reviewer: TwilightTucker Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Feb 2012 1:59 AM Title: Chapter 2

It was fantastic and I want more please



Author's Response:

Thanks. More is on the way...probably later this week. I'm glad that you liked it and thanks for the review.

Reviewer: Sleeping_Beauty247 Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Feb 2012 12:00 AM Title: Chapter 2

The lemon was good! Don't feel awkward it was really good!!



Author's Response:

Thanks. I can't help but feel awkward though. It's so not usually my thing. I'm glad that you like it.

Reviewer: Sleeping_Beauty247 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 15 Feb 2012 11:34 PM Title: The original O/S

Wow! This was really good!! I want more, please!



Author's Response:

Thanks *blushes* I'm glad you liked it.

Reviewer: sophdrea Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 15 Feb 2012 6:57 PM Title: Chapter 2

Loved it! The sex was great! And, wow, you threw in a wedding! You are going to tell us what happened to Bella and her father, aren't you?  Please?

Loving your story!



Author's Response:

You will eventually find out what happened to Bella and her father yes, but it probably won't be the next chapter. Thanks for the rating and the review! I'm really glad that you're liking the story! See you next chapter :-)

Reviewer: sophdrea Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 15 Feb 2012 6:14 PM Title: The original O/S

Vampires and the Mob all in one story...I'm excited! I loved the first chapter, and I can't wait to find out who this man is. It is so nice to find an unique story like this. Thanks for posting it. Great beginning!!



Author's Response:

I'm glad that you're liking the story :-) I love the vampire/mob tie...and i hope you weren't disapointed when you found out who the guy is :-)

Reviewer: kgunter34 Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Feb 2012 5:30 PM Title: Chapter 2

You did good.



Author's Response:

Thanks *blushes*

Reviewer: keola Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Jan 2012 2:11 AM Title: The original O/S

cool story



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review :-)

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