[Report This]Date: 25 Jun 2020 8:50 PM Title: Chapter 4--Cathrine
Can't wait to read more.
[Report This]Date: 25 Jun 2020 8:49 PM Title: Chapter 4--Cathrine
Can't wait to read more.
Date: 16 Dec 2019 5:42 PM Title: Chapter 4--Cathrine
Ah I'm sad that there was not more. Really enjoyed this and I hope you'll come back and update it soon! :(
Date: 21 Dec 2017 12:54 AM Title: Chapter 4--Cathrine
Oh I can't wait to read more
[Report This]Date: 24 Feb 2016 11:15 PM Title: Chapter 1--Departure
How often do you update? Also, I would like to offer my swrvices as editor for this story, but I just joined thos site, and am not sure if you will be able to gage anything about me. I read fanfiction pften, and have done so for the past 5 years, primarily on fanfiction.net or archives of our own. Hope thos hes, and let ,e know if you would like me to be your editor.
Date: 10 Sep 2015 4:07 PM Title: Chapter 4--Cathrine
I am so loving this story. I have several friends and a sister in law who are Wiccan and I love to read stories with witches. I'm wondering if the black inky figure is a wearwolf and the dream is Bella reliving a previous life. I am excited for the next chapter. I'll be anxiously but patiently waiting.
Date: 31 Aug 2015 5:38 PM Title: Chapter 4--Cathrine
I love this story please update soon.
Date: 23 Jun 2015 11:32 AM Title: Chapter 4--Cathrine
Like it so far. Hope more comes soon.
Date: 16 Jun 2015 8:17 PM Title: Chapter 4--Cathrine
Perhaps Catherine here is another incarnation of Mary. A long lived vampire might find several incarnations. If so, hopefully Jasper can help her. Loved it!
Date: 16 Jun 2015 1:54 AM Title: Chapter 4--Cathrine
Eddie got what he deserved by snooping at her window. scary dream
[Report This]Date: 16 Jun 2015 1:32 AM Title: Chapter 2-- Mundanes
Glad to see that she is being a little less hostile towards Charlie, hopefully she sees he just wants a chance to know his daughter? Love the pairings you've established, always adored the idea of Bella and Jasper together! Can't wait for more!
[Report This]Date: 16 Jun 2015 1:21 AM Title: Chapter 1--Departure
I absolutely love it! Thanks for such a great start to this awesome story! I can't wait to see where you take the characters from here!! Take care until next time!
Date: 15 Jun 2015 11:35 PM Title: Chapter 4--Cathrine
That after school I went home with Angela. Dod you mean 'That day after school...' It seemed that there was a word missing in that sentence. great beginning and perhaps the killer was killing her in reincarnated lives. To completely kill her spirit and end her line he has to kill her ten times or has to kill all ten in her line. The 'You kept me waiting' part led me to the reincarnation. I am still available to deit/pre-read.
Xanath
Date: 08 Jun 2015 7:10 AM Title: Chapter 1--Departure
It won't let me PM you - I don't have any real experience editing stories, but my mother is an English teacher and raised me to be a grammar nazi. I'd be happy to edit the chapters before you post them if you'd like!
Date: 08 Jun 2015 7:07 AM Title: Chapter 3--Witch Blood
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Date: 07 Jun 2015 7:24 PM Title: Chapter 3--Witch Blood
Love the chapter and really love the concept for the story. I look forward to reading more and where you will lead! Delphi is a kick! She's so funny for a ghost that old! Thanks for all the time and effort you put in here, it shows!
[Report This]Date: 07 Jun 2015 8:08 AM Title: Chapter 3--Witch Blood
I was very happy to see an update for this story. I got into it immediately and can't wait for more!
Date: 06 Jun 2015 8:02 AM Title: Chapter 3--Witch Blood
Very.enjoyable
Date: 06 Jun 2015 5:46 AM Title: Chapter 3--Witch Blood
Interesting I love it so far,cant wait to read more
Date: 06 Jun 2015 4:27 AM Title: Chapter 3--Witch Blood
oooh Edward got caught. LOL
Date: 06 Jun 2015 2:52 AM Title: Chapter 3--Witch Blood
I don't know what aPM is and I am not sure I have a profile...but I am very good at catching mistakes. The one that bothers me most is when the writer has persons in the story throw things on the ground when they are inside, when it should be the floor. The ground is OUTSIDE. I just change things in my head as I read and go on from there. I would like to be considered as a proof reader. XanathIf you tell me how to PM I will get it, I suspect ist is like chat so no one else can see
Date: 05 Jun 2015 11:37 PM Title: Chapter 3--Witch Blood
So Edward was close enough to smell her blood. But will the spell stop her mate from coming to her. Great chapter. Can't wait till the next one.
Date: 05 Jun 2015 1:18 PM Title: Chapter 2-- Mundanes
I'm with Delphi...She needs to grow up. Its Renee's fault that Charlie wasn't more a part of her life. Math is not my thing either.
Date: 05 Jun 2015 1:13 PM Title: Chapter 1--Departure
hmm wonder how long till Bella and Charlie have an all out fight. Regardless of if they were witches or not, still not right keeping Bella away from Charlie all these years.
Date: 03 Jun 2015 9:59 PM Title: Chapter 2-- Mundanes
Very interesting start with a really new twist in the plot. I love this new world that you have introduce. Can't wait to know more.
I have just one single negative remark... about your french words : you make some mystakes.
"De toutes les choses que j'ai jamais ressenti, c'était la pire. C'était comme si mon âme m'avait été enlevée et qu'on avait forcé une pierre dans ma poitrine. Le moment où ce vampire entra dans la pièce a été le moment où j'ai ressenti une vraie peur bien réelle."
Author's Response:
Thanks for the help on the french. I admit I used Google to translate it, (I studied French through high school and for two years in college but I'm quite rusty.) I'll update it with your spelling corrections. I appreciate the constructive criticism.
[Report This]Date: 31 May 2015 7:47 PM Title: Chapter 2-- Mundanes
I can hardly wait to read more! I am excited to see where you go with this :)
[Report This]Date: 31 May 2015 7:40 PM Title: Chapter 1--Departure
Hi! I don't normally start reading stories if they don't have very many chapters posted, but your teaser was so good I couldn't resist and I am SO glad I did! I was hooked with the first couple of sentences. I can't wait to read more, and am favoriting this story so I get update notices. Have a great day!
[Report This]Date: 31 May 2015 5:12 PM Title: Chapter 2-- Mundanes
Wow! What a great start! Can not wait till the ride really gets going , love,love,love these first 2 chapters - especially Delphi
Date: 29 May 2015 11:55 PM Title: Chapter 2-- Mundanes
Are you intentionally making it sound like Edward and Alice are together? Just curious! How often do you intend to update? I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Yes, Edward and Alice are mates. Sorry if that wasn't clear. Thanks for the feedback!
Date: 29 May 2015 11:33 PM Title: Chapter 2-- Mundanes
So to most she is the desert for a vampire. But what does Jasper think. Love the chapter. Can't wait to see what happened next. More chapters please!
Author's Response:
Hmmmm...what does Jasper think...perhaps you'll find out.;) Thanks for the support!
Date: 24 May 2015 10:06 PM Title: Chapter 1--Departure
I can't wIt to see how this plays out. Who is the ghost? Hurry back with more please.
Date: 24 May 2015 9:28 AM Title: Chapter 1--Departure
I really like the start of this story. Nice changes in situation. Looking forward to updates.
Date: 24 May 2015 5:41 AM Title: Chapter 1--Departure
oh! great start, cant wait to read more
Date: 24 May 2015 3:24 AM Title: Chapter 1--Departure
Want to see where you take this story