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Reviewer: Helenm42 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 09 Sep 2019 9:10 PM Title: Chapter 31: Unleashing the Lioness

Excellent story and I really hope you finish it one day. Thanks. 



Author's Response:

Thank you so much. I do hope to finish it for myself, and for all the readers that have enjoyed it along the way. I appreciate you leaving me a comment. 

 

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: angelskiss Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Jun 2019 5:00 AM Title: Chapter 31: Unleashing the Lioness

I just noticed your story has not updated in three years 😪. Are you planning on completing it? 



Author's Response:

Believe it or not, yes I am planning on completing it. Life has been...well, life and unfortunately caused this to get put on the back burner for far too long. I will finish it. Thank you for asking.

 

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: Eriklylla Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 May 2018 6:47 PM Title: Chapter 31: Unleashing the Lioness

Please, please finish this story! Its fantastic and I can't wait to read more! Its beautifully written and shows a lot of character growth, while still maintaining the essence that makes up that character. Some writers change the character so much, that if it wasn't for the names being the same, you wouldn't even know who the character is. I hope this story gets updated soon!



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for letting me know how much you're enjoying the story. It's been a long road, but I am working on the next chapter now and hope to continue writing closer to my previous regular schedule. I owe it to everyone who has followed this story for the last nine (almost 10 years) and to myself and my characters. Besides, I can't start my original stories until I finish this one. I think I've put it off so long because I will truly miss this story when it's over. 

Thank you again!

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: Vampirelady13 Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Apr 2017 3:12 PM Title: Chapter 9: Bitch Slap

I loved what she said to Jasper. I like how she handled Rose. Esme and Carlisle got off way to easy. Charlie never abandoned Bella her and Renee tried to shove him out in till BElla wanted to give Renne what she wanted. It's not like she actually moved to Forks for her father.



Author's Response:

I can understand your point of view on how you feel that Esme and Carlisle got off way too easy, however it was hard for her to open up to them at all being that she's never really had parents that parented her. So even though she was deeply deeply hurt by their decision to go along with what Edward wanted, she didn't want to alienate them from allowing her to be a part of their lives forever - which is what is her end goal. As for Rosalie, Bella just couldn't resist doing that to her and don't worry about Emmett getting off easy because he definitely will be getting more torture in the future. It will be by his own doing of course, but Bella knows the siblings a lot more than they give her credit for so she knows exactly what buttons to push. Again I want to thank you for your thoughts and your review.

 

Much love, 

~Lisa

Reviewer: Vampirelady13 Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Apr 2017 6:13 PM Title: Chapter 8: Skipping Rocks

What is Charlie to her chopped liver. I. guess Bella does not consider Charlie family. Not surprising considering she did not want to visit with him as a check or. Bella is selfless with everyone but Charlie he is an after thought.



Author's Response:

Her relationship with Charlie gets better and she realizes how much she loves him. Their relationship goes through a lot of transitions throughout the story. Still, I appreciate your feedback. I read and reply to every review. So thank you.

 

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: Vampirelady13 Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Apr 2017 2:57 PM Title: Chapter 5: The Pixie versus the Kitten

Really that is all Alice gets is yelled at. Wow what a friend laughing at her anger Alice is a horrible friend. I would of broken a baseball bat over her smug head. I thought Bella was going to be a bad Ass but no Alice shows up and she reverts back to weak Bella.



Author's Response:

I am so sorry you feel that Bella did not do more to make Alice suffer for her abandonment. However, Alice was her best friend and is planning to support her and all of her other schemes to get back at the Cullens. And I will also admit that Bella does become much more badass as the story progresses. I hope you continue to read and review. I truly appreciate it.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: Sandy74 Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Nov 2016 9:22 AM Title: Chapter 31: Unleashing the Lioness

I have laughed and cried through this whole story and hope you keep writing until it is finished. Leaving out the Voltaire and Italy didn't hurt a bit as far as I can see.  I have read th twilight saga many times and love it, but I always thought Bella was way too wimpy in New Moon. I always thought she should fight back. Your version is just what I thought it should be.  Thank You so much. Need more chapters to complete the happy ending... O.K.?



Author's Response:

Thank you so much. I promise I am working to complete this story and hope to have it finished before the year ends.

 

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: mrsvixter Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Sep 2016 9:40 PM Title: Chapter 31: Unleashing the Lioness

please update 

love this fict



Author's Response:

Working on it, I promise. Hope to have more soon.

 

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: wolfpack15 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 30 Aug 2016 11:46 PM Title: Chapter 31: Unleashing the Lioness

aomg so great                          please write more



Author's Response:

Working on it. I promise. Progress has been much slower than I would like.

 

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: MooMoo Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Aug 2016 4:57 PM Title: Chapter 31: Unleashing the Lioness

I love this story and have been really missing it!!! I was wondering if you have any idea when you may be updating again? I am really, really looking forward to and anxiously awaiting a new chapter! Thanks soooooo much!!!!



Author's Response:

Thank you so much. I hope to have the next chapter, and the rest of the story up soon. With the kids out for summer my writing time is continually interuppted. They go back next week. Do I hear all the moms out there cheering? ;)

 

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: BridieM Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 05 Jun 2016 11:57 PM Title: Chapter 31: Unleashing the Lioness

I confess to being a sucker for a Charlie/Tanya pairing... But, I wouldn't like to get Edward stuck with an eternal FIL. Ouch! A wonderful chapter. Loving your characters. You gave Victoria an impressive insight into her thoughts. Esme was a mama bear steady, thoughtful, quick. Edward, was so mature and controlled. Loved every word. Thank you.

Author's Response:

Thank you for the review. I can't picture Tanya and Charlie - at least not in my head....but it would be interesting for sure. :)

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: LenStormcrow1988 Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 May 2016 8:40 PM Title: Chapter 31: Unleashing the Lioness

wonderful



Author's Response:

Thank you so much! I appreciate the review.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: Hina-chan Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 May 2016 6:01 AM Title: Chapter 31: Unleashing the Lioness

Great story!!!!! I loved it....update soon.



Author's Response:

So glad you enjoyed it! I'm working on the update. :)

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: the real teacher Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 May 2016 10:26 PM Title: Chapter 31: Unleashing the Lioness

WAY to go Mama Esme!



Author's Response:

Hooray! I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: jmthorn Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 May 2016 7:33 AM Title: Chapter 14:Too Much Testosterone

Now if he went to the movies with a "friend" she'd have a fit!!!!



Author's Response:

Well, of course she would because she knows how all the girls "swoon" for him. But don't worry, she realizes how her "friend date" comes across. ;) Thanks for reading.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 May 2016 5:14 AM Title: Chapter 11: Reality Check

that was funny her scene of undressing. lol



Author's Response:

I'm so glad you liked it. I still laugh when I picture Edward falling out of the tree. :)

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 May 2016 4:00 AM Title: Chapter 10: Learning to Listen

I loved this chapter as much as all the kicking Rose's behind. I loved this one.



Author's Response:

Thank you so much! It was hard to write and let Bella get all her words out and stand her ground. She really, really wanted to just wrap him up in her arms and say it would all be fine. ;)

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: Momma Laura Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 May 2016 6:16 PM Title: Chapter 31: Unleashing the Lioness

Go, Esme!



Author's Response:

Hooray - glad you enjoyed it!

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 May 2016 2:16 PM Title: Chapter 31: Unleashing the Lioness

Go, Esme, go.

I loved the chapter and, btw, I love when eventually Charlie is into the secret.



Author's Response:

Thank you! I agree about Charlie and think it's unfair when people write him as stupid. Just because he's quiet doesn't mean he's an idiot. I think it's better when Charlie is in on the secret and given the chance to be a part of what's happening. :)

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: Icrodriguez7 Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 May 2016 1:07 PM Title: Chapter 31: Unleashing the Lioness

This was a fantastic and powerful chapter. I was riveted the entire time with the details you gave us. And how original and surprising that it was Esme that killed Victoria in the end! I was most definitely not expecting that, and yet I was truly impressed with the surprising twist. Excellent chapter! But now my heart breaks for poor Charlie. Can't wait to see what you do with this now. 



Author's Response:

I'm so glad you liked the twist with Esme being the one to kill her. It seemed fitting to me. ;) And yes, my poor heart breaks for Charlie over what is to come, but perhaps there will be some kind of silver lining. ;)

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 May 2016 6:55 AM Title: Chapter 31: Unleashing the Lioness

I wasn't surprised that Esme was the instrument of Victoria's destruction! Mothers will always defend their young, no matter the species. I'm just glad the bitch is gone for good! Now Bella can recover and she and Edward can plan their future. The only sad part will be Charlie's reaction to what is coming. He's not going to want to lose his baby girl. The wolves are not going to be pleased, either, so more drama is bound to happen! I look forward to the next  chapter!



Author's Response:

You're absolutely correct, don't mess with a mother's kids! Ever! Victoria, however, never really saw it coming, but oh, it was satisfying to write. ;) Thanks for continuing to read and review.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: Siobhan_Whitlock Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 27 May 2016 5:24 AM Title: Chapter 31: Unleashing the Lioness

This was an excellent chapter!  What a great scene!  Esme is so awesome!



Author's Response:

Thank you so much. I don't think people (in the story and readers) were expecting Esme to be the one to take Victoria down. ;) I greatly appreciate the read and review. It means a lot and helps keep me inspired.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: sonogal Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 May 2016 5:35 PM Title: Chapter 30: Confessions

That dumb wolf is causing more problems than he is worth. Charlie can't take much more or he will be in a bed next to Bella. 



Author's Response:

Jacob is always causing problems and I think he always will. As for Charlie, I think he's about at his limit and Alice could see that. It broke her heart to have him look at her and respond with fear, but she is hoping he will come around with time. She loves Charlie too.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: sonogal Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 May 2016 4:53 PM Title: Chapter 29: Revelations

I love how Charlie dealt with the wolves. He was correct in blaming Billy and Jacob.  They made her keep going to the reservation,  since Jacob wouldn't talk to her and Billy kept encouraging the relationship.  Jacob is out of control. 



Author's Response:

I have to admit that Charlie's punch to Billy's face is one of my all time favorite moments in this story because it was so well deserved (in my opinion). Billy definitely could've told Charlie to have Bella back off and give Jacob space, but he didn't. Jacob could've called Bella and said he needed space, but he didn't. So yes, Charlie is justified in being truly pissed off and I think he handled it well considering he also realizes that pack "murdered" the person that attacked Bella. I mean as police chief it goes against everything in him not to pursue that, but as a father he wants to let it be.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: sonogal Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 May 2016 4:20 PM Title: Chapter 28: Fists and Fur

I'm glad that Charlie finally sees how much Edward and the rest of the Cullens love Bella.  Sam needs to tighten his control over the pack, especially jacob.



Author's Response:

Yes, it's nice that Charlie can finally recognize that the Cullens, especially Edward, do love Bella as much as he does. And yes, Sam does need to tighten his control over the pack, but he also wanted to see how the Cullens would react to the more volatile members of his pack in order to decide if trying to go forward with the treaty is even worth it. Jacob might not ever be able to be "leashed" completely.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: sonogal Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 May 2016 2:39 PM Title: Chapter 26: Blindsided

Bella was being stupid again.  She was told to stay out of the woods and she didn't.  She should have went to the Cullens when Jacob was being his normal jerky self. Edward is not to blame.



Author's Response:

I agree and disagree with you. Bella was being stubborn, not stupid. There is a difference. She is also being a determined friend. She wants an answer as to why Jacob has just cut off all communication with her. She also has no reason to think she would be in danger in the woods at this point, and Edward is her boyfriend - not her boss. I can't say that I wouldn't have been just as stubborn and determined to find out what the hell Jacob's problem was if it was me in that position. However, Edward was definitely not to blame in this in any way. Getting Jacob to believe that will never happen though. I love your opinions on each chapter. :)

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: sonogal Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 May 2016 11:52 AM Title: Chapter 25: Mistletoe and Message Panty Payback

Bella is being too clingy. Edward was right to leave. He will be back soon and Charlie needs his Bella time. 



Author's Response:

Edward was right to leave - I agree with you, but I don't think Bella was being too clingy. She is experiencing that rush of emotion that comes with the first bits of intimacy with a person she wants to be with forever. Time apart (even when necessary) can be tortuous. ;)

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: sonogal Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 May 2016 10:11 PM Title: Chapter 24: A Trek, A Tree, and Titty Hard Ons

Bella needs to understand that Edward will always be protective of her. Just as Jasper is proteCT I've of Alice.  It's their nature.



Author's Response:

I think Bella does understand that he will always be protective of her. That wasn't her problem with what happened. It was his self loathing and blame that he couldn't prevent her from falling that got her upset. As she pointed out, she will always be clumsy....that's part of her nature. He can't go all dark and twisty every time she scrapes her knee, or trips over her own feet. ;)

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: sonogal Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 May 2016 9:12 PM Title: Chapter 22: Strawberries and Cream

Bella should be proud of herself,  but she needs to give Edward time to adjust to this new intimacy before she expects more.  She needs to control her hormones. 



Author's Response:

I'm not sure how much she'll be able to control her hormones now that she's been able to open up that side of herself a bit. She is a teenager after all. ;)

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: sonogal Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 13 May 2016 7:03 PM Title: Chapter 19: Blue Balls

Great chapter.  Loved the sexual tension between our favorite couple. 



Author's Response:

The build up is so much fun and frustrating at the same time. ;) I want to go on a date day like this one.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: Hina-chan Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 May 2016 5:44 PM Title: Chapter 30: Confessions

Welcome back!!!! Edward reading Bella's mind... didn't see that coming! Love it...update soon..



Author's Response:

Glad I could suprise you. :)

 

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: sonogal Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 May 2016 8:28 AM Title: Chapter 12: Moves and Countermoves

Bella said that the relationship required both of them, but she acts like her wants are all that matters. The conversations need to continue,  which means she needs to listen as well. It can't flip and now she is the bossy one. He was out of love and concern. She is being bossy to be mean and punish. She has to let Edward be a man.



Author's Response:

You are absolutely correct. It cannot be all on her terms now. However, she has to set some real boundaries at first or fear she'll easily fall right back in to the old pattern. Don't worry. Edward starts to call her out on some things soon, and although she gets very defensive she does realize he's correct and that she has to work on things within herself as well. :)

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: LenStormcrow1988 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 10 May 2016 5:23 AM Title: Chapter 30: Confessions

Wonderful



Author's Response:

Thank you very much.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: Twiclare Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 May 2016 8:39 AM Title: Chapter 30: Confessions

Poor Charlie is literally reeling with everything that he's had to face today. I'm a little nervous about them all leaving to hunt Victoria.



Author's Response:

I worry about Charlie too. It's been a rough day for him. :( And yes, the hunt is on and will be interesting, especially if the wolves are still in the mix. ;)

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: the real teacher Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 May 2016 1:30 AM Title: Chapter 30: Confessions

Thanks for the update!



Author's Response:

Thank you for the review. :)

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: msliss8 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 May 2016 1:34 PM Title: Chapter 30: Confessions

Thank you 



Author's Response:

No - thank you for the time you took to not only read, but also to leave me kind words in review,

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: westosobear Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 May 2016 11:01 AM Title: Chapter 30: Confessions

Looking forward to the hunt. Why is it that Edward can now hear Bella's thoughts? Is it because of her concussion?



Author's Response:

Hello. Don't worry - it will be revealed why Edward could hear Bella's thoughts. I did a great deal of research on head trauma and what parts of the brain work with our response and reactions to situations. I promise all will be explained. ;)

 

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: BridieM Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 07 May 2016 9:31 PM Title: Chapter 30: Confessions

I love the way you have depicted Charlie in this chapter. It rang true. Thank you for thinking of us and for updating.

Author's Response:

Thank you! My beta disagreed with me and felt Charlie didn't sound like "book Charlie" at all. In the end I had to stick to my guns and go with what I believed was the correct portrayal of him in this version. I truly appreciate your continued reviews and insights.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: psychovampirefreak Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 May 2016 3:23 PM Title: Chapter 30: Confessions

Wow... another awesome chapter!



Author's Response:

Thank you!!!! 

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: KimiD Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 07 May 2016 2:00 PM Title: Chapter 1: Martyr

Great beginning! But your summary promises us a very posses off Bella... I think in your story she is going to give him the he'll he so richly deserves... look out Edward, you ate about to be schooled...



Author's Response:

I promise a pissed off Bella is just up ahead. ;) I always hated her lack of a backbone in the book. Why wouldn't you fight for your true love? Obviously I felt a need to write it in a way I felt would be more realistic to the otherwise intelligent Bella that SM claimed she was. Thank you for giving this story a chance, and I look forward to hearing more of your thoughts in future chapters. I am grateful for every review and respond to each one. 

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: sonogal Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 May 2016 1:02 PM Title: Chapter 10: Learning to Listen

Bella went too far. She needs to listen to him as well. It can't be one sided on either side. The cutting was all her. She did that to herself. She did it because she couldn't cope. The heart pain is due to Edward and the Cullens.



Author's Response:

I agree 100% with you. Bella does need to listen to him as well. And she'll figure that out eventually. Right now though, for the first few times with Edward again it has to be her way or she is afraid she'll be too easily swayed in standing up for herself and falling right back in to letting him make all the decisions. At least for now, she has to feel like she's in charge of the changes so that she can feel confident that they will happen. You're absolutely correct though - they are both to blame for the issues in their relationship. And that will be addressed. ;) Thank you for your continued thoughts as you read. I'm enjoying them very much.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 May 2016 12:30 PM Title: Chapter 30: Confessions

No criticism: great chapter!



Author's Response:

Thank you so much. I'm glad you enjoyed it. It covered a lot of ground.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: Icrodriguez7 Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 May 2016 5:13 AM Title: Chapter 30: Confessions

I think Edward's explanation for why he didn't bite her wrist was not complete. He explained that he stopped because it wasn't the way he wanted it to happen, without her agreement to do it together. In fact, he didn't buy her wrist because Jasper stopped him from doing it, urging Edward that Bella was about to wake or was coming around. How Edward explained it to Bella made it sound like he stopped because it wasn't the way he had hoped it would  would happen. I think knowing how Bella is, she will pursue this even further. At least I hope she does. :-) 



Author's Response:

I agree. Edward's explanation is not the complete reason, as Jasper's interference did prevent him from changing her right at that moment. Edward is grateful to Jasper though because he doesn't want the choice to be made of desperation (even though the end result is what they both want). Even though Bella will suffer a great deal more pain with the change happening down the road, he does want Bella to have a voice in when that change happens. He wants her to be able to say goodbye to her dad, and anyone else. He wants her to be a full partner with him in the decision, and honestly, that will mean more to Bella in the long run. Between you and me though - I think he should have just changed her. ;)

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: bba628 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 07 May 2016 2:54 AM Title: Chapter 30: Confessions

Fractured - you are killing me. I reread this chapter you covered so much. Great way to move the story along. Charlie's reactions are spot on.

Author's Response:

Sorry to be killing you. ;) This chapter did cover a lot of things so I admit I often reread it myself to make sure I cover all points when I continue on. I'm glad you felt Charlie's reactions were spot on. My beta and I totally disagreed on that front. She felt my Charlie was not in character at all. I had to disagree and go with my gut.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 May 2016 10:26 PM Title: Chapter 30: Confessions

I have all my fingers and toes crossed that the Cullens can find and destroy Victoria! Thanks to her thirst for revenge, Charlie knows more than he should , though not the whole secret. Looking forward eagerly to the next chapter! I sense things are about to get real exciting!



Author's Response:

The hunt is finally on, but will the Cullens find Victoria or will the wolves? Hmmm....and can they even work together toward a common goal at this point? We'll see. ;)

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: LenStormcrow1988 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 02 May 2016 10:17 PM Title: Chapter 28: Fists and Fur

Wow whatis next



Author's Response:

Well, chapter 29 is up but I don't know if you read it. I'm posting 30 now. Look forward to hearing from you again soon.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: LenStormcrow1988 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 02 May 2016 10:13 PM Title: Chapter 27: This is My Hell

Wow what is next?



Author's Response:

It's going to get more intense. ;)

 

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: LenStormcrow1988 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 02 May 2016 10:12 PM Title: Chapter 26: Blindsided

Jacob your an ass. I love it.



Author's Response:

Jacob will always be a bit of an ass. ;) I think it's part of his DNA.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: LenStormcrow1988 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02 May 2016 10:10 PM Title: Chapter 25: Mistletoe and Message Panty Payback

Superb



Author's Response:

So glad you enjoyed it.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: LenStormcrow1988 Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02 May 2016 10:04 PM Title: Chapter 24: A Trek, A Tree, and Titty Hard Ons

Wonderful



Author's Response:

Gotta love Emmett's enthusiasm. ;)

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: LenStormcrow1988 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 02 May 2016 10:02 PM Title: Chapter 23: Teasing, Tasting, and a Trip

Awesome



Author's Response:

We're in for some fun now. ;)

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: LenStormcrow1988 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02 May 2016 10:01 PM Title: Chapter 22: Strawberries and Cream

Wow



Author's Response:

Thanks. :)

 

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: LenStormcrow1988 Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02 May 2016 9:57 PM Title: Chapter 21: Payback

Awesome job



Author's Response:

Jasper needed to have that conversation.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: LenStormcrow1988 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02 May 2016 9:52 PM Title: Chapter 20: Rounding Second

Wow that was heated.



Author's Response:

I agree. ;)

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: LenStormcrow1988 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 02 May 2016 9:39 PM Title: Chapter 19: Blue Balls

Awesome job



Author's Response:

Thank you. :) And you're a very fast reader.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: LenStormcrow1988 Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02 May 2016 9:23 PM Title: Chapter 18: Guys and Dolls

Awesome



Author's Response:

They do have their family fun. ;)

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: LenStormcrow1988 Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02 May 2016 8:53 PM Title: Chapter 17: Turning Stone into Silly Putty

That was great.



Author's Response:

Warm fuzzies that you thought so.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: LenStormcrow1988 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 02 May 2016 8:44 PM Title: Chapter 16: Invisibly Shaken

Excellent



Author's Response:

:) Smiles again.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: LenStormcrow1988 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02 May 2016 8:38 PM Title: Chapter 15: Blood Doesn't Make a Mom

Amazing



Author's Response:

One of my favorites.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: LenStormcrow1988 Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02 May 2016 8:28 PM Title: Chapter 14:Too Much Testosterone

Well done



Author's Response:

Why thank you.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: LenStormcrow1988 Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02 May 2016 8:14 PM Title: Chapter 13: Gunpowder and Lead

Awesome



Author's Response:

Thrilled you're continuing to enjoy it.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: LenStormcrow1988 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 02 May 2016 7:06 PM Title: Chapter 12: Moves and Countermoves

Wonderful



Author's Response:

Smiling in thanks.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: LenStormcrow1988 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 02 May 2016 6:56 PM Title: Chapter 11: Reality Check

that was an awesome chapter great job



Author's Response:

Thank you. :)

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: LenStormcrow1988 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02 May 2016 6:39 PM Title: Chapter 10: Learning to Listen

That was intense.



Author's Response:

Just a bit.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: LenStormcrow1988 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02 May 2016 6:23 PM Title: Chapter 9: Bitch Slap

That was freaking awesome.



Author's Response:

And well planned. ;) Bella wasn't about to be brushed aside by anyone this time.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: LenStormcrow1988 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 02 May 2016 6:01 PM Title: Chapter 8: Skipping Rocks

Fantastic



Author's Response:

:) Thanks.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: LenStormcrow1988 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 02 May 2016 5:57 PM Title: Chapter 7: Circle the Wagons

Awesome that was just totally awesome.



Author's Response:

Humble gratitude.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: LenStormcrow1988 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 02 May 2016 5:37 PM Title: Chapter 6: Torture Devices

A wonderful chapter.



Author's Response:

;) Glad you enjoyed it.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: LenStormcrow1988 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 02 May 2016 5:18 PM Title: Chapter 5: The Pixie versus the Kitten

Fantastic job I am enjoying this.



Author's Response:

Now we're picking up steam. ;)

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: LenStormcrow1988 Signed [Report This]
Date: 02 May 2016 5:05 PM Title: Chapter 4: Thin Red Line

Freaking aswesome



Author's Response:

So glad you think so. This was a bit of a controversial chapter, and honestly, difficult to write, but it went where it was supposed to.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: LenStormcrow1988 Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 02 May 2016 5:02 PM Title: Chapter 3: Pendulum

Marvelous



Author's Response:

Thank you. :)

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: LenStormcrow1988 Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02 May 2016 5:00 PM Title: Chapter 2: Voicemails

Oh boy this is going to be great.



Author's Response:

So glad you think so. It really starts to pick up soon.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: LenStormcrow1988 Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02 May 2016 4:52 PM Title: Chapter 1: Martyr

Awesome start. I love it. consider me intrigued.



Author's Response:

Hooray - so glad you're giving it a chance. :)

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: the real teacher Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Apr 2016 4:23 PM Title: Chapter 29: Revelations

Loved Charlie in this chapter! 



Author's Response:

Thank you. Me too! I felt he really needed to get out a bit of that frustration. :)

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Apr 2016 1:06 PM Title: Chapter 29: Revelations

Grat story, with good deviations from Canon. But, I feel I had read it already - or part of it - on another site a long time ago. Is this right?



Author's Response:

Thank you. Yes, it was originally posted on Twilighted.net, but with my most recent chapter (not yet posted here) they have been having serious technical difficulties. Everyone was notified of the update, but no one can see it. So, I was encouraged by some readers to post it here. Lovely experience so far. :)

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: Twiclare Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Apr 2016 6:25 AM Title: Chapter 29: Revelations

Poor Charlie, he's had his world view altered irrevocably on top of his daughter being brutally attacked. 

Bella is mad!



Author's Response:

Oh yeah - she's pissed! It's going to be lovely. ;) And yes, poor Charlie. :( It's hard to write but vital for him to have his pain recognized.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: bba628 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 20 Apr 2016 2:38 AM Title: Chapter 29: Revelations

I liked this very much Billy's got a Face Punch.... Sweet

Author's Response:

Haha - glad you like it. I figured Charlie needed to punch someone, and honestly, Billy did hold out on him (for his protection) when he could've at least convinced Charlie to keep Bella away. So he kinda deserved it. ;)

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: Hina-chan Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Apr 2016 6:22 AM Title: Chapter 29: Revelations

Okay! The last part was unexpected.  You're good at this writing business! !!! Take your time and update soon...love this story ♥♥♥



Author's Response:

Thank you so much. I'm glad you're enjoying it. :) I'm planning to update soon.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: BridieM Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Apr 2016 8:00 AM Title: Chapter 29: Revelations

A wonderful chapter. Your characters are a joy to read.

Author's Response:

Thank you. They can be a handful though. ;)

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: Icrodriguez7 Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Apr 2016 5:33 AM Title: Chapter 29: Revelations

I was expecting this. And even though he didn't hesitate when it truly came down to the idea of losing her, he is still in a lot of trouble with Bella when she learns how long it took him to settle the doubt within him and no longer flinch at the hesitation. I hope Bella really lays into him for at least a little while and a little bit. After all, had she had an aneurysm, there is no way Edward could've saved her even by changing her. And that the risk was present at all is what I'm sure Bella will find difficult to fathom.

I pray that you also have peaceful times ahead, Darlin', for you truly deserve them. All my love.

 



Author's Response:

Stuck on that aneurysm aren't you. ;) She is pissed to say the least, however, just because she's awake does not mean she's out of danger yet. Thank you for the prayers. We're doing the best we can right now. Some moments are of course more difficult than others but we do have moments where we are smiling and laughing and of course relieved that he's at peace.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: psychovampirefreak Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Apr 2016 4:08 AM Title: Chapter 29: Revelations

Guess Edward is in more trouble with Bella. Love it... awesome update!



Author's Response:

Well of course he is. He is Edward, and a man. ;)

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Apr 2016 3:47 AM Title: Chapter 29: Revelations

Lucky Charlie has a strong constitution or he could have suffered some sort of stroke or heart seizure when Jacob phased! He has a lot to process and has many questions still, only this time he'll be asking the Cullens! I am not surprised Bella is angry because Edward didn't change her! I have a feeling  the repercussions from this may continue!



Author's Response:

For real about Charlie! That man has had a lot to digest so far and it isn't over. Poor man. :( And yeah, it shouldn't surprise anyone that Bella is a bit irked to wake after near death and find she's still human.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: usmcrwife Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 16 Apr 2016 9:26 AM Title: Chapter 28: Fists and Fur

I just wanted to say how much I LOVE you'r story! I just started it 2 or 3 days ago and I could not stop reading it. I'm excited to keep reading your updates and seeing where you take the story from here. 



Author's Response:

Am I guessing correctly from your screen name that you're a military wife? I'm a military wife as well and know that it's a much more difficult job than anyone realizes unless they live it. Thank you for the compliments on the story and I'm glad you're enjoying it so much. I hope to hear more from you soon.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: Terass Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 16 Apr 2016 2:34 AM Title: Chapter 6: Torture Devices

I realize that Edward had his flaws with certain things but Bella did also. Her view on marriage for one, and refusing any and all gifts from him. How was that suposed to make him feel? Special? I hope she has an epiphony in this on!!!



Author's Response:

Bella did have flaws, however, at this point in the Twilight world Edward had not proposed to her so he doesn't know how ridiculous her stance on marriage is at this point. And this Bella might not be that unreasonable about marriage. ;) She does realize that she has things that she needs to work on within herself as well and doesn't expect Edward to be the one to do all the changing. Her goal is for them to be true partners - both equal in their relationship. I hope you continue to enjoy it and thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate it.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: BridieM Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 14 Apr 2016 9:27 PM Title: Chapter 28: Fists and Fur

Firstly, let me offer you condolences for the loss of your Loved One. No words can make this time easier. But, hopefully with time, you will wrap their loss in fond memories and remember with smiles and not tears.

Secondly, you didn't disappoint with this chapter. I am quite liking your Sam and Charlie. So pleased that Charlie has recognised the devotion Edward has towards his daughter. Perhaps this will be a new start to E&C's relationship. Loved the ...interaction between Emmett and Paul. Lol. Would have paid real money to see that. :D I thought the way Carlisle and Sam regained control of the parley seemed sensible. I do love that Jerkob saw the thin veneer of calm demeanour disappear and the predator take its place in the Cullens. Jerkob's casual assessment of Rosalie shows his true immaturity. What insignificance would be place on Pixie Alice? 'Know one's enemy' a lesson Jasper could teach him. I can't help but wonder if Bella will be OK. Yes she is awake but... So looking forward to the next chapter when you have time and the inclination. Thank you for updating. Best wishes, Bridie.

P.s. There are a couple of stories, at least, on FanFiction where the relationship between the Cullens, and also the Pack, is explored in greater and original detail. While the premise of canon is recognised these two delve further into relationships and include more action and suspense. JAM11 has a WIP called Red Dawn. TrillionSchiffer has a completed story called New Eclipse and it's sequel (WIP) called Horizon. New Eclipse is not up to your grammatical standard but the plot makes for a page turner. Perhaps your hubby might enjoy the read.

Author's Response:

You're correct, no words can make this time easier, but we are relieve he is no longer in pain and is finally at peace. Thank you for your condolences and thoughts. I greatly appreciate it. This chapter was full of personalities that don't necessarily get along at all, but are definitely trying to make the best of a difficult situation and stay on somewhat peaceful terms. I would've loved to see the Emmett and Paul showdown in real life as well. It would've been highly entertaining. Jerkob (that made me laugh a bit) is certainly acting like quite the brat right now, not only with his attitude, but also his arrogance of believing he can "boss" Carlisle and Edward around about not being around Bella without him. As if....

I would be interested in checking out the stories you suggested when I wrap my own up. I prefer to not read other's when I'm writing my own as I don't want to inadvertently use something I read somewhere else, or have any of it cloud the voice in my own head. But thank you for the suggestions. Promise to update soon.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: Twiclare Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Apr 2016 6:30 AM Title: Chapter 28: Fists and Fur

I always find Charlie's anguish in these situations especially moving. I'm sorry to hear that you're  going through a difficult time my thoughts are with you. Take care.



Author's Response:

Thank you for your thoughts at this difficult time, but we are relieved he is finally at peace and not suffering any longer. It definitely made Charlie's anguish at almost losing Bella more poignant for me. Writing the next few chapters (that are further along than where I've posted)  are proving especially personal for me right now. Promise to update soon.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: Hina-chan Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Apr 2016 5:51 AM Title: Chapter 28: Fists and Fur

Oh my god!  Man! That was some chapter. ... you are one hell of a writer.. I literally bit my bail off... Emmett and Paul's showdown was something... so many emotions in a single chapter...and Bella even woke up... Dying for the next chapter!!!! Update soon!!!!!



Author's Response:

Thank you for the compliments. They mean a great deal to me and I hope to one day be able to let you all know where to find my original published work. This chapter was definitely an emotional onslaught from every direction. Promise to update soon.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: the real teacher Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 14 Apr 2016 4:20 AM Title: Chapter 28: Fists and Fur

I thought it was a great chapter!  Lots of different emotions that were well written!

 

And of co7rse there is MOST DEFINITELY a God! He is Almighty! 

 

Best of luck with your future! Saying goodbye for now is so hard! Prayers for y'all!



Author's Response:

Emotions were all over the place and what a minefield to navigate!!!! And nothing is getting any easier anytime soon. ;) Yes, he is with God now and is finally at peace. We are dealing with the arrangements and trying to process all the emotions and overcome all the exhaustion. It will take time, but he is where he wanted to be and his suffering is over. Thank you for your prayers. They are greatly appreciated.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: bba628 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 14 Apr 2016 1:46 AM Title: Chapter 28: Fists and Fur

Fantastic Edwards bedside vigil , so sweet great chapter

Author's Response:

Thank you. More to come soon.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Apr 2016 10:47 PM Title: Chapter 28: Fists and Fur

That was so close, it scared me! If Jasper hadn't stopped him, Edward would have bitten her! Sam has his hands full with his volatile young pack, a tiny bit like Carlisle holding Emmett back! Poor Charlie, I'm sure he isn't going to like anything he hears on the reservation, but it ought to be interesting to hear what story they tell the chief! It must have broken Charlie's heart to see his baby girl like that and know there wasn't a thing he could do to help her! I was sorry to hear of your sad future, my thoughts are with you, be strong and hold each other, it helps so much.



Author's Response:

You're right, Jasper stopped him from biting her. But is that a good thing? We all know Bella wants to be changed. Will she appreciate that Edward hesitated yet again? Of course, there is so much to worry about with the pack, and Victoria, and Charlie, and....and....and... Probably not the best time for a new vampire to be changed. ;) My sad future has come to pass and we are dealing with it the best we can. Arrangements are being made, feelings are trying to be processed and exhaustion has set in, but we are relieved that he is finally at peace. Thank you for your thoughts. I greatly appreciate it.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: msliss8 Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Apr 2016 9:41 PM Title: Chapter 28: Fists and Fur

Thank you!

well dwarf has his answer about how he feels about changing Bella.



Author's Response:

Exactly. When it comes down it he will not live without her. ;)

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: Twiclare Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Apr 2016 8:52 PM Title: Chapter 27: This is My Hell

The tension from Jacob was so intense, he's struggling to keep in control. Poor Edward is devastated. I hope that they can track down Victoria soon. 



Author's Response:

Thank you and the tension doesn't ease up soon. It's actually about to get worse. ;)

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: pink cactus2 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 13 Apr 2016 3:12 PM Title: Chapter 28: Fists and Fur

Fabulous chapter!!!

Author's Response:

Thank you so much! 

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: psychovampirefreak Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Apr 2016 2:00 PM Title: Chapter 28: Fists and Fur

Wow... just wow! Awesome chapter!!



Author's Response:

Thank you so much!!

Much love

~Lisa

Reviewer: Icrodriguez7 Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Apr 2016 1:10 PM Title: Chapter 1: Martyr

"Any hesitancy he’d been feeling about changing her was gone now that he was faced with her death. And as the beeps became even more far apart he prepared himself to change her. This wasn’t how he wanted it to happen, but he wasn’t going to let her go." Woo-hoo! That's what I meant!!!

 

Yes, Edward hesitated in Twilight. But Bella wasn't dying, she was just changing because of James' bite. It's not as if Edward stopping the change would mean death for her. Plus that was pre-NM, and I think that experience of being apart made Edward not hesitate at all when it came to life and death for Bella in BD. But perhaps your take is that since this Edward never had to confront the idea of Bella being dead, as he did in canon NM, that his hesitation would be more present? Hmmm, maybe. But I still think he would be more panicked at the thought of her dying and his hesitation being the reason why he will have failed her again. I just thought that the moment Edward had any inkling from Carlisle that she could die, that any doubt about changing her would be gone for good. Guess I just had to wait for one more chapter! Lol!!!

Can't wait to read more!!!



Author's Response:

I love reading the way your mind dissects the chapter. :)  I'm glad you see that Edward really wouldn't hesitate when faced with her actual death. He was just over analyzing as usual. And trust me, Bella will call him on that hesitation. 

Much love,

~Lisa

 

Reviewer: Hina-chan Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Apr 2016 10:07 AM Title: Chapter 27: This is My Hell

Hey! I was kind of worried when u got late to update. Anyways, the showdown with Edward and Jacob was really hair raising. .. I love this...... Man! Is Bella really gonna be changed..... Dying from suspense here!!!!! Update soon.... 



Author's Response:

It's been a rough week and is not showing signs of getting easier over the next several, but I have chapters ready to go and am doing my best to get them up. I'm glad you enjoyed the showdown between Edward and Jacob and it isn't over. ;) A bigger showdown is coming up.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: Icrodriguez7 Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Apr 2016 3:32 AM Title: Chapter 27: This is My Hell

While I know that E would prefer that changing B was done under ideal circumstances (though for him they'd never be ideal enough), I always find it upsetting when he hesitates with even the thought of doing it in a critical situation such as this. With these kind of injuries, B can die instantly at any moment and E would be too late to do anything. Even in canon, E never hesitated a single second in changing B when she was dying. And yet here he's still debating what to do. One aneurism and it's all over in the blink of an eye. E should know that. I'm looking forward to seeing his epiphany on this. Thanks for the update!!! 



Author's Response:

Okay Isa!!! I see you! If you remember he DID hesitate in Twilight when the venom from James was at risk of changing her and she was bleeding out from her leg. Carlisle forced him to decide to either suck the venom out of her or let the change happen. Even Alice said "Edward, I've seen it!" He sucked the venom out refusing to let her be changed in that moment when she was already bitten. Then in Breaking Dawn - he also never wanted to change her until the moment Nessie bit her and he could see Bella slipping away - in his panic at that moment, after going through all they had and being married - only then did he change her and if you remember he didn't even think he had done it time. So I believe that it's very possible that even in these circumstances he would hesitate.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: BridieM Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 13 Apr 2016 1:42 AM Title: Chapter 27: This is My Hell

Another excellent chapter. Let's hope Sam has a cooler head than Jacob. Although, jacob was fairly controlled but his delusion of his HEA with Bella clouds everything. Can't wait to see what you do with Paul. I really enjoyed this chapter. Thanks.

Author's Response:

I believe his delusion of his HEA with Bella was the only thing that kept him controlled in those moments. And they are completely a delusion. Paul and Emmett are....entertaining. ;)

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Apr 2016 9:48 PM Title: Chapter 27: This is My Hell

I hate that it will take a week to find out if Bella will live or be changed! At least the pack and the Cullens will unite to hunt down Victoria. Poor Charlie, he will be so scared for his little girl!



Author's Response:

A week? Who said that? ;) I know it was a bit between the last two chapters, and I can't promise that there won't be more delays as the days go by, but I'm trying to keep you all updated. And will the packs and Cullens be able to work together? Hmmm.....

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: msliss8 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Apr 2016 9:12 PM Title: Chapter 27: This is My Hell

I missed you! 

Thank you great chapter



Author's Response:

I missed all of you too! It's been a lot of traveling and family stuff that has kept me away, but I'm doing my best to continue updating.

Much love,

~Lisa

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