OKAY Uhm so I didn't actually read this(if I'm.. reviewing a story) I am just trying to get back in contact with you since you asked me a question! But your contact thing is disabled and I can only leave one review per chapter (how lame)

So this is my response to the question you asked about Chasing Carlisle:

Wellll lets see.

I think that all depends on if you were wanting to make it a shortstory or if you were wanting to keep it as an OS.

Regardless you jump around too much, making everything seem as if its happenening so fast. I can understand due to it being an OS but if you could make it seem more slow paced, not jump from one thing to the next it would help the story a lot. If that makes sense?

I suggest you make it a story and space it out into chapters, having the first chapter be them finding out about Esme/Edward. The next about Carlisle running off. Maybe have a few in his POV. Make the next few(or so so) chapters about the chase, him leaving notes and her trying to find him. Have it in both of their POV's this whole time leaving us on the edge of suspense. Then finally have her finding him. Maybe have a few chapters of them exploring their new found 'realtionship', talk about their hurts but how it led to 'them'. Ya'know? Then have a chapter of the family argument, Esme/Edward giving their POV's on what happened, but dont make it so quick or dramatic(Well dramatic just not in such a fast outlashing fashion?) Annnddd. Then you could have a chapter or two of them going about their newfound relationship together now that everything is past?

Just my suggestions :D I really liked this story so I would love to see it expanded on and written out in more detail ya'know?

: If you have Any more questions or want to correspond more about this Pleeasse email me at LawlietLynn@Hotmail.com okay :D I'm not good at working TWCS website so I'm behind on how it all works but I can do emails really well haha.

Have a great day!!