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Reviewer: vampireGIRL1 Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Jul 2016 6:03 AM Title: Power Struggle

Billy was full of hate that caused him to loose his mind.



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading, yes sad for the tribe xx

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Reviewer: vampireGIRL1 Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Jul 2016 5:55 AM Title: Pack Mind

Sam and the pack members are getting headaches from jacob think about bella.

Jacob forget about his respectability.



Author's Response:

Thanks glad you liked it xx

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Reviewer: dazzled eyes22 Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 05 Jul 2016 2:23 PM Title: Power Struggle

I enjoyed the tribal politics, but Jake's revelations about his father and Bella were really done well. He grew up a lot in these last couple of days. 

I would recommend getting a beta to correct some of the grammar issues in the story and with the title, but I could understand the story despite them.

Thanks for sharing your story. 



Author's Response:

Thanks, my apologies for the title, fixed now btw. Grammarly can only do so much xx

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Reviewer: dazzled eyes22 Signed starstarstar [Report This]
Date: 05 Jul 2016 1:56 PM Title: Pack Mind

I like that Jake's friends tried to challenge his romantic fantasies about Bella, so he could understand the reality of his situation. I always wished he could have seen that for himself. 

Sam declaring enough and restricting Jacob to La Push by an Alpha order created a compelling conflict for the Pack and the Elders. I knew Jacob and Billy wouldn't take that easily and it forces everyone to deal with the balance of power within the tribe. 



Author's Response:

Thank you, was trying for an acceptable reaction from everyone else, 

felt the blanket just because Jacob wasn't happy neither were they was wrong xx

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Reviewer: BridieM Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 Jun 2016 4:14 AM Title: Power Struggle

I am biased as I really do hate the canon character of Jerkob. So, having said that, I think you were a bit easy on him and he turn around too quickly. Good chapter though. Thanks.

Author's Response:

Thanks, yes I really dislike the character too, so maybe a little lenient xx

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Reviewer: BridieM Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 Jun 2016 4:03 AM Title: Pack Mind

Good chapter. Thanks

Author's Response:

Thank you xx

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Reviewer: Gelsa Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 Jun 2016 1:54 AM Title: Power Struggle

I love your take on Jake.



Author's Response:

Thanks, thought we'ed give him the benefit of the doubt in this one xx

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